Apr 01 2009
Retardised Whovian’s Second Review Forum
I’m trying to write a manga in the fantasy, comedy, adventure and magical knight genres. I’m not sure how long it will last, but the plot below is for the first arc.
The Plot: Keeak was a great hero to the people of Kalomode, a coastal town in an unspecified country. He killed creatures that had been sent out to gather power for Langi, god of evil, and built up his own power to seal Langi away. However, he accidentally sealed himself in, but not before throwing his pendant to his younger brother, Neon. Keeak’s family abandons all hope, before lying to the police and saying that he ran away.
Seven years later, Neon is old enough to use the pendant and the magic associated with it. At first he holds onto it as a reminder of Keeak, but the creatures start surfacing again and he has to fight them. At the same time, he begins to hear a voice. It’s Keeak, who is begging him to unseal the realm of Langi so he can escape. Neon begins to build up his magic for it, while trying to maintain a secret identity.
Target Audience: I imagine it would appeal to guys more than girls, between the ages of 13-18.
Comparable Works: It could probably be compared to DNAngel by Yukiru Sugisaki and The Dreaming by Queenie Chan. At times it will have the feel of DNAngel (more lighthearted) and at other times it will be more like The Dreaming (dark, foreboding, creepy, mysterious).
How Thick Is My Skin? Go easy on me, but point out the errors or potential problems.
