Oct 30 2010

Contact

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Please email me at superheronation-at-gmail-dot-com. If you’d like a story reviewed, please attach the story as a .doc or .docx file. In most cases, however, I only have time to review 5-10 pages. (Sorry about that).

Due to time constraints, please do not contact me about stories that you are not trying to publish professionally (e.g. fan-fiction), or for help naming a character.

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225 Responses to “Contact”

  1. Dan L.on 18 Nov 2010 at 2:23 pm

    Hi, I am a teen hoping to be comic writer in England. I`ve got quite a few ideas for things in the works its just the artwork i mean im not bad at art but im not confident. I might be able to get the plans that are pretty rubbish. I wonder if you could help with maybe artwork side maybe someone might be interested or something, i might have a friend who is into comics and G novels but is more on manga style She is an Amazing artist though and so is my brother. Thanks Dan just call me Dan

  2. B. Macon 18 Nov 2010 at 8:51 pm

    Hello, Dan. Some ideas…

    Unless you’re planning on becoming an artist yourself, I’d recommend focusing on your writing at this point. Like art, it takes a lot of time and practice to become an incredible writer. Do you have any writing samples you’d like me to look at? (A script? A synopsis?)

    Most authors are neither super-skilled at art nor willing to put in the large amount of time to become good enough to get their art published. So writers usually collaborate with artists, usually by paying a freelancer upfront or by collaborating with a friend/colleague on spec (for a share of prospective profits).

    Realistically, the book will only get published if the art and/or the writing are exceptional. It usually takes a lot of time to become that good. Here’s an artistic progression from my colorist, Emily.


    Improvement Meme. Weirdness. by *Foxbane on deviantART

  3. Danon 19 Nov 2010 at 3:40 pm

    Thank You,
    Yeah, I see what you mean with the bit about a friend or colleague that is what ive kind of got. Your colorist is Amazing as well!
    With were Scripts and a synopsis are concerned ive got a few plans i lost a few in a special pad i made dedicated to things comic including my ideas if i find them ones i will send you them at the minute im starting a new project so i could give you that now if you would like that. Its just being Unconfident,Young and Awkward if you see what i mean. the trouble with me is i have no (forgot the word) in my work.
    Dan Lee

  4. Danon 19 Nov 2010 at 3:43 pm

    Oh, feel free to email me.

  5. B. Macon 20 Nov 2010 at 1:58 pm

    I don’t think that publishers necessarily hold your age against you, but I think that young people generally haven’t had as many years to practice. However, you might be able to overcome that with diligence. (For example, I think that the blindfolded redhead Emily illustrated at 15-16 looks publishable).

    As for confidence, I can only assure you that your skills will improve with practice. Check out what I was writing in 2007. Not pretty. In the three years since, I think I’ve matured a lot since I’ve had time to read more, practice my writing, participate in online workshops, and work briefly in the industry.

    As for awkwardness, I think that many (if not most) of the people in this industry are very introverted. As long as you’re able to get along with your team and are at least somewhat pleasant to work with, I don’t think that awkwardness would be a major problem in publishing.

  6. Dan Leeon 20 Nov 2010 at 2:58 pm

    ok thanks

  7. Dan Leeon 20 Nov 2010 at 3:10 pm

    what way would you prefer me to send you some of my plans and even a little bit of script/synopsis that ive done. the thing im working on now is about a young male slayer having to deal with the trials and tribulations of an everyday adolescent teenager. im sort of doing this at the minute because i love Buffy and Vampire stuff so i thought it was just right. its in alpha sort of stage at the minute and is still yet to become a full draft.

  8. Dan Leeon 20 Nov 2010 at 3:16 pm

    i can see what you mean with mike-catastrophe its not too bad though ive definitely seen worse don’t worry

  9. Dan Leeon 20 Nov 2010 at 6:49 pm

    I think I might have an idea of were I left/lost my plans and stuff I will check at some point today

  10. B. Macon 20 Nov 2010 at 10:08 pm

    I can look at a synopsis or plans, if you’d like, but my advice is usually most helpful when I’m looking at a draft of the story (even if it’s a rough draft or the first few pages of a comic script). I can be reached at superheronation-at-gmail-dot-com.

    Also, in terms of professional development and getting published, I’d generally recommend working on original stories rather than fan-fiction because it practices more writing skills and because an original story can be submitted for publication. I don’t work with fan-fiction.

  11. Dan Leeon 21 Nov 2010 at 11:14 am

    You wouldn’t mind setting up a review forumn either would you it would probably be very useful,thanks
    How does this sound for a charcter name – FallenAngel
    Good or what?

  12. B. Macon 21 Nov 2010 at 1:54 pm

    Okay, Dan. I’ve set it up for you here.

  13. Herojockon 02 Dec 2010 at 10:25 am

    Hey B. Mac,

    You have email.

    From Herojock 🙂

  14. TeAvaon 09 Dec 2010 at 1:48 pm

    I need ideas for my super hero/ vilians look what should I do. This is a writing assiment and I have writers block. I also got stuck in my story, my mom told me that working on illistrations will help and guess what!? Im stuck on that TOO!!! 🙁 I dont know what to do!!! I have writers block in both subjects!!

    HELP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    please

  15. B. Macon 03 Jan 2011 at 1:51 am

    Mark, I tried to respond to your question, but Gmail told me my e-mail was “was rejected by the recipient domain.” Could you send me your e-mail address again? I think there might have been a typo.

  16. M-Rodon 09 Jan 2011 at 7:50 pm

    Hi. I was just wondering, is it bad to use a name that is already a character in a comic? I was going to call my character Elektra. But then I found out that name was an assassin in a comic.

  17. Contra Gloveon 09 Jan 2011 at 9:11 pm

    @ M-Rod

    Try to avoid using names already used in other works, unless those names are fairly common; for example, if there is a Dan the Destroyer comic, you can safely use the name Dan, but a name like, say, Naruto, is out of the question.

    As for your example, I suggest changing the name Elektra to something else. Elektra seems too distinctive.

  18. M-Rodon 10 Jan 2011 at 3:50 pm

    Okay, I see what your saying. Thanks. Just out of curiosity, what name comes to your mind when I say red lightning? I’m having trouble coming up with one. I want it to be unique and creative. (female)

  19. Contra Gloveon 10 Jan 2011 at 6:34 pm

    @ M-Rod

    How does “Crimson Bolt” sound? For a more “normal” sounding name, how about Luca? It does mean something like “light.”

  20. Contra Gloveon 12 Jan 2011 at 5:58 pm

    Sorry, B. Mac; the revision to Alien Frontier is taking longer than expected. I had to add a bit more to it.

  21. M-Rodon 12 Jan 2011 at 9:00 pm

    Maybe…it is pretty creative. How about Ashni? It means lightning.

  22. M-Rodon 12 Jan 2011 at 9:02 pm

    They* are pretty creative.

  23. B. Macon 12 Jan 2011 at 11:28 pm

    I like Ashni, but it sounds pretty masculine… The character is a female, right?

  24. Rachel Mon 13 Jan 2011 at 4:51 pm

    @M-Rod
    Are you looking for hero names or birth names?

  25. B. Macon 13 Jan 2011 at 6:20 pm

    “Sorry, B. Mac; the revision to Alien Frontier is taking longer than expected. I had to add a bit more to it.” Don’t worry–work at your pace.

  26. M-Rodon 14 Jan 2011 at 5:39 pm

    Yes the character is female. I’m looking for hero names but I was trying to be creative. A name that no one has really thought of yet.

  27. Rachel Mon 15 Jan 2011 at 7:17 am

    M-Rod
    Veton, and Borak mean ‘lightening’
    Kepi, and Corentine mean ‘tempest’
    Jasu means ‘thunderbolt’
    Elysia means ‘lightening-struck’

    And then;
    Scarlett, Ruby, Akane, Kamala, and Shani mean ‘red’
    Hope this helps!

  28. M-Rodon 19 Jan 2011 at 7:35 pm

    Oh my goodness I love those! Yes those do help! Thanks so much!

  29. Brianon 27 Jan 2011 at 4:58 pm

    Hello there, everybody at Superhero Nation!

    I’m in a bit of a pickle and wondered if someone could offer a bit of advice.

    What advice would you have for someone attempting to write a first novel about a team of superheroes without it turning into one giant X-Men ripoff???

    – B

  30. Nicholas Caseon 27 Jan 2011 at 5:45 pm

    Um…that’s very vague. There are a lot of “Team of Superheroes” that aren’t X-Men ripoffs. What’s the plot, the powers, what is this story? You can’t ask for help and not specify.

  31. B. Macon 27 Jan 2011 at 8:12 pm

    Hmm. One way to differentiate your group from the X-Men would be to give them different methods or a different goal. The main goal for the X-Men is ensuring peace between humans and mutants. In contrast, the Fantastic Four mix in a lot of scientific exploration into the standard superpowered crime-fighting. The Bureau for Paranormal Research and Defense guards against mystical and occult threats. In The Taxman Must Die, my Office of Special Investigations focuses mainly on massive crimes of a decidedly wacky nature, like an invasion of the Hudson Bay by space slugs and a cosmeticist trying to destroy humanity.

    Another approach would be to use different sorts of teammates. I’d say most of the X-Men come from mostly mundane civilian backgrounds before they developed their mutant powers. If you wanted, you could work in more teammates that had specialized backgrounds in their field, like most of the protagonists in G.I. Joe. Relatedly, you could try teammates that focus more on skills than their superpowers.

    I think you could also try varying the team culture and/or leadership. I think teammates on a team like the Doom Patrol will interact in a different way than, say, a Delta Force unit or the Teen Titans or a criminal gang. One thing that differentiates the X-Men and Xavier from Dynamo Five is that Dynamo Five’s members tend to conflict a bit more with each other and with their team’s equivalent of Xavier. Also, in the cartoons and movies, Xavier is almost uniformly nice and not particularly interesting. In contrast, Dynamo Five’s leader is always tough and occasionally ruthless. (The X-Men comic books flesh out Xavier a bit more in that regard, I think).



    I hope that helped! Please let me know if I can flesh out any of this more or help in some other way.

  32. Contra Gloveon 14 Mar 2011 at 6:22 pm

    The website keeps eating my chapter postings. It takes short posts like this one, but when I try to post a longer piece of text, it doesn’t show up — it doesn’t give me an error or anything, it just doesn’t show up at all.

    What’s going on?

  33. B. Macon 14 Mar 2011 at 7:18 pm

    It got caught in the spam filter. I’ve freed them. I’ve adjusted the spam filter so that hopefully it won’t happen again, but please let me know if it does. Sorry for any inconvenience.

  34. Contra Gloveon 14 Mar 2011 at 9:11 pm

    Thanks, B. Mac. If at all possible, could you please get rid of the duplicates? I kept re-posting the chapter because I wasn’t sure what was going on.

  35. Contra Gloveon 15 Mar 2011 at 11:55 am

    Could you release my third chapter from moderation, then eliminate all but the most recent copy? I had been posting it over and over when I didn’t know what was going on.

  36. Contra Gloveon 15 Mar 2011 at 5:10 pm

    Thanks for freeing my chapter. When you have time, could you look at it?

  37. Contra Gloveon 17 Mar 2011 at 7:01 pm

    Just a friendly reminder regarding my new chapter.

  38. Contra Gloveon 29 Mar 2011 at 12:59 pm

    Let me take this moment to say that I am still writing the story — I haven’t forgotten about you all. It’s just that finding time can be difficult.

  39. B. Macon 29 Mar 2011 at 2:40 pm

    No worries, Contra! Feel free to work at your own pace and, if you feel your own pace isn’t fast enough, check out my articles on writers’ block. 🙂

  40. Contra Gloveon 07 Apr 2011 at 12:29 pm

    A revised Chapter 3 has been posted, as has Chapter 4. Had to make up for my long period of inactivity, you know.

  41. Contra Gloveon 07 Apr 2011 at 12:31 pm

    For those unaware, my story, Alien Frontier, can be accessed here.

  42. Contra Gloveon 08 Apr 2011 at 2:58 pm

    Think you can do my chapters, B. Mac? I’m not expecting them right this minute, so if you have other commitments, don’t worry — I’ll give you a whole week before I say anything.

  43. Contra Gloveon 19 Apr 2011 at 2:57 pm

    Are you on Twitter, B. Mac?

  44. B. Macon 19 Apr 2011 at 5:57 pm

    I have a Twitter account (SuperheroNation), but I don’t tweet often.

  45. Contra Gloveon 25 Apr 2011 at 2:33 pm

    Could you take a look at my Chapter 4 now? I know you had to get your teeth dealt with that one time, which is why I waited until now to ask.

  46. B. Macon 25 Apr 2011 at 11:44 pm

    Oh, Jesus! I didn’t get that back to you already? Sorry about that–I’ll get right on it.

  47. Contra Gloveon 26 Apr 2011 at 2:45 am

    Thanks, B. Mac.

  48. Vendettaon 27 Apr 2011 at 4:39 pm

    Hello. I have something I’ve been looking for advice on, and I would be flattered if you’d help me out. A technique I use sometimes in my fiction writing is impassivity. Like, if a ‘haracter breaks their arm, for example, the narrative voice would be something like ‘Her mind was so focused on the book that she almost didn’t feel it when the bone broke’ to give kind of a chilling effect. But I was wondering if it shows a lack of empathetic writing on the author’s part. Help me out?

  49. B. Macon 27 Apr 2011 at 7:36 pm

    Vendetta, my initial impression is that it’s not as immediate, but I’m guessing that’s sort of the point. I’m not sure about this example in particular, but I think it’d be possible to use this style in a chilling way.



    One concern I have with this example is that I feel there’s a disconnect between “Her mind was so focused on the book” (which is from her point of view) and “she almost didn’t feel it when the bone broke” (which sounds more like there’s an intermediary between the character and the reader). As a minor tweak, something like “…she almost didn’t feel the bone break” may be a bit smoother and more consistent.

  50. Contra Gloveon 01 May 2011 at 4:25 pm

    B. Mac, I have a question.

    Would you say that anime and manga have ruined Japan as a setting for genre fiction? I have no evidence to back this up — just a hunch, since the anime/manga boom in the late 90s and early 2000s has resulted in a deluge of poorly-written fanfiction stuffed to the gills with misused honorifics (I know they’re misused because I have actually studied Japanese) and horrendous art with freakishly beady eyes and octagonal faces (actual anime and manga is considerably more varied in art style — and that’s just looking at the commercial stuff.)

    I get the feeling that sending a publisher anything set in Japan would make them take one look at the manuscript, think of a cavalcade of Satoko-chans and Yoshida-kuns saying “Aishiteiru yo” and eating onigiri amid an ignorantly-written slew of otherwise English words and American attitudes, then send the thing to the circular file as they mentally erase bad deviantArt imagery from their minds.

    Mind you, I’m saying this as someone who genuinely enjoys it, though not as fervently as when I was in high school. And sorry if this comes off as a bit angry — it’s not aimed at you or this site; I just really want to write an SF/F story set in Japan without any of the otaku culture hanging over my head like a katana of Damokuresu.

  51. B. Macon 01 May 2011 at 5:43 pm

    “Would you say that anime and manga have ruined Japan as a setting for genre fiction?” No, I don’t think so. I would REALLY hope that a publisher would be able to tell the difference between a good story set in Japan and a bad one. If a publisher was unable to make that distinction, you probably wouldn’t want to work with them anyway.

    I don’t think that setting a story in Japan would be markedly more risky than setting a story in the UK, US or Canada.

    It would be unusual to set an English-language story in a non-Anglophone country, but 1) I’m guessing that you have a compelling reason to set it there and 2) Thanks to the anime/manga boom, there’s a larger market for a work set in Japan than, say, Indonesia or the Philippines.

    If the story was otherwise publishable, I don’t think publishers would turn it away because it was set in Japan. If the Japanese research you incorporated was so dense that you’d have to be a hardcore Japanophile to enjoy the story, that could be a problem.

    One potential concern I’d have is that setting it in Japan–really, writing any story related to your expertise–gives you more chance to lose your readers in the details. For example, Tom Clancy has a MAJOR hard-on for submarines, and pretty much every one of his books has a submarine described in almost erotic detail. Please be careful that your details are actually advancing some story objective or contributing to the reading experience rather than just showing off how much you know.



    “…think of a cavalcade of Satoko-chans and Yoshida-kuns saying “Aishiteiru yo…”” Personally, I have no idea what’s wrong with Satoko-chans and Yoshida-kuns saying “Aishiteiru yo” and I don’t think that getting it right would add anything to my reading experience. Please see the above note on Tom Clancy’s fascination with submarines.

  52. Contra Gloveon 01 May 2011 at 6:07 pm

    Thanks for the response. I wouldn’t do something as foolish as lose readers in details to the detriment of the plot. And of course, I’d write it with Americans in mind, so I’d try hard not to make it inaccessible.

  53. Vendettaon 05 May 2011 at 8:17 am

    I see. Thank you so much!

    Yeah… the example sentence was written pretty hastily because I just wanted a quick reference point.

  54. Contra Gloveon 24 May 2011 at 4:37 pm

    I’ve e-mailed you Chapter 5, B. Mac.

  55. Contra Gloveon 27 May 2011 at 9:01 am

    I know that an actual review would take time, but did you at least receive my chapter, B. Mac? I’m afraid I might have mistyped my e-mail address in the “Your Email” field.

  56. B. Macon 27 May 2011 at 10:24 am

    I received it and anticipate that I will have it ready within a week.

  57. Contra Gloveon 27 May 2011 at 10:32 am

    Thanks. Keep up the good work — you work hard for all of us! 🙂

  58. Contra Gloveon 02 Jun 2011 at 6:26 am

    How’s the review coming?

  59. B. Macon 03 Jun 2011 at 3:08 am

    CG, I just sent you the review. Thanks for the reminder.

  60. Contra Gloveon 03 Jun 2011 at 6:31 am

    If you send the review again and I still don’t receive it, just post it in the review forum instead.

  61. Contra Gloveon 03 Jun 2011 at 12:08 pm

    I’m posting here to confirm that I received the review in my e-mail. Thanks, B. Mac.

  62. B. Macon 03 Jun 2011 at 1:06 pm

    Ah, cool. I sent it to the wrong e-mail address originally. 🙂

  63. Contra Gloveon 19 Jun 2011 at 6:04 am

    When do you think you’ll have a review of the chapter I just sent you? I understand that you still have to prepare for your trip to Korea, so I know it will take some time.

  64. B. Macon 19 Jun 2011 at 2:26 pm

    Ideally within the next week, CG.

  65. Contra Gloveon 19 Jun 2011 at 3:18 pm

    All right, B. Mac.

  66. Contra Gloveon 24 Jun 2011 at 5:38 am

    How’s the review coming along?

  67. B. Macon 24 Jun 2011 at 10:46 am

    Hey, I still have a few days! 😉

  68. Contra Gloveon 24 Jun 2011 at 12:05 pm

    That’s true. Take your time. 🙂

  69. anonymous stranger personon 22 Jul 2011 at 11:41 pm

    I keep trying to use the contact form, but it never actually goes through. Is there any other way to contact you all?

  70. B. Macon 23 Jul 2011 at 4:49 am

    I can be emailed at superheronation-at-gmail-dot-com. Sorry for any inconvenience!

  71. Contra Gloveon 30 Jul 2011 at 10:24 am

    I’ve sent the e-mail.

  72. Contra Gloveon 30 Jul 2011 at 4:49 pm

    I know I wrote a lot, but did you at least receive the e-mail, B. Mac?

  73. B. Macon 30 Jul 2011 at 8:19 pm

    Yeah, CG. I’ve responded.

  74. Contra Gloveon 31 Jul 2011 at 5:06 am

    I’m posting here to confirm that I read it. Thanks.

  75. Harrisonon 02 Aug 2011 at 1:26 pm

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    Please consider spreading the word about this film either on or through your website. There is an embeddable link on the linked page I’ve provided. Feel free to also email me back with any questions, and if you decide to use it so we can send it out through our network for cross promotion. This could be a tremendous opportunity for both of us!

    Looking forward to working with you!
    Harrison

  76. Patrick Harrison 11 Sep 2011 at 10:43 pm

    Hi, my name is Patrick Harris. I am a young adult working my way through college and also a previously published author. During the past four years, I have throughly used the resources of Superhero Nation to refine my new book, Waterman. I have drafted a query letter for agents and a synopsis, and the manuscript is ready. However, I figured I would use the one last resource here at Superhero Nation. Could you put up a spot on the review forum I could post Waterman for people to read and critique, by chance? Additionally, would you be willing to read through my query letter and synopsis and provide critical feedback so as to improve my chances of interesting a literary agent?

    Thanks in advance, and thank you for all of your help from this site.

    Patrick

  77. B. McKenzieon 11 Sep 2011 at 11:29 pm

    Sure, Patrick. I’ve set it up for you here. I’ve used the default “Please see the comments below” as the text at the top, but please let me know if you’d like me to replace that with a summary of the novel.

    As for the query, you can either email that to me at superheronation-at-gmail-dot-com or post it along with the story proper in the forum.

  78. Patrick Harrison 12 Sep 2011 at 11:18 pm

    Thanks a bunch! I’ll send that right your way.

  79. Peteron 07 Nov 2011 at 3:53 am

    Is there a forum for how to write car chases correctly, its just my novel involves a freeway chase and I want to make it realistic, paced and yet still intense.

  80. YoungAuthoron 18 Jan 2012 at 5:31 pm

    I would like a review forum, but i have not yet recieved one. Could it be possible for me to obtain one? Thank you.

  81. Dan Leeon 12 Feb 2012 at 12:26 pm

    hey B Mac, its Dan Lee and im back and im scraping my other ideas and starting from scratch im going to try and give more information on were i want to go with it now aswell, thanks
    can you make me a different review forum also if thats ok

  82. Smallvilleon 13 Feb 2012 at 11:33 am

    By different i mean a new one?

  83. B. McKenzieon 13 Feb 2012 at 2:01 pm

    Alright. I’ve set it up here, Dan.

  84. Red16on 21 Feb 2012 at 5:52 pm

    Hi. I need help coming up with a team name for 6 people. Three boys and 3 girls.

    one boy has ice, the second water, and the third super strength

    one girl has mind control, the second lava, and the third energy (its kinda like lightning)

  85. Red16on 24 Feb 2012 at 3:12 pm

    Hello? Can you help?

  86. B. McKenzieon 24 Feb 2012 at 4:39 pm

    This article might help, Red16.

  87. Bad-Peopleon 10 Mar 2012 at 9:31 pm

    I registered at this site but I never receive a password e-mail. Will that be a problem if I want a review forum?

  88. B. McKenzieon 11 Mar 2012 at 6:04 am

    “Will that be a problem if I want a review forum?” No. You don’t need to sign in to access the forum.

  89. ehrichon 31 May 2012 at 2:33 pm

    any way we can get a forum page where we can post info on looking for people around us to collaborate with? like posting our email address, state and city and such? (no not phone numbers or exact addresses) but to just find people in our area to help each other out, like illiterater looking for a writer

  90. B. McKenzieon 01 Jun 2012 at 5:40 am

    I’ve set one up here, Ehrich. I’d also recommend checking out deviantArt postings and LinkedIn.

  91. Contra Gloveon 08 Jul 2012 at 6:05 pm

    Just reminding you of that story I sent you.

  92. ehrichon 08 Jul 2012 at 6:57 pm

    McKenzie, can i get a forum to discuss how to write a great Interrogation ? im kinda stuck on this part of my comic to get it to move forward

  93. B. McKenzieon 08 Jul 2012 at 9:20 pm

    Alright, Ehrich. I’ve set it up here.

  94. Sandra Weinbergon 25 Jan 2013 at 8:45 am

    Hello There,

    My name is Sandra and I’m a professional blogger.

    I have over three years of experience writing for the web and have covered plenty of topics about Automobile Industry.

    I noticed that you have a blog and was wondering if you would be interested in allow me to write relevant, useful topics about Automobile Industry on your blog at no cost.

    At this point in my writing career, I simply want to get more visibility for your writing and I will write for free as long as you are okay with me adding a small author bio section next to each blog post about myself.

    Please let me know if you’re interested and if you’d like for me to submit a sample blog post for your approval.

    Thanks a bunch,

    Sandra

  95. B. McKenzieon 25 Jan 2013 at 4:38 pm

    Hello, Sandra! I happen to be a writer/blogger myself and, seeing as this is a writing advice website, hopefully it would not be presumptuous for me to share my thoughts on your proposal. First, I’d recommend putting more individual thought into your pitches–pitching a car article to a superhero writing website is a bit counterintuitive. If you do have to pitch a car article to a superhero writing website, I’d recommend doing something to make it relevant to the interests of the site’s readers. For example, I’d consider an article about why the Batmobile is or is not plausible, how much it would cost to build an incredible car, or 5 Ways to Use Cars as a Literary Symbol if your writing tastes run more literary than superheroic. I’d also recommend including the recipient’s name in the proposal–in SN’s case, literally every page has an author’s name, so including a name is both a nice touch and very easy.

    Additionally, as much as possible, I’d recommend conveying enthusiasm in your work. A fun article idea or two would probably help a lot there. Spending AT LEAST five minutes reading the website before writing anything would probably help as well–e.g. check out the WRITE FOR US button in the main navigation tab of the website.

  96. tiffon 21 Feb 2013 at 6:06 am

    hi, i am writing a pitch for a superhero film, for film studies at GCSE, i need help designing a name for my superhero, she is a greek female, her alter ego’s name is elizavet samaras meaning god is our oath, she is a christian, her fighting style is using two knives, her superpowers are supervision, mind-reading and extremely good free-running which includes far jumps. she is slim+toned who is tanned.

  97. Jacob Strainon 21 Feb 2013 at 5:19 pm

    What is her personality like? How did she get her powers? What is her motivation/goal? Tiff, I need more to work with here.

  98. B. McKenzieon 21 Feb 2013 at 11:22 pm

    “hi, i am writing a pitch for a superhero film, for film studies at GCSE, i need help designing a name for my superhero, she is a greek female, her alter ego’s name is elizavet samaras meaning god is our oath, she is a christian, her fighting style is using two knives, her superpowers are supervision, mind-reading and extremely good free-running which includes far jumps. she is slim+toned who is tanned.”

    Some thoughts:
    –The character could be developed a lot more beyond demographics and visuals. For example, what are some major decisions she’d make that 95%+ of superheroes wouldn’t make in the same situation? What are some major decisions she’d make that 95% of cinematic Christians wouldn’t make in the same situation?

    –I think the proofreading could be stronger. Keep in mind that most film pitches ask a Hollywood professional to risk probably $100,000+ on the screenwriter’s writing. It would really help if the professional is confident in your writing, and the first step there is demonstrating a strong grasp of the mechanics.

    –I don’t think her superhero name is all that important, but if the Christian element is very important to the story, perhaps something biblically themed like Jael (a heroine who defeated an enemy commander with a hammer to the head and trickery, but mainly the hammer).

  99. Jimmy T.on 06 Mar 2013 at 6:17 am

    — Dragons? Vampires? Aliens? Superheroes? Pirates?
    Yeah bro, they’re all here, seamlessly meshed into an Awesome Tale of Destiny…

    ~ This is a series about a young hero with the heart of a Dragon, capable of seeking out sacred artifacts, this heart guides the hero to their whereabouts so that he may neutralize them before they distort the planet into a twisted black hole.

    Howdy there, Superhero Nation!
    I’m wondering if there are any peoples here willing to stretch their themselves over to my facebook group for a look at my upcoming novel, Fragment of the Sun.
    You see I’m trying to get this book off the ground by bringing a bunch of awesome peoples ready to be seen by the world. This book series is my long-time dream, but I can’t bring it up by myself. I need fresh faces willing to put some elbow magic on this fantasy project.
    This book series is in serious need of some good writers and I find this place to be quite the home base for some! So if you would, please hit me up for more information, the detailed Synopsis, and even a sample of what I’m workin’ with. I’m sure together we can bring this about the world and help those in need of a really good book.
    https://www.facebook.com/groups/FragmentoftheSun/

  100. gurlson 16 Apr 2013 at 3:40 pm

    B. Mac: You’ve got mail.

  101. B. McKenzieon 16 Apr 2013 at 8:19 pm

    Thanks, gurls — I’ll get on it this week.

  102. gurlson 19 Apr 2013 at 4:01 pm

    Still waiting on that response.

  103. Jayon 14 May 2013 at 1:01 pm

    Yo, B.Mac I sent you a story idea that I would like you to look at and get a review forum for. Have you gotten it?

  104. B. McKenzieon 14 May 2013 at 4:16 pm

    Thanks for the reminder, Jay. I’ve set it up for you here.

  105. Amandaon 28 May 2013 at 4:22 pm

    I NEED ADVISE.
    Hi, I was wondering if you could give me some tips and advise on how to write about superhero training? I have some of it written down but I want to know how to actually write it really good please, I really need help and I want to make this story really good! So basically I need help on describing how this guy develops his flame, water and flight abilities thats the part I need most help on. Please please help me I would love it if you would you give really great advise! -Amanda

  106. B. McKenzieon 29 May 2013 at 3:45 am

    Hello, Amanda. I’d recommend the article How to Do Training Scenes.

  107. Destinyon 30 May 2013 at 11:12 am

    I really need some help, I have several stories in progress and I’m stuck on all of them, not counting some I lost! Writers block kills me, and I really need some publishing advice because I really am tight on cash but need to start making it, but I can’t afford to make any big mistakes with it, any way you can help me?

  108. B. McKenzieon 30 May 2013 at 3:56 pm

    “Writers block kills me, and I really need some publishing advice because I really am tight on cash but need to start making it…” If you aren’t already doing so, I’d recommend getting a full-time writing position (e.g. a marketing or communications job) and/or getting a regular full-time job and writing on the side. The average novelist takes 9-11 years to get published and most novelists make less than minimum wage for their writing.

    As for the writer’s block, I’d suggest checking out How to Beat Writer’s Block and 8 Reasons Authors Don’t Complete Manuscripts (reason #1, working on too many projects to finish one, sounds like it may be an issue in this case — I’d suggest picking one project and sticking with it).

  109. XosMelon 14 Jun 2013 at 6:41 am

    Hey Mac, I think this post is spam.

    “I hope you’re having a great week! My name is Harrison and I work with SnagFilms.com. We are an online library of over 2100 films, free for audiences to stream. I just wanted to let you know that a film that you may be very interested in, “The Mindscape of Alan Moore”, is now available for free streaming via this link: http://www.snagfilms.com/films/title/the_mindscape_of_alan_moore/

    Please consider spreading the word about this film either on or through your website. There is an embeddable link on the linked page I’ve provided. Feel free to also email me back with any questions, and if you decide to use it so we can send it out through our network for cross promotion. This could be a tremendous opportunity for both of us!

    Looking forward to working with you!
    Harrison”

    It gives not even the slightest comment to you or superheronation. I think it’s just a way for this guy to get views, kind of like people spamming in the comments on other people’s youtube videos.

  110. Elecon 14 Jun 2013 at 9:04 pm

    Yeah, that seems a bit off… he’s only “hope(ing) you’re having a great week!” to get people to watch his channel.

  111. Blackscaron 05 Jul 2013 at 4:27 pm

    @B McKenzie

    I’ve sent you the first chapter of my novel. Would you please review it if you have time?

    Thanks in advance!

  112. B. McKenzieon 06 Jul 2013 at 1:11 am

    Sure, Blackscar. If I haven’t sent you a review within a week (by July 13), could you get back to me?

  113. Blackscaron 06 Jul 2013 at 5:32 am

    @B.McKenzie

    Certainly. Thank you for your time!

  114. Jake S.on 09 Jul 2013 at 12:03 pm

    Hey there, I have an original article that I think would be perfect for your site.

    It’s in relation to Iron Man 3 and it does a review of how Pepper Potts stole show (backed up with evidence).

    I really think it would be a cool piece to have on your site. Please shoot me and email if you’re interested in taking a look!

    Best,

    Jake

  115. Blackscaron 13 Jul 2013 at 8:54 am

    @B.McKenzie

    Just reminding you that I’ve not received the review yet.

    Take your time, though! I don’t want to rush you!

    Thanks,
    Blackscar

  116. AliceNightingaleon 27 Jul 2013 at 12:51 pm

    Hey, I was just hoping for some tips and advice when it comes to creating a good Villain for a comic I’ve just started working on.
    If you could contact me (somehow) with some ideas, that’d be great.
    Thank you,
    AliceNightingale

  117. Pat L.on 28 Jul 2013 at 7:50 pm

    Hey, I recently found this site. I know this site focuses more on superheros, but could I send you an excerpt from my sci-fi novel

  118. B. McKenzieon 28 Jul 2013 at 9:15 pm

    If the manuscript is drafted, you can send me the first chapter. If you don’t have the first draft of the manuscript ready, you can send me a synopsis (ideally 1-2 pages), but I’d suggest finishing the first draft before worrying about sending in any chapters for editing and/or rewriting. (Until the draft is complete, everything else is a distraction from the road to victory).

  119. MixArroyoon 27 Aug 2013 at 7:25 pm

    @B. McKenzie

    Good day! I tried emailing a copy of one of my scripts for you to look at but the email address that was listed on the top doesn’t work. (superheronation@gmail.com) Is there an alternate email I can use? Thanks!

  120. B. McKenzieon 28 Aug 2013 at 10:12 pm

    Hmm, that’s odd… I’ve been receiving emails at superheronation@gmail.com every day this week.

    1) Could you try sending it again?

    2) Which email address did you use? (Perhaps it got held up by a spam filter).

  121. MixArroyoon 29 Aug 2013 at 8:14 am

    Hi! I just re-sent it. I think it went through! Thanks!

  122. Blackscaron 17 Sep 2013 at 5:07 pm

    @B.McKenzie

    Hello! I was wondering, would you possibly be able to look at the first chapter of my novel, if it isn’t too much trouble?

    If so, would I be better off emailing it to you, or should I post it in my review forum (provided I find it again, haha)?

    Thanks,

    Blackscar

  123. B. McKenzieon 17 Sep 2013 at 5:25 pm

    Sure, you can email it to me. Thanks!

  124. Blackscaron 17 Sep 2013 at 5:57 pm

    @B. McKenzie

    Thank you very much; I’ll send you the first chapter sometime tonight!

  125. Blackscaron 17 Sep 2013 at 6:03 pm

    @B. McKenzie

    I’ve sent it; hopefully it will go through!

  126. BobCon 18 Sep 2013 at 12:14 am

    Question: Does the main character ALWAYS appear in the MOST PAGES of a script? If he is the catalyst, the engine that drives the story, and creates action and conflict with the other characters, does that make him a secondary character?

  127. B. McKenzieon 18 Sep 2013 at 5:38 am

    “Does the main character ALWAYS appear in the most pages of a script?” No. For example, perhaps it’s more of an ensemble cast (e.g. Watchmen) or a book with several main characters (e.g. Fantastic Four). Either would be fine. Set reader expectations early, be consistent, and you’ll be fine.

    The main problem I anticipate would be if you go against reader expectations. For example:
    –Let’s say issues 1-2 of “Captain Kaiju” are mainly about the title character, but he gets sidelined in issue 3 in favor of a character that wasn’t major in 1-2. This would probably annoy a lot of readers that have made it to issue 3 because he’s almost assuredly a major reason they are still reading.
    –It would also be problematic if your first issue focused on a setup character or someone else that isn’t a main character moving forward (e.g. Superman’s parents rather than Superman). You really want to lead with your most interesting content to hook wavering readers… if Superman’s parents are more interesting than Superman, something has gone disastrously wrong for your Superman story.

  128. Elecon 20 Sep 2013 at 2:47 am

    “if Superman’s parents are more interesting than Superman, something has gone disastrously wrong for your Superman story.”

    Heh, remind me to come back here more often. Forget about the writing advice, just make the site a compilation of your hilarious comments :).

  129. B. McKenzieon 20 Sep 2013 at 6:37 am

    “Just make the site a compilation of your hilarious comments.” I’d recommend checking out this thread and this thread.

  130. Blackscaron 24 Sep 2013 at 4:15 am

    @B. McKenzie

    Just letting you know I haven’t yet received your review.

    Thanks,

    Blackscar

  131. B. McKenzieon 24 Sep 2013 at 6:29 am

    Thanks for the reminder — I will get back to you ASAP.

  132. Blackscaron 24 Sep 2013 at 7:50 am

    @B. McKenzie

    Oh, I’m not rushing you, or anything! Just reminding, haha. Thank you very much, though!

    -Blackscar

  133. Elecon 25 Sep 2013 at 4:55 am

    B. Mac, you should make all of the articles available to download in one package or something. I wouldn’t mind paying a small fee for that, and I’m sure others wouldn’t. Just my thoughts. Feel free to ignore them completely :).

  134. Blackscaron 03 Oct 2013 at 3:17 am

    @B. McKenzie

    Just letting you know I have not gotten your review yet!

    Thanks,

    Blackscar

  135. Robby Salisburyon 16 Oct 2013 at 5:17 pm

    Check out my Super hero movie, It is a movie about a super hero who can never die and his life after civilization. Tell me what you think of the idea!

  136. B. McKenzieon 16 Oct 2013 at 11:22 pm

    Hey, Robby, I generally delete self-links where someone drops in, leaves a link appropos of nothing, and disappears. In general, when you’re marketing yourself online, I’d recommend being a part of a conversation (e.g. trying to interact with other people, tying your movie into something other people are talking about, etc).



    I would probably guess that you’re going to 10+ websites and leaving a comment or two on each? I think you’d probably go further by putting more effort into one or two.

  137. writeron 27 Oct 2013 at 4:06 pm

    I just sent you an email. It isn’t a story so it isn’t attached to a doc. It was three pages on Word, so should I have attached it?

  138. B. McKenzieon 27 Oct 2013 at 8:24 pm

    Writer, the way you formatted it works for me.

  139. Kevin Holsingeron 06 Nov 2013 at 6:48 am

    Good morning, Mr. McKenzie.

    I tried registering last month, but never received a password. I tried emailing about the 14th of last month to ask about this, but never received a response.

    I’d just like to know if there’s something I’m missing about the registration process.

    My thanks in advance. Enjoy your day.

  140. B. McKenzieon 06 Nov 2013 at 8:18 am

    KH, I’ve emailed you a new password.

  141. Kevin Holsingeron 06 Nov 2013 at 10:29 am

    I know I thanked you already, but thanks again, sir.

    And while I’m here, is there any way besides trial and error to figure out how to avoid the “you’re posting too quick” message?

  142. B. McKenzieon 06 Nov 2013 at 10:33 am

    If you’re logged in, it shouldn’t show you the “you’re posting too quick” message. Are you seeing it while logged in?

  143. michael pooelyon 14 Nov 2013 at 11:03 pm

    I have recently come across this site and have gone through it.

    Partially based on this site, and the fact I like to write I have decided to try my hand at a superhero stroy.

    It is still in development. I do not know if this is the correct place. If not Could you kindly put in the right place.

    Origin Story
    Lee Rivers works at a new power generation facility. It is the first of its kind. A miniature sun will be created and its output will be the source of power. However an accident occurs. A number of people die, and others survive. For Lee Rivers his inborn power is awakened as well as new powers of gravity control and solar regeneration. Amanda Bridge gains the suns ability: – radiation gravity light heat. She is turning into a sun. This will eventually kill her. Both take different paths with their powers. He trains and tries to control his powers. The growing powers discharge randomly and are getting wilder. The hero is the only one to be a friend. Now with his developing powers he tries to stop her. He tries through friendship. Just as he was helping her she dies as she turns into a miniature sun. This sentient sun must now leave Earth for someplace else. He adapts a costume to protect him and his girlfriend. He leaves the spot light to live a normal life until needed. To his costume he has added a sun symbol in honour of the one who died. His call symbol is a project sun symbol.

    Main story
    An underground world tries to take over the above ground world. The ebony Dynamo is the only one to stand in their way. The authorities are about equal to the task of containing them. The hero is needed to defeat them.

    Thank You.

  144. Kevin Holsingeron 15 Nov 2013 at 10:23 am

    Good afternoon, Mr. Pooely.

    While I’m not the man in charge of this site, and hence no idea if there’s a proper place to put your story, it might be on the “list of superhero origin stories” page, since that’s what you included…

    http://www.superheronation.com/2012/02/16/list-of-superhero-origin-stories/

    As for what you wrote…

    1. “For Lee Rivers his inborn power is awakened as well as new powers of gravity control and solar regeneration” Would you mind clarifying the difference between the inborn and new powers?

    2. “The growing powers discharge randomly and are getting wilder” Lee’s powers, Amanda’s, or both?

    3. Is Amanda trying to control her abilities like Lee? If not, why not?

    Enjoy your day.

  145. michael pooelyon 15 Nov 2013 at 7:48 pm

    Kevin
    1] he is a very low powered mutant. He can detect electricty. I can create a small electric spark. He can drain and charge batteries. After the accident these powers grow. He gains the powers of solar regeneration and limited gravity control. Neither of these he had before. So new powers as opposed to innate powers.

    2] it is Amanda’s powers that are getting out of hand.

    3] why is Amanda trying to control her powers. I do not know at this point. But I will come up with a reason or I will change this part. She might be but the powers are growing faster than her ability to contol them. Shock. Not knowing what to do. these are all possible.

    Be happy.

  146. tstutzon 27 Nov 2013 at 2:19 pm

    what would a Complete original color guide for Web of Spider-Man Vol. 1 No. 14 go for does anyone know

  147. B. McKenzieon 27 Nov 2013 at 6:57 pm

    “what would a Complete original color guide for Web of Spider-Man Vol. 1 No. 14 go for does anyone know.” No, sorry. I’d recommend asking a collector. My guess is that a ~1985 issue without major historical value* is probably not a lottery ticket.

    *E.g. the first appearance of a major character or perhaps the death of a major character that actually stays dead.

  148. Mattcon 02 Jan 2014 at 7:27 pm

    Hi, I am working on a comic and was wondering if you know of any publishing companies I could submit my work to.

  149. CCOlsonon 05 Jan 2014 at 12:37 pm

    Hi, this is CCOlson. I’m currently deleting just about every story I’ve ever written. Is there any chance you could delete the works I posted for review to the CCOlsen review forum? If not, no big.

  150. B. McKenzieon 06 Jan 2014 at 12:03 am

    CCOlsen, I’ve deleted your review forum.

  151. Paris Watkinson 04 Feb 2014 at 9:38 am

    I need help in publishing. Please go to my website to view my work. I have a fan base over 100,000 people who love my stuff and to see at the next level.

  152. B. McKenzieon 04 Feb 2014 at 11:46 pm

    “I need help in publishing. Please go to my website to view my work. I have a fan base over 100,000 people who love my stuff and to see at the next level.” If you have 100,000 readers willing to pay for your work, I think you’re doing pretty damn well already. My main suggestions would be 1) cover more of the story content, so that your website’s viewers have an easier time finding out what the stories are about, and 2) in terms of artistic production values, I’d recommend against hand-lettering anything and it may help to go more digital and focus less on pencils.

  153. Juon 20 Jun 2014 at 3:17 pm

    Hello there,

    I am an aspiring author all the way down in sunny island Singapore.
    I found this webpage and found it very inspiring as I am embarking on my first chapter book on a superhero.

    Would love be in your mailing list! I need all the inspiration and encouragement from like minded people.

    Looking forward to hearing from you.

    Sincerely;

    Ju

  154. LoneSword7878on 21 Jun 2014 at 9:34 pm

    Wow… 0_0

    This is a pretty expansive site!

    I can’t remember the first time I came across this place, but I do remember taking some sort of test that measures whether I have a character that can considered a “Mary-Sue.” Well, I don’t think I need to explain why I’ve come here because we’re all here for the exact same reason.

    I feel that it is safe to say that I have a significantly broad imagination and have already come up with ideas for a few series. Some of these are simple but there are others that I think I could really use some help on for certain reasons. I will admit that I have done zero storyboarding or concept work save for a tiny cutout figurine that I made way back in high school and have only been in the planning stages ever since. I have made a number of rough drafts for episodes of one series but they’re pretty sloppy. Also, I have no concerns with being original for its own sake but I have a lot for pacing and coherence.

    Seeing as this is, like I said, a very large site, I was wondering if there are places here where I can go one step at a time or so?

  155. B. McKenzieon 22 Jun 2014 at 7:49 am

    “Seeing as this is, like I said, a very large site, I was wondering if there are places here where I can go one step at a time or so?” I’m not sure what you mean. It may help to try the index pages (http://www.superheronation.com/2008/02/24/index-writing-guides/ and http://www.superheronation.com/2008/02/24/index-writing-about-superheroes/ ).

  156. Weisson 18 Jul 2014 at 9:53 pm

    Hi. I’ve emailed you with a request for a review – if you don’t have time, however, it’s certainly fine.

    Just thought I should notify you here in case something didn’t go through.

    ~Weiss

  157. B. McKenzieon 19 Jul 2014 at 9:23 pm

    Hello, Weiss. I’ve responded with the review, thanks.

  158. Won 02 Sep 2014 at 10:25 am

    Awesome site.
    I am planning to write a superhero story for NaNoWriMo this year and break away from my usual genre. Gave me a lot more than I was looking for. Thanks!

  159. Sara G.on 10 Sep 2014 at 4:50 pm

    I’ve been looking all over for someone experienced in writing comics who might be able to tell me if I’m on the right track with my script, so I was really excited to find this site! Before I send you something you’d prefer not to read, though: do you only review superhero comics? I can tell that seems to be your specialty, but would you be willing to look at a slightly different genre? (It’s still in the “super” category, not like a slice-of-life story or anything.)

  160. Adam Eon 24 Oct 2014 at 2:54 pm

    Alright I am 17 years old and I am really into comics, I have so many ideas and I have no clue were to even start. If I even knew were to stat, I have no idea how to put a comic on paper. How would I format it.? I would love advice, please let me know if you have any.

  161. ANGELLOVERon 25 Oct 2014 at 1:54 pm

    hey b.mac can u set up a review forum for my ides? thanks.
    sorry I cant email u, but here is my summary

    One day, one girl wanders out of the woods. a 19 year old girl named kit finds her, threatens to take her to the cops, but Sam ((the girl) these are just filler names until I come up with better ones.) shows Kat that she can fly, so Kat decides that she can’t turn her over to the cops, and takes her in. 8 years pass, and they find 2 other girls who can fly. Then, one day, Kat takes them camping, and they encounter some Fannoys, these things made specially to hunt them down. The Fannoys can blend in with their surroundings, or have other stealth powers, so that it makes Sam and co. impossible to fight, or run away from them. They mostly are the trackers, though. The brute force comes later. Sam and co. (their names are Brittney-12 Sam- 14 and Maggie-10) get away, though Maggie has a broken arm. They head back to the tent, only to find that Kat is gone. Sam searches her laptop, and finds that she has been emailing with the Company a lot. The laptop wipes itself before she can find anymore, so they all fly off to Oregon and try to blend in. that works just fine for about 3 days, then Sam finds a mysterious stranger named Lucas. Neither of them realize the other has powers, and Lucas lets it slip that he spends most of his time running from the Fannoys, then realizes what he has done, turns into a bird, and fly’s away. Naturally, Sam flies after him, and Lucas tells her to check Maggie and Brittney and see if they have a special mark on their shoulders. She does, and they do. Sam meets Lucas back at the place where they agreed to meet, and Lucas decides to show her something. They fly for hours, until they touch down at a camp, which at first glance seems to have just normal kids, but if you look any closer, you will see that they all are “mutants” with powers. Sam is astonished, and Lucas sits down to talk to her. He explains that all these kids have powers, sometimes even 3 or 4, but none of them have memories before first using their powers. This is when Sam recounts her first memory. (Walking out of the woods, Kat, etc.) Lucas wants her to meet these two girls, Esperanza and Emma, who can see into people’s pasts. Essie and Emma look into Sam’s mind, and find something. They confer with Lucas privately, and decide to tell same 8 years ago, there was this group of scientists who thought they could make the ultimate supersoldier, yadayadayada. First they tried it on adults, and it flailed. Then they tried it on children, and it worked, but the entire facility exploded, wiping out all the scientists, and sending that mutant gene thing all over the world. The kids whose bodies were strong enough got powers. The others died. The original 8 kids that were in the room when the explosion happened have the strongest powers. The experiment was only performed on 1 of the 8 kids, though, and that kid has the potential to have every power there is.* that kid is same The other 7 kids are esperanza, emma, lucas, a boy named joseph, a girl named cass, another boy named jack, and a boy named luke, who took in lucas but then abandoned him and went to the company.

    *I don’t know if this makes her too overpowered or not

    thanks so much, b. mac!!!!

    really sorry I cant email u.
    home reasons
    thank you!!

  162. Pharyn rolleron 12 Nov 2014 at 6:17 am

    I hear Daren as tuxedo mask

  163. Anonymouson 29 Dec 2014 at 5:11 pm

    If I wanted to buy this site…would you sell it to me? And for how much?

  164. Danteon 19 Jan 2015 at 10:54 am

    Hi, I was just wondering if you had any tips for creating your own fictional city for the setting of a superhero novel, should I base it off of a real city? Or should I just use a real city? Does it really matter that much?

  165. B. McKenzieon 19 Jan 2015 at 6:12 pm

    “Does it really matter that much?” I don’t think it matters whether the city is fictional. It’s helpful if the city has a personality and/or otherwise contributes to the story and/or is otherwise memorable, though.

  166. Leson 21 Jan 2015 at 9:53 pm

    Hi!

    I’m always a big fan of supers since my early childhood, and I was eager to create my very own characters of heroes and the villains. I collect and read a ton of comics from here and now, drew picture of my favorite heroes and villains! Now, it’s my turn…
    Well several years past, I created my very own characters, and I name it: “The Vanquishers (or the ‘Quishers).” I used the name “Vanquishers” for this team as to vanquish ALL evil! My influences are: Fantastic Four, X-Men, G.I. Joe, X-Files, Conan the Barbarian, Pokemon, Batman, and Forensic Files.

    #1 Green Ranger, Chicagoan: He’s the leader of Quishers, no supers, but uses own strength and brains with nature-based weapons/gadgetry, hence his razor leaves, thorn whip, wooden club, and pine cone grenades, he’s the Batman of nature

    #2 Windman, Chicagoan: He can fly, control the wind, and has some powers of F4’s Invisiwoman

    #3 Hydrowoman, Floridian: Adept swimmer. She has superhuman strength, durability, she can manipulate water, breath underwater, and wields various types of melee weapons made out of water from her hands (when not underwater). She is also wields her trident as her signature melee weapon.

    #4 Flamedraman, New Jerseyite: Grumpy. Unwittingly made a deal with the Devil claiming to cure his wounds from the serious police brutality beatings. However, he was deceived, and ended up transforming into a raging, fire-breathing, yellow-skinned man-dragon with fiery wings. Could control and create scorching fire, and fly too. He’s a ‘pint-sized’ powerhouse and an expert warrior and marksman.

    #5 Heavy Mace, Floridian: #3’s younger bro. Best known for his jolly demeanor despite his huge, muscular appearance. The strongest of the team. He’s colossal, and possessed juggernaut-like strength. He is also known to be an unusually skilled hand-to-hand combatant and marksman.

    #6 Doomfrost, Mainer: His entire body is made of hard ice, which grants him superhuman strength and stamina. He can control and create ice, use them as weapons, and shoots cone of cold from his mouth. He also uses specter-like powers. He is also a highly skilled tactician and hand-to-hand fighter.

    #7 Steeler, Pennsylvanian: Her armor possessed many advanced types of weaponry and abilities, so as her super-fast, hi-tech motorcycle. Her genius-level allowed her to invent a wide range of sophisticated devices and specializing in advanced weapons and armor. She is also a skilled hand-to-hand fighter and mistress tactician

    #8 Charger, Canadian (British Columbian): Creates and controls electricity, and can project up to 5 megavolts which allowed him to emit lightning. Can also spew lightning bolts from his mouth. As he feeds up electricity, his strength/stamina increases. In downside, his excess electricity causes him to go into overdrive and loses his control. He is very tall, muscular and well-built, and also has superhuman speed, agility, flexibility and reflexes. He is also has genius-level intellect, expert tactician, and skilled hand-to-hand combatant. He wields his huge trade mark warhammer.

    The Vanquishers (or the ‘Quishers’ for short) are super heroes whose mission is to simply protect and serve humanity, save lives, while defending the US Constitution, and fight not just bad guys and monsters, but also fight tyranny and corruption within the country and sometimes the world.

    The allies of the Quishers are Fr. Torvald Benson, Gretl Greenhouse (a female Cape Mayer and US Navy vet), US citizens, and their own militia the Gray and Bluecoats (or simply the Coats).

    The villains of the Quishers that I created are: Dire (main villain), Elyograg, Retch, Horrorcore, Blackgrind, Spiderbride, Princess Depravia, Fireman, Deathbat, Scrapper, Malakazam, Doom Metal, and Vile. Other my characters are in the works.

    The genres for this story is a mix of superhero action/adventure, dramedy, dark fantasy, horror, crime, and suspense.

    Ok. I’m not really good in effective writing stories or even do not like to write because it’s too complicated and broad! The rest of my Quishers story is still in the works!

  167. Jedon 15 Mar 2015 at 6:54 pm

    I’ve commented on one of the articles of whether I should write a comic or novel, and I haven’t gotten a response yet. Can I get some advice on it please.

  168. Zakon 10 Apr 2015 at 8:32 am

    Hi i have a decorated NSA and US seals soldier who loses his an arm and has gotten a broken back. NSA gets one of his oldest friend called Alexander who is a well established genius in the fields of physics, mathematics, chemistry and engineering while further increasing his knowledge in quantum mechanics and artificial intelligence. He is made head of a group of scientists and engineers to get David( main protagonist) back to full health. In which Alexander builds a cybernetic arm and a back brace which not supports his movement but together with his cybernetics arm help him pick up about a weight of about a 10 ton. After testing by the NSA of about a good 2 weeks he is brought in to the field

    How is this for a origin story. Is there any improvements that can be made. Thanks in advance.

  169. B. McKenzieon 12 Apr 2015 at 6:56 am

    Zak, a few thoughts that come to mind:
    –Are there any unusual decisions or choices by either the SEAL operator or Alexander to help develop either character? This origin explains how the character receives superpowers but I think it could do more to develop personalities and/or goals and/or the central plot.
    –Some minor notes on realism: If you’re looking for an intelligence agency that does paramilitary work, I’d recommend using the CIA, the DIA, or making a fictional agency. The NSA feels like a counterintuitive choice there — they mainly handle signal intelligence, cryptography, electronic intelligence, etc. It sounds more fitting for Alexander than the SEAL.

  170. Davdi Grahamon 16 Apr 2015 at 4:35 pm

    I am based in the UK and may have a commission for an expert to write a superhero book with a difference.
    Could you email me so we could talk about this.

  171. B. McKenzieon 18 Apr 2015 at 11:08 pm

    Ah, I appreciate your offer, David, but I’m probably not the best fit for your project. (Also, I don’t believe I know what your email address is).

  172. Fact-Or-Fictionon 17 May 2015 at 6:52 am

    Hey, Mac. Do you mind if I send you a short superhero story I just finished? I’d really like to get your opinion on it.

  173. Awesome-Incon 28 May 2015 at 9:16 am

    Hey B. Mac,
    You have been a great help to me so I ope you don’t mind if I send you my prolouge and chapter 1? Just let me know what you think! Thank you and great job on this site…
    Drew

  174. B. McKenzieon 28 May 2015 at 4:15 pm

    “Do you mind if I send you a short superhero story I just finished?” Yeah, you can send it to me at superheronation-at-gmail-dot-com. (By the way, to anyone that would like to send in a submission, I’d recommend sending without asking first).

  175. Adam J.on 04 Jun 2015 at 10:05 am

    I am in the process of writing ideas for comics and progressing them into scripts. Do you know of any websites or programs that I can get to help me organize and write my stories? Also do you know of any places where you can discuss ideas with other writers to fine tune your story or find an artist/writer to work on the story with you.

    Thank you for your time.

  176. Awesome-Incon 12 Jun 2015 at 6:11 am

    Have you read it yet?

  177. B. McKenzieon 14 Jun 2015 at 2:13 pm

    “Have you read it yet?” Could you please resend it?

  178. CPT.WOLFMANon 24 Jun 2015 at 5:04 pm

    Hey I wanted to make a team of 5 female charterers and I’ve got the names and personalities but i need powers any one got any ideas?

  179. CPT.WOLFMANon 24 Jun 2015 at 6:19 pm

    Oh I just thought of something i forgot i want most of them to just have a bunch of minor powers.(If you cant tell this is my first time jumping in and asking for help.)

  180. CPT.WOLFMANon 26 Jun 2015 at 5:36 am

    Never mind I got the powers but man 3 days and no one comments

  181. B. McKenzieon 27 Jun 2015 at 8:04 pm

    “Never mind I got the powers but man 3 days and no one comments.” Ask for a refund! I can’t imagine what anyone else might have been doing on a Friday, a Saturday, or a Sunday, those self-entitled ****ers.

    Also, umm, if you’re looking for story help, I’d recommend telling the recipients more about the story than that your characters are females. You may get more help that way.

  182. Fact-Or-Fictionon 11 Jul 2015 at 3:54 pm

    Hey, Mac. Just sent you a story/possible first chapter of a longer work. Review it at your leisure.

  183. Awesome-Incon 13 Jul 2015 at 11:59 am

    Can someone give me the actual email? Becuz, superheronation-at-gmail-dot-com
    confuses me

  184. B. McKenzieon 13 Jul 2015 at 8:37 pm

    Awesome-Inc, I’m not sure how much I can help. Sorry for any confusion.

  185. Awesome-Incon 11 Sep 2015 at 2:48 pm

    Is the email superheronation[at]gmail[dot]com?

  186. Linkon 16 Sep 2015 at 11:10 am

    I have an idea for a story…(not a superhero story but a sci-fi story[my superhero story is on haitus and i’ll probably delete it because it’s slightly cheesy and needs a ton of work])…okay so the story is inspired (not based or a rip-off of) Farseed, by Pamela Sargent. Basically it’s about six teenagers from The Settlement (where Earth’s remaining humans crash landed and currently live in) trying to make sense of this strange Planet, try to figure out what happened on Earth and establish a second settlement. The six characters are:

    Link–the leader–confident, intelligent, light-hearted, reckless, self-appointed, arrogant and charming

    Sike–the ‘healer–idealistic, moody, lethargic and creative

    Alek–the construction worker–methodical, serious, paranoid, dedicated, asocial and analytical

    Iziko–the jack of all trades– strong willed, clueless, self-assured and impulsive

    Koh–the self appointed co-leader–rebellious,sophisticated, self-centered, just and competitive

    Saila–crafter (furniture, weapons and clothing)–honest (to a fault), innocent, pushover, naive, curious and immature.

    And I planned for the story to start off with The Settlement’s decision to let them go and of course starvation, bushfire, an attack from the Raiders (a nomadic group that left the Settlement decades ago), and a trap and then the story ends with victory and the successful establishment of Klasis, the new settlement.

    What do you think?

  187. Linkon 16 Sep 2015 at 1:50 pm

    Also, i need a title idea please?

  188. Linkon 18 Sep 2015 at 8:16 am

    After reading the article where you said that six characters are hard, i decided to merge Sike and Saila’s personalities to make Salia, who is a healer. However, Sike will be one of the background, minor characters that may only get one word in.

  189. Fact-Or-Fictionon 24 Sep 2015 at 4:31 pm

    I haven’t heard anything about Taxman in a while. Any news on that front?

  190. Kirbyfanon 19 Nov 2015 at 6:22 pm

    Great site!

    I search the web and what I can’t really find is a lot of direction on writing comic book dialogue.

    I see plenty about writing dialogue for novels, but as I’m sure you know that’s totally different than writing dialogue for comic characters.

    Could you please write an article that is totally geared towards writing dialogue strictly for comic book characters?

    I think you would be doing all of us comic cartoonists and writers a very big favor. Let me say thanks in advance.

  191. Matton 04 Jan 2016 at 6:16 pm

    Hi, I love your site! This is probably the millionth time you have been asked about superhero names that are already taken, and I apologize for asking once more.

    My understanding its not a good idea to use a superhero name that is already taken, but what about using a superheroes name for a team?

    For example calling a team “The Invincibles” when there is a character named Invincible. Thanks in advance.

  192. B. McKenzieon 04 Jan 2016 at 7:20 pm

    “My understanding its not a good idea to use a superhero name that is already taken, but what about using a superheroes name for a team?”

    I can’t speak to the legal considerations, but from a creative perspective, I think it’s sort of a generic team name, and I’d personally prefer something a bit distinctive and/or with more personality. E.g. outside of superhero stories, one group with a vaguely similar nickname was the DOJ’s Untouchables — I feel their name is more memorable (it has a possible connotation of uncleanliness and sounds sort of badass).



    There are also some business considerations to the name (especially if we’re talking about comics rather than a novel). For example, almost all comic series about a superhero team are named after the team, but I think “The Invincibles” would be way too close to a well-established comic series (“Invincible”). Also, from an SEO perspective, I don’t even know if you’d be able to get to the first page on Google for “invincibles comic book,” which would be a problem if your comic were named The Invincibles. So, if you do choose Invincibles as the team name, you’ll probably need to use something else as the series name.

    If you’re doing a novel, it might be less of an issue — novel titles usually don’t use the team name, and there’s less risk for audience confusion.

  193. Matton 05 Jan 2016 at 12:03 pm

    Ok thanks for the advice. The Invincible’s name was just an example I agree its generic. I actually have narrowed it down to a few : The Samaritans, Heroics, Phenomenals, Global Guard and use a different name for the title: Supreme Beings and Higher Powers.

  194. B. McKenzieon 05 Jan 2016 at 6:49 pm

    “Supreme Beings and Higher Powers.” It feels long enough that fitting a legible logo may be a challenge. (It’s 32 characters long, and the average on the top ~350 comics last month is 15 characters and 2.7 words). I would suggest shortening, maybe something along the lines of Supremacy. Your cover art will convey that this is a superhero story, so I think that mentioning powers in the series title is probably unnecessary (unless specifically going for a religious connotation).

    Of the team names listed, I like the style/sound of Phenomenals the most (unless, maybe, the religious/Biblical connotation of Samaritans is intentional). However, in general I’d recommend a more distinctive name that fits your group better than most other superhero teams out there (e.g. something that draws in a unique goal, conflict, modus operandi, team personality trait, a distinctive mood, or creates an interesting contrast, or anything else that sets the team apart from an average superhero team). I feel like Heroics and Global Guard may be too generic.

  195. Matton 05 Jan 2016 at 7:15 pm

    Hi I think you may have misunderstood and that’s my fault.I meant Supreme Beings OR Higher Powers as in one or the other not using both as a title. I thought about Supremacy but I checked Comicvine and there already is a team with that name. One name I thought about was The Majestic 12, but a team of 12 seems a bit unwieldy, plus creating 12 characters is a daunting task lol.

  196. B. McKenzieon 05 Jan 2016 at 7:54 pm

    “I think you may have misunderstood and that’s my fault.” Ah, yeah, I got the title wrong (but it was definitely my fault). “Supreme Beings” and “Higher Powers” are each a lot better than “Supreme Beings and Higher Powers.” 🙂 (Assuming a religious angle is central to the work* — if the closest we get to religion is, say, characters being so powerful that they are compared to gods a la Batman vs Superman, the title may be a mismatch).

    *E.g. Constantine, Hellboy, Preacher, (!!) Battle Pope, or Spawn.



    “One name I thought about was The Majestic 12, but a team of 12 seems a bit unwieldy, plus creating 12 characters is a daunting task lol.” Well, you could do Majestic 12 even if the team doesn’t have 12 members. E.g. Tom Clancy named a military unit Rainbow Six even though it has tens of soldiers and no rainbows. Alternately, you could rename the team to Majestic 5 (or whatever the team count is).



    Especially in a comic, I’d recommend limiting major characters in a new superhero team to 5 or less.

  197. Matton 05 Jan 2016 at 10:17 pm

    Yeah I guess i could change the number, fyi here is where the name comes from. I’ve also thought of the name Living legends, also there really isn’t a religious angle just the idea that superheros are modern versions of mythology.

  198. B. McKenzieon 08 Jan 2016 at 1:21 am

    I feel there’s a huge disconnect between a team named after an alien conspiracy and a series title like “Supreme Beings” or “Higher Powers” (which sound a lot more like something in the vein of Constantine than alien anything). I’d prefer a series title that conveys more about your plot and/or characters without suggesting a different genre.

  199. Matton 08 Jan 2016 at 8:25 am

    Just to clarify, the Majestic 12 team name would have been different than the “Higher Powers” or “Supreme Beings” title. If I went with the latter as a name I probably would have named the team something else. Sorry for the confusion. Also I guess I could lose the “12” and go with “The Majestics or “The Majestix”.

    Anyway, I have a whole page of team names and instead of saying “what do you think of this team name” a thousand times and probably aggravating you to death, I should probably think about the characters and team some more since right now its pretty much a generic superhero team.

    Thank you for taking the time to answer my annoying questions lol.

  200. B. McKenzieon 09 Jan 2016 at 1:36 pm

    “Right now, it’s pretty much a generic superhero team.” I’d recommend working on that before coming up with a name for the group. The direction you go with there should make it a lot easier to pick a name that sounds less generic.



    Personally, I prefer the sound of “Majestic” as a team name to “the Majestics” (which I think sounds more pretentious) or “the Majestix” (which sort of sounds like a group of high school graffiti artists).

  201. Andrewon 24 Jan 2016 at 3:59 pm

    Hey guys

    I’m an hobbyist writer doing stories with some OCs as well as Justice League characters. I’m currently working on a synopsis on a comic book series idea plus a Justice League one-shot series. They’re not finished yet but when I do, would you be interested in seeing them?

  202. B. McKenzieon 25 Jan 2016 at 8:55 pm

    “They’re not finished yet but when I do, would you be interested in seeing them?” Original works, definitely. If you’re mainly writing to get better and/or possibly get published eventually, original practice is incredibly useful, especially for the writer but secondarily for readers/commenters.

    If you’re mainly writing for enjoyment and/or a hobby, I’d recommend staying as far away from feedback as you can. Most reviewers are very diplomatic, but even a diplomatically phrased list of tens of things that someone thinks could have been executed more effectively will probably be anti-enjoyable for the author.

  203. Andrewon 26 Jan 2016 at 5:54 am

    I am looking to get published one day, I’m just going around, getting advice on how to make my work get good first reception. Any critism, say it. I want to learn as much now so as I don’t make a mess of it later

  204. B. McKenzieon 26 Jan 2016 at 8:22 am

    “I am looking to get published one day… I want to learn as much now so as I don’t make a mess of it later.” Okay, if/when you have something original for review, I’d be interested. I’d suggest approaching it like a submission to the publisher(s) you might eventually target (in my case, probably Image and Dark Horse).

  205. Matton 28 Jan 2016 at 2:11 pm

    Hi I’ve come up with several concepts, but I’m having trouble getting down and actually writing the thing. Do you have any suggestions? I have a vague idea of how I want the story to go, but I’m having writers block.

  206. B. McKenzieon 28 Jan 2016 at 8:34 pm

    Matt, here’s a reposted answer:

    Take 3-4 characters. Figure out 1-2 things each they desperately want to accomplish and ideally 1 way in which their personality and/or goals conflict with the main traits and/or goals of each of the other major characters. From there, string together actions, consequences, escalations, retreats/regroupings and counteractions until you have a first draft ready. For the major characters, I’d also recommend thinking about 1-3 ways in which they might substantially change over the course of the book (particularly in a way besides merely becoming more practiced/skillful – that’s pretty much a given, especially for inexperienced characters). You don’t have to use all of those, of course, but they’ll give you some idea of which threads are worth exploring more and how you might explore them.

    For example, looking at X-Men: First Class… let’s start with Mystique, a shapeshifting mutant that’s resentful she has to hide, which sets up a bit of conflict with her best friend Xavier (a mutant that doesn’t). What are some ways we might be able to resolve this arc? Maybe she is able to cure her physical mutation and look normal. Introduce Hank and his desire to look normal. Or maybe she decides that she doesn’t want to look normal. Introduce Magneto’s mutant pride and backstory/apprehension of human motives. What are some conflicts we could have between some of these members? We can make Magneto and Xavier partners (as well as possibly friends), but also budding rivals conflicting over methods and goals. Then I think all that we need for the rest of the core of the story is a villain who presents interesting obstacles affecting these arcs. I probably would have handled this somewhat differently than the movie did, but the villain did an okay job of tying together Magneto’s backstory and his relationship with Xavier.

    Also, for beating writer’s block, I’d recommend setting aside ~1 hour each day to write. Write at least one page each day, and for the love of God avoid skipping around as much or rewriting as possible until the first draft is finished.

  207. Halbruston 18 Feb 2016 at 5:31 pm

    I hope you’re still doing critiques, because I just shot you an email.

  208. B. McKenzieon 18 Feb 2016 at 7:50 pm

    Hello, Halbrust! Yes, I’ve responded to it.

  209. Andrewon 14 Mar 2016 at 4:52 am

    Hey guys. I could use a little help. I’ve some up with a hero who shares the same mantle as another I made (Like how Jim Gordon is Batman in the comics now) but I want to give her a slightly different superhero name from him, just something that will make her more unique. Can you help me out?

  210. Kiraon 02 May 2016 at 6:36 pm

    Hi, I’m creating a new hero of my own but I’ve come to an impasse. Her name is Ellie Daniels or Fulminata (Latin for “armed with lightning”) when in her supersuit. The impasse is I’m trying to find a REALISTIC way to give a New York bartender who’s dating a scientist electricity based superpowers. Yet nothing I’ve been able to come up with works or sounds good enough. Any ideas to help get the creative juices flowing/Advice to create electricity based powers?

  211. B. McKenzieon 02 May 2016 at 8:31 pm

    A few possible setups, Kira.

    WHY MIGHT A SCIENTIST HAVE A SUPER-SUIT?
    1) Because Ellie his girlfriend asks him to build it. Not terribly promising.
    2) He’s stolen it from a research project he’s working on. Better. (Why might he steal it? Probably something on the research project went completely pear-shaped, and the other researchers have been getting murdered or something).
    3) He’s agreed to help some other scientist with what he thinks is minor technical assistance (like double-checking schematics or something). He doesn’t check the other scientist’s references all that well (he might be desperate for work* and/or new to town), and surprise, like 99% of New York scientists, the scientist on the other end of the project is either currently or soon-to-be a supervillain. Preferably a supervillain on the run from someone and looking to stash an almost-ready killing machine, possibly from the guys that paid him to make it. Fast forward a few days: the supervillain is gone, possibly dead, and several interested parties think that the assistant has stolen the suit. It’s possible that the FBI/quasi-SHIELD/NYPD also do, because there’s not a lot of daylight between “unassuming NY scientist” and “city-wrecking force of nature.”

    *Would YOU hire a New York scientist? Even the ones that aren’t supervillains yet have a fanatical disregard for standard safety practices, like never ever using yourself as the testing subject, especially something that hasn’t been tested on humans before.

    WHY MIGHT THE PROTAGONIST WANT TO USE THE SUIT?
    1) To protect her significant other! Not terribly exciting.
    2) Because she’s always wanted to be a superhero! I’d probably insta-reject here.
    3) She’s been drawn into some sort of criminal vendetta (e.g. criminals suspecting that the significant other stole something they had paid for, and maybe they think she’s involved because she picked him up from the lab one night or whatever). If going to the police isn’t a viable option for whatever reason (after scientists, comics tend to portray the police as the second-least-reliable group in NY), maybe she uses the suit out of desperation and/or necessity.
    4) This wouldn’t work all that well with a suit specifically, but with some other scientific origins, you could probably have her be involved in some sort of scientific accident that causes her to be affected. Preferably it’s not just luck, and she was doing something distinctive and unusual that causes her to be in the right place at the right time (e.g. in Amazing Spider-Man, breaking into a lab to be bitten by a spider contributes more to character development and plotting than just being the luckiest student on a class field trip).
    4.1) For whatever reason, she’s the only person available that can pilot the suit. E.g. it imprinted on the first person that used it, and overriding that security protocol requires software work they don’t have time and/or skills for. I suspect this will probably feel contrived, so probably not my preferred plan.
    5) Some sort of conflicting plan with the scientist. E.g. he doesn’t want to give back the suit (correctly figuring they will kill him as soon as they have it), but she thinks it’s just some sort of misunderstanding and giving back the suit will make it all go away. So she steals the suit to take it back to whomever. They attempt to kill her, but she escapes with the suit (possibly using the suit, but it’d probably be an ideal opportunity to show that she’s more than just the suit’s operator). Alternately, maybe the scientist wants to give it back, but she’s a hardened bartender with a more practical idea of how a high-grade criminal might handle a witness that knows far too much about his equipment.

  212. Andrewon 03 May 2016 at 3:11 am

    Hey guys. I have a list of character notes, which I’m working on to improve character development skills and I’d appreciate if you took the time to view it if I emailed it to you. Would that be cool?

  213. B. McKenzieon 03 May 2016 at 7:39 pm

    Andrew, it’s probably not the most organic introduction to the story (or the character). I’d suggest a format closer to what publishers typically ask for (e.g. a plot synopsis rather than a list of character details).

  214. Andrewon 04 May 2016 at 1:32 am

    @B.McKenzie

    Will two sentence synopsis for each issue do?

  215. Andrewon 04 May 2016 at 1:34 am

    Or at least a rough outline of the story?

  216. B. McKenzieon 04 May 2016 at 5:22 am

    I’d suggest a synopsis of issue #1, ideally 150 – 300 words long. I’d recommend focusing on major plot developments and characterization (particularly conflicts, any unusual character decisions/actions, and any ways in which characters change/develop over time).

    So, for example, for a synopsis of The Taxman Must Die, I’d cover:
    –The main character (MC) is an IRS agent that can’t leave well enough alone.
    –He initiates an audit on a supervillain to troll his boss.
    –The supervillain (Hex Abrams) flips out and sends robots to assassinate him.
    –OSI, a federal agency focusing on special cases (e.g. supervillains), disrupts the assassination attempt. One agent is critically wounded.
    –The main character witnesses his rescuers using illegal equipment that had been seized from a villain. (Congress prohibits government use of criminal-seized equipment for public safety. Some agents still do anyway, because fighting supervillains with Glocks is suicidal, but they have to keep it quiet).
    –The IRS won’t let him back in the office.
    –He asks OSI for a protective detail, but they decline the manpower. Desperate, the main character attempts blackmail based on the illegal activity he’s observed so far.
    –Two senior OSI officers discuss how to handle the MC. The head of the agency says it’d be best to walk away even though Hex Abrams will certainly kill him. The lead investigator on the Hex Abrams case mentions that he’s the best lead they have in the case so far, because Abrams will try to kill him again. They have him transferred to OSI in theory as investigator but actually as bait.
    –They assign him to a rules-breaking partner, a mutant alligator that had been on desk duty for threatening to eat a district attorney. The alligator is not pleased by his new partner’s credentials (sample pages here), and feels that being assigned an IRS partner is actually worse than being killed in action.
    –They catch their first case. (I’d probably spend a sentence detailing that to hint at where the story is going next).

    Okay, how was that? Based on the synopsis, would you want to read the issue?

  217. B. McKenzieon 04 May 2016 at 6:31 am

    Initial reaction to my synopsis above:
    –In the actual synopsis, I’ll name major characters as they appear. (I skipped most names here).
    –I feel character motivations here are clearer than they had been in previous versions.
    –I’ll probably need to rewrite the sample pages because the circumstances of how the two characters meet is a bit different. In the original, it was a job interview.

  218. Andrewon 04 May 2016 at 1:00 pm

    Does sound interesting but, if I could get like a structure of a synopsis. Like what comes first, the characters or the plot? Something like that will help

  219. B. McKenzieon 04 May 2016 at 4:23 pm

    “… a structure of a synopsis. Like what comes first, the characters or the plot?”

    Here are Dark Horse’s synopsis guidelines:

    2. COMPLETE SYNOPSIS
    Succinctly tell the entire story: beginning, middle, and end, omitting unnecessary details. A short-story synopsis should be no longer than a page. A synopsis for a series (limited or ongoing) or graphic novel should be about two to five pages. Indicate issue breaks where applicable. A synopsis should say exactly what happens and how, noting plot and character specifics. Do not leave the resolution of the story in question. This should be the most straightforward presentation of the story as possible, as the synopsis is often the make-or-break point for a proposal.”

    If you have to choose an emphasis between going after the plot or the characters, I’d suggest going more plot-centric. I think that knowing the plot would probably allow a reader to fill in the blanks on a character (e.g. when a character makes unusual decisions, we can see a personality trait in action), whereas character traits/characteristics probably wouldn’t allow us to fill in the plot.

  220. Andrewon 05 May 2016 at 1:39 am

    Could I see an example? Sorry, I just haven’t done one before

  221. AjofEarthon 31 Aug 2016 at 9:37 am

    Ahoy B.Mac and Superhero Nation!

    I’ve recently created an author page on Facebook, as a promotional vehicle for my novel (so close to completion!!!) and I was wondering if I could make a post here about it, to reach out to interested potential readers!

    I also didn’t really know where to place a post like this, so I thought here in “contact” would be the most appropriate. Hope that’s okay.

    https://www.facebook.com/ajofearth/

    I’d love to connect with folks and start developing a base of readers now, as I’m expecting to have a completed manuscript for publisher submission in just the next few months! Super exciting!

    Hope this can work out! And happy Hump Day to you!

    Dig it!

    -Aj Hyde, of Earth

  222. commoncurtisEon 28 Oct 2016 at 7:24 am

    I am new here, and I must say I love the site. I spent most of last night reading every bit of information pertaining to fantasy novel writing. One thing I have yet to see is a guide on world creating. The story I’m currently working on takes place in a unique world with a variety of humanoid races. Before I began the story I spent a lot of time creating this unnamed world.
    Now, as I begin to write my first pages, I struggle on when and how to introduce the reader to these vastly different lands and people. I want to fill the reader in on the information needed to understand the important characters and the events that take place, but I do not want to bore them with too many details. What advice would anyone here be willing to give me on introducing a reader to the foreign concepts of a fantasy world?
    I would be happy to show the notes I’ve written on the lands and the people, as well as my first few pages of the written story if it will help you help me.

  223. B. McKenzieon 28 Oct 2016 at 4:14 pm

    “Now, as I begin to write my first pages, I struggle on when and how to introduce the reader to these vastly different lands and people. I want to fill the reader in on the information needed to understand the important characters and the events that take place, but I do not want to bore them with too many details. What advice would anyone here be willing to give me on introducing a reader to the foreign concepts of a fantasy world?” I’d suggest introducing details as necessary to understand what’s happening in the plot. Also, I’d recommend keeping these details as close to a major character as possible, e.g. instead of giving a page or two about how two major guilds in town have been at each other’s throats, maybe a page or two of the main character interacting with the guilds in some way (e.g. the world’s most intense job interview as one guild aggressively challenges the main character to prove that he’s not a plant working for the other side. To help this scene make more sense, it might help if there are a few sentences of exposition setting up the “Oh, by the way, be careful about the paranoid guilds” so that the direction the job interview takes isn’t completely out of the blue).

  224. Andrewon 01 Nov 2016 at 8:15 am

    Hey guys. I’m currently going over the rough (emphasis on rough) details of my story arcs. Would you be interested in giving some pointers if I sent it to you?

  225. B. McKenzieon 01 Nov 2016 at 7:00 pm

    ” I’m currently going over the rough (emphasis on rough) details of my story arcs. Would you be interested in giving some pointers if I sent it to you?” My main pointer would be to put all of your writing effort into finishing one, or at least getting it finished enough that you’d feel comfortable submitting to publishers (or directly to readers, if applicable).

    While writing a first draft of arc 1, I would suggest putting out of your mind entirely any thoughts of hypothetical future arcs. (Later on, in rewrites, you could give yourself a few plot-threads that you could draw upon in a hypothetical second arc, but I wouldn’t recommend spending time/energy thinking about it until you have a non-hypothetical foundation to work on).

    Until then, it’s sort of like the writing equivalent of vaporware.

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