Dec 30 2007

List of Superpowers

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1,666 Responses to “List of Superpowers”

1. # KooLon 01 Apr 2008 at 7:53 am

   Thanks! Can you add more unique superhero abilities that are not common to other heroes? I’m making my own superhero story, but I have no idea what abilities to give my superhero. I need a unique power for my main character. Your website has helped helped me a lot with some of my other characters. Thanks a lot!

2. # B. Macon 01 Apr 2008 at 10:50 am

   You could try altering these powers by changing their scope in some crazy way. For example, in Read or Die!, the main character has telekinesis that applies only to paper. Magneto has telekinesis that only works on metal. Maybe the character has a pocket-space which only applies to one category of items (e.g. only metal, only small items, only weapons, only items related to Green Lantern service, only badass things, only magical items, whatever).
   
   If you take a generic power and only allow the superhero to use it on some random category of material, that could probably feel fresher.

3. # J.Ron 11 Oct 2008 at 9:23 am

   What’s a good weakness for someone with super speed?

4. # B. Macon 11 Oct 2008 at 9:36 am

   Superfast heroes rely on good footing and would probably need a lot of space to do things like turns. (For a real-life analogy, drivers take turns slowly). The villain could take advantage of that by building his lair so that there’s relatively little room for someone to dodge bullets and lasers. He could also make the floor slippery, so that the hero will lose his footing.
   
   If you’d like to get more technical, speedy heroes would create a tremendous amount of friction when they ran. Friction creates heat with the ground. The villain might slick the floor with flammable oil so that the hero would set himself or bystanders on fire if he moved too quickly. If your villain is very technically savvy, he could play around with gravity. It’s extremely difficult to move around in a no-gravity environment and a high-gravity environment would also be very tricky.
   
   Finally, you could look at what the hero is actually able to do when he’s superfast. For example, what he could he do against someone in a suit of armor? Probably not that much. If he tries punching the armor, he’s more likely to injure himself than his enemy. Generally, a superfast hero is only powerful when the enemy has exposed vulnerabilities. The villain should try to remove any vulnerabilities he has, probably with armor or something similar. Then the hero has to improvise, which could be interesting and dramatic.

5. # Holliequon 22 Nov 2008 at 11:35 am

   I had an idea for a character, sort of based on a “balance” idea. Her right hand heals but her left hand withers/injures (I’m not really sure how to describe it). The idea is that she can’t use her healing on herself (so, no regeneration) because it’s always counterbalanced by her other powers. And these powers are always “switched on”, so if she grabs hold of somebody with her left hand she could seriously hurt them or even kill them if she held on for long enough – except the person was also in contact with her right hand, which goes back to the whole balance thingy.
   
   To mix things up slightly, I was thinking of making it so she’s left-handed, and therefore whenever she automatically goes to touch somebody or do something with her left hand she has to check herself and make sure she’s not going to cause injury.
   
   I can’t really think of any other limits/problems to this apart from exhaustion, but that’s a pretty abvious one. Is this enough, or do I need to come up with some? Any suggestions?

6. # Ragged Boyon 22 Nov 2008 at 1:03 pm

   When you say her right hand hurts people, how do you mean? Does it drain them, poision them, weaken them or just cause them pain until they die?
   

   I essentially like the power, the balance idea is very fresh. She has no control over her powers, so that would hurt you or. Do her powers come with a side-effect and can they be controlled/halted by wearing gloves. Can her destructive or healing powers be manifested into anything, like a ball oh healing energy?
   
   I think a good factor that she has is that she is essentially human with a superboost, this could lots of improvised scenes where she has to think on her feet, but this can also be bad, what if the villian is cross town and she doesn’t have any mode of super transportation to get to him?

7. # Holliequon 22 Nov 2008 at 1:24 pm

   You raise some very good points. I was thinking that her powers could be controlled by wearing gloves, because otherwise I could see her developing into this angsty character who says “woe!” a lot. Organic material only.
   

   I’m still not sure about the left hand, but the idea is in general that it hurts (uh, yeah >>;).
   
   Draining has potential, because that could give her a boost by stealing their energy and ultimately make her feel stronger. I detect potential angst, though. The idea i had in mind was sort of like aging – I suppose weakening with an unhealthy dose of pain for good measure would be the best thing. And easy to describe.
   
   I didn’t want her powers to be used without touch – so no healing-ball-of-energy, no destructive-blast. On the other hand, she was supposed to fill a semi-support role so I don’t think this is a massive problem.
   
   Your point about the villain on the other side of town is a good one, but that’s part of the fun/challenge. Also, the idea I have in my head places her as part of a team.
   

   Good point about the left-handedness. I may leave that out – or even make her ambidextrous, lol.

8. # Silason 24 Nov 2008 at 8:56 am

   I was trying to decide what my main character’s minor power should be, and this is what I came up with. I’d just like general thoughts or opinions on it, please. Maybe suggestions of how it should be different etc.
   
   Okay, so she can see through other people’s eyes. She can’t hear their thoughts, or hear what is going on around the person she’s seeing. She has to have had some sort of physical contact with the person in order to establish her relationship of being able to see them. The power is very draining for her at first. (She has to build up endurance to use it for greater lengths of times) Since it’s basically her minor power, it’s the first one she learns she has.
   
   I think this is a good minor power because it obviously has its limitations. For example, if she’s trying to find someone, she can see what they see, but she would have to know what she was looking at to determine where they were. Also, when her she sees into other people, her eyes change. I’m thinking either she takes on their eye color for a more subtle effect or her irises completely disappear for a more dramatic effect.
   
   What do you think? I’d appreciate any help.

9. # Bretton 24 Nov 2008 at 9:44 am

   Very interesting. It sounds similar to the Eragon scrying concept, where you can only see what you are familiar with, but with a slight reversal. I find your take on this refreshing. But I would reccomend adding something to make it a bit more visceral, and make it somewhat easier for your heroine to identify what she’s seeing. I’ve been advised that smell and touch are very visceral senses, so maybe your heroine can also feel what the other person feels, or smell what they smell. Feeling would probably be better, because it offers more clues, is more dramatic, and seems more useful. For example, if your character was looking for a missing friend, and felt pain, that would increase the urgency of finding the person. Also, another potential weakness is that if the person she’s seeing through blacks out, she’ll either go temporarily blind (until she returns to her own perspective), or she’ll also go unconscious temporarily. Alsom she could be threatened with death if the other person dies while she’s in vision.

   All thoughts welcome.

10. # Dallason 10 Dec 2008 at 5:12 pm

    What about a powerless superhero?
    

    Not even at Batman standards, just below Punisher. The character in my book only survives because he has enough willpower to fuel a car. He uses blunt objects he finds around, or chemicals he mixes. He’s not extremely strong, or big for his age.
    
    He feels like he’s ‘the only good guy in a sea of drugs and gangs and murder and he’s the only one that can save his city,’ that kind of thing. I have the origin story down: his GF gets drugged, raped, and kills herself, and he could have saved her if he hadn’t been afraid. But what about for mere vigilantes? Any advice?
    
    I’m trying to work around him not using a gun, but it’s hard when all the gangsters in the story have them and he doesn’t. The book’s target audience is mature readers, because I’m trying to make it as realistic as possible. So when people get mad, they swear, and drugs, partying and sex are involved.
    
    I’d appreciate any advice.

11. # Ragged Boyon 10 Dec 2008 at 5:36 pm

    I, personally, am not a big fan of powerless heroes, but they are very workable and they can be very interesting. They have to improvise at all times, so that would make for alot of interesting scenes.

    My recommendation would be not to kill off the girlfriend, but have her severely changed. Experiences like rape can drastically alter personality. Maybe making her more closed off and she doesn’t want to be intimate (not just sexually) with the main character. If you wanted to go to EXTREMES, you could have her go into severe repression so much so she gives herself amnesia, and forgets the MC.

    It would seem this character has some strong connections and is very intelligent (burning drugs, putting gangs against each other). I think giving him a degree of gadgets would be more plausible, but you don’t have to go all out (retractable zip-lines, cloaking devices). If he doesn’t want to kill maybe a small tranquillizer gun or firing taser. Or you could move into gun territory, but know your facts about guns before you use them.

    “But what a bout for mere vililantees?” I’m not sure what you meant by this. If you meant “more” vigilantes, I would recommend a small team seeing as he is trying to accomplish alot for one person. If you meant “mere” vigilantes, as in weaker heroes, that is also very workable, it allows you to improvise alot of scenes, which is very dramatically appealing.

12. # Ragged Boyon 06 Feb 2009 at 9:41 am

    I think your heroes lean towards more natural and elemental based powers, so you may want a counter-intuitive villian, maybe a villian with technological abilities. Alternatively, you could go with an opposite force of nature like fire and heat.

    I like your heroes they sound like a fresh bunch, although I do agree they may not be melee suited. But, I suspect you can use Wilma and Wayne as meleeists, particulary Wayne. And possibly Joshua.

    I’m a little concerned about Bre’anna, what can she contribute by having uncontrolllable noxious gas? Does she ever gain control? What else can she do with her gas?

    Could you give me a general idea of your plot? Maybe that would give me some ideas for an appropriate villain.

13. # Holliequon 06 Feb 2009 at 10:08 am

    I’d reccommend changing Bre’anna into Brianna. Depending on her backstory, I think this a bit more of a natural sounding name.

    Joshua has the power to manipulate air. How exactly would this be helpful? What could he do? The only thing I can think of is that he can stop air from getting into peoples’ lungs, but that wouldn’t make for very good fight scenes. Also, how would you describe this in a novel/show this in a comic book visual? You may want to tweak this power slightly so it’s a little easier to use.

    Wayne’s powers seem very plant-based, which is a good start. However, I’m not really feeling ‘turn himself into a plant-like substance’. I think this overlaps a lot with his ability to copy plant abilities and I’d suggest simply getting rid of it.

    I don’t think Bre’anna’s abilties will be very useful. Heck, they seem more likely to be a liability than anything. Unless my memory fails me, chlorine gas is what they used in the trenches in World War 1, and it’s VERY dangerous and often fatal. I don’t think that I’d want anybody like that near me. I would reccommend changing her powers (maybe something more simple, like creating poisons in her body) or give her some sort of control over the gas.

    I feel that Wilma’s powers will be hard to describe or show in a visual. Also, something about your description of her powers feels a little off to me. Sound is basically particle vibrations, right? You could tweak your description a little to fit this (for example, she has slight control over particle movement and can prevent them from entering the ear, which causes deafness). Ha, my physics isn’t great.

    This is just a minor nitpick, but I think Wayne and Wilma’s names sound pretty similar. I’d recommend changing Wilma to make it easier to distinguish the characters.

    As for the villain, I wouldn’t recommend a fire-based villain, simply because it seems to have been done in a lot of other things. Depending on your origin story, how do you feel about a more psychic- or technological-based villain?

14. # Ragged Boyon 06 Feb 2009 at 10:32 am

    Holliequ, I agree on your other points, but one stuck out to me.

    I’m pretty sure there are quite a few intersting things that can be done with wind abilities. Pushing, pullling, flying, forming weapons, and maybe constructs, tornadoes, etc. I think with a little creativity Joshua’s air ablities can be interesting. Although, I’m not sure exactly how you would depict this in a novel.

    Maybe:

    “Joshua gestured with hand, sending a ball of air hurdling at this opponent. Gesturing upward, he created a current that lifted him off the ground.”

    Or something like that, but I suspect all that gesturing my get annoying. Alternatively, he could control his air through speech, this may be ok, if it doesn’t come off like an anime with all the ability yelling

    I like your idea of creating poisons from her body, but as a slight tweak, maybe she can create a variety of gases. Sleeping gas, knockout gas, dizzy gas, tear gas, seering gas, and maybe truth gas.

    Thinking back a fire villian may not be all that fresh (I find fire a very uninteresting ability. Conversly, I had once dreamt up a hero who uses purely heat instead of fire), but I’d definitely advocate the technological villian.

15. # mysticguston 06 Feb 2009 at 2:42 pm

    Thanks for the help. I’m thinking about making a novel and maybe a comic here or there. I like to draw. This is very helpful. I’m thinking about what ragged boy said about the different gases and I think that’s a good idea. I think maybe Wilma and Bre’anna could gain more control later on and I think I came up with a good villain.
    
    I thought about having a guy who absorbs a lot of people’s abilities but can only retain one, which is okay… but when when he absorbs ability augmentation he can supercharge his ability so he can recall abilities he already absorbed and use them on a higher scale than anyone who originally had the ability.
    
    What makes him bad is that an alien race came to Earth looking for specimens to plant their eggs in (when the eggs mature they become they permanently take over the bodies they inhabit), so when he got injected and they found out he had abilities they started looking for superhumans for the queen to lay her eggs in. But when they are immune, they force them to mine ores to build ships and weapons to capture the rest of the human race. So please tell me if you think this is a good idea and be brutal… I will keep updating.

16. # Ragged Boyon 06 Feb 2009 at 2:59 pm

    So basically the villian is an Ability Theif, he can absorb a multitude of powers, but only use one at a time. When he uses the power, it’s stronger than the person who originally controlled it. Ok, that sounds like it can work as long as there are more people with powers instead of the main characters.

    I’m confused on the origin of his evilness, the way you worded it confuses me. So when he got injected with the egg, they found out that humans had powers, thus they looked for a sperhuman to implant their queen in.

    So basically, he was immune and they forced him to work in a mine. That doesn’t explain why he’s evil. Is he working for the aliens? or is he on his own? did he ever even get out of the mine?

    Could you re-explain it to me?

17. # mysticguston 06 Feb 2009 at 4:02 pm

    The main villain has the ability to copy powers but can only retain one at a time. Until that is he copies the ability of superpower augmentation(ability supercharging) so he used it on himself allowing him to recall his abilities he’s absorbed. When he got injected with the embryo it took control of his body. After seeing that his host had an ability, they decided to find other superhumans to inject.

18. # Chi.Rhoon 17 Feb 2009 at 8:23 pm

    If I use gene splicing to explain the origins of a chracters abilities…would the character have to resemble the animal used to grant the hero abilities?

19. # B. Macon 18 Feb 2009 at 7:50 pm

    CR, I think readers would be okay with him not looking like the animal he shares genes with. For example, Spiderman has some genes from a spider but doesn’t look like a spider.

20. # Chi.Rhoon 22 Feb 2009 at 10:11 am

    Hey guys….I was wondering are some tips on creating characters and making sure that their primary and secondary powers work together….For example would it be pointless to create a character who can turn invisible and have superspeed? Thanx

21. # Ragged Boyon 22 Feb 2009 at 9:23 pm

    Well, usually when you have a character with a primary and secondary power, the primary is usually generic. This gives you the opportunity to give them an exotic secondary power. Wallcrawling and web spinning is cool, but spider sense takes it over the egde (in a good way).

    Alternately, you could choose a primary power and edit it to make it more interesting or exotic. For example, telekinesis but only over paper or marbles. Or summoning, but only things that you have drawn before.

    I hope this helps. I think B. Mac can give you more insight.

22. # B. Macon 22 Feb 2009 at 9:51 pm

    Hmm… as a rule, I think exotic powers require more attention from the audience, particularly if they have unusual parameters (like the ability to use telekinesis but only on paper or metal).
    
    If a power requires a lot of audience attention and/or explanation, I think it’s important to make it front-and-center. For example, Spiderman’s webs are his most distinctive and most-used power (besides the more generic agility/strength), but Superman’s eye-beams and icy breath are just minor tricks that rarely see action.
    
    Invisibility is a good power, and superspeed is ok (although superspeed will make it especially difficult to write in fights with unpowered criminals). However, I’m not sure about the combination. First, they don’t seem to go together very well. Second, I don’t think they’re very complementary. For example, Wolverine’s agility and claws are complementary because he can work in crazy acrobatics as he tries to claw someone. Likewise, Spiderman can do acrobatics or wall-crawl as he tries to shoot webs.
    
    I think invisibility would work better for something like a stealth theme, or maybe an intangible ghost theme. Superspeed is more limited. Usually, the character is just a speedster (like the Flash or Quicksilver).

23. # Brittanyon 02 Mar 2009 at 8:44 am

    Hi, great site! Well, I’m starting to write a super hero novel. Here’s the backstory:
    
    After the Cold War, much of the nuclear waste had to be dumped. They picked five remote areas across the country and dumped tons of this radioactive waste in lakes, swamps, forests, etc. For a while it was left undisturbed until population grew in these areas. People started going missing. Myths and legends were created around strange stories of people with extreme powers, or deformities.
    
    How does that sound so far?

24. # Brittanyon 02 Mar 2009 at 11:11 am

    It’s set in the present time. The main character is a 16 year old guy named Jayden Smithson. After both his father and older brother go missing, the father during a delivery (he was a trucker) and his brother during a camping trip, his mother remarries and has another son, Tyler. Well, Jayden’s stepfather gets leukemia and they are forced to move from Boston, MA to the small town of Greenwood Lake, NY because of Jayden’s mother’s economic turmoil. Greenwood Lake is one of the the dumping zones for the nuclear waste.
    
    How does that sound? I’m having more trouble coming up with names and powers. I’m not sure if the names of the heroes should somehow relate to their power. I’m not sure if that makes them more corny.

25. # Wadeon 02 Mar 2009 at 2:17 pm

    Thanks OK like i said my super human story is about five teenagers who discover they have abilities this is set in a world where superheroes only existed in comics or thats what people think i have got the the characters made now save for they powers and i just can’t decided what to do can any one give me some suggestions

26. # B. Macon 02 Mar 2009 at 4:00 pm

    Wade, what are their personalities and backstories like?

27. # B. Macon 02 Mar 2009 at 4:04 pm

    Brittany, five separate areas is a lot of ground to cover in a novel. You might find it easier to work with something like three: two to explain where the heroes come from and one to explain where the villain(s) come from.

28. # Wadeon 02 Mar 2009 at 5:27 pm

    Thanks a lot. Well, so far I thought of this. It’s about five teens from fifteen to sixteen that go to the same school. They are all very different. There’s Dan, who is popular, smart and handsome but is very arrogant and a bit of a sociopath. Jake is a rebellious and criminal teen. Emma is sweet and naive, while Stacy is enigmatic, elusive and desirable. Lastly, Will is Dan’s friend, an unconfident and weird day-dreamer. There are other elements like the genetic research company Honex. I’m having some problems with the powers and origins, partly because there are so many powers to choose from. It’s really hard.

29. # Chi.Rhoon 13 Mar 2009 at 8:50 am

    What kind of limitations would you put on a memory manipulator so that they wouldn’t seem too powerful? I mean for a person that can create/alter/delete memories. Thanks.

30. # B. Macon 13 Mar 2009 at 9:33 am

    I don’t think that the character would likely be overpowered, given that his powers seem kind of useless in combat. The problem is that memory manipulation is confusing and usually unsatisfying. (See #4 here). For example, a regular superhero has to use cunning and guile to protect his secret identity. That’s interesting! A psychic that can delete memories doesn’t really have much on the line when it comes to protecting his secret identity. Having the ability to erase memories makes the stakes much lower.
    
    Here are some limitations you could use to shake things up.
    –The psychic can only delete memories with the consent of the target. (This will force him to use persuasion or maybe coercion rather than just rely on his power. When a hero just relies on a power without any adding any sort of creativity or cunning, it tends to be unsatisfying).
    –The psychic can only delete memories he knows about. This will force him to do some investigation on his own.
    –Be really careful with the ability to add memories. That power tends to be confusing as hell. Who remembers which fake memories? It’ll probably be hard for readers to keep it all together.
    –A distance restriction. If the hero has to touch the target to use his power, it might make things more interesting. Also, if the power looks really unpleasant and makes the target start convulsing or act similarly agitated, it would probably be more interesting. What does the hero do if the target is in broad daylight? That’s an obstacle that will give you an opportunity to let the hero try a creative solution.

31. # Chi.Rhoon 13 Mar 2009 at 11:00 am

    What are some cool ways to put a twist on teleportation? I was thinking about a character who can teleport through shadows. But do you guys have any other ideas that maybe cool? Like mirrors or water. I might make a character who can teleport through water. That would be tight, now that I think about it.

32. # Tomon 13 Mar 2009 at 11:05 am

    Maybe he can only teleport through certain ‘nodes’. For example (but don’t use this example) he can only teleport through computers. I say don’t use that because almost every home has a computer nowadays so it’s not much of a restriction. But something along those lines. Maybe something totally random or crazy like he can only teleport between public swimming pools, or something ‘plausible’ like he can only teleport between TVs tuned to a certain channel. Either way, teleportation is a pretty powerful superpower so it needs some kind of restriction to keep it in check (Nightcrawler’s range is very limited, for example).

33. # Chi.Rhoon 13 Mar 2009 at 11:58 am

    Yeah, I understand. But there are also very powerful teleporters like the Vanisher (Marvel) and Misfit (DC). So I think there is some sort of balance. What kind of limitations would you put on a shadow teleporter besides distance?

34. # B. Macon 13 Mar 2009 at 12:12 pm

    Hmm. The obvious restriction would be that he can only teleport into places with shadows. (That’s not much of a problem at night, but eventually his enemies will figure out that leaving lights on all the time will screw him). He might need to have line-of-sight with the place he’s teleporting to. He might need to have visited or seen the place in question (such as in Jumper). The power may have a cooldown time, so that he can’t just instantly teleport away as soon as the going gets rough. There might be a limit on how often he could teleport.
    
    He might have problems with relativity. For example, if you jump off of a train that’s standing still, you’re fine. If you jump off of a train that’s doing 90 mph, you’re moving so fast relative to the ground that you will be seriously hurt. Likewise, if he teleports from an area of low-speed to an area of high-speed (or vice versa), he’s going to get slammed into something that’s moving a lot more quickly than he is. If relativity applies, he’d have to be very careful about teleporting onto or off of a moving vehicle (unless he somehow has approximately the same speed and direction before he makes the teleport).

35. # Ragged Boyon 25 Mar 2009 at 6:25 pm

    Jumper? The name says Justice.

    Ok, I’m bringing back my Masquerade story for a second. I’m changing his origin from the drug to the mask. His powers stim from a neurological boost he recieves when he puts on the mask. I’ll probably have other characters use drugs for their powers. That should clear up the controversy with the “drugs for good use” issue.

36. # Chi.Rhoon 27 Mar 2009 at 1:08 pm

    So I have a question. Is it possible to have characters that seem to be extremely powerful and still have a good story? My belief is that there can be a balance. Every character can’t be super powered but there would be people who have certain abilities and multiple abilities that make them more powerful than other people. So what are your thoughts on that?

37. # Chi.Rhoon 27 Mar 2009 at 1:09 pm

    And when i say every character cant be super powered i mean every character cant be superman. Which is why you have the batman and green arrows. lol

38. # Holliequon 27 Mar 2009 at 1:34 pm

    @Chi.Ro: I think it’s possible. In fact, I believe most of Stefan’s plot revolves around this idea. Some characters are probably going to be more powerful than others. As long as the difference isn’t huge, I don’t think that would be a massive problem. Of course, the weaker characters should also be valuable.

    For the purposes of your story, I think it would be more interesting to use characters who aren’t extremely powerful. A weaker character who overcomes an adversary will probably come across as more sympathetic.

39. # Chi.Rhoon 27 Mar 2009 at 1:56 pm

    So is Superman considered a bad character because he is extremely powerful? Or the Silver Surfer for example?

40. # Holliequon 27 Mar 2009 at 1:59 pm

    I’m not very familiar with the Silver Surfer, because I’m not a comic book reader. But yes, Superman is overpowered (super-strength, -speed AND invulnerability?)

41. # Chulanceon 28 Mar 2009 at 8:08 pm

    Also, how can you make someone who can manipulate time interesting? For example if armed men break in he can freeze time and leave or slow the bullets down in time. One of my antiheroes has that ability.

42. # B. Macon 29 Mar 2009 at 12:48 am

    Place a tight limit on how long he can freeze time. Maybe a few minutes.

43. # Tomon 29 Mar 2009 at 9:53 am

    See Peter Petrelli from Heroes for how NOT to do a mimic. By season 3 he was pretty much a Swiss army knife of superpowers. Invisibility, flight, super-strength, lightning, time manipulation, healing factor, telepathy, telekinesis, precognition. Yeah, he was unstoppable.
    
    That was a shame, because they handled his powers so well in season 1. It took him about 16 episodes to learn how to use his powers; he had to either be close to the power’s owner, or think hard about them. He had to train with Doctor Who-I mean… the Invisible Man…I mean Claud Raynes to learn how to use his powers.
    
    But they fixed his overpoweredness quite nicely in Volume 4. They made him lose all of his powers and now he can only have one ability at a time, and must touch people to take their ability. So if he hugs his brother he’ll be able to fly, but then if he slaps Matt Parkman he will lose his flying ability and be able to read minds.
    
    Yeah, power mimicry needs strong limitations.

44. # Tomon 22 Apr 2009 at 1:45 pm

    What do you think of giving my non-powered hero gloves and boots that enhance strength? By that I don’t mean with them on she’ll be able to lift heavy objects with ease, but when she punches and kicks, which are her main ways of attacking, the blows will be enhanced, sending ordinary people flying and causing damage to superpowered beings, something she normally wouldn’t be able to do.

    Also, what do you think of giving her an extendable staff like Robin from Teen Titans?

    She needs something to help her fight crime other than a black belt in Karate.

45. # Dforceon 22 Apr 2009 at 1:59 pm

    I think the gloves could work– though, you should keep in mind what could happen if she were to loose them/break them during a battle. Or what if someone stole them? Or accidentally tried them on? The intrigue goes on…
    
    Melee weapons are nice, I think. Robin was the more bad-a with one; and one of my leads also has a bo staff. Using that should be fine, but have you thought about other melee weapons? There are maces, hammers, nunchucks, swords (another character of mine may use one– still debating that), whips, boomerangs; and does it have to be extendable? These are just suggestions though.
    
    Is she a thinker? Does she lay traps for her foes? There are other ways to bring down crime.

46. # B. Macon 22 Apr 2009 at 2:00 pm

    I assume she’ll have superstrength and maybe some agility as well. I don’t think she needs a weapon.

47. # Yogion 22 Apr 2009 at 8:24 pm

    Okay, for one of my heroes, the one that controls heat, in my original draft a few years ago, he was ridiculously overpowered in comparison to the one that controlled light. So, I’ve redone his powers, and I’ve decided to make him manipulate heat, but not the temperature, so that, if the setting is at room temperature, he can force the heat to clump up at one certain area, so that certain area becomes very hot, but the surroundings become cold. And if he’s in a really cold area, and his friends are freezing to death, the only way he can help is by expunging his own body heat. Is that a good weakness?

48. # Lord of Darknesson 04 May 2009 at 7:57 am

    Hi. I was thinking of writing a story or novel about a boy. It’s set in the distant future. Lark is a multi-trillionaire’s son that is good at almost everything. One day, his Dad pulled a publicity stunt by hiring terrorist to plant a few bombs at a charity event which Lark was attending. Lark goes to give money for charity when he is caught in the explosion.
    
    His father repents and tries to save his son but none of the top scientists can help Lark, who is barely managing to survive with hardly any organs or limbs. His father goes back to the terrorist because there is no one who can help him now. He pays the terrorist kingpin millions of pounds to fix him but they do much more than that.
    
    They fix him but also turn him into a living weapon machine. They tell him that if he tells the police, Lark has a massive atomic bomb which is enough to rip a hole in the solar system. So they use the new and powered Lark to win a massive war against Russia and the USA. When Lark escapes and removes the bomb from his body, he plans to stop the Kingpin and end his ways no matter what.

    Is this a good story plot.

49. # B. Macon 04 May 2009 at 11:52 am

    Hello, Lord of Darkness. I’d kind of have to see how you executed this, but I have a few reservations so far.
    
    –The main character does not seem to have much of a personality yet. Things happen to him. He goes to the charity event, is passively blasted by his father, is passively turned into a machine, etc. So there’s not much that he chooses to do. In contrast, I think that the most compelling superhero origins use the personality and choices of the characters. For example, Daredevil threw himself in the way of an oncoming truck to save a pedestrian, Wonder Woman chose to disobey her mother by secretly competing to represent the island abroad, Spiderman initially chose not to use his superpowers and it got his uncle killed, etc. In contrast, it feels like your hero is pretty much forced to be a superhero.
    
    –”Lark… is good at almost everything.” It sounds like he’s kind of a Mary Sue, an overpowered character that might be hard to challenge.
    
    –It feels kind of flimsy to me that the father decides to kill his son for publicity and then has second-thoughts. Or that he has to turn to the terrorists to heal his son. (I can’t see why terrorists would know more about medicine than the world’s best doctors).
    
    –Even though it’s a bit cheesy, I kind of like the angle of a father trying to kill his son. I think a better reason might help, though.

50. # Tomon 12 May 2009 at 9:56 am

    One thing to add to that- control over time. How far does that power go? If he can time travel you may want to rethink that. If he can go forwards and backwards by a few seconds at most then it’s fine. Basically you can’t have the guy undoing deaths via time-travel, but you can have him using some kind of limited precogniton to fight.

    If his main way of fighting is using his powers to age things that will be very interesting.

51. # Holliequon 13 May 2009 at 2:17 pm

    Actually, whilst I’m thinking about it, I’d like to run a few supers past you too. (Does anybody remember that story from the POV of a dead superhero I was thinking about? Yeah, I’m thinking about it a little more. I’m a bad, bad person, but I’m stuck in a rut with Victor and Zoe. I’m kinda hoping this will kickstart my creative juices or something.)

    Spook (Jonas Miller)
    Very strong ESP, which includes chanelling, astral projection, communication with the dead, and weak precognition. (Also teleporting after he dies.)
    For personality, I’m thinking sarcastic and serious, but bordering anti-social. Being friends with ghosts for most of your life will do that to you.
    (Dies at the beginning, so he’d probably only use teleporting and astral projection. Precognition might be mentioned, and the chanelling is a major plot point. I’m also well aware of the likability issues, but I think being a Deadpan Snarker could cover that one until more likable characters get introduced.)

    Cinder (Leslie York)
    Your basic fire-powered superhero. Heat manipulation abilities too.
    Personality: senstitive, mostly calm, confidant, helpful. Also unquestioning of authority and a little too willing to compromise on the moral front. (Yes, a fire-based superhero who isn’t hot-headed, brash and arrogant!)

    Spectrum (Terence Craig)
    Manipulation of the electromagnetic spectrum – stuff like invisibility, X-ray vision, infra-red vision, etc.
    Methodical, eloquent, intelligent and charming, but self-centred and arrogant. I’m thinking he’ll be a traitor and the one responsible for Spooks’ death.
    (Not too sure about this guy’s name or powers. I’m open to change on this one, but I want something sneaky that could be powerful, but not over-powerful).

    Asclepius (Sean Brady)
    Poison creation, super-agility and a healing factor, but not a particularly powerful one. (Asclepius was the Greek god of healing, and fond of using snakes.)
    Reformed criminal. Dutiful, confidant and blunt, but also secretive, aggressive, critical and sometimes reckless. He’ll probably be my friendly neighbourhood badass, but with a really strict moral code. Slightly ironic given that he used to be a criminal, but then again he did pick a god as his alias.

    The Ripper (Doyle D. Brannigan)
    Bone manipulation, super-durability (NOT invulnerable), very minor healing factor (only because of the bone thing).
    Disinterested, arrogant but cautious, smug, and ever-so-slightly unstable. Will probably serve as the Big Bad. I wanted him to be very hard to kill and also to have a power that was slightly creepy.

    What do you think? Should I start over, tweak, prepare to be laughed at or other?

52. # Holliequon 13 May 2009 at 3:24 pm

    “Theoretically this can involve the ability to emit enough gamma radiation to kill someone in an instant.”
    Yeah, that occurred to me. He can’t emit gamma radiation in a huge amount like that. If he were to ever come across gamma radiation, he could control it, but he can’t create it. Also, gamma isn’t particularly dangerous in small doses, so he couldn’t use it to kill somebody in a fight.

    Radio signals – he’d have to have some way of producing the radio waves. And the other person would have to have a way of recieveing them.
    Intense light – no. He could probably divert light away from the eyes, if he concentrated really, really hard.
    Heat vision – isn’t the same as infra-red? (If no, I didn’t do the research, I guess . . .)

    Any other suggestions of powers that might fit this character? I think I’ll probably need to keep the invisibility. Anything that would pair neatly with that?

53. # JAMMYJon 16 May 2009 at 6:17 am

    Hey, everyone. I just wanted to know what people think of the superhero I’m creating. He can make a forcefield around his body (like an invisible second skin) that can withstand any force but at a cost of becoming extremely exhausted. He can also shoot his forcefields to do a variety of things from knocking back enemies to devastating small buildings. His forcefields give him superhuman strength. I thought I’d give him a floors, so he has an extremely short temper.

    What do you think?

54. # Ragged Boyon 17 May 2009 at 1:06 pm

    Hola, Jammy J

    You’re character seems very similar to the minor Marvel mutant Armor. She has pretty much the same ability. This could be a later issue, but I’m not sure. I like the concept, though.

    Ola, Warblade, you said:
    “His race is a god race, they have all the power in the universe (including Deity) but they don’t use it because of their nature. They only use their powers for the needs of other living beings not themselves.”

    This feels like an internal obstacle, which are usually unsatisfying. I recommend having an actual limitation for their power use. You could do this like Bruce Almighty, in which his powers simply didn’t work when he tried to bend the rules.

55. # notsohottopicon 18 May 2009 at 8:46 pm

    I’m having trouble finding unique abilities for my characters, it takes awhile. The plot is sequenced properly, and the idea’s going in an unknown direction.

    Kir: Female, a viral parasite(brings science to shame, sorry) that has sucessfully invaded the host’s brain and has taken over the conciousness of the body. There’s no struggle for mind-body control for most of the plot because the parasite has already ‘won’, I guess. Key notes:

    The virus explanation:
    -Hosts are ideally humans, but animals and plant beings are also infected sometimes.
    -The parasite travels through the host’s bloodstream, passed on through bodily fluids. There are more than one parasite in the body, all compete to reach the brain first in order to gain control of the brain.
    -The dominant parasite that reaches the brain first usually allows the other parasites to live within the host as well, and they must obey the dominant parasite in return.
    -Since some parasites may linger in the bloodstream, when they are expelled out of the body inside the blood, they prioritize to enter a new host. The expelled blood will start moving rapidly to enter the bloodstream of another host through, let’s say, an injury or cut of the host.

    Abilities:
    -Kir(the dominant parasite takes on the identity of the host)can instruct the parasites into restructuring the host’s DNA. It takes a long period of time depending on how extreme the mutation is. Changing physical features(facial structure, eye colour) will take a few months. More complex traits(nearly inhuman speed, strength, faster regeneration)can take years.
    -Again, depending on whether or not Kir orders it, faster regeneration is possible. Varies in speed, whether or not the injury involves complex restructuring.

    Weaknesses/Disadvantages:
    -Regrowth of a limb is impossible. Reattachment of the limbs possible if ordered.
    -Probability that the DNA can screw up, turn into something undesirable.
    -If Kir is mortally injury anywhere neck up, the entire body dies. If she cannot properly command the parasites, they won’t act and will escape out of the wound and into different hosts.
    -Sleep deprivation, or else parasite Kir will lose conciousness of the body to another parasite, or to the original owner of Kir’s body, which would be Kir(what).

    So as you can tell, too long. I need to simplify the abilities and limits. Can anyone please help fish out a few flaws as well? Thanks…

56. # The ReTARDISed Whovianon 17 Jun 2009 at 11:24 pm

    “So there’s been other posters that’ve been using Paladin for their superheroes? Cool. I got a Sentry in my comic, too”.

    My Paladin is a hacker/inventor/superhero who works as part of a team. My Sentry is a girl who was bedridden with a horrible disease, and when her father bought a last-ditch cure – a medicine developed by the military using the Guardian’s DNA – she gained superpowers like his and got better.

57. # Sammuuon 20 Aug 2009 at 6:51 am

    Captain Light (Sun Kim)
    Captain Light
    
    Real name: Pytros (birth name): Sun Kim Wong (adopted name)
    Alias: Captain Light
    Identity: secret
    Race: Novarian
    Affiliations: League of superpowered
    Relatives: Maxtrus (birth father) Uma (birth mother) Jimmy Wong (adoptive father) and Lee Wong (second adoptive father)
    Citizenship: Citizen of America
    Gender: Male
    Height: 6’5”
    Weight: 255 lbs
    Eyes: Green
    Hair: Blonde
    Marital Status: Single
    Occupation: Superhero
    Origin: Sent to earth by his warrior dad to avoid execution in his home world. Pytros would become a superhero in earth.
    Place of Birth: Avon, Novaron
    
    History
    Pytros was the son of Queen Uma and Maxtrus the greatest warrior in planet Novaron, but when King Delco the husband of Queen Uma found out that his heir and son was not his at all he got so furious he ordered the execution of his wife and general at once in the last attempt to save her son Queen Uma decided to hide her son inside a trading ship that was heading to a nearby planet to trade. While in space the ship was accidently blasted by meteor showers and crash landed on earth. Landing on earth, Pytros was found in Central Park (New York City) by Jimmy Wong and Lee Wong, who adopted him as their son and raised him.
    
    Powers and Abilities
    He can manipulate light to generate force-fields and shoot light-beams from his hand. He has superhuman strength and can lift more than 70 tons with ease, lift mountains with little effort. His strength depends on how much energy he has absorbed, so he could lift in excess of 250 tons. He has superhuman speed and can run a mile per second and can fly at the speed of light. He tends to fly at the speed of 23 miles per second in the atmosphere. He has great maneuverability in the air (like flying backwards and lifting heavy objects), superhuman durability and healing. His most powerful attack, solar flare, is an energy beam fired from his eyes that can blind an entire town.

58. # B. Macon 20 Aug 2009 at 9:15 am

    Hello, Sammuu. Here are some thoughts and suggestions.
    
    –This character has three sets of names (Captain Light, Pytros and Sun Kim Wong). I’d recommend bringing it to two.
    
    –By my count, we get about 150 words on his origin story/backstory/family. And another 230 words on his superpowers. These are not remotely as important as his personality and traits. I would strongly, strongly recommend developing your characters more. You might find this article useful.
    
    –I think the powers for Captain Light strike me as more workable than Zael’s did. (Erm, at least I assume you are the same author that did Zael). However… when you submit to publishers, do you think you could cut down the 230 words on Light’s superpowers into 1-3 sentences? Ideally, one or two sentences totaling a max of 20 words. (Some simplification of the powers might be in order).

59. # Blazeon 23 Aug 2009 at 8:11 pm

    This helps a lot! I was wondering whether I can have characters have mixed origins– for example, can my hero get his powers through magic and the villain through science? Would that all make sense in one universe?

60. # B. Macon 23 Aug 2009 at 8:27 pm

    Generally, I don’t recommend mixing magic and sci-fi. It’s pretty rare outside of DC Comics and might come off as tacky. In most cases, magical superheroes do not sell particularly well (please see Zatanna, Dr. Strange, etc). The magical superheroes that do perform well tend to have a more consistently magical universe (like Buffy, Sailor Moon, etc). You might find this article helpful.
    
    It could just be a coincidence when there are so few successful magical superheroes, but I find it notable that both of the ones I can think of star a female lead. It seems like magical superheroes tend to perform best when women comprise a significant part (or even a majority) of the readership. Perhaps many male comic book readers grow unreceptive to magical heroes as they get older? (That doesn’t seem terribly accurate with regards to fantasy novels, though).

61. # Ice boyon 03 Sep 2009 at 10:48 pm

    I need some help. I’m making a comic book about a team of teenagers who find out they have super powers. There’s also another team and some powerful villain, but I have a few problems:
    
    1-I don’t know what to name my heroes or villains. For most of them I just use other superhero’s names on them. The good team’s leader has cyrokinesis so I used the name Ice Boy for him, but I’d like you to help me with characters and team names.
    
    2-I want help with new super powers. I gave one of my villains “ropekinesis,” the power to create ropes of any size and control them mentally. I gave him the name Rope Master– is that good?
    
    3- I want my target audience for this comic book to be boys at my age. Should I include females in it?
    
    4- I need costumes.

62. # Luna Jamniaon 04 Sep 2009 at 8:44 am

    Hmmm …
    I have an alien (possibly super heroine later) but I can’t really come up with anything ability-wise. Her race’s skin/whole self is naturally very, very tough (like if she fell or whatever, or a knife was thrust at her, it would not have the same result, it takes a lot to make her bleed and even more to break her bones) and so can jump from higher places or whatever, not worry so much about being ‘careful’. In other words, her whole race is pretty enduring.

    But the problem is, of course, obviously that it’s not really a superpower and actually her personality makes it so she’s not very reckless, though she could be, so the possibility of taking advantage of that natural protection isn’t there.

    Maybe since her skin/bones are harder, she can really pack a punch? I don’t know. Her hair and eyes pale, too, when she’s frightened or feeling sick. But that doesn’t really lend any ideas as to a superpower. :/

63. # Ghoston 04 Sep 2009 at 11:03 am

    Luna,
    I agree with lighting man, your character outline sounds pretty solid so I wouldn’t add any abilities. You just need to find new ways use what you have already given your character. Like maybe you alien is stronger on earth because of lighter gravity, but has to work ou alot to keep her body from aclimating(spelling?), or maybe as a result of her having superhard bones and stuff her body is to dense to float in water. Oh by the way with the gravity thing I mentioned earlier, astronauts experience bone loss in space because the low gravity their bones dont need to be as strong, so maybe your character is slow losing her advantage over time.

64. # Ragged Boyon 04 Sep 2009 at 12:42 pm

    Hola, Ice Boy

    If we haven’t met already, I’m Ragged Boy, a part-time contributor. Let’s see if we can’t help you out, buddy:

    1: I’m not really feeling Ice boy. It’s way generic. Personally, I prefer names that tell me about the heroes persona like Showtime or Chicle. Give me a brief bio of each of your characters and villains.

    2: I love coming up with superpowers. I like the power of “Ropekinesis”, but the name is ick. I think with that power it’s okay to explain it in a short description. It’s not a self-explanatory power like super strength or flying. I’m not feeling Rope Master. How about Slipknot? As for the others what types of superpowers do you like?

    3:I’m hoping number 3 isn’t a general question. I don’t think boys would like a world with just boys. But if you’re talking about in your team, I’d recommend for it. Girls usually play an important role in teams. They’re usually the voice of reason or the level-headed one or the love interest through which you can develop your male characters and vice versa. I’d definitely vote “yes” on girls. I think it would reflect poorly on your ability as a writer if you could only write one type of character. Also, a world with just boys is gross. Haha!

    4:Ah, costumes. Have you seen this article yet? I can help you with any questions you have.

    On a side note, I’d recommend working on your grammar and your organization when posting. It makes it easier for us to help you.

    So, what do you think?

65. # Wingson 04 Sep 2009 at 1:07 pm

    Perhaps I can also be of use to Ice Boy – I have an ice manipulator known as Frostbite.

    Oh, and can anyone give me a minor-yet-workable ability for Remembrance aka Maya? This ability would be her power originally, before she was given the Titan’s Diamond powers. For instance, the other fighter created by Crimson in the same manner was Harbinger aka Julian, an empath. Any ideas?

    - Wings

66. # Lighting Manon 04 Sep 2009 at 1:58 pm

    A minor ability? I can’t remember at the moment if your universe has a mass origin or not, but if it does, it might be interesting for it to be something that would require an Eigen plot to be discovered, for example, an individual with the ability to regrow her kidneys, that just happens to offer to give one away, or get kidnapped by an organ stealing criminal. She could be using this to test medications for pharmacutical companies earlier then the law allows, when Crimson finds her.

    Or if you were looking for a suggestion more combat oriented, how about the ability to rapidly repair dermal injuries through increased intake of folate? This could cause her to run around eating inordinate amounts of Sunflower seeds, or kale. You could allow this habit to survive the presumable loss of that power when she gains her new ones, and tie into her name. The actual why of how folate increases her healing ability can be attributed to her possessing a unique physiology.

67. # Luna Jamniaon 04 Sep 2009 at 2:48 pm

    Lightning Man and Ghost, thanks for your input. Yeah, I guess you’re right. It’s actually pretty interesting because I’d never have seen that. I mean, I thought of it as just a trait and maybe she would be more difficult to injure but yeah, when her personality really starts coming through and she gets more confident-or reckless-on Earth …

    Ghost, that ‘denser so she can’t float’ thing is pretty cool.
    Only thing is now I’m worried I made her into a Mary-Sue a little bit, because technically she hadn’t, you know, eaten or anything for several months or more (however long it took her cramped Pod-meteorite to everyone else-to travel to earth). And I remember B.Mac’s thing about aliens having to look like, well, aliens/not human and not being so super-powered they were way superior to humans.

    Then again, considering how many planets and stars are out there-disregarding for a moment this is for a book-though I don’t believe in aliens, it is at the same time entirely possible. If there were aliens for there to be at least several planets with human-like aliens on them, with incredible (or not so incredible) powers. So shes kinda safe that way, though still perhaps somewhat of a Mary-Sue.

68. # Chandleron 13 Sep 2009 at 9:18 pm

    Okay. Build a story around the original premise..hmm. I have something. Perhaps this particular scientist has been studying the Obsidian race, and he uses Obsidian DNA to create the ultimate prototype, or blueprint?

69. # StarEon 13 Sep 2009 at 9:50 pm

    Alrighty Chandler, but what’s the “Obsidian Race”? Why is the scientist studying them? Why does he decide to make a “prototype” based on their powers? What kind of prototype is it? Is it a prototype for a machine, weapon, or a super-serum to give other people powers? (A “prototype” is a test version of something, so what kind of thing is he making? How?) What does your character intend to do with that prototype? Is he in it for the money? Did somebody hire him to do it? Does he want to give people superpowers? What’s his motivation?

    What is your researcher/scientist character’s name? What kind of personality does he have? Is he a very serious, intelligent person who is always highly concentrated on his work? Is he light-hearted, ethusiastic, accident-prone? Does he have any close friends or co-workers working with him on this prototype project? Where does he live? Does he get paid very much? Who funds his research? The government or a private contracter?

    Once the scientist makes the prototype, what happens? Does it turn out differently than he thought it would? It is horrendously dangerous and he must stop the “monster” he’s created? Is there an accident in the lab? Do villains start trying to kill him in order to stop his project? Maybe villains try to steal his research papers so THEY can use the super prototype, or they want to kidnap the scientist so he can help them with their evil schemes?

    Answering these questions will help you flesh out your main character, his motivation, and your storyline. Give it a try! Right now, you’re still being too vague for anyone to give you suggestions. All I can do is try to ask you questions to help you get started. Try to give us a little description about what happens in your story, and who the main heroes and villains are.

70. # Chandleron 14 Sep 2009 at 3:38 pm

    Well, the prototype was used for himself because he has cancer, and he’s trying to cure himself. The Obsidians are a race of beings born with a gene known as the Obsidian gene, which when activated, grants the individual with superhuman abilities. The gene can be activated as a result of changes in the environment. The scientist’s name is Ben Mitchell, and he works for an observatory in New York City. His specialty is developmental biology, and he’s studied the Obsidians for years. Max Crenshaw, a terrorist, heard about this research and has sent followers to steal the prototype, and build the ultimate weapon.

71. # StarEon 14 Sep 2009 at 4:17 pm

    Heya, Chandler! Good start. Lemme see if this all makes sense…
    
    So Ben Mitchell works for an observatory, but specializes in developmental biology? I think people who work in observatories study astronomy (stars, planets, etc.). If he’s a biologist, he probably wouldn’t be stationed in the observatory unless his work related to outerspace or he needed a giant telescope.
    
    He’s got cancer and wants to cure himself, so he makes a prototype SERUM (chemical/medicine) out of the blood of the Obsidians. He wants the superhuman abilities because he believes that if he’s got superstrength and stuff, it might give his immune system the extra boost it needs to fight off the cancer? So he develops this medicine and tries it on himself?
    
    And then the terrorist guy hears about the research and wants HIS scientists/thugs to steal the medicine that Ben made, so he can power up his own legion of soldiers? Or is his “ultimate weapon” more like a machine that can be powered up by Ben’s medicine? Do the terrorists succeed in stealing Ben’s research? How does Ben avoid them at first, and how to they finally take his research if he’s got the super-powers already? What does he have to do to stop them? Does he learn that the super-powers have a time limit (or life-span cost, side-effects, etc.) that the terrorists don’t know about?
    
    Also, tell us more about the Obsidians. How do they play into the story? Who are they? WHAT are they? An alien race? Mutatations amongst humans? A recently discovered breed of animal? I imagine that you’ll be using an Obsidian character somewhere in your story, because when you were planning on a fanfiction, you were going to have the Incredible Hulk in the story. In your original idea, how did Ben Mitchell get the Hulk’s DNA? What role did the Hulk play in the original story? That’s probably how you should start thinking about where to use the Obsidian people.

72. # Chandleron 14 Sep 2009 at 10:11 pm

    Oops, I didnt mean “observatory”. I meant a lab in New York City known as Trinity Labs. I completely took the Hulk out of the story line, but I was thinking, Ben could use the serum to cure himself, and perhaps turn himself into a hulk-like character. I dunno. Maybe some suggestions from you guys would suffice in this case. Anyway, the Obsidians are an alien race, and some of them came to Earth to escape their war-torn planet called Absentia,

73. # Chandleron 14 Sep 2009 at 10:16 pm

    Oh, and yes, the serum does cause a spike in his immune system to help him fight off the cancer, and since it’s caused a radical mutagenic effect on Ben’s cells, it turned him into a humanoid being with strength (kinda like the Hulk). The two Obsidians, Micah and Belarus help Mitchell keep the serum from getting into the hands of Max Crenshaw and the members of his terrorist organization.

    Any suggestions.

74. # StarEon 15 Sep 2009 at 12:13 pm

    Am I the only one trying to review Chandler’s story? lol, it’s hard to do by myself!
    
    Anyways, it’s great that you’re getting some of the details planned out! I’m not really sure how to help other than asking some more questions for you, so here I go!
    
    At this point, I’m mostly interested in how Micah and Belarus play into the story. How do they feel towards humans? Have they been on Earth long? Why do they let the humans scientist, Ben, take samples of their DNA to cure himself? Do they do this willingly, or does Ben make some agreement with them so the aliens would GAIN from the DNA donation? Imagine if you, a human being, wandered into an area full of exotic, four-headed aliens that resembled centipedes. If they took a genuine interest in you and wanted a “sample of your blood” with some foreign medical supplies, I doubt you’d be jumping to volunteer, no matter how well you were getting along with those aliens. This is what the situation might feel like for Micah and Belarus.
    
    Maybe Ben finds them injured or sick, and for whatever reason, Ben convinces them that it’s okay to trust him and he shuffles them to his lab, where he’s got all his medical supplies. (You’re really gonna have to work on motivating Ben AND the Obsidians for allowing this to happen. Why doesn’t Ben run away from the aliens? Why do the aliens decide to trust Ben, at least temporarily? The aliens are probably DESPERATE and plan to either kill Ben or run into hiding if he makes a wrong move with them)
    
    Anyways, perhaps while Ben is applying medicine to the injured Obsidian, he realizes that it almost instantly takes effect. Normally, an injury would have to be cleaned and covered with bandages for awhile, but the wound starts to heal almost immediately after the alien is given medicine. The aliens aren’t surprised by this, but Ben is. They tell him that everybody heals like that, as long as they’re given medicine. There might be a culture shock as the aliens realize that humans are more fragile, and take longer to heal. Ben might realize that studying their blood could come up with a MIRACLE CURE, though he doesn’t know what kind of side-effects there may be. He might strike a deal with the Obsidians – maybe offer to protect them and show them how to blend in on earth, if they’ll give him a sample of their blood.
    
    Then after Ben has made his medical prototype, he uses it on himself and it has HUGE side-effects. His immune system gets a boost, alright, but the blood reacts wildly with human blood and starts turning him into a hulk-like monster. So then Ben and the aliens are working together this whole time, and the aliens wonder if it’s, “ordinary for humans to become massive and snarling without warning…”
    
    Haha, that’s the best I’ve got for suggestions. I don’t think I should be suggesting so much, though. You’re gonna have to start generating lots of ideas so you can get your story going! If any of these ideas sounded good, start trying to build off of the basic premise. You’ll need to come up with what happens during the plot, and how you’re gonna motivate these characters to work together.

75. # Chandleron 15 Sep 2009 at 8:56 pm

    Wow. That’s a good premise that I could go with. Thanks. I was going to add like, after Mitchell is treated with the prototype, and the Obsidians are wondering if humans innately has this ability, Crenshaw and his cronies learn of Mitchell’s research, and try and get a hold of it.

    I do have one question, in Ben’s mutated form, what color should his skin be? What should trigger off the transformation?

76. # StarEon 15 Sep 2009 at 10:14 pm

    Maybe you should make Ben’s transformation more unique than just getting big and changing colors like the Hulk does. Otherwise, he’ll seem a bit like a copycat hero. Try to think of an interesting “monster-transformation” for your character that will go along with the “boosted immune system” idea. Think like the Hulk or a werewolf sort of transformation, but make it unique to your story somehow.
    
    As for what triggers the transformation, it could be any number of things… Maybe it happens at night, like with werewolves? Or maybe it happens every time he sees his own reflection or something? So he’d just be walking down the street and see himself in a puddle, then all of a sudden he starts transforming and he has to freak out and run into an alleyway or something? Haha, that one sounds difficult to write about, though… But think about that sort of thing.
    
    Maybe think about the five senses? Sight, hearing, smell, taste, touch… Anything related to one of those might set off his transformation. Think about the Obsidians, too. What are they like? Since THEY’RE blood causes Ben to transform, maybe the conditions of the transformation are similar to the aliens’s culture…?
    
    I’m not sure about this one. Try brainstorming for a little while.

77. # akim92on 15 Sep 2009 at 11:34 pm

    can anyone give opinions on my superhero? i don’t know whether this hero has been created or not.. but this was my one month idea.. (sorry.. i’m pretty bad in english.. hope u understand).. Well, this is my superhero..
    
    He is a teenage boy.. age around 17-19 years old.. one day, he had a trip with his friends.. one night, he and his closest friend discover that the place that they go has an abandon chemical factory.. then, rain fall down. it was a heavy rain.. he and his closest friend enter the factory.. after a while in the factory, suddenly, a lightning struck the factory and made it explode.. they both “fly out” from the factory.. his friend died because the chemical in the factory had fell on him.. the main character seriously injured.. he couldn’t move.. suddenly, some black radioactive liquid gonna fell on him.. just a few inches above him, suddenly, an enormous lightning struck him.. he fainted.. okay.. thats just a scene on how he got his power..
    
    now.. he can move as fast as lightning(he didn’t run).. when he moves like a lightning, his body changes to a electric particles.. so, when he move, he appear like a lightning struck.. he also can move to the sky( this event make people think that it was a lightning).. he can generate eletric(lightning) from his hand.. he can control the voltage of electric(lightning) that he wants to generate.. he can summon a lightning from the sky.. only his left arm can generate normal electricity/lightning(yellow, blue, red).. due to the black radioactive, his right arm can generate a very powerful lightning, the black lightning.. this lightning can penetrate anything in its way(including mirror, insulator, and titanium steel).. he also can change his body to lightning form.. when on this form, everything get near to him will be struck… even more powerful, he can change to his black lightning form.. everything that near him will be struck by the black lightning and even worse the lightning will penetrate anything on its way.. huh.. thats it..

    anyone please comment and give ur opinion on this hero…

78. # StarEon 16 Sep 2009 at 12:49 pm

    Hey there, Akim. Welcome to Superhero Nation! I’ll try to give you some comments and opinions about your superhero and his origin story.
    
    About your hero’s origin, why did he and his friends travel to an dangerous, old, abandonned factory? What would make them do that? Is it a dare from their classmates? Maybe the hero and his friend are supposed to help with the “Senior Prank” in high school this year, and there’s something they need from the chemical plant? Do they need a hide-out for some reason, so they hope to hide at the factory so no one will look for them there? Are they lost in the woods one night in the rain, and they decide to take shelter there? You’ll need a good reason for the boys to risk going to such a dangerous place!
    
    About the hero’s powers, I think they sound pretty cool. You might have too many powers, though. I like that he turns into molecules when he travels at lightning speed, but make sure his speed has limitations. I also like that he can summon regular attack lightning with one hand, but extremely dangerous black lightning with the other hand. You should definitely make your hero struggle with the black lightning at first – it must be REALLY easy to hurt someone with it, or hurt himself, or accidentally start electrical fires and burn buildings down. Maybe your hero decides not to use the black lightning because whenever he does, someone gets hurt or something really terrible happens? The power might be really unstable, and might go completely out of control and cause disasters. But as your story continues, he learns not to fear the black lightning and trains with it very carefully so he won’t kill anybody?
    
    I don’t think I liked the idea of your hero being able to summon lightning from the sky. Why do that when he can do it from his hands? And being able to “move into the sky” might be too much. That’s kind of like being able to fly, and you shouldn’t make him fly if he ALSO has the super speed. Maybe pick one or the other?
    
    How are you going to challenge your superhero? What are his weaknesses? What keeps him from being “too strong”?
    
    Um, that’s all I can think of! Good luck with your story, Akim.

79. # Chandleron 16 Sep 2009 at 1:37 pm

    I was thinking of coming up with a premise for triggering Ben’s transformation. What about physical exertion? Whenever he gets into a fight with someone, his body “fears” being infected with a foreign substance from the individual he’s in the brawl with, and as a result his immune system sends a special group of antibodies, protecting him and causing the initial transformation?

80. # Chandleron 17 Sep 2009 at 8:43 pm

    Thank you StarE. This site has been very helpful in fleshing out my ideas. I started writing sci fi/fantasy when I was in elementary school, and I’ve been writing stories every since. I also wrote a vampire series, where all seven vampire clans were at war with each other over an ancient text, and I’m still trying to flesh that out to “perfection”.

81. # Chandleron 19 Sep 2009 at 1:15 pm

    Hey guys, what about a sorcerer that has a talisman enabling him to absorb mystical energies from certain dimensional pathways, like the ones he’s familiar with?

    Okay. I have a premise. A sorcerer named Brahmin, a third initiate in the Tarot Order discovers a talisman, which enables him to absorb mystical energies from certain dimensional worlds. He becomes Grand Master and starts a rivalry with a mutant named Wildcard

82. # Chandleron 20 Sep 2009 at 12:11 pm

    Brahmin is the antagonist (bad guy), and he had his herald, a being that was resurrected in a Tarot ritual steal the talisman from the Makai temple, but the mutant Wildcard tried to stop him. Wildcard had been rivals with Brahmin from some time back, due to “killing” him, and having him imprisoned in a pocket world. As far as him absorbing inner-dimensional mystical energies, perhaps, he would learn how to use them all, to become a more effective sorcerer. That sounds like a good idea.

83. # volxwagonon 02 Oct 2009 at 6:12 pm

    Im starting my own novel company and im stillon the basics.One i got over 42 superhumans in all , divided equally in to good and bad. I know how it is going to start and end. By once there was a time were there were super heros who did one differently then the others, and they andIm st one of them end up killing a (unneeded) superhero , so they split and each section wich is about 15 for each one maybe more , it goes they fight intill some crecooperate into the nextplanet mars and thats the good guys and they set up base but whil that happens they get ambushed by the vilians and it drags onto the last planet Pluto where the leaders call the fight between them ( wich are Good:American Arrow and the Bad:still in process of thinking of a name) fight and they battle and they back off and the rest is pretty good.

    I was wondering if i could get some tips from you guys.

84. # B. Macon 02 Oct 2009 at 8:16 pm

    Hello, Volxwagon! I have a few suggestions…
    
    1. I know one guy that started up a novel publishing company. Even more so than other endeavors in the publishing industry, it is freakishly difficult. It also requires a lot of technical savvy, experience and seed money. I would recommend a more limited project like trying to get a novel published (which is a feat in itself) rather than taking on a vastly more difficult and financially dangerous business endeavor. If you are dead-set on starting your own publishing company, I would recommend at least getting a job in the publishing industry for a few years if you have not done so already– it will probably be superbly difficult to find venture capital without a history of success in the field, particularly in this business climate.
    
    2. I think that brushing up a bit on grammar/punctuation/spelling will help a lot, whether you start your own publishing company or just want to sell your manuscript to a publisher. For example, “Im starting my own novel company and im stillon the basics.One i got over 42 superhumans in all , divided equally in to good and bad.” Here’s how I would proofread those two sentences: “I’m starting my own novel company and I’m still on the basics. I have over 42 superhumans in all, divided equally into good and bad.”
    
    3. Just to make sure I understand this correctly… There are 42 superhumans. One of them kills another, and the 42 split into 2-3 groups of ~15. The groups fight and the good guys flee to Mars. The villains attack and force them to Pluto, where the leaders square off in single combat. Right?
    
    4. Who’s the target audience?
    
    5. I think that it would really help to develop the characters a bit. For example, what are some of the distinguishing characteristics of American Arrow? Is he the main character? Why will we like him? What’s his signature flaw? (For example, Peter Parker gets in a lot of trouble because he isn’t responsible enough… that’s why Uncle Ben gets killed). What are the groups fighting over? If the groups split up into sections of about 15, there might be a third group. What’s its deal? Why aren’t they going along with the other two?
    
    Good luck. Huah!

85. # Chandleron 07 Oct 2009 at 8:32 pm

    Hey, guys. I am rewriting a vampire novel (which I’d like to turn into a graphic novel) titled Dark Millennium. The Templar (who is like a Freemason) is planning to start a new world order. Within the Templar, you have lower level initiates, who are vampires from younger bloodlines, and then you have the upper initiates who are highly evolved. They’re trying to build a hybrid race by mixing Carpathian DNA with vampire DNA. The Carpathians are a Nephilim bloodline that they had been feuding with for centuries.
    
    What do you think? Thanks.

86. # B. Macon 08 Oct 2009 at 3:40 pm

    Here are some impressions, Chandler…
    
    1) There are three imaginary words here: Nephilim, Carpathians and Templar (which is a real word, but probably made-up in this context). I feel that’s a lot for ~90 words.
    
    2) What’s a Freemason? Rather than comparing your villain to a concept that readers might not be familiar with, I’d recommend just focusing on the New World Order.
    
    3) Not sure about mixing fantasy elements like vampires with sci-fi elements like genetic engineering. I think that many readers will accept urban fantasy like Dresden Files and most vampire stories set in the modern-day, though. The difference, I feel, is that modern technology is just a part of the setting in books like Dresden Files. In contrast, technology is a major part of the plot of yours– also, it’s science fiction rather than real-life technology.

87. # Roon 11 Oct 2009 at 6:09 am

    Hey wuzup SN? I was wondering if anybody knew what kind of abilities someone would have if they could manipulate electrons, photons, and neutrons….

    nanokinesis is the name of it…. Nanokinesis- Manipulation of subatomic particles, like electrons, protons and neutrons, including their motion behavior and their chemical processes

    thanks guys

88. # Ragged Boyon 11 Oct 2009 at 6:37 am

    You make some good points, particularly about compromising my book’s seriousness. Ultimately, I think I can pull it off. It will be a challenge to make it look serious, but I think I can do it. I think I’ll take away the offense and defense distinction. I agree that it doesn’t add much. I don’t think it will be counterproductive (maybe I have a self-serving bias) simply because he can’t control what he gets. It’s more along the lines of working with what you have and oppose to just getting perfect things. I think it can still be serious, but sort of like One Piece in that there is usually an element of comedy.

89. # ForsAkenon 24 Oct 2009 at 9:04 pm

    I have a couple main characters but i cannot put them together in the same story so if any of you have some advice please help. Oh and so far i have “Recon” a genetically and bio enginnered super soilder, “Shade” a former supernatural hunter who leads a rebellion group against vampire control, im not sure on a name for this one yet but can manipulate time (in my mind kind of a matrix thing) also she was a former quantam mechanic. I am forming a plot but i need some help thinking of putting these people together so if you have any help please post.

90. # Wingson 01 Nov 2009 at 3:56 pm

    Depends. One power, if there are ways to use it creatively and it hasn’t been overused (Super strength, flight, and speed are some of the most common overused examples) can actually be better than an assortment. For instance, a character with hydrokinesis, or water manipulation could, in the hands of a good writer, do a variety of things – create a bubble underwater in order to breathe, make a cloud of steam to conceal a retreat, make water swallow up an enemy, even possibly change the weather by using the amounts of water in the air.

    Characters with multiple powers tend to be overpowered if done wrong (Looking at you, Superman) but if the powers have limits/are relatively small-scale (Being able to tell if someone is lying as opposed to reading minds, for instance) and if the powers aren’t drastically different (Say, water and ice manipulation as opposed to fire and ice).

    Above all, the powers shouldn’t require too much explanation. Maybe…one or two sentences tops. (I dare someone to make a list of all of Superman’s powers – and i mean ALL of them. Even the ones that only lasted for one issue). Keep it simple.

    Hopefully this helped.

    - Wings

91. # MacGruberon 02 Nov 2009 at 6:41 pm

    I’ve been tossing around the idea of a villain for my hero Phase (detailed information here for those who don’t know what the heck I’m talking about: http://www.superheronation.com/2008/01/05/8-common-problems-with-psychic-superheroes/ )

    Ivan Didrier was once a police officer on Manhatten island. He was taken seriously by his coworkers and was on the fasttrack to be the police sergeant when the current one retired. But everything changed soon enough.

    One day, Didrier’s station is called to the home of three notorious gangsters, all well-known (and hated) throughout the community as drug dealers. The station is called in to bust the home, with six men (including Didrier) being dispatched to the scene.

    In the ensuing firefight, stray bullets strike Didrier in the eyes, causing them to swell and bleed out. Once the three drug dealers are subdued, Didrier is rushed to the hospital.

    Too late to save his vision though. The doctors remove Didrier’s now-useless eyes and, in an experimental surgery to save his vision, the doctors insert synthetic eyes.

    These eyes are basically biomechanical orbs, about the size of your average eyeball. Light is absorbed through a glass-like apparatus at the front of each synthetic eyeball. Computer chips at the back of the eye read and interpret this pattern. The data is sent along a near-microscopic wire, which is attached to the now-clipped optic nerve, to the brain for the signal to be interpreted. The light then bounces back out of the eye.

    However, the bullets that destroyed Didrier’s vision have also destroyed his sanity. Unlike before the accident, Didrier now is obsessed with revenge, and is insane with it. And he’s got plenty of things to get revenge for. He wants to get revenge on the police station for forcing him to resign due to his disability. He especially wants revenge on the three gangsters who ruined his life.

    In preparation for his ultimate revenge, Didrier tweaks his synthetic eye just slightly. He covers the glass-like apparatus with an intense magnifying glass-like lens. This lens focuses the light that bounces back out of the eye, intensifying it into a sort of laser (remember frying ants with your magnifying glass when you were kids?).

    So one night, after Didrier has finished all his preparations, he revisits the police station that ruined his life. Didrier, his face covered in a dark red ski mask, body with a dark red sweatshirt, lower body with dark red pants, and hands and feet covered in white gloves and boots respectively, enters the station and melts the security cameras along his way to the cafeteria.

    Didrier sneaks into the kitchen and grabs eight long, skinny knives, which he sharpens with his laser vision. He rushes into the cell block, where he sees the three drug dealers and a guard, patrolling the row of cells. Didrier sneaks up behind the guard and trips him, causing the guard to fall to the ground. Didrier flips the guard onto his back and shoves two of the knives into the guard’s eyes.

    Didrier does this to the three criminals as well, though he uses his laser vision to get into the cells without keys and to subdue the more violent criminal.

    When Didrier is finished, the knives now shoved through his victims’s eyes, he carves an eye into the nearby wall with his laser vision, and walks off.

    Ivan Didrier has two powers (three if you count insanity):
    - heat vision (the ability to sense heat)
    - laser vision (the ability to shoot lasers)

    The laser vision takes a toll on his synthetic eyes’s batteries, meaning he has to recharge fairly often.

    Ivan Didrier calls himself Gamma, after Omicron, after the Greek letter omicron, which reminds him of an eye.

    Didrier/Omicron’s personality/physical traits:
    - He is extremely vengeful
    - He is obsessed with the human eye, calling it the most valuable piece of Nature’s ingenuity
    - He has recruited a team of about twenty henchmen, who were all originally blind, but given sight by Didrier when he installed the synthetic eyes into his henchmen. His henchmen (called Pupils) do not have laser vision, but instead possess guns with heat-seeking bullets
    - He is bent on crushing the Manhatten police force and replacing it with himself and his cronies, feeling that he could do a better job of not screwing people over
    - He considers himself the chief deliverer of justice, painfully killing anyone he believes has committed a crime on sight, no questions asked
    - He sees Phase, the police, and anyone who still puts their faith in the police as a threat to his perfect world
    - He has an average thirty year-old’s physique, with dark black hair and expressionless eyes
    - His uniform is all dark red with a large eye in the center of his chest

    Let me know what you think!

92. # B. Macon 04 Nov 2009 at 5:54 pm

    A few quick questions. Does the operation restore his vision successfully? Second, if he does get his vision back, why’s he so obsessed with revenge? What has he actually lost? I’d recommend making the insanity stem from something else– for example, maybe his eyes look REAL freaky and everybody gives him 10-20 feet. Or maybe the vision works but not in a way that it used to. For example, maybe he only sees in black-and-white. That would drive me bonkers.
    
    Does it really matter what he’s wearing when he goes in the police station?
    
    Calling his henchmen Pupils is maybe a bit too punny for a fairly dark, serious story. It’d work better in Venture Brothers, I think.

93. # MacGruberon 05 Nov 2009 at 5:43 am

    No problem (remindng you).

    Yes, the operation does restore his vision successfully, but the vision goes out at inopportune times.

    People do tend to avoid him on the street (just like people tend to avoid people with glass eyes).

    He’s bent on revenge because:
    - His wife left him after the operation, due to ugliness of the eyes
    - The police station fired him. They didn’t want his vision to go out when they’re at a crime with guns involved

    Because of these two things, he blames the criminals for getting rid of the two best things in his life. Plus, he blames the police for not trusting him with his new eyes. Thus the grounds for his revenge.

    Or the vision could be on a two or three second delay. For example, if someone throws a ball, you’ll realize someone threw the ball three seconds after they threw it. It could have already hit you by then.

    But I personally prefer that the vision just cuts out at inopportune times.

    I don’t even know why I added what he was wearing that night.

    I see that now (the Pupils thing). What is your suggestion for the collective name for his henchmen?

94. # Lighting Manon 05 Nov 2009 at 1:00 pm

    Personally, I don’t think one is needed. Beyond the more campy versions, there isn’t a collective name for the majority of supervillains henchmen, even if they have a theme. Most Joker henchmen wear clown make-up, for instance, but they’re just underlings, nothing more decorative then that.

    What if instead of the delay, his vision has small fugacious moments where they blank out, I mean mere milliseconds. To use a comparison, if his vision were a film or animated clip, he’d miss every third or so frame, essentially making his life choppy, like a video game running on a system that can’t handle it. It wouldn’t be a significant weakness like the delay, but it would make it physically hurt to see, which would presumably limit the amount of time he could comfortably see in a day.

    I like B. Mac’s suggestion of black and white vision, but perhaps instead of that, the eyes could have been derived from military testing and use light intensifying night vision instead? This would limit his activities to night time due to his greatly increased sensitivity to light. This would also explain why his eyes look so weird, they would presumably glow green quite brightly in response to their nature.

95. # RPG-92on 12 Nov 2009 at 5:49 pm

    I think someone should make a new superhero universe because DC and Marvel are already too full. I mean, how can any other hero become famous if everywhere you see it’s Batman, Superman, Spiderman or the Hulk tv shows or movies. The only time these heroes got any spotlight was on Batman: The Brave and the Bold or Teen Titans. I wish to make mine a tv superhero first (on a kids’ network like CN) then make it a comic book (hey, it worked for Megas XLR). I think someone (me, if possible) should make a new universe, so how can someone do that?

96. # B. Macon 12 Nov 2009 at 10:44 pm

    Launching a new superhero universe is not freakishly difficult; making it popular is. The most feasible way would probably be to start off a comic series.
    
    Here’s an abbreviated how-to guide.
    
    First, you’d get a concept for a plot (rather than a universe), a character or team trying to accomplish a difficult goal. I’d also recommend thinking about target audience at this point–that will help prevent distractions from plot elements that don’t fit the audience.
    
    Second, you’d write a pilot issue, either designed as a stand-alone or as the first of an arc of probably 3-6 comics. (The fewer, the better). It depends on the publisher, but you’d probably to want your issue’s script at ~22 pages if you were submitting to Dark Horse or Image. (The first draft should probably be 40-50 pages, though; that will give you ample material to work with when you’re rewriting).
    
    Third. If you’re submitting a comic that would be the first of an arc, then you’d want a synopsis of what happens over the course of the arc (the 3-6 comics, including issue 1). 1-3 pages. I’d recommend giving each issue a paragraph (more on the rest later). Each issue needs to 1) contain enough material to fit the page count and 2) end with a cliffhanger or discovery or some other development that makes the audience want to keep reading. (That’s crucial because you need to show that your series can retain readers from one issue to the next). Then I’d recommend spending the rest of your space discussing arc-wide plot issues (like how the most important character evolves). I’d also recommend discussing business details like your target audience and competing series.
    
    For the competing series section, pick a few well-known works that appeal to a similar audience as yours and then explain why they will pick your work rather than theirs. What makes your work better? For example, if we were doing this for Static Shock, we might write something like “As a regular nerdy student, the protagonist of Static Shock has a similar audience appeal to Spiderman. However, my series will be able to appeal to minority readers because Static Shock is black and deals with issues like racism.” Just come up with something that makes it sound plausible that a few thousand readers a month will pull your series off the shelf.
    
    If you’re submitting a standalone, then I’d go back to your ending and make sure that the character accomplishes enough to leave the reader satisfied but leaves enough open that an editor might think “we could do an issue about that.” For example, if the hero’s main goal is getting revenge against a thug that just killed his family or whatever, he might do so but discover that the problem is actually a lot bigger than just a single thug. If you’re submitting a standalone, the synopsis probably shouldn’t be longer than a page.
    
    Fourth. Check your script again. Is it really as stylish and smooth as you can possibly make it? The publishing company will probably reject the entire proposal unless they really like the first issue, so it’s critical that issue 1 hits whatever notes you’re going for (hilarity, intense action, suspense, wit, engrossing romance, etc). Also, make sure that it’s easy to follow and uses as little exposition as possible. (For example, rather than the narrator telling us the story is set in PARIS, FRANCE, you could show the characters doing something with the Eiffel Tower or Arc de Triomphe in the background).
    
    Fifth. Check out the submission requirements for the publishers you’re interested in. Make sure you meet any additional requirements, obviously. For example, Image requires five fully colored pages but Dark Horse does not. (Every publisher appreciates colored pages, though; if the pages are good, they will instantly make your proposal more professional, feasible and fleshed-out). If you plan to do art before submission, you have to line up at least an inker and a colorer at this point. These have to be the artists that you will use for the series– the sample art is no good if it will not actually look like the comic book you will actually produce.
    
    Sixth. Read through all of your materials again and make sure that they are coherent and persuasive. Why will thousands of readers want to buy this? Remember, show-don’t-tell. It is not good enough to say “they will want to buy this because it is an exciting thriller about a relatable protagonist.” Your opinion does not matter to the editor. It is much, much more effective to give the editor the evidence so that he can decide on his own. For example, “Dead on Arrival is about a poisoned high schooler who has two days to solve his own murder,” etc. It’s easy to see why that would be exciting and why high schoolers would want to read about this protagonist.
    
    Seventh. Once you’re sure you have everything, submit to publishers. You’ll be waiting for a while, so in the meantime I would recommend writing out your next issue.
    
    Eighth. Best case scenario: the publisher says yes. Next best case scenario: the publisher gives you a list of changes it would like to see and asks you to resubmit as soon as possible. Next best scenario: a personalized rejection letter. (This shows that the editor liked your submission more than most of the other rejects). Most likely scenario: form rejection letter or silent rejection. Unless you get accepted, revise your story and keep submitting until you get accepted. This will probably take months or years.
    
    Ninth. Once you are accepted, get your book out. (Your editor will lay out what he wants to see and when, so that’s a big help).
    
    Tenth. If the sales on your standalone impressed the publisher, they might ask for more issues at some point in the future. If you started with an arc and they’re impressed with the sales, they might ask for another arc or maybe even offer an ongoing series. But, yeah, the sales are really important. If you have them, you can take it from a single issue to a gradually expanding series (and maybe even a true universe someday). If sales are bad, the publisher will probably let it end as scheduled. If sales are REALLY bad on an arc, the publisher might pull the plug before all of the issues have been released.
    
    If the sales are really, really good, you might be able to make a cartoon out of it someday. I wouldn’t get your hopes up, though; there are extremely few superhero cartoons that aren’t licensed by DC or Marvel… if working on a superhero cartoon is what you want to do more than anything else, I suspect it would be best to work for either.
    
    As I noted above, I think comic books (or novels, for that matter) are most feasible. Comic books and novels are fairly cheap to produce. Releasing a first novel might cost a publisher tens of thousands of dollars (the author’s advance, the cost of printing and distributing a few thousand copies, editors, any promotions, etc). Comic books are probably somewhat more expensive. If we’re talking about an arc of series, I imagine we’d be somewhere in the low six figures. I’m pretty sure that a cartoon would be vastly more expensive than that. I’m trying to remember the figure cartoonist Harry Partridge (the guy that did Saturday Morning Watchmen) quoted me, but I think it was $10,000 for a 90 second cartoon clip. EVERY EPISODE is 20-22 minutes long. If you’ve ever looked through the credits on a cartoon show, just count how many people are involved in the production. I find it hard to imagine that you could get a cartoon show out for less than a million. This raises huge obstacles for an unproven, young writer. What 50 year-old studio executive wants to bet millions of dollars (and probably his job) on a 20 year old? Hell, he wouldn’t even bet millions of dollars on a well-established B-list series like Hellboy. It’s a lot safer to go with another iteration of a series that has demonstrated appeal to young viewers (Superman/Batman/Justice League and Spiderman/X-Men, mostly).

97. # B. Macon 13 Nov 2009 at 8:32 pm

    Hmm. Screenwriting is definitely not my forte, so take this with a huge chunk of salt. Generally, I’d recommend submitting a sample that’s as close to the end product as possible. If they’re evaluating a 20-22 minute show, I’d recommend giving them a sample script that’s 20-22 minutes long. Is it common for cartoons to do an hour-long pilot? (Well, Justice League started out with three sequential episodes, but they aired separately).
    
    I suspect that they would not require you to have the scripts for all of the episodes in season one ready when you make your pitch. Perhaps Tom could help you more about the particulars; he’s making a run at getting a superhero cartoon on the air and sometimes I can sort of conceivably imagine him pulling off something that feels so batshit impossible to me. (Don’t take that as a judgment on your talent, though–convincing a businessman to bet millions of dollars would be prohibitively difficult for anyone).
    
    If TV writing is really your thing, I think it’d be more feasible to work your way up the ladder by writing for a show currently on the air or taking a position at a studio and networking like crazy. I’m struggling to come up with the name, but I vaguely remember reading about a 20-something Marvel writer that worked his way up through its studio and writes for Ironman now.

98. # bretton 14 Nov 2009 at 4:41 am

    I’ve got a question– I’m concerned with putting too many heroes and villains into my story because of the trap my favorite show, Heroes, fell into. B. Mac, what would you recommend?

99. # B. Macon 14 Nov 2009 at 12:24 pm

    “I can’t see the story being longer than 200 pages. Is that bad?” Well, it depends on your target audience. 200 pages is probably around 50,000 words, which sounds workable for a young adult novel. (Note: publishers count words, not pages– the amount of words per page varies based on type settings). If you’re looking at readers older than 16, I wouldn’t recommend submitting with less than 65,000 words. But you need to write more than you end up submitting; it will be very difficult to pull off a rewrite without having the flexibility to cut out sections that aren’t working as well as the rest.
    
    If you’re having trouble making 65,000 words, I’d recommend checking out How to Beat Writer’s Block Parts One and Two.

100. # B. Macon 14 Nov 2009 at 1:45 pm

     “I’ve got a question– I’m concerned with putting too many heroes and villains into my story because of the trap my favorite show, Heroes, fell into. B. Mac, what would you recommend?”
     
     Don’t lose track of what’s important. I think that the Invincible comic book series successfully pulled off a large cast because it had a main character and didn’t try to keep working the same characters into the plot. For example, I think Heroes had a lot of trouble after the first season because the writers couldn’t bring themselves to admit that Syler never really had a plausible role after that. (Spoiler) He really should have died in the final episode of season 1. After that, they tried an increasingly convoluted series of idiot plots to keep him around even though there is no remotely sane reason ANYONE would trust him for a moment. (For example, the Company put him in a minimum security prison at the beginning of season 2, made him an agent later, Denko not only made him a cop but let one of his own men get killed in his place, and Matt Parkman decided not to execute Sylar to let Mrs. Petrelli keep a son). Invincible did better because there was a single recurring plot– Invincible maturing and trying to stop the conquest of Earth by alien forces– and worked in the side-cast in a natural and fluid way. This means that you may have to let side-characters go when they are no longer useful to the plot. Not a problem.
     
     In novels, I really like how the Wild Card novels handled a big cast. They didn’t have a main character. It wasn’t even centered on a single team (unlike, say, the Avengers). One of the reasons that I feel this was effective for Wild Cards was that the first novel is set up as a string of mostly self-contained short stories. For the most part, the reader doesn’t have to remember the characters that showed up 20 or 40 pages ago because they’re already out of the story. Although the characters don’t overlap much from one short story to the next, the plot events do.
     
     In general, though, I think it’s easier to keep the plot focused with a small number of main characters. Even if the characters have a fairly simple goal (like “kill the bad guy”), it will be difficult to try something like 7 main characters because it’s so hard to develop that many characters.
     
     Justice League successfully pulled off a large cast, but I think only because most of its main characters are already well-known and don’t require much introduction. Additionally, the Justice League TV show tended to focus on just a few heroes in any particular episode. This is similar to Wild Cards’ setup.
     
     …
     
     Also, villains. If you’re writing a novel, I’d recommend having only one main villain. Trying more than one is very dangerous because it’s easy to end up with an incoherent mess of a plot. For the purposes of plot coherence, it would probably be best if the other villains were subordinates/henchmen/lieutenants of the main villain.

101. # PaintedSainton 07 Dec 2009 at 10:23 am

     Stereotypically-wise, characters who are lazy and won’t act without bribery are usually forgiven if they are above and beyond competent. Characters who are weak or have difficulty with controlling with their power are usually nice guys if they happen to be the protagonist. However, from what I know, characters who are whiny, lazy, and altogether incompetent are generally hated by the

     But I have the same request as Ragged Boy, can you please give more clarification on your main character’s abilities and the reasoning behind it? I am rather confused.

102. # God of Comedyon 09 Dec 2009 at 1:37 pm

     My Inconvenient Life

     The story revolves around the everyday life of Michael Williams, who is a jobless, 18-year-old teen. Michael is usually surrounded by a collection of crazy characters that, in his point of view, act as if they dislike him. He struggles to live a normal life because he is often caught into events that are often set in motion by events, ranging from the fairly typical to the supernatural and extraordinary, which frequently happens upon him.

     Michael is often delusional and most of the time, is controlled by his own imagination. He tends to make jokes every time he feels uncomfortable; this acts as a defense mechanism. He is often confused by the contradictory and hypocritical behavior of many people; they mysteriously turn like this when Michael is caught in another adventure. Michael does have powers; he can create things from nothing, warp reality, and shape shifting.

103. # B. Macon 09 Dec 2009 at 3:58 pm

     “The story revolves around the everyday life of Michael Williams, who is a jobless, 18-year-old teen.” That sounds like an autobiography I wrote once.
     
     Anyway, I think this sounded promising until the last sentence or so. First, I think that the powers are pretty out-there. I’d recommend going for powers that are a bit more down to Earth– it might keep him and the story more relatable. Second, umm, what’s the plot? If I had to guess, it sounds like “A string of random things happens to a character.” That’s probably not much of a story. A central goal and antagonist may help give focus. Third, why is Michael the protagonist? Is there any reason HE gets embroiled in all these random adventures rather than somebody else? Luck/contrivance is usually an unsatisfying explanation for events in a story…
     
     Finally, what’s the event that kicks the story into motion?

104. # PaintedSainton 09 Dec 2009 at 10:22 pm

     God of Comedy:

     So, this is one of those “Only Sane Man” stories? Ok, so he can warp reality and shapeshift, but what about these ‘crazy characters’ around him? If he’s so ordinary, why are these crazy characters attracted to him or want to wreak havoc on his life? Usually I think that pleasantly normal characters that are repeatedly put into crazy situations work well as a gag, but gets stale quickly, because by the end of the story segment, the normal characters wants to undo all of the damage and makes things go back to normal.

     I will be shameful and use Timmy from Fairly Odd Parents as an example. Though the plot is meant to be episodic, Timmy repeatedly wishing “I want everything to go back to normal!” is annoying at the end of every episode. He abuses the reset button over and over and doesn’t gain anything from the original wish. Everything’s back to normal, what was the whole point of the conflict?

105. # Luna Jamniaon 26 Dec 2009 at 9:26 pm

     What about a fifteen year old kid who has sort of what the alien boy from ‘Race To Witch Mountain’ has?
     I got the idea while we were driving home from a party. (this topic isn’t about plots so I’ll leave it at that).
     Thing is, I need help with the particulars. I was thinking his ability is like his skin turns into Superman’s, kind of, or like metal or something. … this isn’t helping I know. Let me try again.
     When he’s about to impact something (like go through a windshield and hit the pavement) his skin becomes like rock, so that he doesn’t get a gazillion cuts or break his neck. But then wouldn’t his bones have to be hard too?
     -Would whatever he hit just react normally and he’d get a little jarred but otherwise be fine; or would the ground give?
     -What if he punched something, would it simply not hurt him, how would it affect whatever he punched?
     -What if he jumped off a building?
     -Would he be heavier?
     -Should there be any visible difference when his skin turns all metal-ish or rock or whatever, or should it just look normal and nobody can tell the difference except for the fact he’s not injured? Aaand …
     -is this a sort of gary stu power, what weaknesses could he have? (that is, if I’m turning this into a superhero story, I think I am but I’m not sure, I haven’t written anything superhero-ish in a long time. But maybe he should have weaknesses anyway, right?)

106. # B. Macon 27 Dec 2009 at 12:47 pm

     I’ve never seen Race to Witch Mountain.

     …

     I think that most of the questions you’ve asked are purely at your discretion. For example, if you wanted to, you could have his legs get tougher when he jumps off the building (allowing him to jump farther and faster). If he has REALLY powerful legs, he might cause some damage to the part of the roof he jumps from and the pavement where he lands (each reaction has an equal and opposite reaction). If his skin looks metallic when he gets hit, it’ll be much harder to keep it a secret. Maybe even implausible that he’d have kept it a secret, if it is.
     
     As long as you can come up with practical ways for his antagonists to defeat him, I think that he’s limited enough that we’d wonder if he could pull it off. It sounds like he’s more or less bulletproof, but I imagine that a 15 year old could be defeated if he’s not careful. Especially if he’s up against enhanced antagonists.
     
     …
     
     Scientifically speaking, the bones (and probably most of the body) would have to harden to survive being thrown from a car. (Watch a crash dummy test sometime and bear in mind that the character might be in combat when the crash happens rather than safely buckled in). But that’s a scientific detail that most readers probably wouldn’t care about. If you want to say that the skin only gets hard at the point of impact, I think that would work.

107. # Echoon 09 Jan 2010 at 7:38 am

     Hey,

     I’m starting to write a novel about someone (Adrieene) who hunts down people with superpowers – not entirely by choice. Than, due to some complicated situation that I haven’t entirely figured out yet, she is injected with a needle and given powers herelf, creating a small conflict of interests.

     Anyways, my question is this: Is darkness a good power to give her? I thought that it could have potential, but I don’t want to choose it just because it sounds cool.

     Any Ideas?

     –Echo–

108. # Ragged Boyon 09 Jan 2010 at 9:05 am

     I think the power of “Darkness” is a little too broad. I’d recommend coming up with a definitive list of abilities associated with her powers. When I think darkness the powers that come to mind are:

     - controlling shadows (including pulling them out of the ground to form objects and constructs.)

     - the ability to become a shadow or hide in existing shadows.

     - the ability to make a dark fog that can blocks out light.

     - the ability to make someone’s shadow into a sort of voodoo doll (whatever is done to the shadow is done to the person.)

     - converting shadows into energy for projectile attacks.

     I’m sure there’s more just use your creativity. As for fitting into your story, I suspect darkness powers could work well. I need to know more about the setting, though.

109. # Echoon 09 Jan 2010 at 10:24 am

     Ragged Boy,

     Thanks for the advice! Your right, I should have been more descriptive. What I was thinking was that she could hide in shadows, as well as be stronger in the dark – kind of “super senses,” I guess. I really like your voodoo doll idea – although completely controlling someone would be pretty hard to beat. Unless, of course, she couldn’t do it at night… and I guess she’d probably make a lot of enemys that way. And I could probably avoid the whole “emo” thing easier, which was what I was worried about the most.

     As for my setting… at this point, I pretty much have no idea. I was thinking of doing it in New York, but that seems a little difficult, seeing as I’ve never been there, and it seems to have it’s own culture/ lifestyle that I don’t think I could really pull off. For now, I’m leaning towards creating my own city.

     The atmosphere would probably have an underground feel. The general public doesn’t know about people with powers, and both sides are trying to keep it that way. I thought that that could maybe make some other obstacles – good idea?

110. # Ragged Boyon 09 Jan 2010 at 12:10 pm

     I think your atmosphere could work well with your character’s abilities. I like it. I’d recommend staying away from NYC as your setting it’s been done, and done, and done. I think a fictionalized city could work well. I know I’m using one, although, mine is heavily based after a real city (Los Angeles). As long as you can make it interesting I say go for it.

111. # Wingson 09 Jan 2010 at 12:43 pm

     Although one of my novels is set in the “real” world and some of the heroes reside in NYC, the main reason I did this was so that I could lampshade the crap out of it. In my other novel, I am also working with a fictional city, as the “universe” there is more akin to a Marvel-or-DC superhero world than the real one.

     To be fair, it depends on your story…If you’re sticking with the “real” world research is a lot more important. Fantasy and advanced science fiction elements might not mesh as well in a real-world setting. If it seems plausible enough (Milder science fiction elements and natural mutation based powers falling under “plausible”) it could probably be pulled off in a “real” world. More fantastic/magical elements seem like they would fit better in a fictional universe.

     In short, it could go either way.

     …I’m no help at all, am I?

     - Wings

112. # Seraph-Fireon 11 Jan 2010 at 6:56 am

     Hey guys…I’ve recently started working out a superhero story that involves a society in which superheroes start being cut down in a series of strange murders. Anyone that starts to become a successful vigilante is almost guaranteed to be killed soon after. As such, ten years later, a small group of people aim to find unsuccessful superheroes (who would not be targeted), and make them fully-fledged heroes, to inspire hope in a dull, lifeless world that has become too scared to stand up for others…

     The point of their powers is that they are not completely cut out for being full-on superheroes, but have high potential. The main group’s powers are:

     1: A sporty girl who can channel her chi (or bodily energy) into different parts of her body, like her fists (to deal shattering punches) or feet (to make large jumps and boost her speed). However, in the brief moment her chi is being chanelled somewhere, the rest of her body is VERY fragile. This, combined with her reckless nature, makes her vulnerable for serious injury.

     2: A boy who can shapeshift into his inner animal…in this case, a ferret. Good for evasion, agility and stealth, but not very offensive, and can make him vulnerable.

     3: A young man who can make air molecules vibrate so intensely, he can create shockwaves that explode from his body…however, he can only use his powers when in a state of rage. His anger, plus the severe headaches that come with his ability, make his powers almost impossible to direct or control…making him just as dangerous to allies as he is to enemies.

     4: A girl who’s parents had come into contact with alien spores during her conception. She is born covered in microscopic barbs that inject a paralyzing venom into anyone who touches her, much like a jellyfish. Her hair is particularly potent, but cannot be cut since it contains thousands of nerve endings (yes…she can feel pain through her hair). Although her venomous touch is good for disabling enemies, she cannot come into contact with allies, victims or civilians, and her poison can be lethal if accidentally applied to certain parts of the body.

     5: A young man who’s skin is made up of a hard, organic, clay-like substance, which can endure most blunt and sharp attacks, even bullets. It also gives him a certain degree of physical strength. However, like clay, he cannot get it too wet (or he goes soft, and therefore vulnerable) or too dry (or his skin solidifies and cracks apart).

     If I could get some feedback (and possible hero name ideas, if any come to mind) it would be very much appreciated.

     (Characters are still in development, but still owned by myself. Do not steal!!)

113. # Lighting Manon 11 Jan 2010 at 11:31 am

     I like the assortment of characters, personally, nice bit of variation on popular standard characters, and natural limitations are a plus. The plot sounds like a nice mixture of Mystery Men and Watchmen.

     Two concerns I would voice is the mixture of science fiction (Jelly Girl) and mystical (girl with the Chi power, and possibly the ferret one as well) tend to only exist beyond a compiled force from a widespread existing universe (Marvel’s Avengers and DC’s Justice League, for instance, typically, each character has existed for years or even decades before joining the team) and comedies / parodies (Mystery Men, Soon I Will Be Invincible) which, if your work is not, might send the wrong message.

     Another concern is, the girl afflicted by the spore’s predicament is extremely close to that of Rogue’s of the X-Men franchise, in case, you’re not aware, she has uncontrollable potentially fatal power-absorbing abilities that prevent her from engaging in any physical contact. it is entirely possible that the planned handling of the character is far different from that, but it is a competing angle that should be considered.

     As far as name suggestions, the only real suggestion I have would be considering incorporating the word Golem into the name of your clay person (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Golem) as it is a creature from Jewish folk lore, generally held to be animated clay.

114. # Seraph-Fireon 11 Jan 2010 at 2:08 pm

     Good advice all around, thanks very much! The Golem aspect is something I hadn’t thought of, but it fits perfectly with the character. I hope you don’t mind if I use that.

     As for the mystical/sci-fi mix, I was really going for an all-round superhero-themed story…many stories do fix around a core concept that results in superhuma characters (genetic experimentation, mutation, magical effects etc), but I wanted to create a world in which the superhero origins would vary greatly…indicating that heroes are still being born, by various means, just a lot fewer of them have turned to vigilanteism. But I see your point. I’ll have to see what others think of the mix.

     Also, I created my jellyfish-girl-character more over my interest in jellyfish than my interest in creating an ‘untouchable’ character, but I was aware of her resulting similarities with Rogue. As such, I’m planning on making it an important point that the girl in question is completely asexual, and thus not as likely to be concerned about wanting physical contact. In fact, others tend to be confused as to why she seems realtively unbothered about her predicament.

     She develops a close friendship with my clay person (who is immune to her touch), but as a character, she has few qualms concerning physical contact. Instead, the main focus on her character is more about where the spores came from, why they affected her…and more worryingly, if she might be a host for producing more of them. Her inability to touch others is obviously a problem at times, but it takes a back seat in her character development.

115. # Bretton 20 Jan 2010 at 8:50 pm

     B. Mac, I’ve gotta ask you something. Realistically, is there even a remote chance that an agent or publisher would look at any new superhero story since there’s so much out there?
     I know I’m sounding negative but it’s just I’m worried, you know what I mean?
     I know it’s still a long shot but does the fact that it’s a superhero put me or anybody else at a disadvantage
     Again, not trying to discourage but for me personally I’d like that there’s some chance.

116. # Ghoston 20 Jan 2010 at 9:17 pm

     B. Mac, I’m interested in hearing your response to Brett’s question as well.

117. # Ragged Boyon 20 Jan 2010 at 9:57 pm

     Well, I’m not B. Mac, but I hope my input has some credibility.
     
     Uh yeah, I’m pretty sure publishers are still interested in superhero stories. Most obviously if that publisher focuses on superhero stories. But even so, I don’t even feel that one is at a disadvantage for wanting to make a superhero story. What counts is the writing, talent, and originality. How many fantasy stories with elves and magic are there? Or sci-fi stories with a psycho alien parasite that takes over human bodies? Tons of them. And they continue to make them even if the genre has been there and done that. Why? Different writers can bring new and interesting things to the table to keep it interesting.
     
     I suspect that if your idea is relatively fresh, your style is unique, and writing capability is publishable that you can get an agent or publisher interested in your work. I don’t see any reason in particular reason they would turn you down. I doubt they’d say “Oh, a superhero story!” and toss it in the trash. Unless the market for superhero stories is destined failure or a well-known minefield, I think you have a shot at getting published. What you should focus on now is improving your writing ability. Getting published is a step that comes much, much later (About a year if you’re just starting the first draft of the manuscript).
     
     Hope this helps!

118. # B. Macon 20 Jan 2010 at 10:22 pm

     Ragged Boy said: “Well, I’m not B. Mac, but I hope my input has some credibility. ”

     Well, I am B. Mac, but credibility is really not my thing. If you want credibility, I’d recommend talking to someone who isn’t named after a burger.
     
     “B. Mac, I’ve gotta ask you something. Realistically is there even a remote chance that an agent or publisher would look at any new superhero story since there’s so much out there?” There have been a few superhero novels that have sold pretty well (e.g. the Wild Card series and Amazing Adventures of Kavalier & Clay). Publishers will put out whatever they think is most likely to sell.
     
     But how can you get YOUR superhero story to stand out? Differentiate Your Writing Or Else. If your story feels like a thin knockoff of a popular franchise, it’s probably dead on arrival. The publisher has to feel that your book will add something to what is currently available. For example, there have been many superhero comedies, but I bet that my office comedy about a taxman-turned-sidekick will feel fresh.
     
     So here are a few questions that may help you distinguish your work.
     
     –How is your hero different from other heroes on the market? What sort of interesting traits does he have?
     
     –How is your writing style different from other authors handling similar material? For example, Avatar and District 9 are both sci-fi movies about (SPOILER) a human turning into an alien (/SPOILER) but they handle the experience in a totally different way. In D9, the protagonist’s change causes him to lose something: his wife, his job, his freedom, his innocence, etc. In Avatar, the protagonist gains something: a wife, full use of his legs, social acceptance, the disgust of any Marines in the audience, etc. The plot is similar (a guy turns into an alien and has to deal with the obstacles that follow), but it all depends on which details you use to tell which story.
     
     –What do you bring to the table that other authors don’t? For example, when you’re submitting to publishers, it’ll help if you’ve amassed an audience through your day job or your blog. Excellent grammar and spelling (or money to pay for proofreaders) are pretty much required. What sort of unusual and interesting experiences do you have? Do you have any technical skills that will help you write and market the book? (For example, web coding… professional-grade artistic skills… salesmanship… networking skills, etc).
     
     Finally, the last thing I’ll say is that you can’t let yourself get discouraged. Getting published is like pounding your head on a prison wall until you can get loose. There is no way to know how close you are to freedom. Just take it on faith that you’ll get better and better as long as you work at your writing. It will probably take years to get published; I’ve been a paid writer for three years and am still probably several months away from getting published. UPDATE: I wrote this comment originally in January 2010 and believed that it would be several months before publication. In actuality, it was about a year.

119. # Bretton 21 Jan 2010 at 5:32 pm

     Thanks B.mac sorry for the downer. I think ‘m comfortable enough to share my premise with everyone now.
     Being that I have a disability. I figured I am in the perfect position to create a disabled superhero and write it from a true and honest perspective. Writers can do all the research they want, but they’ll never get something like that exactly right unless they’ve been. Please don’t think that I’m going to be catering to only people with disabilities because I most certainly am not. he’s just a run of the mill teen who happens to have a disability. There are two different sets of powers of planning i can’t decide on which one. the first is superstrength,flight, and the ability to sense other people with powers near by. In this version, he senses one of the villians henchmen and ends up falling down so he doesn’t have very good balance the ability to sense others’ powers makes him dizzy. so the main ‘baddie’ and the henchmen kidnap him and he gets rescued by another group of heroes although only three of them have powers, and the rest of them are just regular people helping them. The heroes train him and Brett fights the main baddie at the end of the story. now hears the fun part. the main baddie goes to school with Brett and he happens to be disabled as well. the book alternates between their two perspectives. obviously, a lot more goes on that i haven’t talked about what do you think?

120. # Bretton 21 Jan 2010 at 5:51 pm

     aw man i didn’t see you mention avatar but there are literally HUNDREDS of disabled characters in scifi. cameron shyed away from the disability because his mind was transfered into the avatar and he could as u said. im not gonna lie, i’ve been working on this story for almost seven years and i found out about Avatar in september 2008. but the more i researched the more i realized the only things i had in common with the story was that both characters are disabled and the disabilities are totally different. we’re going see my character perservere in spite of disability. its the constant elephant in the room

121. # B. Macon 21 Jan 2010 at 6:36 pm

     Hmm. I think a story about disabled characters could work. If Hero (a novel about a gay superhero) could become a bestseller based on what I imagine to be a fairly niche audience, a publisher could probably pick up a disabled superhero if he’s really well-written.
     
     Professor X and Oracle/Barbara Gordon (UPDATE: and the protagonist of Avatar) use wheelchairs, so I think readers will feel pretty comfortable with a physical disability. Now, I notice you didn’t specify whether it was a physical disability, but a mental disability could also work (although it’d probably be trickier). I’m not familiar with such superheroes, but Flowers for Algernon and The Curious Incident of the Dog in the Night-Time sold quite a lot of copies despite using a mentally retarded protagonist and an autistic protagonist, respectively.
     
     So… let’s talk about your character.
     
     –What sort of traits does he have going on besides the disability?
     –Does he have any flaws NOT related to the disability? (One potential problem with using disabled characters that the author may use a disability to make a character unaccountable for his flaws– I’d recommend giving him at least one flaw that is definitely his fault rather than beyond his control).
     –How does his disability affect his work as a superhero?
     –An agent or editor would probably want to know something about whether the character can connect with your readers. Who’s your target audience and why will they want to read about him?
     –I notice that it sounds like the character is named Brett, which is also the pen-name you’re using here. Will you be able to maintain adequate authorial distance between you and your character?
     –Is he dealing with a disability similar to yours? If so, that’s something that might raise huge red flags for a literary professional about whether the character is a Mary Sue stand-in for the author.
     
     …
     
     I really like the twist that the villain is also disabled. I was sort of worried that he’d be a 2-D guy that hated on disabled people, maybe Nazi-style. It’s far more interesting that he himself is disabled.

122. # ForsAkenon 05 Feb 2010 at 4:24 pm

     I am helping one of my friends with his story, and he has asked me to supply him with a character. I named the Character Theireq, he has a laid back personality, he values friendship a lot, he would always try to do what is right instead of whats popular though. I need help with a power though. I was thinking on giving him a charisma or some sort of power that has to do with water. If anyone has ideas please let me know. Oh and his story is fantasy, and there is really no specific time period.

123. # B. Macon 05 Feb 2010 at 5:58 pm

     I think water control would work. It lends itself well to interesting fight scenes and is versatile and easy to understand.
     
     I’m not so sure about charisma. I think that having the power to persuade people to do things they wouldn’t otherwise do would be significantly less interesting than reading about a character who persuades people without superpowers. Not having the power will force you to work harder to make him show how good his skills are, rather than just using a superpower.
     
     I’d recommend rounding out his personality more with a flaw. Right now, he sounds like a mostly generically nice guy. I’d recommend playing up these personality traits so much that they might conceivably get him into trouble– maybe he’s so laid-back that he treats people far more casually or nonchalantly than he should. Maybe he doesn’t care about what’s happening as much as he should. Maybe he values friendship too much and sometimes makes unreasonable (or unethical) requests of his friends. Maybe he gets into trouble because doing what he thinks is right is a hell of a lot harder (and/or dumber) than going with the flow would have been.

124. # ForsAkenon 05 Feb 2010 at 6:28 pm

     Well I was thinking about the villian he will be pinned against in the story, and the Villain has the power to use someones power against them. So i was thinking that a charisma power would help him along some lines.

     There is also multiple enemies and many heroes in this story so far. So a charisma power wouldnt be making it to less intresting.

     I was also working on his background ealier, and if i give him a power like water, it will be more of a ice power.

125. # Anonymouson 07 Feb 2010 at 9:35 am

     Hey, I’m just curious about this- how well does shapeshifting work out for a character? You don’t see a lot of it, (well, I don’t) and I’m just wondering what the pitfalls might be and what the advantages might be. I don’t read much superhero fiction, but off the top of my head, the only characters I can think of that are capable of transformation are Mystique and Beastboy.

126. # B. Macon 07 Feb 2010 at 10:21 am

     Myriad (Dynamo Five) and the Martian Manhunter come to mind as well.
     
     I think shapeshifting is a bit better suited for a support character. The character would have a lot of options for sneaking and infiltration, but probably wouldn’t be too interesting in combat. Even if the character can turn into animals, there are only so many ways to show a dinosaur/tiger/wallaby slamming someone. If your series is mature enough to use blood, you may be able to add variety with maulings–if your series isn’t that mature, you could have him show off the claws/teeth on insentient enemies.
     
     Also, one useful aspect is that the shapeshifter would have a lot of opportunities to run off on his own. If the combat scenes ever got too unwieldy because too many characters were involved, it’d be easy to give him something else to do elsewhere. For example, while everybody else is fighting, maybe he’s looking for an important plot item.
     
     …
     
     If the shapeshifter is a lone character, I’d recommend giving him another power to make the fights more interesting. (Sort of like the Martian Manhunter, although he’s better-known for his work on the Justice League than his own comic).
     
     I don’t think it lends itself particularly well to interesting fight scenes.
     
     …
     
     I think that the ability to transform into other humans requires that the author have a strong grasp on character voicing. If you have many characters that sound very different, it’ll be fun to read the shapeshifter try to emulate their manners of speech. If the characters don’t have distinct voices, having a shapeshifter will draw attention to the fact that all of them sound alike.

127. # Kolbyon 19 Feb 2010 at 1:24 pm

     im trying to write a comic book at the ae of 14 and i need to come up with a superpower thats Orignal and i cant think of anything

128. # B. Macon 19 Feb 2010 at 1:42 pm

     I don’t think that the originality of the powers matters much. In almost every case, there will be previously published heroes/villains that share your character’s powers. That’s usually not a problem for publishers, as long as you put some thought into the character’s voice, personality, style, goals, problems, obstacles, etc.
     
     I’d recommend focusing less on whether your powers are unique than on whether they give you the ability to tell an interesting story.
     
     For example, right now I’m working on a nightsight-themed criminal. I that it will give me opportunities to mix things up for the heroes by cutting the power supply to the building.
     
     …
     
     Good luck getting published! If I could make a suggestion that would have helped me at 14, I think that it would have helped me to work on proofreading skills and practice writing as much as possible.

129. # Montyon 20 Feb 2010 at 10:29 am

     I want to give my superhero the ability to mentally controll gravity, but I do not know what all he would be able to do with that ability. Can you give me any ideas on how to showcase his powers?

130. # MOODYon 27 Feb 2010 at 7:21 am

     To Monty:

     Gravity can be used as following:

     1-It can move/fly objects
     2-bind other people
     3-make protection fields

     By emitting gravity from body you can:

     1-get people nearer or farer
     2-use it in offense
     3-expose objects/people to pressure

131. # B. Macon 27 Feb 2010 at 12:57 pm

     One of the minor antagonists on Static Shock used gravity control, or something like it, to try crushing people.
     
     In practice, I think that gravity control will probably be very similar to telekinesis. (The only difference I can think of is that many telekinetics cannot or do not use their powers to fly or levitate). I suppose one difference between TK and gravity control might be that gravity control is less useful at manipulating small objects in precise ways? A telekinetic or magnetic guy might be able to fight someone off with psychically controlled weaponry, but my guess is that the ability to control gravity wouldn’t give that sort of precision. (Or maybe it does. Your story is yours, obviously).
     
     PS: I’m sorry to hear about the laptop, RB.

132. # Auxilaryon 02 Mar 2010 at 5:40 pm

     I’ve been having trouble creating new characters whenever I make another story. Could you guys offer some constuctive criticism? I was given a few names from my cousin, Mysticgust because he discarded them:

     Joshua: Has the ability to become animal-like when in danger or in a fight. When he goes “animal” he is only operating on instincts and is completly ruthless. His senses become elavated to animal levels.

     Wayne : Ability to draw people to him emotionally and physically and want to protect and help him. Only works on a few people at a time.

     Brooke: Ability to shut off powers that affect peoples minds. It tires her out very qiuckly so that she is constantly sleepy and her power shuts off after several minutes. She usually uses her gift in bursts.

     Zack: ability to sense powers and weaknesses in others. Can cause people to not notice him for breif periods of time. ( He must move slowly while being ” unnoticed”)

133. # Ghoston 03 Mar 2010 at 8:08 pm

     Auxilary,
     First off, I think that Wanye’s powes is to passive. It doesn’t really “do” anything. Remember you want your heroes to be doing the actions in the story, so that means you want their powers to doing things also. Wanye’s power could be problematic, because he won’t be the one doing anything. Other people will be doing it for him. I suggest you give him mind control or something along those lines.
     I would also recommend giving Brooke Zack’s first power. It makes sense to me that if Brooke can turn other people’s powers off that she would be able to sense their weaknesses as well.
     For Zack, I think that his “unnoticability”(is that even a word and if so did I spell it correctly) could work well. From your description, I imagine his powers as something like being mentally invisible to people as oppose to him actually turn invisible. Almost like him using a hypnotic suggestion to make people not notice him.
     I like Joshua’s power, but your description is a little unclear to me. Does Joshua change at will like a Lycan from underworld? Or is he like to hulk and he can only change when he is angry. I think that his powers could work either way.
     By the way, what are your character’s origin stories?

134. # Miss Mynaon 06 Mar 2010 at 8:53 am

     I always thought a cute power for a bookworm would have some sort of paper-kinesis… I’ve seen it a lot in anime where characters could control paper and wood and ended up telekinetically creating an origami army or something. It’s really cool. <3

135. # B. Macon 06 Mar 2010 at 9:23 am

     Also, the librarian protagonist of Read or Die! has paper-kinesis. It’s surprisingly versatile. I haven’t seen any origami armies yet, but she has escaped a crashing helicopter by making a hang-glider out of paper, which possibly the most intense action sequence I’ve seen in a cartoon.

136. # Wingson 06 Mar 2010 at 1:13 pm

     Oddly enough, there was originally an end scene in HTSTW (This was the time before the sequels) designed to foreshadow the existence of superhumans other than the Specials, that mentioned a little girl making origami birds fly around her.

     I might bring her back in the maybe-sequel to Darkstar Rising or the Third Book, just because of the sheer awesome of an origami army.

     - Wings

137. # Miss Mynaon 07 Mar 2010 at 10:56 am

     Yeah… I have a bookworm character and I’m tempted to give him that power, though that’s probably anvilicious…

     Maybe give it to his brother? HE doesn’t read at all. XD

138. # Ragged Boyon 07 Mar 2010 at 12:23 pm

     Hello, Auxilary

     Here’s my input on you team.

     - First off, if this is a team I don’t think your powers are configured well enough. I believe there too much focus on support powers. As off now you only have two characters that could feasibly do combat. Also, Wayne’s powers are situational so that makes one all-time combatant, a part-time combatant, and two support members. I’d recommend reconfiguring their powers to make them a stronger team. A personal rule of mine is that each character should be capable of at least one type of combat.

     - Joshua’s powers are a bit vague. There are over 1 million animal species in the world and I’m hoping he’s not like each one. I’d recommend narrowing it down to one type of animal. Big cats, monkeys, reptiles, etc. I think cats are a bit generic, but a monkey warrior would be pretty sick if pulled off well.

     - I’d recommend going all the way with Wayne’s powers and give him empathy. Empathy encompassed what you said and makes his powers a little more whole. Also, to make him a bit more active I’d recommend givig him psychically produced weaponry. I think the combination would make him solid in and out of battle.

     - Brooke’s powers are a bit negative-heavy. They don’t apply to everyone, can only be used in bursts, and make her tired easily. I don’t know your setting so I’m not sure if her powers are effective or not. I want to recommend giving her a new power altogether. In my opinion, she seems a bit like an easy target with no offensive ability and a defensive powers that only works a percentage of the time.

     - I’d summarize Zack’s powers as detection. He can detect others powers and weaknesses and become indetectable. All in all, I thik his powers work out. You may mant to tweak him a little for combat effectiveness.

     - As a side note, I also recommend cleaning up your writing mechanics. I noticed a few grammar mistakes when editing your comment.

     What do you think? Hope this helps.

139. # auxilaryon 10 Mar 2010 at 6:00 pm

     This is very helpful , i have a few changes on the characters.
     I was thinking Brookes power might have been too powerful when i was creating her so i limited her severly. So after your comments I think I might alter her powers some. She could shut off all powers that invole anyones mind ( like telekenesis, but not superstrength) And making her be able to draw peoples energy slightly in combat to power her sheild. ( sleepy while not fighting). Okay in hand to hand combatants. I might limit her to knocking out everyones powers instead of only select people, but I might not.
     I think Zach’s ( zach not zack, misspelling above) power is okay. I’m not sure how to tweak his powers offensivly ( please help)
     Waynes power is basically having a few people, maybe one or two, become drawn emotionally to him for a short period of time. when they are drawn to him they want to protect him. Like wanting to help him to fight off someone/something. Ex. two gaurds helping him break into a jail ,while taking out other gaurds during it. (wayne wouldn’t be breaking into a jail anyway, but i pulled it off the top of my head) When the people come too (depending who they are) they could suddenly turn on him. The time it takes them to break free depends on their will strength. Okay at self defebse, well, good enough to protect himself until he either gains control of them or takes them out ( knock them uncounsious).
     After a while of thinking I thought that Joshua’s power would mainly be in the mind. He could have enhanced strength/ speed/ durability, but the main shift is in the mind. See, animals fight tooth and nail , completly ruthless tearing at throats and doing any thing to gain the upper hand. So maybe he could just, basically, become extreamly savage. Couple that with his other powers you would have a crazy strong, crazy fast, and crazy durable nearly sixfoot teenager, that wants nothing more than too tear your throat out. I was also thinking about adding a natural ability that would allow him to go on a “white run”, which would allow him to just go on instincts while trying to escape. Example, he could run up a wall for a few steps, then jump out in a flip typr thing, grab a bar swing up, stand on it then jump out of a second story window in like, half a second. change is voluntary unless he is attacked, kie an ambush, then its automatic.
     i will write their origin stories but i have to get off now. Thanks for any and all comments. I will help others who need assistance as well.

140. # Ragged Boyon 14 Mar 2010 at 1:57 am

     In addition to Wing’s excellent inquiries, I’d like to add:

     - What are the members of The Clan personalities like? An inveterate trait of new (or relatively new) writers is not enough focus on the person and more on their powers.

     - Is “the power to conflict death” the same as immortality? Be careful with immortal characters, if a character can die and come back whenever or never die it lowers the stakes and makes death mundane.

     - I’m not fond of names that reflect a character’s powers, it comes off as a bit cheesy. If you wanted to make the names reflect the powers I’d recommend being a little more creative than Shadien for a dark character or Seaaz for a water one.

     I think I’m going to need more information before I can decide to like it or not, not that my opinion is important or anything.

141. # Dark_Minionon 19 Mar 2010 at 7:00 pm

     I am having a little trouble with mixing espionage elements with superhero elements in my novel that i want to start. Any suggestions

142. # B. Macon 19 Mar 2010 at 9:37 pm

     Hello, Dark_Minion. This is probably going to sound counterintuitive, but I would recommend against using stealth-related superpowers like invisibility. I think it’d be significantly more interesting to see the hero try to, say, sneak past a guard than just go invisible and walk past him.
     
     If the hero will be sneaking in and out of heavily fortified facilities, I would recommend against teleportation and phasing. Forcing the character to come up with some alternate escape/entry plan would give you more opportunities to challenge the character, I think.
     
     If intrigue and/or paranoia are a significant part of the plot, I would recommend against mind-reading and lie-detection.

143. # Asayaon 19 Mar 2010 at 10:26 pm

     Yo Dark_Minion! If you don’t mind my commenting, psychometry is an interesting ability that would suit the espionage genre well enough.

     If you didn’t know psychometry, it is the ability to pick up information by touching an object.This special information generally gives info regarding who and what last touched that particular object in the past. Your character, for example, might be on some sort of recon mission were collecting intel on their surroundings is important. I remember there was a character in Heroes that had psychometric abilities.

144. # Asayaon 19 Mar 2010 at 10:33 pm

     Another interesting power to use might be remote viewing. This ability allows the viewer to visualize an area where they are not physically present. This usually comes in the form of visions. Your character could use this power to scope out restricted areas.
     In the case you think I’m making these up off the top of my head, I’m gonna post links to the site I found them on (Wikipedia actually).

145. # B. Macon 20 Mar 2010 at 12:10 am

     I think psychometry would be conducive to an interesting espionage story. For one thing, it requires the character to get in close to the object, which can be dangerous and dramatic.
     
     I think remote viewing might make the hero’s life too easy and safe. (People would much rather read about a spy than a spy satellite, right?) On the other hand, it might work a bit more smoothly for villains because it lets authors give the villains important information without getting bogged down in details about how they found it out.

146. # Bretton 26 Mar 2010 at 2:09 am

     So I sort of have a strange question. Has an unpublished author ever gotten an offer for their book and then for one reason or another, said no?

147. # Lighting Manon 26 Mar 2010 at 12:01 pm

     There’s actually an excellent film named Suspect Zero about while not technically superheroes, a vigilante using remote viewing in order to fight crime. It stars the man that would eventually play Harvey “Two-Face” Dent in the Dark Knight as a detective investigating what he believes to be a serial killer but is in fact a brutal government-created psychic vigilante. If the power interests you, I would suggest viewing it if you get the opportunity.

     I agree with B. Mac that psychometry definitely has a greater potential for drama, as it has the benefit of being an active instead of passive power, but it also has the negative requirement of essentially requiring magic. There’s an element of believability to remote viewing because generally whatever they would be viewing would have a person actively viewing it or in the room as it, but psychometry stretches that to requiring that there be psychic tethers on the object, attaching the object to the memory of whoever they would see, or psychic remnants leftover which allow essentially the same thing to occur. In a universe with limited superpowers, it might be a bit too much. Hellboy and Hellboy 2 both featured a character with the ability (Abe Sapien) but they also featured the titular character as a large red demon with hooves and a giant hand, and his girlfriend Liz, an accidental pyrokinetic, not to mention Seth McFarlane as ghost juice stuck in a metal suit and a giant squid-god that wanted to eat Metropolis and had to die by grenades.

148. # B. Macon 26 Mar 2010 at 12:59 pm

     I haven’t seen Suspect Zero, but some of the things I’ve read would give me pause about using remote viewing. The original version of the script was a mostly realistic police procedural. The remote viewing superpowers got added by the guy that wrote Volcano.
     
     “But psychic visions? For one thing, it removes any and all tension from the detective work in the film. In Penn’s script, Mack was a good detective, and he managed to piece together enough information to find O’Ryan. He’s a great profiler, and that makes him a worthy adversary for O’Ryan, the best profiler, even while gripped by madness. In this new draft, these mysterious faxes do all the legwork for Mack, rendering him inactive, and whatever blanks are left open are filled in by his psychic visions that begin to come more and more frequently, along with blinding headaches. And those visions… they keep him linked to O’Ryan, who the FBI says never existed. Because, you know… the FBI can just erase one of their own from existence. Happens all the time. All of a sudden, Quantico and a university and someone’s family and friends are all just convinced to not remember that someone exists. The way that Mack begins to track O’Ryan down in this new script is ludicrous, based on luck and magic. They weren’t content to just have one set of preposterous coincidences in the film. Instead, every new beat seems to be built on another coincidence.”
     
     Jonathan Last at Weekly Standard reached a similar conclusion.
     
     …
     
     To make remote viewing more interesting, perhaps you could use it as a way to give minor clues to start the search for information. I think it could be dramatic as foreshadowing. However, powers that keep the hero out of harm’s way may undermine the danger to the hero of getting in close.
     
     …
     
     Psychometry could be adapted for a more realistic story. If the idea of getting information by magically touching an object is too fantastical, you could give a character skills in forensic examination or crime scene investigation. A forensic examiner checks out a corpse and determines how the person died, when, whether the victim knew the attacker, etc. A criminal investigator would check a scene to determine how it all went down. (For example, a lack of signs of forced entry suggests that the assailant either had keys to the place or was let in). Similarly, a realistic story may be able to substitute satellites, aerial surveillance or binoculars for remote viewing.

149. # Dark_Minionon 26 Mar 2010 at 4:11 pm

     I had an idea that these superhumans work with the government to fight evil threats such as terrorists, evil corrupt corporations and other bad superhumans but when the goverment has no further use for them they would kill them. any suggestions.

150. # B. Macon 26 Mar 2010 at 6:26 pm

     Hey, Brett.
     
     “Has an unpublished author ever gotten an offer for their book and then for one reason or another, said no?”
     
     Stephenie Meier (Twilight), for example. Meier’s agent rejected a deal for $300,000 and was eventually offered a three-book deal for $750,000.
     
     Jim Munroe published his debut novel through HarperCollins and turned down their offer to publish his second novel. He ended up self-publishing it.
     
     Here are a few reasons that I think an author might pass on an offer…
     –The author (or the author’s agent) is very confident that better offers will come. (The agent usually knows more about the market for a work than the author does, so I would recommend deferring to the agent’s assessment). The agent has a strong financial incentive to get you a deal as quickly as possible. If your agent is urging you to decline an offer, he is very confident that a significantly better offer is coming.
     
     –The author is not confident about the book the publisher has in mind. . Maybe a publisher is willing to run with your story, but wants to move it in a direction you’re not comfortable with. For example, if a publisher offered to publish my book about an accountant-turned-superhero but wanted to do a more conventional sci-fi with supersoldiers instead of superheroes, I’d probably pass. I don’t have a strong grasp of military fiction.
     
     –The author and agent are not confident that this publisher can pull off this project. According to one editorial assistant, “it’s better to be unpublished than published in an inferior way.” In most cases, the editors that go for a particular book are enthusiastic about the genre and target audience. It couldn’t hurt to make sure. Has the editor worked with books like this before? Did they sell at least fairly well? Is this publisher/editor experienced with your target audience?
     
     –The author has political/cultural issues with the publisher. Jim Munroe cited Rupert Murdoch (the guy that owns HarperCollins, Fox News and several other media outlets) as one of the reasons he left HarperCollins. I’d only recommend making a decision based on this if you have some reason to think that the political/cultural issues would create major problems for your work. Realistically,a senior manager of a media empire won’t even glance at your project unless maybe you’re selling millions of copies or somehow attract major media attention and/or controversy (e.g. a Salman Rushdie situation).

151. # bretton 07 Apr 2010 at 1:58 am

     Would a writer stand just as much of a chance at getting a one-shot graphic novel published at image as he/she would a story arc?

152. # B. Macon 07 Apr 2010 at 2:56 am

     You’d probably have a better chance of getting the one-shot published.
     
     –It requires less financial commitment on the part of the publisher. For example, if your art team makes something like $120 a page, which I think is fairly low for a professionally-published comic, that comes out to $2900 per 24-page issue for artistic labor alone. After you factor in the writer(s), the editor(s), the printing costs, distribution and (possibly) promotions/marketing, each issue will probably cost the publisher tens of thousands of dollars.
     
     Publishers aren’t rolling in money and it’s easier to risk tens of thousands on a one-shot than maybe a hundred thousand dollars on a limited series. (And God help those unpublished authors proposing ongoing series). If the publisher is pleased by the quality and sales of the standalone, it will be receptive to adding on issues.
     
     –It’s much easier to pull off a one-shot without delays. For one thing, when you submit your one-shot, you’ll probably have it fully scripted. In contrast, you’d probably only have 1-2 issues of a series scripted at the time of submission. I think it’s wiser/safer for an inexperienced author to have his scripts ready at the onset of the project because scripting an issue is typically a tortuously slow process for rookies. (It gets faster as you practice).
     
     –If you’re doing a one-shot, it’s easier to avoid resolving very little and saving it all for the next issue. There may be a bit of downtime here and there, but generally I’d recommend a steady stream of plot resolutions. One way to do so is to work in intermediate goals–the heroes probably won’t defeat the main villain right away, but you can have them beat a henchman/lieutenant or acquire something significant or achieve something else while we wait for the final confrontation.

153. # bretton 07 Apr 2010 at 8:56 pm

     how long should a graphic novel be?

154. # B. Macon 07 Apr 2010 at 10:45 pm

     I think 168 pages is the average. My brief Google search mostly uncovered GNs in the 140-180 page range. I’m not sure if that includes ads or not, though.

155. # Talyaon 21 Apr 2010 at 11:26 pm

     My superhero is suppose to be the most powerful superhero among them all. But according to the plot, I limited his powers to the four original elements…is this a bad move?

156. # Ragged Boyon 22 Apr 2010 at 3:51 am

     Well, if your hero is meant to be the greatest superhero of them all you should think of other things besides his powers to give him an edge above the others. Maybe he’s an expert tactician? Is extremely cool under serious pressure? Is he willing to make sacrifices that most other heroes wouldn’t?

     I suppose your powers are okay. Being that I don’t know the range of powers you gave other heroes it’s hard to pinpoint whether or not the hero is overpowered. But it’s definitely a possiblility. Packing the four elements would make someone pretty tough.

     I have a few questions:

     - What about his personality makes him the best hero? What is his personality?

     - For reference, what are some other character’s abilities? Also, what was it that exempted them from greatness?

157. # Talyaon 22 Apr 2010 at 11:39 pm

     Well he is cool under preasure, and is a technician and all that. He is a warrior!

     As for the extent of his powers, I still haven’t decided yet, since he is not one that turns to his powers, or avoids situations where he may have to use his powers to their full extent I doubt I’ll have to in the near future.

     Well there is one who can change reality, another who can subdue the powers of others and even their energy; but then those two are sages rather than fighters.

     I haven’t gone to the extent with others yet I am still developing their powers, I just am afraid I might cross the line! Especially with one, who is like Peter Petrali

158. # Con-Elon 23 Apr 2010 at 6:47 am

     Hey guys. Does anyone have any suggestions on creating armored/robotic/tech based heroes and villains? I’m developing my universe and find it much easier to create characters that have superpowers and such. Any advice?

159. # Wingson 23 Apr 2010 at 9:36 am

     Con-El, where’s your universe set – a typical superhero world, a sci-fi world, or a futuristic world (Note: By sci-fi here, I’m differentiating that from futuristic by meaning a story not set on Earth)?

     I’m not great with such sorts of heroes, but I’ll do the best I can to help.

     - Wings

160. # Ragged Boyon 23 Apr 2010 at 1:32 pm

     Hello, Con-El!

     I guess my suggestions would be not to make all of your characters skills rely on their tech. I understand that this is there power, however, if a hero is useless without their suit or tech I’d recommend rethinking their skill parameters. For example, Tony Stark has the Iron Man suit, but outside of it he is great with machinery, a genius, excellent tactician, and a charmer.

     - Technological malfunctions or E.M.P’s would be great ways to force character’s to work without their gear.

     I’ll keep thinking…

161. # B. Macon 23 Apr 2010 at 2:14 pm

     RB said: “I guess my suggestions would be not to make all of your characters skills rely on their tech. I understand that this is their power; however, if a hero is useless without their suit or tech, I’d recommend rethinking their skill parameters.” I think that’s important for every superpowered character, actually. Give them something going on besides the powers. Particularly if they got their superpowers primarily by accident, luck, birth or something else outside of their control.
     
     One thing that bothers me is when a manuscript makes the character sound like a collection of powers rather than a person that happens to have powers. Powers are just a part of a character, and almost never the most interesting part. (Personality, traits, voice, etc).
     
     …
     
     With powersuited heroes specifically, I’d recommend occasionally forcing them into tough situations where they can’t just rely on the armor. What does your hero do when he’s caught in a situation where he isn’t wearing the suit? What does your hero do when he’s in a situation that isn’t well-suited to a powersuit at all? (For example, maybe his suit is a bit too clunky to handle something delicate like moving the Mona Lisa out of a dangerous position or defusing a bomb). Or maybe he’s in a situation where his suit is too lethal. For example, if armed juveniles are robbing a bank, shooting them would be unseemly. How does he subdue them without getting any bystanders hurt in the process?
     
     Also, I agree with RB that malfunctions and EMPs are effective ways to force the characters to improvise. Relatedly, you might be able to do something with computer viruses and/or hacking.

162. # Con-Elon 23 Apr 2010 at 7:03 pm

     Ok thanks guys. To answer your question Wings, the universe I am attempting to create is populated by various individuals with extra-human capabilities. Their are people who utilize advanced technology and/or powered armor, people who can manipulate magic and superpowered humans. The emergence of advanced tech, superpowered people and magic users all suddenly began to emerge about six months before my universe starts. An event no one can explain, but that everyone has been trying to find the truth behind, left hundreds of people superpowered or able to harness magic in the modern world. So yeah, the s*** is still hitting the fan but the people in power seem to have everything calmed down and stable.

     I plan to write three stories to introduce my future audience to my universe. These stories will prominately feature one of the three types of heroes in my universe. I’ve already got one story planned for the most part. I can’t decide whether to start planning one of the other two or stick with the other one for a while longer. I like to try and get everything in order before moving on, but I tend to try and force ideas when I get strung out on a project. So I’m having a little trouble but so what, that’s the writing process right?

163. # Wingson 23 Apr 2010 at 8:58 pm

     Off topic: You know, some times character traits that aren’t superpowers can be just as useful/more useful than the actual powers: For instance, on my character encyclopedia, I list “Charismatic” as a superpower for Shift just because he utilized it so well. As a human shapeshifter, he made the perfect infiltrator, but it was his acting/mimicry skills and ability to make people like him that made him excellent at spying.

     - Wings

164. # Koveon 23 Apr 2010 at 9:43 pm

     Hey guys,
     I’ve been troubled by a few things that I’m working on in my story and I’m hoping I can get some help/advice.
     My main character does seem a bit over-powered (check out my review forum) but I think he’s relatively weak as well. His power allows him to do a great number of things, but it is physically taxing and unless he prepares himself properly, he cannot use his powers at night. I think that’s one heck of a weakness. My question is this: What can I do to make him seem more human? I mean, he’s a teenager, with no skills or training whatsoever, and the only thing he really has going for him is his powers. Without them, he’s just a scared kid. His personality is well-rounded enough, but he doesn’t trust anyone and has a tendency to run from his problems instead of facing him down. How can I tell if these are going to be likable traits or not?
     My second question revolves around the use of super-strength as a power. One of my characters, named Truck, has super-strength and a form of body resistance that makes him quite resistant to most forms of damage. He is very young as well, and has had trouble adjusting to his abilities. He is a very likable character, and his power is a constant thing. What I’m hoping to get are some suggestions on how to put HIM in situations where he can’t use his powers or a situation where they would be completely useless. Hopefully you guys can help me out with that. Thanks a bunch

165. # Con-Elon 30 Apr 2010 at 6:25 am

     Hey guys, I’ve got a question. I’m currently attempting to develope this character with the ability to rewind time to a limited degree. I’ve always liked that power and so I’m attempting to put my onw personal stank on it if you will. My question is this, how for should he be able to rewind time?

     There was an episode of ‘The Batman’ called ‘Seconds’ in which a time-rewinder was fought. He could rewind time for only twenty seconds but it was enough to steal components in order to build a nerve gas bomb; defeat batman, Robin and Batgirl; and kill everyone in Gothom City with said nerve gas bomb. In the end however, he was somehow able to rewind time enough to prvent all of it from happening.

     I know one of the problems with time manipulaters is their ability to retcon stuff. But all I want this guy to do is rewind time for a short period. That’s all. I’m not gonna do anything that would let him go past his limit. So what do you guys think? What would an appropriate length of time be?

166. # B. Macon 30 Apr 2010 at 8:11 am

     I think the power sounds very interesting. Because the events are being changed almost at the same time they happened, I don’t think there will be retcon problems. (You’re undoing the events before they have the chance to gel in the readers’ minds). Also, it seems like an excellent way to build urgency with a ticking clock. Can the hero undo [Event X] in however many seconds/minutes?

     As for the time limit, I’d recommend keeping it short. Probably less than five minutes. It’ll make it harder for him to completely avoid dangerous situations with his powers.

     I haven’t seen the episode, but one thing you might consider is that the ability to rewind time is useless if the antagonist is such a better fighter than you that he will beat you each time. So, while the ability to rewind time may help give me the initiative against (say) a tiger that attacks me, even if I know he’s coming, what can I do about it? (However, if he kills or knocks me out before I have the chance to use the power, then I definitely wouldn’t have the initiative).

167. # shwow12on 02 May 2010 at 9:55 pm

     Hey everyone. i was hoping you guys could throw in your two cents.
     So I’m starting a new comic and i want my main character to have a more unique power (no super strength, speed or anything else like that) and i can’t really come up with a solid idea, i was hoping you guys might have some.
     Some powers i thought of are weight manipulation: he can change his own weight from a fraction of a pound to (insert really high number here).
     and i was also thinking about sonic scream.
     if you guys have any advice or ideas they’re much appreciated. thanks.

168. # Pon 03 May 2010 at 6:33 pm

     Here are a few interesting powers that come to mind:

     Foresight: Able to see a certain amount of time into the future. I made a character whose power was seeing 10 seconds into the future which allowed him to counter nearly any attacks his foes threw at him. If you feel it is appropriate, you could make his powers to see into the future even greater, but of course that normally leads to a lot of holes in a story

     Spines: Bones are stronger than people give them credit for. You can limit it to be related to Wolverines, though I strongly advise not too, or you can go extreme and make him a calcium behemoth, complete with spikes and natural bone armor.

     Sharkskin: One interesting character I had made was covered with near microscopic spines which enhanced his fists with one hundred tiny blades, allowed him to climb walls, and even gave him resistances to certain attacks. It’s like spines, but they are all a lot smaller.

     Limited Manipulation: You could have your character be able to manipulate certain items into weapons. Such as, he can turn an item into an explosive, but the item has to be a certain material, like wax, or cheese if you want to be ridiculous.

     Well, there’s a few things. By the way, your ideas of weight manipulation of sonic scream are not prevalent or overused, so they seem good to me. Anyway, these were just a few suggestions, I’m sure the others on this site can help you more than I did.

169. # Wingson 03 May 2010 at 8:15 pm

     Hmm…To add on to P’s statement, bone manipulation is definitely unique and unusual so long as you use it plausible. Agility’s kinda underrated as a power, so that could also make an interesting skill.

     If anything, take a well known power and reinvent it. For one of my characters, I combined the powers of mind reading and creating illusions to create the ability to “animate” the memories of others for a certain period of time.

     - Wings

170. # Ragged Boyon 03 May 2010 at 9:21 pm

     Here’s a few unique powers off the top of my head:

     Smoke Manipulation: This could also involve the character being able to become temporarily incorporeal. Common uses include gusts, smokescreens, illusions, environmental blending, etc.

     Minions: The character can summon up a team of little kickass helpers (I, personally, would’nt go over five helpers unless it was a major event). Each helper could perform a different action or they can team up for devastating and cunning tactics or both. For a limitation I would have the helpers linked directly to the hero’s body. If one is taken out it impacts the user.

     Black Knight: Any pain inflicted on the hero can be retained, strengthened, and fired at enemies (I imagine the pain in the form of a purple or crimson red lance). Of course, the pain does tax the user, but they would have a higher tolerance to pain given their ability. Pushed to the limit the character’s suicide or death causes a death wave.

     Full Body Control: Heavily taxing the user this would probably be a time-based power. For a period of time the user have complete control over their body and can morph and create things like claws, fur, wings, a tail, tentacles, spines, scales, sharp teeth, elongating limbs for harpoon attacks, etc. I imagined a character named Freakshow with this power.

     Additional Voice Capabilities: In addition with sonic screams (did you know that past a certain decibel limit you can deflect bullets?), you could add pitches that can overload the brain and knock them out and undo locks. Also, voice mimicry and sound mimcry would be great for tricking enemies.

     That’s all I got for now. Like any?

171. # Con-Elon 04 May 2010 at 6:34 pm

     Hey fellas, I got another question. I’m developing characters for a comic involving a supergroup and am having trouble powering one of them.

     What i’m thinking about using is the power of sublimation, the ability to turn into an incorpreal being of some kind of smoke/gas. So this is my question, how do you guys rate that ability. I mean is unique enough to use effectively? Is is powerful enough on it’s own? What do you guys think?

172. # Roon 04 May 2010 at 6:40 pm

     Whats good Con-El, I would like to know what abilities the other characters on the team have. But In my opinion I think that would work well for a spy or stealth based character. I think you could definitely make it work!

173. # Con-Elon 09 May 2010 at 4:42 pm

     Ok fellas, here’s a question. How can a comicbook universe developer get away with having superhumans, magic users, demon/angels, armored heroes/villains in the same universe, make it all seem normal enough to portray and NOT have it be compared to Marvel/DC like I imagine it will be. What do you guys think?

174. # B. Macon 09 May 2010 at 8:37 pm

     Introduce it all gradually, Con-El? For example, Dr. McNinja introduces a few ridiculous concepts in each issue (like banditos riding raptors or Ronald McDonald as the end boss or a gorilla as a receptionist or Dracula in space or time-travelling astronauts turned zombie-fighting mayors, etc).
     
     Also, I think Marvel and DC comics often skip or gloss over the part where the characters meet each other. Most independent stories take more time showing how the characters meet each other, how their relationships evolve, etc. I think it’s because Marvel/DC characters are usually better-known to the readers beforehand than independent characters are. (Also, I’d expect that an independent comic would spend more time introducing the character because you can’t assume that your readers know anything about Captain Awesome, whereas most Superman fans are at least pretty familiar with the character’s concept and major backstory).

175. # hopefulon 10 May 2010 at 2:37 pm

     First of all the snake-head is a fish, second, yes he can shoot water because he can turn into a monster. The fish state is the main power, the water shooting comes second.
     Thanks! Cortex is just the name I’ve been looking for.
     That last line sounds a little scarcastic. I’ll take that back if you can explane to me a plasuable way to explane Superman-like flight.
     To prove that I know what I’m talking about, Laser vision. It could be atcheved by providing a large amount of energy to the victerious humor in the eye, which would have to contane a large amount of carbon dioxide. That would cauce the humor to floress laser light. A mirror like substace in the back and you have Laser Vision.
     See this scientific, and it could work.

176. # ekimmakon 12 May 2010 at 3:48 am

     Hey, I’ve been working on a superhero team novel for quite some time now. I could use a bit of feedback.

     The backstory to the area is that during World War II, both sides began developing supersoldier experiments to give themselves the edge. But, when the war ended, the superhumans had nothing left to do. Some became heroes, some became villains, some just went on to live normal lives. But, one major supervillain managed to recruit the majority of the villains to his side, and started world war III. The rest of the free world fared poorly, until a superhero elected himself as global defender, and created superhuman control laws, forcibly drafting any superhuman into the army to fight back.

     My story starts in the middle of this war, with a group of superhuman teenagers. Some of them know each other, some of them don’t, and some of them loathe each other. But, when the city is put in jeopardy, they all turn up at the same place, and save the city, only to be marked by the government as draftees. In evading the police, they find out about an even greater threat. (Ironically, the first disaster would have plunged the city into chaos, but the second would anhilate the city entirely)
     Finding that they work well together, the group decides to form their own superhero team, naming themselves after the team that owned the base they use.

     Comments please.

177. # B. Macon 12 May 2010 at 4:43 am

     It sounds interesting, ekimmak. I like the on-the-run angle.

     When you write your query to publishers, I’d recommend focusing more on the protagonists (personality, key traits, key relationships, etc).

178. # Dark_Minionon 21 May 2010 at 7:35 pm

     what if three superhumans wanted justice but they each had their own methods of achiveing it:

     Cross: everything about him is unknown, his abilities are superhuman aim which makes him a very skilled marksman and he also has enhanced speed.

     Nina Cruz/Angel Cruz: a girl with a split personaility. Nina has very strong light powers. with her powers she can fire a burst of light energy, flight and she can also make different things out of light ( sword, animals, etc) but when nina’s dark side Angel takes over she has darkness powers.

     Jax: a man with physical strength and enhanced senses.

     any suggestions, i need help on there methods

179. # jmilbon 21 May 2010 at 8:14 pm

     Dark_Minion

     Here is what popped into my mind when I read your descriptions, take them for what they’re worth.

     Cross: Sounds like a sniper. They are generally patient, scout out their targets and the terrain to learn routines and escape routes. A planner comes to mind, someone more likely to take out whoever he was after with one shot, be that finding the one piece of damning evidence to put the person away or other, more permanent, methods. That being said, a totally different person comes to mind when I see enhanced speed. That person I see as more reckless, impatient, and more likely to rush into events instead of considering them. Are you absolutely married to the idea of that particular combination of powers? Also, are we looking at a dark and gritty setting where “justice” can include killing? If so, he sounds most like an close-in assassin. Someone who scouts a target, then uses his speed and skill to get close to take out whoever he’s stalking in a hit and run attack.

     Nina Cruz/Angel Cruz: The Nina part of her personality feels more like the straight superhero type, where justice means defeating the bad guy (not killing him) and turning him over to the authorities for prosecution. Angel sounds more cruel and capable of killing without compunction. She also seems more likely to destroy her opponents mentally by preying on many people’s instinctive fear of the dark. For a twist, maybe switch the personalities I described.

     Jax: Sounds like a bruiser, someone who would confront their enemies and pound them into submission. He would probably take the law into his own hands. The enhanced senses suggests someone more stealthy and a spy-type (Superman excepted). Someone who would use those senses to eavesdrop on conversations, track an opponent from a distance, etc., to dig up dirt on him to turn over to authorities.

     Would you be open to giving Cross the enhanced senses and Jax the enhanced speed? Superhuman aim and enhanced senses seem like a more natural fit to me, as does strength and speed. Cross could work as an ultimate sniper, especially if you give him some kind of super-weapon that works at insane distances. Of course, all of this depends on your type of setting. Hope this gives you some ideas.

180. # B. Macon 21 May 2010 at 9:19 pm

     Cross sounds like he’d fit more easily into a well-organized group, like the Company from Heroes or a criminal outfit or maybe a government agency. I’d recommend going with the criminal outfit or something like the Company because I think that he’d be more interesting if he had to worry about getting busted by the authorities. (Or, maybe if he is a government agent, he’s involved in seriously dirty stuff that his government can’t admit to, so they won’t bail him out if he gets caught). (One thing I’d recommend against doing, though, is making him somebody that is just a mindless killer that kills without asking any questions–I think that there’d be a lot of overlap with the Wolverine: Origins version of Agent Zero).
     
     I’d recommend going with short-range guns (pistols, rifles, etc) instead of sniper rifles. It might be hard to give a sniper dramatic entry/escape scenes and I doubt you’d get much chance to use his speed.
     
     It doesn’t look like his personality is fleshed out much yet. One option would be to do something like an archetypical Marine (organized, ridiculously tough, maybe uptight) with an unexpected personality trait. Maybe he’s brilliantly philosophical or doubles as the team diplomat/charmer or scientist. Another option would be to do an archetypical gangster/hitman with a twist. Or an archetypical street rat.
     
     I don’t have much to add on Nina/Angel. The concept sounds more workable than Heroes’ Nicki/Tracy, in any case.
     
     I’d recommend differentiating Jax’s personality from Cross’ in some way. For example, maybe Cross is a hitman and Jax is a do-gooder superhero. Or maybe Cross is a squeaky-clean cop/soldier/whatever and Jax is a mob enforcer. Maybe one character is substantially more methodical/patient than the other (I’d expect that it’d be Cross that’s the planner, but there’s no reason that it couldn’t be Jax). Maybe one has a radically different goal than the other. That could be something as simple as a do-gooder vs. somebody that’s more selfish, or maybe one is putting on the guise of joining the team to get the best opportunity at killing a particular target, or is joining the team to act as a mole for another organization.

181. # Dark_Minionon 21 May 2010 at 11:45 pm

     Cross-basically is the “by any means nessecary” type

     Angel- im gona leave out the split personality thing.

     Jax-he is the “boy scout” type

182. # B. Macon 22 May 2010 at 12:34 pm

     Give them an unexpected trait (or possibly an unexpected background) to differentiate them from other “by any means necessary” and “boy scout” characters.
     
     For example, Tony Stark is a brilliant scientist that isn’t a stereotypical nerd but actually a quite charming lady’s man and a wildly impulsive thrill-seeker. The protagonist of Monk is a private investigator and former police detective that isn’t tough or street-savvy but rather a super-precise, neurotic guy that freaks out when he gets dirty. For a demon, Hellboy is surprisingly compassionate–the first movie played that up to the point of ridiculousness with kittens. The protagonist of Avatar is a Marine that isn’t super-athletic but rather physically crippled (he lost his legs).
     
     The point is, if we know or can guess pretty much everything there is to know about the character based on his archetype (whether that’s “ruthless/amoral,” “boy scout,” “brilliant scientist,” “Marine,” “private eye,” “demon,” etc), the character probably isn’t very interesting or well-developed. Giving characters unexpected traits helps make them feel like people rather than two-dimensional walking cliches.
     
     In addition, maybe you can give Cross some reason for being willing to use any means necessary and why Jax is more restrained/principled. For example, maybe Jax is a father and so he really worries about being a bad role model for the bajillions of kids that look up to superheroes like him. Maybe Cross had a partner that died because Cross or the partner hesitated when a civilian got in the way. (Similarly, Scarface’s life went to hell because he refused to kill women and children–he called off a bombing and missed his chance to kill a critical gangster).

183. # Anonymouson 28 May 2010 at 1:43 pm

     What kind of powers can you get from nanotechnology

184. # B. Macon 28 May 2010 at 3:00 pm

     I think you could use nanotech to sort of plausibly explain pretty much anything physical, most mechanical or electronic abilities, maybe intelligence, maybe bio-control, stretchiness, etc.

185. # Five-manon 04 Jun 2010 at 3:04 am

     Hey, I’m new to novel writing but I find it quite enjoyable if frustrating, anywho, life story out of the way, I’m after some help.

     I’ve got a five man band story going on, (TV tropes is my new wikipedia, thank you superhero nation), and figure I’d ask if they seem over/underpowered and whether you think they mesh well.

     Adam Cadman-The Hero. Agility and relfexes. (Point of veiw character) His origin story is actually revealed near the end but he discovers his powers at the start.

     Force/Barty Shepherd. Power armoured hero. Suit has [miniturised]jets for flight, wrist mounted/concealed machine guns and a cup holder. He is the mad character, likely to break the fourth wall.

     Lizard. Super Strength, Reptilian scales give durability. Trapped in Lizard form, which is a different personality to the original form. Prone to Hulkspeak.

     Retribute/Dirk Steel. Martial artist with good reflexes and hand to hand skills. These are increased further because he is a conduit for the hellforce, which grants him the ability to ‘shoot’ hellfire. If he does it to much he becomes weak untill he eats.

     Kate Manna-The Psyker. She had immense psychic abilities until the ‘baddies’ implanted a mental block which prevents from using her powers unless she’s angry which causes her to go out of control. This leads to the Lizard mentioning ‘Lizard not like her when she’s angry’

     What do you think?

186. # Ragged Boyon 04 Jun 2010 at 8:08 am

     Hello Five-Man,

     Your team does remind me of the Avengers, but working in different team dynamics and social conflicts can easily extinguish any problems with similarities. My only concerns would be Force and Lizard. Force’s repeated breaking of the fourth wall could compromise the seriousness of your work. It works for Deadpool and a few other character, but it’s a risk. I’d recommend spacing his breakings and focusing on the execution. I do believe that you can break the fourth wall stylishly. As for Lizard I’d recommend making sure that his Hulkspeak doesn’t become a nuisance to read. Also, if his Lizard personality is his primary side I’d recommend making sure he has some relatable/likable traits.

     All in all, sounds like a workable team. I’d recommend focusing on their personalites thoses are the aspects that really need to mesh to create interesting teams. For example, The tension between Captain America’s clean-cut style and Iron-Man’s flashiness makes for dramatic conflicts. These conflicts rose to their apex in The Marvel Civil War.

187. # Five-manon 04 Jun 2010 at 8:26 am

     Thank you for the response Ragged boy.

     Perhaps I could make Force genre savvy rather than breaking the fourth wall, but still keep him a bit mad. (The madness and ‘genre savvyness are what I believe differentiate him from Iron man to be honest. Also giving him weaponry that isn’t repulsors kinda helps somewhat.)

     Instead of hulkspeak for Lizard perhaps simply speaking in 3rd person would suffice?

     A final note, Deadpool is awesome.

188. # B. Macon 04 Jun 2010 at 2:11 pm

     Okay, so Cadman is a hero that relies on his reflexes and presumably fights unarmed. It looks like there’s a lot of overlap with the martial artist, who also has good reflexes and fights unarmed. I’d recommend differentiating their roles in battle a little bit more or, alternately, if the characters are too similar it might be worthwhile to consider getting rid of one. For example, maybe Retribute becomes a bit more of a long-range kind of guy.
     
     Just so we’re clear, when you say Force is “mad,” you mean crazy/insane, right? (In the U.S., I think “mad” usually means “angry” rather than “crazy”).
     
     What are the characters’ personalities like?
     
     I agree with R.B. that breaking the fourth wall tends to reduce the seriousness of a story. I’m not sure that’s a problem for this novel, though. The cupholder in the power-suit and the play on the Hulk’s overwrought line suggest to me that it’s a comedy. I also agree with RB that it’s risky, whether in a comedy or not. (For example, if the author isn’t careful, it may end up disorienting the readers and many readers want an immersive reading experience rather than one that reminds them they’re reading a book). One way you might be able to break the fourth wall in a somewhat intrusive way is if the crazy powersuit guy is convinced that he’s a character in a comic book.
     
     The Hulk-like lizard strikes me as problematic. I don’t think the Hulk (or another barely-sentient hero) lends himself well to a novel. Novels almost always have a hell of a lot more dialogue and less action than comic books do, and I’d assume that the people that will read a novel for fun are probably older and more literary than the typical Hulk fan. Two mitigating factors: it’s a five man team, so you could just focus on the other four characters in dialogue, and if it’s a comedy, you might have more leeway to use his voice to do something other than annoy the middle-aged, probably female editor evaluating the submission (“HULK SMASH!”). I’m not sure having Lizard speak in the third-person would resolve the issue, but it’s definitely better.
     
     I like the idea of having Force be genre-savvy instead of breaking the fourth wall. I think it might be pretty funny if it’s the insane guy that knows the most about what’s going on.
     
     I think it’s slightly cliche that the woman on the team is the psychic, but it’s a minor thing and you might even be able to use it for comedic effect. If the martial artist asks her about it, maybe she can respond like “Well, I was in martial arts training, but then I accidentally blew up my sensei’s brain.”

189. # Five-manon 04 Jun 2010 at 4:08 pm

     Thanks B.Mac

     Yeah, when I say mad I mean crazy/nutjob but I guess thats what I get for being a brit. Oh well never mind.

     Lizard, I’m hoping will gain a lot of dialogue with Force.
     The banter (in my head, wait does that mean I’m mad?) between them will be something like,
     Force makes a joke, “Oh no, not more generic mooks,” or something thats actually funny and Lizard would reply with,”hah hah… wait, Lizard doesn’t get it.”

     Is it cliche for women to be psychic. Susan Storm, Jean Grey, Psylocke…. crap. Hmm perhaps an easy substitute (at least for the scene in my head, wait, now I’m worried) could be magnetic force control. Whereby when she gets angry, things start floating around and arcs of lightning/cheesy special effect(hooray another line for Force) start shooting everywhere.

     A thought as struck me. Have Lizard somewhat intelligant but no-one takes him seriously because he talks in 3rd person.

     A final note, I’m stealing the sensei brain explosion line.

190. # Jammyj93on 08 Jun 2010 at 8:42 am

     Hey ive been thinking of some superhero ideas.
     1. The superhero has a unique chemical in his brain which they can release into their blood stream and into their muscels increaseing the superheros strength and endurence to superhuman levels…but the chemical has a side effect which makes the superhero increasingly aggressive over certain periods of time and the amount released, maybe even transform into something more than a human.

     2. The superhero can negate other powers if they are physical power the superhero still gets hit but as if it was average human strength, if the power is a ranged power e.g. a concussive beam, lightening, fire etc it would reflect off the superhero, the superhero could even channel the power back at the user or store it for some other time…but to much negateing and channeling other powers will make the superhero increasingly dizzy untill they become unconscious perhaps even die.

191. # B. Macon 08 Jun 2010 at 8:53 am

     “1) multiple hearts, impenetrable heart and blood vessels, hyperelastic heart and blood vessels, etc. something dealing with heart” — allowing him to do what, exactly?
     
     “2) Double nerves, hyperelectric nerves, or hyperelastic nerves, etc.” Again, I’m not sure what exactly having double nerves would let him do. Fast reflexes? Electric powers? Immunity to pain? Superintelligence? Psychic stuff? (I suppose you might be able to explain some psychic powers in terms of being able to read and/or influence and/or control the electrical impulses of another person’s brain).
     
     3) superhuman senses — this is okay, but I’d recommend it as a supplemental power because it probably won’t make for very interesting fight scenes on its own.

192. # B. Macon 08 Jun 2010 at 10:19 am

     No problem, Jammyj. As for your comment…
     
     I like the idea that using his powers come with a cost, which he voluntarily takes on (instead of, say, the Hulk, which is usually an involuntary transformation). I’m not sure whether you’re doing a comic book, but if you are, one potential area for concern would be whether strength and endurance will give you enough interesting visuals to work with. If you’re doing a novel, I think that’d be less of a problem, but even so you might want to give him a minor, more exotic power to help keep his fight scenes from getting monotonous.
     
     I feel that the power negation/channeling ability would make the character maybe a bit too limited, particularly if the character is a solo hero rather than just one guy on a team. Will the character be able to do anything in a situation that doesn’t involve fighting a superpowered bad guy? (For example, rescuing somebody from a wreck or burning building, or fighting unpowered bank robbers, or finding a stolen MacGuffin, or stopping a building from collapsing, or whatever). I think it worked a bit better for X-Men’s Rogue because she was just a teammate, so she could be off on the sidelines in a situation where she couldn’t steal a power from a villain. (Alternately, in some situations she contributed by stealing the power of an injured or otherwise unavailable hero). Alternately, maybe the character’s powers are only useful in terms of fighting supervillains, and he has to rely on his wits/training/weapons/whatever to deal with everything else.

193. # Jammyj93on 08 Jun 2010 at 10:32 am

     Thanks you gave me an idea the two together could make a team and when the hero with the superstrength gets too angry the other superhero can help him calm down by channeling the heros powers.

     Also for visuals maybe becuase of the chemical the heros veins and arteries appear to be on top of his skin also he could become red all over because of the chemical too.

194. # bretton 08 Jun 2010 at 3:01 pm

     Hey guys. I came up with a really cool superhero idea.
     20 years ago almost all the superheros were wiped out.
     Zane Wyatt is a 15 year old with superstrength who has just moved to Sunridge City to live with his dad Who is one of the higher ups in the local police department.
     Erik Mason is the lead villian and can shoot fire from his hands and eyes He cannot go in the pool or be outside when it rains becauswe he can’t use his powers when he’s wet.
     Zane is accidentally discovered by Harry Carson and he takes him to meet Jan Mathers a disgraced PI who has superspeed. Jan seends Zane and Harry out on cases and they soon discover the source of the latest superhero boom

195. # Jammyj93on 15 Jun 2010 at 10:53 am

     Hey its me again I was thinking of very different power. The heros power comes from some sort of demon/spirit/dark energy/alien symbiote…(havent decided yet) that dwells inside the hero. It appears on his skin as tattoos of animals on the heros skin. As they are alive they can move around his body, the hero can even make the “tattoos” leave his body and use them to aid him in his strength, endruance, flight, speed, all the hero sences and even in combat. The power comes with a cost to much use of the power could drain the heros stamina making the hero fatigue, another idea was that the hero could lose controll of the “tattoos” or mabye the heros “tattoos” begin to engolf the hero turing them into a demon/spirit/dark energy/alien symbiote (which ever i decide the tattoos are made of.)

196. # B. Macon 15 Jun 2010 at 11:06 am

     That sounds interesting.
     
     …
     
     Would he have a secret identity? If so, the moving tattoos might make it tricky for him to keep the identity secret. (He could probably mostly deal with that by wearing long clothes even in hot weather, but it would make having a romantic relationship rather tricky ).

197. # Herojockon 19 Jun 2010 at 4:20 am

     What’s the advice on creating your own fictional element, material, isotope or atomic particle. My story has humanity (well a private company) mining one comet, a presence on the Moon and Mars. I suspect the whole ‘this material is the strongest known to man! and could easily cut through our toughest metal’ is kind of boring now?

     Thoughts welcomed.

198. # B. Macon 22 Jun 2010 at 10:29 am

     “What’s the advice on creating your own fictional element, material, isotope or atomic particle.” Hmm. If it’s really important to the story, I’d recommend giving it a brief origin of its own. For example, Ironman 2 had a rather hilariously destructive scene where Tony creates a replacement for palladium for the first time.
     
     I think having it fit the mood of the piece helps, too. The MacGuffin mineral in Avatar is called “unobtainium,” which is a geeky hat-tip to the TV tropes concept of the same name. I felt the name was goofy and out-of-place in a movie that otherwise treated itself seriously. (Too seriously, I think, but James Cameron didn’t ask me and I think he’s pretty happy with how it turned out).
     
     I vaguely remember a wacky story where a mad scientist made rockets tipped with explodium. I think that fit the style of the piece and was pretty funny. Incidentally, “Made of Explodium” is itself a TV Tropes page.

199. # Dark_Minionon 23 Jun 2010 at 5:00 pm

     a guy named Devin Dash has the ability to manipulate all forms of energy( electricity, heat, light etc) he wakes up from a coma in a city called New Fenix. The city is controlled by a militia group named The Legion, which is led by a man named Murdock. Murdock and The Legion are all about “human purity” and they want to get rid of all the non-humans running around New Fenix by any means. Devin Dash does not like this and he begins to rebel againist Murdock and The Legion.

     ANY SUGGESTIONS????????

     i need help coming up with a weakness for Devin Dash

     Devin can also absorb a non-humans energy to mimic their powers

     Devin has a “hidden potential” which allows him to fully generate & have control over the 7 elements ( fire, earth,water, electricity, wind, darkness and light)

200. # Bronteson 23 Jun 2010 at 5:39 pm

     Maybe Devin needs to be in proximity of a source of what he wants to control. The more exotic or the less there is for him to manipulate into something useful exhausts him. Maybe if there is a lot of it, the energy overwhelms him/the more difficult it is for him to control.

201. # Bronteson 28 Jun 2010 at 9:14 am

     I want the superhero from the story I’m writing to have entropy-based powers, but I don’t wanna be a subject to failed physics. This is what I’ve come up with;

     He is able to force entropy on any kind of matter, altough it is easier on solids. He then is able to absorb the energy released from deconstruction and apply it for different means, like blasts. He is able to reconstruct the object entirely if he does not use any of the energy produced. He is able to recnostruct the object partially and with the energy absorbed make the object a projectile (this can be used for flight as well). He is able to augment the mass in himself and/or other objects by moving the energy from one to the other (sort of like E=MC²). He is able to use his power through any part of his skin. The problems are that he is loosing control of the powers, deconstructing food and oxygen at a much latter stage, also radiation poisoning from deconstructing matter. His imminent death is one of his main motivations in the story.

202. # Hopefulon 06 Jul 2010 at 1:59 pm

     What does mentaly generated weaponery mean?

203. # B. Macon 06 Jul 2010 at 8:17 pm

     Weapons created by a superpower. I think they’re typically melee weapons wielded by the character. (See Youngblood‘s Knightsabre and Rifts Cyber-Knights, etc).
     
     Sometimes they’re weapons that are mentally manipulated at a distance by the character, like Green Lantern’s projected weaponry. (Picture courtesy of Superhero Universe).
     
     Rarely, they’re semi-intelligent floating weapons that fight on their own.

204. # Dark_Minionon 17 Jul 2010 at 8:35 pm

     if i have color & ink manipulation, what can i do?

205. # Wingson 17 Jul 2010 at 9:44 pm

     Dark_Minion: It depends on what you mean. If you mean, say, drawing something and the drawing coming to life, you have infinite possibilities but your character may come off as overpowered. Literal control over ink? I suppose it’d be like a much more limited version of hydrokinesis. Control over color itself would be difficult to use well in combat, I think.

     - Wings

206. # B. Macon 17 Jul 2010 at 9:55 pm

     “if i have color & ink manipulation, what can i do?” Well, it’s your story. You tell me.
     
     If I were writing a story about someone with that power, some things that come to mind would include:
     
     –visual illusions (a la Mysterio)– he wouldn’t be able to do anything with sound, though, which probably makes it more interesting than Mysterio.
     
     –camouflage
     
     –maybe some minor Green Lantern-like powers with the ink, like the ability to draw things that come alive. For a variation on GL powers that strikes me as more interesting, maybe the ability to create inanimate objects that he has to use himself.
     
     –maybe the ability to slightly alter reality* by drawing things. For example, if you’re trapped in a room, maybe you can draw a door.
     
     –Maybe he can do some stuff with ink. Slow people down with a flood of ink gunk? Use ink as a fire-starter? Defend law and order by garishly recoloring people’s pants pockets?
     
     *As a rule, I think any power with “reality” in it is usually a disaster because the limits are so hard to define, but I included it just to brainstorm.

207. # Ragged Boyon 25 Jul 2010 at 2:59 pm

     Dark Minion, what happens when one of his drawings or tattoos is killed. You could have a biological link so that when his creations are destroyed it saps his energy. Maybe, the more things he summons, the more he has to concentrate and the weaker his creations are.

     Alternatively, He (Shade? Wasn’t it?) doesn’t seem to be invuinerable so it doesn’t really matter if he has a concrete weakness. Showtime, for example, doesn’t have an explicit weakness, but his pheromones can be neutralized making him nearly powerless. However, he can just as well be overwhelmed by an opponent strength or tactic. As long as he can be challenged in a dramatic manner a weakness doesn’t really matter.

208. # B. Macon 25 Jul 2010 at 4:46 pm

     Have you seen our Superhero Weaknesses and Vulnerabilities category, Dark Minion?
     
     I agree with RB that it matters more that the character is challenged than how he is challenged. However, giving the character a weakness like Kryptonite is probably not your best option, I feel.

209. # MHon 17 Aug 2010 at 12:55 pm

     Here’s a superpower I thought up for one of my characters: He can make himself completely flat, becoming a one-atom-thick silhouette of himself. He can then be folded into any shape (he can’t fold himself, but he can unfold himself). While in flat form, his edges are extremely sharp, and can cut through almost anything, but he is also very light and fragile.

     Thoughts?

210. # Ragged Boyon 21 Aug 2010 at 9:24 am

     MH,

     That powers sounds like a double-edged sword. While it could be extremely effective for evading attacks and combat, if he got hit wouldn’t he come apart easily? I’m not sure, quantam physics isn’t really my specialty.

     Although, if you have enough writer know-how you can spin up a reason why he doesn’t get obliterated. I think the power is interesting. I’d like to see it in action.

211. # Ragged Boyon 16 Sep 2010 at 5:33 pm

     I’m trying to come up with a character that can control space. I’d like some general idea bouncing. Off back, I figured he’d be pretty overpowered. In dangerous situations he could easily warp the problem away or warp away from the problem or warp to the problem, if need be, without going through mooks. So I tried moving some of the extreme things and brought it down to a set I think could be workable, if not longwinded. But grooming will come later.

     - Control over one’s own gravitational aura: The character could use this to fly, but as limitations, doing so is quickly taxing. Instead I’m seeing some thing super leaps. Also, the character would be protected by a repulsion field that weaken incoming attacks and enhancing his own attacks.

     - Repulsion and gravitation at a limited range.

     - Limited matter extension: He can’t expand matter for some reason I would cover with a joke, but he can extend it. Like extending a kitchen knife to use as a sword. However, extending thing does not increase their constitution so he’d have to extend things made of sturdy material.

     What do you think? Too much? Too convoluted? If I were ever to explain this in-story I’d probably do something like a training scenario and people are analyzing his abilities. That way explanations will seem warranted.

212. # B. Macon 16 Sep 2010 at 7:40 pm

     I think it could work. The three uses you named seem interesting and the character will probably be pretty easy to challenge.
     
     However, the power will probably take a fair bit of explanation. I don’t think that would be an insurmountable challenge for a major character, particularly the lead, but I think it might not be worthwhile on a minor one.
     
     There may also be some potential for confusion. Will your readers understand the distinction between expanding and extending matter? I like the idea of it only working on sturdy materials–it feels like a very realistic restriction on the power.

213. # Ragged Boyon 16 Sep 2010 at 9:11 pm

     Indeed. I didn’t want to include expansion because I think it opens his powers up in a way I didn’t want it to go. I was going to qualify it saying that expansion of matter has the potential to create rifts in space and that extension is a safer alternative.

     However, the power will probably take a fair bit of explanation. I don’t think that would be an insurmountable challenge for a major character, particularly the lead, but I think it might not be worthwhile on a minor one.

     Yeah. I usually save the exotics for my leads. This one is Finesse. My sides usually have powers that need little to no explanation. I’m up for the challenge, though.

     I’m making this character for a world I’m building. I have no idea of the medium I want the story to be in, but my working title is Sapien Plus. It’s basically about a universe in which a Higher Intelligence contacts Earth after the planet unites to stop a crisis. As reward the H. I. boosts humanity’s’ innate abilities; our ability to break down mental barriers and directly affect reality with one’s mind. This ability manifests itself differently for everyone.

     Also, the H. I. basically gives Earth a solution for the energy problem at the cost that they must use their newly acquired skills and resources to protect the bonds that the H. I. has made with other planets. Of course, there are those that would seek to use their gifts to overpower the H. I. And so, there are a group of particularly enlightened individuals who use their abilities to protect Earth and the H. I.’s mission, Finesse being one of them.

     What do you think? I’m need help fleshing out idea.

214. # Ragged Boyon 17 Sep 2010 at 5:35 am

     Hmm. I’ve noticed that this keeps happening when I’m the last to post a comment. My name and comment won’t show up on the recent comments. I’m not sure if it’s just my computer or if the name ‘Ragged Boy’ has some kind of jamming code.

     [Update: Now they have appeared in the recent comment widget. Woohoo!]

215. # bretton 15 Oct 2010 at 10:14 pm

     I just saw unbreakable, and it got me thinking, do the villains powers HAVE to be the opposite of the heroes?

216. # B. Macon 16 Oct 2010 at 9:50 am

     No, but I think it’s helpful if the powers are distinct enough to make each fighter stand out. (Alternately, perhaps they have similar powers but totally different styles of combat?)

     So, for example, if one character is a superstrong brawler like the Hulk, I’d generally recommend trying something like a villain more based on finesse and/or agility or psychic and/or mental abilities or maybe some sort of ranged combat because there are only so many ways to show two Hulk-like or Superman-like characters going at it. (The only thing worse than one flying brick is two?) On the other hand, I think finesse vs. finesse or psychic vs. psychic has more promise.

217. # Jennyon 19 Nov 2010 at 8:41 pm

     Hey everyone, I’m having difficulty figuring what tense to write in because of my hero’s powers. She can see parts of the future in her dreams, so what tense would I write in if she’d having the dream, but then wakes up to realize it was a dream?

     ie. **“Oh look, your little girlfriend is protecting you” the man sneered into the student’s ear as he pressed the gun deeper into his temple, “Bad move, kid” And with that he pulled the trigger.**
     Stella’s eyes shot open as pain ricocheted inside her skull.
     “Another dream?” Josh questioned; Stella nodded weakly.

     Would the tense be present or past, or even super past? (sorry, that’s what my English teacher calls it)

     Thanks in advance!

218. # Sean Higginson 19 Nov 2010 at 9:18 pm

     I would suggest, if you are writing in past tense, continue to write in past tense during the dream. For the character, it’s happening the same time as the rest of the story.

     Of course, if she were aware at the time that it was a preminition, that could be something totally different.

     Those are my thoughts, others may say differently.

219. # B. Macon 20 Nov 2010 at 2:13 pm

     I agree with Sean. If the story is mostly in the past tense and the character doesn’t know they’re dreams as they’re happening, I think the past tense would feel truest to the narrator’s perspective. (Possible exception: the character is narrating the story looking back, and she knows now that they were dreams, but did not know it as they happened).
     
     …
     
     PS: Could you give an example of super past? I’m not familiar with that phrase.

220. # Jennyon 20 Nov 2010 at 2:53 pm

     So to clarify, I should write the dreams in the past tense, but the rest of the story in the present?

     And B. Mac- The super past (or past perfect) is an event that happened in the past and ended in the past.
     ie. – I had been to the U.S once before.
     – We had had that car for ten years before it broke down.

     Hope that makes sense (sorry if it doesn’t, I stink at explaining stuff)

     Major thanks to the both of you!

221. # Sean Higginson 21 Nov 2010 at 1:42 am

     Depending on narrator’s perspective, assuming that as the dreams are taking place, the character is unaware that they are dreams, then the dreams should be written in the same tense as the rest of the story.

     B. Mac’s exception is this (and looks unlikely from what you’ve written) – if you are writing the story from the dreamer’s perspective (first person past tense) and she is now aware that the dreams were visions of the future those should be written in future perfect (I think that’s the correct term, ie: “I saw that Sean was going to become a best selling author”).

     [My dreams are not always direct reflections of the future.]

222. # B. Macon 21 Nov 2010 at 2:24 pm

     Yeah, Sean is right. I would recommend past tense for the story and past tense for the dreams.
     
     Sean, your dream may be right, too. In contrast, I dreamed that the Saints would beat the Vikings 46-40 in the NFL season opener. The Saints actually won ~14-10. (Latest dream: the Bears blow out the Packers in the World Cup, which is impossible in so many ways I don’t even know where to begin. Like I’d get caught dead watching the World Cup!).

223. # Sean Higginson 21 Nov 2010 at 6:26 pm

     Let’s do something somewhat on topic – imagine a world where superpowers are commonplace (say 50% of the population), how would this affect professional sports?

224. # B. Macon 21 Nov 2010 at 8:24 pm

     I imagine there’d be segregated leagues, some open to only people with supernatural abilities and others open to only regular athletes. (Unclear cases like Larry Fitzgerald could pick).
     
     If the proportion of people with powers were smaller, like 5%, I think the professional leagues would be limited to regular people for competitive reasons. A few superpowered people (probably mostly people without powers strong enough to compete with Superman, Thor, or other guys who really won the superpower lottery) might still try sneaking into the pros. Discerning fans have often wondered as much about Larry Freakshow, Kurt “The Bagman” Warner (who bears an uncanny resemblance to a certain superpowered serial killer), the Nigerian Nightmare and T-Bone, among others.

225. # Sean Higginson 21 Nov 2010 at 10:41 pm

     That’s what I was thinking too. I just wanted outside insight.

     Next question – would the superhuman league get better ratings than the NFL?

226. # B. Macon 22 Nov 2010 at 1:25 am

     Would the superleague get better ratings than the NFL? I think it could plausibly go either way.
     
     If you wanted people to be more interested in regular competition, you could draw on…
     –Superpowered sports would put a preposterous premium on what you’re born with rather than how hard you work or how smart you are. I think one of the major appeals of sports (especially football) is the idea that every team has a chance of winning any given game. But if your guys were born with crappy superpowers, do you really have a chance?
     
     –Most fans feel that steroids are unacceptable because they give some players an unfair advantage and cheapen the history of the game (records and the like). Letting superpowered people into the game would be even worse. It would be a disgrace if Brett Favre’s or Cal Ripken’s incredible start streaks were broken by someone that was actually invulnerable. It’s not a fair competition.
     
     –Some superpowers would make the game extremely uninteresting/uncompetitive. “Touchdown #12 for Speedy! Scoring drive: 1 play, 95 yards, :02.”
     
     –Some superpowers would make the game hard to officiate. How do you call 12 men on the field if one of them is the Invisible Man? Alternately, how do you call unnecessary roughness against a psychic?
     
     –I think that most professional sports have some degree of relatability, like the hometown heroes, the Kurt Warner rags-to-riches success stories, heroes from the hood, etc. I think that superpowered athletes would have less relatability to fans without superpowers. Also, even superpowered fans might have trouble relating to freaky athletes (e.g. Beast or Reptile).
     
     –The potential for severe injuries would probably concern fans, the government and TV stations. It’s hard enough to avoid injuries as it is. Add superpowers and you might end up broadcasting an on-field fatality to tens of millions of viewers. I don’t think the FCC would be amused.
     
     If you wanted people to be more drawn to supernatural competition, you could go with…
     –Supernatural competition has more variety? Each new team will have superpowers you haven’t faced this season. In contrast, if you’ve played the Jets, wouldn’t a game against the Ravens feel sort of stale? (Both have a strong run, strong defense and an okay pass attack). There’s absolutely no difference between the Bills and teams that are relentlessly bad at everything.
     
     –More spectacular play. Why do so many more people watch professional ball games than college ball or high school ball? The players are more capable and the plays are more incredible. With superpowers, you get all that and more.
     
     –Unlike steroids abusers, most superpowered players didn’t bend the rules of the game to get their powers. Fans of a super-league might argue that letting someone born with superpowers play is just as honest and natural as a basketball player having a competitive advantage because he was born tall.
     
     I think nonpowered people would generally prefer nonpowered play, and powered people would mostly prefer powered play. In a country that’s half-and-half, I think both leagues would draw roughly even levels of fan interest.
     
     However, feel free to do whatever you feel your story calls for. If a major theme of the story is that superhumans are treated as invisible even though they’re like 50% of the country, then it’d be thematically helpful if nonpowered sports leagues were the only game in town. (Maybe there’s a lot of interest in a superpowered sports league, but legal authorities won’t let it happen because the risk for injury/fatality is too high).

227. # Jennyon 24 Nov 2010 at 11:03 pm

     Hello again, so my problem this time is my teleporting character (or course)

     I need to give her a restriction so her power doesn’t dominate and ruin the plot (she’s not the protagonist).
     As well, I can’t think of a creative way to write someone teleporting. I really don’t want to have to write “..as she teleported” or “…she teleported into the room” for my entire novel.

     Is there a way to write creative teleportation?

     Major thanks in advance!

228. # B. Macon 25 Nov 2010 at 2:16 am

     One possibility would that there are limits to how quickly she can teleport or how reliable her power is if she can’t concentrate. If she has to wait a second or two before teleporting, it’d be harder for her to dominate a fight on her own.

     The first time the character appears in a scene, I think it’s more important to be pretty clear that she teleports in. (One way you could liven that up beyond “she teleported into the room” is to describe some unusual side-effect of her teleportation–maybe her teleportations send a chilly breeze throughout the room or have a distinctive smell or otherwise affect other people in the room). However, after that, I think you can be a bit more stylized because readers will know she’s the teleporter, so you could describe her kicking one character and then punching another and kicking a third and kneeing a fourth in one fluid motion and it’d be pretty clear she was teleporting from one opponent to the next even if you didn’t explicitly say so.

229. # Sean Higginson 25 Nov 2010 at 8:28 pm

     Ok, I use the term Bamf as a verb for teleportation, but this probably won’t work unless you are doing a very slapstick comedy.

     Also, limitations for teleportation are seemingly endless. I had a character once who had to concentrate, sending hist asteral projection to the location first before his body could join. Nightcrawler can’t teleport unless he can see the place he’s teleporting to because otherwise he might wind up in a wall (ouch). In Harry Potter, the teleportation spell had the dangerous side affect of leaving your limbs behind.

     As for stylistic ways of writing the teleportation – from a scientific stand point there is a great one I feel. When entering a location through teleportation, the character would essentially be displacing his volume in oxygen which could easily explain the breeze B.Mac mentions above. When you telelport out of a location, you basically create a human size hole where air would immediately rush to fill, which would create some kind of noise, realistally probably like the pop of a champagne bottle being opened.

230. # Jennyon 25 Nov 2010 at 10:03 pm

     Thanks for those ideas, they’re better than I would have thought of

     A friend of mine suggested (after reading B. Mac’s post) that the person leaves a smell when she teleports, but the smell reflects how she’s feeling.

     IE- When she’s happy, with would be crisp and clean (like the clothes just came out of the dryer smell)
     Or when she’s angry, it would be like sulfur, or something putrid like that.

     I think overall it’s a cool concept, but I’m afraid it might confuse and/or throw off the
     reader some how

     What’s the happy medium?

231. # Helen T.on 26 Nov 2010 at 8:02 pm

     Greetings,
     I’m writing a sci-fi novel where the characters become superheroes after devoloping these abbilities. I’ve been hesitating, though, on choosing which power to give to my main character.
     She’s 17, your typical high school cheerleader who seems to have the perfect life. Off course it isn’t perfect. Her father is an alcoholic who beats her mom and tries to rape her.
     Sooo I had thought about giving her psychic abbilities (telekinesis, telepathy, psychometry, forcefields) and I had even created weaknesses that suited her powers perfectly.
     Then I read the article “8 Problems with Psychic Heroes” and realized it would be difficult. So I changed my mind and thought maybe she could have the abbility to generate plasma blasts?
     But I found this overdone and not as original as I could make the psychic ones?
     I don’t know. Any help, advice, recommendation would be enourmously accepted.
     Thanks in advance,
     Helen.

232. # Sean Higginson 26 Nov 2010 at 8:31 pm

     Just reading what you have listed here Helen, I immediately thought of some power to do with kinetic energy, being able to force things away from her body (maybe a reverse kind of gravity). Reason it came to mind was I had a great visual of the girl’s father attempting to rape her when her powers manifest and him being thrown away.

     Also, the power can create some of it’s own weaknesses (especially while she’s learning control).

233. # Helen T.on 26 Nov 2010 at 9:01 pm

     Thanks Sean, but would you explain me a bit better how that power would work? What conditions or weaknesses it would have?

234. # B. Macon 28 Nov 2010 at 4:17 am

     Helen, what sort of main goal(s) do you have in mind for her? It seems like her drunken father would not be much of a match for her superpowers, unless maybe the point is that her superpowers aren’t enough to fix her family. (Obviously, the situation is more complex than “let’s just beat the hell out of him!”)
     
     Alternately, if the main antagonist is her father, another option would be giving him powers as well. Superpowers could be hereditary.
     
     Another possibility would be challenging her by making it very difficult for her to use powers against her father. For example, if the father learns about her powers, maybe he can sell her out to villains that will kill her. And, if she kills the father, the police and media will get involved, which will alert the villains. So, how does the hero thwart her father without either alerting him to her superpowers or killing/maiming him? I think that will present interesting challenges for her to overcome.
     
     Finally, you could use the father as a secondary antagonist (like the robber that kills Spiderman’s uncle) and then use a supervillain as the main antagonist.
     
     If the father is an unpowered but major antagonist, I think something messy would be interesting, like barely-controlled telekinesis. That’d raise the stakes because it’d be harder for her to use her powers without directly endangering her loved ones and outing herself to the bad guys.

235. # Comicbookguy117on 03 Feb 2011 at 9:26 pm

     Hey listen fellas, I have a problem that hopefully you guys can help with. So I’m developing this character, he’s a acid generator. And I want him to be visibly distinguishable. You know like people can look at this guy, remember who he is and go “Oh s***!” So I’m thinking of giving him completely cauterized skin, from head to toe. The reason is that this is one of those people that is not exactly immune to their powers. So my question is what exactly does cauterized skin look like? I mean is this a compelling idea, or just too disgusting? I’d like some advice please.

236. # B. Macon 03 Feb 2011 at 11:11 pm

     “So my question is what exactly does cauterized skin look like? I mean is this a compelling idea, or just too disgusting?” I’m not a scientist, but I scanned through Google and found some examples of cauterization that were mild and some that were nightmare fuel.
     
     I’m not sure if you’re doing a comic book or novel, but I think a skilled comic book artist could illustrate the character without repelling readers. Swamp Thing and Batman’s villain Clayface look pretty tolerable (at least not repulsive) despite having physical disfigurement built into their plots. Deadpool and maybe Spawn also come to mind.
     
     
     
     Is the character a protagonist or antagonist? If he’s a protagonist, the extent of his physical disfigurement would probably raise relatability issues. However, I don’t think that would be a major issue if the story had other protagonists that looked more normal. Another way to preserve his relatability would be to show as little as possible. For example, we don’t see Deadpool’s horribly scarred face much because he wears a mask. (Similarly, Darth Vader).
     
     …
     
     (Another type of extremely exotic-looking protagonists is aliens/nonhumans like the Martian Manhunter and the Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles. I found those examples mostly extraneous because they look a lot “cleaner” than a horribly charred human, but maybe you’ll see something there I missed).

237. # Comicbookguy117on 27 Mar 2011 at 7:58 pm

     Hey B.Mac, I’d like your advice but I’m not sure which thread to post under for this specific inquary. So I apologize if this feels out of place here ok?

     So as I have mentioned before I am developing my own comic book universe. A daunting but overly worthwhile endeavor. My ultimate goal is to have a series of individual stories that will eventually become a supergroup story. Like how Batman and superman had their own super careers before founding the Justice League. My question is this, how can I create characters that are different from each other? I know that may seems very vauge, so let me try and clarify. I have several ways to ‘power’ people within my universe and am working to develope a protagonist from each of these factions that will eventually found a team together. The problem is that they all seem to come out as dark, brooding or highly serious. I do take my work and characters very seriously, but I also feel as though I need a character that cracks wise or somehow lightenes the mood. I don’t know I guess I’m looking for advice on building a team.

238. # B. Macon 27 Mar 2011 at 8:55 pm

     One possibility would be a different setting for one or more of the characters. My guess is that a superhero story set in Detroit, Gotham, Baltimore (“Bodymore”) or Oakland would probably be relatively dark. When the crimes are more brutal, I think the mood is likely to feel more hopeless. Robberies where no one get seriously injured are PG-friendly, whereas elements like drug abuse/sales, rape, brutal and frequent murders, torture and other similar crimes push a hard R. In contrast, a lighter series like Spiderman or some versions of Superman are likely to deal with murders pretty infrequently and usually in a pretty clean way. (IE: Gwen Stacey dies of a fall and Uncle Ben gets killed off-camera, which are pretty tame as far as murders go).
     
     Another possibility is how the characters deal with crime. I think Spiderman’s crime-fighting methods lean towards PG or PG-13–he never kills anyone and I don’t think he even inflicts a lot of pain. His powers lend themselves very well to nonlethal takedowns. Batman never kills anyone either, supposedly*, but his takedowns are quite a bit more brutal. For example, in The Dark Knight, he pushes a criminal ~15 feet onto a street. The Punisher is possibly even harder on criminals.
     
     *Arkham Asylum give you explosives that can rip through walls and has you use them against people. To “stun” them. Sorry, not buying it. It’s even farther out there than the premise of a billionaire dressing up as a bat and kung fu-ing 20+ armed criminals at a time.
     
     Another possibility is how the villains are developed. I think pretty much every Batman villain is either pathologically insane and/or a hardcore sadist. Few of them (besides, say, Two-Face and the modern Mr. Freeze) have a significant precriminal history to humanize them. In contrast, a lot of Spiderman’s villains were relatively normal people that knew Peter Parker before becoming villains (such as Dr. Octopus/Otto, Lizard/Curt, Venom/Eddie Brock, Green Goblin/Norman Osborne) which helps put a face on them. Some of Spiderman’s and the Flash’s villains flirt with redeemability. For example, the situation is not hopeless for Lizard or Venom; with the right help, they might be able to cure (or at least neutralize) their reptilian/alien killing impulses. In one episode of Justice League, Flash steps in to make sure that a villain is taking his medications, which actually helps fix the problem. In Batman’s universe, pretty much none of the villains are redeemable. What little we see of the “treatment” going on at the Arkham Asylum is both inhumane and utterly ineffective.
     
     Another possibility is how you use your side-characters. For example, in Spiderman’s NYC, the police sometimes get in his face a bit, but there’s never any hard feelings and they basically mean well. In contrast, the police in Gotham run the gamut from corrupt to crazy to woefully incompetent. (Gordon is clearly fighting a losing battle, not only with outside criminals but also within his own ranks). Even when there is an authority figure that seems remotely likable and sane, like Harvey Dent, it’s only to get the audience’s hopes up.
     
     Another possibility is the traits of the heroes, of course. I’ve already mentioned the way they deal with crime and their obstacles, but I think their personality and key traits are at least as important. I think a darker hero would be more likely to be dark, brooding, asocial or antisocial, romantically dysfunctional, and just generally more troubled by what he’s seen and done. A darker hero’s backstory may be more brutal and probably presented in a rougher way. (For example, the Punisher, Batman, Spiderman and Superman lost family members, but Spiderman and Superman cope with the losses much more maturely and sanely).
     
     Some other elements that tend to be darker than not:
     –Authority figures as a major villain (i.e. governments as ethnic cleansers in X-Men)
     –Characters crazier than relatable
     –Silent/serious/brusque/paranoid vs. traits like outgoing, friendly, forgiving, understanding, quippy/light-hearted, etc.
     –Substance abuse, particularly the lows of addiction. (IE: Comic books deal with Tony Stark’s struggles with alcoholism pretty seriously–it’s messy and not terribly fun–but the PG-13 Ironman movies use his alcohol more for comedic relief and to make his life feels fun/exciting).
     –Strong cynicism. Kick-Ass comes to mind here.
     
     I hope that helped! Please let me know if I can offer any other suggestions.

239. # ekimmakon 03 Apr 2011 at 4:09 pm

     There may be a better article for this question, but a quick browse of the names doesn’t seem to reveal any, so, whatever.

     If you have a hero who is seeking to remove their powers (Rogue and Bruce Banner come to mind), chances are they’ll get it. ONly to find out later that it’s temporary, or it didn’t really work. How often can you do this before it becomes bad writing?

     (I’m asking this because when Farley is a bit outlandish to go out into public. Being a vampire and all. I’m thinking of giving her a temporary cure or something along those lines, but it appears at first to be a real cure. Which could make for some excellent emotional breakdown when it turns out to not be the case.)

240. # B. Macon 03 Apr 2011 at 9:53 pm

     In a comic book series, particularly for Marvel or DC, I think it’s VERY hard for writers to make long-term changes that would compromise the publisher’s ability to keep printing stories with the characters. For example, if a character’s powers get removed or the character dies, it’s extremely likely that things will be back to normal within a year or two. Perhaps the most extreme example of this is the third X-Men movie: Magneto gets “cured” of his mutation at the end of the third X-Men movie and he starts to regain his powers as the credits roll. His powers are gone for maybe 10 minutes of screentime.
     
     I think comic book publishers are more amenable to keeping changes that lend themselves to new stories. For example, since getting paralyzed in The Killing Joke in 1988, Barbara Gordon has been portrayed pretty consistently as a wheelchair-bound information specialist rather than as an athletic Batgirl. In terms of story potential, that’s workable–she still has a role in the Batman universe as a hacker and all-around genius assistant. In contrast, if the Hulk actually lost his powers forever, he’d probably be pretty much useless for storytelling purposes. (Bruce Banner isn’t a particularly interesting character and Marvel already has a bajillion brilliant scientists). Likewise, in most cases a dead character will either be revived or replaced.
     
     One of the principal differences between A-list comic franchises and novels is that the comic franchises are designed to be indefinite. DC and Marvel will be selling new Batman and Spiderman stories 50 years from now. In contrast, Scholastic won’t be selling new Harry Potter books or whatever 50 years from now. Novel series almost always end when the original author walks away. This makes it much easier for novel characters to permanently change, even in ways that negatively affect their future story potential (such as dying).
     
     So, keeping that crucial difference in mind, I think that novel publishers and readers are much less patient with rug-pulls like introducing something that appears to be a major change and then quickly undoing it. I’m not sure what the context of your character’s temporary cure for vampirism is like, but it could potentially be problematic. Or not. One setup that would probably totally work for me would be that the cure itself works, but for whatever reason the people offering it cut off the protagonist from additional doses. (For example, maybe they try to use the cure to blackmail her and she won’t play ball). One setup that I’d probably find more annoying than not would be “Oh no, the cure didn’t take!” for no readily apparent reason besides that actually curing the character would make the author’s life harder.
     
     I think one of the key differences between a cheap rug-pull and a development that actually feels satisfying is that the rug-pull usually brings the story back to square one without much (if any) long-term impact. For example, the cure that randomly doesn’t take probably has rather little impact on the story moving forward. In contrast, if the cure wears off because she’s been blackmailed and runs out of medicine, introducing the cure still develops the story moving forward–for example, it raises the question of whether the character will cave in to their pressure and/or whether she try to procure doses of the cure on her own.

241. # Armond H.on 10 Apr 2011 at 7:56 pm

     I had the idea to have my hero enhanced by nanomachinces infused in his body. The nanites can stimulate his muscles for limited super strength, agility, durability etc. but the other usefull ability is that the nanites produce bio-electricity that my hero can expel from his hands. Im just having trouble coming up with a way to limit him

242. # B. Macon 10 Apr 2011 at 9:06 pm

     Depending on how strong/agile/durable he is, it sounds like he’s pretty limited already. I could envision a variety of situations where I think he’d be challenged. (For example, anything relying on speed/reflexes, like a fast-moving hostage situation or a chase scene where he’s trying to apprehend as many criminals fleeing a bank robbery as possible, etc).

243. # ekimmakon 07 May 2011 at 4:56 am

     I remember at one point, it was mentioned that a team of superhumans should have powers that work well together. Could you explain further? Are we talking City of Heroes archetypes or Ultimate Alliance fusions?

244. # B. Macon 07 May 2011 at 9:38 am

     I think it’d be helpful if the character’s roles didn’t overlap too much. For example, if you had one guy that was superstrong and another guy that was indestructible, they’re probably both going to be tanks. Alternatively, if you have a character like Superman on your team, he will probably make a character like Flash redundant*. Superman can do everything Flash can and more–Flash isn’t even the fastest character on the team!
     
     *Redundant in terms of superpowers, anyway. There are other reasons you might want to have a character around.

245. # Aineon 15 May 2011 at 12:29 pm

     For my new comic (I tried to make the old one lighter and it lost all its humor X’( I’m thinking of returning to the traditional superhero genre. I have a team of two heroes (plus their friend who does hacking for them, but doesn’t where a costume. He’s the equivalent of a scoobie on BTVS-useful but no powers). There’s Tempest (\Juno\ June Sizanyuk: weather powers, there are limits to what she can do without giving herself a headache or knocking herself unconsious), and Resilience or Sandstone (Danny Calthorpe: sand based powers- similar to Sandman but he can’t morph his limbs into hammers/morningstars or grow. He can just turn into sand or hard as a rock. Strong winds/currents mess with his powers and in aquatic situations his powers are extremely limited. In addition, he has to eat a lot to make up for the inevitable loss in body mass).

246. # NotSuchAMisterEon 19 May 2011 at 10:32 am

     Hi. I’ve posted on here before as E. when I was younger and my ideas were less developed, therefore some of my characters or origins may seem similar to what I said a few years ago.

     For now I have just one question, and for lack of a better section I’ll post it here, since this seems to be the most active.

     I have ideas for various storylines involving different superpowered individuals and set in different locales. Here’s the thing though: I was wondering if it would be the right decision to all the different series exist in the same universe, e.g., one superpowered team lives on Emerald Island, another superhero is In New Haven City, and a third on another planet entirely, but all exist in the same continuity. In which case they could possibly react with each other in their respective stories. Does this seem workable, or is it too complicated?

247. # Crystalon 19 May 2011 at 4:19 pm

     @NotSuchAMisterE:
     Yes, I think that that could work. I actually think that I’d like to read that series. It would be interesting to see how the different superheroes interact with each other!

248. # Freshon 29 May 2011 at 12:32 pm

     I’m making a superhero with mass manipulation the ability to grow and shrink matter, and I need help establishing the pros and cons of the ability and various sizes.

     So different sizes for how small stuff can get, and for how large. So 5 inches, 1 inch ect and 50 feet, 100 feet.

     Just trying to work out pros/cons.

249. # B. Macon 29 May 2011 at 4:32 pm

     Well, I think a good limit on how small it could get would be something visible to the naked eye, so maybe he can’t shrink stuff smaller than around an inch tall (or about 1-2% of its original size, if you’d like to go with a proportion). If he’s visible to the naked eye while shrunken, I think it’ll be easier to challenge him. 5 inches may be too limited for him to be very versatile. (Can you think of many situations where it would be advantageous to be 5 inches tall rather than human-sized?)
     
     As for the maximum size limit, if you’re doing a comic book I’d lean towards something like maybe 20-30 feet so that you can do panels that include the giant character without ALSO making everybody else look like invisible ants. If he’s Godzilla-sized, expect to do a LOT of panels where we can only see his heel, because any panel focused on a regular-sized human pretty much needs to be at the level of Godzilla’s heel. If you’re doing a novel or a short story or some other prose, I think you have more flexibility to go bigger. In a novel, it wouldn’t matter much whether the limit was 30 or 50 or 150 feet or whatever, although it’d probably be easier to challenge the character if the limit was tighter. (For example, a 150 foot tall colossus would be able to stop a semi or maybe even a tank careening out of control, but a 30 foot giant would have more trouble with it). Generally it’s helpful to give yourself more ways to challenge the character.
     
     Another limitation that might help is how long it takes him to use his ability. If he needs (say) 30-60 seconds to complete the shrinking or growth, it’d be easier to challenge him by catching him off-guard.

250. # Freshon 29 May 2011 at 8:09 pm

     Mhmm I see what your saying, and as for smaller sizes I didn’t plan on going microscopic, but maybe the size of a penny or something.

     The Character is a villain, one of the main villains so I intend for them to be powerful, and be a challenge to the protagonists so they have to work together to defeat said character.

     I’m probably not going to do a comic,because I’m no artist. A Television program, and since this an antagonist while I want to know strengths and weaknesses. Liek how would bullets effect a 100 foot person versus how they’d effect them at 50 feet, and what size things would be in comparison to them.

251. # B. Macon 29 May 2011 at 9:55 pm

     Realistically, I think rifles would be as lethal to an 100-foot giant as it is to a 6-foot human.* The good news is that that you don’t have to be realistic. If you wanted to say that an 100-foot giant took on Godzilla-like resilience, I think that’d be okay even though biologists would probably bite their tongues. Ahem–it was believable in Godzilla even though it was probably biologically unrealistic. Readers will give you a lot of slack on realism when superpowers are involved.
     
     *Realistically, having bones 15-20 times bigger might offer some protection against lower caliber bullets, but I doubt even MASSIVE bones would prevent bullets that can majorly beat up metal plating and punch through tanks from inflicting terrible, terrible damage.
     
     …
     
     Speaking of guns, if you’re doing a cartoon show, getting guns past censors might be tricky. I’m only familiar with a few instances where handguns got on cartoons. For example, Gargoyles had a protagonist get wounded in a Very Special Episode about why kids should stay away from guns, the Gotham Police fired pistols but (as far as I can remember) never hit ANYTHING in Batman: The Animated Series and the Joker had a pistol in one episode of Justice League but didn’t fire it. On the other hand, you might get more flexibility on cannons not recognizable as handguns (i.e. a gundam cannon or Megaman’s plasma shooter) and GI Joe-style lasers and nonlethal rays (i.e. Mr. Freeze’s ice gun) are generally acceptable, I think.

252. # Freshon 29 May 2011 at 10:15 pm

     Thanks, I’m glad to know I can get away with some lack of realism. And that the bigger you get the stronger your bones are, plus the more muscle mass means more strength, and durability correct?

     I don’t have the money for a cartoon or recognition/fame xD. So for now I’ll be starting with novels. I’d like to have gun usage, not heavy gun usage but guns. I’ve always thought lasers, and stuffa re too silly.

     What should a limit on size be for the villain? This should be a powerful antagonist, but one the protagonists can beat if they band together? I’ve thought about for example heights ranging to 1000 feet?

253. # B. Macon 30 May 2011 at 4:10 am

     Hmm. Okay, bearing in mind that this is reasonably difficult science that I wouldn’t expect most readers to be familiar with (read: feel free to violate this without consequence), but one scientific problem with growth on the scale of Godzilla or something 50 feet tall would be that the character’s weight grows faster than the ability of his skeleton to support his weight. According to scientist James Kaklios, in The Physics of Superheroes, a body that became three times as wide and three times as tall would be nine times stronger, BUT the character would weigh 27 times as much. Even factoring in the extra strength of the bones/muscles, the character’s skeleton will eventually break under his own weight as he keeps growing.

     Now, the good news is that you’d probably need a scientific degree to understand that (personally, I don’t), so again please feel free to disregard it. Do whatever makes sense to you. Personally, I’d recommend making him tough enough that he’d have the advantage against the heroes. (They should really have to work to beat him, right? A greater obstacle is more dramatic to overcome).

     One minor logistical issue, though. On average, humans are about a third as wide as tall. So, if this character is 1000 feet tall, he’ll be about 300-350 feet wide, right? If you were planning on having a battle royale in a city, he’s way too wide to fit in a city street (usually in the ballpark of 75 feet at the widest). At about 12 feet per highway lane, a 1000-foot tall villain could ALMOST fit on a 26-lane highway (America’s widest).

     So, one possibility would be that the character is 225 feet tall (still absolutely enormous, so much so that he barely fits in the biggest city streets. One way that the characters might be able to turn that against him is that he wouldn’t have as much space to maneuver as something smaller, like a blue whale.

254. # Freshon 30 May 2011 at 7:02 am

     I see the science in that. I guess I’ll have to violate science in this lmao. Ah AH but in this case the character is using a superhuman ability to control their mass, wouldn’t there skeletal system now massive as with the rest of the body be able to support the body? Godzilla rapidly grow, this person changes grows/shrinks every aspect of them. I see what the Physics dude was saying, but it’s different from rapid growing? (Correct me If I’m wrong I’m no science major haha.)

     Yes, the heroes the main one’s have to work together, I’m planning a little battle royale at the end where they work together, and manage to bring this Goliath down. I just don’t want a character where one character can hog all the spotlight, and beat the villain with ease.

     mhmm I can somehow see how 1000 foot person, are you sure they’d be 300 feet wide? I mean how wide was Godzilla, and what if it’s like Attack of the 50 foot Woman where their mass makes them taller, and was she wider in the film I forget. What if they get bigger but have a similar width then normal size. Wouldn’t their foot just destroy massive parts of a street with one step? Plus 1000 foot is the equivalent theyt’d look like a human the size of the empire state building/eiffle tower correct ??Anyway I see your point about keeping it in the 100′s tho.

     The Characters using his size against him, that sounds like a good idea, and would be funny as that could be a funny way to piss the villain off lmfao. I could write some humour in this, but I’m thinking the Military can take down someone in the hundreds with their heavier bombs, while someone in the 1000′s can wis-tand more serious harm, since by my estiates a person/suv would be about hte size of a 1000 foot person’s finger nail, but I’m here for advice so whatever you say I’m listening.

     And I have question on another power. Energy Absorbtion like absorbing kinetic, solar, thermal, whart are some other energies an energy manipulator can use so far I’ve thought of
     Kinetic Energy
     Thermal Energy
     Solar Energy
     Gravitational Energy.
     Nuclear Energy.

     But I can’t think of any others.

255. # B. Macon 01 Jun 2011 at 3:02 am

     “I see the science in that. I guess I’ll have to violate science in this lmao.” That’s completely acceptable. I mean, it’s a cartoon, right? I doubt scientists are a major part of your target audience.
     
     “I mean, how wide was Godzilla?” Well, one version of Godzilla was 100 meters (~320 feet) tall, and another was half of that (roughly the size of the Statue of Liberty). So if his proportions are roughly human, he’d be about 100 or 50 feet wide. (I’m looking at a picture of him and it looks like he’s a bit wider at the base than most humans are).
     
     …
     
     If you’re planning on urban combat, 1000 feet would be rather tall. As a measure of comparison, the tallest building in the United States, the Sears Tower, is 1500 feet. You don’t need to be realistic, but there aren’t that many spaces in a city where you could just fit 2/3 of a Sears Tower without flattening several buildings in the way. However, if you’re doing a cartoon, one difficulty of going too tall is that it’ll make it harder for your artists to illustrate a urban fight without making the streets so wide it looks weird. (That’s something your audience might actually be able to notice–if you took a city and made the streets several times as large so that a really tall villain could fit, I think it’d look off even to some kids).

256. # SpazTazon 06 Jun 2011 at 3:03 pm

     hey,

     I got an original character for a fanfiction, X-Men, and she got her mutation from another mutant when he was dying. He could deconstruct, alter and reconstruct DNA, organic matter and non-organic matter.

     She got almost the same mutation as him, but she can only deconstruct and reconstruct organic and non-organic matter. Something similair to disintegration. She has some control over it, but if she loses her temper she can do some serious damage.

     Not only to others but also on her own body, nosebleeds and major headaches if she uses it for long periods of time and even disintegrating her own body when she uses everything she got.

     Let me know what you guys think about it and if I should change something.

257. # B. Macon 06 Jun 2011 at 6:18 pm

     I think the superpower is okay, but just don’t forget the character’s personality.

258. # Marquison 08 Jun 2011 at 5:30 pm

     Rather than simply using powers in the most obvious of ways i like to try and think of other ways the powers can be used.
     For example( This example is taken from my story) if a character had the power to absorb heat and convert it into energy blast. I would think how could i use this in a more complicated or advanced way.Since the charcter is absorbing heat the temperature would drop drastically which could make the character appear to have an ice ability. At the same time if one could change the temperature in the air from hot to cold or vise versa this difference in air temperature would effect the wind pressure which would make the character appear to have wind based powers. At the same time most powers are heat based so if the character absorbed the heat in a fireball it would make the character appear to have absorbtion powers. And finally since he could convert the heat energy into actual blast it would appear as if he had multiple powers rather than just one.

     All in all my point is that depending on how you chose to look at it. your character could truly improvise any situation ,all you have to do as his or/her’s creator is think about how a power can be used differently depending on the circumstances. I hope this helps anyone that feels like their characters powers just arent enough or maybe too weak or simple. Its all how you look at it.

259. # Marquison 08 Jun 2011 at 5:42 pm

     Also many people dislike pyromancy. ( I dont truly like it myself seeing as it is very destructive but I’d still use it in a story just not as my main characters power)
     I’m writing this as a sort of add on to my previous comment. Rather than simply using pyromancy to shoot fireballs and what not. Why not make where the character could actually mold the flame . Maybe he could create a claw made of fire and use it to do battle. Another example would be to use it as a sort of discharge ( another example from my story just not with fire) Lets say your character is sorrounded by many enemies and his/ her allies are not around.( also bystanders) What if he/ she simply gathered together the flame around his/her body and released the fire to clear out multiple enemies with one fell swoop. Maybe by swirling the flames in a circle or expanding the flames to make a flat burning disc he/she could use the flames as a shield or even throw the flaming disc similar to the destructo disc used by krillin in DBZ. Its also a good idea to pay attention to physics a spinning disc of fire wouldnt slice through an object but would explode on contact.

     Anyway just remeber to think about powers and how they can be used. If you have any questions or just need help with a certain power you want to be better post them on my review forum.

260. # ekimmakon 22 Jun 2011 at 4:23 am

     A very distinguished power:
     A gothic, depressed girl with zero sense of humour. However, when she starts laughing, she turns into a genki girl with superspeed and ice powers (no one’s sure about the ice part, when they ask, she replies “How else could I keep my drinks cold?”). Her powers and personality fade when she starts to feel depressed again.

     It’s not something I’d work with, but I thought it was an interesting take on distinguishing someone’s powers via personality shift.

261. # Comicbookguy117on 23 Jun 2011 at 8:29 am

     Hey guys. I’m working with an idea now that giving me a little trouble and I i’d some opinions, if that’s ok. So I’ve got this government agency that works for global stability and I’ve got this idea that, to achieve that goal, they begin to develope a series of suits or powered armor. Now some of these suits are develoed to aid in normal jobs such as deforestation and firefighting. Some are developed for the military. But for the life of me I can’t think of a large number of jobs that a suit of powered armor would be practical enough to build for. So does anyone have any suggestions?

262. # B. Macon 23 Jun 2011 at 9:49 am

     “Some are developed for the military. But for the life of me I can’t think of a large number of jobs that a suit of powered armor would be practical enough to build for.”
     
     –Hazardous conditions (fires, the moon, intense biohazards like working on Ebola patients, deepsea exploration, etc).
     –Any position involving a lot of violence (soldiers, SWAT police, peacekeepers, IED/ordnance disposal, civilians doing dangerous fieldwork in war zones or disaster relief like Iraqi census-takers, etc).
     –Anywhere you’d need a computer or mechanical assistance immediately available but holding one was not practical. For example, defusing bombs or possibly doing surgery.
     
     If you wanted, you could do a set of more specialized suits based on the circumstances. For example, a surgical powersuit would probably not have much armor–the main point of having one in an ER would probably be to enhance the user’s precision and maybe give him/her immediate access to various computer programs.

263. # Samuelon 14 Jul 2011 at 5:33 pm

     I’m writing a novel where my protagonist is a villain trying to get revenge against another villain. He has extreme elemental control; so he can create tidal waves and and make giant pillars of rock. He has the four basic elements (fire, earth, water and air). he breathe underwater and fly. As his major weakness i decided that if he does something to drastic with his powers then he’ll lose control, kind of like Phoenix from the X-Men.

     There’s also another character that can use magic and teleport. I don’t know what his limits are yet or what exactly he can do with his powers but i think he should be able to create objects from thin air. Kind of like Daniel-X by James Patterson. I don’t want that to be a huge part of his powers though. I also don’t know what type of weakness he should have.

     Another character; what kind of weakness can a man that can duplicate himself have? He has an infinite amount of duplicates and there controlled with a “hive mind”. I’ve also made him to be able to duplicate small inanimate objects like a gun or clothes but not a motorcycle.

     As the antagonist i have a necromancer that is quite powerful. but again i don’t know limits or weaknesses. i think he can only raise the dead that actually exist close by, not just have a random skeleton jump out if your in a building. I’d also like him to be able to mash skeletons together and make a dragon but i don’t know if that’s a good idea or not.

     I’d appreciate any comments you have on any of the stuff i wrote.

264. # B. Macon 14 Jul 2011 at 6:26 pm

     “What kind of weakness can a man that can duplicate himself have? He has an infinite amount of duplicates and they’re controlled with a hive mind.” Maybe if he duplicates too many, they get harder to control and/or coordinate. Perhaps he runs the risk that they will become less useful in combat because the hive mind can only handle so many. (And/or perhaps one of them goes rogue on him and convinces himself that HE’S the real one).
     
     I think it might help to narrow the protagonist’s powers or limit them in some other way. For example, perhaps there’s some cost to him even if he’s doing something relatively small with his powers. (For some ideas of potential costs, please see #2 here).

265. # Muggleon 23 Jul 2011 at 1:34 am

     gravity control is a good one. You can control the gravity in an area and you can make everything in there lighter (so you can lift really heavy things like cars and stuff, it looks like super-strength but its not) heavier or even levitate (including yourself), invert it so you can walk on ceilings and walls without the blood rushing to your head, and choose to absorb it when you please to make yourself a little stronger. oh and you can jump around like your on the moon
     cons: emotions are involed (like with any power) so strong emotions can cause the gravity near you to turn off or become too great, etc…

266. # invader-mynaon 26 Jul 2011 at 1:16 pm

     What do you think of a power like this? http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/PaperMaster

267. # B. Macon 26 Jul 2011 at 2:41 pm

     I’m a fan! I mentioned the paper powers in Read or Die here. It strikes me as a versatile power with a lot of potential for memorable visuals.
     
     PS: It’s a lot more interesting to see a librarian flying on a giant paper airplane than Superman or Angel flying with actual flight powers. If the character has to slap together a solution, I think it’s more creative and dangerous/suspenseful.

268. # invader-mynaon 26 Jul 2011 at 3:36 pm

     Thanks! ^.^ I really want to use it, it’s such a cool power to me (origami ninja stars? YES!) but my only aversion, is that paper is kinda weak as a power. It can’t cut into skin very well, not very good for defensive either, etc. However, the main villain in this particular story is pyrokinetic, so it struck me that if the hero made like a bunch of ninja stars or something, and the pyro got the bright idea to light them thinking they’d crumple, it would give the hero an opportunity to use them as flaming projectiles…

269. # From the Soulon 28 Jul 2011 at 7:54 pm

     So it feels a bit weird commenting on this ultra long forum almost 4 years after the article was written, but here it goes. I have these characters:

     1. An ex-boxer from Russia, male, who isn’t the brightest (average intelligence) with anger issues and an anti-mutant sister (who knows all of the characters have superhuman abilities. She feels this way because Nikolai had accidentally turned her fiance into a quadriplegic) He has the ability I call Power Surge (though it probably exists elsewhere), Nikolai ability is to either give a boost to a superhuman’s ability (allow a teleporter to port further, power up an energy beam by 100x or so, allows a healer to heal more of a person, etc) or cause their ability to falter (Force field becomes too weak, stop an energy beam as it’s being released, cancel self-healing, etc) and even (with contact and much concentration) totally cancel their ability for 1 hour. His abilities also power up a regular human’s physical abilities (reflexes, agility, stamina, etc. Though cannot cause super strength and things like that) but if he uses the draining side on a human, he can cause paralysis, comas, or even death. Also, his power is initiated by eye contact or touch, but he has control over the touching aspect of his powers (can’t say the same for eye contact)

     2. A worldly Hispanic genius, female, with a photographic memory (this causes her short term memory to suffer occasionally) but is overly emotional named Magdalena “Lena.” Her ability is 100% knowledge of a person’s body. This allows her to visualize all the major organs in a person’s body, the pressure points, joints, and bones after 1 minute of processessing. She can use this ability to read a person’s physical movement and after 30 seconds of processessing, be able to know exactly how to replicate their movement (this is kind of like adoptive muscle memory) but due to her occasional short term memory issues, can only use the move 1 day after she processes it (but can call upon this at any time thereafter, due to her photographic memory) Lena can also use this ability to think of the 10 most probable moves the person will use next.

     3. A concert violinist, male, somewhat of a coward though he talks big, who suffers a inferiority complex because he is always compared to his boxer cousin (character 1, Nikolai) who also has the girl he wants (Character 2, Lena) and an ability somewhat similar to his (but in his eyes, more useful than his own ability.) He has the superhuman ability to activate and deactivate mechanical, electronic, and even human objects. If he turns something on (but only if it is electronic) he can control it for up to 20 minutes. By human objects, he can power up or disable a person’s 5 senses, sense of balance or coordination, and ability to feel pain. He can use this ability on himself by turning off his ability to feel pain (physical pain, and not emotional pain and is still worn down by the injuries he receives) and power up one of his five senses to 100% at the expense of the other (Hearing is 100% but he cannot see, for example)

     So I know I haven’t provided everything about these characters, but I have just a few questions about this three characters. Will the combination of abilities be combat worthy, both offensively and defensively? A non-cliched group of characters? Overpowered abilities? And don’t think that because Aleksander (aka Character 3) has so much disdain for his cousin, that he’s going to become a villain “just to prove himself” He’s a different fate.

     Yeah…if anyone wants to answer this query, go ahead!

270. # B. Macon 29 Jul 2011 at 12:04 am

     Hello, From the Soul.
     
     –In a superhero story, I would recommend being very careful about an ability to cancel out other people’s powers, particularly if the character has other powers. (One limitation on power-cancelers that I’ve found helpful is that if they don’t have any other powers, they can be overwhelmed by an unpowered foe that’s better-trained and/or better-armed). Depending on how much he’s able to weaken other people’s powers, he could be very difficult to challenge, which would probably make the story less dramatic. Since he already has several other powers that are probably more combat-worthy than what the other characters are working with, it might even be worth considering eliminating the power-cancellation altogether.
     
     –I’d recommend being a bit more consistent about how much more powerful he can charge people up. “allow a teleporter to port further” and “allows a healer to heal more of a person” sounds like he’s making a fairly modest improvement, but “power up an energy beam by 100x or so” sounds like a vast improvement. I’d recommend going with a weaker charge-up because it’s just one of his abilities.
     
     –I think it’s a bit cliche to make the Latina overly emotional. For example, Heroes already had one. I don’t feel like it ties into the rest of her character traits and/or background very smoothly, either.
     
     –”Will the combination of abilities be combat-worthy, both offensively and defensively?” I think Aleksander will have trouble contributing in combat, but that might be thematically appropriate. (He’s not the boxer, after all). In time, maybe he gets REALLY creative with his powers and can make them work well in battle.
     
     –I think Aleksander’s powers could be simplified somewhat. For example, instead of “mechanical, electronic and even human objects,” I’d recommend making it electricity, including the impulses from the eyes to the optic nerve or whatever. I think that’ll make it a bit more coherent. (Otherwise, what’s the connection between his ability to activate/deactivate mechanical and electronic objects and human senses?)
     
     –I see some promising signs of personality, but it’s hard to tell from a description of this length. Anyway, the relationship triangle sounds interesting.

271. # From the Soulon 29 Jul 2011 at 12:05 pm

     Thank you for answering so quickly. I total see what you are saying about the power-cancellation thing, so I took that out altogether. WIith the boosting part of his abilities, the 100x was just a random number so that’s changed to powered up by 15%.

     Yeah, over-emotional Hispanic thing may seem overdone so, would switching it to her having slight Asberger’s (pardon the horrible spelling on that) be a good fix?

     With Aleksander, I aslo had the idea of him being able to be able to switch an object nearby or in his possession with another object either nearby or in another’s possession, but had felt that it didn’t really fit with the other characters. Or maybe could just have the ability to power up or disable a person’s 5 senses, sense of balance or coordination, and ability to feel pain. He can use this ability on himself by turning off his ability to feel pain (physical pain, and not emotional pain and is still worn down by the injuries he receives) and power up one of his five senses to 100% at the expense of the other (Hearing is 100% but he cannot see, for example) Any suggestions on that?

     I do have their entire personalities mapped out, and it IS possible for me to share those on here (yeah reeeal sacrifice) so if that’d help I’ll share it.

     Again thanks

272. # Phantomon 29 Jul 2011 at 6:10 pm

     Hay, B. Mac I have a question concerning plot structure. Say you have a main character that knows some of his powers but not that he has more that are dormant. Shortly after the character is established. He finds out that his powers are not from a mutation or anything like that, but he is actualy part demon. Once he finds this out, he is exposed to another side of our world seldom seen by humans. After which his new powers become active, and he must control the as new powers. At the same time learn to service in his new twisted reality.

     Do you think that would be a good sell for a plot?

273. # B. Macon 29 Jul 2011 at 6:49 pm

     “Say you have a main character that knows some of his powers but not that he has more that are dormant.” Does he have any idea what is causing the superpowers? (For example, if there are mutants in-story, he might assume he’s a mutant).
     
     “Once he finds out [that he's part-demon], he is exposed to another side of our world seldom seen by humans. After which his new powers become active, and he must control the as new powers. At the same time learn to service in his new twisted reality.”
     
     It sounds like it could be workable. I think I’d be more intrigued if the setup had the main character doing something interesting and/or making interesting choices and/or having something at stake. It might help to use a few sentences going into specifics about his “service in his new, twisted reality.”

274. # B. Macon 29 Jul 2011 at 7:06 pm

     From the Soul, I think Asperger’s would be interesting.
     
     “With Aleksander, I also had the idea of him being able to be able to switch an object nearby or in his possession with another object either nearby or in another’s possession, but had felt that it didn’t really fit with the other characters. Or maybe could just have the ability to power up or disable a person’s 5 senses, sense of balance or coordination, and ability to feel pain. He can use this ability on himself by turning off his ability to feel pain (physical pain, and not emotional pain and is still worn down by the injuries he receives) and power up one of his five senses at the expense of the other (if he could hear extremely well, he could not see, for example). Any suggestions on that?”
     
     If he can power up his sense of balance and coordination, I suspect he’ll be at least somewhat useful in combat.
     
     One thing I really like about just having a power influencing the senses, balance, coordination and pain-sensitivity is that it feels pretty coherent to me.

275. # From the Soulon 29 Jul 2011 at 8:57 pm

     Okay gotcha.

     “One thing I really like about just having a power influencing the senses, balance, coordination and pain-sensitivity is that it feels pretty coherent to me.”
     I guess I found Aleksander’s concrete ability. And yes, I’ll have him power up his own sense of balance and coordination, so he atleast has SOME use in combat.

     I switched Lena’s personality. However, I’m not sure if it turned out well…

     19 years of age, female, Hispanic, and she also has mild Asperger’s Syndrome. Lena speaks without contractions, does not easily understand the emotions of jealousy, pride, greed, or lust, and is somewhat obsessed with researching things she’s never heard of, including a few pop culture references. She likes to go to movies, the library, and also public debates/political gatherings. Growing up with a low-level senator of a father, Lena had to get used to being in the public eye and putting on a good girl image. Because of her condition, she didn’t become a bad girl to spite her father, found it hard to maintain a conversation without having the need to look something up, but managed to seem less socially awkward then she might have. Lena is not a fan of meeting new people, and subconsciously has something against people of a heavier than average weight. She blinks a little too fast, her eyes do not focus on one thing for long, and also she seems like she has a short attention span. When Lena was 9, she read the dictionary for fun and knows almost every word’s approximate definition. She can get stressed easily and also has occasional issues with falling asleep. Lena does comprehend being in love, and is in love with Nikolai, though she may have issues showing it. She only feels totally comfortable meeting new people when she is with Nikolai, and he can help her sleep more easily. She and Aleksander, to her, have a friend-friend relationship, and she tells him a lot of her secrets. Due to her ability and her photographic memory, she has a few issues with her short term memory.

     So yeah….Thanks for your wonderful input! (Though I suppose I still found a way to weasel in one more thing for you to critique)

276. # Shockwaveon 01 Aug 2011 at 12:34 pm

     I have a character who has the ability to manipulate the energy of anything made of paper. This means she can set it on fire, charge it with electricity, or mold it into something entirely different. The only weakness is that what she can alter about it is restricted by its size and the amount of energy available for her to manipulate. I’m afraid this is too powerful, or too “Gambit-like” to use though.

277. # Rogon 07 Aug 2011 at 1:35 am

     I think i’m having a bit of trouble trying to mae sense of a self-liquifying character. he’s suppose to be a hero, but I don’t exacly know how he’s going to work. what would happn if he lost some mass of himself, or how his shapeshifting would work. would you be able to help me on this

278. # B. Macon 07 Aug 2011 at 3:14 am

     For the most part, I’d recommend doing whatever you feel comfortable with.
     
     If you wanted it to be a problem that he lost mass, that could work. Maybe something like heat or unusually strong wind causes him to dehydrate/lose mass, which limits his powers or causes other problems for him. If you didn’t want mass to be a problem for him, maybe his body just naturally regenerates mass. (Humans naturally shed about 500 million skin cells per day–the epidermis is constantly being rebuilt from ingested material).
     
     As for shapeshifting, I’m guessing that he has the ability to control the way his liquid molecules move and solidify them into a body, right? So maybe he shapeshifts by rearranging and solidifying his molecules. Again, depending on your preferences, you could work in a mass limitation here. Maybe he’s limited to forms that have roughly the same mass as his regular form, so he can’t do something the size of an elephant. Alternately, if you wanted to give him larger forms, maybe he can absorb excess moisture from the air and use that to make forms bigger than he usually is. If he wanted to do something really small, he’d probably have to leave some liquid behind (or get really dense), but he could just grab more water from the air when he was ready to return to normal size.

279. # Basilon 22 Aug 2011 at 7:29 pm

     I have to ask, is it possible to have a character with similar powers and a similar theme to Spider-Man without him or her being a complete ripoff?

     I ask because I’ve had similar ideas for characters years ago, before I even really knew who the heck Spidey was (I never read many comic books as a kid). Also, I really like his general powerset – not too strong, not too fast, able to sense danger but not to a degree where he’s untouchable, etc.

     Anyway, just thought I’d ask.

280. # Brian McKenzie (B. Mac)on 22 Aug 2011 at 9:27 pm

     “I have to ask, is it possible to have a character with similar powers and a similar theme to Spider-Man without him or her being a complete ripoff?”
     
     –I think you’re totally fine on agility and strength. Those are generic powers. But the ability to sense danger is fairly unique to Spiderman. Even though you developed the idea independently, prospective readers will not know that and may conclude that the older, much better-known character is being ripped off.
     
     –I’m not sure what you mean by a similar theme to Spider-Man. If you mean that the character gets his powers in any way related to spiders or that his superpowers are connected by something related to spiders, I would highly recommend considering alternatives. Like slinging webs, spider-themed powers are SO distinct to the Spiderman universe that I think it’d be really hard to use them without making prospective readers think it was a ripoff.
     
     –What’s the connection between agility/strength and the ability to sense danger? The Spiderman series tries to connect the two by saying that they’re both abilities related to spiders, which fits with the character’s origin. How would your character’s powers be connected? I think that a unique connection could soften the ripoff concerns. (For example, I think Star Wars Jedi sometimes get premonitions from their connection with the Force. That strikes me as unique enough that the similarity between the two danger-senses is not immediately obvious). For example, if the character’s power to detect danger is not supernatural and is just a careful attention to detail (situational awareness), I think you’d be TOTALLY fine.
     
     –Marvel’s legal department is aggressive about protecting its characters, and Spiderman is a billion-dollar franchise.
     
     –If the ability is supernatural, what is the symptom that alerts the protagonist? Spiderman is alerted to danger when he gets a tingling sensation or his perception of color goes haywire. I would recommend coming up with a different mechanism(s).

281. # Basilon 22 Aug 2011 at 9:47 pm

     Okay, that makes sense. I appreciate it.

     By ‘similar theme’ I meant kinda like Arana or Mohinder Suresh or something insectoid. But I get that it’s hard to do something even vaguely similar without flirting with a lawsuit.

     In the few characters I’ve had that could sense danger, it was always in a nebulous way, only really noticeable as a niggling gut feeling, rather than a direct ‘spider-sense is tingling’ type of thing. And I usually had it granted as sort-of a souped-up intuition. But then that runs the risk of either being not connected to the other powers at all, or being just cliche, or both.

     I gave up on the web-slinging (or just swinging) part long ago. Other than the occasional use of a borrowed grappling gun, the only swinging my character would have been doing was on a swingset.

     Anyway, thanks for the help. Take care.

282. # Brian McKenzie (B. Mac)on 23 Aug 2011 at 2:00 am

     “But I get that it’s hard to do something even vaguely similar without flirting with a lawsuit.” Well, there are exceptions. For example, if your work is a parody of Spiderman or heroes like Spiderman, that could count as “fair use” of copyrighted material in the U.S.

283. # Davidon 09 Sep 2011 at 3:59 pm

     Like my character for example can use the power of elements and he has a great skill with knives and blades

     and my other character is half cyborg armor witch he can shoot plazma beams and blasts but he has a virus in his armor so when he drains power from humans he has no controll over friends and enimes but he is frikin powerful

284. # Hollyon 19 Sep 2011 at 7:17 pm

     So, I dreamed a new power that I’ve never heard of before, the ‘Commonplace’ power. It effects both animate and inanimate objects, and makes them ‘think’ that ther person who has this power is normal in any given situation, despite their appearance. (Like a hero amung military-dressed minions would be considered commonplace and not anything to worry about, and machines would accept thier codes, prints, and eyescans as if they were always in their databanks)

285. # Breatheon 25 Sep 2011 at 7:49 pm

     I’ve been told countless times that teleportation is an unfair power because it’s hard to beat (or something along those lines) and has barely any drawbacks (again, something along those lines at least.) Would the following list of drawbacks help out with toning down the “cheating”

     -Must be to a place either in her line of vision or where she has left a phsycial marker behind (Old jewlery, library card, concrete imprint, etc)
     -Like Shadowcat’s phasing, they can only teleport as long as they hold their breath (so like a 30 second or so interval between each ‘port)
     -If they do not concentrate, they could leave behind part of their body (kind of like splinching from Harry Potter)
     -Sudden movements (sneezing, flinching, etc) cause them to randomly teleport to somewhere in their line of vision
     -If there is someone or something right where they are teleporting, they might combine with each other (Their arm sticking out of that person’s body or the object, for example)
     -If they teleport somewhere more than 5 miles away, they are literally paralyzed for two minutes

     So yeah, just wondering if that list of drawbacks helps balance out the advantages of teleporting (or if teleporting is “cheating,” in the first place)

286. # CCOlsonon 05 Oct 2011 at 6:00 pm

     I’ve been thinking about teleportation and one thing might be to think of HOW this ability functions. I know that the most common explanation is “it’s secretly magical and defies all physics” but if we come up with some physical mechanisms for a power we can immediately get some drawbacks.

     So, one way to teleport would be to spontaneously generate, enter and exit a wormhole between oneself and the target location. Theoretically, this is possible, but it would have some drawbacks.

     To start with, creating a wormhole would require a ridiculous amount of energy. Like, New York’s powergrid ridiculous, at least. Sure, the energy for superpowers comes from somewhere, but this immediately suggests that someone who teleports via wormhole might get far more tired from one wormhole that goes a few miles in a single instant than another hero would by cutting through fifty feet of steel with his eye lasers (as the energy required for the two acts is vastly different, despite the eye-laser feat appearing more difficult).

     Additionally, a wormhole is created by folding the fabric of spacetime together between two points with an intense concentration of gravity (like a quantum singularity), then punching a passable hole through that connection and spreading it open. This could have rather devastating implications for everything surrounding the entry and exit point of the wormhole, perhaps warping and destabilizing buildings, attracting unanchored objects toward the point of teleportation at a hundred-gravities of accelleration for the fraction of a second it takes to teleport, and so on.

     Also, one way of lessening the power consumed by making a wormhole is to only make a tiny wormhole and then somehow fit the object, or person, in question through that tiny opening. This would entail some survivable form of spatial compression, or perhaps derezzing, which would probably be extremely disorienting/discomforting/disconcerting, such that the person teleporting ends up puking their guts out on the other side of the teleport 4 times out of 5.

     If wormholes don’t intrigue you, let’s try hyperspace (though there are many interpretations of what, exactly, hyperspace is). In this one, we’ll assume that hyperspace means entering a higher dimension. In this concept, every point of existence that exists in the normal dimension also has a matching point in hyperspace, except that the points in hyperspace are all somehow closer together.

     To illustrate, let’s say our teleporter, Bob, wants to get from point A to point B. In our dimension, point A and point B are 100 meters apart. However, in hyperspace, point A and point B are only 1 centimeter apart. Bob’s power takes him into hyperspace at point A, then immediately opens a way out at point B, which is conveniently almost right on top of point A as far as Bob is concerned, and drops him out back in our regular dimension, 100 meters from his original location.

     Fairly straightforward. What are the drawbacks?

     Well… What is hyperspace like?

     Is it a vacuum? If it is, then even an instant of exposure is going to be VERY uncomfortable, and the farther Bob needs to teleport, the MORE uncomfortable it’s going to get, until it becomes harmful or fatal.

     Is it energetic? If hyperspace is much smaller than our universe, but contains the same amount of energy in some form, then it might leave Bob a little singed every time he goes through it unprotected.

     It it occupied? What if hyperspace in your world is like hyperspace in Warhammer 40k? THAT hyperspace is filled with demons and chaos deities who want nothing more than to destroy or enslave all life in the universe. You CAN teleport through that hyperspace, but its not something most people would ever consider fun, or safe, or even worth doing except in the most dire of circumstances.

     On a completely different front, teleportation is very easy to beat. Like most active, non-sensory powers, it is completely useless against a surprise attack. Example: a .50 cal sniper round to the back of the head.

     Also, you can have an enemy with an area-effect power that nullifies other powers, or that stabilizes space preventing all powers based on spatial distortion.

     Or you can have a villain whose base is set up to immediately taze/shoot/vaporize anyone who teleports in.

     Or the villain can kidnap loved ones and keep them hostage somewhere the teleporter doesn’t know how to get to.

     As long as your teleporter doesn’t have omniscient teleporting he CAN be beaten. And even if he does have omniscient teleporting, he has to sleep sometime, somewhere, and GPS tracking devices have become very small and easy to attach to people.

287. # Halleon 08 Oct 2011 at 7:31 pm

     I’m creating a villain and hero.
     Hero: Anni, she has pyrokenisis. She can control fire.
     Weekness: Water (duh)
     Past: She was orphaned at a young age. Her family was killed by the Dark Angle. She has been looking for Dark Angel for years.

     Villain: Dark Angel, she posses the ability of darkness. (origanal power) She can bring back the dead, (in skeleton form) shoot knives out of her wrists, and fly. (wings)
     Weekness: Unknown
     Past: When she was young she was killed. She was an evil angel. So she became “Dark”. She has been killing out of anger.

     Any suggestions on powers, weekness, anything.
     Thanks!

288. # B. McKenzieon 09 Oct 2011 at 2:32 am

     Some thoughts that come to mind:
     
     –”She was an evil angel. So she became ‘Dark.’” Why did she become evil? I feel like it might help to flesh out her motivations here to make her a more three-dimensional villain. In my opinion, even the most heinous people truly believe that they’re doing something good for somebody. So, unless she woke up one day and decided to be evil, it might help to think about what she’s trying to do that she thinks is good.
     
     –What is DA’s personality like? How is she different than other evil characters? (For example, Hannibal Lecter is distinct from most evil characters because he’s notably brilliant and wry–also, his background as a psychologist is unexpected for a serial killer and helps give him an interesting role in a story about tracking another serial killer).
     
     –What’s Anni’s personality like? How is she different than other heroes, especially other heroes with slain parents? What sort of major choices does she make and why? (One that comes to mind: She decides to look for DA, whereas most of DA’s victims are probably not that brave).
     
     –I’d recommend being careful with making one element weak against another. I feel that sort of classification fits more smoothly in video games.
     
     –I think DA’s name could be more unique. Replacing Dark with a more distinctive term implying darkness or corruption might help. Alternately, replacing Angel with a more unique term tied to the character and her personality might help. Another option would be sharpening the contrast between the two words in the title. (Maybe something like Dark Guardian if she sees herself as protecting something?). I won’t even try to tie this into anything, but some over-the-top football nicknames might include the Nigerian Nightmare, the Dark Wanderer, the Hooded Stranger (no, not Bill Belichick), the Green Reapers, etc.

289. # Halleon 09 Oct 2011 at 3:21 pm

     Thank you.
     Well the bio’s were just an example. I have much more details and stuff. But, should Dark Angel have a weakness? Since she is already dead, is there anything anyone can do to her?
     (I’m not too good at this… -_-)

     Thank You!!!

290. # B. McKenzieon 09 Oct 2011 at 6:55 pm

     “Since she is already dead, is there anything anyone can do to her?” Well, presumably there will be SOME way for the hero to pursue revenge against her. It may or may not entail beating DA directly in combat. For example, in the first two Terminator films, I feel the main goal for the protagonists is surviving rather than destroying the Terminator. In the second film, the heroes try to stop the Terminators from ever getting invented by sabotaging the company that is trying to make them. If DA gets her power through a plot device, like an artifact or something, maybe losing the artifact (or getting it unpowered somehow) is DA’s weakness.
     
     “(I’m not too good at this… -_-)” I wouldn’t worry about that too much. Just keep practicing and it’ll get better. Writing is a learning process and I feel that my own writing has gotten demonstrably better in the past 2-3 years.

291. # Halleon 10 Oct 2011 at 2:17 pm

     OMG! Thank you so much for your help. You have no idea how grateful I am.

     If DA has a power source, should it be so obvious that you wouldn’t think of. Or should it be very unknown? I was thinking, a stone. Like a certain black and red stone found only in New Zealand. And it holds the power of her. And if destroyed, she will become mortal, but still hold all of her abilities to fight and her powers. So them Anni would have a chance of hurting or even killing DA…

292. # ShyVioletson 11 Oct 2011 at 10:05 pm

     Hello everyone!

     I’ve been working on ideas for a superhero novel for quite a while and have finally got them to the point they might actually be worth someone reading.

     I need help with the powers of my main character. She has a super advanced form a eye sight that allows her to see all sorts of things like lies, illness, pregnancy, poison in water or food and other stuff like that. She can also track people by the the unique energy signature every living person gives off and has a Macgiver (my apologies for not knowing how to spell it) like resourcefulness.

     Generally, these abilities work very well for finding/tracking/searching and as far as the resourcefulness goes, for occasionally blowing stuff up. What she needs a quick access battle ready power that will allow her to defend herself in a pinch. I was thinking something to do wither her eyes since thats where her powers are based. I also want it to be kind of subtle and small because it fits more with the story and her personality.

     Many thanks,
     ShyViolets

     PS: any and all suggestions are welcome

293. # B. McKenzieon 12 Oct 2011 at 6:39 am

     Hmm. I feel that most combat powers (eye-rays or otherwise) would probably make her visual acuity feel forgettable. One possibility that comes to mind is that her combat skills are not supernatural (maybe she’s just generically tough and/or skilled at armed or unarmed combat).

294. # CCOlsonon 12 Oct 2011 at 10:22 am

     Another possible source for the combat ability, if she can perceive lies (you could actually do this, mostly, if you could read a person’s physiological responses nearly perfectly. Isaac Asimov had a little girl in Nemesis who could do this) is that she perceives the subtle shifts in posture, muscle tension and direction of motion that forecast an enemy’s attacks.

295. # B. McKenzieon 12 Oct 2011 at 2:18 pm

     Ah, I like that, CCOlsen. It ties in very nicely with the enhanced perception.

296. # ShyVioletson 14 Oct 2011 at 12:48 am

     I think I’m going to make her somewhat naturally tough and actually learn to fight properly along the way which hopefully will provide opportunities for character growth. I plan for her to start out as someone who kind of becomes a hero by accident and ends up growing into her role. I feel like it will be a lot more interesting to have a hero that defeats a much stronger villain using mostly intelligence and resourcefulness than having a very powerful hero take out the bad guys easily. Plus her sight abilities are very important and having those be over shadowed by a combat power would be a shame.

297. # ShyVioletson 14 Oct 2011 at 12:58 am

     to CCOlson’s suggestion: I’m thinking I can use a slightly altered version of that. She can see the subtle movement so she can tell that something is coming and as she trains to fight she can also learn what EXACTLY certain muscle movements mean so she can counter them effectively.

298. # CCOlsonon 14 Oct 2011 at 8:03 pm

     B. Mac, have you written an article on ordinary uses for superpowers? Like Mr. Fantastic stretching his face to shave it? Or the superpowered wrecking company in Ultimate Spiderman?

     These things don’t beat the badguys, but they do make the world and characters seem more real.

299. # ShyVioletson 18 Oct 2011 at 6:36 am

     What would an interesting power for a thief be?

300. # CCOlsonon 18 Oct 2011 at 11:19 am

     Define “interesting”.

     Interesting as in Useful?

     Interesting as in Funny?

     Interesting as in “How does this help out a thief in any way?”

301. # B. McKenzieon 18 Oct 2011 at 7:52 pm

     Well, I feel the most cliche powers for a thief would be something like phasing, teleportation, invisibility/stealth/camouflage, etc. I’d also pass on those powers because I feel like they tend to make it too easy for the character to get away if things go wrong, which will probably make the thief’s work less interesting. (In contrast, a character like Catwoman has more to worry about and has to be more clever than JUST turning on a superpower to enter or escape).
     
     What do you think about telekinesis for a thief? It’s not the first thing that comes to mind (which I think is a plus if you want something unusual) and it’s pretty versatile.
     
     Alternately, for something rarer, maybe something like control of a pocket space. (For example, maybe he/she can reach into a jacket and either deposit something in a secret space only he/she can reach or pull out equipment from the same space). It could be used to hide/conceal incriminating goods, steal bigger stuff than she’d easily be able to carry, carry equipment and/or gadgets without looking out of the ordinary, perhaps plant incriminating evidence, etc.
     
     Alternately, something like agility would probably make for more interesting stealth scenes than something like invisibility would.

302. # ShyVioletson 18 Oct 2011 at 8:31 pm

     I really like the idea of a pocket space. The thief in question is currently reformed but having a pocket would be a great way for him to have gained infamy. For example stealing a painting is bad but stealing the Venus De Milo (not sure if thats right) would make a huge ruckus. The guy who stole the Venus De Milo wound gain a lot of attention from the international media. It wound also make the thief very hard to catch because he could slip in (after disabling security) and slip out again without being noticed. Plus a pocket space has all sorts of every-day applications.

303. # B. McKenzieon 18 Oct 2011 at 10:53 pm

     Depending on his personality and/or history, he might also use the pocket space to take invaluable art as hostages. For example, “If you kill me, you’ll never see the real Mona Lisa again.”

304. # Rogon 08 Nov 2011 at 11:32 pm

     hey, would you happn to know a plausible way to explain something like pyrokinesis? having a bit of trouble with it.

305. # Wingson 09 Nov 2011 at 11:49 pm

     @Indigo: Yep. Way too many abilities for one person – though I admit the butterfly angle could be cool. Just the antennae wings, and tactile substance identification would be enough for that. Adding the UV rays angle essentially makes her godly – I’d strongly advise against it.

     Hmmm…Limitation wise, if the character didn’t have the wings and antennae and whatnot all the time, then maybe, in a reference to the short lives of butterflies, she can’t stay in “powered” form too long (Maybe only for a day’s amount of time, or she dies? Could be an interesting limitation). Flightwise, butterflies glide a lot, so she might no be able to get airborne in close quarters or in places with no wind. If the antennae are sound sensitive, then even a dog whistle or microphone feedback could be a problem for her.

     @Rog: How’d your character get the power in the first place? Mutation, lab accident, genetic experimentation, awesome gadgets, or something else entirely?

     - Wings

306. # Indigoon 10 Nov 2011 at 12:06 am

     @Wings

     That’s what I was afraid of
     Although I was tryin to come up with an idea based on the short life span of butterflies; I like your idea of limiting her butterfly form to only a day Now forgive me if I sound like I’m desperate to combine these powers with the UV energy abilities, BUT what if the UV powers don’t kick in until she’s NOT in butterfly form? Like 2 separate sides to her? OR she loses her butterfly abilities at some point but gains the UV abilities? Hmmm I don’t know, I think I’ll try to limit her as much as possible, that way she won’t be too powerful. I also think I’ll incorporate what you said about her not being able to get airborne in small spaces and the higher sound frequency messing with her antennae.

     Thanks so much for your advice!

307. # Wingson 10 Nov 2011 at 10:28 am

     You could try limiting the UV ray powers severely. The power to create anything is a tricky one – 99% of the time it can’t be pulled off, and for a lot of readers it sets off the Mary Sue warning bells. Maybe if you just limited it to energy blasts or some other small scale energy attacks – none of butterfly-girl’s powers thus far are offensive, and that might actually help her in the long run.

     - Wings

308. # Marquison 10 Nov 2011 at 3:54 pm

     Grenac I haven’t been on in awhile so I’m not sure if you’ve actually gone through with the rewrite ( I Hope Not). Anyways about the whole modified weapons idea, I think it seems kind of like an add on. It’s not really needed. If Ianthe can control plants n plant growth, I think she’d be pretty strong. Unless of course if the story takes place in some type of futuristic tech type of era. Other then that she could always have seeds in her pocket, she’d always have some type of plant nearby usually. And on the rare occasion that she doesn’t the training her dad gave her would come in handy. Great Combat skills, Great Marksman skills. She doesn’t have to be perfect but I thought you had something great going with her. Maybe you should think about some techniques she could use.

309. # Indigoon 10 Nov 2011 at 4:35 pm

     I think you’re right Wings-she doesn’t have any offensive powers, which is probably why I’m so intent on including the UV abilities. So I believe it may be best to leave it at energy blasts to avoid the whole Mary Sue thing-thanks again for helping me

310. # Wingson 10 Nov 2011 at 10:15 pm

     Grenac: So her control over plants is directly proportional to her physical strength/health?

     Indigo: No problem. We all started out once, y’know? Gotta help each other out and whatnot.

     To borrow the words of someone far wiser than I, great powers do not a great character make. I mean, look at Superman. Sure, he’s a superhero icon, and he has pretty much every power ever and no real weaknesses (kryptonite doesn’t count). But if a character like him was introduced today? They’d be eaten alive. Who could challenge them? No challenge, no conflict, no plot. That’s how it goes.

     Keeping the UV powers as energy blasts should suit your character. Glad to have helped out.

     - Wings

311. # ShyVioletson 10 Nov 2011 at 11:30 pm

     Hi Indigo

     I agree with Wings. Tone down the powers and you have a potentially interesting character. The MC for my story has no really offensive powers at all so its very feasible that she’ll get her sorry butt kicked into neck year so it adds drama :

312. # Grenacon 11 Nov 2011 at 1:29 am

     @Wings: Yes, she tires easily with her power.

     @Marquis: No, I’m just thinking ahead during my sleeping times.

     @Both of youse: The thing is, when she gets her power, she’s thrown into the hero guild. She can’t control large amounts of plants and for expended periods of time. I was going to have her use the weapons with the plants cause she can only use the plants to ensnare enemies only. If that fails, she has the artillery for backup. I thought it’d be a nice way to tie in her little weapons knowledge. I don’t want to make her a Sue or anyting though, so she wasn’t going to be this competent fighter because even though she trained some with her Dad, she has grown up to sit in front of the computer all day. She’s way out of shape basically. So all she can do is fire away, pretty much how she plays her games, spamming the attack button. I was just wondering if it was okay or not.

313. # Anonymouson 05 Dec 2011 at 5:28 am

     What sort of abilities would one hypothetically have if they were to be using 100% of their brain capacity?

314. # B. McKenzieon 05 Dec 2011 at 9:32 am

     Basically any mental power could be vaguely believably linked to it (e.g. anything psychic, anything related to intelligence, etc). However, it’s an urban legend that humans only use 10% of their brains on average. According to Scientific American: “‘Though an alluring idea, the 10 percent myth is so wrong it is almost laughable,’ says neurologist Barry Gordon at Johns Hopkins School of Medicine in Baltimore… What is correct, however, is that at certain moments in anyone’s life, such as when we are simply at rest and thinking, we may be using only 10 percent of our brains. ‘It turns out though, that we use virtually every part of the brain, and that [most of] the brain is active almost all the time,’ Gordon adds.”
     
     That said, human brains DO use only a small proportion (20%) of memory-forming neurons. If somebody was somehow able to use super-science or some other means to tap a greater proportion and stimulate mental activity in the midbrain, it’d be believable if his memory and/or learning ability were vastly better than average.

315. # CCOlsonon 05 Dec 2011 at 4:17 pm

     Having an Eidetic Memory is one the real life abilities that I would rank as a superpower. There actually are people who remember everything that they read or see or hear. C.S. Lewis was one such. Oh to be able to do academic citations from memory…

     I know I mentioned this before, but one thinking superpower that a person could conceivably have is supercharged empathy. In Isaac Asimov’s “Nemesis” there is a little girl who is an empathic genius. There’s nothing at all psychic about her powers, though. She’s just so incredibly good at reading and interpreting body language, physiological signs, voice inflection, eye movement, tone, word choice and context that she functions as near infallible lie detector and can make pretty reliable guesses about what a person is thinking at any given moment.

     Other thinking superpowers might include having a brain that works like a squirrel’s, able to rapidly plot crazy-insane parkour routes through streets, parks, buildings, tree branches, etc.

     Also, there was “The Pretender”, a TV Series with a main character who was so smart and imaginative that he could adopt not only a believable, but also an effective, persona as just about any kind of career person in the world. At various points he pretended to be doctors, lawyers, investigators, etc, and he was so smart he could actually do the work associated with those professions.

316. # B. Macon 05 Dec 2011 at 6:53 pm

     “She’s just so incredibly good at reading and interpreting body language, physiological signs, voice inflection, eye movement, tone, word choice and context that she functions as near infallible lie detector.” One study found that police officers, lawyers and polygraphists couldn’t detect lies with any degree of accuracy. If you flipped a coin with “TRUTH” on one side and “LIE” on the other, it’d be about as good as detecting a lie as they were. However, Secret Service agents and, umm, aphasics beat the coin by a substantial margin. In both cases, researchers speculated that the lie-detector succeeded by paying extremely close attention to “micromomentary” cues in the face that indicated the person was lying. In contrast, the average listener focuses on what the liar says and that tends to work out pretty well for the liar.

317. # KolendaMaon 22 Dec 2011 at 8:01 pm

     Wow, me and my friend are wrighting a book on super heros. Their are 3 main charecters. Kate, Rose, and Dawn. Kate’s Powers are Invisibility, And Water manipulation. Rose’s powers are Ice manipulation, and flying. Dawns powers are Electric manipulation, and shape shifting. The story start with these charecters and they go to a school called West Rock HighSchool. They eventually find out that they have superpowers and they train with heir new friends who all have super powers also. Then soon they find out that dillion a school bully is actually a super villon. Then later after the team (Here are the others who are part of the team, Claire: super strength, Jordan: sublimation. Alex, super speed. Richard: duplication, and Kyle, his power is telekinesis, The super heros are training to defeat the mysterios scarlem. The scarlem are evil, and are trying to turn all the super heros into super villions. Then they plan to take over the world.
     How does this book sound to you!

318. # Indigoon 24 Dec 2011 at 11:52 pm

     It sounds like it could be interesting My only concern is that I counted 8 main characters (not including villains) and it could be difficult to develop each of these characters individually. Unless you’re focusing on the three girls you first mentioned and the other members of their team get less spotlight and are therefore secondary characters. And since you have such a wide range of powers, try to use them in unique ways so that they stay fresh.

     Have you come up with any distinguishing personality traits for your characters? I’d like to see a list of your characters, along with their personalities and powers if you don’t mind.

319. # Klutzon 27 Dec 2011 at 9:00 am

     Hello!
     I’m working on refining the powers of some characters in the comic I’m creating and I’m asking for some advice regarding weaknesses and their powers overall.
     Decibel: Sonic screams and other forms of sound manipulation. Over use causes stress to his vocal cords.
     Cobalt: Projects blue disc-shaped force fields that eventually develop into telekinesis. Her mind becomes strained if she projects discs that are too large or if she projects too many.
     Electrode: Can absorb and project electricity. He cannot absorb large amounts of electricity without losing control of his power causing damage to his own body.
     Paragon: He can transmute his hands/forearm into any metallic/geological material. He also has enhanced strength and bone density.
     Blaze: Absorbs heat from the sun and uses it to generate fire. She has to store solar energy to use her powers at night.
     Are these descriptive enough and do they provide enough weakness? I was also thinking of adding another member with either super speed, invisibility and intangibility or healing. Any ideas?

320. # Crystalon 02 Jan 2012 at 10:49 am

     I’m writing a story about a guy named Royce Black (Electro) who has electrokinesis, but the bad thing about that is he’s always charged and has to wear rubber gloves and wrap himself up in plastic.

     And I made up this character, who calls herself Plastique, whose powers I came up with when you said ‘Telekinesis that only applies to a specific thing’. Her TK applies only to plastic, and she can do everything Magneto can with metal, but with plastic.

     So Plastic and Electro meet each other and start a relationship because Plastique is immune to electricity. But while Electro falls for Plastique his friends are noticing weird things about her. Nothing that implies she is actually luring Electro into a careful trap.

     What do you think?

321. # B. McKenzieon 02 Jan 2012 at 1:12 pm

     It sounds okay–at first, I thought it felt contrived that he wrapped himself in plastic and she just happened to control plastic, but it turns out that plastics actually are generally good at resisting electricity.
     
     I think the false romance/trap could be really good if you executed it well. For example, what’s she setting him up for?
     
     …
     
     I have a highly tentative sideplot (making fun of the tendency that even average-looking guys in comic books somehow land smoking-hot women, a la Mary Jane) where (SPOILER–maybe?) an IRS agent new to a super-agency suddenly has a highly friendly and intelligent model interested in him. The guys at the office start taking a pool about which country she’s spying for and/or why else she might be interested in the IRS agent. (“Can I get odds on Russian spy AND visually impaired?”) I’m not sure what the payoff would be, though. Maybe Gary comes tantalizingly close to the perfect romance but his new job and/or his coworkers get in the way. Maybe she was into him because he’s so super-normal, but is completely thrown off by all the danger and/or strange acquaintances she’d have to put up with to date him.

322. # Crystalon 03 Jan 2012 at 12:23 am

     Thanks! I like your idea too
     Electro wraps himself up so that he can touch people without killing them and so he doesnt burn his clothes off or destroy electronics. I haven’t yet figured out what Plastique’s intentions are or what Electro’s friends are noticing, but she wants some kind of revolution. Any ideas?

323. # B. McKenzieon 03 Jan 2012 at 7:36 pm

     One possibility is that she comes to him with either a mysterious offer of assistance and/or a desperate request for help. Then she subtly causes him to fall for her.
     
     For example, maybe she shows up with a BIT of credible evidence and claims that somebody close to him is trying to kill him. “I was on the trail of [a criminal] that’s bought hundreds of thousands of dollars worth of military-grade electronics* he couldn’t possibly know how to use. I found these [personal effects, maybe a security card or blueprints or something] in his safehouse. He must have gotten them from somebody close to you. Do you know anybody who would be good with electronics?*” I imagine he’ll be initially skeptical, but start to wonder when an assassin (secretly collaborating with Plastique) narrowly misses killing him with something electronic*.
     
     *Subtly frame one of his teammates, maybe somebody he doesn’t get along with. Feel free to swap out “electronics” for anything that might plausibly be linked to the implicated character. For example, if she’s trying to frame an expert marksman, Electro might start to wonder if she’s right if he nearly gets killed by a sniper rifle and the sniper character has been acting strangely and/or rudely. One way that she can make it seem like the sniper character is a suspect is by coming to Electro shortly after he has a relatively major spat with the implicated character. Alternately, Electro might get really suspicious if the sniper character is the one that is the fastest to suspect something of the mysterious new girl.
     
     …
     
     “She wants some sort of revolution.” What doesn’t she like about the current system? (Her reasons for wanting a major change may show us a lot about her personality and choices).

324. # TheGhostManon 08 Jan 2012 at 4:33 pm

     In my story, my main character has the ability to shapeshift into any person he’s seen (usually he has to have met them in person, but overtime he is able to do it with just pictures). This also pertains to clothing and other accessories. He uses this power in a multitude of ways – to throw pursuers off his trail, to gather intelligence which he would otherwise have no access, to infiltrate enemy camps, or to just play mischievous tricks.
     However, his shapeshifting comes with fatigue parameter, as the act of shapeshifting and remaining in a guise requires a significant amount of conscious mental power. If his concentration falters, then his guise is likely to “slip”. For example, skin tone and eye colour may change, or his facial features might begin to morph.
     Does this sound like it would be a good power?

325. # B. McKenzieon 08 Jan 2012 at 6:35 pm

     Sounds workable–I like the concentration aspect more than, say, Mystique’s powers, which just seem to work without any thought or effort. The character might not be able to participate in superpowered fight scenes to the same extent as other characters, though.

326. # TheGhostManon 09 Jan 2012 at 6:56 am

     My story is still in the early planing stages – do you think that maybe the shapeshifter would be better as, say, a supporting character? I just want my MC to be involved or able to be involved in superpowered fights.

327. # Charlieon 09 Jan 2012 at 2:36 pm

     Hi,

     I’m a 6th grade teacher who is in the process of putting together a fictional narrative unit. I’d like for my students to write a superhero comic book story. They’ll be using an online app (toondoo). I have many questions. First, how many superpowers should my students select for their characters. I’m guessing a superhero can, theoretically, have a combination of some, or many. However, might it be best for the kids to choose a single superpower for coherence sake?

     Thanks, and I hope to hear from you. This blog is a fantastic resource.

     Charlie
     Vermont

328. # B. McKenzieon 09 Jan 2012 at 5:04 pm

     Charlie, I’d encourage them to stick to 3 or fewer (so that they have space to work on story elements besides just describing the characters’ superpowers). I wouldn’t worry about it too much, though, because sometimes counting superpowers is surprisingly hard. (For example, is Storm’s flight a separate ability, or is it just part of her ability to control the weather?)

329. # Comicbookguy117on 10 Jan 2012 at 7:04 am

     Charlie, I would recommend you let them choose one or two powers. I’m developing my own comic book universe and found it easier to go with one power per character. It allows me to give them a power that allows them to be challenged in their heroic endeavors. So I’d say one of two powers would be good.

     Now shadowhazard, I must be honest. I was a little confused reading your top post. Ok the blind kid can use his other senses to superhuman levels, I get that. But where did the adaptation come from? Just curious.

330. # Marquison 22 Jan 2012 at 11:43 am

     Ok I want to know how I would write Maves shadows taking damage by bolts of electricity.should the shadows simply dissipate or should they simply be stunned for a period of time?

331. # L05T 80Yon 25 Jan 2012 at 1:40 pm

     i’m writing a superhero story, are these good ideas for superheros and their powers?

     Dead: immortality (only discovered later)

     Ion: Cybernetic DNA enhancments, flight, energy blasters on each wrist, increased sight and hearing

     Ms. Electric: Production and control of electricity and ‘blue lightning,’ which is like radioactive lightning.

     Firewall: Biomechanical familiarity with electronic devices, superhuman hacking ability, limited control over electricty itself.

     i’ve got a few more characters, but i’m still finetuning them

332. # HomuHomuon 07 Feb 2012 at 6:02 pm

     I like Viv’s choice for her character’s power. It’s not too common, unlike super strength and fire abilities, and it isn’t overpowering that her character can’t be challenged.

     People make the mistake of bending over backwards just to make sure their characters have tons of powers so they won’t be caught in a situation they can’t escape from. When they are challenged, it all seems contrived. I think it’s much more interesting when a hero can use their power to get out of any trouble, even if that power isn’t all that powerful to begin with.

333. # Pungoon 14 Mar 2012 at 6:41 pm

     Long time reader, but never posted…

     So my hero has various abilities, while that are very impressive, are not superhuman (climbing on near-flat surfaces, 20mph run, a high jump, spend 15 minutes underwater, etc.)

     Does this seem too overdone? I would love to hear your opinion.

334. # B. McKenzieon 14 Mar 2012 at 7:38 pm

     The powers are fine. That said, most superhero stories succeed or fail based on whether the characters are interesting and the plot is exciting.

335. # YoungAuthoron 14 Mar 2012 at 8:40 pm

     @Pungo- are you trying to make you character super? b/c none of these powers are super powers, unless your going for the non-superpowered hero.

336. # B. McKenzieon 14 Mar 2012 at 10:29 pm

     YA, the character above sounds like an Olympic-level athlete (a la Batman). For example, Usain Bolt can run 27 miles per hour, so 20 miles per hour would be pretty close to the limits of what is humanly possible. 15 minutes underwater would basically make this guy an honorary amphibian.
     
     This doesn’t strike me as a Paste Pot Pete scenario where the character’s powers are so limited that it’d be difficult to show him doing impressive things. (And, even then, I think it’s a matter of execution. Ozymandias is one of the most interesting supervillains of the past ~30 years even though his powers were highly limited).

337. # Rex Nihiloon 22 Mar 2012 at 7:57 am

     Greetings all! I have been inventing super-powered characters for a bit now. Recently, I fear that I may have invented a character with far too many abilities. Bear with me. I am fond of animal themed heroes and created one of my own. He is called Frogmun*:

     Frogmun is a literal frogman (probably a genetic mutation) based on dendrobatid frogs. His outward appearance resembles a regular man, albeit tall and narrow with flipper-like feet. What is unique is his internal structure giving him an array of natural abilities:

     Abilities:
     - Dense, pliable bones and durable skin, joints, and muscles make his body resilient (although not immune to pain).

     - Unique structure of his core and legs amplify his energy output exponentially allowing powerful kicks and jumps as well as grace and speed.

     - Animal instincts give him enhanced senses.

     - His skin sweats/secretes a film with a controllable viscosity. He can make it extremely thick and pasty or thin and slick. His blood is a neurotoxin and causes paralysis.

     Removed abilities:

     - Extending, prehensile tongue with viscosity control.

     - Throat bladder capable of firing anything Frogmun can fit in his mouth.

     - The sweat was originally going to be a neurotoxin and have viscosity control. This could have been an interesting limitation (as he cannot touch innocents), but I felt as a good-guy this made his seem too villainous and over-powered.

     - A special secretion that allows his hyperactive speed and reflexes and greatly augmented strength for a period of about 4 minutes. Known as Berserk, this ability also allows him to jump off air and removes his other secretion abilities. This ability leaves Frogmun completely exhausted afterwards. (This was supposed to be his greatest adaptation).

     I could use some assistance in refining this character. If anyone could recommend different combinations or weaknesses to help limit this character while maintaining the animalistic appeal that would be tremendously helpful.

     *Frogman is C/D-list Marvel superhero with springy boots and a goofy, padded suit. Among Marvel’s** other Frog themed characters are Leap-Frog and Ani-Man. I think my character has enough of a uniqueness to avoid being reminiscent of the aforementioned fellows.

     **DC featured a circus freak frogman as a minor antagonist in Batman & Robin (When Grayson was The Bat). One of his leader’s men later exterminated him.

338. # B. McKenzieon 22 Mar 2012 at 10:59 am

     The frog theme brings Marvel’s Toad to mind (human-looking guy with frog powers). If the character has a unique personality, voice and motivations, I don’t think the (possibly superficial) similarities to Toad will scare away prospective publishers.
     
     If I could use an example from my own writing, one of the main characters in The Taxman Must Die (Agent Orange) has some extremely noticeable similarities to the Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles (he’s a crime-fighting mutant reptile), but his personality, voice, perspective and goals/motivations are so different that I think the similarities are superficial. For example, he doesn’t act anything like a TMNT character would in this scene and the character he works with most closely (his partner, the titular taxman) doesn’t have any TMNT analogue.

339. # Richard S.on 22 Mar 2012 at 11:05 am

     Hi Rex!

     For character weaknesses, you could play a lot with the social aspects of being part poison dart frog. For example:

     - Dendrobatid frogs are brightly coloured. Maybe your character is as well. This would make it hard for him to do normal daily routines, like going shopping
     - Animal instincts. For example, the desire to eat insects, the need to keep his skin moist (as with all amphibians), or the urge to mate (not only do frogs have mating seasons in which they croak non stop [maybe this is involuntary] but also they are dedicated parents. Plus they are aggressive to other males, thus leaning toward more social issues).
     - Whilst he may be more durable than normal people, is he immune to fatigue? If he has an increased output, will he need an increased input of food?
     - With enhanced senses, this could be used against him. Frogs rely mainly on sight to find prey, so they will be more sensitive to motion and bright colours than humans.

     Hope this helps!

340. # Angus L.on 01 Apr 2012 at 9:43 am

     Greetings,
     I’m writing a novel and I need comments, ideas as well as critics on the plot, characterization of MC, powers and abilities and weaknesses as well. Thank you all a great deal!

     Here’s the bio for the MC:

     Real Name: Oscar J. Willowby (He does not reveal his real name in the series.)
     Known Aliases: Oz (In the origins novelization), Teddy Brian.
     Age: 16 (but looks younger)
     Occupation: None.
     Citizenship: U.S.A.
     Place of Birth: New York
     Known Relatives: Diana Willowby (mother, deceased), Jack Willowby (father, deceased), Elizabeth Mae Willowby (sister, unknown), Lucy Browns (stepmother), Daniel Browns (stepfather), Patrick Adams (stepbrother).
     Education: Attended one year of Public Elementary School. Practices auto didacticism, aka. self-directed learning.

     Height: 5 ft. 7 in.
     Weight: 156 lbs.
     Eyes: Lavender-Amethyst.
     Hair: Black.

     Past: (Origins of Teddy, which I am working on as well)
     Eternally optimistic, innocent and radiant, Oscar was a 5-year-old boy whose world was thrown into chaos when his father was killed, and his mother stuck in a comatose state. Separated from his sister and mother after the accident, he was sent to an orphanage in Brooklyn, and was later adopted by the Browns along with another boy, Patrick. The hectic environment that they must live in forced him to take on certain adult responsibilities and watched in helpless silence as his stepbrother was physically abused. He then sacrifices himself and took on the role as the Brown’s “punching bag” as to relieve Patrick from abuse. Despite the extreme pain, Oz remained strong and preferred to suffer silently, knowing that if his complaint would only satisfy the Browns and cause Patrick more worries. His innocence and sacrifice reflects a maturity and control which is uncharacteristic at such a young age.

     He was also remarkably intelligent and possessed photographic memory which he kept hidden from the Browns, confiding his talents only to Patrick. Patrick accidentally revealed Oz’s secrets to the Lucy Browns, which prompted Oscar to run away. He returned for Patrick late at night, only to be caught by Daniel Browns who beat him up severely, nearly killing him. Patrick and him was then sold to a private science facility (NEED A NAME, HELP!), who took an immediate interest in Oz’s abilities. The science facility gave birth to a wide variety of dangerous mutants, which not only will become a threat to post-war humanity, but will also serve as the means by which the “Directors” of said facility sought to achieve their goals. Helpless, Oz was caged, experimented with drugs and tested. Yet he never forgo his duties as Patrick’s brother, striking a deal with one of the Director to protect his stepbrother. However, little did he know, Patrick was left at the tender mercies of the facility’s genetic scientists. The geneticists used Patrick as an experiment, splicing his DNA with that of a wolf in order to create a new breed of “werewolf”, which ultimately failed. Enraged and torn with grief, Oz activated his powers, destroyed the facility with a flare of “glowing magenta-pink energy” and escaped.

     Present:
     Naturally intelligent and with an eidetic memory, Oz makes a living taking tests for other people. He changed his maternal name and adopts a new identity, Teddy Brian. (Still working in plot.)

     Powers/Abilities:

     Teddy is a sentient being composed of pure Mana and likewise, is able to freely manipulate it to his every whim.

     Mana, in my case, is a blanket of energy that seeks material elements to inhabit, thinning and condensing in this invisible tempest Also known as Life Energy, Chakra, Chi or Quintessence, Mana itself is a form of energy which, in its raw form, does not have a specific physical representation. It remains on the ethereal plane, until it is being used to fuel an effect, and even then, unless it is pure Mana manipulation, the Mana generated is not seen.

     Teddy’s manipulation of Mana basically involves numerous ways and uses of pure pink-and-magenta-colored energy to erect force fields of tremendous strength for a variety of effects. The fields are able to repel solid objects, even those of great mass and momentum, and can repel all but the very strongest energy attacks.

     Since his power is an extension of his mind and Mana, Teddy is affected by inertial forces acting upon his projections. Thus, if a car travelling at 60 miles per hour hit a wall of his Mana that was 6 inches thick, unless he generated a bracing shape against a sufficiently sturdy object, he would be affected as though he were hit by the car directly. He can vary the texture and tensile strength of his field to some extent, rendering it highly rigid or as soft and yielding as foam; softer variations on the field enable him to cushion impacts more gently, and are less likely to result in a psionic backlash against Teddy himself (in rare cases, sufficiently powerful attacks on his Mana fields can cause him mental or physical pain). He is also able to make his shields opaque or translucent (magenta) as well as reflective (outside and inside of the field) like Milk glass to effectively block variations of light such as laser-beams, or make them semi permeable to filter oxygen from water though the latter is mentally taxing. He is capable of generating and manipulating multiple force fields simultaneously.

     Teddy can shape his Mana into constructs, usually magenta shapes such as barriers, columns, cones, cylinders, darts, discs, domes, platforms, rams, ramps, slides, spheres and globes. The complexity of the shape is limited by his ability to imagine (mentally visualize) a particular form and keep it in sharp mental focus: not even he is able to see the forms he creates. The size of a given Mana projection is also limited by his ability to imagine. The smallest Mana projection he can visualize (and maintain the visualization) is the size of a marble. The largest solid Mana projection he can visualize and maintain is about 100 feet in diameter. He can project larger Mana-objects if they are hollow. For instance, he could visualize and project a dome of 1 foot thick about a mile in diameter (5,280 feet) and a dome 1 inch in thickness he can project for about 3.3 miles. Small objects at high speeds become missiles; large objects at slow speeds become rams. He can make these objects grow or shrink as desired, up to a size of 100 feet (30 meters). However, the constructs made out of Mana are volatile; once he stops concentrating on the projectiles, it shatters and ceases to exist.

     By forming one of his force fields within an object and expanding the field, Teddy can cause his target to explode. He can manipulate the energy of his force fields around other objects to simulate telekinetic abilities. Also, beams or torrents of pink-magenta glowing energy that are generated from his hands enables him to ensnare or slice through objects with a slashing strike. In addition, stepping disc or platforms are generated to travel through air.

     Teddy is also able to heal others or even temporarily strengthen and intensify powers of a nearby living being by projecting essence of his Mana into others. However, this will greatly drain him of his powers and if it is ever depleted, would result in his imminent death. Projecting Mana is very taxing, often Teddy will collapse of exhaustion before this happens – as sort of biological fail-safe. With discipline and fortitude, he is able to push himself to his limits.

     Teddy is able to draw Mana from his surroundings, living beings as well as inanimate objects to power his abilities and replenish his Mana. However, he needs sufficient rest to recuperate and to convert the procured Mana into its purest form.

     Limitation:
     The size, number, and movements of these objects are limited only by his powers of concentration. Once he stops concentrating on an object, it ceases to exist.

     Also, the experiments conducted on him in his past damaged his circulatory system: Teddy now suffers from Haemophilia B, rendering him physically vulnerable. He is also physically untrained, rendering him useless in combat battles.
     Please comment on both the plot, characterization and powers as well as abilities.
     Comments and ideas (and critics) are accepted with gratitude!!
     Thanks in advance,

     Angus L.

341. # B. McKenzieon 01 Apr 2012 at 7:49 pm

     Hello, Angus. There’s a lot here that I feel I’ve already touched upon in my articles on characterization. For example…
     
     –When you’re submitting to a publisher, I would recommend against listing characters’ demographic traits–for example, the above list gives us 9 character names before we learn anything about the plot. I think that it would help to give publishers information in a more organic way (i.e. tell the story rather than list things, introduce characters gradually, etc).
     
     –I’d also recommend cutting extraneous details like his height/weight/eye color/hair color/birthplace unless these are relevant to the plot.
     
     –I feel like I’m missing some premise details here. E.g. the story goes from “the mother finds out Oscar is special” to “the mother selling Oscar to a private lab for research.” Depending on the premise and setting, this could make sense (e.g. if mutants were thought of as less than human in this world), but if the setting is supposed to be a completely normal Brooklyn, my suspension of disbelief would probably be completely blown. Also, he’s remarkably intelligent and has a photographic memory, but (unless I’m missing something) neither one of those is superhuman or particularly remarkable. It might be more believable if they get rid of him because he manifests a superpower that is more obviously supernatural and/or scary. In contrast, most people WANT their kids to be remarkably intelligent.
     
     –Granted, I’m not very experienced with young adult fiction, but these one-dimensionally evil foster parents strike me as a bit cliche and unappealing. I’d like to contrast them with Harry Potter’s Dursleys. The Dursleys are proud of their normalness and don’t take well to the magically-inclined Harry, especially when he does magical things and/or impedes on their normalness. I would characterize them as “trying far too hard to be normal” rather than one-dimensionally evil. In contrast, the description of the foster parents strains my suspension of disbelief because they don’t seem to do anything or have any goals besides being evil. In particular, this strains my suspension of disbelief because they apparently chose to be foster parents even though they virulently hate kids. In the Dursleys’ case, I think it sort of makes sense that they’d take in their nephew after his parents were murdered because, umm, what would the neighbors think if the Dursleys turned away their next-of-kin? Moving forward, I’d recommend coming up with some overarching trait for the Browns that explains their nastiness in a way besides just making them mindlessly evil. For example, the Dursleys are trying far too hard to be normal and care a lot more about their own son rather than their adopted nephew.
     
     –The science institute is also straining my disbelief for similar reasons. They’re one-dimensionally evil. Also, it’s a criminal operation, right? If so, how did the Browns (i.e. non-criminals) find them? Most criminal organizations make themselves hard to find.
     
     –By my count, you spent about 50 sentences (800 words) on his superpowers. I would estimate that it would take the average publisher’s assistant 5-10 minutes to have even the most basic idea what’s going on with his superpowers. The main problem is that PAs have to get through hundreds of unsolicited manuscripts per week and reject most of them within 2 minutes. I would HIGHLY recommend slashing those 50 sentences down to 1-2 sentences.
     
     –The characterization of Teddy strikes me as one-dimensionally pure. It would probably be more interesting if he had some flaws. (For more advice on how to use flaws to make characters more interesting, I’d recommend this article). Also, I’m a bit alarmed that his superpowers got 800 words of space but his personality got less than 20 (“Eternally optimistic, innocent and radiant… naturally intelligent” was all I was able to find at a glance). Besides that he’s extremely protective of his brother, I’m not sure whether he’d be able to do or say interesting things out of combat. He doesn’t seem well-developed beyond his superpowers.
     
     – What are some things Teddy would do that most other characters wouldn’t do in the same situation? These unusual decisions/actions tend to be more memorable and will help the character stand out in a sea of submissions. Please see this article on writing interesting, distinct characters for more details.
     
     Please let me know if you have any other questions.
     
     BM

342. # Angus L.on 02 Apr 2012 at 9:47 am

     Dear B. Mackenzie,

     Thanks alot on your comments and critics. I really do appreciate them.

     Yes, the plot does sound stereotypical. (I’m a Potter fanatic after all!)

     I did some changes based on (nearly) everything you suggested.

     Here goes:

     (Prequel: Origins of Teddy Brian)

     Real Name: Oscar J. Willowby (He does not reveal his real name in the series.)
     Known Aliases: Oz, Teddy Brian.
     Age: 5 years old

     Intro:

     - Oz is sweet and innocent; he is easily frightened.
     ————————————————————————————————————————-
     Excerpt from The Origins of Teddy Brian:

     “Brooklyn is our new home now,” Eli smiled at him. “She won’t be scary-looking. And she won’t be mean. If she were, she ever would have agreed to take us.”

     “But witches do that sometimes, Eli. Remember Hansel and Gretel? They trick you. Because they want to eat you. They all do that. I know; I read books too.”

     “So long as I’m there, no witch is going to be bothering you.” She gripped his arm, showing off her strength, and he finally relaxed and looked over at the other occupants of their sleeper compartment.
     ————————————————————————————————————————-
     And this:
     ————————————————————————————————————————-
     Oz looked at his own hand and saw there the transfers of rich soil from the handshake. He smiled because it was as though the two had just undertaken the blood brother ritual. A brother! Now that was something Oz could get excited about.
     ————————————————————————————————————————-

     - Oz is whip-smart, quirky and dorky as well.
     ————————————————————————————————————————-
     Excerpt from The Origins of Teddy Brian:

     “My dad is Jacob Willowby. He’s a very famous writer. You’ve probably heard of him.”

     The young man didn’t grunt or even wiggle a finger. The road ahead apparently held fascination for him that a dose of Willowby family history simply could not compete with.

     Getting into his sister’s spirited attempt at conversation, Oz said, “He’s dead, but our mom’s not.”

     This indelicate comment drew an immediate scowl from Eli, and just as quickly Oz looked out the window, ostensibly to admire the countryside.
     ————————————————————————————————————————-

     To sum it all up, Oz is sweet, charming, innocent, quirky, dorky, intelligent with insecurities and can be reckless and unruly at times. He is also sensitive, and extremely protective (of Patrick, a young boy who is affiliated to him).

     -The story progresses: Separated from his sister, Eli and comatose mother after an accident, Oz was sent to a development organization, Liberty Children’s Home, which aims to provide a place of transition where children can stay while waiting to be reunited with their families. The orphanage also houses many children who are not orphans, but have been sent there by their parents, who are unable to care for them. The owner of the orphanage manages the operation like a business, using the kids as bait to bring in donations from foreigners and international aid which she kept while selling children for adoption or as indentured servants. There, the orphans are subjected to serious physical and emotional abuse… A scientist sees potential in Oz….yada…yada…etc (Still working on it)

     ————————————————————————————————————————

     (1st Novelization)

     11 years later…. (Oz adopts a new name: Teddy Brian)

     Hounded by the past, Teddy is the unmotivated boy wonder. He’s that guy who has talent coming out of his ears, but can’t be bothered to do anything with it.

     In the pilot, Teddy becomes slightly indifferent and aloof: he is largely just interested in himself … in getting paid, and later in avoiding the cops and whatever punishment they’d mete out. However, later in the story, he regains his passion in helping others. He matures and learns when he makes mistakes.

     Yet he can also be immature, reckless and unruly at times. Those flaws, I hope, makes Teddy three-dimensional. They flesh him out. His journey is a realistic one, with detours and growing pains. We will see him as a complete individual, understanding who he had been, who he was, and who he can be.

     Teddy also retains his quirkiness, dorkiness, sweet and charming personality.

     Powers/abilities:
     Oz is a sentient being composed of Mana. He is able to manipulate Mana, aka Life Energy or Ki. He is able to erect force-fields, project blasts, create constructs, generate healing powers with Mana. Oz draws Mana from his surroundings, inanimate and living beings, to power up his abilities and replenish his Mana. Mana manipulation is extremely taxing, and depleting one’s Mana results in imminent death.

     Oz also possesses eidetic memory and encyclopedic knowledge though he has never attended school.

     I am actually planning to work on the 1st book before I do the prequel, but I was bombarded with ideas simultaneously…
     Please do comment and critic. Thank you in advance.

     Angus L.

343. # B. McKenzieon 02 Apr 2012 at 4:33 pm

     –This looks significantly better.
     
     –It’s hard to tell from the brief excerpts, but what I’ve seen suggests to me that the Hansel & Gretel usage may be a bit saccharine/cloying. That said, I like the incorporation of excerpts.
     
     –“Oz is sweet and innocent…” Really? In the excerpt, he’s the 5 year old that is so worried about his new foster parents that he brings up Hansel & Gretel nearly getting eaten by a cunning witch. He comes across as more paranoid than innocent—I think that paranoia would probably be more interesting, but if he is paranoid, it might help to explain what would cause a 5 year old to be supersuspicious rather than, say, a prototypical victim that goes with a creepy stranger into a seedy van because the stranger offered free candy. One possibility that comes to mind: he might have trust issues stemming from his father’s death and his mother’s disappearance/possible death (e.g. if your parents couldn’t save you, who could you count on? Probably just Eli, in his case). One way to transition that into a flaw would be to present him with situations where he fails to trust someone that actually means well and there are negative consequences. For example, that scene where the scientist offers to help him? Maybe Oz brushes him off (because he thinks it might be a trick).
     
     –“[Oz] is easily frightened…” Are there any points where his fear creates problems for him and/or causes him to do something different than most other protagonists would do in the same position?
     
     –“Oz is whip-smart, quirky and dorky as well.” Could you show these traits with plot details? For example, when he suggests that they might be walking into a Hansel-and-Gretel situation, is he just guessing, or is he making an observation based on something he has seen? (For example, maybe they have an initial meeting where they promise him food and a room, but didn’t ask what food he likes or what he’d like in his room. That might feel cold to a possibly-paranoid five year old). Or maybe they’re sort of creepy, like asking for a blood sample before asking for his name or introducing themselves. Or spending more time doing a medical checkup in their first visit than actually talking with him. If the kid is really sharp, he might notice that these doctors don’t act like the doctors he’s seen on TV* or the doctors that he’s been to before his parents were lost and leap to the conclusion that this operation is suspicious. You could work his other traits into this sort of scene—after he’s made this conclusion, what does he do? A reckless and unruly kid would probably act differently on this deduction than, say, a very mild-mannered child.
     *This is obviously not the most sensible source of evidence in the world (what you’ve seen on TV), but it might fit the point-of-view of a really young character. Kids sometimes have trouble distinguishing fiction from reality, especially fiction that isn’t obviously a fantasy.
     
     –Eli is his sister? I think Eli is a boy’s name. Speaking of names, I tripped up a few times on Oscar and Teddy being the same person. (If you go down that route, I’d be helluva careful about when you use one name rather than the other. It might help to explain why he’s using two names—for example, if you were writing about a character like Superman/Clark Kent, you’d probably mention that he’s trying to hide his given name to protect his family from Superman’s enemies). Also, I’d recommend giving Teddy a more common surname than Brian.
     
     –“ My dad is Jacob Willowby.” I think this sort of contradicts “(He does not reveal his real name in the series.)”
     
     –I like the new setup for the orphanage a lot better. A for-profit orphanage strikes me as a much more believable villain and I think that makes it feel more threatening.
     
     “His journey is a realistic one, with detours and growing pains. We will see him as a complete individual, understanding who he had been, who he was, and who he can be.” When you’re pitching to a publisher, I’d recommend avoiding sweeping claims like these and focusing instead on specific details about your story which will cause the reader to reach the conclusion you’re going for. For example, instead of telling us that his journey is realistic, maybe show us some things about it that are unusually realistic. (Case in point: I think the for-profit orphanage strikes me as a lot more realistic than the one-dimensionally evil foster parents selling the kid to science—the motivation is much easier to understand).
     
     “Teddy also retains his quirkiness…” You’ve mentioned his quirkiness twice, but it hasn’t actually come up yet. It may help to cut the mentions of quirkiness and instead showing us an example of something he does that’s a bit unusual.
     
     “Teddy also retains his… sweet and charming personality.” Hmm, I’m wondering how. His childhood was pretty traumatic (e.g. missing parents, abusive and/or neglectful orphanage, police trouble pretty early on, etc). How did his innate sweetness survive all that?
     
     “Oz is a sentient being composed of Mana…” Uhh, what? 1) Is there any origin here? (E.g. was he special from birth or did something happen? Did his parents know?) 2) This may be an idiosyncrasy, but my impression is that it’s probably somewhat harder to market a story which mixes elements of sci-fi (e.g. scientists) and fantasy (e.g. Mana). “Oz also possesses… encyclopedic knowledge though he has never attended school.” This sort of comes out nowhere.

344. # R.L. Junioron 05 Apr 2012 at 7:14 pm

     Does anyone know what its like to have awesome ideas and then get in front of the computer and feel like you have lost it all? Any advice?

345. # Marquison 06 Apr 2012 at 6:37 am

     R.L it happens, but I think its always best to be ready for critique it not always good but it definitely helps your writing skills. As far as forgetting its best to write down all ideas for novels. Or even ideas for story ideas. Also an important note, remember not to change anything last minute before posting, because most likely it’ll really mess up a good draft.

346. # Comicbookguy117on 12 Apr 2012 at 10:58 am

     Hey guys I’ve got a big question about my universes magic users. Now magic is usally represented as this myterious, ethreal force with universal accessibility to anyone who can manipulate it. Meaning that magic can have any number of visual styles and mages have access to all the same spells, charms and relics. That’s fine, it works.

     But I wanted to try something different. So I devised a system for magic in my universe that, I think, is unique enough for me to pursue. A mage in my universe is capable of manipulating magical energies to perform various feats. However all of these feats are of a certain classification and are manipulated with a certain type of magic. The feat is represented by a physical, colorful glyph on or near the mage and what is being manipulated. For example a spell used to manipulate a natural element such as fire, gravity and metal is designated with a red glyph. Manipulating biological matter is designated with a blue glyph and so on. So what do you guys think?

347. # Blue Xon 12 Apr 2012 at 7:43 pm

     Greetings everyone! I’ve been in a large mess for a while and have been searching the web for something to help me. I must say, I love this site. So I was wondering if you all could help me with my problems. I’ve been working on my series now for over a decade, starting when I was seven and it’s my pride and joy. However, like me, it has been growing and developing and now I have too many holes that need filling.

     Here’s the first hole…
     I have an organization of villains who serve under one (the main villain of my series). However, I’m having trouble coming up with names, characteristics, and powers for these villains. If anyone has any ideas, I would appreciate it.

     ~Blue X

348. # Comicbookguy117on 12 Apr 2012 at 7:46 pm

     I devised a system for magic in my universe that, I think, is unique enough for me to pursue. A mage in my universe is capable of manipulating magical energies to perform various feats. However all of these feats are of a certain classification and are manipulated with a certain type of magic. The feat is represented by a physical, colorful glyph on or near the mage and what is being manipulated. For example a spell used to manipulate a natural element such as fire, gravity and metal is designated with a red glyph. Manipulating biological matter is designated with a blue glyph and so on. So what do you guys think?

349. # B. McKenzieon 12 Apr 2012 at 9:05 pm

     CBG, the magical system in question doesn’t sound like a noticeable improvement over what I’m used to. It’s not clear to me how this would raise interesting storytelling possibilities beyond, say, a Harry Potter-style magic system. In contrast, I thought the magical systems in Bitter Seeds and The Amulet of Samarkand were pretty incredible. For example, Bitter Seeds had magic fueled by demonic negotiations with human-hating spirits which demanded various nefarious deeds in exchange for their assistance. Every negotiation gave way to an impressive scene and the nefarious demands exacerbated a conflict between the protagonists.
     
     When you’re pitching your book to publishers, I would only recommend going into the details of how the magic works if it will make the book more appealing and/or we wouldn’t understand the plot/characterization otherwise. So far, I’m not getting that vibe from the color-coded glyphs. One possibility that would be more plot-relevant is that the segregation of different magical powers among different groups of people is key to the plot (e.g. if necromancers gravely mistrust time mages, and everybody hates those freako healers*). If you’re putting time into developing the mechanic, make sure you’re actually getting something out of it.
     
     *Oh, God, please do something with healers besides making them the affable saps that everybody gets along with. I’m not sure where this comes from. In real life, doctors don’t get along with anybody.

350. # Blue Xon 13 Apr 2012 at 7:56 am

     I was wondering if someone could critique me on something. I was thinking about starting off with eight characters, three villains (which one defects to the main character’s side), and multiple supporting characters. I understand this is a little much, so I was wondering is their a way I can do it without overwhelming the reader? The character’s are pretty unique as far as their personalities.

     ~Blue X

351. # Comicbookguy117on 13 Apr 2012 at 8:58 am

     “CBG, the magical system in question doesn’t sound like a noticeable improvement over what I’m used to. It’s not clear to me how this would raise interesting storytelling possibilities beyond, say, a Harry Potter-style magic system.”

     Well see the problem is that I’m trying to develope a system of magic for a comic book, not a fantasy novel. A novel benefits from a more verbal style, while a comic book needs a visual style in order to be interesting. Plus, I really like the idea and am gonna try my best to make it work in my universe and be interesting for my potential readers.

352. # Blue Xon 13 Apr 2012 at 9:24 am

     CBG, if you’re going to do something like that, then why do they have to use magic? It seems to me like you’re just going to use elemental powers. Are you going to use anything like levetating or summoning?

     ~ Blue X

353. # B. Macon 13 Apr 2012 at 10:49 am

     “A novel benefits from a more verbal style, while a comic book needs a visual style in order to be interesting.” Okay, fair. However, I think an artist could make negotiations between a wizard and demonic/human-hating spirits visually interesting. (And the contributions to character development and conflict are useful whether the project is a novel or comic book).

     What would the advantage be of having glyphs versus, say, showing a beam come out of a wizard’s wand?

354. # Comicbookguy117on 13 Apr 2012 at 4:10 pm

     First off, Blue X, I did want to display truly magical feats such as summoning, necromancy and dimensional travel. It’s just that the examples I gave were common known and were used simply to explain what I’m trying for. But yeah, magic will be allowed to be amgic while still being represented with colored gylphs.

     “What would the advantage be of having glyphs versus, say, showing a beam come out of a wizard’s wand?” I have seen that a million times! Just because my characters are manipulating magic doesn’t mean they have to have the image and skill set of a stereotypical wizard from an RPG. Even magic users in other comicbooks, like Thor, have this sort of aura where you can tell he is magical. I’m not saying that I want to go in the complete opposite direction, but what I am saying is that I’m trying to display magic in a new way. Maybe it doesn’t have to always be this etheral force that only a few individuals have knowledge of. Maybe the world could not only know it’s there, but are capable of using that knowledge. Just something cool and new, you know?

355. # B. McKenzieon 13 Apr 2012 at 5:02 pm

     “…I’m trying to display magic in a new way.” Okay. Then be ready to explain the benefits of that new approach to a prospective publisher*. If nothing comes to mind there, then don’t cover it in depth when you’re making your proposal.
     
     *For example, is it somehow relevant to plotting or characterization? Will it set up really interesting scenes?
     
     I notice that you alluded to magic being something that pretty much everybody can do (“Maybe it doesn’t have to always be this ethereal force that only a few individuals have knowledge of”). That sounds vastly more relevant to the story and potentially interesting than the details of the color-coded glyphs they use.
     
     PS: Have you read Alan Moore’s Top 10? It’s set in a city where everybody has superpowers, so you might be interested.

356. # B. McKenzieon 13 Apr 2012 at 7:57 pm

     Blue X: “I was thinking about starting off with eight characters, three villains (one of which defects to the main character’s side), and multiple supporting characters. I understand this is a little much, so I was wondering is their a way I can do it without overwhelming the reader? The character’s are pretty unique as far as their personalities.”
     
     First, I’d like to clarify. You have five protagonists and three villains (including one villain who becomes a sixth protagonist), right? I’d need to look at the characters more closely, but I suspect you could probably eliminate 1-2 characters by merging them with overlapping characters and maybe demote another to a supporting role. My rule of thumb for first-time authors* would be at most 4 major protagonists unless you are unusually adept at managing large casts and you have a really good reason(s) that all of the characters are necessary.
     
     Another possibility would be simplifying the villain situation. For example, instead of having 3 villains (including the defector), maybe you could do 2 major villains (including the defector) and demote the third to a supporting character (a la the Admiral Tarkin supporting main villain Emperor Palpatine and eventual defector Darth Vader).
     
     *I think publishers will give experienced authors more latitude on this front because an experienced author has a better idea of what he/she can successfully pull off.

357. # Blue Xon 13 Apr 2012 at 9:06 pm

     Thank you for the advice B. Mac! I would like to confirm, and apologize for not stating it clearly, that it is eight main characters and three villains. (Much worse than you expected right? This is why I need help!) As far as the “non experienced writer” thing is concerned, I have a plan for that.

     This isn’t going to be the first book I send to the publishers. I have multiple other stories (not related to this story) that I plan to send in first. (I have those stories all wrapped up, I just need to type them up.) The reason I have this problem with this story is that I planned on it being a series and I’ve been working on it for over a decade. That’s why I have that many characters in the beginning, to lay the foundation. I suppose I could simplify it a little bit, I’m just reluctant too.

     Here are some of the protagonists:
     Jason (Main Character)
     Age: 12 (It plays a big part in the series)
     Personality: A very determined person who always seeks to do what he considers is the right thing. He works incredibly hard to train his power. His dream is to become just like his father, who he considers to be a hero, however his dream changes drastically once his father dies to save him.
     Power: Water

     Ann (Plot Driver)
     Age: Looks 12 (Actually much older)
     Personality: Around her friends, she’s happy. Around anyone else, she could be compared to the secret service, monotone, grim, unemotional, unreadable. She holds so many secrets in her life, secrets that are very significant to the plot. She doesn’t try to hide the fact that she has secrets; she just doesn’t tell what those secrets are.

     Power: Unknown to the reader until the end

     Ty (Technician)
     Age: 12 (Again, significant to the story)
     Personality: The happy go lucky guy who everyone laughs at. He’s the guy who brings down the tension. He also has a immense background in technology.
     Power: Wind (Which he’s upset about!)

     The Love Interest
     Age: 12 (…)
     Personality: Gets clingy to anything she likes, including the main character who, since he’s not ready for that kind of thing being a 12 year old boy, resists. Also very protective of her younger sister and can get easily influenced by people.
     Power: summoning

     So what do you think? Please keep in mind that I have four more.
     I appreciate the help.
     ~ Blue X

358. # B. McKenzieon 14 Apr 2012 at 1:07 am

     Blue X: “I would like to confirm… that it is eight main characters and three villains. Much worse than you expected, right?” Harder, but not necessarily worse. I’d recommend reading the Wild Cards series—the first installment is probably the finest superhero novel/anthology I’ve read even though it has an absurdly large cast. However, most authors and editors aren’t as good as George R. R. Martin, particularly when it comes to huge casts…
     
     Okay, some thoughts on the characters here:
     –Jason comes across as bland and sort of forgettable. “Very determined” and “always seeks to do what he considers is the right thing”* apply to pretty much every protagonist ever written. To make the character more memorable, I’d recommend giving him traits that will cause him to do/say things that most other protagonists wouldn’t do in the same situation. Please see this article for more details. What sort of unusual choices might he make?
     *”always seeks to do what he considers is the right thing” is tautological and doesn’t tell us much about the character. Everyone — even Hitler and serial killers — think they generally do the right thing. It’d probably be more distinct/interesting to talk about what he thinks the right thing is. Also… I would recommend checking the article on generically nice characters because it sounds like he could use some rougher edges (e.g. does he do anything disagreeable at all?)
     
     –If you’re thinking about a series, one possibility is removing some characters from this book (or perhaps demoting them to a really minor role) and introducing them in another book, when you have more space to work with.
     
     –If the only purpose of Ann is that she has secrets, I think she could be merged with pretty much any other character. What else does she have going on? (Also… it’s hard to tell from the description here, but I suspect that she’d come across as overly cryptic to me in the book itself. Make sure you’re giving readers enough information to speculate or it’ll be a helluva lot more annoying or confusing than intriguing). For the secrets to be interesting, I think the SURFACE needs to be interesting, and it sounds like her surface (e.g. what we know or can observe relatively quickly) has fairly little going on. Also, I would definitely recommend tantalizing hints at what lies beneath the surface. (I think Doyle’s Sherlock Holmes books are rather excellent at building up a mystery with a few bizarre scraps of evidence–we see enough to wonder about what we aren’t seeing).
     
     –I suspect that Tyler’s skillset (which looks to be his main role in the story) could be passed off to anybody—the love interest, perhaps? I really like that he’s upset about wind.
     
     –I’m getting the vibe that your heart isn’t really in the romance. If so, I’d recommend staying away from the romance angle. (Nobody will fault you for that, especially since the characters are 12).
     
     –It sounds like these characters have, for the most part, personalities that can be summarized in 1-2 words. E.g. the love interest is clingy/protective. Jason is generically heroic. I’d recommend more three-dimensional combinations of traits. For example, Tony Stark (Iron Man) isn’t a stereotypical scientist… although he’s brilliant, he’s preposterously confident and charismatic. His main flaw is a total lack of self-control, which is definitely not the first thing that comes to mind for a scientist character. I’d recommend mixing in more things about each character that we wouldn’t expect for their archetypes. For example, the laidback wind guy hating his wind power is a good start.
     
     –Because these characters strike me as more one-dimensional than not, I think that merging some would probably help create more unusual combinations. For example, what if a very laidback and easy-going character has some major-league dark secrets lurking?

359. # Blue Xon 14 Apr 2012 at 6:57 am

     Thanks for responding B. Mac! I understand what you’re saying about one dimensional characters. They do have more traits, I was just in a hurry that to show them to you that I didn’t write them all down. Let me try them again with the two most important characters, plus one more. And Angus L., I will also list their flaws.

     By the way Angus L., they come from a race that already has powers. But because of a war going on, they were transported somewhere that they could live safely without standing out… the closest thing was Earth. Since they grew up in Earth, they didn’t expect to have powers. Some realized them earlier, some realized them later. (Is this enough information, or should I say more?)

     Jason (Main Character)
     Personality: Let me summarize this better. He follows the code his dad left him; he never kills, he always does his best to safe someone in need, etc. Here’s what makes him unique.
     #1. He doesn’t lie, ever! How is this interesting. (Ex. A character cooks some food and it’s terrible. All the other characters say, (Wow, that was good!). Jason says, (That was awful! Did you follow the recipe???) Or when he met the powerful and cruel leader of his race, Jason says, (You’re a terrible leader, how can we replace you?) Which gets the army to aim their weapons at the young hero!
     #2 He’s able to convert people over to his side. This isn’t a power, it’s just who he is.
     Flaws: Jason is extremely gullible and trusting because of his good natured core. Not to mention if someone mentions his family in a bad way, he’ll go berserk and unleash his power without consideration to those around him.

     Ann (Is much more different than the other characters)
     Info: First, she isn’t even from the same race as the others. She’s a powerful member of a more powerful race of beings. How powerful? She was supposed to be the leader, but her parents, simply because she looked different, chose someone else to succeed them and threw her out on the streets. That’s when she’s near death and the main character saves her.
     Personality: Ann has experienced much in her life. As a result, she has become a key player in this battle for the universes (yes, there’s more than one) that the heroes get thrown in. As a result, she wants her friends to be key players as well. She’s been betrayed often, but trusts the main character completely. As a result, she’s herself around him. Kind, caring, compassionate, but still secretive. Around anyone else, she’s cruel, suspicious, unforgiving, monotone, etc.
     Flaws: Ann has lived a long time. She’s nearly as old as the universe! (So are other main characters, the just experienced a massive time skip in the story!) As a result Ann doesn’t make many mistakes. However, she is a bit of an extremist when it comes to protecting her friends. Ex. She’ll wipe out an entire planet if they just looked at Jason the wrong way.
     PS. She took a page from the main character’s book and doesn’t lie too! I wanted the readers to have a mystery. So every word she says is 100% true. Since I know how I’m going to end it, I made her say hints about her secrets as early as the first chapter of the first book! Plus, she’s a bit crueler when it comes to the truth. (Ex. She meets someone. Says, “Don’t worry, I’ll treat you like family.) However, based off of what we know about her, she hates her family .

     Wasp (Love Interest, not her real name, just the one she goes by)
     I’m stating this because I do take a huge interest in the love aspect. Here’s what I got.
     Personality: At first, she’s a girl who is obsessed with Jason. Once she joins his team, however, she gets to know him better and gets even more attracted to him… until they fight one enemy and Wasp gets knocked out.

     Here a metamorphosis happens. Wasp realizes that she and the rest of the team had been alive for a long time, just unconscious, and she regains access to her lost memories and learns most of the secrets that Ann holds. She finds out that her cousin Kenya, has wiped out her branch of her people, except her and her sister. (There were different branches of their super race.) She was saved by Jason, which explains why she liked him so much. This part about her stays the same, but the rest of her changes. She becomes a girl bent on revenge for her people. She thought summoning was a weak power, but someone from her past (the main villain) offers to help her if she would join their side. Once Wasp leaves, (she’s about 13) Jason starts to like her and it becomes a struggle to save the girl he likes from being consumed with power. Wasp even goes so far as to attack her little sister, nearly killing her, to get her to be stronger. At the age of 16, Wasp becomes a key player in the universal battle.
     Flaws: Um… is it obvious??? 

     That it for now, what do you guys think, does that help?
     I look forward to hearing you!
     ~Blue X

360. # Comicbookguy117on 17 Apr 2012 at 11:49 am

     Hey guys. I’m trying to create a ‘tank’ character and have a few questions. Does a tank character HAVE to have a similar body-type to the Hulk? If so, can a female be a true tank? If not, what are the required concepts for a character to be a tank? I will be thinking on this myself and may come up with an answer on my own. However, your opinions do matter to me and will be greatly appreciated. Thank guys.

361. # YoungAuthoron 17 Apr 2012 at 12:37 pm

     Not necessarily. by tank i’m assuming you mean aggressive and super-strong. thier body type doesn’t really matter but they are usaully aggressive, stubborn, and probably pig-headed

362. # B. Macon 17 Apr 2012 at 2:12 pm

     There are some female tanks (e.g. Wonder Woman, She-Hulk, Power Girl)… I think the only requirements are that the characters depend more on their strength and/or resilience than most other characters do. If the character’s first move in a battle with a new foe is usually throwing a large object or attempting a bum-rush, the character is probably a tank.
     
     Characters that rely on strength and/or resilience tend to be stubborn and not terribly bright, but not always (e.g. Beast, Superman, Henry Kissinger, She-Hulk).

363. # B. McKenzieon 19 Apr 2012 at 8:35 pm

     “What would you say is the limit for major characters in the first novel? (Not including the main character.)” I think it depends totally on how many characters you’re able to handle–some authors (GRR Martin and JRR Tolkien) work quite well with huge casts. If I had to put out a number out there without knowing anything about a first-time author’s ability to handle a big cast, my instinct is that anything more than a total of six main and major characters would make me a bit skeptical of the depth of the characterization. I’d want to see right away that 1) the author actually does have interesting, three-dimensional characters (especially the main characters) and that 2) there actually is some discernible reason to have as many characters as there are.
     
     For example, if this is a horror series where most of the major characters get offed, it will be clear why the author has included so many characters and also why it might not be a problem (if characters get killed off or otherwise removed quickly, they won’t take much space later on).
     
     …
     
     Also, one other vaguely related note. Many first-time authors working with large casts write queries that are lists of character descriptions. Please don’t do that! It is pretty much never the smoothest or most interesting way to walk us through a plot and show us how the characters fit into the plot–I’d strongly recommend coming up with a more coherent paragraph-based approach incorporating new characters only as they are necessary to understand the plot.
     
     (If it seems impossible to come up with a coherent way to write a 1-2 page description of a story in sequence rather than leaping from one character to the next, the story probably isn’t coherent enough to begin with. To any authors in this situation: make sure you’re introducing characters in the story to advance the central plot, whatever that is. If any characters aren’t contributing to the central plot, I’d strongly recommend rewriting or removing them).

364. # Blue Xon 20 Apr 2012 at 9:23 am

     That makes sense, thank you B. Mac! I think I may be able to pull it off because even though I have not had anything published, I’ve been working on this for over a decade. That’s why I have eight characters to which the plot center around. Even if they didn’t have distinct personalities (They Do!), I would need them for the plot elements I have in the future.
     My first, (and hopefully not my last) book will be about how the team came to know each other. It’s built as a stand alone, but I plan it to be a large series. The characters each have different roles to play in the team once they assemble.

     Jason- Leader (Main Character)
     Jessica- Medic
     Tyler- Technician
     Derek- Scout
     Kevin- Strategist
     Tracy- Sniper
     Ann- Sensei (Main Character)
     Wasp- Base Defender

     They each have different personalities (I can put them if needed…) but are these too many characters or do you think it can work?

     ~Blue X

365. # B. McKenzieon 20 Apr 2012 at 11:04 am

     “I would need them for the plot elements I have in the future.” Then I would recommend introducing them at the time you actually need them, or perhaps briefly mentioning that this team has other members, but for whatever reason they aren’t present now (e.g. maybe we’re looking at just one of two squads and the other squad in on its own mission for most of this book).
     
     It’s a bit hard to tell from these one-word descriptions of the roles of the characters, but it sounds like you can merge and/or eliminate 2-3 characters fairly easily. Ideally 3.
     –If Wasp’s main role is defending the base, you could probably have Tyler come up with some mechanical system to do that and cut her. Is there an advantage to having a character for base defense?
     –I don’t know what the difference between “Leader” and “Sensei” is (e.g. Leonardo and Splinter of the TMNT?), but you could probably merge the “Strategist” into either. If the Sensei is a main character, I’d probably give it to her because it sounds like she will get fewer opportunities to lead in the field.
     –You could merge “Medic” with “Technician.” Is there an advantage to giving these capabilities to two separate characters?
     –This wouldn’t be my first choice, but you might be able to merge “Scout” with “Sniper” since snipers can perform a recon role.
     –This would not be my first choice, because I think both of these roles should be merged elsewhere, but you could merge base defender and strategist because it’s likely that both of them serve mainly a logistical role rather than coming along on most of the missions.
     
     PS: Listing them and their roles, rather than going with a plot-centric approach, suggests to me that the cast size is unwieldy. Do you really have this many characters because it is necessary to build THIS book or because they’re necessary for OTHER books? If it’s for other books, I’d recommend bringing them out only at the point they are necessary (likely in other books).

366. # Blue Xon 22 Apr 2012 at 5:03 pm

     I though about what you said B. Mac, and here’s my answer…
     They’re not all main or major characters in this book. The ones who are really involved are Jason, Ann, and Tracy since the enemy wants her (long story… literally!). The others do play a major part, but not in this book. They are probably present 15% of the time (which by your standards and mine, would not make them a major character). However, they all still have a impact on the story, which makes them difficult to take out. (Not just this one, but the ones following them too.)
     Ex.
     Tyler- Contains numerous files the team needs.
     Derek- The whole reason Tyler, Kevin, and himself ever make contact with the main protagonists.
     Kevin- A rival for Jason
     Tracy- The enemy’s target
     Jessica- Little sister of Jason, Does a lot of small things that aid the team, plus, she’s the only family member Jason has, so he’s protective of her.
     Wasp- Love Interest, and, drives the plot. Wasp plays a major part of the story soon after this, so I thought it would be good to mention her.
     I’ll also list a post about their personality traits.

     ~Blue X

367. # Blue Xon 22 Apr 2012 at 5:04 pm

     Here are their personality traits.

     Jason- A determined individual whose lost everyone in his family except his father and his step-sister. As a result, since his father isn’t around a lot because of his profession, (Comparable to being in charge of Area 51) Jason is very protective of his sister. He’s also very reckless when it comes to accepting near impossible challenges, and does so with a smile.
     Catch: What makes Jason unique is that he never lies. That creates some interesting scenes when he’s hiding secrets and tells you what he’s thinking all the time. (Ex. Others will say someone’s cooking is good and its not… Jason will tell you the truth!) The other thing that makes Jason unique is that he has an incredible imagination, allowing him become an interesting fighter to watch. You don’t know what he’ll do next!

     Tyler- A carefree individual who’s upset about his power, air. (Since he loved technology, he was hoping to get something tech based. Imagine his surprise when he discovered he had wind!) Tyler is the character you look to for comic relief. He’s always cracking jokes and, despite his careless attitude, incredibly smart.
     Flaw: Sometimes, Tyler will get too carried away and end up annoying or insulting someone.

     Derek- A kid who lives for speed. He likes life in the fast lane and trains endlessly to become the fastest who ever lived. He loves his power of light (something that really annoys Tyler) since it will, with training, allow him to travel at the speed of light. He also loves playing pranks on people, especially Tracy, his sister.

     Kevin- The quiet, calm, and sensible member of the boys. Kevin is a master at strategy. He’s able to plan multiple steps ahead of his opponent. (Not even Tyler was able to beat him in chess!). For the most time, he’s in the background until the characters need some help, then they turn to Kevin. He’s also able to handle most problems with ease, and is the best gravity user in the story.
     Flaw: Kevin often gets flustered when having to talk to new people.

     Tracy- Being isolated from others for 12 years of her life, Tracy is the most easy to influence. This happens multiple times where she’s tricked into doing something that can harm herself and others, (Mainly the other members of her team) and they’ll have to convince her otherwise. Since she’s tricked a lot, she also has trust issues with others, particularly Ann, who at first she considered a friend, but later on became to despise her greatly, because Ann refused to tell her secrets. Her power is force.

     Jessica- She’s the youngest of the group. Being a fire user, she’s quick to anger. Although, she brings a lot to the team. She’s skilled in healing techniques (Which is good since she’s the one hurting people… or is that bad?) She also is one of two of a deceased race, the other being her older sister Wasp (Who she adores).

     Wasp- At first, Wasp is introduced as the love interest, obsessed with Jason (He doesn’t feel the same way, being only 12; She is too, but girls mature faster than boys) However, later on Wasp, whose power is summoning, feels like she has the weakest power and thinks she is useless. (She didn’t know how to control it) However, she accidentally stumbles onto one of Ann’s secrets and it changes her drastically. (I won’t say what it is!) The next time the team sees her, she’s attacking Jessica, and leaving the team to go to the other side, and it’s here that Jason starts to like her.

     Ann- The main female protagonist, much of Ann remains a mystery, with her keeping secrets until the last chapter of the last book. (She has a lot!)
     Info: First, she isn’t even from the same race as the others. She’s a powerful member of a more powerful race of beings. How powerful? She was supposed to be the leader, but her parents, simply because she looked different, chose someone else to succeed them and threw her out on the streets. That’s when she’s near death and the main character saves her.
     Personality: Ann has experienced much in her life. As a result, she has become a key player in this battle for the universes (yes, there’s more than one) that the heroes get thrown in. As a result, she wants her friends to be key players as well. She’s been betrayed often, but trusts the main character completely. As a result, she’s herself around him. Kind, caring, compassionate, but still secretive. Around anyone else, she’s cruel, suspicious, unforgiving, monotone, etc.
     Flaws: Ann has lived a long time. She’s nearly as old as the universe! (So are other main characters, the just experienced a massive time skip in the story!) As a result Ann doesn’t make many mistakes. However, she is a bit of an extremist when it comes to protecting her friends. Ex. She’ll wipe out an entire planet if they just looked at Jason the wrong way.
     PS. She took a page from the main character’s book and doesn’t lie too! I wanted the readers to have a mystery. So every word she says is 100% true. Since I know how I’m going to end it, I made her say hints about her secrets as early as the first chapter of the first book! Plus, she’s a bit crueler when it comes to the truth. (Ex. She meets someone. Says, “Don’t worry, I’ll treat you like family.) However, based off of what we know about her, she hates her family!

     Hope to here from you!
     ~Blue X

368. # B. McKenzieon 22 Apr 2012 at 7:32 pm

     Blue X, if you were inclined to, I think you could give most of those roles to other characters.
     
     For example, readers would probably care more about the enemy’s target if the character is a major character. Would it be possible to get rid of Tracy and have the enemy focus on a more significant character?
     
     We’d probably care more about a rivalry between Jason and a major character than we would with a minor character. Is there any reason that Jason’s rival needs to be Kevin rather than any of the other characters?
     
     “Derek–the whole reason Tyler, Kevin and himself ever make contact with the main protagonists.” If that’s the main thing he does, can you get rid of him after they’ve made contact with the main protagonists? What’s the advantage of keeping him? Alternately, can you make it so that Tyler and Kevin have the ability to make contact on their own, so that Derek can be removed beforehand?
     
     –”Tyler- Contains numerous files the team needs.” Could these be given to some other character?
     
     –”Jessica- Little sister of Jason, Does a lot of small things that aid the team, plus, she’s the only family member Jason has, so he’s protective of her.” This sounds the most promising so far. However, given the cast size, it might be worth double-checking whether you actually have the space to do anything with Jason’s family. Alternately, it might be worth giving her somebody else’s role and then eliminating that person… for example, maybe she becomes the medic and/or the technician.
     
     –I’ll look at the most recent comment soon.

369. # Kenry Skyleron 27 Apr 2012 at 11:27 am

     Hello and thank you for the suggestions. I’ve been trying to think of a “super-reflexes” character, but I don’t want him to come off as a cheesy Robin-ripoff, so I’m trying to make his powers more supernatural. What I have so far is a guy who can slow down time substantially. Now he’s not a time manipulator, because he slows down along with everyone, (and everything), else. The only thing that doesn’t slow down are the synapses from his eyes and ears to his brain. So I guess another way of looking at it would be to say he dramatically increases the speed of those electrical synapses. While he can’t make drastic changes if he’s slowed down as well, it does give him extra time to think about the situation at hand. For example, if a guy pulls a gun out of his jacket and shoots you, you have fairly little time to react. However, this character can slow down time to perceive such an event, giving him more time to get over the initial shock, and consequentially more time to react to the gun being fired. What do you think of this ability?

     ~Kenry Skyler

370. # B. McKenzieon 28 Apr 2012 at 2:32 am

     “I’ve been trying to think of a “super-reflexes” character, but I don’t want him to come off as a cheesy Robin-ripoff…” I think readers will generally cut authors a lot of slack on similar superpowers if the personalities/main traits are different enough. For example, Wolverine and Deadpool share some similarities (they’re melee combatants with enhanced agility and regeneration/longevity), but their voices and personalities are so different that I don’t think there’s much meaningful overlap between the characters.
     
     “so I’m trying to make his powers more supernatural. What I have so far is a guy who can slow down time substantially. Now he’s not a time manipulator, because he slows down along with everyone, (and everything), else. The only thing that doesn’t slow down are the synapses from his eyes and ears to his brain. So I guess another way of looking at it would be to say he dramatically increases the speed of those electrical synapses.” If you wanted to create a contrast between Robin’s capabilities and his, the origin story could help make it feel more supernatural (e.g. maybe his powers come from outlandish science rather than Robin’s incredible training).
     
     …
     
     PS: When you’re pitching to publishers, I’d recommend covering his superpowers in just 1-2 sentences (e.g. “After [origin summary], he develops incredible reflexes” is fine). That will help you save space to cover the details that will make or break the project (mainly character development and plotting.

371. # MisterEon 29 Apr 2012 at 12:51 am

     Hi,

     In the story I’m focusing on a the moment my main protagonist has the ability to absorb most forms of energy, e.g., kinetic, solar, electrical, etc, and convert it into enhanced physical powers, e.g., super-strength, super-endurance, etc, energy projections via his eyes, hands, and/or mouth, or form small force fields, as well as giving him flight. He can’t absorb magical energies, and is vulnerable to mental powers. Most of his energy comes from passively absorbing solar radiation. Kinetic energy is easy to absorb, but difficult for him to convert, and most other forms of energy are difficult to absorb, but easy to convert. Even though he can absorb these energies, he can still be harmed and/or overpowered by them.

     Anyways, his arch-nemesis will be the leader of the cities criminal underground, and I need a good ability for him that will enable him to have the advantage over my protagonist. I wanted him to have to wear a bulky metal mask over his entire head as a way to contain his powers; which led me to originally consider either generating poisonous vapors or being composed of complete energy capable of overwhelming even the protagonist. However, I dismissed the energy one as being both obvious/convenient and potentially too easy for the hero to overcome. I haven’t given up o poisonous vapors completely, but I’m not sure how I feel about it. I’m looking for viable options.

     Any thoughts?

372. # Kenry Skyleron 29 Apr 2012 at 11:53 am

     If he can absorb kinetic energy, doesn’t that mean he’s virtually unstoppable around any/all moving objects? I think you need to limit the forms of energy he can absorb, say, just solar energy? With that in mind, maybe the arch-nemesis can have some form of darkness-related ability? Not sure about the bulky metal mask thing though.

373. # Okovangoon 01 May 2012 at 7:04 am

     Hey, I’ve thought of an idea for a superhero book and would just like some thoughts on it. So pretty much there is a hidden “world” or “civilization” of genetically enhanced humans, living hidden within our society(generic I know but it works). The MC is a teenage boy who discovers that he has superpowers, and begins to learn more about them. He meets another kid who has powers, they go off to find kids like them, and find a secret organization trying to strip people of their powers. Yada yada blah blah and it comes down to this, I was thinking that all powers are generated through these “super super-humans” essentially, so people who have really strong powers that are very varied. These would also represent the seven different colors of light(red,orange,yellow,green, blue, indigo, violet) so there would be seven of them, and when one dies the ultimate power gets placed upon someone else. The evil organization is trying to get all seven of them together, so that they can form a “white light” someone with pretty much all power, because that will also create someone with Black light, or absence of light, who the organization can use to strip everyone’s powers with. That is the basic concept, any thoughts? Also I need help/thoughts on the sevens powers, I want them to be big. Here’s what I have so far:
     Red: Ability to “summon” and object from thin air in. Also able to teleport. (She pretty much bends space to her will)
     Orange: MC here, he can control all of heat, melt things/freeze things, control lightning and fire, but was wondering if he could either fly or make things float and have it to be something with the fact that hot air rises.
     Yellow: Not so sure, I’m thinking it will be someone with increased psychical properties and senses (inhuman speed,strength, sight, smell, hearing)
     Green: Controls the four basic elements
     Blue: Invisibility, able to change voice and appearance for ultimate disguise and can sense other peoples powers.
     Indigo: The ability to control gravity
     Violet:not really sure about this one, quick idea was shape shifting and talking to animals
     Also I was trying to think up names that represented those colors in some ways, such as Ruby for red or Violet for Violet. Thanks so much!

374. # Kenry Skyleron 01 May 2012 at 8:36 am

     I really would rethink the whole “all 7 colors” thing, because I haven’t seen it done that well. Don’t get me wrong though, it can be pretty awesome if done carefully, but it usually comes of as cheesy to me. Even considering the color route, I don’t think you should do all seven colors. Red has the summoning thing and the teleporting thing, orange has heat, lightning, fire, and flight, and already right here I think there’s too many powers. I would recommend stick to 3, maybe 4, colors. Probably White, Black, Red, and Blue. Cliche, I know, but it works. Plus it’s usually easier to work with because a lot of readers are accustomed to the whole blue-means-water, red-means-fire, etc. To make things more interesting you could tweak these a bit, change the character’s personality,(please no more hot-headed fire guys), and give them interesting weaknesses.

375. # B. McKenzieon 01 May 2012 at 12:46 pm

     I agree with Kenny’s take on the color system. Color-coding characters might help in a TV show or perhaps a comic (e.g. Power Rangers and Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles) to make it easier for readers/viewers to tell which character is which at a glance. In a novel, I suspect it would make the characters feel more one-dimensional, especially if they are named after their color.
     
     …
     
     I think 7 main protagonists would be a lot to work with. Unless you’ve published a novel before, I’d encourage you to stick with 3-4 main protagonists because that’ll give you more space for characterization.
     
     …
     
     When you’re pitching a superhero novel, I would generally recommend spending 1-2 sentences total on the superpowers. Maybe 3 sentences here because the superpowers play a major role driving the formation of the team and the villain’s plot. When you’re pitching your story, almost all of those 133 words spent on superpowers could probably do more for your story developing characters (e.g. personality, key traits and/or motivations) or the plot.

376. # Kenry Skyleron 01 May 2012 at 2:17 pm

     Well, while I’m here, I might as well throw in my main character’s bio.

     Name: Kenry Skyler
     Alias: Haze
     Age: 15
     Location: Toronto, Canada
     Power(s): Control over shadows, genius-level intelligence, and graphical user interface connection to his brain for better data and memory handling.
     Weakness(es): His abilities can be stopped by a significant amount of fire, electricity, or light, or if he can’t maintain his concentration.
     Race: Naturally evolved human.
     Occupation: Anti-Hero Vigilante, sometimes supervillain.
     Personality: Paranoid, obsessively-compulsive, wild/aggressive, and authority problems.
     Background: Kenry was orphaned by his parents as a baby, who are unknown, at was adopted into the Greay household. From an early age Kenry displayed remarkable skills in logical and analytic thinking, testing at an IQ of 140 at age 13. He lives with a form of “orphan complex”, constantly cleaning, cooking, etc. He feels as though his life was planned out for him; that he has no choice but to succeed. Due to his high paranoia, he keeps an underground room in his backyard loaded with information on supposedly “supernatural” beings,(vampires, pyromancers, etc.).
     Origin Story: The United Supernatural Federation,(USF), since their inception 2 years prior to the start of the story have been facilitating most of the “supernatural” beings across the world. They carefully pick the smartest and strongest of the supernatural beings to induct into their organization. A group of supernatural rebels formerly from the Canadian Branch of the USF take an interest in Kenry Skyler and enlist him in their quest to bring down the USF. But when Kenry discovers his incredible abilities, he has other plans in mind.
     Family: Mr.Greay,(adoptive father), Mrs.Greay,(adoptive mother), and Cathy Greay(adoptive sister).
     Relationships: Cathy Greay
     Comments: I decided to make the USF a worldwide organization so that Kenry could travel to different parts of the world.(Plus, like you said, a supervillain would be pretty dumb to fight in the same state as a bunch of superheroes). Kenry’s power really works by transmitting a sort of sonic wave that specifically interacts with shadows, which lets him not only control shadows, but also lets him see in the dark. And no, he can not turn into a bat, shadow, or fly(he can use his powers to glide though). And he does have a reflection. It would be pretty hard to explain why you don’t show up in any school photos. And on a final note, I wanted to make him the “unconventional anti-hero”. So basically, instead of having him just torture his enemies, he actually kills them,(when necessary). He also causes a lot of destruction with his abilities, which, of course, causes a heap of civilian casualties. That’s the main reason he’ll get in trouble with the police.

377. # B. McKenzieon 01 May 2012 at 5:39 pm

     Some thoughts:
     
     –When you’re pitching to publishers, I’d recommend covering the character in a more organic way (e.g. starting with the character at the start of the book and covering major turning points so that we can understand the progression of the plot).
     
     –I feel like there might be some personality discrepancies. For example, he’s “wild/aggressive,” but constantly cooks and cleans? Cooking and cleaning sound about as unwild as it gets (especially for a guy).
     
     –”The United Supernatural Federation,(USF), since their inception 2 years prior to the start of the story have been facilitating most of the “supernatural” beings across the world.” I’m not exactly sure what it means to facilitate a supernatural being, but if there are many supernatural beings that require facilitation, it might help to make the organization a bit older than 2 years. (Two years might not be long enough to make it feel believable that this organization has developed a global reach or that it has splinter groups).
     
     –I would recommend making it clearer what the USF is set up to do. A more specific name might help. Also, why are the rebels opposed to the USF?
     
     –I’m not seeing much connection between Kenry’s powers. He has some sort of graphical interface and the ability to control shadows. Did these powers come from the same place/origin?
     
     –One element to your characters that I think could be smoother is that their personalities tend to boil down to a bunch of psychological problems. For example, what does this character have going on mentally besides being a head-case? Also, you’ve listed a number of psychological problems for him, but it doesn’t sound like they affect his decision-making and/or his role in the plot very much.
     
     –Especially if he’s supposed to be unconventional, I would recommend covering major unusual decisions and/or actions for him. What are some things he does that most protagonists in his genre wouldn’t do in the same situation?
     
     –The character’s extraordinarily smart, right? What are some points where his intelligence leads to unusual decisions and/or actions? What makes his intelligence important enough to mention?

378. # Okovangoon 01 May 2012 at 6:28 pm

     Okay I totally agree with the color thing now, I was going to say it seems to “power rangers-y” but it looks like someone beat me to it :P. However I still like the idea of having lots of powers, I was hoping to go for something along the lines of, if any normal super being has a power then either one or multiple of the original seven can match that with their powers. I think this would either cause lots of characters or lots of powers on a little amount of characters, I like the latter because it makes them more unique which I was going for. I also think the number seven just fits for like things of legends, you know? But I understand that seven characters would be a lot to manage. But I was also planning on introducing them one by one at a certain rate, because they’re not all in the same place at once. I was planning on two of them traveling around to follow the others. If you think that would help managing them at all, because I really like the seven characters idea.(Also it would only be through the point of view of one character, and so the rest on them would be like secondary main characters.)

379. # Kenry Skyleron 01 May 2012 at 7:13 pm

     “I’d recommend covering the character in a more organic way (e.g. starting with the character at the start of the book and covering major turning points so that we can understand the progression of the plot).”
     -I wasn’t sure if I should start with him getting his powers or the organization’s background. Should I make a prologue?

     “For example, he’s ‘wild/aggressive,’ but constantly cooks and cleans? Cooking and cleaning sound about as unwild as it gets (especially for a guy).”
     -My original idea was that he was sort of reserved when he was at home, not really able to do anything on his own. When he notices his superpowers, he uses them as a sort of outlet to make a “dual-life” for himself, one where he can be free to make his own choices/decisions.

     “I’m not exactly sure what it means to facilitate a supernatural being,”
     -Well they basically “bag-and-tag” the ones they find to keep from causing too much panic. They’re sort of like The Company from Heroes I guess.

     “…but if there are many supernatural beings that require facilitation, it might help to make the organization a bit older than 2 years.”
     -That’s actually really interesting, because I always thought that if an organization was too old it would make it seem unrealistic that they wouldn’t already have their stuff together and not have many people rebelling against them.

     “I would recommend making it clearer what the USF is set up to do. A more specific name might help.”
     -I sort of just thought of that, lol. I’m not really sure what they’d call themselves, if they even had a name. I mean, why would a secret underground organization need a name, I guess?

     “Also, why are the rebels opposed to the USF?”
     -I tried to keep some of the details out because I wanted to make this just about Kenry, but mainly for the whole “bag-and-tag” deal. They think it’s not fair that they don’t get to choose what sort of life they want to live.

     “Did these powers come from the same place/origin?”
     -Actually I was going to go all sci-fi on this story so he was sort of born with the whole GUI thing. My explanation was going to be that he was born with an enlarged hippocampus, the part of the brain that controls memory, and as a result he can sort of “interact” with his long-term memories. So to answer your question, they didn’t really come from the same place. Their sort of two separate abilities. Though I wouldn’t really call the first one a “power” as it’s more of an extension of his thoughts.

     “you’ve listed a number of psychological problems for him, but it doesn’t sound like they affect his decision-making and/or his role in the plot very much.”
     -Mainly his paranoia effects his trust issues. He’s not very trustful of his teammates and tends to withhold information from them as a result. As for the decision-making, the main problem he has is his approach to fighting his enemies. He tends to make decisions based on impulse, which sort of contradicts his normal calm, analytic demeanor. For example, if an enemy goads him into destroying an “evil weapon”, it may actually be a bomb, or support pillar for a building full of hostages. His main enemy will be the police and the USF leaders, so I’m still trying to think of interesting ways to challenge him.

     “What are some things he does that most protagonists in his genre wouldn’t do in the same situation?”
     -I think I sort of covered this in my previous answer, but mainly making rash decisions is the “bad” thing that other protagonists wouldn’t do. He’s not just a screw-up though, and some of the things other protagonists wouldn’t do, like letting a villain fall to his death, or destroying a building to kill the enemy, he would do in a heartbeat. I’m trying to keep him just good enough so that he’s not crossing supervillain territory all the time though,(because he occasionally does).

     “What makes his intelligence important enough to mention?”
     -I can’t believe I forgot to mention this part. One of the reasons,(among many others), the USF originally wanted him to join their organization was because he is an aspiring bio-chemical engineer. With his help they thought they could identify what exactly was causing people to be born supernatural. He actually contributes immensely to studying the neurological, or whatever, aspects of what gives people their abilities. I thought it would be a fitting career choice, mainly because most of the supernatural beings’ abilities are linked to their brains,(e.g in the character I mentioned earlier, faster neuron data transfer for enhanced agility and reflexes).

     ~Kenry Skyler

380. # Kenry Skyleron 01 May 2012 at 7:21 pm

     @Okovango
     Do you know if you’re going to make a series of these? Because if so, maybe the first one could have you develop half the original cast, and the second,(or third, maybe), develop the rest? Even disregarding the color thing, I still think you should limit the cast. Maybe you could make the 7 people with the powers a sort of sub-plot. For some reason, I keep thinking of them as a group of naked people in suspended animation in a darkly lit room. So maybe you could limit them greatly, like only one of them can use their powers at a time, or something. I just think they seem too godlike, having so much power. Plus, if they hoard all the superpowers, what powers will all of your lesser supervillains have,(assuming you have any lesser supervillains)? B. McKenzie said it was okay to share powers across different books, but I doubt readers would take a liking to 3 guys with superstrength, 2 psychic girls, and 6 pyromancers in one book. Along that line of thought, instead of having a few people with all the powers, maybe have one machine that disperses powers,(Green Lantern Core-like), to a wide range of people. Then focus on the ones with the more plot-significant powers? I don’t know these are all just suggestions off the top of my head.

381. # B. McKenzieon 01 May 2012 at 9:03 pm

     –I would not recommend a prologue. I would probably lead with the main character rather than the organization, because one is the main character and the other does not sound particularly central to the story. (Plus, the smoothest way to introduce the organization will probably be as the main character learns about them). As for starting with the main character… starting with him getting his powers is one possibility, but I would also recommend brainstorming some alternatives.
     
     “My original idea was that he was sort of reserved when he was at home, not really able to do anything on his own.” But he does have some sort of paranoid collection of information about paranormal activity. This sounds vastly more interesting and not all that reserved (particularly if he’s planning on using it in some way?).
     
     –”They basically ‘bag-and-tag’ the ones they find to keep them from causing too much panic.” So they’re killing and/or capturing and/or conscripting supernatural beings which are some danger of causing a public panic? Or they’re killing and/or capturing and/or conscripting any supernatural beings which they can find?
     
     –”I always thought that if an organization were too old, it would make it seem unrealistic that they wouldn’t already have their stuff together and not have many people rebelling against them.” Hmm… I think it takes time to grow really unhappy about something and organize an opposition. It was about 1500 years from the formation of the Catholic Church to Martin Luther publicly posting the 95 Theses. It was about 100 years from the formal formation of the U.S. government to the Civil War and at least another 30 before the U.S. did much of anything globally. It took communism about 60 years to take over a country and another ~40 years for the two largest communist countries to part ways. I think it was about 75 years between the founding of Disney and the departure of several Disney employees to found Pixar–it took a while for a critical mass of Disney employees to get sick of its model.
     
     “Why would a secret underground organization need a name, I guess?” It might be difficult otherwise to refer to the organization (e.g. it might be awkward to ask someone to join a nameless entity). I am not aware of an organized crime or terrorist group without a name (although I’ve heard of Islamist groups changing names when they’re facing too much heat).
     
     “BM: you’ve listed a number of psychological problems for him, but it doesn’t sound like they affect his decision-making and/or his role in the plot very much.”
     KS: “Mainly his paranoia affects his trust issues. He’s not very trustful of his teammates and tends to withhold information from them as a result.” That sounds a lot more interesting.
     
     “He tends to make decisions based on impulse, which sort of contradicts his normal calm, analytic demeanor. For example, if an enemy goads him into destroying an “evil weapon”, it may actually be a bomb, or support pillar for a building full of hostages.” Uhh… Uhh… In the context of the story, I’d recommend using more complex examples here because a genius better be able to tell the difference between a bomb and a support pillar at a glance. For example, it might not be immediately clear what is connected to a particular electrical grid or computer system and/or what would result from sabotaging them. Alternately, perhaps he’s been told to plant a roadside bomb but doesn’t know who the intended target is and somebody else will be handling the detonation.
     
     “What makes his intelligence important enough to mention?”
     “I can’t believe I forgot to mention this part. One of the reasons,(among many others), the USF originally wanted him to join their organization was because he is an aspiring bio-chemical engineer.” Aging him up might help? Also… if he’s a valuable biochemical expert, what’s the advantage of risking him in the field? (Perhaps his point of contention with the USF is that they don’t want to risk someone that young, particularly a biochemist, but he chafes at that because he’s got authority issues and the rebels offer him a more… active position).

382. # Kenry Skyleron 01 May 2012 at 11:37 pm

     @B. McKenzie
     Interesting points there, I’ll definitely keep them in mind while I’m working out my rough draft, especially the last part about the point of contention with the USF. I had originally planned for him to be a sort of free-lancer anti-hero, who sort of came and went when it best suited him. He was sort of like the first “vigilante” among them, because the USF wanted to stay secret and the rebels wanted to become publicly known, and that was going to be my point of contention, but I really like your idea. Oh, and they’re killing and/or capturing and/or conscripting any supernatural beings which they can find. I feel that if they were only capturing the ones that were causing trouble, it wouldn’t really make sense to rebel. Capturing and/or killing any/all that they find makes it seem more evil. Also, about the “rebels”. I’ve already mentioned one of them, the super-reflexes guy, and one of the other two is a teleporter. I’ll post her bio soon. I’m still not sure about the last one though. I don’t really like overly-generic powers,(super-speed, flight, super-strength, etc.), because I like to be able to explain their powers, preferably something to do with a neurological defect/enhancement. I feel that powers linked to the brain seem more believable, even if the power itself is astronomical. If you haven’t seen it, I would recommend Alphas if you’re not really following me here.

     @Okovango
     Hmmm, that sounds a lot like Avatar: The Last Airbender to me,(the part about when they die their power is passed down to someone else), so you might wanna look at that show for some inspiration. I mean even in Avatar where there were only 4 basic elements, they “invented” new ones, like Toph’s Metalbending,(which I personally thought was awesomely innovative), so there’s still a lot of room to work with. And if the organisation tried to kill all the super humans, why should those guys stay? I guess my main concern is that it feels sort of forced. Does the organisation have something hanging over their heads to keep them there? With superheroes, I’ve always wondered why they take orders from people.(E.g Why would Superman let the police order him around?) And what age are you targeting this book for. It sounds pretty adult with the whole “killing all the super humans” deal, but if one of the characters is 13, it seems sort of juvenile. I seriously recommend you watching The Last Airbender if you haven’t already. Just don’t watch the movie though, because you will be seriously ticked off.

     ~Kenry Skyler

383. # MisterEon 04 May 2012 at 1:01 pm

     Okay, so a week ago I posted about needing a power for my main antagonist to have, and Kenry Skyler offered his help. I think I’ve come up with a suitable ability for him; the generation and manipulation of a powerful, black flame that he calls ‘Hell Fire’. This could potentially explain why he wears a mask; his face was horribly burned the first time he created his Hell Fire and he wasn’t able to control it (thanks to Kenry for suggesting his face be deformed).

     Any thoughts?

384. # Bunnyon 05 May 2012 at 1:48 am

     Hi! I’m writing a story called ‘School of His Talented Individual’ and I am making one main character (Called Brook Gates) and she finds out that the reason that her and her baby sister suddenly live in a big house is that her older sister (Jaclyn) started working for the government since she is a Dragon Born. Meaning she has super powers. There are a lot of support characters but I can only think of so many powers. Please Help!
     The names are:

     Kayla Baker
     Riza
     Ashley
     Ebony
     Dawn

     Caleb
     Tate
     Blake
     Dustin
     Corey
     Royce Black

     Also, I need last names please!

     If you want to read any of my other stories, search ’5abunnylover’ on Fiction Press.

     Thank you!

385. # Kenry Skyleron 05 May 2012 at 11:08 am

     @MisterE
     Sounds cool, but is there anyone else who can manipulate this fire? I sometimes don’t like reading books about people who are the only ones who can see/use some mystical force. It just always seemed sort of contrived to me. But like I said, sounds cool. I would recommend brainstorming some restraints to his powers, like they are hard to control,(reason why his face is burned?), or something to limit him.

     @Bunny
     Wait, you have 13 characters’ names but no powers or personality yet? Plus, 13 characters is a huge cast, even if they are support characters. If they’re all going to have powers too, I would seriously recommend cutting it down to like 4 or 5, and even that’s pushing it. What’s the plot of the book? Her sister’s a super-powered Dragon Born* whatever so they move to a really fancy house and…what? I’d really recommend getting the plot, character personalities, etc., down before you worry about their powers. Btw, there’s a whole wiki devoted to super powers. I’d recommend watching The Avengers movie for how to handle reasonably large cast. I think they did it pretty well and developed each of the character’s equally.

     *P.S.
     I don’t know if you’ve played Skyrim, but Dragon Born is already taken. And no, they will most likely not let you get away with it. You will most likely get sued. Skyrim’s pretty popular. You might want to change the name?

386. # MisterEon 05 May 2012 at 11:30 am

     Not planning on anyone else being able to generate and manipulate black fire. The odds of someone else in my character’s universe having that same exact ability is slim to none. And no need to recommend restraints/limits, all my characters have them.

     Also, on the subject of Dragon Born… Dragonborn is also present in the book Song of Ice & Fire, as well as it’s tv show, Game of Thrones, and D&D. Dragonborn/Dragon Born isn’t the most original thing, so I don’t think you need to worry about another company laying claim to the name as it’s a generic term used in most fantasy worlds, and therefore doesn’t belong to any single company.

387. # Kenry Skyleron 05 May 2012 at 5:17 pm

     @MisterE

     I meant to ask this in my last post, but does Black Fire have any special traits? I mean, can it do something that normal fire can’t,(i.e burn the soul(like in Ghost Rider), kill anything it burns, etc.), because I think you could go pretty far with that. If it’s pretty much the same thing as regular fire, I think it would be a wasted power. Also, where does the Black Fire come from? Is it within him, found in the natural world, etc.?

388. # B. McKenzieon 05 May 2012 at 9:14 pm

     Hello, Bunny. By my count, I see at least 13 characters here (plus villains, presumably). I think it would be very challenging to develop a cast this large and would not recommend it unless you’ve been professionally published before. Would it be possible to merge and/or delete, say, at least half of these characters? I think that will give you more time/space to develop the remaining characters and make us care about them. (Generally, I’d recommend 2-5 superheroes on a team?)
     
     …
     
     Regarding “Dragonborn,” I think there’s some potential that your eventual publisher will ask you to rename it, but I doubt that a publisher would turn away an otherwise publishable manuscript over that issue alone. (Names can be changed relatively easily). If I were the publisher, I’d be less concerned about the potential for a lawsuit and more concerned about the potential that people who have played Dungeons & Dragons or Skyrim would think that your work was derivative of another work. That would be problematic.
     
     …
     
     I would recommend putting more development into the character’s personalities and distinguishing traits.

389. # MisterEon 06 May 2012 at 3:22 pm

     Regarding your earlier question, the black fire’s abilities would probably be to burn anything and everything and leave a distinctive burn mark. However, it would be incredibly difficult to control for extended amount of times. I’m thinking the ability would be mystical in nature, and therefore come from within. Though I’m not too sure.

     Regarding blood manipulation, usually it’s a pretty powerful and dangerous ability, but if you’re limiting it to his own blood, it would be drastically less powerful. Especially if you’re not giving him the ability to re-generate his own blood at an accelerated speed.

390. # Kenry Skyleron 06 May 2012 at 9:21 pm

     Yeah, it’s just his own blood. I’ve done some more thinking on my main character and after lots of brainstorming, I’ve decided to cut the whole graphical user interface with his brain. I’m not sure if I’ll give another character that ability yet, but probably not. After thinking about how paranoia can affect decisions, I’ve thought about him “over-thinking” situations. For example, he might misinterpret a villain’s plan to destroy a bridge as a hoax to lure him into a trap so he doesn’t come, and the villain actually blows the bridge up. Also, one of the primary uses of his intelligence comes into play when he’s fighting. His umbrakinesis,(telekinesis of shadows), lets him construct any object,(solid or gaseous, but not liquid), so long as he completely understands the inner and outer workings of such object. So knowing how the parts of a gun interact with each other thoroughly and how much each part roughly weighs, etc., would be crucial in constructing a gun. What do you think about that?

391. # MisterEon 06 May 2012 at 9:48 pm

     I think you should choose one major power for your main character, and, possibly – if you feel it’s necessary – give him one or two sub-abilities that derive from his major power. I think the only way having both shadow and blood manipulation would work would be if he was some kind of demon, and even then I’m not sure about giving him both.

     Regarding his shadow-constructs, I think you should further limit him aside from him having to understand each object. Gaseous shadow constructs also seems like a little much. But, I’m no expert, so feel free to ignore my input.

     Finally, is your character the hero or villain? Because although him being paranoid to the point where he ignores his self-proclaimed duty to protect others may give him conflict for you to work with, I’m not sure how appealing it would be to readers. Unless you’re going the comedic (dark humor most likely) super-hero book/comic route. In which case, I can see that potentially working.

392. # Kenry Skyleron 07 May 2012 at 11:40 am

     @MisterE

     No, he’s not the blood manipulator. I was thinking of one of my side characters. One of the main reasons I decided to let him do gaseous shadow constructs as well is because when he makes his guns, he also has to make the gunpowder, and I didn’t think it would make sense that he could make gunpowder but not the gas that results from its ignition. Lastly, he’s actually an anti-hero. He doesn’t really have any “self-proclaimed duty to protect others”. He sort of freelances crime-fighting. A “conditional vigilante” so to speak. Also, regarding the weakness of his powers, that’s just in the construction of the object. Any sort of electrical interference, fire, or sunlight will deteriorate his power. And no, he does not roast in the sunlight. Sunscreen easily provides more than enough protection.(Yes, he is a vampire). I think the main reason he counts as an anti-hero is because he really only fights crime to keep suspicion off himself. I mean, his job is to kill/capture supernaturals, so fighting crime keeps the pressure off. The story mainly focuses on his experiences up to the point of him coming out to the world, which is actually another point of contention in the series,(revealing a group of people who have kept hidden for decades vs remaining in the shadows,(no pun intended :])).

393. # Bunnyon 11 May 2012 at 3:21 am

     How is this for a power and weakness:
     Scarlet can read peoples mind, but she is actually deaf, so she can’t hear them but can read what they are thinking. She hides the fact that she is deaf since she can understand what they are trying to say. However, she is looking out a window as her friends are arguing (She does not see their lips moving) And eventually she yells at them to shut up. They had actually stopped fighting a few seconds before but they were thinking of insults. They soon find out that she can not hear them.
     Is this a good idea?

394. # B. McKenzieon 11 May 2012 at 4:52 am

     “They had actually stopped fighting a few seconds before but they were thinking of insults. They soon find out that she cannot hear them.” She told them to shut up a few seconds after they had stopped fighting. Erm, would they actually notice that something is off there? It might help to do a version of this where the impression she gets from her superpowers is entirely different than what a regular person would get from hearing. (For example, maybe two characters are having a conversation that is, on the surface, not very heated but under the surface both characters are seething and angry). Alternately, maybe they figure out that she’s deaf because she didn’t hear an inanimate object coming (perhaps a car or truck), and then someone wonders about how she has been able to keep up in conversation. (The first possibility that comes to mind would be that she’s an expert at reading lips, but someone observant might notice that she seems to do pretty well even when she’s not facing the right way to read lips. Depending on whether she wants to keep her abilities secret, she might start faking incomprehension in situations where a lip-reader would struggle).
     
     …
     
     It might also help to place some limits on her ability to read minds so that her deafness comes into play more often.

395. # Bunnyon 11 May 2012 at 5:36 am

     The thing is, I think about four people are arguing at once and by the time she yells at them, they had already stopped. I think before this happens, I might make a car nearly hit her since she can’t hear it. They notice it becouse Insted of her reacting a short second after they had stopped, it was at least five seconds or longer. Thanks for the feedback.

396. # Sarahon 11 May 2012 at 2:04 pm

     What if you have two heros that want to have similar abilites but not the same? Nothing elemental or clique.

397. # Jacobon 11 May 2012 at 2:05 pm

     you could go for the senses that have to do with sight and sound. EX> A person with the ability to manipulate sound might be able to deafen and mute someone. Also they could have extreme hearing, and perhaps have the ability to hear a persons thoughts. Many heros such as Daredevil have a range of abilitie due to his hearing.

398. # Saraon 11 May 2012 at 2:07 pm

     Thanks! Does anyone else have any ideas for me? I need powers for two, possibly three, that are similar. Nothing clique please!

399. # MisterEon 11 May 2012 at 6:53 pm

     Hmm, I’m not sure where best to ask this question, so here’s as good a place as any.

     Do you think it would be difficult/strange if the main character in a comic is a metahuman who was born with his abilities, but his ally/partner, major enemy, another major enemy (this time an entire organization), and a lesser ally all have mystical/magical origins and/or abilities?

400. # ehrichon 11 May 2012 at 9:58 pm

     i personally have never been a big fan of magical or mystical powers/orgins. i like a little bit of plausability in the story to get just an ounce of truth to it.

401. # B. McKenzieon 11 May 2012 at 11:17 pm

     “Do you think it would be difficult/strange if the main character in a comic is a metahuman who was born with his abilities, but his ally/partner and major enemies all have mystical/magical origins and/or abilities?” It feels intuitive to me that genre consistency would help, but I would note that Marvel and (especially) DC have some genre inconsistencies.

402. # Juan D'Marcoon 12 May 2012 at 5:40 pm

     So I need Superpowers that aren’t very destructive but aren’t useless either
     Any suggestion?

403. # MisterEon 12 May 2012 at 9:27 pm

     “It feels intuitive to me that genre consistency would help, but I would note that Marvel and (especially) DC have some genre inconsistencies.” But most comics have a diverse line-up, whether it be racially, sexual orientation-wise, power-wise, origin-wise, etc etc. Frankly, I would find it odd if in an entire country people of different power origins didn’t ever live in the same general area.

404. # B. McKenzieon 12 May 2012 at 9:49 pm

     In terms of powers and origins, I am not sure that most comics outside of the Marvel and DC universe have many diverse origins for the protagonists. Outside of Marvel and DC, I would gauge that it’s more common for most, if not all, of the protagonists to get their powers from the same source (or at least a source in the same genre).
     
     …
     
     Outside of Marvel and DC, I can’t think of many comic or graphic novel series which combine magical/fantasy and sci-fi origins. For example, BPRD/Hellboy has one or two characters which rely more on technology than anything mystical/magical/mythological, but the series tilts heavily towards (urban) fantasy rather than sci-fi. One of the characters in Top 10 comes from a fantasy background, but it only comes up in a spinoff series and is barely mentioned in Top 10 itself. Scott Pilgrim has antagonists ranging from demon hipster chicks to giant death robots to (sort of) ninja fathers, but it’s not a superhero series.

405. # B. McKenzieon 12 May 2012 at 11:52 pm

     “I need superpowers that aren’t very destructive but aren’t useless either. Any suggestions?” I think pretty most superpowers could fit that description if the limits were strict enough. For example, if someone has enough telekinesis to exert about half as much force as a boxer’s punch, it could be useful in a fight but would probably be more useful in noncombat situations.
     
     Some other possibilities that come to mind:
     –Illusions and/or any ability affecting the perceptions of others.
     –Enhanced intelligence, particularly if the character is not gifted at science. (For most comic book scientists, science means creating things which could be destructive).
     –Animal shape-shifting, possibly using size limits to limit the destructiveness.
     –Suggestion/limited mind-control
     –Telekinesis limited to a particular material. Magneto’s metal-control is obviously pretty dangerous, but something like paper-control could still be extremely useful despite being less destructive–please see Read or Die.
     –EXTREMELY limited time-control, like the ability to go back in time up to a minute or a few minutes. It’s not enough time to redo every mistake and avoid every trap, but a character might be able to make a big difference at certain points with it.

406. # King Applebutteron 14 May 2012 at 9:12 pm

     Heyho, I’ve been lurking through this website for a little while now, and so I figured I’d ask for some input on my character’s powers.

     His powers come from a plant-like parasitic organism (which will mostly likely be alien in origin, it’s still in the works) which has taken host in his body. This parasite slowly feeds off of what I simply put as his sanity, causing him to slowly go insane. However, in exchange, he is able to produce malleable vine-like tendrils* to achieve a variety of different effects. Some include using them as wings, for propelling him off the ground, extra limbs, shielding himself, or even walking around with them like Dr. Octopus does.

     I’ve thought about how all of that may be overkill and I’m having difficulty justifying them. My main allowance is that as he loses his sanity, he’ll become what will essentially be the main supervillain and afterwards lose his powers for good.

     (*I’m not entirely sure how to describe what these are. I was thinking of something similar to the Biomass from the webseries Romantically Apocalyptic)

407. # Marquison 15 May 2012 at 7:02 am

     King Applebutter,

     I don’t think your character is overpowered, he’s simply powerful.His powers come from a parasitic plant-being meaning most fire damage should harm him ( Shield or Not) Also He’d be very vulnerable to most bladed weapons ( depending on who’s using them of course).

     As Far As the Tendrils, if its a comic you’re working on make the tendrils seem more like something venom from spiderman would use or something like the powers in prototype.

408. # HomuHomuon 15 May 2012 at 10:05 am

     I would take that web series more seriously if Alexiuss would just draw everything himself didn’t just smudge photographs. And his attitude is piss poor.

     On a more relevant note, as long as he isn’t a completely invincible villain sue, then you should be fine bro.

409. # B. McKenzieon 15 May 2012 at 10:31 am

     “His attitude is piss-poor.” I’m not familiar with any of the particulars here, but I’m inclined to sympathize here. I sometimes behave far more curtly on the Internet than I would in person–e.g. this guy had a not-thoroughly-idiotic (albeit thoroughly implausible) concern and I sort of went off on him. The publishing industry in general… I don’t know. It has more than its share of jackasses*. I’m wary about becoming one of those jaded husks of a human that apparently exist mainly to complain about how bad the bottom half of the submissions pile is (or about how bad Bestseller X is).
     
     *Aggravating factors include New York City, low profit margins, huge technological shifts AND a workforce which is mainly arts-and-letters rather than math-and-science, a multitude of not very good fiction submissions, New York City, widespread feelings of inadequacy/self-doubt (even for many phenomenal writers and editors), paychecks which are scandalously small and unreliable, a certain correlation between being an underpaid artist/writer and abject depression, unreasonable customer criticism** AND sometimes disdain for the audience, and tension between sales/marketing and storytelling.
     
     
     **I think people tend to have much more polarized opinions about books than about most other products. One thing goes wrong and suddenly the book is terrible and the author should be ashamed for inflicting it on the public. In contrast, almost no one would leap from “Pharmaceutical Product X has a serious side-effect” to “the people that made Pharmaceutical X are horrible idiots.” I’m working a lot harder on being more understanding of writing decisions that I don’t think are very effective.

410. # HomuHomuon 15 May 2012 at 10:54 am

     Unless you’re a regular dA and other sites lurker, I really wouldn’t expect you to be hahaha. It’s just these “popular artists” with huge egos that behave themselves like children.

     Oh, I saw that. I understand their concerns, but the way it was worded was like an accusation rather than just an expression of genuine concern. But surely anyone with an ounce of a brain would realize just how incredibly pretentious that sounds, especially coming with someone with questionable grammar.

     Personally, I think you handled that well (if just a bit too soft).

     >I’m wary about becoming one of those jaded husks of a human that apparently exist mainly to complain about how bad the bottom half of the submissions pile is.

     I’ve seen my fair share. Not really a problem unless you make it one. In my case, I may outwardly voice my complaints about something/someone, but I never hold ill-feelings towards anyone really. I still hold a positive attitude as long as I’m treated with respect

411. # HomuHomuon 15 May 2012 at 10:58 am

     >I think people tend to have much more polarized opinions about books than about most other products. I’m working a lot harder on being more understanding of writing decisions that I don’t think are very effective.

     Indeed! Even when it comes to art. It’s a tricky thing to get into. I’m inclined to be more understanding because I’ve been there before.

412. # YoungAuthoron 15 May 2012 at 3:07 pm

     Due to a tragic computer mishap, i may or may not have lost the two manuscripts I had started. (it’s getting fixed so i’ll find out what i lost and and didn’t lose). Therefore, i have started upon a new idea! *applause*. I think I gave my character a unique power set and I want to know how it sounds. His name (Kevin Hartline) will be Black Dragon. His powers will be the ability to breathe fire, super-strength, and flight. ( from a freak accident in his dad’s lab.) Any and all feedback is welcome!!!

413. # B. McKenzieon 15 May 2012 at 3:52 pm

     “Due to a tragic computer mishap, I may or may not have lost the two manuscripts I had started.” Whether the manuscripts are lost or not, I would recommend saving your files somewhere online–that way you’ll have a copy in case your computer is suddenly lost, damaged or stolen. Personally, I use Amazon Cloud Drive.

414. # B. McKenzieon 15 May 2012 at 4:26 pm

     “Hey, how exactly would you use radiation as a power?” If we’re just talking about the ability to control radiation, I think it’d be somewhat believable to turn it into some sort of laser beam (like Captain Atom does). Besides that, I guess he could dish out cancer like it’s going out of style, but Saturday Morning Watchmen got there first.
     
     It might help to expand the idea of radiation beyond controlling radiation–for example, radiation caused some physical and mental changes for Bruce Banner (the Hulk) and Dr. Manhattan. It also made Captain Atom a lot more physically tough, so he’s not just a ranged hero.

415. # HomuHomuon 15 May 2012 at 11:20 pm

     >Yeah, I usually spend a few minutes rewriting each comment. I think it helps make them more coherent, useful and diplomatic.

     Before or after posting? I usually review what I write as I type and make changes accordingly. Though there is the occasional typo that manages to slip through.

416. # Anonymouson 15 May 2012 at 11:24 pm

     I have a character who is a sentient liquid substance with the ability to morph into any shape/form (with some limitations). It becomes attached to my other MC and becomes his “sentient powersuit” or sorts. Is this ok for an ability?

     - The one who is too shy to post as any name anymore

417. # Comicbookguy117on 16 May 2012 at 8:00 am

     Anonymous, I thinks it’s a cool idea for an ability. A sentient powersuit, like the venom symbiote. Hopefully yours won’t have any of the psychological problems, :).

     You don’t have to be shy, this is a welcoming community. We help each other out. So hopefully I helped.

418. # Kenry Skyleron 18 May 2012 at 10:04 pm

     Okay, so I’ve been doing more thinking and planning for my story, and what I came up with was a world full of supernatural people,(my own multiverse), most of whom don’t know they have abilities. Some people’s abilities are far less supernatural than others, such as increasing lung capacity for longer breaths and more supplied oxygen, but one trait they all share is the “early indicator”. The early indicator is a universally shared characteristic of their abilities that typically manifest itself before or at the start of puberty, in Kenry’s case, being able to see in the dark. Throughout puberty the rest of the ability develops, umbrakinesis* in Kenry’s case. My first arcs will cover Kenry coming to terms with his abilities and starting his crime-fighting career. After a particular incident where he is forced to kill one of the criminals, he begins to question his reasons for being a super-”hero”, and not just being an anti-hero. This is how he becomes the dark hero that he is.

     *Umbrakinesis is telekinesis over shadows*

     The next arc will cover him exposing himself to the world,(with an alter-ego of course), and subsequently his conflict with the police. I’m still not sure if I should introduce the team of supernaturals at this point, or if I should introduce them before now.

419. # Leiion 30 May 2012 at 1:12 am

     So what about the manipulation of electromagnetic fields? I’m not sure if this was already listed, but it would include basic telekinetic powers (as all things are influenced by the pull of charge at some level), as well as things like creating plasma arcs and using the charge to float. Just a first-round idea, which needs some refining. Thanks

420. # B. McKenzieon 30 May 2012 at 3:14 am

     “So what about the manipulation of electromagnetic fields? I’m not sure if this was already listed, but it would include basic telekinetic powers,… creating plasma arcs and using the charge to float. Just a first-round idea, which needs some refining. Thanks.”
     
     Those superpowers strike me as totally workable–just make sure that the characters and plot are interesting enough to drive the story. Based on the superhero manuscripts I’ve read, superpower selection strikes me as a major barrier to publication in maybe 5-10% of cases (the most common issue there: the powers make it very hard to challenge the character and/or reduce the stakes of failure–e.g. immortality). In contrast, characterization* and plotting** strike me as a major barrier to publication in ~95% and ~75% of manuscripts, respectively.
     
     *Most common characterization issues: lack of distinguishing traits for main characters (the main characters act more or less like pretty much every other protagonist would act in the same way–very forgettable), inconsistent personalities, overly passive main characters, utter lack of likability for main characters, etc.
     
     Most common plotting issues: the plot is too hard to follow, the beginning is too slow, the stakes are too low and/or the goals are not urgent enough for the characters, the plot hinges on inexplicably stupid decisions from characters (e.g. a villain just letting the hero go), the main characters don’t make any mistakes or disagreeable decisions, the characters aren’t challenged enough, etc.

421. # Leiion 30 May 2012 at 8:16 pm

     Right, my protagonist is (tentatively) going to be a rage-oriented vigilante, who acts according to his own plan after some major loss, causing conflicts with people on both sides of the law (villains and police).

422. # B. Macon 30 May 2012 at 8:51 pm

     That sounds pretty good. Some thoughts: 1) Does he have a personality besides being angry? 2) One potential concern for characters in the mold of the Punisher is likability. Both Batman and Punisher are revenge-driven antiheroes, but I think Batman is significantly more likable… the two main factors that come to mind there are that Batman has a personal code (nonlethality) and that Batman is more stylish/witty/clever).

423. # Leiion 30 May 2012 at 10:06 pm

     Yes, he does have other traits, however his actions are driven by anger (and possibly the potency of his power–not to the degree of the hulk, for example, but the greater his anger, the more damaging his power is, for example his electromagnetism is more likely to cause plasma arcs than to act more like telekinesis).

424. # Helknighton 07 Jun 2012 at 8:11 pm

     In my book half of the population on earth have a kind of tattoo that with them they have special apilitys mostly dealing with the five sences but I can’t think of what to call them

425. # Helknighton 07 Jun 2012 at 8:45 pm

     Also they have them since birth so kind of like really detailed birthmarks

426. # ehrichon 08 Jun 2012 at 9:00 am

     @Helknight to give ya some inspiration i googled a bit about lore involving birthmarks and tattooing of people in many cultures here’s what I’ve found…

     In folklore significance has been placed and generally three theories appear across cultures and time:

     1. Birthmarks signify are an omen which may denote a characteristic or life path
     2. Birthmarks are leftover from a past life/ re-incarnation
     3. Birthmarks are the result of events that happened to the mother while carrying her child or actions she took during her pregnancy.

     In this theory, the location of a birthmark signifies something about the person. For example it has been suggested that a birthmark on the right arm is an omen for prosperity, while a birthmark on the left arm conversely signifies financial struggle through life. The parallel of the right and left side of the body however does not always correlate to an opposing meaning of an omen. If a birthmark appears on the right foot, it is thought that the person in question will have an overpowering love of exploration and travel, while if such a birthmark appears on the left foot; this would be a sign of great intellectual ability.

     The meaning ascribed to a birthmark can also differ depending on the gender of the person; marking on the ankle for a man denotes personal refinement, while for a woman such a marking is considered to represent independence and a zest for life.

     there’s more to it involving re-incarnation too but I’ve skipped posting that.

     as for the tattoo part, try using them as an enhancement of the birthmark powers. so the birthmark will determine one of the 5 scenes and as that grow up, the tattoo’s will be made depending on factors of that person.

     i personally would need more info to help ya out more in naming the characteristic, cause many things for me are involved in naming stuff. like what happens when 2 different people with different scenes have a baby? is there a formula to determine the mark of the baby? is it random? does society even allow two different marks to pair up? whats the social status of the scenes scale?

     cause different wording would mean different things written in different order or context. so please post a bit more on this for some help.

427. # Helknighton 08 Jun 2012 at 12:38 pm

     If two diffrent peaple with marks have a baby the tattoo is random it depends on the baby what the tattoo is and they are born with the tattoos where it is and what it is determans what find of power they have
     One of the character has a dragon circling his arm from shoulder to wrist and he is one of four on the planet with enhanced strength

428. # helknighton 08 Jun 2012 at 1:48 pm

     all of the powers are completely random

429. # ehrichon 08 Jun 2012 at 3:55 pm

     what about social status? is everyone on the same scale? or are some powers more revered than others?

430. # ehrichon 08 Jun 2012 at 4:00 pm

     do you want it to sound modern? ancient? English? foreign? there is really a lot that goes into naming stuff, lol.

431. # Helknighton 08 Jun 2012 at 4:17 pm

     There are 4 diffrent social levels 1st the god and goddesses level 2nd demigod 3rd monster 4th mortal the tattoos give the power from the Greek/roman mythology and it’s about 200 years in the future

432. # ehrichon 08 Jun 2012 at 4:33 pm

     are the tattoo’s a gift from the gods?

433. # Helknighton 08 Jun 2012 at 5:25 pm

     Sort of they were given to stop a war from tairing apart the earth

434. # ehrichon 08 Jun 2012 at 5:28 pm

     Marks of Theora (which means gods gift)
     Marks of Kratokas (which means power of a seal)

     you can change the marks parts but those are the best sounding “greek” terms for use of power combos that are both real and unque

435. # ehrichon 08 Jun 2012 at 5:30 pm

     but on that note time to play WOW. let me know if there good, i can find something else if ya want a different sound or style to them.

436. # Helknighton 08 Jun 2012 at 5:54 pm

     Thanks they sound good

437. # Helknighton 08 Jun 2012 at 6:10 pm

     Also what do you have that sounds modern

438. # YoungAuthoron 08 Jun 2012 at 6:43 pm

     I have a superhero named Black Dragon, the alter ego of my main character. (think Bruce Wayne/Batman type of personalities). He has an armored body suit (like Iron Man) thats midnight black. His mask is like batmans, but starting at the top of his head there is a mohawk of spikes like a dragon’s spine going down his spine. He has the ability to breathe fire, super-strength, and flight? How’s he sound?

439. # B. McKenzieon 08 Jun 2012 at 8:12 pm

     YoungAuthor, I think worrying about superpower selection is generally a fruitless time-sink compared to the story elements which will determine whether the story gets published or not. I’d recommend allotting more of that time into character development and plotting.
     
     From a previous article:
     
     “If you’ve put more thought into the main character’s costume and/or superpowers than personality and defining traits, I’d recommend going back to the drawing board. When editors and publisher’s assistants evaluate a novel manuscript, their reader’s reports will usually mention the characterization, the plot and the quality of the writing, etc. Superpowers and costumes, not so much.”

440. # ehrichon 08 Jun 2012 at 9:49 pm

     @helknight one name I’ve always liked but have never been able to use is Tiberius, and yes i know its capt. kirk’s middle name but i still like it. there’s many different ways to spell it but still sounds pretty good. also it have a more modern Greek myth sound to it if ya ask me.

     FEODORA its the same meaning as Theora but is from Russian decent and more modern form of the name.

441. # Helknighton 09 Jun 2012 at 8:45 am

     Thanks I think I’m going to go with Kratokas

442. # YoungAuthoron 10 Jun 2012 at 11:53 am

     @B.Mac-I’ve spent more time on the character and plot development than on superpower selection and his costume. I read that article too.

443. # slickon 21 Jun 2012 at 9:49 am

     the best way to manipulate the ability of speed is finding another power that can benefit and support it. the 2 weakest powers up there is super speed and elasticy as a user of speed cannot do much against heavily armored foes and tbh cant do much but dodge and elasticy is good and if you have ever watched the anime one piece than you would see that using certain techniques of elasticy can resort in a very powerful attack as in if you was to throw your arm away from you than launch it at the enemy than it would resort in a super punch and shooting a rubber man would only resort in your own death as the bullets would bounce of him making him almost invinsable but the weakness is that a blade can easily cut through rubber making it a weakness so putting speed and elasticy together would mean a man whose only weakness it a sharp blade or maybe shrapnel using speed and rubber attacks to create a super powerful combination that can fire super fast super powerful punches or kicks

444. # Yuuki12on 23 Jun 2012 at 12:59 pm

     Hello everyone. I have a brief question. Is spatial manipulation a complex power to work with? I mean, it’s plausible to understand why time manipulation is difficult to implement, given how it can it make challenging heroes nearly impossible (like traveling back in time to prevent a crime). But I am wondering if this might to due with that space is an innately hard concept for most humans to understand.

     The basis for why I’m asking is that I have an idea for a hero who’s an private investigator/ conspiracy theorist who gains spatial powers.

445. # Carl Shinyamaon 23 Jun 2012 at 1:23 pm

     If you can clearly show the how the powers work and what, if any, limits there are, then not really. Streamine the powers into a core concept, and let the reader ride with it.

446. # Yuuki12on 23 Jun 2012 at 2:55 pm

     @ Carl Shinyama

     That’s the thing. I’m unsure as to what limitations as to spatial powers. The only thing that in my mind that is conceivable is that these powers require the user to understand space and that they take time to home.

     Perhaps, then, this ability is very complicated to work with. The other alternative I had was sound manipulation. This would be for another hero, Derek, who I had conceived. The shortcomings for this power are easy. The first is that sound requires a medium, like air, water etc. to transmit. Thus, areas which are vacuums render him powerless.

     The next disadvantage is due to his emotions. Given his powers are tied to them, excess emotions, like anger or frustration might trigger them.

447. # Comicbookguy117on 23 Jun 2012 at 6:12 pm

     Yuuki, spatial manipulation is not that hard to work with. In essence, teleportaion is their main skill. Moving themselves, others and even objects around three dimensional space. Where it can become complicated is considering the other applications for manipulating space. For example, is it possible for a space manipulator to influence objects over more than three dimensions. And speaking of the three dimensions, spactial manipulation could allow such a character to manipulate an objects height, width and depth. This can be done indepently of each other or all at once, allowing for gigantic or microscopic objects. I hope this helps. I’ve got a handful of space manipulators in my universe, so I’ve don some research.

448. # Yuuki12on 23 Jun 2012 at 7:21 pm

     @Comicbookguy117

     Yes, it does help a lot and I thank you. To address your claims ,some of the things I do see my character doing is teleportation. HOWEVER, to keep the power in check, he will need to see where he’s going prior to teleporting.

     So if he wanted to teleport to paris, he would need to see the layout of paris, like a specific location. But he does manage to get over this, by learning to use his space powers to visualize the area. This is kind of like a form of scrying.

     Other abilities include being able to take objects and teleport them into pocket dimensions. However, he can only do it to small objects, like a deck of cards or at biggest a laptop. He can’t do it a car, or any other huge object.

     The final ability would be a type of spatial slicing. By utilizing specific energy, my character can slice or pierce through objects. How this is explained is that it is slicing the third dimension, so in essence it’s breaking the object away from space.

     So items, like diamonds, are rendered useless as they are being taken away from space. That said, this is a very DANGEROUS ability. My character uses it with extreme caution, because he knows that something sliced spatially, like a human flesh, is most unpleasant.

     So how’s that?

449. # Comicbookguy117on 23 Jun 2012 at 8:42 pm

     Interesting. I like it. Can’t wait to hear more.

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451. # Epic Battleon 27 Jun 2012 at 4:35 pm

     is gravity control becoming a more used power now because this is the second time something has listed gravity control, have you seen or heard of any one using gravity control in any book, or movie because one of my characters has that power, and i wanted it to be orignal, if it hasnt been used in one thats published or produced, anyway thanks

452. # B. McKenzieon 28 Jun 2012 at 11:10 am

     I wouldn’t consider it very common (unless you consider it interchangeable with telekinesis, which is arguable). There are a few published examples (e.g. WildStorm’s Freefall), but they aren’t well-known.
     
     Personally, if I were reviewing a manuscript or comic book script for publication, I wouldn’t be terribly impressed or concerned by the uniqueness or clicheness of the superpowers. Furthermore, even if the superpowers were a pressing problem, that could be changed readily enough (e.g. swapping out superstrength for, say, telekinesis would probably take less than a workweek). I’d recommend focusing instead on characterization (e.g. personality, memorable traits, and unusual decisions) and secondarily on memorable uses for the superpowers. For example, Batman has essentially the same capabilities in Batman & Robin and The Dark Knight, but TDK used the superpowers in more interesting ways–for example, compare and contrast Batman using his nonlethal fighting skills to prevent a SWAT team from mistakenly killing hostages dressed as criminals AND stop the actual criminals vs. everything in B&R.

453. # rogon 28 Jun 2012 at 2:09 pm

     hey, i’m trying to come with a “trinity” of superpowers, I don’t exactly know what powers to use, I though of using a trinity of people with telepathy/telekinesis/pyrokinesis or super intelligence/super strength/ pyrokinesis. what do you think?

454. # Janon 28 Jun 2012 at 4:06 pm

     I hate to be biased, but super smart and super strong are two traits that are not commonly found in the same individual. Then again, it could make for a good story, but pyrokinesis (controlling fire for anyone who might not know), super intelligence, and super strength have little or nothing to do with each other. The first one may be better in that regard.

     But if you haven’t already, check out ‘Eight Problems With Phsyic Heroes’ for some insight on that. Have a nice day.

455. # rogon 28 Jun 2012 at 4:52 pm

     well i meant this in the regard of a team, as in these would all be powers for different individuals: one would have intelligence, another strength, and the last one would have pyrokinesis. I mean a trinity in a sense of giving a variety of people different powers.

456. # rogon 28 Jun 2012 at 4:53 pm

     I really just wanted to see if there could be a different set of powers that might be more interesting combined or something like that, or maybe a different third wheel other than a pyrokinetic

457. # B. McKenzieon 29 Jun 2012 at 6:08 am

     “I thought of using a trinity of people with telepathy/telekinesis/pyrokinesis…” The character whose main power was telepathy would probably have trouble being useful in a variety of situations, I suspect. I think the strength/intelligence/fire control split would make it easier to find uses for all of the characters, especially in combat scenes. Outside of combat, if you were having trouble giving each character things to do, you could give them skills (either related to their superpowers or not–for example, maybe the intelligent guy has a strong grasp of first aid and the strength guy is a hunting/wilderness enthusiast, or vice versa*).
     
     If you wanted to get rid of the pyrokinetic, one possibility would be a power that lent itself better to use outside of battle royales. For example, an agility-based hero (e.g. Batman or Spider-Man) might be useful in stealth/subterfuge situations.
     
     *If it seems strange that the medic would be somebody besides the designated genius, I would point out that it worked for Holmes and (Dr.) Watson.
     
     …
     
     Another possibility (which might make it easier in noncombat situations) would be a split more along the lines of occupations or skill-sets appropriate to the genre and plot (e.g. soldier/scout/medic or soldier/demolitions/pilot for a military-themed team or wizard/warrior/ninja* for something fantasy). The abilities might or might not be closely linked to those skills.

458. # rogon 29 Jun 2012 at 6:47 am

     the alternative does sound pretty cool, but I don’t really know what would count as a “stealth” power; wall-crawling, invisibility?
     and for the most part, its mainly super-hero/military

459. # B. McKenzieon 29 Jun 2012 at 7:15 am

     A stealthy character’s superpowers might or might not be explicitly stealth-related. For example, Batman mostly uses superior climbing/jumping/gliding/melee skills to accomplish stealth effects. I think that approach is more interesting than, say, the ability to turn invisible–with a made-to-order superpower like invisibility, it’s harder to challenge the hero and generate suspense.
     
     Some superpowers and abilities which strike me as potentially helpful in stealth situations (but not necessarily very dramatic). If the power would make common situations too easy (like invisibility might in a story with a lot of stealth), then I’d recommend using limitations to make it more challenging (read: interesting) for the hero.
     –Shapeshifting (animal or human). Failing that, acting ability and/or a knack for disguises. Bruce Wayne’s disguise skills are pretty outlandish–look up Almost Got ‘Im if you haven’t already seen it. (Killer Croc: “It was a really big rock!”)
     –Camouflage
     –Invisibility
     –Short-range teleportation (but I would recommend putting a limitation on this so that the exit requires more skill than just teleporting out. Maybe the ability has a cooldown or there’s a tight weight restriction).
     –Illusions/the ability to influence perception.
     –Electronics skills (for disabling cameras, opening doors, locking doors to thwart guards, maybe disabling/subverting security droids and drones, distracting guards with false alarms, etc).
     –Canadianness
     –Superior athleticism (in particular: climbing, jumping/landing
     –Melee skills (especially the ability to silently disable someone from behind)
     –Pocket space (the ability to put away items and withdraw them later–could be useful for getting bulky equipment, explosives or stolen goods past guards or into secure facilities).
     –Shrinking
     –Relatively quiet movement
     –The ability to handle long falls (e.g. Batman’s cape)
     –Some psychic skills might lend themselves well to silent takedowns and/or other stealthy solutions. For example, telekinesis could be used to distract guards and/or knock them down stairs or ledges. Mind control or suggestion might help an intruder clear a guarded checkpoint or deal with a guard who is about to sound the alarm.

460. # rogon 29 Jun 2012 at 8:39 am

     well I think camouflage or invisibility might work in dramatic situation. one limitation I can come up with is that the invisibility somehow creates a faint shadow, or maybe make it some sort of technology that can’t get wet or it shorts out

461. # Edgukatoron 29 Jun 2012 at 9:34 am

     @Rog – I often find TVTropes is a good website for looking at the existing stereotypes, either to live up to them or undermine them.

     Some possibilities:

     - Brains / Brawl and Beauty (Beauty could include seduction / stealth ala catwoman)
     - The RPG trio – Fighting / Stealth / Intelligence (warrior / rogue / mage)
     - Fire / Ice / Lightning (could be the abstract of these as well – a fiery martial artist, a cool calm and collected brick, a super quick speedster)
     - Land / Sea and Sky (a brawler, a swimmer, a flyer)

462. # rogon 29 Jun 2012 at 10:11 am

     pretty neat, I was mainly stuck in the rpg trio thing because it would seem the easiest to explain, but the other ones I might wanna consider, thanks

463. # scytheon 29 Jun 2012 at 1:06 pm

     me,I like the unholy power of death and shadows.

464. # B. McKenzieon 29 Jun 2012 at 7:08 pm

     “Brains / Brawl and Beauty (Beauty could include seduction / stealth ala catwoman)” — if so, broadening “beauty” to be social skills in general (and/or charisma) might give you more to work with than just sex appeal. This person might be, say, a skilled poker player, a police negotiator or a savvy agent rather than a face that could stop traffic.

465. # Gameron 02 Jul 2012 at 1:51 pm

     Me and 5 of my friends play a verbal game in which we work for a place called the gild and try to stop evil. We all have some crazy powers for example mine is super strength, my friend has Telekinisis, Teleporting, Forcefields,Plasma, Healing Plasma, my next friend has powers to go to a sacred world of dead people and make weapons of gold and gold armor yet the weapons and armor are stronger than normal gold, he can also use electricity, my next friend has wings and laser vision, and last my friend also has super strength, My final friend is the creator of the game and the narrator. I am hoping to use this list to gain better powers

466. # rogon 03 Jul 2012 at 3:54 pm

     I was also planning on explain the super-humans in this world created as militant weapons by a genetic-engineering corporation. some of the powers that I think I use are super-strength(tanks), hypnosis(spys), telepathy(communication), intelligence(engineering), flugokinesis(energy fuel), bio-healing(medics) and super-speed(scouts). what powers that might be used for the likes of militant or practical needs do you think might work?

467. # B. McKenzieon 03 Jul 2012 at 6:21 pm

     Control over metal (e.g. Magneto) could be used to detect and disable buried landmines/IEDs and perhaps suicide bombers, disable and/or redirect rocket-propelled grenades, perhaps stop incoming bullets in some cases, and perhaps resolve hostage/human shield situations at close range more accurately and effectively than a rifle could (either by grabbing the gun or perhaps by lethally stabbing the hostage-taker from behind).
     
     Weather control could be used to avoid adverse conditions (e.g. sandstorms)*, reduce enemy visibility, perhaps destroy enemy fortifications more quickly and perhaps cost-effectively than calling in an airstrike, clear skies for airstrikes/helicopters/medevacs/supply drops, make it easier for citizens of allied districts to grow legitimate crops (rather than growing drugs or taking payments from the enemy for sabotage) and convince wavering chieftains that cooperating is a better long-term plan than working with the enemy.
     
     *This could be really useful for missions that are extremely time-sensitive (e.g. special forces operations like Desert One — Iranian sandstorms created severe problems for Desert One).
     
     Enhanced intelligence could be used for better investigations (e.g. glancing at the detonating mechanism on a defused IED and figuring out useful information about the bomb-maker), ballistics (maybe determining the location of a shooter by glancing at the impact of the bullet), better research and design (more obviously, working in a lab somewhere on weapons and vehicles, but less obviously doing things like smart phone apps which can help soldiers detect bombs and unexploded ordnance), etc.

468. # rogon 03 Jul 2012 at 7:23 pm

     thanks, this can do a really good job helping me be more creative with the intelligence and suggesting magnetism, really cool ideas. I don’t really think i’ll be making superhumans that can control weather however, seems a bit too powerful for the kind of story I want to make, but thank you for the other stuff.

469. # Shadow Forceon 05 Jul 2012 at 4:09 am

     Hi there

     I’m thinking of plunging my heroine into a super-power filled world without any super powers herself (getting your power is kind of like going through puberty- it happens to everyone mostly). Would it be terribly flaky or mary-sue ish if she obtains a power towards the end- and even more so if its an unusual or powerful one. A good example would be from Lissa Dragomir in Vampire Academy- instead of having a ‘normal’ elemental ability, she has one thought to be dead.

     Your site rocks by the way and has made me reconsider even non-super hero books. (It even got me thinking on this plot )

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471. # Leegirlon 12 Jul 2012 at 9:09 pm

     This is kind of an outlandish thought, but I think that every superpower is sort of cliche. I wanna be able to make up a new ability that no one’s ever thought of before. Of course that’s going to be next to impossible cuz Stan Lee and DC comics have done something close to that. But guys seriously, what if there were other superpowers out there? I’d love to make a story out of that.

472. # B. McKenzieon 12 Jul 2012 at 9:52 pm

     “This is kind of an outlandish thought, but I think that every superpower is sort of cliche.” Not so outlandish, although occasionally someone will come up with something out of the blue (e.g. as far as I know, webbing and danger-sense are original to Spider-Man). The good news here is that you can tell an awesome superhero story with very unoriginal superpowers. For example, Watchmen is very possibly the best superhero series introduced within the last 30 years, but only one of its characters (Dr. Manhattan) has remotely creative superpowers, and even those came largely from Captain Atom. The Incredibles was an incredible superhero movie, but it used basic powers mainly from the Fantastic Four. I’d recommend focusing on personality and character development instead.
     
     Failing that, unusual costs or limitations might make a conventional superpower feel unique. For example, Magneto was hardly the first telekinetic character, but he was probably the first telekinetic character whose power only applies to metal. Bitter Seeds was hardly the first story with magic, but the magic comes across as fairly memorable because the magic is fueled by making horrible sacrifices to angry spirits.

473. # Anonymouson 13 Jul 2012 at 12:08 pm

     Hey everybody, got a question. Well, more of a concern. Basically I just need input. So I’ve got a whole group of characters running around my universe that are wielding a special kind of magic. They use magic to summon creatures from another dimension. Some choose to summon only a handful of creatures that they’ve acquired through a process of ‘trial and error’. Some are capable of summoning a vast array of creatures. And rare among them, are those that are dubbed ‘kinship’ summoners. These magic users can summon only one creature but they are capable of altering this creature to adjust it to a variety of situations.

     Basically I’m concerned about differentiating a whole lot of characters that can summon. I mean I know some characters might summon the same of similar creatures. I just don’t want my potential readers to get bored. Any questions, comments or insight will be greatly appreciated. Thanks guys.

474. # Aj of Earthon 13 Jul 2012 at 12:44 pm

     @Anonymous

     Perhaps theming each characters summons with elements particular only to that character? Ex.: Character X’s summons are all made of shadow because the character… where Character Y’s summons require some sort of tithe in exchange for its services because the character… Or maybe a character can only summon during the day. You get the idea.

     Use what you know. Brainstorm some creative ways to reflect the qualities of your characters through the beings they summon and I bet that would help make them really unique.

475. # Rebekkaon 31 Jul 2012 at 7:13 pm

     thanks to you i can continue my stories and make them better! i hope you add more that are unique and out of this world.

476. # Rachelon 07 Aug 2012 at 10:09 pm

     Hey, I’m fourteen and I’m trying to write my first novel. Roughly, the plot is that an ex-gov scientist experimented on kids when they were young and now they have powers, then the gov takes them in and trains them to defeat the guy who made them. They were all taken from their foster homes to live at a secret gov building they call the ‘complex’.The main character is Hazel, and I’m not sure what her powers are yet. I’m leaning towards the idea of having her be able to control energy (ex. she can stop a bullet speeding toward her by controlling the energy particles in the air to create a sort of force field. Or she can infuse energy into an injured or dying person to help heal them)
     Are there any suggestions to help improve her?
     And I could really use some help figuring out powers for the others:
     Gavin–the guy Hazel falls in love with, really muscular–maybe super strength??
     Blake–the rebel, doesn’t like the way they are treated, hates being a “freak”
     Raina–kinda like the popular girl of the group, really beautiful
     Mason–the teacher’s/trainer’s pet
     Calvin–the quiet one
     Andrea–nice, becomes Hazel’s best friend at the complex
     Please Help!!!!!!Thanks

477. # Rachelon 07 Aug 2012 at 10:52 pm

     Oh! Almost forgot:
     I want one or two of the “heroes” to turn into villians later on in the story, perhaps when they go to battle the evil scientist. Hazel definitely stays good, but which one(s) should become bad?? Or just become unsure, not good but not overly bad??
     And how should the ‘good’ find out about them? I’m trying not to be to cliche, but I don’t know how to further the story from the common themes.

478. # Edgukatoron 07 Aug 2012 at 11:51 pm

     Hi Rachel,

     Some thoughts,

     - The ability to control energy is kind of a biggie, and the two uses you mention are vastly different, suggesting that your character to basically use it to do anything she wanted. I recommend reading this article:

     http://www.superheronation.com/2011/04/13/superpowers-checklist/

     to help define the powers.

     - Beware of the word “nice” as a character trait. B.Mac explains it here:

     http://www.superheronation.com/2009/06/15/please-do-not-make-your-characters-generically-nice/

     - Why would a government agency risk the lives of teenagers to get revenge on a mad scientist? That would be an act of child endangerment.

     - As for who to turn evil, I think you need to deeply think about your characters and your villain.

     First, nobody thinks that they’re evil – well, there are some cases where people have psychological issues, but generally they are a lot less evil than people who think they’re doing good. People like Stalin and Hitler, for example, believed that everything they were doing was for the betterment of their people, which made it a lot easier for them to commit such horrible acts.

     Anyway, think first about your bad guy. Who is he and why did he carry out these experiments? What was he hoping to achieve? Then, flesh out your teenagers and think how they would react to bad guys motives.

     A good example is can be found in X-Men: First Class. And MAJOR SPOILER ALERT (if you haven’t seen the movie, I’m sorry)

     (I recommend reading B.Mac’s breakdown here: http://www.superheronation.com/2012/07/12/learning-writing-skills-from-x-men-first-class/)

     We believe Magneto, and to a lesser degree Mystique’s turn to the bad side because the choices are consistent with the character that has been developed throughout the story. Magneto has seen the worst of humanity, and while he opposes the bad guy, it’s out of a need for revenge. Meanwhile, Mystique struggles throughout the movie with how she looks, and when she is rejected by two of the “heroes”, but embraced by Magneto, she knows where her allegiance lies.

     On the other hand, another character (Angel Salvadore) switches sides, there is the barest of explanations as to why.

     Come up with a clear goal for your bad guy, define who your teenagers are, and then find plausible reasons your teenagers would be attracted to the bad guy’s goals.

479. # Rachelon 08 Aug 2012 at 9:30 am

     Edjukator,
     Thanks for the advice, it was really helpful!
     For the main character’s ability, I think I’m going to cut off the healing bit, and just go with the force field sort of thing, and possibly combining that with being able to teleport herself a short distance (no more then ten feet or so) by rearranging her body into pure energy and transporting it to a different spot. This will make her a good defensvie fighter.

     To answer the question of why the bad guy is evil, and why he experimented on the teenagers, it was an illegal test which is why he got fired in the first place. This made him angry, and trying to get back at the gov, he experimented on himself and became insane in the process. He believes he is saving the world by creating superhumans to defend against other countries.

     The government is just trying to tie up loose ends, they don’t want uncontrolled teenagers with powers running loose, so they train them to fight the villian, not really caring whether they get hurt or not. If the kids and the villian all die, then its a win-win for them(they obviously don’t tell the heroes about this, but a few of them have suspicions which causes them to take the villains side to help take down the gov)

     Motive for fighting villian:they think of it as their duty, and the gov basically brainwashes them. They can’t leave the complex until they fight the villian because they are dangerous to others.

     ‘Nice’ was just referring to that out of the two other girls there, one is mean to the MC because she fears MC might become more popular, basic high-school cliques, just in super heroe form. The other girl helps stand up for MC and becomes her friend.

480. # YellowJujuon 12 Aug 2012 at 11:37 pm

     What kind of powers do you imagine a robot having? They dont have to be “super” but just things that are implied I guess.
     For example not “It can turn invisible.” More along the lines of “It’s stronger than a human being.”

481. # B. McKenzieon 12 Aug 2012 at 11:50 pm

     “What kind of powers do you imagine a robot having? They dont have to be “super” but just things that are implied I guess.” I think you have a lot of options here. Increased strength/endurance and reflexes/mental speed strike me as very intuitive. I could also envision that it’d be somewhat lacking in creativity and innovation (e.g. it might struggle to deal with problems it hasn’t encountered before). If you had something in mind like ranged weaponry (e.g. a laser and/or firearms), it would be believable if the robot was more accurate than a human would be.
     
     Alternately (or additionally), you could go in a more exotic direction. For example, Terminator 2 had robots which could shapeshift, a capability not usually associated with robots.

482. # mythos manon 13 Aug 2012 at 2:53 am

     hey what do you think of lightning as a power for a super strong flight superhero

483. # YoungAuthoron 13 Aug 2012 at 6:03 am

     Lightning is a very compatible power for a flight/super strength power hero.

484. # ewanon 14 Aug 2012 at 11:07 am

     who is your favourite superhero or heroine mines got to the flash or kid flash

485. # Ragged Boyon 14 Aug 2012 at 11:26 am

     Black Panther for Marvel. Batman for DC. Personally, I’m a fan of the human level heroes. Even if they have some pretty superhuman resources.

486. # Braden H.on 15 Aug 2012 at 2:29 pm

     Pardon me, super power gurus.
     I’m working on a character for a story… not exactly a generic superhero (no tights) but he has a super human ability. The character is already athletic and strong, but an ability that improves his fighting style (which is just punching, kicking and jumping around) would work best. Something that alters his body perhaps, nothing telekinetic.
     Help is greatly appreciated!

     also, my favorite super hero is Captain America. Yeah!

487. # B. McKenzieon 15 Aug 2012 at 3:46 pm

     In keeping with the theme (no tights, not exactly a superhero), I think generic physical abilities would be the most intuitive approach. For a somewhat more superheroic feel, maybe generic physical abilities + a minor power or two for flavor (e.g. Spider-Man uses generic physical abilities plus webbing and danger-sense and Captain America uses generic physical abilities plus uncommon proficiency with a sci-fi shield).
     

488. # C_C_Son 15 Aug 2012 at 5:31 pm

     I like to create superheroes with personalities and powers just for fun. Someone mentioned this set of powers might be over powered. Thoughts?

     Power: : Either with reflective surfaces/mirrors or a reflective surface that she creates with her hands, she can use it to reflect back an energy based power or elemental based (but only fire and water, not earth and rarely air) power at the same force as it was sent towards her. The mirror/reflective surface can also be used as a force field that breaks after one use, and even as transportation if she’s visited the place before. She can only transport one other person with him and no more than that. Lastly, with a lot of concentration she can use mirrors as viewing screens but she must be using one mirror to look through another

     Flaws: Can only transport herself, if she tries to transport someone else, she collapses and goes into a coma for a length of time dependent on the distance travelled. Each force field breaks after one hit, and it takes some effort to create them, so it tires her out. Can only reflect energy based power and only fire and water elemental based powers. Her eyes are light sensitive as her eyes are composed like mirrors and that intensifies her sensitivity to light

     Also, this character has more of a chameleon type personality with a manipulative side and I wanted her powers to show how she basically “reflects” what people want to see in a person (If that make sense… It sounded better in my head) to get what she wants/needs

489. # Braden H.on 15 Aug 2012 at 6:37 pm

     So the mirrors reflect energy, but not matter I assume, hence their being easily broken. That works well as a weakness I suppose, she couldn’t stand a chance against characters like the Hulk, cause they can just smash her mirrors, but she can still evade them. She doesn’t seem too over powered to me. It sounds good!

     In response to B. McKenzie, for the purposes of the story, I can give the character generic abilities like you said, all I need to figure out is the minor power. Thanks for the helpful suggestion.

490. # C_C_Son 15 Aug 2012 at 6:42 pm

     Thanks Braden! And your first sentence is something I’ve been trying to explain about her powers, but didn’t know how to, so that really helped!

491. # crsitofon 16 Aug 2012 at 2:21 pm

     I’m working on a book about a bunch of teenagers that take certain pill that give them powers but I’m having trouble explaining how the main conflict starts between the team of people who use their powers for good and the organization of criminals that uses their powers for evil. I mean i know what their plan is and all that but i need advice about how to have the doctor who created the pills tell the main character about it.

492. # Braden H.on 16 Aug 2012 at 10:40 pm

     Feel free to ignore me if the following doesn’t suit your story, but maybe the “doctor” tested the first pills on the villains, causing some bad effect that could make them evil, then perfected the pills and gave them to the heroes, so they can stop the villains. Perhaps the original pills have some sort of addictive effect, and the bad guys are hunting and killing for supplies to make more.
     Is that of any use?

493. # Hotrod198on 17 Aug 2012 at 2:33 am

     I wanna give some characters some side abilities as well as their main ones. But I am stuck.

     So far, I’ve used some of the elements as main powers and giving them an extra power, as follows:

     Water Manipulation-Regeneration of body parts
     Earth Manipulation-Super Strength
     Wind Manipulation-Flight
     Thunder Manipulation-Super Speed (Thunder sounds cooler than lightning, but it is really lightning manipulation)
     Shadow Manipulation-Teleportation

     Now, where I’m stuck is with these:

     Fire Manipulation-I’m not sure what to give him as a secondary ability
     Energy Manipulation (Psychic powers)- Also not sure what to do here either. Was thinking the ability to make copies of himself.

494. # Gnomeon 17 Aug 2012 at 5:31 pm

     I have a question:
     Today i got an idea for a novel. Basically, there is an entire city full of supers. Each person is born with powers. The Super Council, a group of leaders, decreed that when each person turns 16, they must choose a costume, name and side. Villians cannot commit crimes outside of the city, and heroes cant kill. These are the laws set forth by the council. The book follows Nate Richmond, a boy who can control the weather. On his 16th birthday, his parents are murderd by a villian called shadowhawk. She breaks the rules by fleeing to LA, so Nate decides to follow her and break the rules as well, by killing her. The Council hears about his plan, and he is declared a fugitive. Now he must defeat shadowhawk aswell as other heroes. However, his adoptive father, inferno, is with him. They also meet a vigilante called Red Raven in LA who aids them. My question is, how do I start this book? Should I explain the reason why everyone has powers, or start another way?

495. # Gnomeon 17 Aug 2012 at 5:38 pm

     Also, I am not sure whether to tell this in the first or third person.

496. # Super79on 17 Aug 2012 at 7:52 pm

     A good way might be having an introduction by a narrator. A short, epic speech describing the setting, and perhaps introducing some characters.

497. # crsitofon 17 Aug 2012 at 8:37 pm

     it all depends on what psychic ability you end up giving him/her but at least i feel that teleportation would be a good pair with fire manipulation

498. # mythos manon 18 Aug 2012 at 1:28 am

     Gnome
     “Today i got an idea for a novel. Basically, there is an entire city full of supers. Each person is born with powers. The Super Council, a group of leaders, decreed that when each person turns 16, they must choose a costume, name and side. Villians cannot commit crimes outside of the city, and heroes cant kill. These are the laws set forth by the council. The book follows Nate Richmond, a boy who can control the weather. On his 16th birthday, his parents are murderd by a villian called shadowhawk. She breaks the rules by fleeing to LA, so Nate decides to follow her and break the rules as well, by killing her. The Council hears about his plan, and he is declared a fugitive. Now he must defeat shadowhawk aswell as other heroes. However, his adoptive father, inferno, is with him. They also meet a vigilante called Red Raven in LA who aids them.”

     this sounds really, really good. shadowhawk,red raven are sick superhuman names.

     the idea of a super council setting rules for superheroes and supervillians is really cool.
     i also love the idea of the boy being a fugitive and having to fight villains as well as heroes. good stuff

499. # mythos manon 18 Aug 2012 at 1:30 am

     Gnome

     instead of them being heroes their more like super powered enforcers who are tasked to make sure that the rules are kept. i’d sugest having the council as superhumans who officially take no sides but have a bunch of members unofficially working as villains.

500. # Gnomeon 18 Aug 2012 at 4:56 am

     That was what I was going to do, mythos man. You’ve helped a ton, thanks. I know how to start the book now, but should i tell it in first or third person?

501. # Gnomeon 18 Aug 2012 at 5:03 am

     Also, Nate can control the weather, so his codename is going to be Stormy Knight. He wears a suit of armor.

502. # Edgukatoron 18 Aug 2012 at 7:30 am

     @ Gnome – you may want to check out Alan Moore’s Top 10, which has a similar idea of a city where everybody has superpowers, but it sounds like a completely different tone to what you have developed. It might give you ideas of the things you have to think about when creating your world…

503. # McBurchmanon 20 Aug 2012 at 8:10 pm

     What’s the best best super power for someone who rides a bicycle?

504. # B. McKenzieon 20 Aug 2012 at 9:03 pm

     “What’s the best superpower for someone who rides a bicycle?” I generally wouldn’t recommend picking superpowers based on choice of vehicle. Also, unless you’re writing a really wacky comedy, hopefully the character isn’t using a bicycle in combat*, so superpower selection wouldn’t have much of an effect on vehicle selection (or vice versa).
     
     *Unless we’re talking about a motorcycle?

505. # Maxon 21 Aug 2012 at 5:30 am

     BMX bandit!!!

506. # Ragged Boyon 21 Aug 2012 at 9:38 am

     Brainstorming: What types of powers would benefit a character with medical aspirations?

     Enhanced senses and controlled synesthesia: Combining touch, hearing, and sight could give a person the ability to x-ray people. Smell could be used to detect health and toxins. A character can equate a certain aspect of a person’s body with a medical condition (“Hmm, feels like grey with a hint of violet. Either the common cold or scurvy. I can never tell.”). Could be used with “the sixth sense” to detect life/vitality.

     Selective intangibility: Perform operations without incisions (strong knowledge of anatomy required). Removes toxins and obstructions by hand.

     Enhanced memory or photographic memory: Learn and remember procedures quickly.

     Biological manipulation (I like it, but it’s way too easy. Maybe it can be limited): Control cellular division and glands. Control blood flow and neural systems. Literal healing hands.

     Toxicological manipulation: Make remedies, antidotes, vitamins, and performance enhancers. Make poisons?

     I’m thinking of using the enhanced senses and synesthesia along with some type of minor glandular manipulation through touch. I just don’t know if the latter of those abilities will make him overpowered If you guys have any other ideas feel free to post them. I could use any assistance available.

507. # Janon 21 Aug 2012 at 4:08 pm

     Some sort of see-through-skin X-ray vision could be helpful.

508. # Ragged Boyon 21 Aug 2012 at 6:43 pm

     Yeah, the x-ray was what I was going for with the synesthesia. But I’m sure x-ray vision alone would be invaluable to the prospective medic. Thanks.

509. # Kipppermoon 30 Aug 2012 at 8:48 pm

     What about a story of kids with, rather then super abilities, they have super disabilities. I thought of a story of two kids who have super hardships rather then powers, one is a kid that randomly travels through time with no control over it and the other is a kid that travels through different dimensions(or verisons of our world) without control over it either, not really something I’ve thought a ton about just thought it would be a cool idea, any thoughts?

510. # B. Macon 30 Aug 2012 at 9:38 pm

     “I thought of a story of two kids who have super hardships rather then powers, one is a kid that randomly travels through time with no control over it and the other is a kid that travels through different dimensions…” That sounds promising, although as with superpowers, I’d definitely recommend making sure that the characters have more going on than their capabilities (or, umm, anti-capabilities ).

511. # Kipppermoon 31 Aug 2012 at 5:43 am

     More going as in?

512. # B. McKenzieon 31 Aug 2012 at 6:09 am

     Personality/distinguishing traits, memorable goals/motivations, interesting conflicts/relationships, evolution/development over time, maybe voice, etc.

513. # Kipppermoon 31 Aug 2012 at 7:01 am

     Well yes for the characters I would do that, like I said I haven’t really thought about it all that much just wondering if it seemed a good idea, or a good place to start.

514. # Emily M.on 31 Aug 2012 at 9:23 am

     Hi! One of my main characters, Spitfire, is blunt, mean-spirited, snarky, and hard-edged. This is a result of being verbally bullied by two vigilantes when she was twelve.

     She has the power of vocal/sound manipulation, but I’m taking a different approach to it.
     Instead of giving her the classic Canary Cry/Sonic Scream, the emphasis is on what Spitfire says. She can destroy buildings, start wildfires, & reduce enemies to tears with just a few vicious insults. The catch is once she’s started, she doesn’t know when to stop. She takes out her rage on enemies and innocent people just for looking at her the wrong way.

     Would this work as a superpower? And are Spitfire’s personality and origin story interesting enough to keep the reader’s attention?

515. # B. McKenzieon 31 Aug 2012 at 9:51 am

     I really like her personality and the challenge that she doesn’t know when to stop.
     
     …
     
     The power vaguely reminds me of Umbrella Academy’s Rumor (a character that bends reality with words). One potential concern is that it may be hard (especially for male readers) to take the character seriously–the idea of trash-talking an opponent to tears sounds more CW than BAMF. I don’t know–I’m probably not in the target audience for the work and I would especially recommend running it past beta readers in the target audience (ladies 12-18, I’m guessing). The bullying/bullied aspect of the origin story might also present obstacles with male readers–personally, I feel like it might make it harder for me to enjoy the character’s perspective, particularly if the bullying happened a long, long time ago but she still hadn’t gotten over it.
     
     *How old is the character? If the character isn’t ~12-15, I’d recommend having her traumatic moment come at a later age than 12 (i.e. making it more recent and easier for older readers to take it seriously).

516. # Emily M.on 31 Aug 2012 at 11:49 am

     Spitfire is seventeen years-old.
     And I can definitely see how male readers wouldn’t be sold on a pint-sized teenager who picks fights because the big kids hurt her feelings. It does sound a bit lame.

     What if the cause of Spitfire’s bad temper ran much deeper than just being called names? Would it be more interesting if the source of Spitfire’s rage was her loss of faith in superheroes as a whole?

517. # B. McKenzieon 31 Aug 2012 at 12:13 pm

     “What if the cause of Spitfire’s bad temper ran much deeper than just being called names? Would it be more interesting if the source of Spitfire’s rage was her loss of faith in superheroes as a whole?” That sounds more promising. One possibility: most superheroes would, without much mental difficulty or inner conflict, choose to save 2+ people even if it meant that they were unable to save 1 other person. In a very abstract, utilitarian way, that makes sense. However, if you were the son/daughter/spouse/best friend of the one other person that got left to die, that utilitarian reasoning might feel cold and/or inhumane, especially if the superheroes in question treated it like there was never any option of saving the last person and/or were trying to cover their asses in some way. (I think most superheroes, especially experienced superheroes, would try to shield themselves from worrying about what they could have done differently because that is a road which probably ends in hopelessness and doubt–there might also be legal and/or career implications to admitting fault).

518. # Emily M.on 31 Aug 2012 at 2:53 pm

     Thank you! I’ve been trying to incorporate the idea of vigilantes abusing their power into the storyline, but I have no idea how to incorporate it without the motivations sounding childish.

519. # B. Macon 31 Aug 2012 at 3:05 pm

     “I’ve been trying to incorporate the idea of vigilantes abusing their power into the storyline without the motivations sounding childish.” Another possibility would be that the hero had the opportunity to save 2+ people but opted to instead save 1 person that mattered more to him (e.g. saving Mary Jane rather than a few random bystanders).

520. # Emily M.on 31 Aug 2012 at 3:58 pm

     “Another possibility would be that the hero had the opportunity to save 2+ people but opted to instead save 1 person that mattered more to him (e.g. saving Mary Jane rather than a few random bystanders).”
     So let’s say that the sidekick, Adam Average, was in a situation where he had the opportunity to save either the heroes or Spitfire. And in the end, Adam chooses to save the heroes, who treat him like dirt, rather than the little girl that looked up to him.

     It would be more interesting and dramatic for Spitfire to hold a grudge against Adam rather than the heroes. It would also give the reader a look at Adam’s perspective
     What’s ironic is that she actually winds up working alongside the very same sidekick that abandoned her. He now goes by the name Poindexter and is unrecognizable without his mask. Spitfire doesn’t recognize him, but Poindexter remembers Spitfire all too clearly. Spitfire serves as a haunting reminder that the little girl he failed to rescue did die that day, in a sense.

     I think some of the story just wrote itself. THANK YOU.

521. # B. McKenzieon 31 Aug 2012 at 4:04 pm

     “It would be more interesting and dramatic for Spitfire to hold a grudge against Adam rather than the heroes. It would also give the reader a look at Adam’s perspective…” I think blaming Adam more for this is very intuitive–it’s not the heroes making this decision.
     
     “I think some of the story just wrote itself. Thank you.” You’re welcome.

522. # Emily M.on 31 Aug 2012 at 4:35 pm

     Now the fun part will be writing a scene in which Poindexter faces the music. And Spitfire’s reaction.

523. # scarletton 01 Sep 2012 at 8:01 am

     Is pyscometry useful in combat in any way?

524. # Aj of Earthon 01 Sep 2012 at 8:47 am

     Hi there Scarlett

     Good question. I’d say it depends entirely on the context of your character’s situation. I think overall non-physical psychic powers (mind reading, astral projection, psychometry, etc.) are generally a little more difficult, though not impossible, to use effectively in high-action/combat scenes, if for no other consideration than the mere concentration and subtlety of their nature. That said, however, feel free to think outside the box.

     Perhaps one of the bad guys in the fight is a complete unknown to the heroes; shadowy, mysterious. If by chance the psychometrist can get their hands on this person, or on an object or weapon this bad guy is using, the heroes would be able to gleam a little more information about them. It doesn’t need to be an Ah-Ha! moment, in which everything about the villain is revealed, but what little pieces the psychometrist picks up might be enough to point the heroes in the right direction. That sort of thing…

     Ultimately, and I think most importantly, actively decide what your character is trying to accomplish in the scene. Is there a specific intent for the psychometrist? A motive? Is there a really good reason to risk injury or death for this character just so they can use their powers? Or would it be better to let the tank take care of business and then have the psychometrist “interrogate” the bad guy’s personal belongings after? Think about it. In either case, as long as you understand what your characters are doing and why, I see no reason why you couldn’t utilize your psi during a combat scene. Especially since it moves away from the stereotype that psychics are sideline characters only when it comes to hand to hand combat. Dig it.

     Good luck!

525. # B. McKenzieon 01 Sep 2012 at 12:46 pm

     “Is psychometry useful in combat in any way?” I could imagine that it might be useful to tip the character off to an ambush. But, aside from that, it might be hard to work into a combat. It might help to give the character some other ability if combat is a major aspect of the story. For example, mind-reading and telekinesis are psychic abilities which lend themselves more directly to combat (e.g. a mind-reader can gain a tactical advantage by reading the opponent’s minds).

526. # Emily M.on 03 Sep 2012 at 11:03 am

     “I think blaming Adam more for this is very intuitive–it’s not the heroes making this decision.” Is that a good thing or a bad thing?

527. # B. Macon 03 Sep 2012 at 3:25 pm

     “‘I think blaming Adam more for this is very intuitive–it’s not the heroes making this decision.’ Is that a good thing or a bad thing?” If your goal is establishing a conflict between Adam and Spitfire, I think it would help that the conflict is believable. In contrast, if she had NOT had a good reason to blame Adam, the conflict would have been weaker.

528. # Emily M.on 03 Sep 2012 at 6:50 pm

     “If your goal is establishing a conflict between Adam and Spitfire, I think it would help that the conflict is believable. In contrast, if she had NOT had a good reason to blame Adam, the conflict would have been weaker.” In other words, if the conflict was based solely on a personality clash, it would make the plot & relationship between the two characters shallow?
     Adam (Poindexter) knows his abandonment of Chickadee (had to change Spitfire’s name) is the root of her rage and her destructive power. He’s haunted by what he didn’t do. He believes that by not abandoning Chickadee this time around, he’ll be in her good graces. But Chickadee’s pretty outspoken on how much she hates Adam Average, so he feels very uncomfortable around her.
     Conversely, Chickadee is confused by Poindexter’s distant, painfully shy nature. He’s the closest thing to a friend she has, but she gets the vibe that Poindexter is scared of her. While Chickadee wants revenge on the boy who made her life a living hell, Poindexter wants to find forgiveness and regain his peace of mind. The problem is if Poindexter tells Chickadee who he is, she’ll turn against him, or worse.
     Chickadee takes out her rage on other people and Poindexter keeps his sadness bottled up inside.
     Until the two can acknowledge the elephant in the room, neither can let the past go.

     Would that work as a conflict?

529. # Ravenon 09 Sep 2012 at 2:45 pm

     I’m thinking of writing a novel and i want to know what everyone thinks of this idea and my characters.
     So heres the idea:
     People are born with superpowers that don’t show up until around the age of 14, the government takes the supers to a facility where they brainwash them and turn them into soliders to opress the normal people. Ten girls escape the facility and form five hidden bases in five important cities, NYC, Boston, Seattle, Chicago, and LA. Their mission is to find people with the Omega gene (super powers) and protect them in the hope that they will one day overthrow the government.
     Plot:
     My story follows Base 5 in LA where Marcy Evers and Kayla Carmicheal run the base but have not yet been able to save anyone from the gov. They then run across these two brothers who both have the Omega gene and are on the run. They take them in and try to train them but the base is attacked and they have to find the others before the other bases are destroyed as well.
     Characters:
     Marcy Evers: age 16, black, and is originally from San Francisco where her family died trying to stop the Alphas (the brainwashed supers) from taking her, musical, sarcastic, a little shy and quiet, and was a dancer before her powers came. Powers: she can manipulate earth and can turn people to stone with one touch.
     Kayla Carmicheal: age 15, bubbly, a little naive, gentle, creative, blonde hair blue eyes, originally from New Orleans so she has a slight southern accent, she was born into a fanily of normals, has an older sister. Powers: she can manipulate light and darkness, can make light solid, and can blind people. She can also fly.
     Ian Benson: age 17, Josh Benson’s older brother, his powers came late, sarcastic, bad boy, has a low self confidence but hides it, would do anything for brother, speaks his mind, good solider. Powers: can manipulate his aura (aura blasts or solidify it to make a kind of force field) and the auras of other people, it is extremely draining.
     Josh Benson: age 15, Ian Benson’s younger brother, warm, kind, his powers came first, does wrong thing for right reasons, questions everything. Powers: absorbtion (his body becomes what ever inorganic material he touches), can control it but has the weakness of the material. ex: glass breaks or metal melts

     I would really like some input if this is a good idea and I am open to suggestions. Thanks!

530. # Ravenon 09 Sep 2012 at 2:47 pm

     Oh and the brothers are from San Diego where they ran away to protect Josh from the Alphas but then Ian’s powers show up when they meet Marcy and Kayla in downtown LA.

531. # Cayon 14 Sep 2012 at 4:28 am

     Hi! I love Gambit ^^ for those of you who have no clue what I’m talking about, Gambit is part of the X-Men!! ^^ I love his power… Kinetic Energy Manipulation

532. # YellowJujuon 14 Sep 2012 at 7:08 am

     All of us probably know who Gambit is. lol

533. # B. McKenzieon 14 Sep 2012 at 11:12 am

     “All of us probably know who Gambit is.” Perhaps. With people younger than 20 (especially those that do not read comics), I would not be so sure. Outside of comics and video games, he hasn’t had all that much exposure over the past 15 years. I vaguely remember he had a bit part in Wolverine’s movie and two cartoon series, but at least 20 characters in the X-Men franchise have had more screentime.

534. # Cayon 14 Sep 2012 at 2:30 pm

     I’m 13, and I still know how he is lol ^^

535. # Cayon 14 Sep 2012 at 2:33 pm

     Did u know that Gambit is the 65th fan favorite superhero? (out of 100) ad Gambits been in many things, not too recently, but he was first created by the X-Men

536. # Comicbookguyon 14 Sep 2012 at 7:58 pm

     Raven, I find the charactera and their powers to be interesting. But what really has my attention is the plot. An opressive government

537. # Comicbookguyon 14 Sep 2012 at 8:01 pm

     Raven, I like your characters and their powers. But what really interests me is your plot. An opressive government WITH an army of brainwashed supers? I mean how do you fight that? I’m very interested to find out how all your characters will handle this fight.

538. # B. McKenzieon 14 Sep 2012 at 10:56 pm

     “I’m 13, and I still know who he is.” Would you happen to remember how you first encountered the character? (TV, movies, comics, or something else?) I’m always interested to see how stories/characters spread.
     
     PS: On a possibly related side-note, one teacher in a juvenile detention facility asked his students what sort of superheroes they were most interested in. I guessed that the superheroes that resonated the most among this audience would probably be Batman or Spider-Man (mostly-likable characters that have conflicts with the police and deal with fairly realistic problems on the home front) or maybe the Hulk. The overwhelming favorite was actually Iron Man. That initially appeared counterintuitive (how much does an adult billionaire MIT valedictorian have in common with juvenile detainees?), but I can see how a lot of guys (in particular) might look up to him: he’s brilliant, tough/determined and charismatic… the trifecta of manliness. A few of the students noted that Stark made his own luck more than most other heroes did (e.g. surviving as a hostage more through his own ingenuity than by being born a Kryptonian or getting a lucky spider-bite).

539. # Ravenon 15 Sep 2012 at 7:57 pm

     Comicbookguy, I was thinking that a way to fight it was that they would destroy the brainwashing facility freeing all the supers inside. What I’m having trouble with is how to free all the supers already brainwashed. Any ideas?

540. # Thorgronon 15 Sep 2012 at 10:17 pm

     Hello Everyone!

     I am currently fairly deep into writing what I intend to be a superhero novel. i have a slew of characters with powers I have tried very hard to keep from the usual (fire, super-strength, flight, etc.). The plot is a little complex but basically there is a man born with limitless potential (he can be or do anything) but refuses to use his abilities for fear that he will not use them justly. For years he is studied by the government and currently a group known generically as the Agency. After some time he can no longer handle the burden, wipes his own mind and turns his body into a flower. This flowers pollen is viral, with two strains being released ( Alpha-which gives people manipulation abilities like control over water or air, and Omega-which causes physical changes in someone’s body). This virus sweeps the United States, killing most who become infected and giving powers to a small percent. The story focuses on a small group bent on curing the virus.
     They are;

     Issac Specter: Personality- loner, brash, has a need to prove to himself that he is worth something. Life- mid twenties, lives alone, works as a key-grip, competed in underground fighting rings for amusement. Powers-Omega- cannot be detected by the five senses as well as being unable to be remembered, except by the few characters who can see him, items he is in physical possession of take on the same properties as himself

     Alistair Gendo: Personality- devoted, intelligent, driven, will do anything for his son. Life- lost his wife in car accident, late thirties, heart surgeon, rarely home, spends all free time with son. Powers-Omega- after the death of his son at the hands of his babysitter, Alistair ripped out his own heart and implanted it into the body of his son in a fit of insanity, he and his son our now linked, both bodies controlled by Alistair’s mind, however the son’s body is the only one alive and healthy, Alistairs is dead but unkillable, Alistair can also remove the hearts of other’s and implant them into his son’s chest, gaining control of that body

     Toby Eckrin: Personality-flighty, apathetic, sneaky, money hungry, Life-grew up poor and on the streets, late teens, always looking for a way to make money. Powers-Alpha- with enough focus he can force himself or a situation to be lucky in his or another’s favor

     The Conducter: Personality- kind, quick to act, not very intelligent, honest. Life- passionate for lacrosse and music, early twenties, broke his leg freshman year of college rendering him unable to play lacrosse. Powers- can create sound with thought, can condense and project it how he sees fit, often into large blasts of concentrated sound he refers to as “dropping the bass”

     Let me know what all of you think, I’m open to suggestions and would love to here your comments. Thanks!

541. # Thorgronon 15 Sep 2012 at 10:23 pm

     Sorry i forgot to mention that the Conductor is an Alpha

542. # Yuuki12on 16 Sep 2012 at 6:47 pm

     Hello everyone. If anyone would mind, I need some help, regarding a superhero style short story I am writing. The basis for me writing this story is (aside from just wanting to), is to get prepared for National Novel Writing Month.

     Now I understand the differences between short story writing and novel writing in regards to mechanics, but I need some feedback in regards to my main character, Jenny’s superpower. I understand personality matters more than powers, but I wish to see if they are balanced.

     Here’s the two sentence summary:

     “Being blessed by Tonatiuh, an Aztec god, Jenny has gained the powers of the sun. She can generate manipulate, as well as become sunlight”

     I apologize if the two sentence summary was clunky, but I wished to convey the point. Jenny ‘s powers manifest as white yellow flames, which she calls “Helio Fire”. She has the basic attacks like fireballs and blasts.

     One variant is where she launches fireballs from her fingertips in the form of bullets. Alas, forgive the rambling.

     The major point has to deal with Jenny’s next characteristic of her power: elemental intangibility. As stated above, the character can transform herself briefly into fire to allow attacks, such as bullets, knives, to pass through.

     My major concern is that this might make her overpowered, given she can do this ability. It is here that I have a couple of solutions, but I don’t know if they are good enough.

     The first obvious weakness to this power is DURATION. To turn briefly intangible requires plenty of concentration for Jenny. That said, while being able to phase through stray gunfire and melee attacks, continuous attacks, like rapid machine gunfire, will push her to the brink.

     The second weakness to this variant is the idea of Active usage. Now, for Jenny to phase through an attack, she needs to see it and actively turn on the power. With that said, sudden or sneak attacks might catch her off guard and thus, cause her damage.

     This idea was inspired solely by Kitty Pride, whom after reading about, has a weakness where she needs to actively notice an assault beforehand in order to phase through it.

     Now in regards to her power as a whole, I do have one weakness to propose. Sunlight. Being that she’s an elemental, being connected with the element of the sun is important. This means that Jenny can be at her strongest.

     But in situations, such as nighttime, where sunlight is less, I think that while she has access to her powers, they are to a much more limited degree. So for example, while Jenny could launch off a few smaller attacks, fireballs and blasts etc.; large effects, like conjuring bright flashes and large solar flares, will exhaust her.

     Being that she is exposed to little or any heat, the effect can cause her to tire and potentially put her to the brink of death.

     Also, given that this is an undercover mission for the short-story, Jenny can’t be so flippant with her abilities, with how that could jeopardize the task she has to do.

     All in all, how is that? If anyone has any suggestions please don’t heistate to comment.

     P.S: I know this maybe off topic, but do you think I should give Jenny a unique mode of transportation? While I could easily have her fly (Using her powers to propel herself), I was thinking something else. Given that the setting of my story is steam-punk, I was considering a motocycle, but that’s kind of cliche.

     Perhaps, A special type of air surf board to which utilized her powers to fuel a steam powered engine, connected to a back propeller?

543. # B. McKenzieon 16 Sep 2012 at 9:19 pm

     I like the limitation that it’s an undercover mission, which would probably present major obstacles for someone with solar-themed powers. Additionally, I’d imagine that many of the missions would be conducted at night, so there’s some nice tie-in there with her other weakness.
     
     …
     
     I’m not sure what tone and/or target audience you’re going for, but if you were going for a serious tone and an adult audience, I think a flying surfboard may create some challenges there. I think there’s also a bit of a genre disconnect between the mythological origin of her powers and the steampunk surfboard… it might be more coherent and require less explanation to tie her flight (if any) into the blessing–e.g. something like the ability to soar on thermals and/or sprout wings.
     
     …
     
     One (probably minor) potential challenge I see is how you might incorporate these details about her superpowers into the story. The above description took 600 words. That’s a lot of space to cover one character’s superpowers, especially in a short story. If at all possible, I would recommend 1) slashing that length and 2) using whatever remains to also develop interesting character traits and/or significant plot points. For example, in The Incredibles, two characters spend a few sentences working the limitations of their powers into a discussion about how to save people from a burning building. These details are effective because they’re extremely relevant to the matter immediately at hand. In Bitter Seeds, the superpowers are fueled by demonic sacrifices, which helps develop the two main characters, the conflict between the two main protagonists, and the conflict between the protagonists and the demonic spirits requesting the sacrifices.

544. # Yuuki12on 17 Sep 2012 at 7:34 am

     @ B. McKenzie

     First thank you so much for responding back. In regards to the issue of describing the powers, I am more than aware of the issue. In terms of word count, a short story is about 7,000 words. Not very long. That said, I of course intend to take your adivce.

     Maybe, during a scene to which she is inside the bar ( the plot of the short story, being she needs to rescue the son of a wealthy Entrepreneur from a group of pirates), she unleashes a large solar flare. The effect, while blasting everyone, weakens Jenny where she’s exhausted.

     This would help explain her limitations, by showcasing them; instead of direct exposition. Of course a bit of dialogue could be added (by the wealthy tycoon asking what’s going on, perhaps?).

     In regards to transportation, I understand your concerns. The basis as to why I wanted to use a surf board was for purposes of creativity. But given the story is meant for adults, I can understand the disconnect.

     One method to give her flight, is by propulsion. By pointing her arms downward, she generates a downward thrust to which propels her in the air. Aside from high speed flight, she can utilize this power for stationary hovering.

     Might make for an interesting aerial fight scene. In regards to character traits, I’ll be sure to play them up. The post where list of character traits will be the area to which I describe that, seeing as it would be off topic here to do so.

545. # Dragondevilon 18 Sep 2012 at 3:50 am

     What can you suggest to give a superhero god-like or demon-like abilities?

     Examples:
     *Born to a god/demon
     *Blessing?(would it be believable?)
     *Curse
     etc…

     I would like some suggestions….Thanx a lot!

546. # Cayon 18 Sep 2012 at 1:27 pm

     @dragondevil
     I like where your going ^^ a power I would have as a god would be either creation or the knowledge everything. If you wouldn’t like those, then think of a power that god would have, and anyways, if your god then you can have whatever type of power right? But if I was a demon, I would have either mind-control or energy manipulation. Some examples of people with these powers are below:
     •Creation- well, god. He created everything, right?
     •Knowledge- Proffessor Xavier had a limit of his knowledge, but somehow knew just about everything. I’m sure you know this, but I’ll say it anyways, he is from X-Men.
     •Mind-control- Lelouch Vi Brittania, from Code Geass (awesome show, my fav).
     •Energy Manipulation- Gambit from X-Men… I am in love with that Cajun <3 ^^

     Hope this helped!! ^^

547. # Thorgronon 18 Sep 2012 at 7:05 pm

     I agree with Cay, and although I’m not a regular at this site (yet), I’d like to put in my two cents. If you are going to do god-like powers I would say it really depends on what god you are basing the powers on. Let’s say for example that the god you get your powers from is an Indian god of the hunt, then perhaps his powers relate to having heightened senses useful for tracking among other characteristics of various animals. Or maybe you are looking for something more divine in nature, then I would say to give them things like the ability to heal their allies, flight, the power to see the future, and like Cay said abilities involving creation.

     Along the lines of the demons, I feel you open yourself up to a whole mess of interesting potential (I tend to lean towards the more evil side of abilities). Again I feel it depends what kind of demon your character is getting powers from. You can be anywhere from Spawn to Ghost Rider heck even Dr. Doom has some interactions with demons. But why not look at things like, energy draining, perhaps summoning of minor imps and demons, illusions, enhanced strength, and again as Cay said, mind control.

     Ultimately the powers you give your character should relate to his/her background and fit well with the character but I hope this has helped!

548. # Dragondevilon 19 Sep 2012 at 12:53 pm

     Thanx a lot guys!

     I would also like some suggestions on some unique origin for these powers….
     *What I mean is:If a character has demon-like abilities…then the origin of his power is a curse!
     *What other suggestions can you give?
     *like say…Magical artifact…Maybe he is the son of a demon…etc…

     I would really like some suggestions!

     Thanx! ^_^

549. # Cayon 19 Sep 2012 at 1:28 pm

     You could have the main character be a murder/thief in the begining and then a goddess appears before him. She punishes him for his actions by cursing him with the powers. Then he wants to get rid of his powers, do he tries to find the goddess. He turns good along the too. While he is good, he saves people’s lives and eventually comes up with a name that people can call him by (his super identity). But he learns to appreciate his powers along the way too. So when he finds the goddess, she asks him if he want to get rid of his powers as a reward for finding her. But he declines the offer and leaves. Then it could end with the goddess saying, “I turned a villain into a hero.”
     That’s just what I think would be cool. You don’t have to use that I’d you don’t want to ^^ hope I helped

550. # Dragondevilon 19 Sep 2012 at 2:06 pm

     Not a Bad idea!

     I will look into it! Thanx a lot!

     I wanted some ways in which a hero can gain these powers….hmm…

551. # Cayon 20 Sep 2012 at 12:02 pm

     Another way for him to get his powers is that he could be a mutant like the X-Men. Or maybe be was an experiment that the government created but he escaped. Maybe he was from a different planet and the sun here is different than his original sun, so it gives him powers (well that’s how Superman got his powers). Just think of some creative way, I’m sure you can think of somethin

552. # Dragondevilon 21 Sep 2012 at 3:40 am

     Lol….
     I did not mean these kind of stuff….
     Just some plausible origins for a “MAGIC-based power” thats it….. ^_^

     I have made up lots of plausible origins…but coudnt round-off on one…

553. # Cayon 21 Sep 2012 at 12:33 pm

     Maybe they have magicin their blood, but they can only expell it out of a magic wand or scepter (like Sailor Moon) or maybe they just use their magic power with an object to make the attack more powerful ^.^

554. # V.P.on 28 Sep 2012 at 12:48 pm

     Another idea is that they recive an unsigned pakage or something with a ring or amulet inside that contains some form of magic in it that works oddly eg. charonic (death) communicatin, the ability to summon and control diffrent lizards like geckos or chamealeons or being able to teleport thins with sand,ect.

     and then it fuses to their skin or someting and has some negative effects also.

555. # The Drifteron 30 Sep 2012 at 5:17 am

     I don’t know if anyone is aware but there is a website called powerlisting.wikia.com, I think the site (along with this one) is a good tool to use if you are having trouble finding an ability for your character.

556. # Dekaveonon 05 Oct 2012 at 9:48 am

     My ability to boil, freeze, and manipulate water, It so cool. My power is the best.

557. # Plumon 08 Oct 2012 at 11:07 pm

     Well, hello there This is a character idea that is still very much in the works, but I need a second opinion before I really take off with this concept. So… She’s a girl with magical powers. I was thinking that to make it a little more unique, and to avoid the hassle of a spell/magical language, she casts her spells and whatnot using symbols of power (which she can only conjure under certain conditions).

     Honestly, I just need a second set of eyes and some feedback on whether or not this is a solid basic idea. Thanks!

558. # B. McKenzieon 09 Oct 2012 at 8:48 am

     It’s hard to tell at this very early stage of development, Plum, but I don’t think the character’s powers will add a whole lot to the story beyond what a more conventional magical system would do. In contrast, I’d recommend checking out the magical systems in The Amulet of Samarkand and Bitter Seeds. In particular, check out how the details of how the magic is fueled/used help develop characters, advance conflicts/relationships, lead to major choices by characters, contribute to interesting scenes, and add to the mood of the books. So far, it doesn’t sound like this character’s magic has that much going on. Granted, the story might be really successful on other fronts–e.g. Harry Potter was wildly successful on a number of levels despite a mostly generic magical system.

559. # Plumon 09 Oct 2012 at 3:53 pm

     Well, you see, the story is much more focused on her actions and interactions with a certain other character, and their flight from a seemingly faceless threat that wants our heroine for her power. Honestly, I just need help finding a good, solid power that the “faceless threat” will have a solid reason for needing.

     If you need me to go into more detail about the basic plot I’ve got forming, I’d be happy to elaborate

560. # Mr. Amazingon 12 Oct 2012 at 4:24 pm

     I was thinking about having a hero that can download a superpower as if it were an app, any ideas?

561. # Plumon 12 Oct 2012 at 5:21 pm

     So, like in the Matrix?

562. # Hobbeson 12 Oct 2012 at 6:16 pm

     What are the limits to his powers? The story would lose any suspense if he could just create any object/weapon out of nothing.

563. # B. McKenzieon 12 Oct 2012 at 7:11 pm

     Mr. Amazing, it might help to handle the superpowers through hardware/physical means (e.g. a particular chassis of a powersuit or a particular configuration of nanotechnology or a particular Terminator transformation, etc) rather than downloadable software. I think that would make it easier to limit the power that way (e.g. a more stealthy build might require skimping on armor or whatever).

564. # Mr. Amazingon 13 Oct 2012 at 9:06 am

     Or maybe through a wristwatch or gauntlet?

565. # B. McKenzieon 13 Oct 2012 at 10:22 am

     Sure. I think those would work, MA.

566. # CCXon 15 Oct 2012 at 11:21 pm

     Hi. I’m working on a super hero story and am a huge fan of marvel, x-men, and a few other superhero stories. I have read so many amazing books on powers, but i feel like if
     I write one, i’ll fail. The thing is, i don’t want one of the normal plots of teen kids going into a lab and being transformed. It’s classic, but not for me.if anyone has a suggistion for me- thats great. I did try one though, but it didn’t feel professional. Like, it was as if my heart was writing it- not my head. If anyone does have a plot, i’ll gladly listen to it. But i do want the main character to be a guy named Nathan and another main character named diana. If anyone has sugustions, please reply!

567. # B. McKenzieon 16 Oct 2012 at 12:43 am

     Hello, CCX. Because age does not make characters interesting, I would recommend using distinguishing traits to help develop the story. If I were evaluating manuscripts based on one-sentence premises, I’d be very likely to pass on either “Teens go into a lab and accidentally develop superpowers” or “Adults go into a lab and accidentally develop superpowers” in favor of a premise which did something to establish the characters as interesting, develop an interesting conflict, show the stakes, and/or do anything else to differentiate the characters from any other young adult or adult superheroes.
     
     If at all possible, I’d recommend having the plot hinge on unusual decisions by the main characters, preferably ones which establish crucial character traits. For example, contrast “After blackmailing his way into a top-secret military experiment, juvenile delinquent Jim Anderson must hunt down a deranged serial killer before his commander officer kills him for supposedly working with the enemy” with “Jim Anderson is a teenager who develops superpowers.” The extra details (e.g. Jim being brazen enough to blackmail his way into a military project, the nature of the enemy, and the conflict between Jim and his CO) will help the book come alive.
     
     –”I have read so many amazing books on powers, but I feel like if I write one, I’ll fail.” I would recommend a different approach here than about writing about superpowers. I think a book about superheroes which is more about incredible capabilities than interesting characters with incredible capabilities is likely to fail. In superhero novels, most characters spend an overwhelming amount of time (usually 70-90% of pages) NOT using superpowers, so it is KEY that the characters are interesting enough to keep that ~80% of the book from being awful. I’d recommend watching some excellent superhero movies (e.g. Iron Man, Incredibles and Dark Knight) and contrasting them with disasters like Batman & Robin, Catwoman, and Green Lantern. The disasters actually have okay action sequences (e.g. GL’s jet fight scene is not much worse than Iron Man’s jet fighter scene), but the bad movies handle nonaction scenes so ineffectively that decent action sequences cannot save them.
     
     –I’d recommend proofreading aggressively before submitting your manuscript anywhere.
     
     –”If anyone does have a plot, I’ll gladly listen to it. But I do want the main character to be a guy named Nathan and another main character named Diana. If anyone has suggestions, please reply!” My suggestion would be coming up with a more detailed plot and asking detailed questions. For example, a question like “How can I make it sound sort of believable that a juvenile delinquent gets onto a super-soldier project?” will likely result in gloriously twisted theories of blackmail, intrigue, subterfuge/trespassing, espionage, fall guys, plausible deniability, military emergencies and/or scientific tests so ludicrously unsafe not even Marines would walk in the room. In contrast, I don’t think other people could help all that much with “What should I write?”

568. # CCXon 16 Oct 2012 at 2:58 pm

     Thanks! I’ll work on it!

569. # Dr. Vo Spaderon 16 Oct 2012 at 4:53 pm

     …I have a minor villain whose power is the ability to separate his conciousness from his physical body. Shortly after he discovered this abiltiy, he was murdered because his political ambitions. Instead of dying, as he expected, he roamed around as a sort of cloud of mentality. As he is unable to control people when he enters their minds, he just speaks to them inside their head, trying to get them to do things that will lead to the man behind his death. My hero finds him and prevents this vengance by following a trail of people who claimed to be insane because the villlains whisperings.
     …Does this sound good? Feedback and advice appreciated!

570. # B. McKenzieon 16 Oct 2012 at 6:24 pm

     It might not be an issue because he’s a minor villain, but generally, if you have supernatural powers for a character, I’d recommend giving them something a bit more threatening. Right now, I think it’d be simpler to cut the supernatural angle and make him a really good ventriloquist (and/or perhaps he uses minor gadgets like planted radio receivers to make people hear things when nobody is around).
     
     …
     
     “My hero finds him and prevents this vengeance by following a trail of people who claimed to be insane because of the villain’s whispers.” This might be a good opportunity to bring out any notable social skills on the hero’s part. I suspect that many (probably most) of the victims would want to keep completely quiet about it*, so perhaps the hero brings some unusual skills to the table that help him identify who’s involved and/or convince them to tell him what’s going on.
     
     *Some reasons here: most people wouldn’t want other people (especially strangers) to know that they’re crazy. Also, consider the criminal angle. Most of these victims are probably themselves criminals (targeted by the villain because they know something about his murder or are associated with the murderer in some way). If they confess to hearing voices telling them to do terrible things, that would make it very likely that even friends and family would call the police, which would be very problematic for most criminals. I think the most obvious trail of evidence for the hero to follow would actually come from crimes involving the ventriloquist’s victims. (For example, if a minor gangster snaps and performs some minor act of assistance for the villain to make the voices stop, perhaps he gets caught in the act by his boss and eventually killed by another minor gangster, who will surely tell his bosses EVERYTHING he knows to explain why he suddenly killed a fellow gang member, e.g. “here’s what he said to me before I killed him.” In this case, I think other criminals might actually be more outgoing about what they know (e.g. bragging about killing a traitor someplace the hero can hear) than the actual victims are.

571. # Dr. Vo Spaderon 16 Oct 2012 at 6:59 pm

     …Alright, thanks for the help! One more question: if I have a hero who is near-invincible (best described as bulletproof), how could he discover this? Aside from getting hit by a truck, I mean.

572. # B. McKenzieon 16 Oct 2012 at 7:23 pm

     Perhaps he tries climbing out of a burning house but slips and falls 2 stories. Normally, that’d be an ER trip. He’d probably have some idea something is amiss, but it’s not as in-your-face as, say, getting shot and having the bullet bounce off of him.
     
     …
     
     If maintaining a secret identity is an issue, someone might remember something which later proves a challenge for him (e.g. someone asks him how he managed to get out–maybe firefighters were watching the front door the whole time and are puzzled how he got around to the side of the house without anybody seeing).

573. # Dr. Vo Spaderon 16 Oct 2012 at 7:30 pm

     Sweet, thanks! I like the building idea.

574. # CCXon 16 Oct 2012 at 9:39 pm

     Do you think this power is ok? This is not a story question. My charachter is named rose, and she can absorb powers like rouge, but can control it, so she can touch people, but if she wants to absorb powers, she has to touch a place with a pulse. Her eyes change color depending on what power she has. Her eyes are mostly gray though

575. # Shogon 17 Oct 2012 at 7:59 am

     I think you should add the ability to create physical objects from energy within ones self.

576. # Anonymouson 22 Oct 2012 at 2:00 pm

     What do you think of this discovery of powers for someone with poison blood? The MC is having an…”intense” moment with his girlfriend and as they are… *cough* frenchkissing *cough* she drops dead. This leads him to examine his blood under a microscope and he eventually finds that his blood is toxic. What I wasn’t sure about was how to explain why the doctors never found anything any time he went to a hospital, so my explanation is that the toxicity is higher in his saliva than his blood. Does that sound okay?

     **By the way, this is a slightly more adult book, so the “intense” scene fits with the atmosphere of my book.**

577. # B. McKenzieon 22 Oct 2012 at 3:45 pm

     Granted, I’m not a medical professional, but if he’s young and healthy, I think doctors would probably NOT have examined samples of his blood. I think they’d only do bloodwork on a young person if they had some reason to suspect that something was amiss (e.g. if he was showing symptoms of anemia or a clotting disorder), but not as a blind precaution. Alternately, maybe the toxin in his blood degrades fairly quickly when exposed to oxygen (e.g. within an hour), so a basic blood test wouldn’t show anything worrisome a few days later.

578. # CCXon 30 Oct 2012 at 7:35 am

     Hey, i have a question. Could affecting phereamones, aka the feeling of love, be a power? Like, if the user could manipulate the feelings? And also, would having a power to make people want to follow you be a power?

579. # Dr. Vo Spaderon 30 Oct 2012 at 7:50 am

     …Making people want to follow you has been used before, although usually with villains. Emotion manipulation is, in my opinion, an interesting power. Also, it could lead to a good side-story if the protagonist is a politician or married even. How does he know if he didn’t just win his vote/spouse because of his power? A lot of internal conflict would be possible.

580. # kykyon 30 Oct 2012 at 8:39 am

     Can someone help me out cuz I’m trying to write a novel about kids at a supernatural boarding school, I just need some help with story and characters please x

581. # kykyon 30 Oct 2012 at 8:47 am

     i mean i know the basics of the story and the characters but i just need some help please x

582. # PlagueHearton 30 Oct 2012 at 5:08 pm

     Could a character using Biological Manipulation be able to assimilate machinery in order to create greater weapons? I had the idea of giving this species the power to transform inorganic matter into organic matter does this sound viable?

583. # Dr. Vo Spaderon 30 Oct 2012 at 5:27 pm

     …I’m not sure how workable it would be (because I’m not really an expert), but this idea sounds awesome!

584. # Dragondevilon 31 Oct 2012 at 1:58 am

     I agree!
     I like the idea of transforming Inorganic matter into Organic matter~

585. # B. McKenzieon 31 Oct 2012 at 3:48 am

     “Can someone help me out? I’m trying to write a novel about kids at a supernatural boarding school. I just need some help with story and characters.” I don’t have much to work with here. Could you give me some details about the story?

586. # PlagueHearton 31 Oct 2012 at 7:38 am

     Oh really well that,s good new for me i was thinking of these creatures from a different dimension with their planet only consisting of living tissue they are senseless and emotionless no pigmentation either. White faceless beings that fight and fight among themselves (they use the survival of the fittest lifestyle to the fullest) and whoever is victorious gets to assimilate the weaker of the two eliminating any flaws in itself better preparing for the next battle. Does this sound weird/horrifying?

587. # Dr. Vo Spaderon 31 Oct 2012 at 8:30 am

     …I think it sounds more scify or fantasy than heroic, but it doesn’t seem too horrifying. I once read a book (trilogy actually) where a species had to take a corpse’s pieces and fit them together to form a non-blob body for themselves. A short while after the first time I read about this process, it started sounding natural. I accepted and expected it during the rest of the reading.

588. # PlagueHearton 31 Oct 2012 at 2:39 pm

     Well it is a hero type of story but more of the mixture of all creatures from all of the dimensions be it vampire werewolf alien or eldritch abomination coming together for an epic battle.

589. # Liam2013on 01 Nov 2012 at 10:44 pm

     Well I have had an idea for a story. So if you guys don’t mind criticism and feedback is always awesome.
     So it takes place in a different universe than ares. And it’s deals with 2 factions that are at a huge debate over government and religion(basically lifestyles). There are the “Primes” and the “Ainsaic.” The primes Are a noble very modern society who believe in maintaining peace and there system of life is similar to ours. While the Ainsaic are a brutal warbound race that look exactly like the Primes, how ever they are born with a strange symbol like a both mark somewhere on there body it’s not usually very large buts it is noticeable. There differences lead them to an all out war fired by their differences. The prime king is with a squadron of soldiers raiding a city when he finds a young boy standing in front of him. This will be the main character of the story. Out of reasons of his past the kings spares the Ainsaic child and secretly brings him to the prime homestead. The story revolves around the Ainsaic boy growing up in the palace with the kings wife and his birth son. Many conflicts occur due to the boys Ainsaic nature and no one knowing about him being one. Some of the superhuman powers ainsaics have is: Rapid regeneration, Increased vision if they are hunting some one, Incredible strength and natural gifts in all melee weaponry, weak form of telekinesis which can be developed, they have a cloaking or invisibility but it can only be used during near death situations for short periods at a time. Though they also have downfalls: If they go 3 days without killing another person(not of their own kind) they grow weak almost powerless, if they do not kill some one in a large period of time it can make them sick almost to the point of fatality, They have natural urges or outbreaks of violence, cannot commit suicide or kill another Ainsaic. The Primes on the other hand are blessed with other gifts that are usually only passed down through royals families such as the king such as: Gift of healing other, Stoneskin(Like a defensive mechanism), and other helpful gifts. The kings son has a gift of incredible strength as well as the ability to summon heavenly armor around himself, he also finds out he can shield others. The story relives around the Ainsaic boy and how he is completely out of place and know one at the time knows it except for him and his “father.” I was thinking if making the king or his father have a Gillian approach were he was only raising him as a super weapon to over throw the Ainsaic people(Would need to edit their ability to not kill each other though.) But tell me what you think please haha, thanks for reading.

590. # Nayanon 02 Nov 2012 at 12:02 am

     @Liam2013

     I did not understand your plot quite clearly (due to some typos, I guess). Still I will try to help.
     The first half of your story looked a bit slow to me and a lot similar to Loki’s origin story. Loki was brought up in Asgard and only Odin knew that he was a frost giant. But the King of prime society using the boy as a weapon against Ainsaic society looked interesting.

     A few things looked odd. Like why ainsaics become weak if they do not kill someone and why they cannot commit suicide or kill each other. But I am sure you will explain these in the story.

591. # Liam2013on 02 Nov 2012 at 6:25 am

     Thanks for the feedback haha. Ya sorry, about the typos using my mobile phone. And I was wondering if it would be good to have some sidecharacters or just focus around the main character.

592. # enchantedseekerson 05 Nov 2012 at 7:08 pm

     Need a super power for a girl who is dark and mysterious

593. # YellowJujuon 05 Nov 2012 at 7:52 pm

     Well enchantedseekers, there’s a lot of powers that would fit.
     Umbrakenisis, invisibility, vampirism, blood manipulation, Telekinesis, no powers (like Batman), etc. Or you could give your girl butterfly powers or something (powers don’t have to be based on personality haha). Your description of the character was really brief so it’s hard to choose a certain power.

594. # Infernoxon 06 Nov 2012 at 2:30 pm

     I’m just wondering, could a speedster vibrate his molecules fast enough to generate electricity and use it in combat and in other ways?

595. # BMon 06 Nov 2012 at 4:08 pm

     “I’m just wondering, could a speedster vibrate his molecules fast enough to generate electricity and use it in combat and in other ways?” I think most readers could probably believe it.

596. # CCXon 07 Nov 2012 at 8:28 am

     Hey, i have a question. Would self-explosion and a combo of immortalty work? Kinda like if the user explodes then would go back in their original form.

597. # CCXon 07 Nov 2012 at 8:29 am

     Oh and another question, how could someone manipulate light and dark?

598. # YellowJujuon 07 Nov 2012 at 11:19 am

     CCX, I could see the exploding power work but you would need to put some sort of cooldown on it.
     You could use dark as a camouflage of sorts. Light could be used to blind or heal or even burn!

599. # Scarletton 07 Nov 2012 at 1:09 pm

     So I have an African American teen who can manipulate electricity. Is this character concept too close to Static Shock from DC comics, or am I okay?

600. # B. McKenzieon 07 Nov 2012 at 4:20 pm

     “So I have an African American teen who can manipulate electricity. Is this character concept too close to Static Shock from DC comics…” Yes, I think so (unless the similarity is deliberate–e.g. a parody or some sort of commentary).

601. # B. Macon 08 Nov 2012 at 11:28 am

     “For a character that can kinda copy any animal nature, like copying the ability to regrow any limb like a lizard or have the stealth of a cat, etc, what animal would be the best of these 3 animals?” I’m not sure I understand… I think it depends on what sort of ability you’re trying to bring in. For regeneration, I think the lizard example is best. I think a panther would do a good job making the reader think of agility and strength but obviously would not be effective for, say, regeneration. Are you asking whether regeneration is more interesting than agility/strength?

602. # CCXon 09 Nov 2012 at 8:31 am

     M.Happenstance, the gravity ability would work by either maybe making the enemy fly up into the air and not being to get down. Another way it could work is that the user puts gravity down to an intensity that they would practically be stuck to the floor.

603. # GalaxyWaffleson 09 Nov 2012 at 10:45 pm

     Can someone tell me what the pros and cons for Force Field and Gravity are?
     Also what they would be weak too?
     Also how you could incorporate that into fighting (Ex: using weapons + power or only power)

604. # M. Happenstanceon 10 Nov 2012 at 12:29 am

     Possible forcefield weaknesses:
     - A set amount of damage absorption. Maybe a given forcefield can only take so many hits before shattering. A “broken” forcefield could also possibly rebound upon the creator, injuring them.
     - Time limits. A character might only be able to sustain a field for a given amount of time, with that amount varying depending on outside conditions like size and damage.
     - Air limits. For nonpermeable, entirely enclosed forcefields, a character might run the risk of running out of oxygen.
     - Energy weapons might be able to penetrate a forcefield.
     - Alternately, maybe a forcefield can only block energy weapons, and can’t deflect physical attacks.

     Other uses for forcefields besides shields:
     - Forcefields as tactile telekinesis. A well-aimed field could pack a serious punch, and even a stationary field could cause some damage against a speedster, as seen in The Incredibles.
     - Forcefields as a method of levitation, or even as a vehicle.
     - Forcefields as an air filtration system. Of course, this depends on the permeability of the field, but it’s a viable option. If the character was skillful enough, this could also adapt itself to underwater survival.
     - A forcefield user could project a small field inside an object, then expand it, causing that object to explode or at least break. This could probably be used as a killing strike against opponents, or, in a less lethal situation, to break open, say, padlocks.

     There’s probably a lot more uses out there, but that’s just what I’ve got off the top of my head.

     Not exactly sure how gravity powers would work, especially in regards to actual science, but I can see a lot of accidental deaths happening in outdoor battles. Gravity alteration could also wreak some havoc on an opponent’s internal organs and other assorted squishy bits, what with pressure and all. Battles against a gravity manipulator: more gruesome than you’d think.

605. # Scarletton 10 Nov 2012 at 5:47 am

     So mu electricity manipulator went undersome major retooling, and now I think he is different from Static:
     He’s white,
     He’s gay
     He’s quiet, and he does not make jokes during combat, like Static does.
     He’s stubborn
     He’s reckless
     He’s determind, but also a shamelss self-promoter. The fame kind of went to his head.
     He can create electrical constructs, like ropes, weapons, ect, which fade after a time.
     His lightning is yellow, not purple.
     He got his powers when a lightning bolt struck him and lightning bonded with his molecules. At first, the lightning threatened to kill him, until a scientist built him a suit, which can contain it.
     He gets around by surfing power lines, not flying.
     Is he different enough now, or should I work harder.

606. # CCXon 10 Nov 2012 at 10:25 am

     Scarlet- i think you’re character sounds ok but that “scientist built him a suit” almost sounds like iron man…

607. # Dr. Vo Spaderon 10 Nov 2012 at 10:35 am

     Speaking of electric characters, Jamie Foxx will probably play Electro in the next Amazing Spiderman. Shocking, isn’t it? (Sorry, couldn’t stop myself. )

608. # Scarletton 10 Nov 2012 at 11:08 am

     CCX, I do not mean a power suit, just a regular costume made of a special material which allows my MC to control the electricity he produces.

609. # B. McKenzieon 10 Nov 2012 at 11:30 am

     Scarlett, when it comes to originality, I recommend putting more focus on personality/distinguishing traits than demographics. The demographics have almost always been done before (hell–even something as hyper-specific as “mutant alligator” has been done before).
     
     …
     
     “He’s quiet… a shameless self-promoter.” Hmm. There appears to be a discrepancy here. Is it possible to give this character unusual decisions/actions related to quietness (e.g. situations where he’s quiet but 90%+ of characters wouldn’t be) without compromising his (presumed) desire for attention, and vice versa?
     
     There may also be a discrepancy between quietness and recklessness. (Depending on the plot, it might make sense, though–for example, a cop might be SECRETLY a renegade and/or corrupt, and if so then it would make sense that he might be careful about how much he hides his cards from his coworkers).
     
     “He’s stubborn… he’s reckless… he’s determined…” Almost every protagonist is. To distinguish yours, I’d recommend taking these traits beyond what is normal for a protagonist. (For example, in Casino Royale, James Bond chases a criminal onto a hostile country’s embassy grounds, which is insanely dangerous and certain to create an international incident–this helps create some distinction between him and other spy protagonists*).
     
     Bond also shows a reckless edge in the sort of ladies he goes after…
     
     
     *Although, to be honest, I thought it was more interesting when he moved towards the other side of the spectrum (overly obedient) in Skyfall. There were more consequences to being obedient in Skyfall than there were to being disobedient in Casino Royale.

610. # Thorgronon 10 Nov 2012 at 12:38 pm

     Hello Everyone!
     I am currently fairly deep into writing what I intend to be a superhero novel. i have a slew of characters with powers I have tried very hard to keep from the usual (fire, super-strength, flight, etc.). The plot is a little complex but basically there is a man born with limitless potential (he can be or do anything) but refuses to use his abilities for fear that he will not use them justly. For years he is studied by the government and currently a group known generically as the Agency. After some time he can no longer handle the burden, wipes his own mind and turns his body into a flower. This flowers pollen is viral, with two strains being released ( Alpha-which gives people manipulation abilities like control over water or air, and Omega-which causes physical changes in someone’s body). This virus sweeps the United States, killing most who become infected and giving powers to a small percent. The story focuses on a small group bent on curing the virus.
     They are;
     Issac Specter: Personality- loner, brash, has a need to prove to himself that he is worth something. Life- mid twenties, lives alone, works as a key-grip, competed in underground fighting rings for amusement. Powers-Omega- cannot be detected by the five senses as well as being unable to be remembered, except by the few characters who can see him, items he is in physical possession of take on the same properties as himself
     Alistair Gendo: Personality- devoted, intelligent, driven, will do anything for his son. Life- lost his wife in car accident, late thirties, heart surgeon, rarely home, spends all free time with son. Powers-Omega- after the death of his son at the hands of his babysitter, Alistair ripped out his own heart and implanted it into the body of his son in a fit of insanity, he and his son our now linked, both bodies controlled by Alistair’s mind, however the son’s body is the only one alive and healthy, Alistairs is dead but unkillable, Alistair can also remove the hearts of other’s and implant them into his son’s chest, gaining control of that body
     Toby Eckrin: Personality-flighty, apathetic, sneaky, money hungry, Life-grew up poor and on the streets, late teens, always looking for a way to make money. Powers-Alpha- with enough focus he can force himself or a situation to be lucky in his or another’s favor
     The Conducter: Personality- kind, quick to act, not very intelligent, honest. Life- passionate for lacrosse and music, early twenties, broke his leg freshman year of college rendering him unable to play lacrosse. Powers-Alpha- can create sound with thought, can condense and project it how he sees fit, often into large blasts of concentrated sound he refers to as “dropping the bass”
     Let me know what all of you think, I’m open to suggestions and would love to here your comments. Thanks!

611. # GalaxyWaffleson 10 Nov 2012 at 1:03 pm

     So I made a character named Surge and he has Gyrokinesis (Gravity Manipulation)
     Applications:
     + Able to reverse gravity (Down is up, sideways or towards an object)
     + Can use Gravity as a force field
     + Weight Manipulation (sluggish movement and/or floatiness)
     + Repel objects and attacks (Can only repel energy attacks, like energy blats and so on)
     - Can’t create wormholes or black holes
     - Can’t use it to fly (has not practiced this ability and has another method of transportation)
     - Useless in area with no gravity
     - Can only control certain aspects of gravity
     - Useless if target/area isn’t in eyesight (Ex: Gravity is unaffected behind him due to the area/target being out of his sight)
     Now Surge uses gravity in a non science way. You could say that he could crush organs and such with gravity but with Surge’s gravity powers he can only affect the outside of a person. So basically this means that his gravity powers don’t affect the inside of a human body, just the outside. (This prevents him from being cheap and/or a killer)
     The only powers able to really rival him are people who have Telekinesis, Time Manipulation, Vector Manipulation and the ability to nullify powers. Other powers do fare well against him but he does have a slight edge over them
     He uses his fists to fight. When he fights he surrounds his hands in a gravity aura to amplify his
     strength and also when he uses his gravity abilities his hands glow purple. If he’s using his powers lightly
     then it glows light purple but if he’s using a lot of power or a big ability (ex: black hole or something)
     his hands glow dark purple.
     He wears a black and purple suit and it has shoulder pads and knee pads (like Kid Flash’s YJ costume)
     Also he has these shoes that give him the ability to do super jumps. (Think of Superboy from Young Justice)
     The only thing is he can’t leap over tall building in one bound and he has a height limit.
     What do you guys think of my character so far?
     What changes should be made?

     *Name is Galaxy Waffles (forgot to add it)

612. # Derp Writeron 18 Nov 2012 at 12:39 am

     So I’ve got a few superpowers that I’m hoping nobody has seen before (all of them are for villains in my stories, BTW).

     1.) Psychokinesis/Astral Projection – More specifically, though, the ability to project one’s negative thoughts/feelings into a semi-physical manifestation that would cause “poltergeist” activity when said feelings were attached to a person. The villain that uses this ability in my stories can then go to sleep at any location he finds convenient and then project his consciousness into that manifestation which he had sent to torment poor soul and bump the level of the “haunting” up to a demonic level and can actually kill his victims this way.

     2.) Spontaneous Combustion – Unlike what this might sound like, the villain uses this ability to cause OTHERS to catch fire suddenly, rather than himself. To make this creepier I decided that the victims wouldn’t be able to light up anything else, even highly flammable materials, with the the flames that they were engulfed in.

     3.) Remote Detonation – Still working this one out, but basically the villain is an expert in explosives and demolition and has the ability to send the right signal (for lack of a better word, at least from what I can think of at the moment) to detonate anything that could be blown up, especially if it was made to do so (like C-4) mentally.

     4.) Induced Schizophrenia (really just a unique use for telepathy, I guess) – As with #3, I’m still working out the specifics, so the details are a bit fuzzy, but the idea is that the villain can turn people into murderers by messing with their perception of things and causing them to kill people via the power of suggestion and false images.

     Thoughts?

613. # Scarletton 18 Nov 2012 at 12:26 pm

     So my friend gave her two MC’s fire manipulation and telekinises, but she is a bit worried that there are too many heroes with these powers and that the story will bore readers because of this. Any advice.

614. # Derp Writeron 18 Nov 2012 at 1:01 pm

     Well, Scarlett, it really depends on how they are used. For example, anyone can tell you that control/production of electricity as a power has been done to death, but even with that being the case, the way Misaka Mikoto (the main character of A Certain Scientific Railgun) uses that same power is refreshing. Rather than just “zapping” an enemy, she uses it in more creative ways, like clinging to the side of a building or, as her signature move, propelling a coin at supersonic speeds to cause larger-scale destruction.

     Maybe setting limitations that sound more scientific would help, as well. For example, anyone who understands electricity even moderately knows that it doesn’t just jump from one thing to another without being guided. That’s why we need wires to make sure our machines get power. So a creative play on a character like Static Shock might be that it takes time to produce this connection between his target and himself before he can reliably attack.

     Pyro from X-Men, for example, doesn’t create fire, but instead manipulates existing flames, which is why he needs his lighter at all times in X2: X-men United. Setting a similar limitation might make it more interesting than “James shot fire out of his hands and scorched the bad guy”, or “Michael turned the dude’s brains into mush”.

     Your friend could avoid this problem altogether by choosing a less common power for the two characters, but if she really likes them, then she’ll have to put a twist on it. At least that’s how I see it.

     B.McKenzie gives better advice.

615. # B. McKenzieon 19 Nov 2012 at 1:57 am

     “Induced Schizophrenia (really just a unique use for telepathy, I guess) – As with #3, I’m still working out the specifics, so the details are a bit fuzzy, but the idea is that the villain can turn people into murderers by messing with their perception of things and causing them to kill people via the power of suggestion and false images. Thoughts?” I’d recommend checking out how the pilot of Alphas showed the victims experiencing the brainwashing–the execution there was very memorable.

616. # Trevor Lon 19 Nov 2012 at 3:19 pm

     Pardon me, super power gurus.
     I’m working on a character for a story… not exactly a generic superhero (no tights) but he has a super human ability. The character is already athletic and strong, but an ability that improves his fighting style (which is just punching, kicking and jumping around) would work best. Something that alters his body perhaps, nothing telekinetic.
     Help is greatly appreciated!

     also, my favorite super hero is Captain America. Yeah!

617. # YellowJujuon 19 Nov 2012 at 8:39 pm

     Trevor, theyre are a lot of ways to go about this. You could go the Captain America route, or even similar to Spider Mans or Hulks origins.

618. # Karmaon 20 Nov 2012 at 2:01 am

     @Trevor;

     You can also use various kinds of Fighting techniques.
     Like in Dragon Ball Z/Mortal kombat/Street Fighters : all the characters are actually Martial artists but they have certain [b]‘Key moves’[/b] which make them look like Superheroes.

     On the other hand there also certain Combat-based Superpowers such as:

     *Pyrokinetic- Combat ( Fire )
     *Cryokinetic Combat (Ice) (Example : Subzero)
     *Papyrokinetic Combat (Paper)
     *Chlorokinetic Combat
     *Umbrakinetic Combat

     Or you can also go for moves based on weapons or Give the Main Character a Weaponized Body(Wolverine).

     Hope it helped ~ ^_^

619. # Novaon 20 Nov 2012 at 9:11 am

     I had an idea for an hero who can mimic the abilities of fictional beings (vampires, greek gods, dragons, sandman, etc…) but i don’t know where to start. Suggestions?

620. # B. McKenzieon 20 Nov 2012 at 6:29 pm

     “I had an idea for an hero who can mimic the abilities of fictional beings (vampires, greek gods, dragons, sandman, etc…) but i don’t know where to start. Suggestions?” I’d recommend picking one and sticking to it (e.g. a dragon or a Greek god or whatever). I feel like the ability to take on the abilities of fictional beings in general would be diluted/generic and would probably take more explanation.

621. # Raymondon 21 Nov 2012 at 12:23 am

     I’m writing a story about an American superhero, but it is set in Paris. He and the other main character are American, so they speak English, but what should I do about the dialogue that would normally be in French? Should I have it in French or English. Also, the dialogue in French is never anything important, it’s just stuff like ordering food in a restaurant or asking for directions. The secondary character speaks French, so she helps get the main character around, so I guess she is kind of like a translator. Thanks.

622. # B. McKenzieon 21 Nov 2012 at 5:41 am

     If the French dialogue doesn’t matter, you could either skip over it, add in a line that someone says something which the main character doesn’t understand (and perhaps have the secondary character translate if the main character’s response is critical), and/or have the main character attempt to engage in a scene with imperfect French.*

     *For example, he might only translate the words he understands for readers. Alternately, if he occasionally gets disoriented by his lack of knowledge, it may be fitting to have mistranslate a few words (preferably ones where the readers could obviously tell that something is amiss based on context). For example, if a waiter asks the main character “Hello, how may I kill you?” I think readers will figure out that he’s having trouble understanding what everybody is saying. Alternately, perhaps he asks a stranger what time it is and gets slapped in the face.

623. # Katherineon 21 Nov 2012 at 5:23 pm

     Im writing a book and i need help on a good weakness for different people:
     a girl who can hypnotize people.
     a girl that can take others powers away
     a boy with x ray vision

     they need to make sense though! thanks

624. # NRGon 24 Nov 2012 at 6:25 pm

     My question is, How powerful can light manipulation be?

625. # YellowJujuon 24 Nov 2012 at 10:31 pm

     You could burn up the Earth.

626. # Dr. Vo Spaderon 25 Nov 2012 at 9:37 am

     You could reflect and refract the surrounding rays of light, rendering yourself invisible.

627. # B. McKenzieon 25 Nov 2012 at 3:13 pm

     Solar-powered death rays. There are weaker superpowers out there.

628. # Green Rangeron 26 Nov 2012 at 6:51 am

     Light is also part of the electromagnetic spectrum, keep that in mind

629. # HisWrath777on 26 Nov 2012 at 8:24 am

     I’m writing a book about a teenage American boy who gets caught in an electrical explosion while he and his dad are stuck in their car (a new brand of electrical cars after the world has stopped using fossil fuels). He only gets a touch of the explosion though because a hero named Phantom saves him before the entire car explodes. His father wasn’t so lucky and dies. Soon after he finds that he could control machines and create electrical charges. Question is I don’t know if he is too overpowered…

630. # B. McKenzieon 26 Nov 2012 at 11:22 am

     I’m not particularly concerned about the character being overpowered, but the origin story could be more distinct/memorable. It might help to incorporate something more unique to the character (e.g. give him a decision or action that most other superhero protagonists wouldn’t make in the same situation). I’m not sure that being sort of passively involved in his father’s death (e.g. perhaps causing it accidentally by powers beyond his control) is as interesting as something he’s consciously involved in (e.g. Peter Parker choosing to let the robber go, which ends up getting his uncle killed).
     
     Also, it might help to give Phantom and the main character a more interesting hook together than Phantom randomly stumbling upon an exploding car (which may feel contrived). For example, maybe Phantom is battling with a criminal, and the stress of being caught near the battle causes the main character’s powers to emerge in a hard-to-control way (which causes the car to explode). One possibility: the boy already knows he has superpowers and decides to take part in the fight with the villain even though he’s not actually that capable of controlling his powers yet. His attempt to power up causes the car to explode, but it’s more his choice than merely being in the car with his dad.
     
     …
     
     “I’m writing a book about a teenage American boy who gets caught in an electrical explosion while he and his dad are stuck in their car…” Should have bought a Toyota.

631. # Thorgronon 26 Nov 2012 at 11:48 am

     Hello!
     I am currently writing a super-powered story (not sure if it will be a novel or series of short stories yet) that has a post-apocalyptic feel to it. I am currently having some trouble accurately describing the powers of an anti-hero type character that is going to show up periodically. Currently his name is Looney and his abilities focus on distance manipulation (this is what I’ve taken to calling it). He can change the distance, mainly for himself between objects. I’m just wondering if this is too bizarre of a power to convey or in what ways it could be changed. The way I have him using it is by spinning the dial on his pocket watch to increase or decrease the distance between whatever he is focusing on. So he could walk to the top of a ten story building with one step or expand the distance between himself or an oncoming bullet to prevent it from hitting him. Thanks!

632. # M. Happenstanceon 26 Nov 2012 at 12:34 pm

     So… it’s effectively teleportation?

633. # Thorgronon 26 Nov 2012 at 2:50 pm

     No not exactly, although it could be thought of simply as a sort of “flavor” to a teleportation power. He manipulates the physical space, either expanding or contracting it to his will. So instead of teleporting to the top of a building, he compresses the space the building occupies, effectively making it a foot high, steps onto it, then allows the effected space to assume it’s original shape. So lets say there is a large wall in his way. He could compress the space around the wall in front of him, making a gap in it, step over it, then allow the space to snap back to its original position, without damage to the wall or anything in that space.

634. # Dr. Vo Spaderon 26 Nov 2012 at 3:37 pm

     I think I get it…but what if he expands the space between him and an object? Is matter simply created to do this, or is everything between elongated?

635. # B. McKenzieon 26 Nov 2012 at 3:47 pm

     If I understand it correctly, it sounds a lot like teleportation to me* (although perhaps the ability to change the position of other things as well, like the bullet or perhaps himself and the bullet simultaneously). If it is a variant of teleportation, I think the explanation could be simpler. (Generally, I’d shoot for superpowers that can be explained in 1-2 sentences and I feel moderately confused after 5+).
     
     *With some quirks. It sounds like it’d be really hard to operate the dial in the heat of the moment, particularly for something relatively complicated (e.g. three dimensional movement rather than 2-D movement). Unless his senses and/or reflexes are supernatural, I’m not sure it’d be believable that he could respond quickly enough to the bullet to teleport away from it. (See what you can do with a dial in under a second–maybe you could turn a volume dial from max to mute or vice versa, but anything remotely complex would be quite challenging). If so, I think the limitations would probably make the power more interesting than 100% intuitive, can’t-miss teleportation.

636. # Thorgronon 26 Nov 2012 at 4:25 pm

     Hey thank you guys very much! To answer Dr. Vo Spader, the space would be expanded, no matter creation. And to answer B. McKenzie, the dial is meant to limit him and yes he would also be capable of moving other objects, examples involving him were just easier to use. Also I don’t intend him to use it much for complex 3D changes such as litterally changing the shape of something but instead lowering it’s height or increasing the distance between two objects without anything actually moving.

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638. # The Wizon 07 Dec 2012 at 6:38 pm

     Is this just where we can drop off some story ideas? Does magic really count as a super power? I was thinking of a story where a kid discovers a magic staff that he can use to do magic whilst camping with his family. He, being a teen of course, starts to use it for his personal gain and just fools around with his powers for a little while, not really looking to be a hero or anything just a kid. Soon he realizes that the more he uses his powers, the more he is getting sucked into this other dimension, a world much like a Earagon/LOTR type of thing. But its pretty much too late by then, and he ends up stuck in this world. He soon is able to be trained by some official “Wizzes” there and they find out that hes from a different world and of course is some sort of wiz with the potential of being the most powerful one ever. Also some sort of dark force begins to come to power with him switching worlds, and he has to learn to become the wiz he has the potential to be and stop it. Any comments?

639. # randomdudeon 08 Dec 2012 at 4:48 pm

     I have an idea for a superhero but its not very good. Help?
     He’s 17. (can’t think of a name)
     He has white hair and purple eyes.
     He’s shy and quite but if you mess with his freinds your dead kind of personality.
     His powers are he can see visions of the past through touch (contact with a living organism lets him see the memories in their perspective but for example if he went to a crime scene and concentrated he can see what happend) and he can “see” 10 seconds into the future so he can dodge attacks.
     When he uses his powers his eyes go compleatly purple.
     Oh and he is Bisexual and in a love triangle with some of his team mates.

     His powers arn’t used for combat that much so does he need more powers?
     He also needs a name. THANKS!

640. # randomdudeon 09 Dec 2012 at 4:52 am

     Ok I made a few changes. (still no name -_-)

     When he sees people’s memories he feels what they felt in the memory e.g.pain, joy etc.If he is not concentrating on a certin time it gives him a random memory.

     He’s going to be gay not bisexual and because there is always complications in superhero relationships (ice man and rouge) his boyfreind has a very painful past so whenever they touch he feels that pain.

     Also he has no physical powers but he does have black belts in karate, taikuando and other martial arts that I don’t know the name of.

     I NEED A GOOD NAME FOR HIM PLEASE!!!!!
     and powers and stuff for his boyfreind and other team mates including names and origin of powers also a team name would be nice.

     Hope i’m not to needy THANKS!

641. # Scarletton 09 Dec 2012 at 6:28 am

     Randomdude, I would reccomend working more on your characters’ personality. All I know so far is that he is shy, quiet, and loyal.(And perhaps dedicated, because of the martial arts thing.) I know absolutley nothing about the team: Goals, why they were founded,ect. could you provide me with more info about the boyfriend, too?

642. # randomdudeon 09 Dec 2012 at 11:31 am

     Okay well he’s kinda scared of new people and doesn’t like people touching him because of his powers but when you get to know him he opens up a bit more his kind-hearted nature kicks in. He blushes alot, acts childish and has a cute giggle that his boyfreind adores he looks up to his freinds as he is the third youngest in the team.

     His boyfreind is a little hard to descibe but i’ll try:
     Brown hair and blue eyes
     He’s 19 one of the oldest so he is extremly protective of the white haired boy since when he was 15 he was beaten by his father because he blamed him fo his mothers death when an orphanage hears about this they take him in. After a year scientists are looking for children as they “can’t have any of their own” later reveald that the children are used for experiments. He becomes able to turn into any mammal and is tortured by the scientists until he escapes with his girlfreind Bianca who becomes resistant to all diseases, she is shot in front of him after they escape.
     When he joins the team he acts like he doesn’t care for them until the white haired boy edmits his love, he goes out and protects him because he reminds him of Bianca.
     He describes himself as bisexual. (can’t think of an exact personality for him but he is American)

     The others I have simplified a bit to help keep this short.

     The Leader of the team is level headed and has beach blond hair and ocean blue eyes his power is the manipulation of water but can turn his body to water aswell. (American)
     (age: 19)

     The optamist of the team is a girl with blonde wavy hair and shiny green eyes she has the power of light and healing she’s always happy and anoying at times.possible love intrest of the leader.(American)
     (age: 19)

     The “goth” of the team is a girl who is depressing and antisocal with short-ish black hair with a blue streak on one side, her eyes change colour(IM BRITISH I SPELL IT WITH A U OK!) from sparkly ruby red, citrine orange, topaz yellow, emerald green, saphire blue, Amthyst purple and crystal white. Her power if you havn’t guessed is earth and crystal manipulation.(She is from Ancient Greece frozen in a crystal)
     (age: 17)

     The joker of the group is a very mischivous boy with black hair and green eyes he has the power of wind and has wings that extend from his back he uses a bow because of his eagle vision. He tries to lighten the mood most of the time he has a copper coloured skin he gets into arguments alot and appears immature.(He is a decendant of the Plains Indians spirits gave him his powers)
     (age: 16)

     The youngster of the team is a small girl with dark brown hair and forest green eyes she is quite and shy to everyone only more social when she likes that guys^ jokes or needs to stop arguments between either the goth and the joker or the leader and the joker as his imature nature does annoy them…alot.She can control plants she is the youngest that everyone tries to protect. (British oh yeah!)
     (age: 15)

     The last person is the “big brother” he gets on with everyone and is the most liked person in the group he has ginger hair and green eyes he is resiliant to being made a fool of though if you push him to far his anger gets the better of him. His power is smoke and fire. (American)
     (age: 18)

     They are in a bording school where there are extra classes for the “needy” children. When the school goes into all out war the students pick sides the good ones are the eight listed above the rest either became the villans or died when refusing to join them. When it finaly ends they stay as a group to fight crime. (though 4/8 die and only one of the four could be resurected)

     Is this okay Scarlett or should i go into more detail?
     (love your name actualy)
     THANKS!

643. # randomdudeon 09 Dec 2012 at 11:33 am

     Oh God longest comment EVER! SOOOOORRY!

644. # nameless.on 09 Dec 2012 at 4:15 pm

     your superhero sounds pretty wonderful alongside your other characters.
     im not very good with naming either, but reading about your main character two names came into my head which i thought match him. alistair or thoe. hope that helps. I’m not sure how to help you on the story though. o:

645. # B. McKenzieon 09 Dec 2012 at 5:53 pm

     “He’s 17. (can’t think of a name)
     He has white hair and purple eyes.
     He’s shy and quite but if you mess with his freinds your dead kind of personality.” So far, I’m not seeing anything which would lead to unusual decisions for the character. What are some things he would do that 90%+ of heroes wouldn’t do in the same situation? For example, maybe he’s too empathetic (because of his superpowers?) and gradually starts to relate too much to the criminals he’s working against–e.g. on Homeland, several characters have either made major mistakes or outright been turned to the enemy because they looked too hard at what was human about the other side. For example, a federal prison was very hard on a terrorist detainee, and a CIA operative trying to convince the detainee to cooperate gave the detainee eyeglasses as a sign of good faith–the detainee shattered the glasses and used the shards to commit suicide.
     
     …
     
     “When he sees people’s memories he feels what they felt in the memory e.g.pain, joy etc.If he is not concentrating on a certin time it gives him a random memory.
     He’s going to be gay not bisexual and because there is always complications in superhero relationships (ice man and rouge) his boyfreind has a very painful past so whenever they touch he feels that pain.” While I appreciate that you’re incorporating superpowers into noncombat, incorporating them into romantic scenes like this strikes me as probably more awkward than not. (It might help to ask a few prospective readers in the target audience what they think; I find myself generally unreceptive to all romance and that might flavor my perspective here).
     
     …
     
     I’d recommend checking out this article on how to incorporate demographic details. Specifically, I’d recommend not mentioning generally irrelevant demographic details such as hair color, eye color, nationality (I haven’t seen any indication it’s relevant here), and individual age* when you’re describing your proposal to publishers/agents. In particular, one of your characters gets more words for her eye color or hair color than for what she contributes to the plot. When you’re putting together a synopsis and/or query for publishers, I’d recommend focusing overwhelmingly on unusual personality traits, major decisions, motivations/goals, and anything else we need to understand the central plot.
     
     *It’d probably be worth noting that the characters are teenagers, but I’d recommend against listing all of their ages in the submission, especially if they’re all within a few years of each other.
     
     …
     
     I think this article about 3-dimensional character development on a superhero team would help.

646. # Milky Wayon 09 Dec 2012 at 9:11 pm

     My story has two main characters- both with powers. But I * really * don’t want to make their friendship/ teamwork/ plot sound contrived, and don’t want to go down the usual sometimes stereotypical road a couple of authors may go down.

     They’re both fourteen.

     The first main character is Scarlet. She’s a Necromancer. So what she can do is:
     - Know the history of someone who is deceased back to their birth just by visiting their grave.
     - She can negate the powers of an opponent but only for a time period of six minutes.
     - Speed up the lifespan of a living thing until it reaches death. For example, she’d turn a flower into a dried up leaf after a short period of time by pointing at it.
     - She can summon things back from the dead, and once those things are called back, they’re Ghosts. They can only stay on earth for a time period of 24 hours, and she cannot summon that being again.

     Naturally she’s a quiet character, and is a bit more practical than her best friend. She doesn’t have thick skin so she’s sensitive. However, she spends most of her time in secluded areas just thinking.

     The biggest secret she has is a bonsai tree she’s raised from its beginning. It’s a pretty big plot twist because Necromancers don’t have anything to do with life. This is pretty close to enhancing the fact that she is quiet.

     Then we’ve got our second character, Xander.
     He comes from a race of people with these powers, and people who have these abilities are almost always deemed as hopeless as they have a small amount of powers. The only time when a person of this race can actually be worth use is when they turn sixty.

     He’s a Timewinder ( agh, considering on changing the name soon ), and the only power he can do is go back in time and go forward into time. However, going forward into time is forbidden in the society they live in. To be blunt? His powers aren’t even powers. They suck.

     Xander is a bit of a comedic person, and is nothing like the other Timewinders. He actually plans to do something else before the ” clock runs out ” and turns sixty. He’s much more creative than Scarlet, which comes in handy on most of their journey.

     He’s got a defiant nature, which helps drive his want to change the reputation of the Timewinders.

     Xander is the character I want to focus on most while writing this story because he tries desperately to destroy stereotypes of others, and Scarlet is the character that I usually want to outdo Xander in projects involving powers.

     However, the way he plans to destroy stereotypes is kind of a cliche path. I’ll summarize it considering how extensive this post is:

     The weak guy from the weak race chooses to go on a death defying journey with someone who wanted to be the one who takes the journey. In the end, he comes out victorious.

     I’ll just stop it here. Now, I’ve summarized what I’ve been planning for the plot mind you. This isn’t the raw plot-line.

647. # Milky Wayon 09 Dec 2012 at 9:13 pm

     BLAST! I should just publish that comment. It’s as long as a novel!

648. # randomdudeon 09 Dec 2012 at 11:50 pm

     Nameless, THANKS! I love the name Alastair!
     B. McKenzie, THANKS! I like the idea about being too empathetic and i’ll try to make them have more unusual personality traits.

649. # SimaLingon 17 Dec 2012 at 10:36 am

     ok guys i need a name for a male plant manipulator
     his real name will be Sage Green
     but i have no clue for a superhero name help?

650. # Kirbyon 17 Dec 2012 at 3:47 pm

     Chlorophyll could work. Evergreen might, too. His secret identity name does seem to be kind of slamming it in that his power is manipulating plants, though. I would keep the Sage, but probably change the last name to something else.

651. # 494alexon 17 Dec 2012 at 5:35 pm

     My story isn’t really a Superhero story as such, being more of a Western with Sci-Fi elements. However there ARE people with powers, the source of which involves genetic manipulation (there is a backstory to how people get these powers but that’s another matter entirely).

     These powers are strictly confined to the user’s body, and are often rather horrific for the user; for example, somebody with fire powers would have a combustible body and an immune system decked out to rapidly heal burn wounds, but the power would NOT extend to pyrokinesis (mental control of the fire or spontaneous ignition of other objects). Therefore his fighting tactic would be to have a weapon or piece of equipment that compliments his power, like a gas/fuel gun of some sort.

     Being genetic powers, many are likely based off attributes of various animals or plants.

     In this vein I have thought of several characters with the following power/weapon combinations. I’m mostly looking for feedback as to whether they sound ok, bad, or really corny. Displayed in the format: “POWER/WEAPON/VISUAL THEME (if any)”.

     - Improved Long Distance Vision, Night Vision, Improved Hearing/Pistols, Rifles, etc/Owl

     - Six Arms, Multiple Eyes (360 Degree vision and field of fire)/Six Revolvers/Spider

     - Echolocation, Wall or Ceiling Cling/Infiltration Gear/Bat

     - Heat Transfer via physical contact (can heat up or cool down things, results in scalding/boiling/freezing)/No equipment yet/No theme yet

     - Self Combustion OR Emission of Flammable Gas (methane? hydrogen?)/Gas or Fuel Spray (if Combustion), Lighter or similar device (if Gas Emission)/No theme yet

     - Augmented Bioluminescence (continuous blinding or flashbang effect)/Possibly some sort of light focusing device to make lasers/Glow Worm or Fungus or Firefly

     - Augmented Vocal Chords (aka Sonic Scream)/No equipment yet/

     - Static Electricity Generation/No equipment yet/Electric Eel

     - Healing Factor/No equipment yet/Axolotl Salamander

     Also I sort of need an idea for what kind of power/equipment would help a sniper, besides improved/zooming vision.

     Thanks for reading, sorry for the wall of text.

652. # RoLandoLon 25 Dec 2012 at 7:08 pm

     Hey guys, I was wondering if you could give some ideas of how to use Telekinesis in a creative way?

653. # SimaLingon 26 Dec 2012 at 2:27 pm

     for one i belive that it should only work on certin objects or materials
     an example being metal or paper if these are too exact you could use things like tecnology in general or even objects that are emotinal attatchment to the charachter like a stuffed animal
     something like that hope i help (seriously you asked this on christmas)

654. # Anonymouson 27 Dec 2012 at 2:02 pm

     My MC has the power to generate illusions through the use of a magical orb. Is this ability too close to that of Green Lantern?

655. # Commenteron 27 Dec 2012 at 3:27 pm

     Hello! New commenter here, looking for a little help!
     I’m trying to decide on a power for my main character – currently stuck between shape-shifting and intangibility. What do you think? She is a sensible teenage girl who doesn’t like to stand out from a crowd much due to self-interest and pragmatism because of the government in the world she lives in. She prefers to use brains rather than brawn to get out of trouble, and usually improvises rapidly when stuck in a corner. She is a very good liar.

656. # B. McKenzieon 27 Dec 2012 at 5:14 pm

     “My MC has the power to generate illusions through the use of a magical orb. Is this ability too close to that of Green Lantern?” I’d have to see it in action, but I think you’re clear on GL. He’s not much of an illusionist.
     
     Mysterio, maybe, though you could probably avoid any problems there by making the characterization substantially different. If I could brazenly self-promote, I think my own Agent Orange is sufficiently different from Leatherhead (a Ninja Turtles character) even though they’re both mutant alligators with very similar combat capabilities/superpowers. I think their personalities, voices, attributes, flaws, goals, obstacles, backgrounds, etc. are different enough that they will feel different even though their powers and origin stories overlap. I think that a significantly different character will also find different ways to use his illusion powers than Mysterio would. In AO’s first scene, he uses his abilities in a social context (terrifying an accountant, theorizing on the unique properties of the American alligator, and devouring the accountant’s resume because he thinks the accountant is useless). I think the scene feels unique to AO rather than LH because I don’t think LH has the personality to do this scene (although he’s physically capable of doing it).
     
     PS: Since Mysterio is associated with orbs (he has a shiny orb for a head), it might help to give the character some other tool than an orb.

657. # B. McKenzieon 27 Dec 2012 at 5:43 pm

     “What do you think? She is a sensible teenage girl who doesn’t like to stand out from a crowd much due to self-interest and pragmatism because of the government in the world she lives in. She prefers to use brains rather than brawn to get out of trouble, and usually improvises rapidly when stuck in a corner. She is a very good liar.” What are her flaws like? What sort of mistakes and/or disagreeable decisions would she make that most other characters wouldn’t make? (One possibility: sometimes she’s excessively pragmatic and is all-too-willing to write off friends/allies if the situation gets too hot and/or as pique if the friend acted foolishly).

658. # Anonymouson 28 Dec 2012 at 6:41 am

     BM, I am totally clear on Mysterio. For one thing, he is a villian, and my character is a hero. Also, I do not think the orb is what creates the illusions, but I could be wrong. I think the technology in his suit makes them. My character is a wizard.

659. # B. McKenzieon 28 Dec 2012 at 7:37 am

     “BM, I am totally clear on Mysterio.” I’m inclined to agree. However, I’d like to offer the caveat that making Character B a villain rather than a hero (or vice versa) might not be enough to differentiate him from Character A–generally, I think personality/character traits and goals matter more. That said, I think the villain vs. hero distinction would probably be sufficient in this case–Mysterio and this character don’t sound like they resemble each other all that much–they’re not even in the same genre).

660. # Anonymouson 28 Dec 2012 at 10:50 am

     Cool, thanks. Now I just need to figure out how to show the MC doing interesting things without jumping into the dragons or embezzelment sceme.

661. # Anonymouson 28 Dec 2012 at 10:53 am

     whoops, I posted that last comment on the wrong article. That was a refrence to our conversation at What to do when you discover your story isn’t original.

662. # Anonymouson 28 Dec 2012 at 1:02 pm

     I think I have an adequet beginning now.

663. # Superguy99on 02 Jan 2013 at 12:36 pm

     Does anyone have any tips on how my characters can discover their Powers?

664. # Dr. Vo Spaderon 02 Jan 2013 at 12:57 pm

     A stressful situation is (in my opinion) the most common and most believable.

665. # Wishon 02 Jan 2013 at 10:34 pm

     B. Mac, I need a little help. Or maybe a lot. I’ve Bren watchig some superhero stuff lately and I’ve been planning an Avengers fanfiction story for a while based off of the 2011 TV series. The main character is an original one of my own creation, but I’m a little concerned about her superpowers. I don’t want a Mary Sue on my hands, but I’m scared I’ll fall into the trap of Sue-ness too easily under the superhero excuse.

     The main character is a 27 year old woman named Silvia who has a dagger that allows her to tell truth from lie (it remains a dagger whenever the person addressing her is speaking honestly but extends into a full sword when they lie). The dagger metally and physically harms the weilder if he/she lies. Silvia also can hover up to a foot off of the ground and can manipulate water vapor and minor amounts of water.

     Part of me thinks she’s too weak/not powerful for the storyline I have set up where she is noticed by the Avengers, but I don’t want a flying brick or crazy powerful hero who’s powers are completely unoriginal, at least in use. Any thoughts? I considered making her eater vapor abilities allow for some form of flight where she gets a boost to the sky closer to clouds and thus more water, but I’m still wondering what could make her an asset to a super hero team that’s already so diverse.

666. # YellowJujuon 02 Jan 2013 at 11:36 pm

     Wish, liars in superhero stories are often villains. Why would you give a villain a smaller weapon only to have it become a larger weapon that is easier to stab you with?

667. # B. McKenzieon 02 Jan 2013 at 11:56 pm

     “I’ve been watching some superhero stuff lately and I’ve been planning an Avengers fanfiction story for a while based off of the 2011 TV series.” First, my usual fan-fiction caveat: if you’re interested in becoming a writer someday, I think you’d probably learn more by building an original story from the ground up rather than taking a story where most of the main characters and the premise and probably the setting have already been laid out.
     
     Some thoughts that come to mind regarding the character and her powers:
     
     –I’m still wondering what could make her an asset to a super hero team that’s already so diverse.” Besides Iron Man’s lasers, the team is very light on ranged attacks more powerful than a bow and arrow. It doesn’t have any elemental controllers (besides possibly Thor). It doesn’t have any psychics. Except for Hulk, it doesn’t have anybody with notably messy and/or hard-to-control superpowers (a less reliable form of weather control comes to mind here). Except for Black Widow, it doesn’t have anybody who’s notably intelligent in a non-scientific way. It doesn’t have any mutants. Except for (sort of) Thor, the team is all human (as opposed to, say, a more exotic alien like the Martian Manhunter, a robot, a non-humanoid mutant like Beast, a mutant animal like The Taxman Must Die’s Agent Orange, a Canadian, a lab experiment gone horribly wrong, etc).
     
     –I feel like the character’s powers don’t really feel like they fit in with everybody else’s. Except for maybe Thor, all of the Avengers have either sci-fi origins (e.g. the Hulk’s radiation, Captain America’s super-serum, and Iron Man’s suit) or are badass normals (e.g. Black Widow, Samuel L. Jackson, and Hawkeye). And even Thor is kind of an alien. This dagger that extends into a sword when someone lies feels more like fantasy to me. One possibility: she uses some sort of sci-fi blade (e.g. a vibroblade or a light saber or whatever) and her abilities to detect lies are more based on her skills than on superpowers.
     
     –The character’s powers don’t strike me as contributing all that much to the team beyond what the other members can do. For example, is there anything she can contribute with the ability to detect lies that Black Widow and/or Iron Man couldn’t already do with their social skills and mental abilities/perception? (A related concern: if a feat can be accomplished without superpowers, it will almost always be more interesting to do so–e.g. The Mentalist is a very popular TV show about an investigator who uses his skills to detect and uncover lies, whereas Daredevil is a character who uses no-fail superpowers to uncover lies with much less drama/interest. Also, see Batman vs. Superman in flying scenes–Superman’s powers pretty much can’t fail, so those scenes are much less interesting for him than for Batman who has decidedly more limited flying capabilities).
     
     –I agree with/understand your concerns about the Sue-ness, but I’d generally recommend having the main characters on a superhero team roughly as powerful as each other (it makes it easier to challenge every character without rendering anyone useless). “Part of me thinks she’s too weak/not powerful for the storyline I have set up…” I’m inclined to agree. For example, she can hover a foot, but most of the other members on the team can either fly, pilot or have at least some heightened mobility (e.g. Hulk can jump high enough to get from one skyscraper to the next). She has a dagger (or sometimes a sword), which strikes me as less useful than what Thor and Iron Man and even Captain America bring to the picture.
     
     –I’d recommend spending a lot more time/thought on her personality and interesting interactions with other characters than on her superpowers. If her personality is interesting, the superpowers won’t matter much (as long as she and the team are properly challenged). If her personality isn’t interesting, great superpowers won’t save her.

668. # B. McKenzieon 03 Jan 2013 at 12:02 am

     “Does anyone have any tips on how my characters can discover their powers?” What’s the plot of your book like? Can you use the emergence of the superpowers to create problems in other ways? (For example, if the main other thing going on for the character is playing on the football team or wooing a significant other, you could have the superpowers emerge at a time which creates major problems on those fronts).

669. # Milanon 03 Jan 2013 at 5:44 am

     Hey Wish, that really is an intriguing starting point, a sword that gets longer when you lie. I can imagine Stark’s glib remarks already about Guiseppe’s foray into weaponsmithing.

     Perhaps the sword is a lightsaber after all, a high tech magic device akin to Asgardian gadgetry. At least it’s “feasible” in the Avenger world. Perhaps it doesn’t actually respond to lies, it just seems to. Perhaps it simply gets bigger when the wielder is significantly threatened, and the wielder has learned to lie to get the right response. “You WILL beat me to a pulp!”, the arcs of the sword stretched ever closer to the retreating Hulk. “You will murderise me completely!”. The sword practically lunged, severing the Hulk’s arm.

     The Hulk scrunched his eyes, but there was no searing pain. He hazarded a look, yet not a drop of blood, green, purple or otherwise, came from the gruesome stump. Looking closer, he saw his bicep ended in a shimmering field. On the ground, his severed limb… shrugged.

     With sufficiently outrageous “lies”, that sword might well serve as a ranged weapon. Such a sword could be wielded by anyone though, so there’s definitely a need for a second dimension to the character to tie her to the sword.

     Its limited programming may have also resulted in it choosing the wielder. Perhaps she has some trait taken to heroic lengths that the other Avengers don’t have. Protective… Captain America. Inventive… Iron Man. Manipulative… Black Widow. Angry… Hulk. Deific… Thor. Okay I don’t understand Thor. Sacrificing! She could cut off her own arm to throw at a keyboard just out of reach. Sharing! Anything can be shared with the sword of (um) Two-th. Or else you could work backwards, figure out a trait that would be heroic in the extreme, and then see how that might modify or relate to the sword.

     Anyway, you really do have a unique power. Toss in a heroic trait and wield your that pinnochioid “Knowsword” as an Avenger

670. # Wishon 03 Jan 2013 at 10:22 am

     @B. Mac: Thanks for the tips. While I do aspire to be a professional writer one day, for now I’m just hoping to exercise my writing skills. I’m still in school, though, so I don’t quite have the time it would take to build a whole new universe and story from the ground up. I might try it during NaNo this year.
     As for the character’s personality and character interaction, I already have those pretty well set up. I’ll re-evaluate her like you said and see about fixing the problems.

     @Milan: Thanks! I was always thinking about the dagger/sword’s versatility and many possible uses. I can definitely see her doing the sacrifice play; it would tie in to her personality and thoughts rather nicely.

671. # Amberon 03 Jan 2013 at 9:28 pm

     what kind of power would someone have to take down someone with telikinies but however the person with telikinis would be able to resist them long enough to give another person long enough to run/ get away?

     also I want this power something that would make them one of the most feared suprhumans

672. # Wishon 03 Jan 2013 at 10:10 pm

     @Amber: Perhaps telepathy? If the telekinetic had good reasons for a sharp and strong mind, then the telepathic could be trying to overpower the telekinetic while s/he threw items at the telepathic in an attempt to break his or her concentration. Plus, telepathy can easily scare people. Who would be able to tell if he or she read their minds?

673. # Tamahiroon 06 Jan 2013 at 10:48 am

     can someone help me with a team name their are 3 boys and 2 girls:

     the leader is telekinetic

     another boy is able to change his density
     (low density= levitation and phasing)
     (high density= strength and near invunrability)

     another boy with eagle sight and retractable wings and wind manipulation
     (uses a bow with wind arrows)

     a girl with plant powers

     and a girl who can create energy beings 5x her size controls them from the inside
     (the main two being a greek warrior and a ninja but their is more types)

674. # B. McKenzieon 06 Jan 2013 at 1:59 pm

     I would strongly recommend naming the team based on something besides their superpowers. For example, something about their team goal and/or motivations (e.g. Avengers), something/someone who matters very much to them (e.g. the X-Men or Justice League), something which suggests an unusual approach to being superheroes (e.g. Suicide Squad or Shadowpact or the Bureau of Paranormal Research and Defense), etc.

675. # Anonymouson 12 Jan 2013 at 6:39 pm

     Hey all!
     I am writing a novel about a teenager named Tom Silverton. He is quiet, curious, impulsive, self-centered, and intelligent. His father was an athlete in high school, so he is all about sports. His obsession grew when Tom’s mother died. Tom hates sports, and instead goes to a live action role playing group. They role play as their favorite superheroes, because everyone knows supers exist. One day, his favorite hero appears at one of his meetings, and so does a villain. The villain kills the hero, and Tom becomes depressed. He sets out to learn more about the hero, and finds some crucial piece of information. I do not know what yet. Anyway, he goes to the team the hero was on, and blackmails them into letting him join. He will not tell them what he found out until they allow him to help track down the heroes’ killer. The leader of the team, who was in love with the hero, says that Tom can join. Tom gains powers through intense training.
     That was pretty long winded, but my question is this:
     What power should I give Tom, super speed or animal mimicry? Those may seem odd given that his origin is training, but everyone has the potential to manifest a power, most people just do not know.

676. # Anonymouson 12 Jan 2013 at 6:50 pm

     There are a couple of things I forgot to mention. Tom is also very stubborn and determined. Also, do you think first or third person POV would work best for the story?

677. # B. McKenzieon 12 Jan 2013 at 10:49 pm

     Hello, Anonymous.
     
     –Stubborn, determined, curious, and probably impulsive are pretty much a given for a superhero, so these probably won’t distinguish the character very much. What we’re left with is quiet, self-centered, and intelligent. My impression so far (and I may be missing something) is that a character who’s quiet on his own is probably not as interesting as he could be–e.g. Mark Ruffalo’s Hulk was interesting in Avengers, but probably wouldn’t have fared as well as a main character rather than a side-character.
     
     –I really like the idea of the character blackmailing/pressuring his way onto a superhero team, but as it currently stands, I don’t understand why superheroes would agree to this. The blackmail will probably be more believable if the main character actually knows something damaging. For example, maybe he witnesses a major crime which the superheroes either grossly misrepresent and/or cover up to the media (e.g. Superhero A murders teammate Superhero B for whatever reason; the team silently deals with A and falsely claims that B was killed by a supervillain to avoid the public relations catastrophe of revealing that they let a murderer on the team*). A supervillain that has been framed in this way might correctly guess that the team has some major skeleton in the closet and might be interested in devastating his enemies and/or perhaps clearing his own name** by uncovering what happened.
     
     *If they killed A in retribution, they might also claim that the supervillain killed A as well.
     **The supervillain probably wouldn’t care about appearing innocent–he is, after all, a supervillain–but he might wonder if the superheroes’ final plan is to kill him as well to tie up any loose ends. You wouldn’t have to be a nice person to worry about some of your most powerful enemies framing you of murdering multiple VIPs, especially if it looks (erroneously) like one of your enemies might actually have murdered both.
     
     –”The leader of the team, who was in love with the hero, says that Tom can join. Tom gains powers through intense training.” This sounds too easy. I’d recommend instead having the leader offer a more conditional offer and/or perhaps provide useful information — e.g. “If you were remotely qualified to be a superhero, you would have figured out that everyone has the potential to manifest a superpower with sufficient effort.” Then he can push them to revisit their decision when he comes back with either superpowers or perhaps the first symptoms of superpowers.
     
     …
     
     “What power should I give Tom, super speed or animal mimicry? Those may seem odd given that his origin is training, but everyone has the potential to manifest a power, most people just do not know.” Super-speed seems counterintuitive for a character that is more cerebral than athletic. Animal mimickry, okay, although it might feel a bit odd that characters can discover such an ability through training/effort.
     
     …
     
     The conflict between geeks/dorks and athletes strikes me as overused and not particularly promising. I’d recommend checking out 21 Jump Street for a fresher take on cliques.
     
     If I were the marketing guy evaluating this proposal, I’d be concerned about the live-action roleplaying angle. It could come across as odd/weird to many readers, and notably anti-aspirational superheroes (like Kick-Ass and his painfully inept attempts at romance) don’t typically resonate with readers as much or sell as well as characters who more consistently show traits that readers look up to. I’d recommend looking at Peter Parker there–he’s not stereotypically cool, but he’s more clumsy than actually a loser. Alternately, Scott Pilgrim’s life has some HUGELY anti-aspirational elements early on (e.g. dating a high schooler at ~24, a total lack of success of the job front, how badly he handled his disastrous relationship with his ex, his dishonesty, etc), but he turns it around on every level. Even then, I would note that Scott Pilgrim didn’t sell remotely as well as more conventionally heroic-and-successful characters.

678. # Anonymouson 13 Jan 2013 at 11:56 am

     I’m not writing this to get published, just to improve my skills. I want to be as excellent a writer as possible.

679. # comicbookguyon 15 Jan 2013 at 11:58 pm

     How is everyone, I’ve been busy working on my comic book universe. Still sort developing my first, of many, projects bu I had a question. At the moment I’m trying to work in a race of aliens that are very important. So i really want their concept to work. One of the biggest details about them is that they possess a triple-helix for their DNA rather than a double-helix. So aside from explaining what a triple-helix IS compared to a double-helix, here are my questions;

     1) Knowing that DNA is basically nothing more than genetic storage devices, what advantaged would come from a triple-helix?

     2) Could the third strand of DNA be artificially created to link this race to the advanced suits they wear to visit other planets?

     Apologies, if this is not the right discussion area to post this. Thanks for your time, attention and opinions.

680. # B. McKenzieon 16 Jan 2013 at 4:45 am

     1) “Knowing that DNA is basically nothing more than genetic storage devices, what advantages would come from a triple-helix?” I think this is purely the author’s choice.
     
     2) “Could the third strand of DNA be artificially created to link this race to the advanced suits they wear to visit other planets?” Hmm. They genetically engineered themselves so they could use their spacesuits? That seems like a sort of convoluted reason to bring in genetic engineering. Perhaps their DNA/physiology require them to wear special suits to survive on other planets?

681. # comicbookguyon 17 Jan 2013 at 7:11 pm

     Exactly, perhaps I should elaborate. They need these to survive indeed. So the suit must be some sort of bio-tech that matches an individuals genetic code. Thus each member of this race has their own tailor-made suit.

     But also, in regards to DNA structure, what advantages would a triple-helix serve an organism that a double-helix couldn’t?

682. # B. McKenzieon 17 Jan 2013 at 8:15 pm

     Scientific American has an article on GE triple-helixes here. If you’re delving into the science — which I would not generally recommend in fiction* — the unusual genetic structure could allow for proteins not seen in double-helix organisms. Proteins are integral to pretty much everything in the body (including the muscles and brain), so that should cover pretty much anything that would be most relevant to a superhero story. Wikipedia also has an article here.
     
     *It tends to be VERY slow exposition.

683. # comicbookguyon 18 Jan 2013 at 12:14 pm

     As usual, I thank you B.Mac. I appreciate the help.

684. # j.coulsonon 21 Jan 2013 at 3:34 am

     you missed necromancing the ability to bring back the dead and minipulate them

685. # GalaxyWaffleson 22 Jan 2013 at 8:42 pm

     Hey I came up with a character and I want to know your opinions on him.

     Name: Aventus
     Age: 15
     Weapon: Whips

     So basically his story is that his parents were evil and they worked on alien technology.
     They tried a bunch of alien technology on him at a young age and they did a bunch of other tests on him and they tried out this new alien technology they found of him and it merged with his body. So kinda like Jaime Reyes. So throughout years Aventus develops a type of psychic connection with the alien technology. So basically he could talk to him and the alien technology could reply. (btw they’re baton like things.) So then Aventus’s parents lab explode and they died in the explosion but Aventus doesn’t thanks to his alien baton protecting him and that have now transformed into energy whips. The only thing left was Aventus’s parents journal which talked about their love for their child and many other things.

     So his whips can only be activated by Aventus and unless Aventus gives permission for someone to use it. Also the energy whips are blue. The whips can also extend to become longer (not super long though), are indestructible and Aventus retract them any time he wants.

     Combat wise it’s like the Metal Benders in the Legend of Korra.

     Aventus can also force the whips to fly into his hand and translate certain alien languages and writing.

     Aventus wears a black suit with white gloves and boots and it has a symbol on the chest of to batons overlapping each other like an x.

686. # Cluelesson 26 Jan 2013 at 2:39 am

     My superhero team’s powers are based on colours:

     (YELLOW)
     Appearance:
     A boy with short blond hair, orange eyes and slightly tanned skin he wears sandy coloured shorts, a short sleaved black top with a golden dragon design in the middle, black with gold trim fingerless gloves and is always bear-foot.

     Personality:
     He is the arragont hothead. He never backs down from a fight and seems to have the best comback to everything, he can be moody when he doesn’t get his own way and it is hard for him to admit that he was wrong or at fault. But even with his faults he is very loyal and always trying to help his freinds.

     Power:
     He can turn into a half-dragon: breaths fire; he can fly; has sharp claws; strong tail; enhanced sight smell hearing and resiliant scale armour. His scales are golden he keeps his clothes he has a blond crest (that means a hair going from the head down the spine) and a cream coloured underbelly. When pushed to maximum power he becomes a full dragon but this is unstable as he can lose control when enraged.

     (PURPLE)
     Apearance:
     A young boy with short light brown hair, purple eyes and pale skin he wears purple, grey and black coloured trousers (pants whatever) purple at the front black at the back and a grey line down the side same colour scheme for his converse purple sides, black front and grey tips he also wears a grey hoodie and often has the hood up.

     Personality:
     At first he is timid and quite and stuters a bit but when you get to know him he opens up he is very kinhearted and empathetic towards everyone in any situation this is his downfall as he is too empathetic towards the villans, he trusts to much and he just wants to help people in need. He is reserved and doesn’t like touching people because of his power

     Power:
     He is telekinetic, can use purple mindblasts and can use psycometry.(this is how he is too empathetic because he can feel the emotion or pain in the vision) When he uses his powers his eyes glow purple the things he telekineticly moves glow purple for a few seconds until he can lift the object.

     (BLUE)
     Apearance:
     A girl with shiny blue eye and long dark brown slightly curly hair with one blue streak she wears a blue and black skin tight top with a blue circle with a thist through it on her back she has similar skin tight shorts that go down to the knees and blue boots and a blue skirt.

     Personality:
     ???

     Power:
     she can make blue energy forcefields and fires melon sized blue energy balls from her hands, if she uses both hands she fires a bigger ball. When her power is pushed to the max she fires the bigger ball normaly and a giant ball with both hands.

     (RED)
     Apearance:
     A girl with long black straight hair and kind red eyes.(not evil red eyes)
     ???

     Personality:
     ???

     Power:
     she can create and manipulate red electricity and shadows. She can fly because of her electricity and she can make shadow clones of herself to fight.(not naruto style her shadows become 3D)

     (GREEN)
     Apearance:
     A boy
     ???

     Personality:
     leader
     ???

     Power:
     ???

     (the question marks are the parts I don’t know or unsure about can you help fill in the blanks)

687. # Cluelesson 26 Jan 2013 at 2:48 am

     meaning:
     i need personality for blue,
     costume and personality for red,
     everything for green,
     names (only superhero) and
     team name, backstories and villans

     (if you didnt notice the costumes are all their colour and black sometimes with a symbol)

688. # YellowJujuon 26 Jan 2013 at 10:06 am

     Clueless, I wouldn’t reccomend having color being your most important thing about the characters.

689. # B. McKenzieon 26 Jan 2013 at 12:53 pm

     “Clueless, I wouldn’t recommend having color being your most important thing about the characters.” I agree… Color-coding characters reminds me of Power Rangers and Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles, cartoons where the main characters only have one personality trait. I’m not sure it would play well with novel-readers.

690. # Jordanon 30 Jan 2013 at 8:35 pm

     Hi, I’m trying to make some supers that have balanced powers, but some I can’t get a good drawback for.
     Name: Energon
     Power: Energy manipulation (can completely alter energy in anything)
     Drawback:???

     Name: Supernova/Arsenal
     Power: Explosion Control/Ace marksmanship
     Drawback: Too angry and loses control/???

     Name: Metallico
     Power: Metal manipulation
     Drawback:???

     As I said, these are some I haven’t figured out yet. Any suggestions would be very helpful.

691. # Mikeon 31 Jan 2013 at 2:06 am

     I’m not sure this is the correct article but thought I’d give it a whirl. I’m coming up with an idea of a superhero who is a martial artist, a Kickboxer to be more specific but I want his skills and powers to be amplified. I’m struggling to figure out why could possibly cause this to happen without being too cliché. Any suggestions would be great!

692. # Anonymouson 31 Jan 2013 at 6:10 am

     There’s a list of superhero origins here. Are you thinking more about a sci-fi or a fantasy direction?

693. # Mikeon 31 Jan 2013 at 3:29 pm

     It’d most definitely be a sci-fi story if any.

     I’m in two minds about my main character having his martial arts skills enhanced by an experimental chemical, ie Captain America or him just being simply superior in hand-to-hand combat, ie Batman.

     My original story is that a young kid named Jordan Monro who lives in the fictional town Skyline City. He lives with his mother after his father died when he was a baby. He takes up kickboxing at aged 10 after being recruited by a mysterious Grand Master Sensei Marcus Senester and his Martial Arts Academy. Jordan is a good-natured kid who used to hate seeing other kids getting beaten up and not being able to defend themselves. But the Academy’s Cobra-Kai-No-Mercy-style of training turns him into a remorseless fighting machine. At aged 13 he earns his first Dan black belt. At 16 he earns his second Dan black belt and is inducted into by Grand Master Senester into his Wolf Pack. The Wolf Pack is an elite group of fighters personally recruited by Senester, similar to the Foot Clan from Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles. Senester is revealed to be a major Crime Lord of Skyline Cityresponsible for all the drug dealing, robberies and hits, akin to Carmine Falcone.

     Jordan rises through the ranks, swiftly becoming a firm favourite of Senester’s, becoming the Beta to his Alpha. However, when Senester orders Jordan and the rest of the pack to infiltrate the labaratory of the biggest pharmaceutical company in Skyline (the same company that Jordan’s mother works for), he has reservations but goes along with it. Senester is after a new experimental drug that’s being developed that he’s looking to sell. Once it’s been secured, Senester orders the Pack to execute all of the workers so that there’s no witnesses, one of them being Jordan’s mother. When Jordan refuses, he is chastised for his compassion and lack of conviction before he kills Jordan’s mother himself and excommunicates him from the Pack, having him killed, or so it seems. The idea would be to have the Pack blow up the lab and make it look like an accident. With Jordan unconscious and the building blowing up around him and he’s accidentally covered in a combination of experimental chemicals which preserves his body. When he wakes up, he’s in a strange room where someone has pulled him from the wreckage. The stranger turns out to be his Dad who is actually alive and well. He reveals that Senester had attempted to kill him but he faked his death for his family’s safety. He trains Jordan to hone his new abilities so they can take down Senester and his Wolf Pack and save Skyline City.

     What’s everyone thoughts? Feedback is really appreciated!

694. # Kalion 31 Jan 2013 at 9:38 pm

     I’m trying to write a book about a superhero and it’s my first time trying to write any book at all. My character has wings and other powers that I haven’t decided on yet. Does anyone have any ideas for a three syllable name for her and possible costume choices (colors, etc.)? I need good ideas, not some ideas that are taken from another superhero or something.

695. # Mikeon 01 Feb 2013 at 6:29 am

     What kind of wings are they? Mechanical? Demonic? Dragon? Insect?

696. # BMon 01 Feb 2013 at 8:23 am

     Kali, especially in a book, I’d recommend worrying a hundred times more about the character development (e.g. personality/distinguishing traits, motivation/goals, etc) and plot than about the costume. You won’t score (or lose) any points with readers because of the costume.
     
     “I need good ideas, not some ideas that are taken from another superhero or something.” Hmm, good luck with that. There are only so many color combinations, and the 5000+ characters of Marvel & DC have probably hit on all of the ones that might actually look good. I’d recommend focusing a lot more on differentiating your character in other ways. If I could use my own The Taxman Must Die as an example, none of my beta reviewers have complained that the taxman/detective wears a regular suit-and-tie (like pretty much any modern detective) or that the other main character looks too similar to a character from the Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles. Again, I think it overwhelmingly comes down to characterization/personality, interesting choices, and plotting. If you can deliver on those fronts, the costume/colors won’t matter. If you can’t, the costume/colors won’t save you.

697. # Kalion 01 Feb 2013 at 6:50 pm

     Mike:
     my character’s wings are normal bird wings, except the color of them is blood red.

698. # Kalion 01 Feb 2013 at 6:54 pm

     BM:
     Thanks, I didn’t know that the costumes don’t really matter for a superhero. I will work more on her personality and the plot. Since I’m 13 I didn’t really know that writing a superhero book is actually harder than it seems to be.

699. # Kalion 01 Feb 2013 at 6:56 pm

     And forget about the name for her; I already came up with one: Archangel

700. # Leegirlon 01 Feb 2013 at 7:13 pm

     Kali, I really don’t mean to burst your bubble, but there’s already a really famous super named Archangel. It’s a guy though. He’s from the Marvel universe and he’s one of the newer X-men members. Sorry, You might wanna rethink that name.

701. # Kalion 01 Feb 2013 at 11:51 pm

     Dang it, I really liked that name. Maybe she could go by Red Angel or something.

702. # Amberon 01 Feb 2013 at 11:52 pm

     Kali:
     I think that that’s a pretty good name for her.

703. # Mikeon 02 Feb 2013 at 1:56 am

     Depending on what kind of bird wings, you could go for Red Eagle, Red Hawk, Red Falcon etc.

     Anyone have any thoughts on my potential story idea as posted above? Really keen to get some other experts points of view

704. # B. McKenzieon 02 Feb 2013 at 2:24 am

     Hello, Mike. Thanks for your patience.
     
     Why did Senester recruit Jordan? (There might be some interesting reason that they are recruiting a counterintuitive candidate–someone good-natured–for a group that’s very much at odds with that).
     
     Jordan’s personality could be more distinctive/interesting. What are some unusual decisions he’d make that most other protagonists wouldn’t make in the same situation?
     
     Jordan’s rise to the lieutenant role sounds like it could be more interesting. Out of all of the people in the Wolf Pack, what’s special about Jordan (besides that he’s the protagonist)? What are some things he does that none of the others would do in the same situation? One possibility: like Senester, he’s unusually determined, so much so that it’s also a flaw… maybe he’s so driven to accomplish his objectives that he’s willing to sacrifice teammates if necessary. However, unlike Senester, he has that compassionate/altruistic angle, so his objectives/goals would probably look substantially different than Senester’s (although there might be some overlap, at least at first).
     
     Erm… my interpretation of the villain’s plan (having Jordan participate in the killing of Jordan’s mother) would lead me to suspect the villain was a bit of an idiot—how did he expect Jordan would react? One more believable alternative would be if the villain specifically intended it as an affront to Jordan, perhaps as punishment for some transgression*. Or perhaps the villain misled/lied to Jordan about what they were planning, and Jordan wasn’t actually present when the killings occurred.
     *E.g. Jordan interfering with some crime against a civilian without knowing that the perpetrator was part of Senester’s organization. Perhaps Senestro gave him sort of vague instructions about not to interfere with something and Jordan disregarded those instructions because he assumed that he must have misunderstood Senester’s meaning–e.g. “If Senester had actually known what this criminal was involved in, he would want me to get involved to stop him” (obviously this is incorrect, but Jordan doesn’t know that at the time).
     
     Skyline City sounds like it could be more distinct. What’s something that might happen there that wouldn’t/couldn’t happen in most other superhero settings?
     
     Jordan seems oddly passive in the key scene where the villain kills his mother, Jordan gets knocked out, the building blows up, he gets covered in experimental chemicals, and his father saves him from the wreckage. I’d recommend giving him a more active role – e.g. giving him the opportunity to do something that most other protagonists wouldn’t do in the same situation. Preferably something more distinctive than getting pissed because his sensei committed a mass murder (including his mother)—that strikes me as something that everybody would do. For example, it sounds like he’s pretty chummy with his father after his father suddenly returns. One possibility: he’s instead really upset with his father because his father 1) misled him and probably Jordan’s mother about the father’s supposed death, and 2) his father was there when Jordan’s mother was killed and didn’t do anything about it. At least at first, I think it’d be more interesting if the two characters were deeply at odds. If they do reconcile later, I’d recommend having it come after gradual character development (e.g. maybe something about the father and/or the son changes that makes it easier for Jordan to accept his father back).
     
     Also, one concern I’d have about the father randomly entering to train the son is that it sort of relegates the son to a passive/secondary role. I think it’d be helpful if he took a more active role in his development (e.g. it would probably help to focus more on what he learns through practice than what his father teaches him… the stakes are higher and Jordan will probably have more opportunities to do interesting things).

705. # Mikeon 02 Feb 2013 at 9:30 am

     Thanks very much, it’s great to get some constructive feedback! I’ll definitely take your points onboard!

706. # Amberon 02 Feb 2013 at 2:37 pm

     I’m trying to write a book and my superhero has purple fur everywhere, black hair, a tail, and yellow eyes. She can wall-crawl. Do any of you guys have any ideas for another superpower for her? Preferably not things like energy blasts or any cliche powers.

707. # B. McKenzieon 02 Feb 2013 at 4:13 pm

     “Do any of you guys have any ideas for another superpower for her?” I don’t know anything about the plot or much about what sort of feel you’re going for, so I’m at a bit of a loss here…
     
     Wall-crawling would probably be more interesting with a character that was mainly a melee and/or short-range character, and I get the impression that you’re not a huge fan of ranged combat. Most characters that are exceptional wall-crawlers (e.g. Spider-Man, Wolverine and Beast) mainly rely on some combination of strength/agility/athleticism, sometimes with claws or some other melee weapon. If that is too generic for your tastes, perhaps something like powers that are mainly effective at melee range (e.g. psychic abilities that are much more useful at close range or the ability to disable superpowers via touch).
     
     …
     
     In some cases, a character that looks abnormal is intended to evoke a vibe of horror and/or shock and/or wackiness. If any of those apply here, I’d recommend picking capabilities accordingly. (For example, the ninja turtles were originally a parody of the glut of 1980s ninja stories).

708. # Jaion 02 Feb 2013 at 6:47 pm

     Okay, my superhero can fly (no energy or wings, just plain flying), control ice, frost, snow, and is (possibly, still not sure) immortal (can not die of old age, not-can never die by being stabbed or something).

709. # Jaion 02 Feb 2013 at 6:54 pm

     So, what do you guys think? I know I have to come up with what she looks like. Do you think she would look good with white hair? Or should I make her hair color more normal like brown or something?

710. # Amberon 02 Feb 2013 at 7:11 pm

     B. McKenzie:
     The book starts off with her running down an alley, freaking out over what she looks like. She sees a guy getting mugged by two other guys and is conflicted because she wants to help him, but she doesn’t want anybody to see her the way she is. She decides to help the guy and beats up the two guys who are mugging him (she used to take karate).
     That’s as far as I’ve got. I think that the guy who she saved will be from some organization or something, and in exchange for her saving him, he gives her a watch that his organization has been working on: a watch that lets you look however you want to by illusions or something. But she only wants to look like what she used to look like, so she sets up the watch and goes to school. While she was messing with the watch while she was bored during class she accidentally makes it only able to switch on and off for the way she used to look and the way she looks now. (This will be for later in the book): Saving that guy made her realize that she wants to use her abilities for helping people and stopping supervillains.
     Sorry about how long this is, I tend to elaborate A LOT sometimes.

711. # Amberon 02 Feb 2013 at 7:15 pm

     And her sense of justice is kind of like spiderman’s, not in any way like batman or something. (No killing or anything in the book. There will probably be things like bleeding, bruises, broken bones, etc. She is the kind of superhero to turn the supervillain in to the police.)

712. # Amberon 02 Feb 2013 at 7:32 pm

     B. McKenzie:
     What do you think she should have for a power besides wall-crawling? I’m not really into psychic, energy, claw things, or draining powers. I know, I’m picky with superpowers. And I’m sorry, I don’t know what a melee weapon or character is. (I’m 13 and this is my first time writing a superhero book.) Could you please give me a list of some more powers that are good for her and a definition of melee weapons and characters?
     Sorry if I’m bothering you with all these questions.

713. # Clarabelon 03 Feb 2013 at 12:00 am

     I have an idea for a character, but she lacks an actual power instead of a mutation. Okay, prepare for an avalanche of backstory. My character is a completely ordinary receptionist. She is young, but is very depressed about where her life is headed and wants more than anything to be special in some way. Anyway, over the course of a few days , she begins to notice markings showing up on her skin. They are kind of a filigree/vine pattern and look rather alien. At first, she wears them proudly, thinking her life is turning around and she will finally be special and a superhero. However, she is ostracized and experimented on, and she becomes disillusioned. However, at a point where she only wants the “tattoos” gone, she gains for combatant powers and becomes a villain as revenge for her treatment. At a later point in the story, she experiences a turnaround and becomes somewhat of a hero. But what I’m wondering is, what powers could be related to the markings? I know they should be kind of alien or mystic in origin, but I can’t find a power that is strong enough to make her a full-blown villain, but also having to do with the markings on her shin. Please help, this a pretty big hole in the plot.

714. # B. McKenzieon 03 Feb 2013 at 12:15 am

     She’s trained in karate… maybe her power is a mental ability that would affect her ability to do karate. For example, if she were extraordinarily perceptive (e.g. especially keen vision and hearing), she could use those to “read” people more effectively and react more effectively in battle. Conversely, outside of combat, this power could be both useful and a liability–e.g. it might be really hard for friends/family to hide how much her appearance freaks them out (if/when anybody sees her true appearance).
     
     …
     
     “I know, I’m picky with superpowers.” The above list has 50 to choose from.
     …
     
     It’s not a huge problem here, but if you’re thinking about maybe getting this published eventually, I’d recommend fleshing out the plot so that the events tie together a bit more smoothly. For example, the guy she saves just happens to have access to a technological device that’s extremely useful to her. She’s basically solving her problem (her appearance) through extreme luck, which is not as interesting as it could be.
     
     One alternate possibility that comes to mind: she has this problem with her appearance, so she seeks out this company that can make a hologram watch. She goes in to meet with them and they politely turn her away after finding out that she can’t pay $100,000 or whatever to buy the watch. She tries to make her personal plea but it’s not a charity and the manager would get fired if he gave away an $100,000 watch. On her way out, would-be bank robbers who want the hologram watch to disguise their appearances for bank robberies hold up the office at gunpoint. She steps in to save them, even after they were unhelpful to her, and after defeating the robbers, the manager sheepishly gives her a watch. She thanks him, but he cuts her off along the lines of “Ehh, no thanks necessary. As far as the insurance company knows, one of the watches just got stolen. Let’s leave it at that.” I think that this explanation for how she gets the watch is a bit more memorable and raises the stakes (e.g. if she loses the watch, it’d be much harder for her to replace it–the manager is already breaking the law by giving her this one).
     
     “Sorry about how long this is, I tend to elaborate A LOT sometimes.” Hmm… if there are any editors out there that can’t handle a 225-word comment, I think they’re probably too distracted to be very helpful.

715. # B. McKenzieon 03 Feb 2013 at 12:41 am

     Hello, Clarabel.
     
     I think the receptionist angle is an interesting starting point. I’m intrigued…
     
     “At a later point in the story, she experiences a turnaround and becomes somewhat of a hero.” What causes her turnaround? One possibility: another hero(ine) offers help in accomplishing a major goal (e.g. revenge/justice against someone involved in the experimentation), but only if she stops her villainous shenanigans.
     
     Besides her desire to become a hero -> actually becoming a villain, and then becoming a hero, how does this character change/develop over the course of the story? One possibility that comes to mind: she treats her tattoos in a human but sort of immature way—out of all the things she could be proud about – e.g. her personality, charm, job skills, intelligence, unusual interest in [ANY INTEREST], physical fitness, whatever – she flaunts only something that she has no control over and is only skin-deep. Eventually, she might realize that she was unhappy as a not-particularly-remarkable* receptionist, but her problem wasn’t that she was born unremarkable but that she never actually made herself remarkable.
     
     *If the first thing that came up about me in a Wikipedia article was my exotic alien tattoos, 1) I’d be extremely disappointed I couldn’t give them any more interesting material to work with and 2) Wikipedia editors would break their fingers slamming the DELETE – INSUFFICIENTLY NOTABLE button.
     
     “But what I’m wondering is, what powers could be related to the markings? I know they should be kind of alien or mystic in origin, but I can’t find a power that is strong enough to make her a full-blown villain, but also having to do with the markings on her skin…” Ehh… you could do pretty much any superpower here. For example, maybe the tattoos were markings of an alien operation that caused her to gradually develop a superpower(s). Or maybe the markings are some sort of blessing. Your concept here sounds workable, so I think there are a lot of possible explanations which could work.

716. # B. McKenzieon 03 Feb 2013 at 2:11 am

     “So, what do you guys think? I know I have to come up with what she looks like. Do you think she would look good with white hair? Or should I make her hair color more normal like brown or something?” I’d recommend focusing more on character development than on hair color. Either white or a more typical color would work fine.

717. # Amberon 03 Feb 2013 at 1:50 pm

     Never mind about the melee question, I looked up the definition of it. Does anybody know some good melee powers for her(excluding the ones posted above)? I also need help coming up with a name for her.

718. # Amberon 03 Feb 2013 at 2:47 pm

     I can’t really go any farther in the book without a superhero name. I like names that have three syllables.

719. # Amberon 03 Feb 2013 at 2:57 pm

     Can anyone list names that you think would be good for my character please?

720. # B. McKenzieon 03 Feb 2013 at 3:01 pm

     I don’t know what would work for your character. I don’t know anything about her personality or your writing style and, even if I did, names which make the author happy almost always come from the author.
     
     My suggestion would be to proceed with the book, using a placeholder until you come up with something that you like better.

721. # Amberon 03 Feb 2013 at 3:40 pm

     Thanks, B. McKenzie. I was thinking about going with something like Shadowcrawler, but it’s a long name and not three syllables, which I like. I’m probably going to have “crawler” in the name, but I need a one syllable word for it. Something like “dusk” or “shade” maybe?

722. # B. McKenzieon 03 Feb 2013 at 4:03 pm

     Hmm. Is the character meant to bring Nightcrawler to mind?

723. # Amberon 03 Feb 2013 at 5:15 pm

     No, wait, isn’t that the character from x-men who can teleport?

724. # Amberon 03 Feb 2013 at 5:21 pm

     Anyway, I wasn’t trying to copy any characters. I don’t even like teleportation! It’s way too hard for me to write and I think it’s a way too powerful power if you don’t put any limits on it. I was just putting the “crawler” part in there because she has the power of wall-crawling. Since I don’t want to copy a character, could you please make a list of names that you think would work for her that don’t sound like nightcrawler? I would think some more about it, but my brain is fried from overuse. I had homework over the weekend!

725. # Jacob Strainon 04 Feb 2013 at 4:03 pm

     Hm. If she is into intimidating criminals, perhaps Shadelurker? I don’t know, I’ve never been all that great with names.

726. # nicoleon 04 Feb 2013 at 6:54 pm

     You can ask people for more superpowers cause all you got are the old and boring ones

727. # B. McKenzieon 04 Feb 2013 at 10:20 pm

     Nicole, I think it’s all in the execution. For example, agility and teleportation are definitely two common powers, but Neo’s fight scenes in The Matrix and Nightcrawler’s White House attack in X-Men 2 are still among the best superpowered fight scenes in the last 20 years. Captain America’s and Batman’s physical powers are extremely generic, but they still had some really interesting action scenes and have totaled 4-5 great movies. Scott Pilgrim had similarly generic powers (strength and agility) but executed them in a highly unusual way.
     
     This isn’t to say that relatively complex and unusual superpowers can’t work (e.g. Inception was a great movie even though its dreaming was a relatively complex superpower), but more common and generic superpowers have definitely had a lot more success in movies over the last 15-20 years. For example, looking at the list of the top-rated superhero movies on Rotten Tomatoes, we see 1) The Incredibles, 2) Dark Knight, 3) Spider-Man 2, 4) Iron Man and 5) Avengers. Except for Spider-Man, these movies exclusively use generic and common superpowers, but nevertheless are averaging 95% on Rotten Tomatoes. In contrast, the movies which use arguably the most unusual superpowers, the Ghost Rider series and Green Lantern and Jonah Hex and Astro Boy, are averaging 25%.
     
     This is not to say that “a generic superpower makes for good stories and unusual powers make for bad stories” (e.g. see Inception), but if you think that picking an unusual power will make your story more interesting, that generally hasn’t been the case so far, at least not in cinema. It’s all about execution.
     
     …
     
     For more advice on superpower selection, I’d recommend this article.

728. # Amber D.on 08 Feb 2013 at 10:31 pm

     My original I used on here was Amber(last post Jan.3) but since it has sorta been taken over I added the D to clear up who is who.

729. # Amber D.on 10 Feb 2013 at 1:46 pm

     Here are more ideas for powers:
     .erasing flaws: erase flaws from people’s bodies however only to an extent

     .hair that will twist into snakes when it is in snake the persons eyes will turn people to stone, whether is normal or snake it can be control’d when it is snake hair this could be used to attack and when it’s normal it can be used to style

     .puppy eyes (sorta like hypnosis) when you look into there eyes you will want to do anything/ every thing for them

730. # Dr. Vo Spaderon 10 Feb 2013 at 5:43 pm

     @Amber D.,

     I think you should be working for the CW. Just sayin.

731. # B. McKenzieon 10 Feb 2013 at 6:50 pm

     “I think you should be working for the CW. Just sayin.” Hmm… Amber D., in terms of writing a superhero story, it would probably be helpful if the main character’s powers can be used to do interesting things — e.g. some combination of subduing/thrashing enemies, rescuing bystanders, solving crimes, and/or stealth. Personally, I’d have a really hard time giving a character with the ability to cosmetically alter minor flaws chances to contribute there. What sort of interesting things might you have such a character do?
     
     One possible tweak would be that the character has very useful superpowers with cosmetics built into his/her origin–for example, Clayface was originally an actor (Basil Karlo) who desperately used an experimental cosmetic to save his career. The cosmetic ruined his body and mind while giving him superpowers which are insanely effective at terrorizing Gotham, such as melee moves like a yoga instructor out of hell, invulnerability to pretty much everything besides Batman, and shapeshifting.
     
     …
     
     “Puppy eyes (sorta like hypnosis)…” I could definitely see myself incorporating puppy-powered mind-control as a wacky aside in a comedy. In The Taxman Must Die, perhaps Agent Orange’s criminal mastermind kid nephew discovers at a critical point that he can get much farther with puppy eyes and a grenade launcher than with puppy eyes alone.

732. # Jacob Strainon 11 Feb 2013 at 3:23 pm

     Erasing flaws could be used as a sort of minor identity cover for criminals. If, say, a murderer is on the loose and he’s got a really distinctive facial scar or a black eye, he could make it go away and throw the cops off.

733. # Garreton 11 Feb 2013 at 4:37 pm

     I know a couple you forgot: shadow control. The abilty to shape and use shadows as tools, weapons or armor. Density control to make a enemy super heavy or super light.Can sink through floors or float through ceilings.

734. # Dr. Vo Spaderon 11 Feb 2013 at 5:45 pm

     @Jacob Strain,

     That’s genius. Only, I think they’d work better as a group of people with the flaw-erasing. (As in this ability isn’t uncommon, but not a dime a dozen either. If a futuristic, utopian scify setting was used, they’d make a good type of criminal. Say like, fences.

735. # B. McKenzieon 11 Feb 2013 at 11:07 pm

     “Erasing flaws could be used as a sort of minor identity cover for criminals.” Hmm. It may help to upgrade this to low-grade shapeshifting–e.g. the person can recolor his/her skin/hair and adjust minor facial features but can’t substantially change his/her build. It would probably make it a bit more believable that the police don’t recognize him than just removing a scar or black eye. It might also help avoid the “this feels more like a CW drama than a superhero story” concerns (in contrast, if a superhero’s or criminal’s abilities are 75%+ redundant with makeup, would the character be extraordinary enough to interest superhero readers?)

736. # Jacob Strainon 12 Feb 2013 at 1:22 pm

     Hmm. Low- grade shapeshifting was what I meant… sort of. I think I misread the power.

737. # Jessicaon 14 Feb 2013 at 1:06 am

     Hi! I’m looking for a character that has interesting powers. I am thinking of writing a novel where the characters are not human. So I’m looking for a power that can be revealed slowly but efficiently. To give the readers a more suspenseful story. I plan to make this character go into the human world after an invasion on her race. I’ve already chosen the names of the mane characters:

     Main character:
     Kayla
     About 18 human years
     Power: ???

     Do you think I should have any other characters to suit in with her? Like some humans or others of her race?
     Please help me out.

     Thanks!
     Jessica

738. # Jacob Strainon 14 Feb 2013 at 1:48 pm

     Hm. If I end up writing my sci-fi novel, a minor antagonist might have the low-grade shapeshifting power.

739. # hoaxeron 17 Feb 2013 at 1:33 pm

     for my story the heroine name is Monica. at the beginning of the story she has a bad case of lice so they shave her head to find two eye shaped tattoos on the back. the doctor tells her that judgeing by the marks she got them when she was only a few mouths old. which kind of frecks her out. soon she discovers that her ink can serve as actail eyes. giveing her litterly eyes at the back of her head. what do u think

740. # Jacob Strainon 17 Feb 2013 at 2:23 pm

     Hoaxer, I like the power, but I have two concerns. One: I would reccomend proofreading more agressively and working on your mechanics. Two: What’s Monica’s personality like? What are her key traits?

741. # Celofanon 17 Feb 2013 at 2:28 pm

     I thought of it as an awesome superpower, too… lice! Pretty creative way of discovering it –I’d have recommended her to use an anti-lice shampoo instead of shaving all her hair, though.

742. # B. McKenzieon 17 Feb 2013 at 2:31 pm

     Hmm. It might help to give her something more than the ability to see behind her–the ability strikes me as somewhat limited in utility. Perhaps her supernatural tattoos give her some sort of supernatural sense (e.g. the ability to see something that humans could not normally see).

743. # hoaxeron 17 Feb 2013 at 11:22 pm

     ok thanks for the input

     jacob – Monica is sort of person who acts before she thinks, she basicly wears her heart on her sleeve, never backs down, all ways has something to say,but what id say is her main trait is her unmoveing opinions

     celofan – its true she could have used the specail shampoo but if she did the chances of her discovering her powers is low. so I came up with two reasons why she had to shave her head number 1 – too expensive her family isn’t doing well with the whole ecomey thing, so they kind of had too number 2 – well think about it how did she get lice in the frist place, her parents can only assume she was doing thing behind there back even if she says she didn’t so it was punishment, shave her head. not the most trusting parents but it will make a funny scene when she relizes what there doing

     b.mac- I agree totally limited I might make her be able to see diffent things like heat or thorw walls, even ghosts ill work something out

     okay also Monica’s superhero name is Argus, and her friends call her mo, she is allso naturally athletic

744. # B. McKenzieon 18 Feb 2013 at 7:58 am

     “how did she get lice in the frist place, her parents can only assume she was doing thing behind there back even if she says she didn’t so it was punishment, shave her head… it will make a funny scene.” I’m not sure readers will be on your page. I think the parents come across as one-dimensionally crazy and maybe faintly abusive, and I suspect that playing the scene for laughs would not go over well. What do they think she was involved in, sharing a comb with someone at school?

745. # Anon.on 18 Feb 2013 at 5:30 pm

     Or even bumping into someone who had lice. Seriously. It takes about a second or two of physical contact to cause lice infestation, and it’s a bastard to get rid of.

746. # Dr. Vo Spaderon 18 Feb 2013 at 7:24 pm

     You know, I think I’m going to start saying “life’s a bastard”.

     —

     I’ve been thinking about a character who can manipulate emotion. But he has to use this ability subtly – making too much of a change makes the victim aware of his defect on them and they can consciously resist his powers. This has made John (Diamond, I’ve decided) a silver tongued citizen. He has dealt with rejection before, is greedy and generally doesn’t trust people because he is used to tricking/conning/betraying people.

     Now my dilemma is this: what should I make him? The first choice is obviously a politician, but I’m not particularly good at writing political scenes that are interesting or entertaining. Second to mind was a leader of a cult or a con man. Which of these do you think sounds better? I’m also open to suggestions for other paths to take!

747. # B. Macon 19 Feb 2013 at 1:29 am

     “This has made John (Diamond, I’ve decided) a silver tongued citizen… Now my dilemma is this: what should I make him? The first choice is obviously a politician…” I’d recommend going with something unexpected. I think you can incorporate dishonesty pretty much anywhere (e.g. a cop who lies to convict someone he is 99% sure is guilty but would otherwise get off, a businessman embroiled in office intrigue, a scientist or academic willing to fudge results and/or not aware he’s fudging results to generate more market-friendly data, a prosecutor willing to lie to railroad witnesses and suspects, a spy or anybody leading a double-life, etc).

748. # Dr. Vo Spaderon 21 Feb 2013 at 10:55 am

     Thanks! I think I’m going to choose between a lawyer and a business man. Making him blue collar would be interesting, but more difficult I work with. Again: this site is awesome.

749. # Amber D.on 23 Feb 2013 at 1:45 am

     so in some super hero movies some pepole who get powers (mainly villans) have serious disfigerment. In the fake world I created for one of my story ideas every 1/100,000 pepole have powers and in verry rare cases (like only ten pepole in the world) sometimes they have a certain gene that allows them to transmit powers to ordinary pepole. Sometimes however there can be disfigerment in those pepole after transmision. The girl in the story that erases flaws in these situation can do some pretty major work. what I mean by to an extent is she can’t make everyone look like super models. However she is more of a side character.

750. # BTBon 23 Feb 2013 at 8:01 pm

     So, I’ve decided to write a story in my spare time and this is what I’ve come up with so far.

     Protagonist’s Name: Darren Alias: Trela
     Age: 15
     Gender: Male
     Race: African-American
     Setting: Future
     Eye Colour: Blue
     Skin Colour: Caramel
     Costume Colour: Blue & White (white parts turn black during the night)
     Hair Colour: Silver

     Story: Darren was experimented on by his parents regularly and frequently throughout his childhood. From the age of 7 he assumed his parents were evil scientists and ever since then he’s tried to escape and kill them. One day Darren’s parents got a hold of a mysterious chemical code-named “Eve” and tried it out on Darren along with a couple other chemicals “Eve” didn’t react well with the other chemicals or Darren’s body and it almost killed Darren leaving him in a coma for 3 weeks. Once he woke up he realized that everything in the house he lived in was gone. Assuming Darren’s parents abandoned him, he leaves his hometown, swears to find his evil parents and kill them and decides to ditch his real name and go by the name “Trela”. Trela then meets up with a group of “abandoned” kids once he enters SkyFall City and realizes that they all have the same story. Trela and the other group of “abandoned” kids decide to dig a little deeper into what’s going on with their parents, how they got their powers, what chemical “Eve” is and if there’s other chemicals like “Eve” and who’s really in control of SkyFall city.

     Powers:
     - Teleportation (can only teleport to locations within his sightline. Can only carry 2 people with him)
     - Force Field Generation (can create force fields on varying sizes. Large sized force fields help up for long periods on time exhaust him)

     Abilities:
     - Bilingual (can speak English & French)
     - Martial Arts (Excels in Martial Arts)
     - Gymnast (can perform most basic flips & roles)
     - Strength (above average human strength thanks to his Power Gloves)
     Weaknesses:
     - Lots of strain exhausts him (ex: carrying more than 2 people while teleporting or holding up a very large force field)

     Equipment:
     - Goggles (protects his eyes)
     - Power Gloves (uses them for close combat fighting so he like doesn’t destroy his fists)
     - Suit
     - Shoes

     That’s what I have so far

751. # B. McKenzieon 24 Feb 2013 at 3:05 pm

     Hello, BTB. Some thoughts and suggestions:
     
     –When you’re pitching to publishers, I think you can safely leave out the character’s gender, eye-color, skin-color, hair color, and costume color. Maybe race, too, unless it’s really important to the plot and/or the audience appeal. I’d recommend focusing instead on what makes the character distinctive or memorable (e.g. unusual personality traits, unusual decisions, motivations, etc).
     
     –Darren’s one-dimensionally evil parents strike me as an opportunity for deeper, more three-dimensional character development. Is there some reason they’re sadistically experimenting on their child? (For example, I feel Harry Potter’s adopted family, the Dursleys, are somewhat believable as a family much more interested in being normal than friendly which picks on Harry because he’s definitely not normal).
     
     –”Trela then meets up with a group of “abandoned” kids once he enters SkyFall City and realizes that they all have the same story.” Is this just some super-lucky coincidence that he has run into these other kids with a similar problem to the one he has? If so, I’d recommend fleshing out the plot a little more so that there’s some better explanation for how he meets up with these other people in a similar situation. (For example, maybe he gets sought out and/or seeks them out because he has these unusual capabilities).

752. # What is Your Superpower? | Café Caseyon 27 Feb 2013 at 4:02 pm

     [...] Now I’m wondering. Do I have a superpower? What could it be? Let me check the superpower checklist: [...]

753. # Mister Phenixon 04 Mar 2013 at 4:24 am

     Do you have any advice on characters who can absorb/mimic other people’s powers?

754. # B. McKenzieon 04 Mar 2013 at 8:34 am

     I’d recommend putting some sort of limit on the character’s ability to absorb superpowers. For example, maybe he can only “remember” one superpower at a time and absorbing one power causes him to “forget” the last. If there are no limitations…
     1) The character will never be at a disadvantage, which means that his fights will probably suck.
     2) The character will eventually outstrip every other character, including the villains. By the end of Heroes, it got so bad that Peter could have pretty much told 90% of the cast to go home.

755. # Cluelesson 04 Mar 2013 at 1:09 pm

     improvements yay

     LUKE
     Appearance:
     A boy with short blond hair, orange eyes and slightly tanned skin he wears sandy coloured shorts, a short sleaved black top with a golden dragon design in the middle, black with gold trim fingerless gloves and is always bear-foot.

     Personality:
     He is the arragont hothead. He never backs down from a fight and seems to have the best comback to everything, he can be moody when he doesn’t get his own way and it is hard for him to admit that he was wrong or at fault, he picks alot of fights as he gets bored easily. But even with his faults he is very loyal and always trying to help his freinds.

     Power:
     He can turn into a half-dragon: breaths fire; he can fly; has sharp claws; strong tail; enhanced sight smell hearing and resiliant scale armourand is omnilinguistic. His scales are golden he keeps his clothes he has a blond crest (that means a hair going from the head down the spine) and a cream coloured underbelly. When pushed to maximum power he becomes a full dragon but this is unstable as he can lose control when enraged.

     ALASDAIR
     Apearance:
     A young boy with short light brown hair, grey eyes and pale skin he wears purple, grey and black coloured trousers (pants) purple at the front black at the back and a grey line down the side same colour scheme for his converse purple sides, black front and grey tips he also wears a grey hoodie and often has the hood up.

     Personality:
     At first he is timid and quite and stuters a bit but when you get to know him he opens up he is very kinhearted and empathetic towards everyone in any situation this is his downfall as he is too empathetic towards the villans and he just wants to help people in need.

     Power:
     He is telekinetic, can use mindblasts and he is an empath. When he uses his powers his eyes glow purple the things he telekineticly moves glow purple for a few seconds until he can lift the object. Also he can levitate himself to “fly”.

     ELIJAH
     Apearance:
     He has jet black hair and hazel eyes. All over his body he has cuts and scars mostly on his back, around his mouth he has a cheshire smile and two vertical cuts on both sides of his mouth. He wears a black leather jacket, a plain white T-shirt, black jeans, converse and a scarf that covers his mouth and nose.

     Personality:
     He is very dark and mysterious, very sarcastic and sceptic. He tends to keep to himself and read books rather than be with the team and it takes a long time to gain his trust but has a soft spot for the people who understand him, he hates it when people try to look at his mouth because he thinks he looks like a monster.

     Power:
     He manipulates darkness into whips, claws or blades and can fire them for long-ranged attacks, he can also make clones out of and teleport through shadows. He is more powerful at sunrise, sunset and night and weak at noon. He can become a being made out of darkness but it is hard for him to do so.

     MATT
     Apearance:
     He has ginger hair and bright emerald eyes, he wears glasses when he is on the computer or reading. He wears a pale green T-shirt with a black and white unbuttend shirt, white trainers(sneakers) and green trousers(pants).

     Personality:
     He is a fun loving daredevil who although being intelligent and charming is a pervert to say the least, always flirting with girls, cracking bad jokes and trying to lighten the mood but when he fights he fights to win. Often seen on his laptop.

     Power:
     The power to create a personal digital interface and manipulate the data via interactions with the computer hologram. Can create a green robotic suit with “ears” and a gun on one arm. It can fire lazers/missles and create fire walls(like a forcefield) out of data. He can also use the computer hologram as a normal computer and is used for hacking and storing data. The suit has a jetpack.

     I need a girl leader
     She will have dark brown hair and blue eyes.
     She is like any leader brave, strategic blah blah blah but to make her more original she is very femminist and takes the girls side in any argument.
     She tends to beat up Matt because of his perverted jokes and sexism.

     I cant think of a power for her (or a name -.-) but i think she needs a really strong punch so she can send Matt flying.(just so its funny =D) HELP?????

756. # Cluelesson 04 Mar 2013 at 1:18 pm

     The green suit looks like a green combination of Samus, Mega-Man and Ironman.

757. # NJHeroFanon 04 Mar 2013 at 6:55 pm

     @Mister Phenix: In addition to BMac’s suggestions for power mimicking or absorbing supers, also consider the following limitations:

     I think these types of powers can be one of three types:

     1) Power Mimicry: The super can mimic or duplicate any power he actually sees in use. If no one uses powers around him he can’t mimic anything. The copied supers don’t lose access to their abilities. This can be temporary or permanent, but temporary may be the better route to go depending on the story.

     2) Power Absorption: The super can consciously or subconsciously absorb super abilities, maybe by making skin contact or perhaps absorbing them empathically like Peter Petrelli in Heroes. The donating super still doesn’t lose access to their ability or abilities. This can be temporary or permanent, but temporary may be the better route to go depending on the story.

     3) Power Stealing: The super consciously or intentionally steals another super’s abilities, either temporarily or permanently, but temporary may be the better route to go depending on the story. This is what Rogue from X-Men and Sylar from Heroes can do. The process is really a physical and perhaps a psychic violation to the victim who may or may not go into a crippling shock (Rogue), or they may wind up dead (Sylar).

     No matter what the method of power absorbing is they should all probably have one or two limitations on them:

     1) Time Limits: The super can absorb and have multiple powers available to use, but only retains their use for a limited time (a few minutes, hours, days, etc).

     2) Physical Contact vs. Ranged Effect: Just like Rogue, the super must make skin contact for the absorption or mimicry to work. This could make an act of mimicking, absorbing, or stealing another super’s abilities more challenging to pull off. If the super can absorb abilities simply by being near them, perhaps a short range like 10 or 20 feet would work. Peter Petrelli had a short ranged effect, while Sylar and Rogue have to get right on top of somone and make physical contact.

     3) Uncontrollable: Also like Rogue, but also Peter Petrelli, the absorption happens automatically whether the super wants it to or not. The super may not be aware of this happening at first, as was Peter’s case for the abilities he gained.

     4) Learning Curve: Just because a super absorbs a power doesn’t necessarily mean he’ll master it quickly. I’m dating myself, but in the 70′s comedy show “The Greatest America Hero” the hero learned how to fly by reading an alien book, but he lost the book before learning how to land. He would always crash and never quite mastered how to land gracefully. If your hero mimicked another super’s ability to manipulate molecular or atomic structures, does he also have the academic and scientific knowledge of chemistry or physics to use that ability to its fullest potential?

     5) Non-Supers: If the super’s only ability is to absorb super powers, what does he do when an armed gang of non-super criminals come after him with conventional weapons? That gang has no super powers to absorb, but they have plenty of bullets and knives to stick into the now helpless hero.

     6) Painful: Particularly for power stealers or parasites, the process of absorbing another super’s powers will hurt them to some extent, either dropping them into a deep state of shock, a coma, or possibly causing cardiac arrest. In Sylar’s case, his victims literally lose their heads.

     7) Diminished Use: The super can only use an absorbed, mimicked, or stolen ability at a lesser rank of power than the original user could.

     8) Personality Duplication: Similar to Rogue’s side-effects, she doesn’t just absorb powers but personality traits of others she touches. This could make the super particularly nasty or mean for a little while if she aborbs a villain’s abilities…

     9) Power Queue: Similar to what BMac mentioned above, the super can only use one power at a time, even if she has multiple powers in her arsenal. It may take a moment or two to switch between powers, leaving them temporarily powerless during this transition.

     10) Weakness Absorption: With all this talk of absorbing powers, no one wants to talk about absorbing the weaknesses or side-effects of those powers – so here it is! If a super absorbs any of Superman’s abilities, he also picks up a lethal weakness to Kryptonite. If the super absorbs the Thing’s rocky skin, they can form the Orange Man Group for a while. If he absorbs Spider-Man’s abilities he gains a weakness for Mary Jane and the eternal emnity of J. Jonah Jameson.

     Just some additional ideas. Maybe some of them will be helpful for your story.

758. # Mister Phenixon 05 Mar 2013 at 2:21 am

     @NJHeroFan I took all of your tips into consideration. Especially the power queue, time limit, weakness absorbtion & the learning curve. My hero can temporarily absorb superpowers but he can also absorb knowledge & skills of others and keep them permanently. Could that work?

759. # Luckyon 06 Mar 2013 at 6:33 pm

     I’m writing a story for kicks about my brother and I being the reincarnates of ancient Sun and Moon gods (since I am a ginger and he has olive skin and brown eyes and hair; oh yeah, we’re twins, too), so I was wondering what powers would be fitting for a sun/day based person and a moon/night based person. I have list running at the moment of my ideas, but I’m not sure if they are overpowered or unfitting for us.

     Sun: Limited pyrokinesis, limited gravitokinesis, resistance to burns, enhanced abilities (i.e. strength, speed, senses, etc.) during the day, bright flashes of light, heat vision

     Moon: Limited aquakinesis, limited terrakinesis, resistance to cold, enhanced abilities (like above) during nighttime, blending into shadows, night vision

760. # Derp Writeron 10 Mar 2013 at 7:45 pm

     Right, so, I accidentally posted this in another place and now I’m putting it in the correct place.

     I just came up with a hero and villain, though they don’t have a story yet, based on abilities that I thought would be amusing to watch/read about.
     Really there isn’t anything decided about them just yet, so the only description is their powers.
     The hero’s power is the ability to “respawn”, as in a video game, in which, upon death, the player is given a new body and life to continue their mischief.
     The villain’s ability is one I like to call “contagious incompetence”. The name is rather self explanatory, I think, as far as its function, but what I found amusing was the idea that it would be a passive/area affect, making all within a certain proximity become inexplicably useless for much of anything.
     Thoughts?

761. # B. McKenzieon 10 Mar 2013 at 8:44 pm

     Derp, I responded to you here.

762. # NJHeroFanon 10 Mar 2013 at 9:19 pm

     @Mister Phenix: I suppose an ability to quickly learn new skills could work as well. I can think of two ways off the top of my head how this could be done.

     1) Limited Telepathy: The super can’t read surface thoughts or access a person’s memories, but they can tap into the parts of a person’s brain that controls language and stores raw knowledge. The super may need a little while to realize the full extent of what he’s learned, and he may not realize his potenial until he needs to apply that knowledge. His gained skills and knowledge is obviously going to be limited to what a person actually knows. This type of ability is perfect for picking up the academic knowledge we can’t see going on inside someone’s mind. The Matrix uses a similar process where information is directly downloaded into people’s brains.

     2) Muscle Memory: This type of ability was used by a minor character named Monica Dawson in the Heroes series (she was only in a few episodes). Monica could duplicate and learn physical skills like gymnastics and kung-fu simply by watching television and movies of people performing these skills. I’m sure she’d technically be able to learn how to do anything as long as she was watching someone perform the task (flying a plane, firing a firearm, playing an instrument, singing, painting, cooking, etc). Monica wasn’t around long enough for the audience to know if she could also learn academic knowledge just as quickly simply by reading a book.

     As far as how long these knowledges and skills last you could say they’re permanent, but I think an effective limit would be that these abilities need to be used somewhat frequently over extended periods of time in order to become “permanent.” Otherwise the super may naturally forget things he hasn’t had to use and perform for years.

763. # Mr. Masteron 11 Mar 2013 at 3:15 pm

     Hey, I would be grateful if you could answer some questions I have.
     - What is your view on characters having multiple powers? I mean, it’s not like I’m gonna give each character every single power in the book, but I do want a few powers that work well in cooridantion. For instance, strength+reflexes+durability; or speed+unlimited stamina+reflexes.
     - What do you think of this idea: Once/if needed, my hero is able to “upgrade” or “enhance” his powers up to a certain point. It sounds slightly similar to the idea of, let’s say, Goku and his Super-Saiyan levels, or how the Hulk gets more powerful as he gets madder. However, I’m experimenting with some limitations or qualities to give it a unique and tasteful spin.
     -*this one kinda depends on your view on the first question* What is the number of super powers you consider to be “enough”? My absolute maximum is around 8 (in coordination, that is; not a random pairing like strength+speed+telepathy+sensing danger+stamina+etc…); Superman has a metric ton, yet he’s still considered to be by some the best and most popular superhero. Also, on the flip-flop, I don’t want a hero to only have one or two powers like the Flash having speed and not much else.
     - Lastly, I am thinking about putting my hero into a team of heroes, similar to the Justice League. I do like strength as a quality in most of my heroes; however, I’m worried that the whole “super strong, super durable” characteristic will become a little redundant. Yet even with that thought, the Avengers had the Hulk, Iron Man, Captain America, and Thor, all having that combo; The Avengers is currently the third highest-grossing movie ever. I’m also worried that it will make the characters’ abilities too evenly-matched. I want each hero to be able to solve a problem that the others can’t. I guess this once again leads back into the pairing-of-powers subject.

     Thank you so much for your time, I appreciate it!

764. # Marxon 12 Mar 2013 at 8:41 am

     What would be the pros and cons of Temperature Manipulation?

765. # B. McKenzieon 13 Mar 2013 at 7:35 am

     “What is your view on characters having multiple powers? I mean, it’s not like I’m gonna give each character every single power in the book, but I do want a few powers that work well in coordination. For instance, strength+reflexes+durability; or speed+unlimited stamina+reflexes.” Since pretty much every strong character is also super-durable and every fast character also has great reflexes, I’d give those secondary powers to you for free. Generally, I’d recommend 1-2 powers for each character (unless you have only one main character–then I think 3-4 might work). If there’s a minor power which rarely comes up (e.g. super-senses), I wouldn’t count that, either.
     
     “My absolute maximum is around 8…” A caveat here: it sounds like you’re counting powers as distinct which I would not (e.g. every strong character is also tough, so I would just count strength-and-toughness as a single power). Even in a story with a single main character, I can’t think of any scenarios where having more than 3-4 distinct superpowers would be helpful. If I saw a character with 6+, I’d have red flags that the author were spending too much time developing his superpowers and not enough time developing what actually makes him interesting (e.g. a memorable personality, distinguishing traits, unusual choices, voice, motivation/goals, etc). If an author needs more than 3-4 superpowers, the first 3-4 were probably not the right ones.
     
     “Superman has a metric ton, yet he’s still considered to be by some the best and most popular superhero.” Almost all of the major superheroes introduced in the last 30-40 years have 1-3 distinct superpowers. Superman and Captain Marvel are from a very, very different time period, and they don’t sell all that well today.
     
     –I don’t think The Avengers’ box office success hinged on its superpower selection. The writing was insane. That said, movies with simpler powers (whether strength/toughness or agility/finesse) tend to sell better at the box office than movies with more exotic superpowers. I think characters that use agility more than strength (e.g. Batman, Captain America, Neo, Spider-Man) tend to outsell heroes in the Hulk mold, but a character in either (or both) camp could be very successful.
     
     –While Captain America and Iron Man are much stronger than an average human, it’s not the focus of their powers. They have other things going on. There is considerable overlap between Thor and Hulk in terms of superpowers, but their personalities are different enough that they both get opportunities to make memorable contributions to the team. Likewise, Black Widow has a role even though a lot of her capabilities overlap with Captain America. (I’m not as optimistic about Hawkeye).
     
     –”I want each hero to be able to solve a problem that the others can’t.” Non-superpower capabilities (e.g. Black Widow’s social skills or Batman’s gadgets) could also also help here. Also, personality. If I could give a self-serving example, a scene from The Taxman Must Die, there are hundreds of characters who have the physical capability to jump down from the ceiling, get in an altercation with an accountant, and eat the accountant’s resume, but there are so few characters that actually would that I think Agent Orange will come across as unique even though his powers are very generic.

766. # MasterRevolutionon 16 Mar 2013 at 2:39 pm

     I have a few questions..

     1. When my character controls wind should the wind be a different color? Like blue, dark blue, sea blue, light blue, baby blue..?

     2. With the power of wind manipulation, what would be some weaknesses?

     3. What would someone with wind manipulation excel at?

     4. Would one with the power of wind manipulation be able to create force fields?

     5. How would one with the power of wind manipulation fight? Would they be upfront in your face? At a distance? Close to mid range? Is close combat reccommended for wind manipulation users?

     6. Means of transportation for wind manipulation users?

     7. Do wind manipulation users play the role of attack, support or defence

     8. What would be a good weapon to give someone who has wind manipulation? Is it best to give someone who has wind manipulation a weapon?

     9. which powers does wind manipulation beat?

     10. Is the power of wind manipulation considered to be “too powerful”? Also does the power of wind manipulation correspond to control over oxygen and stuff?

     11. Can you give me an example of wind manipulation users?

     Thank you !

767. # Klutzon 16 Mar 2013 at 3:05 pm

     Hi MasterRevolution. This is my first time responding, so you might want a second opinion on some of these answers.

     1. If it is a novel, it probably doesn’t make a difference, if it is a graphic novel or a comic book, the blue might have a nice visual effect, but you could probably just use gray or white.

     2. A weaknesses could include confined spaces, or maybe the user can only manipulate certain gases or air with a certain percent of that gas.

     3. A wind character can fight from long range, fight with nonlethal attacks, and remove all the oxygen in a room to neutralize enemies.

     4. Yes, if they could compress the air, they could make a barrier.

     5. A character with wind powers can manipulate wind, create bursts of air, summon tornados, fly, etc. Wind users are usually long ranged, but they could use wind to amplify their jabs and punches.

     6. Self-propelled flight

     7. Wind can be used offensively, defensively, and to support others.

     8. Any blade maybe? I don’t think weapons are necessary unless the story takes place in a setting where weapons are common.

     9. “Beating” implies a rock-paper-scissors system. I think I remember B Mac saying this is a weak way of giving people the advantage or disadvantage in a battle. But otherwise, if a character has sand powers, wind could disperse the sand. Wind is versatile if used correctly.

     10. You may want to limit the power of the character. If your character can remove all the oxygen from a room or create tornados in seconds, it may be hard to challenge them.

     11. Aang (Avatar: the Last Airbender), Storm and Wind Dancer (X-Men), Red Tornado (DC Comics), and probably plenty of other examples in manga and anime.

768. # Luckyon 16 Mar 2013 at 4:40 pm

     Maybe my comment didn’t get through? I’ll post again:

     I’m writing a story for kicks about my brother and I being the reincarnates of ancient Sun and Moon gods (since I am a ginger and he has olive skin and brown eyes and hair; oh yeah, we’re twins, too), so I was wondering what powers would be fitting for a sun/day based person and a moon/night based person. I have list running at the moment of my ideas, but I’m not sure if they are overpowered or unfitting for us.
     Sun: Limited pyrokinesis, limited gravitokinesis, resistance to burns, enhanced abilities (i.e. strength, speed, senses, etc.) during the day, bright flashes of light, heat vision
     Moon: Limited aquakinesis, limited terrakinesis, resistance to cold, enhanced abilities (like above) during nighttime, blending into shadows, night vision

769. # NJHeroFanon 16 Mar 2013 at 6:39 pm

     @MasterRevolution: I don’t think wind or air manipulation is too powerful, and supers with that ability can still be challenged effectively. Consider the following:

     1) Gravity Manipulation: An opposing super with this ability could slam your air controller straight into the ground by increasing the force of gravity upon him. This could be fatal if the hero falls from a great height. If the impact doesn’t severely injure or kill the hero, increasing G-forces on him could finish him off.

     2) Density Manipulation: Similar to gravity manipulation, only the that the hero becomes so dense he collapses under his own weight. No amount of air is going to prevent someone from becoming heavier. Also, if the density manipulating super makes your hero less dense your hero may become susceptible to being blown back or knocked around by his own winds.

     3) Pressurization: A super who can manipulate atmospheric pressure could still cause damage to the hero by giving him the “bends” or manipulating pressure around or within him so much the hero implodes or explodes from the trauma. Try blowing some wind at that.

     4) Phasing or Intangibility: Supers who have the ability to phase like Kitty Pryde won’t be affected by winds. Assuming they can get close enough to your wind using hero they should be able to hit them with a surprise attack and possibly solidify a phased object right inside them, which will do more than just knock the wind out of him.

     5) Mental Attacks: These types of abilities should easily bypass blasts of wind. Mind contol, hallucinations, mental bolts and the like aren’t going to be stopped by hurricane force winds.

     6) Energy Attacks: Some energy attacks do require a medium to transmit through or fuel the energy, like fire and sound. Your wind user could disrupt those types of energy attacks by controlling winds. Electricity, radiation, light (lasers), electromagnetic-based attacks, and other forms of energy can work right through wind and air, so your wind using hero still be a target for these types of attacks.

     7) Non-Breathing Supers: Some supers may be able to transform into living monoliths of stone, metal, crystal, or other forms and not need to breathe while in that form. Removing oxygen around them won’t stop them. Whether or not they also have enough super human strength to overcome intense winds is another matter. Non-super adversaries may also learn to equip themselves with self-contained breathing gear if they get wind of your hero’s oxygen-deprivation attacks.

     Don’t worry about your wind using hero not being challenged; there are ways to do it. Lots of bad guys won’t stand a chance against him, which is expected, but the good stories about your wind and air using hero will be about the bad guys who can hurt him.

770. # BTBon 18 Mar 2013 at 5:40 pm

     @MasterRevolution I’ll be stealing your question format XD Hope that’s ok!

     1. Is force field generation the type of power that needs to be accompanied with another power?

     2. Would someone with force field generation be able to create force fields mentally or is that a totally different ability?

     3. Would weapons be necessary for someone with force field generation? (I’m not too sure on this one..)

     4. Theoretically someone with force field generation would be able to create platforms and landmines/bombs right?

     5. Is telekinesis apart of force field generation? (I’m kinda thrown off by the whole able to levitate stuff that comes along with force field generation)

     6. What would be some ways that force field generation could be performed? (I know about being able to like bend/warp or something along those lines gravity but are there any other methods to perform force field generation other than using gravity?)

     7. What would be some weaknesses for binding? (for those who don’t know what it is, it’s basically being able to bind enemies in spheres. Kinda like what Rocket in YJ does to Blue Beetle)

     8. Does the ability to sense danger only work on the person who has this ability or in general are they able to sense incoming danger to anyone around them?

     9. Can someone who has force field generation be able to break someone else’s force field using their own powers or does it not work like that?

     10. Do force fields only block physical attacks? Or can they block mental attacks as well? (like mind blasts.. i think that’s a mental attack lol)

     Hopefully someone can answer these. This is my first time writing a book so I’m a little scared :s I really don’t want to mess this up XD !

771. # NJHeroFanon 18 Mar 2013 at 6:11 pm

     @BTB: I’ll try and offer some useful suggestions. Keep in mind there are no right or wrong answers and it’s ok to use whatever works consistently (not conveniently) in your story:

     1) I wouldn’t say FF “needs” to have an accompanying power, but a FF is primarily a defensive ability. If the FF only protects the super (a personal FF only) then another power is probably recommended. If the FF can be projected over an area (ala Susan Storm), then maybe less so, but it may be helpful to have the super use the FF more creatively like Susan can (projected spheres, climbing and support platforms, simulated flight, etc.)

     2) It could be either. Susan Storm creates them mentally, Magneto creates them by manipulating electromagnetic fields (which could be an extension of a mental ability), Iron Man has them as a technological capability in his armor, Dr. Strange uses magical energies, and so forth. Unless the super is a techie like Tony Stark or a sorceror like Stephen Strange, a FF is likely going to wind up as a psychic ability or an energy manipulating ability of some sort.

     3) Sure, why not? Ask Tony Stark…

     4) Sure, ask Susan Storm (I don’t think she has created force “bombs” but she’s good with platforms)

     5) It could be. I think a TK field would be great against attacks with a solid physical component of matter (solids, liquids, and gases), but TK in that sense may not work against energy attacks unless the super can also manipulate that form of energy (this is why there’s lot of “kinesis” powers like pyrokineis, electrokinesis, etc.).

     6) This may have been answered aleady…

     7) Once you trap or bind someone in a FF they’re stuck, but they can’t be hurt by anything that can’t get through the FF. You’re essentially protecting them from harm even though you’ve trapped them.

     8) Danger sense could work either way. I think Spider-Man could also sense any impending danger in his general area even if he wasn’t the intended target (such as if a bus lost control on a busy street and he or others could be in its path). I’m currently writing a story where the protagonist has this ability and it isn’t just limited to him; he can sense if something bad is about to happen around him even if he isn’t the target. He just has to figure out what and where it is in order to do anything about it (and he may not always be able to).

     9) That’s up to you. If the FF can be used as a form of kinetic attack I’d say yes, the force potential of once FF could overwhelm and break through another FF of lesser power and ability.

     10) FF’s may be all-inclusive (it blocks everything to some extent) or it may be limited to certain types of attacks (physical, energy, psychic, etc). It depends on what you want a particular super to be capable of and how you want to possibly limit his or her abilities.

772. # B. McKenzieon 18 Mar 2013 at 9:38 pm

     1. “Do forcefields need to be accompanied with another power?” For a lone superhero, I think giving your character another power (or perhaps some other capability, like some combat skill) would probably make your life easier. In a superhero team, I think forcefields might work on their own (although they are generally combined with some other mental power, particularly telekinesis).
     
     2. “Would someone with force field generation be able to create force fields mentally or is that a totally different ability?” I don’t understand the distinction. Whatever works best for your story.
     
     3. “Would weapons be necessary for someone with force field generation?” No, though skills with weaponry could complement forcefields effectively.
     
     4. “Theoretically someone with force field generation would be able to create platforms and landmines/bombs right?” Platforms are extremely intuitive. Landmines/bombs would probably take some explanation.
     
     5. “Is telekinesis a part of force field generation?” Either way, you’re exerting force with your mind, right? If you wanted to make the two powers part of the same package, I think you could make a believable case here. If you want to keep the powers separate (e.g. a character can only do one of them), that would also work.
     
     6. “What would be some ways that force field generation could be performed? (I know about being able to like bend/warp or something along those lines gravity but are there any other methods to perform force field generation other than using gravity?)” I don’t understand. It sounds like you’re asking about the mechanisms of how a fictional power would work, and I wouldn’t recommend getting bogged down in the details unless you have a really good reason to. In a novel of 80,000 words, I generally wouldn’t recommend spending more than 80 (.1%) describing how the characters’ superpowers work. (Unless the mechanics contribute to the mood, plot, and/or characterization in some way–e.g. the superpowers in Bitter Seeds came from malevolent spirits, which contributed to protagonist-vs-protagonist conflict).
     
     7. “What would be some weaknesses for binding enemies in sphere?” Perhaps it requires a great deal of concentration, leaves the character vulnerable to other combatants, leaves the character somehow vulnerable to the bound character (e.g. opening up some sort of telepathic link or other susceptibility), drains the character’s energy, etc.
     
     8. “Does the ability to sense danger only work on the person who has this ability or in general are they able to sense incoming danger to anyone around them?” Your story, your rules. I think it would be an interesting limitation if it only detected threats to the person with the superpower.
     
     9. “Can someone who has force field generation be able to break someone else’s force field using their own powers or does it not work like that?” Your story, your rules. It feels intuitive that forcefields could be used in that way.
     
     10. “Do force fields only block physical attacks? Or can they block mental/psychic attacks as well?” Your story, your rules. It feels intuitive that they would mainly be used against physical attacks, but I’ve also seen stories that have used them as barriers against magic and other sorts of nonphysical attacks.

773. # Luckyon 23 Mar 2013 at 4:21 pm

     Hello? Can anyone tell me if those powers seem appropriate or too much/little?

774. # grrron 26 Mar 2013 at 12:51 pm

     I like the list of powers but I want something more original powers but not limited like magnetos’

775. # Mugsyon 27 Mar 2013 at 10:26 am

     As I’m rewriting some older stories I’ve been wanting to post a question: regarding writing superhero stories is it better to suspend disbelief or to the explain everything you can? (I.E. I have some characters mutated to near animal states, another character who disintegrates to gel, I’m not sure that I have a feasible explanation for how they can still speak as if they have human tongues and vocal cords)

776. # B. McKenzieon 27 Mar 2013 at 12:57 pm

     “regarding writing superhero stories is it better to suspend disbelief or to the explain everything you can?” I would recommend leaving out the explanations unless the details somehow contribute something to the story and/or character, or if the readers would have suspension of disbelief issues if you didn’t explain it. I don’t think you’ll ever need to explain how someone speaks–readers will accept it for ghosts, aliens of any sort, every kind of mutant animal, fantasy creatures*, Pokemon, politicians, etc.
     
     In contrast, if an alien has come to Earth to play in Major League Soccer, I think readers would be really confused unless you explained a bit how he got into soccer. That’s much less intuitive (and much more important to understanding the character) than how he can speak. (If readers had questions about how an alien understood English, you could throw in 1 line about a translating device, but I wouldn’t recommend going into it beyond that unless the details are somehow plot-relevant).
     
     *For example, if there’s a work where dragons can speak, they will certainly be fluent in the language(s) of humans… even the dragons that attack humans on sight. The suspension of disbelief covers that.

777. # Starchaseron 28 Mar 2013 at 12:58 am

     First comment after months of just viewing!! Great site btw
     @Lucky
     BMac is right, you should work on making story interesting and on challenging your characters…what if “moon-god” powers depend on moon cycles and NOT on day/night cycles? That way, the twins could be both full-powered during days when sun and moon are together in the sky (if you do some research, you’ll find out it happens often, every month, even for just a few hours) wherease they could be un-powered during a new moon night (no sun, no moon, no powers!). If I were a villain, I’d try those nights after figuring out

778. # Masteron 01 Apr 2013 at 8:22 pm

     Hey can you guys tell me everythig you know about ice manipulation and your thoughts about it as a power

779. # Hero!on 06 Apr 2013 at 7:32 am

     B. Mac! (By the way, I’m writing this story on my language. I’m not quite good in English…)
     Little help here. My weakness, whether it is Fiction or Non-fiction, is ending the story.

     So here it goes. My main character can summon electricity. The protagonist (I don’t quite have the real idea yet since the protagonist, Maestro, only watches the main character throughout the story but will end in a battle.) has telekenesis. Maestro is geared with a sort of anti-electricity armor since he knows my hero’s powers. The final setting would be in a television studio.

     Any idea how to plot the battle scene and what could be a surprising ending?

     I was thinking, how about if someone (or the hero himself, electrically teleports into a…) call a firetruck while, the two is physically battling in the studio. Then, firemen helps the hero by watering Maestro down thus wetting him enough to be electrocuted by the hero?

     Any more suggestions?

780. # Smokeon 08 Apr 2013 at 8:45 am

     I have a team of Superheroes i’ve created, though i am having some trouble coming up with their arch enemies. i want to create a team of villains (kind of how the League of Doom is to the Justice League). I’ve been able to come up with three supervillains, but i need some advice on another.

     One of my hero’s names is Smoke. He is a sleek and sneaky ninja-like hero that wields an enchanted smoking whip as a weapon. Aside from his extreme stealth, Smoke has the ability to actually turn himself into smoke and navigate, allowing him to pass through small spaces and crowded rooms undetected. I have spent many hours attempting to come up with a villain fit to his persona. Ive had absolutely no luck.any suggestions??

781. # Qwertyon 08 Apr 2013 at 8:57 pm

     Smoke:

     What are your hero’s weaknesses? If he doesn’t have any yet, you can give him some and then create a villain who is strong in those areas.

     Or you can create a villain with powers similar to your hero’s powers, so they have to try to outsmart each other when both of them know exactly how each other’s powers work.

     Or, if you don’t go the route of power vs. power, you can perhaps make the villain a former friend of the hero; perhaps a former teammate or even love interest who turned evil.

     Or perhaps your hero has a twisted past and worked for some bad guy at some point, and that bad guy is relentlessly pursuing the hero because he switched sides.

     Just some thoughts.

782. # B. McKenzieon 09 Apr 2013 at 2:43 am

     Hello, Hero! Here are some thoughts and suggestions (and please let me know if you have any questions or comments):
     
     –”Any idea how to plot the battle scene and what could be a surprising ending?” My suggestion here would be to generally focus on delivering a satisfying ending more than a surprising one. If you’re dead-set on a surprise ending, some possibilities are that the villain’s motives were much different than the hero had anticipated (e.g. in retrospect, it turns out that he had been fighting against a much larger villain), the villain’s plan was much different than the hero had anticipated (e.g. Ozymandias in Watchmen), or the hero reacts to a given situation in a way far different than most other protagonists in other stories would have reacted (for example, in Point of Impact, a notably patriotic character who has been framed for murder destroys evidence which would have proved him innocent because the evidence would have embarrassed his country and because he has a different but riskier plan in motion to prove himself innocent).
     
     –The final fight takes place in a television studio? Perhaps one of the characters has some startling revelation he wishes to take public (e.g. the villain wishes to make a public statement and/or the hero wants to publicly prove the guilt of the villain if that’s applicable to the plot).
     
     –Perhaps the final scene hinges more on something mental than a straight-up brawl. For example, see the final confrontation between the hero and villain in Cars 2 (which was generally a terrible movie, but that scene is very well-executed).

783. # gurlson 10 Apr 2013 at 7:07 pm

     What’s a good weakness for heroes with:
     1.a girl with Flight
     2. someone with an impenetrable shield
     3. a guy who shifts into a lizard
     4. a gal with a super-sonic voice and advanced hearing
     5. a girl with super speed

784. # B. McKenzieon 10 Apr 2013 at 7:23 pm

     “What’s a good weakness for…” If by weaknesses you mean vulnerabilities to things like Kryptonite, I generally recommend a more natural approach. If you mean something more along the line of a limitation rather than a Kryptonite, here are some suggestions.

785. # WinslowMudDon 10 Apr 2013 at 7:46 pm

     Well, it depends on how you would want to portray these abilities, or at least the more ambiguous ones, in my humble opinion.

     1. Flight- You could have her positive acceleration (how fast she picks up speed) be greater than her negative acceleration (how fast she slows down) to make it so that she cant stop immediately, as her momentum would continue to carry her forward.
     (e.g. braking in a car slows the cars movement forward at a certain rate, but the user still continues to go forward) Alternatively, you could make it so that she has the regular lung capacity as a human being,which most characters with this ability lack, and have it so that if she flies too fast, then it becomes harder for her to breathe, restricting her to a happy medium that is not too fast, but fast enough. Or you could mix both of these weaknesses.

     2. Ultimate Shield- You could make it so that the shield (assuming it is dermal armor) does not cover his/her entire body at once, as they would have to predict when and where each blow would be coming from to use it effectively. I guess the same could go for if it was an external shield, but in general, I would just try to make it so it does not cover everything. Also, yes, this is a FMA/FMAB reference (at least in my titling of the ability)

     3. Lizard morphing- For this, other than the obvious weaknesses of having to get used to an incredibly smaller body, (in most cases, unless you are looking for a more Spider-Manesque Lizard) you could have it so that, like a real reptile, he would be cold blooded. So in effect, he would be endangering himself much more if he were to fight crime at night – in the cold – than in the day, and he would be pretty much useless if the team was in a colder region. Also, another obvious weakness would be his belly, at least as a lizard. Most reptiles have tougher skin than a majority of animals on their body, except for their belly.

     4. Supersonic Scream + Keen Hearing- This one pretty much explains itself. She can’t really be effective if her combat ability is based on blowing out the enemies eardrums, when hers are far more sensitive to her own ability.

     5. Super Speed- Hmm. This one is slightly more of a challenge. I would say that for this, you could have something along the lines of a general weakness. This would be, in my opinion, clumsiness. This regular flaw would be much more amplified when she is running at extremely fast speeds. I.E.: Said character is running in to stop a bank heist, because the criminals would never expect a super-speedster to try to take them out by herself, and she trips and falls over the door frame. I just think this is a very realistic weakness that most super heroes don’t take into account when they get the ability to run at mach 5. If you really are running that fast, how in the world would you be able to stop yourself from running into that closed door/window, or tripping over that rock. Its also very difficult to imagine a person running at any high speed being able to turn very well. The faster you are going, the more gradual of a turn you would have to take to, well, turn.

     Physics makes super-heroics much more difficult eh? Alas, I digress…

786. # WinslowMudDon 10 Apr 2013 at 7:48 pm

     Also, the same rule applying to number one, the one about breathing, could also apply to number five.

787. # gurlson 11 Apr 2013 at 8:31 am

     What’s a good weakness for heroes with:
     1.a boy who has heat vision and can manipulate fire and is fireproof
     2. someone with the ability to mimic anyone
     3. a guy who can manipulate plants and create new ones
     4. a gal who can freeze time and liquids
     5. a boy who is extremely intelligent,controls electricity, and read minds

788. # WinslowMudDon 11 Apr 2013 at 11:16 am

     You jerk! The difficulty level of a game is supposed to increse gradually, not all at once!
     I’m just kidding. But some of the combinations seem too convenient/overpowered.

     1. Flame Control/Manipulation- Well, other than taking away his fireproof ability (would definatly make him think before he acts), i would suggest a similar weakness to cold blooded animals. And obviously he would be useless if a fight was taking place during a rainstorm, near a pool, or with a person with Water/Ice Control/Manipulation. Also, heat vision is really nessecary to mention here, as this could be a caveat of the first ability.

     2. Mimic- *Looks to K.A. Appelgate* You could have a limit on how long they would be able to stay in that form, make it so they must physically touch that person to be able to mimic them. You could also go the x-men first class route and make them self-concious, though that would be more of a flaw than a weakness. You could also make it so that they must concentrate very hard to maintain their form. Or, you could make it like sightblinder, where when he uses his “mimic”, different people see him as differnet things (in that story, Sigtblinder is a sword that makes people see you as someone that the characters either really hated or really loved, etc.)

     3. Plant Control/Manipulation- I would suggest changing the second part of the ability from plant creation to being able to quickly accelerate plant growth. Anyways, he could be very empathetic to plants (i.e. nearby plants being burned would actually cause him pain, or even actually burn him as well), an obvious aversion to fire and lightning, and then being virtually useless in places where plants don’t/can’t grow. (i.e. tundras, deserts, mountains, etc.)

     4. Ice Control/Manipulation(?)- An aversion to heat and fire would be very easy to explain, as would uselessness when in a place without liquids. She could also have a certain temperature that she can not freeze to, limiting what things she can actually solidify. And freezing time, hmm, it does not seem to completly mesh with the character. But nevertheless, a person with that version of time control/manipulation could need to concentrate extremly hard on being in that moment. So, in other words, it would only be useful for getting out of the way of various things. Also, a limit for time manipulation would be soemthiing else that no one ever questions. How, if you are the only thing not frozen in time, can you pick bullets out of the air or kill someone? Better explanations come from some movies and T.V. shows. For more on this, i suggest watching “The Lost Room” (very interseting series, the object you are looking for is the comb), or, please don’t execute me for this, the first Lara Croft movie. The part you are looking for is at the end, when she attempts to turn a knife around mid air, while hoping that this will somehow change the speed/vector that the knife was travelling at (which you couldn’t, without some enrgy redirection ability)

     5. Sounds like you are mixing Charles Xavier with Cole McGrath, or just Kessler. Anyway, you could have a mix of both characters weaknesses, or generic ones similar to those characters. For intelligence, you could makeit limited to one feild (i.e. physics, chemistry, useless knowlege). Telapathy could be limited in a number of ways. One way would be for that character to be influenced by the thoughts, but I think that would be too similar to empathy, though they are almost the same ability(with minute and situational differences). An obvious weakness for someone with lightning based abilities would be water, or the interaction wth thereof.

789. # RockTalentFreshmanon 13 Apr 2013 at 9:32 pm

     I was thinking of having my character be an empath, can control a humans brainwaves, and also can manipulate memories. Now with the memory manipulation i was thinking of having my main character also be able to manipulate different like genetic to grant himself powers that his ancestors may have had.

790. # valcorwabajakon 16 Apr 2013 at 12:08 am

     I’m wondering about what kind of power to give to one of my superheros and what his motivation for fighting crime would be

     the character is Sebastian (no last name) a 20 year old institutionalized person who was put there at age 5 from an orphanage

     he is immediately suspicious of everybody due to suffering from paranoid delusions he gets powers and escapes from his padded cell

     I still want to flesh him out I feel he should have powers that are unusual/unique and relate to to his personality

     he is also highly intelligent and takes great pleasure in devising elaborate and sometimes unnecessary and overly elaborate plots he is often scared and caught off guard by sudden conflict and will often run away as to have time think of a plan and will then fight later he is also terrified of people catching him and putting him back the padded cell and thus is secretive to the point of severe compulsion any ideas?

     I also have another super hero I feel being the polar opposite he might be good to have as a potential ally for Sebastian

     he ought to have a cool name with a dignified last name

     he is a definite anti-hero he feels no emotions and only fights crime for the money as is a incredibly effective practical superhero that while very lethal with his powers is not above using weapons and blackmail to get the job done thus he receives a huge salary from the police department because without him the city would fall into anarchy as superpowers are common and hardly a soul in this town is trustworthy

     he is the only thing keeping this town in check and should he choose to stop helping out everything would go to shit

791. # dineshreeon 22 Apr 2013 at 1:28 pm

     hi i need help with a superpower that would help attract the opposite sex.its this audition im goin for and it asks me to come up with superhero name and also a superpower and also for this superpower to help attract the opposite sex..so I’m a girl so I would need help thinking of a superpower that would help in attracting guys
     Please help me guys this is urgent ! ! !

792. # WinslowMudDon 22 Apr 2013 at 2:23 pm

     I would say empathy would be your best bet. Longer article here: http://powerlisting.wikia.com/wiki/Empathy . Basically, it is feeling to controlling emotion in others.

793. # B. McKenzieon 22 Apr 2013 at 2:36 pm

     Hmm. I think using a form of mind-control (or some sort of mental influence) romantically would probably compromise the likability of the character and make readers care less about the relationship. I’d recommend something more along the lines of Spider-Man kissing upside down in the rain — i.e. a standard power being used to put a badass and/or cool touch on romance, but it wouldn’t make readers think the romance is somehow artificial.

794. # WinslowMudDon 22 Apr 2013 at 3:38 pm

     I can see how my statement could be misinterpreted. What I meant of empathy is setting up a sort of dependancy of use on the ability, or something similar to it.

     I.E. A guy always seems to be able to get the girl, but only because he picks up on the emotions they put off. Then, he meets someone that notices this, and must either not use his ability or be much more subtle about it.

795. # Dr. Vo Spaderon 22 Apr 2013 at 3:42 pm

     Actually, B. Mac, I’m curious: how far could a tragic past allow a character to go? For example: if the character resorts to mentally influencing people because she has been betrayed/rejected so many times, do you think readers will feel more sympathy?

     “…and make readers care less about the relationship.” – Perhaps the sympathy would make the readers care even more about the relationship and hope for an understanding semi-signifigant other?

     (Also, I am not a proffesional in any writing field and I apologize if these come off as sort of dumb questions.)

796. # B. McKenzieon 22 Apr 2013 at 11:10 pm

     DVS: “Actually, B. Mac, I’m curious: how far could a tragic past allow a character to go?” First, a caveat: I think people react to romances in really different ways. That said, personally, I feel there’s not a whole lot of backstory that can justify romantic mind control. If a character tried to justify using mind-control/mental suggestion on members of the opposite sex because of past romantic failures, personally I’d guess the author was setting up a serial killer rather than a protagonist. It MAY come across as less creepy if the character’s powers are mainly subconscious/uncontrolled (e.g. phermones) rather than something the character turns on or off, but even then creepiness would likely be an issue and it’d be really hard to care about a relationship which was artificial/not real/the result of some sort of mind control or mental influence.
     
     …
     
     “Perhaps the sympathy [of a character having been rejected before] would make the readers care even more about the relationship and hope for an understanding semi-significant other?” If the character is using some sort of mind control/hypnosis/mental suggestion, I think an understanding relationship was never on the table.
     
     …
     
     WinslowMD: “What I meant of empathy is setting up a sort of dependancy of use on the ability, or something similar to it. I.E. A guy always seems to be able to get the girl, but only because he picks up on the emotions they put off. Then, he meets someone that notices this, and must either not use his ability or be much more subtle about it.” Ah! That strikes me as a lot less creepy than what I had in mind (i.e. something like mind control).

797. # Malcolm Bansaon 27 Apr 2013 at 7:30 pm

     Hey, I have a theory on how superpowers actully work, and by this I mean most superpowers. Here it is: Superhuma usingn are not actually using the powers but there using limited reality bending that is specialized for each power. DO you think this is good, please reasond

798. # B. McKenzieon 27 Apr 2013 at 7:49 pm

     Malcolm, it sounds like it could be complicated, but I don’t understand what the advantage would be. Generally, I’d recommend making things more complicated only if it makes the story better in some way (e.g. makes for a more interesting/enjoyable reading experience).

799. # Qwertyon 28 Apr 2013 at 10:04 pm

     Malcolm Bansa:

     It’s an interesting idea…as I interpret your explanation, superhumans are causing the people around them to THINK a power is being used, when there isn’t, by bending the reality around them. This concept might work, but you would have to set down some ground rules for how the reality-altering works. There are a number of ways you could go about it:

     One way is if the “altered reality” was permanent…in which case it wouldn’t be “altered” at all, but would become actual reality. Otherwise, if the altered reality was temporary, some problems would spring up…because if they aren’t using actual powers and they aren’t in actual reality, then when the superhuman used their “power”, no real damage would be inflicted on whatever they’re attacking, since “reality” would presumably bend back to normal eventually. For example, if the superhuman used reality-bending powers to smash a car, and reality then bent back to normal, the car would be intact. Also, think about this: If the superhuman used his powers to kill somebody, and reality then bent back to normal, the person would come back to life…or he might never have died at all!

     If the “altered reality” that the superhumans use is permanent, then this problem would be moot. However, another way to perhaps get around this problem (if the altered reality was temporary) would be to explain it as a concept similar to how dreams work in the movie Inception. In the dream-reality (which is an altered reality), everything is in the mind…so when people are hurt in altered reality, they feel pain, even though in actual reality they haven’t been hurt at all. Thus, with reality-altering, a superhuman could cause people to “think” damage has been caused, or “think” they’re in pain, when they actually aren’t. This would then cause there to be two “realities” running at once: the real reality, and the bended reality that is only in the people’s minds. This would also make the superhuman’s powers not reality-altering, but instead mind-altering…which kind of serve the same purpose.

     These are just some ideas. I think the biggest thing for you to decide is if the altered reality is permanent or not…and if you want to take the time to puzzle out all the ground rules for how reality-altering works, it could make an interesting premise for a story.

     ~Qwerty

800. # WinslowMudDon 29 Apr 2013 at 3:26 pm

     I have a quick question, though it is not directly relating to powers/abilities themselves.

     In my series, people with abilities are trained on the use of firearms, but when it comes to hand to hand combat, they must figure out what works best for them. So my question comes in the form of: Does it sound interesting for a character to have fighting style that incorporates their background/history, personality, and abilities.

     Example:

     Wilbur is a person fairly new to the Legion, as he has just been rescued from an Association lab. He has previously had training in various forms of martial arts, but mostly when he was a child. He never really advanced far, but does still remember certain things. He has the ability to absorb and disseminate energy from the cells in his body, and to transfer the energy from cell to cell. When he learns to control his ability, he manages to be able to perform crude blast-like attacks as well as exploding the energy out of his body all at once. He has a limited amount of energy he can store, and when he runs out, he begins running on his own life energy. (Think kind of along the lines of DBZ, except much less control over it)

     So, taking all of that into account, for his abilities to be useful in hand-hand combat, and I would make his general fighting style an aggressive open-handed style, similar to some Shaolin styles.

801. # 45CentConcerton 29 Apr 2013 at 5:16 pm

     I just have a quick question on superpowers (of course, that’s what this page is about)

     This is the description of her abilities:
     Self detonation. Can also concentrate the explosive force into her physical attacks, creating a mini-explosion on contact. If an object is moving, then she can focus on its kinetic energy and cause the object to explode. She can fly short spurts by kicking her feet together and pushing herself forward on the force of the explosion. However, she only can go 5 feet per kick, and thus this takes a lot of energy out of her

     Catches: Her detonation abilities come from a manipulation of heat. She is heat resistant (can get burned, but doesn’t feel the heat or feel the pain <But I need to work on this part), but also cold blooded. She cannot function well in temperatures of 50 degrees or less. If wet, she also cannot use her powers. A tik-tocking sound precedes her self detonation, giving warning (and also her codename Tik Tock).

     My question: Are these adequate weaknesses? Or should I do some revamping?

802. # Amber D.on 02 May 2013 at 10:58 pm

     Here is an idea for another power reversal, when someone tries to use a power against them they can reverse the power and use it against the person. once the they start useing the power it’s to late for the other person to stop them from being able to use it however the second they stop as long as the other person doesn’t keep using there powers they won’t be able to reverse them again.

     also it only works for certain powers. for example it wouldn’t work on something like super strength, it would work on things like mind reading, teliquenises, force feilds, ect.

803. # Shadowon 08 May 2013 at 11:15 am

     I am also working on a book. My main character controls heat and light, since they are closely related in terms of electromagnetic radiation, as well as slight increase in speed and internal radar. I have 4 sub main characters: a pair of fraternal twins, a boy and a girl, and the girl has a unique contrition called Alexandria’s Genesis, which takes pigmentation from hair (so it’s all pure white), takes mos pigmentation from eyes (so they’re purple), does nothing to skin (so she’s tan), and gives perfect metabolism, agility and mental speed, and she can make/ emit a fog of any substance; Poison, water, sand, helium, neon, etc. The male twin controls sub-atomic particles, which are tiny packets of energy and have the ability to change from wave to particle, and vibrate constantly at frequencies unique to the atom. The other boy has the power to become composed of or become whatever he touches, so he could become composed of stone or become a stone if he touches one. The other boy has the ability to control weather, and whenever his powers are active his hair turns white and his eyes turn blue.
     Any comments or suggestions? I am greatly in need of help.
     I have something I all a character log, where I create character descriptions and powers so I can use them in the future, and there are multiple unique powers that I have come up with hat I have not seen anywhere else if anyone is interested.

804. # Shadowon 08 May 2013 at 11:25 am

     One of my most prized characters: I am very into genetics, I read genetic articles and books for fun, which leads to some interesting characters. My favorite I have come up with is a chimera. This is a genetic condition where two fraternal twin embryos, at a few weeks or so into developement, merge and become one embryo. Thus the character has two different sets of DNA. Half of his head is white/blond and the other half black, and the colors are all marbled together. He has bright green eyes with the center outside of the cornea or black part ofthe eye being brown, since I though a blue eye and a green eye would be too distracting. Having to sets of DNA, he is the only one in the book with two superpowers. He can see anything, anywhere. He could be in NY and visually explore South Africa. His other power is if anything is thrown at him his body deflects it, often throwing it back to the person who threw it, so energy blasts and guns and telekenisis don’t work on him.

805. # Shadowon 08 May 2013 at 11:28 am

     The male twin can also control the five states of matter: Bose-Einstein Condesate, solid, liquid, has and plasma.

806. # Shadowon 08 May 2013 at 6:56 pm

     I have a lot of characters, since it will be a super hero high school setting. Every person has a power, and the enemy is an organization called the Aether, a sky based organization with their own team of super kids/people, intent on conquering the USA and the defeating the whole world. The good organization which no one knows about (I have no idea what to call it yet) has the kids al in the school setting and whenever a particular individual’s power is needed, they send them out to do their work. He kids need to protect their identity so they can go shopping and do public stuff like that so they come up with super hero names and costumes, and do their fighting in that.

807. # bookwormon 17 May 2013 at 7:47 pm

     first, love the website and second, I’m writing a story where the kid lives in a small town somewhere in a swampy-ish area and he already knows about his powers, wich are mist,steam and smoke. Does anyone have any feedback on limitations on powers. I’m thinking about him seeing the near future, things that just happened in the past, and present through mist and teleporting small distances through smoke. I can’t figure out somthing for steam or his oragin story other than being abandoned at a bording school/foster home. how does it sound so far? any Ideas?

808. # Hyper-Redon 23 May 2013 at 5:47 pm

     I have a person with just a sword and powers of captain America, I’m thinking of changing them tho…

809. # NatashaTheSovieton 25 May 2013 at 2:08 pm

     Ugh…I have
     A electromagnetic power (f)
     An ice-and-snow power (f)
     A…powerhouse power (m)
     A soundwave power (m)
     On my team of superheroes. I also have another male but I’m having trouble figuring out where he fits into the team. He’s my super-scientist, but I can’t seem to find anything for him to do, powerwise.

810. # CDon 29 May 2013 at 7:39 am

     Hey guys,
     Me and a few friends are a small film company and we create indie films and one I am currently creating revolves around a secret organisation of vigilantes.
     But their power stems from their DNA and a artifact. The artifact helps them unlock knowledge of their ancestors, who are all ancient warriors by the way, which gives them amazing fighting technqiues, fighting strategies and historical knowledge.
     Is this a good power?

811. # Tiffanyon 31 May 2013 at 12:17 pm

     What would you call a superpower where the character in question is simply so pleasant that people cannot say no to her?

812. # Kirbyon 31 May 2013 at 12:30 pm

     Mind control?

813. # B. McKenzieon 31 May 2013 at 8:15 pm

     “What would you call a superpower where the character in question is simply so pleasant that people cannot say no to her?” Mind control is the first thing that comes to mind. I think suggestion and/or hypnosis could also work. In-story, you could go with something less clinical and more descriptive. For example, in The Taxman Must Die, the two main characters might call such it “Southern charm,” although a doomed taxman and a mutant commando probably have a very different approach to charm and persuasion than the aforementioned sweet character does. (Additionally, the taxman’s main social trait is the uncanny knack to make EVERYBODY want to kill him, and his commando partner thinks THAT is a form of IRS mind control).
     
     …
     
     If the character is a hero, I think mind control (or similar) will tend to shortcircuit any potential drama/challenge from noncombat situations (unless perhaps the use of limitations is excellent). I fear the superpower would amount to a “Get out of Noncombat Problem Free” card, which will probably make noncombat problems (and their resolution) less interesting than they would have been if the superpowers had entailed risk and/or creativity.
     
     Some potential workarounds:
     1) The character is a villain. It actually strikes me as a pretty interesting superpower for a villain, and limiting a villain is much less critical than for heroes.
     2) The series is almost exclusively combat.
     3) Many of the character’s antagonists are immune or highly resistant.
     4) The limits about what the character can pressure another person into doing are serious enough that she has to get creative.

814. # Telickon 02 Jun 2013 at 6:06 am

     I have an idea for some powers that should be added to the list. Flying, laser vision, ice, creating things out of nothing, changing things, duplicating yourself, and that’s all I can think of

815. # Comicbookguy117on 04 Jun 2013 at 12:06 am

     Hey guys i’m in need of a little help defining aone of my characters powers. Put simply, she has power absorption. This means she is capable of stealing the powers of other super beings through physical contact.

     The following is merely one of the strangest concepts behind this character and i’m not even sure i like it. But its really all i can come up with.

     But bassically, she has retractable, nearly microscopic dagger-like fibers on her fingertips. Upon physical contact, these fibers enter a victims blood stream gather their unique genetic code. Subconsciously her mind disregards anything that isn’t about their unique superpower. She then places the genes carrying the superpower into her own genetic structure. This gives her that power. And being the sadistic, hunter-killer that she is, she usually murders her victims with their own power. Is this explanation ok, good enough or great? I mean what do you guys think?

     I love this character and have had her concept, a power absorbing serial killer who murders her victims with their own powers, in mind since I was in high school. But have always had trouble defining how to execute her powers. So what do you all think about the above concept? If it’s a dud, what suggestions can you offer? As always, thanks guys. I always feel welcome her and i appreciate that.

816. # StramyneZZon 04 Jun 2013 at 3:56 pm

     Hey fellas, what’s up? i’m in a bit of a bind. i have this supervillian and i need a little help defining and developing his powers and character. he is born in England and is a descendant of a templar knight. in his youth in England he and his mother were poor but faith would have it that his estranged grandparents move them both to the states. years past and he is about to graduate high school and his mother is ill and he struggles with two jobs to pay for his mothers medicine. on a school trip to a museum, he finds himself uncontrollable drawn to one particular artifact a silver chalice embedded with rubies. later that night, he uses his lock picking skills he gained while in England, to break in the museum and steal the chalice. he notices that the chalice has an impression in the bottom of it similar to his cross necklace given to him by his grandfather. he recalls a story told to him by his grandfather and he places the cross in the impression, unknown by him at the time the cross had a philosopher stone in the center, and the chalice begins to produce an elixir that gives him the strength compared to that of a dragon, enhanced reflexes and heighten senses and invonerability, however the elixir’s effect only lasts for 48 hours and his mental stability is augmented along with an arrogant and egotistical personality change. any suggestions on how i can develop this character and his powers? thanks again all suggestions matter.

817. # B. McKenzieon 04 Jun 2013 at 11:46 pm

     I like the idea of a serial killer using acquired superpowers to kill the person who gave her the superpowers… That said, I feel like the premise here (a serial killer targeting supers to grab their powers) has already been done fairly recently by a very prominent story (Heroes’ Sylar). It may help to check out this article about how to handle a situation where Hollywood beats an original concept to the presses.

818. # Comicbookguy117on 05 Jun 2013 at 2:20 am

     Well actually that’s what its gonna look like to the other characters and my readers. In actuality, she’s a weapon. No different than a gun. So you know, SOMEONE is pulling the trigger. And thats the mystery about her. What happened to this woman, who has control over her and what is their goal for her and the world. But yeah, the simple “serial killer targeting supers to grab their powers” story is just a ploy. But i am glad you like it. I conceptualized this character years ago and am proud that very little about her has changed. She was originally created as a power-absorbing serial killer, so yeah she’s one of the favorite villains i’ve created.

     But now i have new problem. I’m looking at a villainous group of mine and need help defining their powers. This group all have the same abilities and even have a hive-like mind. Anyway they are a group of scientists whose latest experiment goes wrong of course and turns the four of them into techno-organic beings. Now in order to explain my problem i have to be a little honest. I consider myself a intelligent person. Just not in most scientific fields. So while i know that i want these people to be turned into techno-organic beings, i have no idea what it would mean to be techno-organic. And thus i cannot begin to theorize on their power set. I know one thing for sure thing though. The reason why they represent a credible threat in my universe is that they can convert matter to their techno-organic type of matter. This means they can infect other living beings and turn them into more of whatever they are. What do you think?

819. # Telickon 05 Jun 2013 at 6:39 am

     Techno-organic would mean they are part computer, or a cyborg, if that helps. But I like the concept. Maybe they could be minions to the other villain you created.

820. # Comicbookguy117on 05 Jun 2013 at 8:15 am

     Yeah maybe. But i think i’d like to push them as a superhero version of a zombie virus. They tend to eat or at leaset rip apart living beings. But they can also choose to infect/convert their victims. This choice is based on a consensus put together by the hive mind. They must decide if the organism can add anything they may need. This will become incredibly dangerous once they discover the superhumans in my comic book universe.

821. # JTSon 05 Jun 2013 at 7:33 pm

     —I am writing a fantasy novel and having some trouble with finding some powers for a few of the characters. Two of them live in a mountainous kingdom and so I am looking for a transport/speed-travel-up type power. I have already given teleportation, super jump/strength, and spidey-hands (I have added personal twists to these powers) to other characters. I had also speculated using wings but decided it had been used so many times in other books and didn’t feel I could write wings that well. The characters are boy and girl.

     —In case you guys wanted to know how I made them a little different than the common concepts of the powers: The teleportation is not instant, the character must place two portals in order to teleport (think the ps3 game Portal only the portals cannot be seen through and the only visual give away as to their location is slight warping of the line of sight like looking over the hood of a hot car) The super jump/strength is what I call “muscle burst”. No, the muscle doesn’t explode. The idea is that the user has enormous amounts of strength along with speed for split seconds. However there is no in between regular strength and the muscle burst. If the character was unable to pick up a large rock with his regular humans strength he would only end up tossing the rock thirty feet in the air with this power. The spidey-hands are not as original but the character has only that power. Does anyone have an idea of how to make spidey-hands a more original/ less plageristic power?

     —The other hero who needs a power lives in a kingdom that stretches thinly along an ocean coast (the kingdom mainly trades in fish and salt). I had originally used water walking and breathing under water but the character will be traveling through other environments where those powers would be useless. I don’t necessarily prefer elemental powers. I know I am just cutting off most of my options by saying what I don’t want but I really want something with an uncommon twist to the power. For example, one of my characters has skin that heats up and gives off light like a stove element (I call it “ember skin”). it would be considered a fire ability and could be used to light things on fire or melt through things. The weakness is that wind involuntarily causes heat and light, like a coal. I have never heard of or seen this power so I assume it is uncommon. I don’t read comics so I wouldn’t know.

     JTS

822. # Qwertyon 05 Jun 2013 at 9:32 pm

     JTS: For the spidey-hands character, you might compare the wall-crawling ability (if that’s what spidey-hands means?) to some other creature/insect that can climb walls, or you might just describe the power without comparing it to a creature/insect at all…just some suggestions.

     Also, for the “ember skin” power – you might want to check out the movie Iron Man 3, because your description of that power sounds pretty similar to the Extremist mutants’ powers in that movie. (Whenever the Extremist mutants used their powers, their skin heated up to glowing and they could use their heat abilities to melt through things.) Your character’s powers may be sufficiently different from this, but it still reminded me of it.

823. # JTSon 06 Jun 2013 at 6:51 am

     Cool, thanks Qwerty, I will check into that.

824. # thunderpolloon 14 Jun 2013 at 1:41 am

     thanks this really will help me with my work as we need to design a superhero for a contest thanks

825. # Zinnitoon 20 Jun 2013 at 7:10 pm

     Good day to all those who love heroes. I am creating a new universe of heroes and need some writers. This creation of mine begins with the Renaissance of Italy with Zinnito Mussioci. He is a demi-god, the son of Ares god of war. Although this is like Greek Mythology it is different. Zinnito, he gains a new ability every century. First is Invisibility, next immortality and so on. With him being immortal he falls in love and loses her through life, so he moves on knowing he should not love another women or else his heart will break. So of course he turns into a bit of a player throughout his life. But with every women he’s with, some are bound to become pregnant. He doesn’t realize it though, but when he does he has created a new group of heroes and villains. This starts the new universe. With every power Zinnito possesses along the way he passes down one to each of his children. But some of those powers can be branched down further. The creation of this legacy is something i can’t work on alone. So much, but life is short so i need assistance on my universe. ZM Legacies, Among the night stars and the sunlit oceans
     there are those who have greatness thrust upon them.
     Some say as curse, others as gifts.
     Using this greatness they fight for survival, for rights, for power.
     Power is what divides us, it gives a living creature strength.
     How you use it though, determines the true nature of that being.
     Mostrami il tuo potere … Ti faccio vedere il tuo percorso!If you’d like to join email me at zmlegacies@gmail.com

826. # _D0FPXon 21 Jun 2013 at 1:01 am

     Quick questions!

     1. What are the weaknesses and advantages of a Bo staff?

     2. What are the weaknesses and advantages of a whip?

     3. What is the normal amount of arrows for a quiver? I’m trying to find ways to not make the Bow & Arrow user super strong.

     4. What are some weapons that are good for quick, fast paced and action packed fighting? All my characters are very quick and agile so i want them to have weapons that work for their theme but are all different and have their weaknesses and advantages.

     THANK YOU

827. # AtALossForNameson 21 Jun 2013 at 4:39 am

     Hey guys, I’ve been doing some different things with my writings to try and alleviate writer’s block (not to much effect until now, due to my overload of ideas) and I wanted to try something new and maybe pick up some older projects AFTER I’m done with this one. But I just wanted to ask if my character’s power was strong, but not too strong to ruin the story. My character whom I haven’t named yet, has the power of Intuition or Intuitive Aptitude. Basically, he could pick up a guitar and learn how to be awesome in minutes, but it would give him migraines and fatigue the more and the longer he applies his ability. And when he stops using his ability he forgets all but the basics of that skill. I was just wondering if I had his power weak enough to still be interesting, but strong enough to still be considered a super human. Names would also be appreciated, but not what this post focuses upon.

828. # AtALossForNameson 21 Jun 2013 at 5:05 am

     @ _D0FPX,

     Don’t take my opinions as cold hard facts, I’m not a weapons expert or anything, but I would think that a Bo staff would be more suited for getting better range on an opponent, quick strikes, and (if trained) they could disarm a person and effectively incapacitate them, possibly even kill them through a strong strike to the head. But if it was made out of a material like wood, it could be cut through by a strong strike with a sharp weapon like a sword or an axe if blocked instead of redirected. It could be an awesome weapon in the hands of a master.

     With a whip, I would imagine that it could take a weapon away if the user is distracted, or it could potentially bind the enemy, given the length and if it is a magical or enhanced weapon. There is a catch though, in the hands of a novice, it could horribly miss and end up popping the user if they’re not careful, causing a distraction that could prove detrimental, or even fatal in an intense combat scene.

     With a bow and arrow, it would really matter on the quiver, and I couldn’t give you an exact number of arrows you could put in your average quiver, because I don’t know much about that. But I would assume that in a combat situation, the user would want to catch the enemy by surprise. If it’s in closed quarters he’d have trouble using it, unless it’s a short bow, limiting his range but making it easier to handle. It’s not just the size of the quiver, it’s the competence in the user’s abilities with the bow and the kind of bow he has as well. Maybe he only has a short bow, limiting his range on the open field, or he has a long bow, limiting the ease of his abilities when he gets surprised indoors.

     If you’re thinking of other weapons to use, you could try a dagger, sword, hand axe, hammer, or even a scythe. Though I’d imagine it would take a lot of research to portray the numerous styles these weapons have.

     Sorry if I made the post too long, I enjoyed making my first two posts!

829. # AtALossForNameson 21 Jun 2013 at 5:07 am

     Whoops, mentioned the short bow twice. Haha, my bad.

830. # Anonymouson 23 Jun 2013 at 8:41 am

     I need help with a super power for what all it can do. I got a power fiction control it lets people control fiction aka they can enter any fiction with or without people, summon/control fictional people/objects, and fuse with fictional creatures/people ect.
     What all would that power be capable of?

831. # Sabeon 23 Jun 2013 at 6:59 pm

     Hey SHN,i’m new here but ive browsed the site and it’s great! but i have a question that i hope i can get some insight on

     i’m writing a story that i want to make about 3 main characters,how would i go about introducing these characters in the beginning without making it seem like one charcter is favored? Or would you recommend that i just keep one main character and have the other 2 as side characters?

832. # Mr.siron 24 Jun 2013 at 4:56 pm

     Ok guys what do you think about this a super villan who has already been ruling the world with armies of guys some with weak powers some with none at all and a couple of heros (spread across the world) start small rebellions in their areas eventually that are all captured, one escapes (preferably the cool, but pettyish one) sees the others has pity and frees them, then they escape

     That’s where it begins

     P.S. super rough just made it up

     p.s.s. what do you guys think

833. # Mr.siron 24 Jun 2013 at 8:17 pm

     Possible superheroes

     Brain. Dr.George o Meyer

     Powers super smarts, telepathy

     Doctorate at Oxford in genetic metaphysics
     Scientist
     British
     58
     Make miracle invention
     Unfair science laws

     Shadow. (Name foreign)

     Powers Basic element manipulation, flying, slow aging

     Scholar at school of magic
     Social outcast
     Rough English, vagean
     2431. 24
     Theories rejected
     Trying to get back to his world
     Born super
     Find others like him

     Monk. Abhishek Patel

     Powers martial arts

     Monk training
     Monk
     Dedication
     Indian
     45
     Total enlightenment
     Mother abandonment in search of enlightenment
     Years of training
     Was convinced by his master

     Toxic waste. Jim breckner

     Powers acid spray, enhance powers, liquify

     College dropout
     Mechanic
     Bad***
     American
     36
     Broke
     Cherynobyl victim
     Better than his dead end job

     Wither. Alice white

     Powers withering, healing, ray,

     Bachelors in business
     Corporate Lawyer
     Unintentional powers
     Cannot touch loves ones with left hand, leftie
     Chinese
     35
     Not in touch with family
     Become rich
     Test subject for corporate drug
     Wanted to stop corporate greed scandals

     Main villain

     Paul Rogers. Overlord

     Ruler of world through oligarchy, then monopoly, then despotism

     Leads army of mutants, some with weak powers others with non

     Unfair laws

     Healthcare only for troops

     Runs all large businesses

     Other main enemies

     Overload. Pam breckner

     Powers electrical manipulation

     Scorpio

     Powers can control unholy animals

     Dark matter. Ally baker. Tested on wither

     Absorb life force

     Possible superheroes

     Brain. Dr.George o Meyer

     Powers super smarts, telepathy

     Doctorate at Oxford in genetic metaphysics
     Scientist
     British
     58
     Make miracle invention
     Unfair science laws

     Shadow. (Name foreign)

     Powers Basic element manipulation, flying, slow aging

     Scholar at school of magic
     Social outcast
     Rough English, vagean
     2431. 24
     Theories rejected
     Trying to get back to his world
     Born super
     Find others like him

     Monk. Abhishek Patel

     Powers martial arts

     Monk training
     Monk
     Dedication
     Indian
     45
     Total enlightenment
     Mother abandonment in search of enlightenment
     Years of training
     Was convinced by his master

     Toxic waste. Jim breckner

     Powers acid spray, enhance powers, liquify

     College dropout
     Mechanic
     Bad***
     American
     36
     Broke
     Cherynobyl victim
     Better than his dead end job

     Wither. Alice white

     Powers withering, healing, ray,

     Bachelors in business
     Corporate Lawyer
     Unintentional powers
     Cannot touch loves ones with left hand, leftie
     Chinese
     35
     Not in touch with family
     Become rich
     Test subject for corporate drug
     Wanted to stop corporate greed scandals

     Main villain

     Paul Rogers. Overlord

     Ruler of world through oligarchy, then monopoly, then despotism

     Leads army of mutants, some with weak powers others with non

     Unfair laws

     Healthcare only for troops

     Runs all large businesses

     Other main enemies

     Overload. Pam breckner

     Powers electrical manipulation

     Scorpio

     Powers can control unholy animals

     Dark matter. Ally baker. Tested on wither

     Absorb life force

     Just some ideas

     I would like some recommendations but no hatemail

     P.s. sorry if I offended just don’t want to be discouraged

834. # B. McKenzieon 24 Jun 2013 at 11:38 pm

     Some thoughts and suggestions, Mr. Sir:
     
     1. “I just don’t want to be discouraged…” As far as career paths go, fiction-writing tends to be unusually emotionally challenging and has an unusually high potential for frustration. If avoiding discouragement is a major consideration, another field (e.g. perhaps a communications position) might work out more happily for you.
     
     2. Some of these characters sound like they could be interesting (e.g. I’m intrigued by the idea of an underachieving badass). Generally, I’d recommend a format closer to a plot synopsis than a list of character traits. A plot synopsis would probably make it a lot easier to tie everything together (e.g. key plot points & character decisions, relationships and conflicts between characters, critical details about the premise or setting, etc) and establish how the characters’ traits affect the plot. For example, a list of character traits can tell us that one character is from Tuvalu* and another is a vegan, but a plot synopsis could develop more about why those details matter (e.g. if they somehow tie into a conflict, major decision, or major plot point). The details will be more interesting if readers can see why they matter.
     
     *Yeahhhh, Tuvalu.
     
     3. If I may, I’d generally suggest proofreading more aggressively.
     
     4. “Genetic metaphysics…” Hmm… Unless the character is an old-school philosopher, I’d suggest rephrasing this as something like “Biophysics” or “Genetic biophysics.” (Metaphysics is a type of philosophy). If the character is very philosophical, perhaps something like bioethics and/or (more nefariously) eugenics.

835. # Mr.Siron 25 Jun 2013 at 6:48 am

     1. You’re right I just don’t want negative feedback too early, I haven’t even started my first “book”.

     2. Sorry I just copy paste some notes I jot down I hadn’t really focused on anything else yet (didn’t have a computer nearby).

     3.please elaborate

     4. Good idea I’ll go with genetic metaphysics

     5. I think I should add a bachelors in engineering

     Thanks for the feedback Mckenzie

     P.s. could I call you MC

836. # B. McKenzieon 25 Jun 2013 at 9:46 pm

     A novel manuscript with more than 2 typos on page 1 will not survive to page 2. There’s a lot of opportunity here.
     
     In addition to removing a lethal obstacle to publication, stronger proofreading will generally lead to more professional feedback/review. Reviewers/readers will generally take authors a lot more seriously that at least have the mechanics down. Proofreading will mean the difference between getting rejected in the first 30 seconds or not.
     
     “Could I call you MC?” I’d prefer BM.

837. # Nayanon 26 Jun 2013 at 4:37 am

     “I just don’t want to be discouraged…”

     One way of not getting discouraged in writing world is not having any high expectations. Less than 1% of the manuscripts get published. If you hold high expectations like ‘ I will get published, become a bestseller and rich etc.’, then it’s highly likely that you will be discouraged and frustrated. Don’t consider fiction writing as your only income source. Write passionately with fun. Be happy if you can complete a good novel. If you get published, then that’s bonus.

838. # Mr.siron 26 Jun 2013 at 7:29 am

     Ok B.M. I wrote up a synopsis on the first couple chapters, here you go

     Synopsis

     The heros are leading several small protests around the world
     When all of them are captured simultaneously and brought to overlord’s prison brain uses his telepathy to make the guard feel sympathy for him and escapes. While passing by the cell blocks he sees the other heros and takes pity on them. He then frees the heros who escape to an abandoned police station

     That’s what I have so far and this is just where I want the story to go, haven’t really fleshed it out yet

     Hey anyone interested in a collab since you guys are saying these characters have potential, also I chose my words wrong I’m not gonna give up on this regardless of negative feedback

     All the best,

     Mr.Sir

839. # B. McKenzieon 26 Jun 2013 at 6:49 pm

     “Hey anyone interested in a collab since you guys are saying these characters have potential…”
     
     1) The average novel advance is roughly $4,500. When a pie is that small, it’s hard slicing it more than one way. (Note: anyone writing nonfiction should disregard this comment entirely).
     
     2) If I were going to take on a co-novelist, I’d only make that sort of commitment to someone who had impressed me with his/her writing style, productivity/work ethic, and reliability. Writing a novel takes thousands of hours… Anyone willing to offer that sort of commitment lightly does not know what it would take to see it through.
     
     2.1) This will probably change as you have more opportunities to practice (and ideally get published on your own), but it would be very hard for an unpublished author to convince a professional author to make that commitment.
     
     3) The authors good enough that you’d want them as a coauthor don’t need a coauthor and generally wouldn’t benefit from an unpublished coauthor.
     
     3.1) I’d recommend proofreading more aggressively. It’s extremely important.

840. # Mr.Siron 26 Jun 2013 at 8:02 pm

     Ok so that’s one no anyone else interested

841. # amarionon 26 Jun 2013 at 9:13 pm

     I like superheros and I wish I had some

842. # Mr.Siron 26 Jun 2013 at 9:34 pm

     Please explain Amarion

843. # Anonymouson 27 Jun 2013 at 3:26 am

     I’m new to this so please bare with me haha.

     I have three different stories and not sure which to chose. Both aren’t very far along in fact I only have the small details. I need help haha

     Story #1)
     - characters name is shade.
     - his power is dark Aura
     - he surrounds his feet and fists with it to amplify the power
     - he can travel/hide in peoples shadows but for limited time. He can’t go into the shadows of inanimate objects though
     - he can make himself vanish (covers himself in his aura to become very dark to the point where he’s invisible)
     - he can make rooms pitch black but it drains him and he can’t so it for a long period of time
     - is a somewhat well known rookie thief

     Thought s?

     Story #2)
     - Characters name is Pulse
     - his power is force field generation
     - can create any type of shape (except for super complicated ones & shapes that he has to think about)
     - can create force fields without having to stop whatever he’s doing
     - only works for physical attacks. He can somewhat shield his mind but not very well.
     - fights using fists/force fields (not sure yet)

     Thoughts?

     Story #3)
     Characters name is

844. # Anonymouson 27 Jun 2013 at 3:27 am

     Yeah my third one is sorta complicated. I pressed the submit button by accident sorry!

845. # ShiningKnighton 28 Jun 2013 at 9:15 am

     shift the power to instant teleport anything or anyone where ever the user thinks of, by pointing towards the target and pronouncing the word shift and the user can also teleport themselves as well. so what do you think?

846. # Blue chargeron 29 Jun 2013 at 9:43 pm

     Names for characters in your novel
     -Brent Daniels
     -Cassandra Channels
     -Leo Willkins
     -James Trivolto
     -Jamie Stewert
     -Sam Retrone
     -Dean clovsters
     Those were just some names

847. # drenKon 29 Jun 2013 at 10:55 pm

     My character’s name is Ven & he uses Kinetic Energy.

     His suit stores a bunch of kinetic energy giving him his powers. He’s able to use that energy to fly, shoot beams & create force fields. He can also surround his fists in the stored energy to amply his punches.

     His two weakness is being in an area with little to no kinetic energy and having someone stealth attack him because that uses little to no kinetic energy at all.

     When it comes to making force fields as long as the enemy is hitting it the force field will only get get stronger but it leaves Ven semi helpless.

     It is unknown how much kinetic energy the suit can store.

     Is this solid enough for a character.

848. # Blue chargeron 29 Jun 2013 at 11:18 pm

     Umm it kinda is , u kinda need to know how he got the suit and who he is and u know the origin

849. # Blue chargeron 29 Jun 2013 at 11:23 pm

     And Drenk is ven short for something

850. # Blue chargeron 30 Jun 2013 at 9:05 am

     D0fpx your hero sounds cool so who is the villan

851. # Blue chargeron 30 Jun 2013 at 10:06 am

     Superheroes and super villains were just story’s and movies .One day James Killgore and is three best friends were walking back from school and saw this factory it was a grand opening party . The factory was the future industries by Salvador griffin a powerful business man so James and his friends went so see what was going on they heard an alarm sound the people evacuated . James heard screaming so he ran in the building looking for the sound his friends came looking for James . The sound was upstairs were James and his friends see a man being transformed into a man eating monster a man next to him put on a gas mask and said y are u here and dropped a smoke bomb the next day James found him self in his room staring at the ceiling but something was different
     he was hovering

     P.s. this is just something I thought of its not really a story anyone can take the idea and detail and fix it up

852. # Blue chargeron 30 Jun 2013 at 10:08 am

     Any comments

853. # B. McKenzieon 30 Jun 2013 at 9:53 pm

     Blue Charger, some thoughts and suggestions:
     
     1) It may help to incorporate some unusual choice for the main character that most other superhero protagonists wouldn’t have made in the same situation. For example, maybe he was already at the party because he broke in for [SOME REASON MOSTLY UNIQUE TO HIM].
     
     2) The main character doesn’t get a chance to do all that much in this origin story. He walks into a party, gets knocked out, and then wakes up with superpowers. I’d recommend building the origin more around the choices the character makes and what he does/says than around being in the right place at the right time.
     
     3) I would recommend proofreading more aggressively.

854. # Blue chargeron 01 Jul 2013 at 6:10 am

     Okay that helps thanks mckenzie but ummmm that’s not my real hero anyway and now that u say wat u said I think I might do that

855. # The Answeron 01 Jul 2013 at 5:52 pm

     Ronald Dawson is a tattoo artist and also the protagonist of the story that I’m working on. He has the ability to manipulate his own tattoos and make them manifest in physical form or gain their powers directly, the power was given to him by the god of tattoo & body art also known as Acat (Mayan Mythology) I’m having trouble coming up with weaknesses/limitations & a proper origin. Any ideas?

856. # Bgirly12on 01 Jul 2013 at 10:51 pm

     Hey!!!!! I’m trying to write a book about superheroes and need some help.
     The point of view is from a twelve year old girl named Jaycee. Everyone calls her Jay. Her and her best friend Cammi are part of a moon rock class, with five other kids there age (Missy, Twyla, Jack, Tyler, and Oscar)and the teacher Dean.
     They go on a field trip to a moon rock science lab place, and get some samples to study. As they are heading home, an asteroid hits them(I don’t know why yet) and everyone goes unconscious. They wake up, don’t remember any thing, and head home. They were hit in the country, so no one saw it.
     There memory gradually returns over a few days, and one day Missy comes in shrieking about how she changed into a famous model after looking at a magazine and wishing she was her. They all find out they have powers over the next week or so.
     Here’s the powers: Jay can fly. Cammi can turn invisible. Missy can shape-shift. Twyla can run really fast. Jack can control gravity. Tyler is super strong. I don’t know what Oscars power is, but I’m thinking on the lines if reading minds and things like that. Dean is probably a guy who obsorbs powers, but only one at a time. Jack and Jay help each other with their powers for a while, because they are similar. And yes, I did mean to make them similar.

     Can you help me?!?!?!?!?!

857. # Blue chargeron 03 Jul 2013 at 2:29 pm

     I will help u one u might want to get rid of one or two characters cuz well it takes away from the story and what about the teacher also the United States would know cuz the asteroid and y were the walking instead of a bus

858. # Blue chargeron 03 Jul 2013 at 8:24 pm

     Hey does anyone have a superhero name to this girl named stephenie channels her powers telekinis,intangibility,levetation,invisibility.she got her powers cuz an a experiment she was forced to do . So all I need is a super hero name for her but I can’t think of one

859. # Bgirly12on 03 Jul 2013 at 10:55 pm

     They weren’t walking, dean was driving the bus. The asteroid was something entirely different and didn’t show up on radar our anything else. Thank you for helping, but I’m in love with my characters, and would rather not give any the boot. Sorry, but I don’t know any names, but thank you any way!!!!!!!!! If I find a name, I will post it.

     THANK YOU ANYWAY!!!!!!!!!!!

860. # Blackscaron 03 Jul 2013 at 11:48 pm

     Mm, I was considering a villain with the ability to manipulate friction. I was worried, would this make her too overpowered?
     The other characters in my story have powers which aren’t as dangerous (I’m sorry, but a world without friction would be a dangerous place. Don’t even question that.), but they would most likely be able to fight her decently well. If they tried hard enough, that is.

     She kills one of the main characters with this power by, say, making him slip in front of a moving vehicle.
     He doesn’t survive the crash.

     Would this be too overpowered?

     ((I apologize in advance for how incoherent this post will probably seem; it’s four in the morning where I’m at and I’m not exactly the most eloquent person out there at four in the morning. Also, I swear that I planned said character’s death and will execute it better than I might have implied. ))

     Thanks in advance!
     -Blackscar

861. # Proxie#0on 04 Jul 2013 at 1:57 am

     I believe that no villain can be overpowered. Unless the writer keeps thinking of ridiculous ways to make the protagonist better, and then the villian, and then the protagonist again…makes an annoying cycle.

     An example of something like that would be Dragon Ball (Regular, Z, or GT…) or Naruto (Really, as soon as one character can do one thing, another miraculously learns something else…). This can work to a certain extent. Using those same examples, I would say that for DBZ, it got old after either Frieza or Cell, or maybe even as early as Vegeta…but I personally hated the Babidi/Buu saga. In Naruto, it got old as soon as they started introducing random as all hell abilities for Sharingan and for the Bijju (tailed beasts). I.E. Teleportation, Mind Control, Banishment, etc.

     Anyway, getting off of my rant… I think that idea sounds pretty interesting. My advice is to make sure that the audience can grasp the vastness the ability entails, and doesn’t think that She’s just an ability conglomerate, ala Superman (although it would be much more understandable if the abilities followed along a single tangent, such as friction or empathy)

     And as a final note, I believe character deaths can be very effective when done well. I kill a few characters in my (planned) book too, including the main character…which is going to be difficult. But it can be done. I don’t mean to pry, but could we please hear more about the “set-up”?

862. # B. McKenzieon 04 Jul 2013 at 10:09 am

     “I believe that no villain can be overpowered. Unless the writer keeps thinking of ridiculous ways to make the protagonist better, and then the villian, and then the protagonist again…makes an annoying cycle.” I agree almost 100% of the time. There might be a rare, rare exception where a villain is so powerful relative to the hero that the villain has to start making idiotic mistakes and/or become inexplicably helpless for the hero to win.

863. # Bon 04 Jul 2013 at 2:27 pm

     @Proxie#0

     You aren’t prying at all! What do you mean by set-up, before I begin to type it up?

864. # Blackscaron 04 Jul 2013 at 2:32 pm

     Wow.
     I entered my own name in wrong.

     Wow.
     A negative side-effect to staying up all night, everyone.

865. # Proxie#0on 04 Jul 2013 at 4:04 pm

     What I meant by “Set-Up” is how do we see the personality change* to what it is at TOD (time of death), how it is foreshadowed, just generally how it is executed I guess.

     *I ask this because in my own story, the MC, by the end, has become extraordinarily protective of the people she used to, and now does, love. This leads her to beg for her love interest to just “kill her,” because she is turning ,in short, into a “bad guy.” (It may sound cliche, but I’m working with it…) So does his personality lead him to make the odd decision that gets him killed, I guess.

866. # Blackscaron 04 Jul 2013 at 4:14 pm

     Ah, I believe I understand the question now.
     Give me a moment to type up my explanation, okay? :]

867. # Proxie#0on 04 Jul 2013 at 4:29 pm

     Awesome, take all the time you need man, I’m on liberty till Monday. Speaking of which, it’s hot as [REDACTED] out here.

     HAPPY FOURTH OF JULY EVERYONE!

868. # Blackscaron 04 Jul 2013 at 4:44 pm

     The character in question is not quite a main character, but rather a major character? His death is rather important, as it sets the tone for much of the main plot. (The book takes place at a school for superheros-in-training, as I’m a sucker for those sort of settings.)

     It is implied numerous times in the book that he either had to be taken out of the picture, or he would instigate a chain of events so dangerous that most of the main group would not have survived.

     This information is discovered when one of the main characters goes snooping through some highly confidential files and discovers that said character (We’ll call him ‘Bard’ for now, though it isn’t his real name. We will call said main character ‘Knight’) has contracted an extremely dangerous virus which is usually fatal.
     This virus is called ‘Hemosis’ (temporary name; if it’s already taken, then I shall change it), and it slowly corrupts anyone who has contracted it, deteriorating both their minds and bodies. One of the main symptoms is increased aggression.

     Bard began the book as a kind, if somewhat detached individual. He was best friends with the MAIN main character. (We’ll call this main character ‘Heir’.) Throughout the course of the book, he becomes more and more irritable, even violently lashing out Heir for no apparent reason. He messes up many of his missions, when previously he had a nearly-perfect track record.

     Knight, in a panic, told her best friend (who we will call ‘Seer’) what she had discovered, not thinking that her best friend would tell anyone else.
     The two of them searched Bard’s room while he was out, trying to discover what had caused it. Neither wanted the school to fly into a panic. (No one was quite sure how hemosis was transmitted.) The only thing they found was a journal with somewhat disturbing entries, many describing various hallucinations, and a white devil telling him to ‘fix it’, over and over.
     Days later, a webcam video had been shot with him pleading into the camera, begging the devil to stop.
     Begging the devil to find another to ‘fix it’.

     After a teacher finds one of Knight’s friends dead, stuck upside-down to the school cafeteria’s ceiling via a large patch of rapidly melting ice, both Knight and her friend assume that Bard is the killer due to his condition. (He had cryokinesis/ ice powers.)

     They confide to Seer’s friend, who tries her best to comfort them before she leaves the room to run an errand, promising that she’ll text them the entire time.

     Before they can tell a school official, or anyone, Knight receives a phone call from one of the other characters, this one being female. Whoever called her had blocked the number in advance, so there was no way to identify them.

     It’s cut off rather disturbingly, with screams of “PLEASE, NO!” and other things of that sort from said female, before the line is cut off.

     Bard’s corpse was found within a few hours, crushed under a vehicle, and no one is quite sure what to think.

     They thought that the one who had presumably died on the line was female, and that Bard had been the killer.

     Of course, I can’t reveal the villain, as that would spoil the plot. What do you think? Too predictable? Cliche? Downright corny?

869. # B. McKenzieon 04 Jul 2013 at 5:12 pm

     “I entered my own name in wrong. Wow. A negative side-effect to staying up all night, everyone.” I’ve done worse at 0400 and heard of much worse… E.g. one oil trader’s set of drunken trades lost his company $10 million. The company’s annual income was only $12 million. They ended up losing 7-8 million dollars that year.

870. # Blackscaron 04 Jul 2013 at 5:14 pm

     What do you mean?

871. # Blackscaron 04 Jul 2013 at 5:22 pm

     Oh, wow. Ah, fair point. It could have been worse, though.
     I’ve heard some fairly disturbing stories about things that happened due to drunken mishaps at four in the morning.

     I’m glad I had the good sense to only pass out onto my keyboard with Word open.

     I only had to delete a couple thousand pages of incoherent streams of numbers; at least I didn’t lose $10 million.

     I would have been very concerned if that had happened, considering the fact that I don’t even have $10 million, to begin with.

872. # Bretton 04 Jul 2013 at 5:25 pm

     Hi Blackstar,
     While the first part of your set up appears a bit jumbled, I think you have the makings of a really twisty murder mystery on your hands. I know you said you were going to change the bard’s name, but I would consider keeping it and seeing if there’s not a fresh angle on the bard idea. Maybe the jocks in the story (playing with the jocks vs. creatives troupe). could be like, “To kick your ass, or not to kick your ass, that is the question.” I know that sounds a bit on the cliche side, but don’t be so quick to disregard what could be an interesting story thread
     “The character in question is not quite a main character, but rather a major character? His death is rather important, as it sets the tone for much of the main plot. (The book takes place at a school for superheros-in-training, as I’m a sucker for those sort of settings.)

     It is implied numerous times in the book that he either had to be taken out of the picture, or he would instigate a chain of events so dangerous that most of the main group would not have survived.

     This information is discovered when one of the main characters goes snooping through some highly confidential files and discovers that said character (We’ll call him ‘Bard’ for now, though it isn’t his real name. We will call said main character ‘Knight’) has contracted an extremely dangerous virus which is usually fatal.
     This virus is called ‘Hemosis’ (temporary name; if it’s already taken, then I shall change it), and it slowly corrupts anyone who has contracted it, deteriorating both their minds and bodies. One of the main symptoms is increased aggression.

     Bard began the book as a kind, if somewhat detached individual. He was best friends with the MAIN main character. (We’ll call this main character ‘Heir’.) Throughout the course of the book, he becomes more and more irritable, even violently lashing out Heir for no apparent reason. He messes up many of his missions, when previously he had a nearly-perfect track record.

     Knight, in a panic, told her best friend (who we will call ‘Seer’) what she had discovered, not thinking that her best friend would tell anyone else.”
     This whole section feels jumbled to me. You have good ideas but all of this really needs to be streamlined. Also, clarify who your main character is. Is it Knight? If I missed it, my bad, but it just didn’t seem clear.
     Starting withThe two of them searched Bard’s room, your set up is really good because the twisty murder mystery I mentioned earlier starts to come into play. You said Heir is the main character but it doesn’t seem that way based on this description it feels like Knight is.
     Assuming Knight is the main character can I recommend at least to start that we see the story through knight’s eyes as a first person POV? That way readers know who we are supposed to be following. Are knight and Heir going to be our two protagonists?
     Best of luck!

873. # Bretton 04 Jul 2013 at 5:28 pm

     Darn it! Apologies Blackscar. I misread your name, lol!

874. # Blackscaron 04 Jul 2013 at 5:34 pm

     @Brett

     Oh, my apologies. I was sort of concerned that it didn’t really make sense; I’ll try my hardest to fix it!

     Actually, now that I think about it, Knight would make a better main character. Most of the book centers on her actions, so it would be somewhat stupid to tell it through someone else’s eyes.
     I was planning to do a third-person story, as I don’t trust myself to write a decent first-person narration. However, I will give it a try, as I think that might be helpful.

     The story as a whole was going to focus on Knight, Heir, Seer, and a boy whom I will now dub “Prince”, though Bard will play an important role. There would also be the main villain, whose point of view I planned to switch to, occasionally.

     I know it isn’t recommended to have that many main characters, but I doubt I could tell the story without most of them. They all contribute to the plot equally, though Knight, of course, will be the most important.

     I’m sorry if my explanations seem a bit scattered, or if my word choice is somewhat confusing. Honestly, I’m still rather new to this!

     I appreciate the suggestions, though, and I will take them to heart.

875. # Blackscaron 04 Jul 2013 at 5:35 pm

     @Brett

     Don’t worry, it happens all the time, haha.

876. # Bretton 04 Jul 2013 at 6:14 pm

     Hi Blackscar,
     I’d love to read some chapters if you have any. While you should keep them to a minimum, Don’t worry too much about the povs just make sure that it is very clear which chapter is which i.e. Chapter ONE: KNIGHT; Chapter two: HEIR, Chapter three: PRINCE etc. I’ve seen many first novels, particularly fantasy novels(the blade itself comes to mind) that have multiple POVS and are fantastic. I think there were four in the blade itself I wanna say there were six in Brent weeks first book but don’t quote me on that, there might be more. Ultimately, write the story you want to write. Good writing trumps all. Make it clear who the POVS are in the query letter and say the book is told in mulyiple viewpoints from x, y, and z.
     Best of luck!

877. # Bretton 04 Jul 2013 at 6:21 pm

     *multiple

878. # Blackscaron 04 Jul 2013 at 6:22 pm

     @Brett
     Ah, all right! I’ll keep that in mind!

     Might I have an email address so I can send them to you once I complete them? If you don’t mind, that is!

879. # B. McKenzieon 04 Jul 2013 at 6:30 pm

     “I would have been very concerned if that had happened, considering the fact that I don’t even have $10 million, to begin with.” Considering that the company lost $7 million that year, I’m guessing they didn’t, either.

880. # Blackscaron 04 Jul 2013 at 6:32 pm

     A moment of silence for those poor souls at that particular company…

     Also called: alcohol and managing a company do not mix very well.

881. # Unknownon 04 Jul 2013 at 6:34 pm

     In my book, an advanced super-alien race, the Teazonians, create a Virus that the want to use for galactic domination. Liten, one of a few Teazonians opposing the rest of his species steels the Virus and flees from his home planet, Teazon, into space, and accidently exposes a couple hundred humans, and another alien race, Reddas, to it. Liten finds these them all (mostly by accident) and trains them to use their powers to wipe out his enemies. The leader of the bad guys (don’t have a name) mobilizes the 7 trillion inhabitants of Teazon and they massacre all but 16 of them. I’d like an honest opinion of these few characters.
     Travis- Main protagonist. 18 years old. I don’t know how to describe his power, but he can shape shift himself and any objects into anything. He has short brown hair, and he and his younger brother, Mason, were orphaned at a young age.
     Samantha- Age 17. Travis’s love-interest. She has the power of speed, and is supporting Travis in everyway possible. She has long brown hair, usually tied in a ponytail, and
     Ronald- 17 years old. Ronald has the power of accuracy and is the breakout character of the book. he NEVER takes any situation seriously. His love interest is Sara. The Teazonians will attack, and kill, and he will still crack a joke. He is described as tall with short sand-blonde hair. his mom died during birth, and his dad was an alcoholic.
     Zack- Age 17. Zack is extremely athletic and has noticeable AD/HD. His power is to control the winds. (No background Info.)
     Mason- age 14. Mason is Travis’s younger Brother. He can control shadows, but normally has a cheery attitude. He looks almost identical to his brother.
     Sara and Jason- Age 17. Sara and Jason are Twins. Both control ice. Jason is just downright rude and HATES Ronald. Sara is extremely shy and loves Ronald. Both have blonde hair. ( No background Info.)
     Ben- Age 16. Ben is probably the most useless character in the whole book. He is a water-breather in an alien war. He feels like he has no place and is a loner. (No Background Info)
     Doug- Age 18. Doug is an African American, and the kindest character in the book. he is the voice of reason among the group and can teleport. his parents abandoned him at birth.
     Liten- An immortal Teazonian who has a healing ability. (no background Info.)
     Toxic- A codename given to a Redda. Toxic can generate acids, and is basically a giant snake with 4 legs, and a pair of arms. Where he comes from, humans are basically a food source.
     Scott- Age 16. Scott’s power is extreme reflexes and agility. Ironically, he gets his legs blower off, but Liten builds him a pair of robotic legs. (this leads to Ronald calling him a cyborg.)
     Stu- Stu basically incinerates whatever he touches. (Nothing else. HELP!)
     These are only a few characters. I will put up some more information on the others later. IF you have an opinion about a character, or think of something I can use for a character’s past, please tell me.

882. # Blackscaron 04 Jul 2013 at 6:34 pm

     @Brett

     Thank you! I should finish chapter one sometime tonight or tomorrow.

883. # Bretton 04 Jul 2013 at 6:54 pm

     Hi Blackscar,
     Ok. I’ll be watching for it.

884. # Proxie#0on 04 Jul 2013 at 7:51 pm

     @ Unknown

     I would advise giving some more thought to the characters than just their Names, abilities, and what they look like. It would be much easier to critique them if you could post some information about their personalities.

     After all, the powers don’t make the hero, the hero makes use of the powers. (Kind of like how guns don’t kill, people do use guns to kill though…and don’t let this spark a political conversation. Please, dear god…)

885. # Bretton 04 Jul 2013 at 7:59 pm

     Hi unknown,
     First of all, can I just say that this story is right up my alley. the only thing you’re missing is a cop lol
     Ok so going in order:
     Travis- I don’t like the name. it just seems too…mundane. his powers however are not, but here’s the thing make sure he can only do one thing or the other at any given time (He can’t shape shift things and shapeshift himself at the same time and vice versa. maybe he has a bit of a chip on his shoulder being an orphan.
     Samantha- try not to make her so supportive and have her call him on his crap. maybe she knows something about why travis and mason are orphans
     ronald- I know exactly what you mean by breakout character, but it’s a tricky thing so tread carefully and try not to use ronald as a crutch when you don’t know what else to do. He struggles with the demon in the bottle (hint, hint, wink, wink)
     Zach- how noticable is the ADHD going to be? I’ve had friends who have ADHD. one would fly off the handle at thre most unexpected time. Another had certain ticks such as waving his hands or being wildly ethusiatic or dramatic when it wasn’t neccessary. Here are some links:
     http://www.webmd.com/add-adhd/guide/adhd-symptoms
     http://www.diseasesymptomstreatment.com/adhd.html/
     http://www.cdc.gov/ncbddd/adhd/ As for his background, maybe his grandmother with alzeimers has to take care of im because his parents never wanted to have kids to begin with, so when they found out about the adhd they pawned him off on a grandmother years ago and never looked back
     mason- He’s really naive and thinks his brother can do no wrong (a litle like the mokouba/kaiba dynamic on yugioh)
     Ok now jason and sara. Jason hates ronald because in a drunken rage ronald’s dad smacked sara while she was visiting ronald one day so he always worries ronald will do the same to her. She has a special connection with Zach. Sara has jason wrapped around her finger. (I think this last part could still be plausible even if she is shy) If Sara calls, Jason drops the rude demeanor and acts as a brother should.
     Ben- So he’s aIquaman?? I jest, I jest. Here’s a thought, and I not joking when I say this: Maybe he’s a loner because he’s gay and his family is devoutly christian? Liten and Travis look out for him.
     Doug- maybe he’s from Teazon and doesn’t know it??
     Liten- Sooooo many possibilities here. Maybe there’s only a few immortals on teazon? maybe he likes hanging out with travis and co because they offer him a different perspective on immortality. maybe he was raised to believe a teazonian is only as good as his legacy. maybe he’s pissed he has to deal with the humans?
     toxics- they hate the teazonians for what was done to them, especially liten.
     Scott- I really don’t think you need him. Save hi fo the next book.
     Stu- ok, here’s something. He incinerates whatever he touches only when he’s close to liten. maybe they ran experiments on him and the virus activated his power.
     For the bad guy’s name, how about kyrell?
     Instead of travis, how about trevor?
     If you feel like I am hijacking your story, by all means disregard all of this.
     I’d love to read when you’re ready!
     Best of luck!

886. # B. McKenzieon 04 Jul 2013 at 8:00 pm

     Yeah, seriously. Pretty much everybody I know (besides P. Mac) would be axed if they lost $1 million.

887. # B. McKenzieon 04 Jul 2013 at 8:02 pm

     “After all, the powers don’t make the hero, the hero makes use of the powers.” Superpowers (and capabilities in general) are a means to an end; the end is an interesting story. An interesting personality is probably the most important thing a character can bring to the picture.

888. # Bretton 04 Jul 2013 at 8:21 pm

     Hi again unknown,
     Feel free to email me @ bsl1290@aol.com

889. # Blue chargeron 04 Jul 2013 at 8:36 pm

     Yeh unknown I think proxie is right but who are the main characters

890. # Bretton 04 Jul 2013 at 8:53 pm

     Hi Blue Charger,
     All due respect to you, proxie, and b.mac, but I really think all unknown needed was some ideas to get the wheels turning. Just judging by the amount of characters listed I’d say this was an ensemble headlined by Travis and/or liten. Give’em a couple what if scenarios.

891. # Blackscaron 04 Jul 2013 at 9:03 pm

     @Brett

     First chapter has been sent!

892. # Blackscaron 04 Jul 2013 at 9:11 pm

     @Brett

     Done!

893. # Bretton 04 Jul 2013 at 9:27 pm

     Blackscar
     I got it, it’s awesome. no worries about the typos. my only issue with it is a couple nit picky word choice things.

894. # Blackscaron 04 Jul 2013 at 9:37 pm

     @Brett
     Thanks!

     Really? What would those be?

     Also, do the characters seem too extreme?

895. # Bretton 04 Jul 2013 at 10:25 pm

     I don’t know what you mean by extreme. Alice seems like a typical teenager. I’ve sent you an email. Great job!

896. # Proxie#0on 05 Jul 2013 at 3:05 am

     I was just hoping to have a Character quickly reviewed, hoping to avoid any cliches or annoying stereotypes.

     The Main Character is a woman in her mid 30′s

     Audrey is a Kind, Reliable, Intelligent and Trustworthy person. All those who know her would say that she is Loyal to a fault. To put it in context, if a train were coming after someone she cared about, and she was the only one there, she would willingly stand in their way to save them. However, Audrey is also very introverted an initially un-trusting of people (and more wary of men than women). She is a strong and independent mother figure (towards her brother and her students, and her best friend Marylyn) though she wears this mask partially to hide her chronic depression. This is mostly onset by past events with her father as well as being the main cause of her husband’s death.

     Her abilities are as follows:

     Empathy:

     -Audrey has the ability to sense emotions (not thoughts!) that other people are feeling, and can tell “who” those feelings are directed at.

     -The drawback to this is that it does not give much information, and that she can become overwhelmed when it is in use, as well as the fact that some people can tell when she is “reading” them.

     Psychometry:

     -Audrey can see the past 24 hours of a persons life by…er…consuming a portion of their living DNA/Bodily Fluid. THIS DOES NOT MEAN CANNIBALISM! She just has to acquire a relatively small sample. (i.e. Scratching someone and acquiring blood sample, kissing, going “all the way”) The trip she goes on is always seen from the person shes seeing through’s perspective, as if she were that person.

     -The drawback to this is that she cannot “fast forward” or “rewind” the memories, so she only has one chance to see them. Also, she goes into a trance-like state whenever she begins a psychometric trip, and cannot move her body herself. She has little control over when this happens, so it has also hindered her love life. Time passes fairly quickly in her trance, and she can awake in a little over 4 hours. She can also be overwhelmed by the person shes seeing through’s emotions. If she is awoken from her trance, she gets sick, severity depending on how close she was to completing her “viewing.”

897. # Blackscaron 05 Jul 2013 at 8:59 am

     @Brett

     Thank you!

     I’ve replied to said email accordingly.

898. # Bretton 05 Jul 2013 at 9:53 am

     proxie,
     I think you’ve created a very strong lead character. The fact that she is shy and that she is an empath makes for a nice combination I think.
     What exactly happened with her father? Did he abandon her?
     The only hitch I can see right now is the dna eating thing. I know you said it isn’t cannibalism, but I think you’ll have to be careful about how you handle because it has the possibility of coming off as weird. In terms of only being able to see the memories once, I think there’s some great drama in that idea. Maybe she misinterprets a memory and it winds up getting her in trouble? I’d love to read some chapter if you have them.
     Best of luck!

899. # Bretton 05 Jul 2013 at 9:55 am

     Blackscar,
     I’ve sent you an email containing the first two chapters.
     Thanks.

900. # Unknownon 05 Jul 2013 at 10:42 am

     Thanks for your opinion. I will use some your ideas, namely The main villain being called Kyrell. I’m sorry if I wasn’t clear that Toxic is an individual Redda, and is the only being, other than the other good Teazonians, who Trusts Liten completely. But Thanks for your opinion.
     Hate to be a burden, but can you take a look at these other characters and tell me what you think.

     Heroes-

     Nick- Nick can clone himself. He is quiet and tends to speak only when spoken too. He tends to hangout with is own clones most of the time. I guess this would classify him as a loner.

     Kelly- Kelly can control lightning, and is Scott’s longtime girlfriend. That’s all I have.

     Jessica- Jessica can create force fields. She has a crush on Nick, but is too embarrassed to admit it to anyone. Even herself. That’s all I have.

     Coleman and Jun – Coleman is an 18 year old American boy that travles with Jun. the duo meet Travis after the Teazonian Empire gain control over earth. Coleman’s power is to comprehend any language. even if he has never heard it before. He is best friends with Jun. Jun is a 10 year old Japanese boy who speaks no English whatsoever. Naturally, he and Coleman get along quite well because he is the only one who can understand him.

     I forgot to say this, but all Teazonians are immortal. They have mud-brown skin, and have 4 horns on the top of their head. Some other Teazonians are…

     Barlam- A Teazonian Scientist who helped to create the Virus that gave Travis and the others their powers. When the Teazonian Empire (The bad guys), took over the planet, he sided with Liten. He sees himself as an outcast with no friends, even though he is not.

     Treert/Phantom- Treert was the first being to have been experimented on with the Virus. His power is more of a curse. He was already immortal, but the Virus made him intangible, and he can not reverse it. He finds being stuck in his ghost form, hence the name Phantom, irritating. He is allied with Liten, and is Barlam’s best friend.

     Thoids- Thoids was placed in the Teazonian Empire by Liten as a spy. That’s all.

     Kyrell- The leader of the Teazonian Empire. He has the power to control machinery.

     Karnk- Kyrell’s ruthless 2nd in command. His parents sided with Liten, but he hunted them down and killed them for betraying the Teazonian Empire.

     Jex- A hot-headed Teazonian who Hates Kyrell, but Hates Liten even more. He lives to gain authority, and thinks he can lead the Empire better than anyone else.

     Liedge- A Teazonian who just follows Kyrell out of fear. He counts Jex as his friend, but knows Jex would kill him if he thought it would make Kyrell notice him. as a result, he is the kindest member in the Teazonian Empire, but still a ruthless and deadly fighter.

     I also have a few normal humans.

     Dylan- Dylan is Jason’s best friend, but likes to hang out with Ronald, Zach, and the others. he is the only one of Travis’s friends who doesn’t have a power, but is a computer genius, and constantly proves himself to Liten as an honorary member of his team.

     General Lowell Palmer- When the Teazonian Empire Wipes out all but 16 of Liten’s superheroes, The Empire attacks, and conquers, Earth. General Lowell Palmer survives and forms a small resistance that eventually hooks up with Liten and his team. He doesn’t trust Liten, or the other aliens, but wants his planet free…No matter what.

     Captain Noah Howell- Noah was stationed in the mid-Atlantic when the Teazonians took earth. He is eventualy recruited by Travis to joine Liten’s Resistance. He doesn’t trust The aliens, or the Superheros, but, like his friend Lowell, wants to free earth.

     Brandon- Brandon is a tank. he is best friends with Jake, and trusts Liten and his heroes.

     Jake- Jake is either Drunk, hung over, or both at the same time. So, naturally, he doesn’t make the best decisions, and relies on Brandon to make most of his decisions for him. When he gathers with Travis and Liten, Jason jokes that he may be Ron’s father.(Sorry I wasn’t clear on this, Ron’s dad abandoned him after birth, and it is the only topic that can ever anger Ronald) Jake’s personality is described as a stereotypical redneck.

     If anybody has an opinion for one of the characters, please tell me.

901. # Blackscaron 05 Jul 2013 at 12:06 pm

     @Brett

     I’ve received the chapters, and I sent you an email telling you my opinion.

902. # Bretton 05 Jul 2013 at 1:08 pm

     Hi Blackstar,
     I got you’re email. (I was kinda relieved when I saw smiley face up there, lol) I sent you one back. Could I read your next chapter?

903. # Proxie#0on 05 Jul 2013 at 1:19 pm

     @Brett

     First of all, I would like to thank you.

     “What exactly happened with her father? Did he abandon her?”
     Egh…
     Long story short. He beat his wife, who ended up leaving him with his kids. (He beat her because he has very bad abandonment issues, and she cheated on him. He only found out because their son was not his.) As his kids grew up, and began showing signs of maturity and planning to strike out on their own, he began…ahem…beating them until they decided to stay.

     His issues even, by the time Audrey was about 18 or 19, developed to the point where he tried to recreate the “loving, happy relationship” he thought he’d had with his ex-wife. He started calling her by her mothers name, and even tried to have an in-home marriage.

     Throughout the very abusive relationship with both his son and daughter, Audrey satiated his…ahem…hunger to keep her brother safe. One day, when they both grew too angry and tired at it all, they hatched a plan to kill him. Audrey would “seduce” him, and then Micheal would kill him.

     It backfired, and, in short, Micheal had a sever concussion (thrown through a window) Audrey was beaten over the head with a lamp (resulting, after awaking from a six month coma, in her abilities) and Jason nearly died in an ensuing house fire. The two “kids” went to trial against their father, and only managed to get him an insanity plea (still working on that one…) He reformed very quickly, or seemed to. And by the time of the start of my book, he is let out, “a shining example of what asylum(s) can do.”

     The only hitch I can see right now is the dna eating thing…coming off as weird.”

     I’m glad it came off as weird. It is supposed to be a little strange, and difficult to use under normal circumstances. In the first chapter (unwritten, I plan out the entire book before writing…and this one has a lot of betrayals/conspiracy, so it’s actually necessary) I intend on showing her speaking to a person claiming her brother had assaulted and attempted to kidnap her. She was going to feign falling down and trying to grab onto the alleged kidnapees arm and scratch it, “accidentally” drawing blood. The rest of the chapter would be a psychometric trip.

     “In terms of only being able to… Maybe she misinterprets a memory and it winds up getting her in trouble?”

     That is exactly what I’m doing. I have her entire motive throughout the story being trying to prove her brothers innocence (along with another, very dark story. Her brothers is really a stepping stone to the bigger picture) I was going to show some doubt throughout the story, but by the time tat act comes to a close, she finds that her brother not only did what he was accused of, but much, much more. And basically, everything she did was a waste. (Not in the sense that it was a waste of time for the audience. This revelation actually pushes the story further forward. That…and I have a few other “readings gone wring” in here too.

     And i apologize if this post seems too long or excessive…just trying to answer a few questions.

     Proxie Out.

904. # Bretton 05 Jul 2013 at 1:43 pm

     Hi unknown,
     I was worried that I inadvertenly scared you off. lol
     So glad you’re keeping kyrell!
     As for the new characters, I’d be careful because it feels like you are including too many people. The human characters I get, but may I suggest that you leave Nick Kelly and Jessica out. I think you could leave coleman and jun in because its a fun little twist on the language barrier cliche. Remember, it’s not about what cliches you use, but how you use them. I’m going to suggest amalgamating a few characters if you want to use some parts of them.
     That being said, I’ll give you some food for thought regarding the three of them:
     Nick: Are you sticking with the whole ben being gay idea I had, if so, maybe nick could be gay and nobody knows it, especially jessica. if not, then I think he and ben should be friends with a majority of Nick’s storyline with ben. I don’t think it would work as well if they were separate since they are both loners.
     Kelly- maybe shes an uncover agent for kyrell
     jessica- maybe she’s friends with sara and thinks jun and coleman are annoying??
     Everything else is pretty good, but like I said, Be careful about how you plug these guys in, so you don’t overload the story. Going forward I’d suggest a very loose narrative outline of the book, going chapter by chapter a paragraph each. it’s nothing you’d have to be committed to, but at least there would be a version of the story on paper with a beginning, middle, and end?
     Feel free to send me an email @ bsl1290@aol.com
     Best of luck

905. # Bretton 05 Jul 2013 at 1:46 pm

     Unknown,
     When I’m talking about amalgamating I’m talking about Nick, kelly, and Jessica

906. # Proxie#0on 05 Jul 2013 at 1:55 pm

     Oh, and just so in case it becomes important, I have a Chapter/Scene Organizer that keeps things in order, including characters involved, viewpoints, developments, subtext. Normally I wouldn’t go into so much detail with it all, but as I said, part of my story is a conspiracy…and involves falsifying information, crime scenes, etc. I’m just using it so that I can keep everything in order for myself.

     Proxie Out

907. # Blackscaron 05 Jul 2013 at 2:34 pm

     @Brett

     You had nothing to worry about! It was fine!

     I look firward to your next chapters!

     And, I’ll send you my next chapters once I finish them, okay?

908. # Bretton 05 Jul 2013 at 3:05 pm

     Hi Blackscar,
     Sounds Good. Looking forward to it!
     Best of luck!

909. # Anonymouson 06 Jul 2013 at 1:46 pm

     Ok, I think I got the outline and characters of my story done. If anyone could look through it and give me your opinion, it would be very much appreciated.
     Travis and Mason are two orphaned siblings. After their parents died in a car accident when they were six, and four, they were put in an orphanage. Fast forward 10 years, The two are still at the orphanage, but they have made some friends close to their own age.
     Ronald, who was abandoned by his alcoholic parents as an infant, is a happy, careless joker, who takes almost nothing seriously. He and Jason often get into fights over the stupidest things.
     Sara and Jason, who ran away from their abusive parents when they were five, are a fairly serious duo. Jason is overprotective of his sister, and hates Ron’s guts, personality, and just him in general. Sara has a crush on Ronald, and is extremely shy, but gets enjoys hanging out with her brother and his friends.
     Adam, who was left sent to the orphanage by his parents, seams like a big, muscular brute, but is really kind, and quiet, tending to speak only when spoken to.
     Doug, is an African American boy, and is the kindest person at the orphanage. Having been abandoned by his parents when he was 5 years old, Doug feels that it is his fault he was abandoned, and is constantly acting kind, trying to forgive himself. He is the voice of reason and wisdom among the group, and, to an outsider, appears much older than he really is.
     Dylan, who was abandoned after birth, is skilled with computers and is an expert hacker, and Doug’s closest friend.
     Sam, having ran away from when she was 7, has been wandering for 8 years, before she finally arrives at the orphanage. She immediately falls for Travis, and bonds with each of the others as if they were her own brothers, and sister.
     A few days after Sam’s arrival, Travis and Doug awaken to, what sounds like explosions from above the orphanage. Their curious, the friends go outside to investigate, and find hundreds of UFOs in the middle of a battle. A stray shot from one of the UFOs incinerates the orphanage, and the others inside. Before the friends can react, one of the Ships abducts them, and warps off into space, taking them away from the fight. When Travis awakens, he finds that he and his friends are locked in a large metallic room. Soon after the awaken, they are confronted by several aliens.
     Liten, the leader of the group, explains that they have accidently been exposed to an alien super virus, and they now have abilities like no one else. Liten also informs them that his species, the Teazonians are in a war between each other. One group wanting to dominate and enslave the galaxy, while the other wishes to protect it from their ruthless advisories. Several hundred good Teazonians, along with 2 other alien races want to stop the evil Teazonian Empire from decimating other planets. The two other alien races, Reddas, and Energoids, are allied with Liten’s group. Energroids are all but extinct, the last known survivor, Cobline, remaining with Liten, While Reddas, large, multi-limbed snake-beings, work with Liten by the thousands. Banding together, with Liten, and his crew, Travis and his friends must learn to use their powers to help save Earth, and humanity from an impending invasion of trillions of ruthless killers.

     Ben, A bisexual with an extremely low self-esteem, Scott and Kelly, a kind, yet cocky couple who think they can manage to help Liten by themselves, Stu, a teen who fears he will hurt someone with his power of incineration, Jessica, an extremely rude girl who likes secretly Stu, and Chris, a mentally unstable mind-reader,Treert, Thoids, and Barlam (Good Teazonians) also are characters in the story, but they don’t come in until later.
     Kyrell, Karnk, Jex, and Liedge are also the leaders of the Teazonian Empire.
     If any one has any opinion, or idea whatsoever that they think I can use to improve this story, I’d be happy to hear it.

910. # bretton 06 Jul 2013 at 2:35 pm

     hi Anonymous,
     I’m actually in the Microsoft store right now typing on some random computer, lol what you have sounds good so far. i’ll give you more details about it later.
     Thanks.

911. # Unknownon 06 Jul 2013 at 3:16 pm

     Thanks brett.
     The Anonymoys above is actually the Unknown person.

912. # Bretton 06 Jul 2013 at 7:20 pm

     Hi Unknown!
     I figured. ok so like I said before I like what you did here.
     Travis and mason- like the car accident angle. the only question is was it really a car accident.
     Ronald- I like the idea of him being abandoned by both of his parents. Is he going to struggle with alcohol? With the parents not around I think the alcohol angle works even better. Is that the plan?
     Sarah and Jason- I think no parents angle gives her and ronald even more to bond over. like the whole clashing personality thing between Jason and Ron
     Adam- he sounds good, but do you really need him? This really comes down to character overload.
     Doug- friggin perfect! Change nothing about him!
     Dylan- this one needs a little more dimension. maybe he’s bitter about being abandoned?
     Sam- like what you did, but she needs more. maybe she has trust issues from being on the run because some truckers took advantage of her but because of these experiences she is the most street smart of the group, maybe there’s a will they or won’t they dynamic between her and travis, but they are best friends regardless. Both of them deny that there’s something more between them.
     the Liten stuff is good, my only other concern is this:
     “Jessica, an extremely rude girl who likes secretly Stu, and Chris, a mentally unstable mind-reader,Treert, Thoids, and Barlam (Good Teazonians) also are characters in the story, but they don’t come in until later.”
     How much later? it’s going to feel like over load depending on where in the story these characters come in. Who’s chris, do you need him?
     This is really starting to come together! Keep at it!
     Oh and I’m really happy about Ben!

913. # Unknownon 07 Jul 2013 at 4:06 pm

     hi brett,
     I know I have alot of characters, and the sad part is i plan on having at least a couple hundred superheros. (I’m not even going to try to think up of names or powers for them) but by the end of the book, i only have about 16 heros left.
     I know Chris doesn’t really fit in to the story, and i don’t have any ideas for his past simpely because I don’t intend on have either him or Adam surviving, but i have Chris as a character because i thought it would be amusing to have an insane mindreader.
     The other characters, like Scott, Kelly, Jessica, and Stu don’t come in until the middle of the story, when Liten gathers other humans who were exposed to the virus, to train them to help his cause.
     I don’t think i’ll give Ronald a problem with alcohol. I just say he remembers how they acted, and doesn’t want to become like them.
     I have Dylan surviving, but he gets seperated during the battle with the Teazonian Empire. He comes in again in the next part of my story as a member of General Lowell Palmer’s resistance unit.
     Sam and Travis will remain friends throughout the first part of the story, and they deny that they are in a relationship, but this will change in the seccond part of my story. I will deffinetly use your idea of her having more street smarts than the others. I have started wrighting, and if you want, I can send you chapters bit by bit as i finish.

914. # Anonymouson 08 Jul 2013 at 2:40 am

     what about pyrokinesis (the power to create/control fire)/

915. # Bretton 08 Jul 2013 at 1:48 pm

     Hi Unknown,
     I get what you’re trying to do. I’ve read novels such as the way of shadows where there must have been fifty different characters (don’t get me started on the saga of seven suns, first book alone there was at least sixty, whew boy) It’s doable, but I think that having a very detailed outline would help to keep it all straight. I’m glad that you seem to have a loose structure now for how you’d like things to play out.
     “I have Dylan surviving, but he gets separated during the battle with the Teazonian Empire. He comes in again in the next part of my story as a member of General Lowell Palmer’s resistance unit.”
     So then you definitely have plans for more books? Awesome! Usually the ‘rule’ is to focus on one book at a time, but I myself have never followed it because I can’t help but think in terms of prequels and sequels. I had to ask to ask myself, “ok we have this great big mythology, it’s just a matter of which story is being told, this go round” I’m saying you can’t use all of them you should, but if the cast gets too bloated think about moving two or three to the next book. I like your plans for Dylan, but at this point start thinking about how you tell the story: Is it multiple POV, first person, third person, etc
     For pyrokinectics, just be careful how you use it. If you are keeping stu, I don’t think pyrokinectics are necessary. “if you want, I can send you chapters bit by bit as i finish.”
     Yes, Please!! Email me @ Bsl1290@aol.com
     Best of luck!

916. # Unknownon 08 Jul 2013 at 3:34 pm

     Hello again brett
     I can’t keep my mind on writing 1 book at a time. If I get writers block, I tend to see what I can do for a possible sequel. I already have a compleated plans for 3 more books. I guess I’m getting ahead of my self a bit. The only downside for the 3 are characters. I already have way too many, and I still keep coming up with (what I think are) good hero, villen, and human characters. I’m going to have a hard time picking and choosing them for the next stories.
     As for how I’m going to tell the story, it will be told in third person.
     I will be sure to send you the first few chapters when I finish them.

917. # Acaeriaon 09 Jul 2013 at 2:23 pm

     Okay, I have an idea for a fantasy style superhero novel that I want you guys to judge.

     So, the book is built on the premise that, three thousand years ago, sixteen angels rebelled and were exiled to earth. However, there they began to cause war among mortals, and chaos prevailed. In retaliation, heaven sent down one of their strongest angels, Acianna, to destroy them. Fifteen of the Dark angels were destroyed, but the final Angel, a fiend known as Archangel, is imprisoned in a volcano. Now, three thousand years later, Archangel is stirring, and heaven has sent five angels Back to earth to reborn as mortals with unique abilities.
     So, in the book, these five kids- Emma, Brandon, Eleanor, Amy and Josh- are kidnapped by Mrs Twigg, a crazy old cat lady who tells them the truth. So, the Angels- their teamname- go into a fight against Archangel, but it takes a lot of work and such. Anyway, here are the powers and nicknames/superhero names of the main characters. Do they work?

     Emma: Emma can fly, like all of the Angels. She has the power of ice/water manipulation, which allows her to bend water to her will and freeze it. However, this power renders her dehydrated and light-headed after use. It can also be used when there is water in a 5 metre radius. She can also breathe underwater, but this too has a drawback. After a long time using the power, it becomes harder and harder to breathe above water. Emma’s other name is Icegirl.

     Brandon: Again, Brandon can fly. His first power is telekinesis. With this ability he can lift objects, but the heavier the object the more strain it will put him under. If he tried to lift an impossibly heavy object (such as, say, a mountain) it would put him under so much strain that he would pass out without doing anything. Using this power can also give him a migraine. His other power is gravity manipulation, which allows him to decrease and increase the force of gravity in the room in which he stands. However, this cannot be used as a weapon as it cannot be directed, and affects everyone in the room. Brandon’s other name is Airhead.

     Eleanor: Eleanor, like the others, can fly. She has the ability of shapeshifting, where she has two natural forms- her human and animal form. If she wishes to take the appearance of another human or animal, she must first touch them for at least three seconds. The ability is rather draining, and can only be used for an hour at a time. Her second power is robbing others of their senses. This requires a five-second contact with the person she intends to rob, and she cannot choose which sense she deactivated. Likewise, she can only deactivate one sense at a time. The power causes pain for both Eleanor and the victim- an agonising burning at the point of contact. Eleanor’s other name is Wild Card.

     Amy: Amy can fly, too- though she dislikes flying, and all of her powers. Her first power is invisibility, which happens unwillingly, when she is feeling frightened. Her second power is possession, with which she can take over another’s body for a period of two hours, during which her own body remains catamose. This is activated by digging her nails into her victim’s skin. When the two hours are up, the victim and Amy will regain control of their own bodies, and will pass out immediately afterwards. During possession periods she cannot use her own powers, but can use her posessee’s. Amy’s other name is Visi.

     Josh: Josh is also an Angel, so can obviously fly. His first power is pockets, which I made up myself. This power gives him pockets of air hidden in his skin, in which he can stash pretty much anything without feeling it. His second power I called resource, with which he can mold anything into a desired state. He cannot, however, change the state of something (he couldn’t turn stand into water). Josh’s other name is Shortstuff.

     I’d really love to hear what you think!

918. # Bretton 09 Jul 2013 at 6:03 pm

     Hi Unknown,
     I think the best thing for you to do is to create a kitchen sink draft and then par it down from there. Remember, first drafts are just that. As Dean Wesley smith once said, “Dare to be bad, then fix it.” (don’t worry about fixing it when you send it to me, just give me what you have).
     Best of luck!

919. # Blue chargeron 09 Jul 2013 at 6:25 pm

     Hey does anyone have a superhero name to this girl named stephenie channels her powers telekinis,intangibility,levetation,invisibility.she got her powers cuz an a experiment she was forced to do . So all I need is a super hero name for her but I can’t think of one
     And her personality is outgoing proud and at war with her feelings she hides that she is sad from her betrayal of her father her physical appearance she’s hot

920. # Unknownon 10 Jul 2013 at 6:29 am

     Blue charger, the powers this character has sort of makes me think of a ghost. Mabey try somthing paranormal related. Just a suggestion.

921. # carlyon 10 Jul 2013 at 8:11 am

     What about the power of shootin lazor beams out of your eyes is that a super power?

922. # Proxie no. 0on 10 Jul 2013 at 5:03 pm

     Hello B. Mac. I just wanted to ask, and feel fairly guilty about it, but would you mind clean – slating my review forum? I’d just like to start off on a more formal note.

923. # Blue chargeron 11 Jul 2013 at 7:26 pm

     Okay thx unknown

924. # Blackscaron 13 Jul 2013 at 3:25 pm

     Hello there!

     I was wondering if by any chance I could receive some feedback on an idea I’ve come up with?

     It relates to the powers in my novel, and, subsequently, how the characters receive them. I apologize if the following information isn’t streamlined; it’s not supposed to be in any chronological order, really. Actually, it may end up falling that way. I’m not sure. Bleh.

     Basically, every baby is injected with a sort of serum when they’re born, in order to see whether or not said child will develop superpowers.

     Those who do are labeled ‘Supers’ (terribly uncreative; I’ll try to come up with something better.)

     Those who do not are labeled ‘Mutants’, as seventy percent of all humans born are Supers.

     However, the injection is not safe; it can twist and mutate, causing terrible side-effects. This includes a thirst for human blood, loss of coherent thought and speech, and a temper which spikes at the drop of a pin.

     The mutation/virus only seems to develop in Supers, but it may be possible for it to begin from a Mutant, too.
     The virus carries through bodily fluids (i.e blood, saliva, etc.), and may be passed in any number of ways.

     Both Mutants and Supers can be infected.

     The infection itself spreads from the point of contact; once it reaches the heart and brain, the symptoms set in. There is no known cure, but there are ways to stop the infection before it can fully take over.

     For example, if one was infected in the wrist, they could cut their own arm off to prevent it from spreading. (I’m not a doctor, I could be wrong on this. I have no idea what I’m doing, haha.)

     However, about 4% of those who are infected exhibit odd behavior: they don’t lose their ability to function like a normal human, but still retain the craving for blood. (Vampires. Yep. I’m totally creative. Somebody roll out the red carpet and hand me an award.
     Wow, my sarcasm is horrible today.) This only seems to happen to Mutants who are infected, and, like previously stated, only a small, small percentage of them.

     So, uh, what do you think? Is it stupid, or no?

     -Blackscar

925. # Blue chargeron 14 Jul 2013 at 12:01 pm

     No blackscar that’s amazing so amazing I wanna here more like who are the heros are all supers infected and are mutants are basically humans right

926. # Blackscaron 14 Jul 2013 at 12:08 pm

     @Blue Charger

     Thanks!

     Yes, all of the Mutants are humans.

     Not every Super is infected; only a few end up contracting it. Some Mutants and Supers are carriers, which basically means that they have the disease but don’t show any symptoms, and instead transfer it to others.

     What do you mean by ‘who are the heroes’? Do you want me to tell you the main characters?

927. # Blue chargeron 15 Jul 2013 at 9:15 pm

     Yeh blackscar who are the main characters

928. # Blackscaron 16 Jul 2013 at 2:34 am

     @ Blue Charger

     Well, I have a grand total of four main characters, possibly five. For now, I will say that there are four. If nobody minds, might I please have a bit of critique on them? Here, have a list I composed at 5 A.M. with little sleep:

     Alice Brandt, age 17- The main MC, she’s an irascible Mutant with an irritable disposition. Most of her anger isn’t actual fury, but instead pent-up frustration at the way the world is run. She utterly loathes the Supers for their sense of superiority, and how the Mutants are mistreated as a result. She has a penchant for video games and doomsday scenarios, much to her best friend’s chagrin. Alice has been described by others as “the textbook definition of a Tsundere, right down to the ridiculous comments.” She’s also about as dense as a slab of granite when it comes to romantic endeavors.
     She’s a skilled fighter, and would rarely attack anyone without provocation, and even then she’d prefer a verbal battle to a physical one. She also hates the color red, and has a certain fondness for baby animals. She’s also afraid of heights, and isn’t fond of blood due to its color.

     Erik Reinhardt, age 17- Alice’s best friend, Erik is dramatic, a hopeless romantic, and would fight to the death over criticism over one of his crappy rom-coms. Erik is an Aerokinetic, meaning he manipulates wind, but he holds the title of being the only Super in the entire school whom Alice doesn’t wish a slow, painful death upon. He hails from an extremely wealthy family, and tends to secretly buy things for his friends when they aren’t paying attention. He tends to exaggerate, turning a simple statement like “he got lost on the way to the store” into “unable to regain control of the wheel, he swerved his car down the misty street, despair suffocating the air inside the behicle. He had no recollection of the past events, and he seemed to have stopped in treacherous, uncharted territory”, or something along those lines. That is usually the point when his friends all but implore him to shut up. He isn’t totally nice, however, as he does have a haughty, pretentious side that he tries to suppress. Suffers from severe arachnophobia to the point where he’ll freeze up if he so much as sees a spider. He’s also prone to seasickness.

     Seth Grayson, age 17- A sarcastic Mutant guy who tries far to hard to be considered cool, Seth has been trained by his father to always keep his cool, no matter the circumstances. Seth is usually prepared for any situation with a sardonic quip or ridiculous metaphor. He has an interest in dual-wielding swords, particularly katanas due to their light weight and, according to him, cool appearance. He usually comes off as a bit of an ass whenever he tries to crack a joke, as he usually doesn’t realize that certain topics are incredibly sensitivd to some people. He tries to apologize once he realizes what he’s done, however. Seth also has a habit of calling most people ‘dude’, or even just using it for filler in a conversation. He’s also quite skilled at cooking, as his mother was rarely around as a young teenager, which meant he mainly saw his father, who could not cook to save his life, and his twin sister who looks nothing like him. Said sister possesses the culinary skills of a rock. Seth has an admittedly irrational fear of ants, and he’s also not very fond of total darkness, either.

     Charlotte Grayson, age 17- Short, snarky, eloquent, and a bit of a wordsmith, Charlotte is a Mutant, just like her fraternal twin brother. She has a certain fondness for reading trashy vampire romance novels, writing fanfiction whose prose is an unhealthy shade of violet for said novels, and, of course, gambling. Charlotte possesses incredible luck; if someone flipped a coin and called it five times out of ten, she’d call it eight. This carries over to her card games; she’s rarely, if ever, lost a match of her own accord. This has earned her the title “The Queen of Spades” amongst her circle of friends. She has a slight fear of cats, and thunderstorms utterly terrify her. As for her tendency to snark at people, she prefers passive-agressive banter as opposed to her brother’s blatant accusations.

     ((Bleh, I stayed up all night again. Damn you, Walking Dead! Anyway, though, what do you think?))

929. # Blue chargeron 16 Jul 2013 at 7:40 pm

     So those are good but is the genre of your novel I’d it scary romantic and when u finish your first chapter please email it to me rileyrocks360@gmail.com
     Also who’s the main bad guy u should have like maybe the boss of the country be able to controls the supers the crazy ones so he uses them for population controls or people to obey him

930. # Blue chargeron 17 Jul 2013 at 10:48 am

     I have some questions for everybody and answer
     •Marvel or dc
     •Villan or hero
     •Comic or show or movie
     •no power hero or powered hero
     •mutan or alien
     •deadpool or batman

931. # Blackscaron 17 Jul 2013 at 12:34 pm

     @Blue Charger

     I most certainly will do that; as soon as I finish revising the first chapter, I’ll send it.

932. # Proxie#0on 17 Jul 2013 at 2:03 pm

     @Blue Charger

     Hmm…interesting questions…

     1.) Marvel in nearly every case. The only exception I can think of is Batman. He is probably my favorite as his stories are enthralling, there is a lot of possible fallability – and in turn, suspense – and just the fact that he is the most human character in DC. Also…I think he has some of the greatest and better developed villains in the universe, and possibly including Marvel. (Im thinking of Joker…especially from “The Killing Joke” and Harley’s origin (dont remember the name of it).

     2.)I like both villains and heroes. But if I had to choose, I would say a well developed villain that is a great foe to the protagonist.

     3.)Comics and books all the way. Just that general rule I guess: “Meh, the book was better.”

     4.)Non-Powered, or otherwise underpowered heroes make for great stories.

     5.)From Specific movies? (ALIEN) If it is not, I’d say that aliens are more interesting, but tend to be harder to portray if you are going for a semi-realistic story.

     6.)Deadpool is more fun and is great to read, but I usually prefer a more serious, and realistic, story. That, and…well…he’s the “GOD!*#% BATMAN” heh he.

933. # Blue chargeron 17 Jul 2013 at 8:17 pm

     @proxie we have the same answers cool I will do more later first I gotta think of more discussion ones

934. # Blue chargeron 17 Jul 2013 at 8:40 pm

     Hi these are some disscusion questions please answer and my answers will be on the next page

     1. If u could have any power and why
     2.would u be a hero or villan
     3.what would your superhero name be
     4.would u be a universe hero a city hero or a world hero
     5.if u were a villain in the dc world what would be your plan for world domination
     6.who do u think is the most confusing hero in marvel and dc
     7.which movie is better chronicles or kick ass
     8.justice league or avengers

     That’s all and I just wanna say my obsessions Greek mythology , superheros , fantasy and creature-ology thx and anyone if u have a story please email me it please rileyrocks360@gmail.com

935. # c.viperon 18 Jul 2013 at 10:52 am

     Hi guys, I have 4 main characters and here’s their description.

     Lyle: Attacker

     - Can move fluidly on both air and land
     - Can kick off almost any surface and air dash
     - Use the environment to their advantage
     - Boost in speed and strength
     - Excels at hand to hand combat

     Appearance:
     - 16
     - 5’7
     - Plain clothing
     - Fit
     - Always surrounded by pink astral aura
     - White/Caucasian

     How: During an attempt of lucid dreaming, Blake got stuck in the astral plane. The special abilities he was given in the astral plane came with him upon his return to the real world. He was stuck in the astral plane for 1 month.

     Weakness:
     - No projectile
     - cannot kick off certain substances (ex: slime/goop)
     - Always surrounded by pink astral aura
     - impulsive
     *Not sure what some of his weaknesses are/can be.. help a brotha out?*
     —————————————————————————————————————–

     Piper: Support

     - Can manipulate energy in various ways
     - Able to increase natural abilities
     - Posses 3 different auras
     - Can hover using poncho
     - Using the green aura Piper can heal herself and others mentally, emotionally & physically
     - Using the indigo aura Piper can communicate telepathy and sense other auras around her. She can also track items with this aura by leaving her mark on it.
     - Using her Violet aura Piper can read the aura of someone else. Must be human. Those with superpowers are harder to read. She can also break illusions.

     Appearance:
     - 13
     - 5’0
     - Native
     - plump
     - Wears a white, black or brown poncho depending on mood

     How: Ability passed down in her tribe from the founding grandmother

     Weakness:
     - Can only use one aura at a time
     - Not much fighting experience
     - Requires concentration (ranges from low to high)
     - Must be spiritually connected at all times
     - If connection severs she loses her power
     *Suggestions for other weaknesses?*
     —————————————————————————————————————–

     May: Marksman/Artillery

     - Has different types of guns (stun gun, ray gun, trick gun, shotgun, pistol)
     - Agile
     - Smoke pellets/bombs
     - Crossbow + trick arrows
     - Specialized darts
     - Diamond sword & dagger
     - Knives
     - plasma whip
     - computer genius and master at stealth

     Appearance:
     - Looks 17-18
     - 5’6
     - Asian/Oriental
     - platinum blonde hair
     - tech suit
     - skinny

     How: Her origins & story are unknown.

     Weakness:
     - Lacks any superhuman abilities
     - Deemed untrustworthy
     - secretive
     *uh help :)*
     —————————————————————————————————————–

     Dj: Gadget

     - can create things out of almost any object
     - Can teleport
     - Talented mechanic
     - Can drive any and every type of vehicle
     - Hand to hand combat

     Appearance:
     - 6’2
     - 20
     - Black/African-American
     - Muscular
     - Has a thing for overalls

     How: Grew up around a family that loved mechanics. Created a gadget that allows him to teleport. Liked to build things from a young age.

     Weakness:
     - No superhuman abilities
     - Anger issues

     So what do you guys think? Pretty good if i do say so myself. It actually took some time to search for some of these powers, abilities, descriptions, etc.

936. # Blue chargeron 18 Jul 2013 at 2:28 pm

     My favorite cviper are dj and piper so I really think there good so what’s your plan are u going to put them in a story togother or what cuz that would be good kay

937. # Blue chargeron 18 Jul 2013 at 2:30 pm

     # Blue chargeron 17 Jul 2013 at 8:40 pm
     Hi these are some disscusion questions please answer and my answers will be on the next page
     1. If u could have any power and why
     2.would u be a hero or villan
     3.what would your superhero name be
     4.would u be a universe hero a city hero or a world hero
     5.if u were a villain in the dc world what would be your plan for world domination
     6.who do u think is the most confusing hero in marvel and dc
     7.which movie is better chronicles or kick ass
     8.justice league or avengers
     That’s all and I just wanna say my obsessions Greek mythology , superheros , fantasy and creature-ology thx and anyone if u have a story please email me it please rileyrocks360@gmail.com

938. # Blue chargeron 19 Jul 2013 at 9:25 am

     Excuse me none who do u think u are

939. # Blue chargeron 22 Jul 2013 at 8:04 pm

     Can some one answer the question on top

940. # Blackscaron 23 Jul 2013 at 5:49 pm

     Hello, all! I’ve been dying on some feedback for my latest idea. Before I can tell about the idea, I’m going to give a bit of background info.

     In the world I’ve created, mankind and vampires were able to coexist peacefully of centuries. A council of humans and a council of vampires formed a treaty dictating that the vampires would not kill humans when feeding, only draining 2 ounces per person, and only hunting one person per day. In return, the humans would supply the vampires with modern luxuries. Both parties viewed these as fair terms, and the deal was struck.

     However, the vampires grew tired of going hungry, as an adult vampire needs about twenty pints of blood per week to survive. 20 pints of blood is the bare minimum. Many consume anywhere from 25-30 per week, depending on the size of the vampire. They began to break the treaty, instilling fear in the humans like never before. The vampires learned to replicate human technology, and it seemed that the humans had lost their only leverage.

     Many vampires were blessed with supernatural abilities, such as elemental manipulation or mind-based powers such as telepathy. Humans, however, had none of these. It seemed that all was lost.

     However, once scientist of the Nervetech Corporation developed a method to fight back one hundred years prior to the start of my novel, starting as a simple sword and a matching pair of gloves, which, when paired with a certain individual, could bring out one’s inner power: either flames, lightning, or wind. All humans had the ability just as vampires did, but few could channel it without assistance.

     Humanity rejoiced; now, they could fight back! Anyone who wished to enlist to do battle with the vampires could enroll in specialized academies, and received their first pair of Nervetech gloves on their initiation day in the academy. They would be able to sync with a weapon and be classified into three color groups: purple, for flame-type people, green, for lightning-type people, and gold, for wind-type people. The groups were only used for one class period, which would be for power training. The rest of the day, students could interact with anyone from any group.

     The weapons themselves are made of plain silver (vampires are weak to silver), with some sort of technological modification inside it, only receiving a color design once synced with a person. The colors which would appear on the weapons are the same as the ones for the groups associated with them.

     (The gloves, by the way, are black, with two colored vertical stripes, one over the index finger and the other over the middle, the colors corresponding to the power. The stripes only appear once synced.)

     Any sort of weapon can be synced, but usually one to a person. Dual-wielding is not uncommon, but never with two different weapons; one could dual wield two swords, but not a sword and an axe.

     Once you sync with a certain weapon type, you can purchase a better, more advanced model if need be. It’s not just one weapon for life; that would be impractical. However, it must be the same type; you couldn’t switch from a katana to a claymore.

     I do have a way to streamline all of this; these are just jumbled facts that I’d like critique on. If you have any questions about details I might need to add, I’d love to hear it.

     Thanks in advance!

     -Blackscar

941. # Blackscaron 23 Jul 2013 at 5:51 pm

     P.S.

     I’ve never heard the name Nervetech used before, but I can change it if I’m wrong. I don’t want to risk copyright infringement, that’s for sure.

     -Blackscar

942. # kingofnerdson 24 Jul 2013 at 6:21 pm

     I’m writing a story and i’m having trouble coming up with a name that goes along with her power and her power is forcefeilds

943. # Blue chargeron 24 Jul 2013 at 10:19 pm

     @kingofnerds i need more info to decide a name

944. # kingofnerdson 25 Jul 2013 at 10:21 am

     sorry, okay so it should go along with her personality ;she is sassy and sneaky and kind of like the spy of the group. if that doesn’t help you can go with her secondary reliament witch is increased brain waves so she can tell if someone is lying or can move small things with her mind.

     if that helps thank you

945. # Hylianon 25 Jul 2013 at 10:36 am

     Can you guys help me with Hydrokinesis?

946. # GreenWithAwesomeon 25 Jul 2013 at 1:59 pm

     @Blackscar – hello there! Just gonna’ do a quick review of what you have so far.

     My initial thought is: if vampires are already more powerful, why bother making a treaty in the first place? They have supernatural abilities at their arsenal, but they’ll agree to go easy because a couple of humans want peace? Even if they did agree to the treaty, wouldn’t the vamps think of the consequences beforehand, i.e. knowing they can’t live on less than twenty pints per week whereas the treaty allows them less than that to survive?

     I think the only way this would somewhat make sense would be if the vampires were segregated from the humans, living in completely different areas. But even then, the consequences of living on less blood than they can survive on would still be on the forefront of my mind.

     Another thing: you say vampires were able to replicate human technology, so why didn’t they go ahead and do that before signing the treaty, so that they wouldn’t have to sign it at all?

     This may just be a personal thing, but the idea of super-powered vampires reminds me of the Twilight saga. It’s something to keep in mind that you definitely do not want to be creating a replica of it!

     Nervetech is a good name, and I haven’t heard of it either. There’s some business institute in India called Nerve Technology that has the Nervetech URL, but nothing major – so I think you’re in good hands. It’s a catchy name too!

     Hmm, I like the idea of the sword and gloves ‘synchronising’ with the user (which I’m guessing is something to do with nerves, no?). But why one hundred years? Have the vampires just been sitting around all day, picking their nails, allowing this scientist to flourish with his sword-glove way to defeat them? Even worse, allowing the creation of these academies where their very enemies are being trained? Surely they’d be working their fangs off to annihilate Nervetech Corporation off the bat?

     Humans keeping the academies a secret save only a select few (including students) is vital here. In one hundred years, though, you’d think one vampire would be smart enough/ lucky enough to stumble upon one such training facility. You might want to shorten the length.

     Good to see you doing actual research into the species. In real-life, silver makes very poor swords, but in the context of your story it works because vampires are weak to silver. I would only be cautious in using silver though, as by Googling silver swords I have discovered that they blunt themselves easily. I also like how the colours are unusual (as red is usually associated with fire, yellows and blues with lightning, white and clear for air.). If I can ask, why did you choose gold for air? Gold, in comparison to purple and green, suggests some sort of superiority (since gold was used for the most prestigious medals and is associated with luxury and wealth), whereas purple and green are sort of mundane colours. If this was intentional then I am doubly-curious.

     Maybe I’m over-analysing. Psychology excites me, okay?

     It’s good to see that a variation of weapons can be synchronised. Everyone using a sword would just be boring. I have a question regarding it – since any other weapon can be synchronised, does this include smaller projectiles like throwing knives? Is physical contact required for the synchronisation process to work?

     And while we’re on the subject, how do the powers come into it? Once they’re holding the weapon and wearing the glove do they just shoot fire/ lightning/ air from their eyeballs?

     Obviously, my opinion is based on the paragraphs that you have provided; your idea has promise but a few things need to be refined. Hope my critique helped! It was fun to write! ^^

     ~ GwA

947. # GreenWithAwesomeon 25 Jul 2013 at 2:00 pm

     @Hylian, what about Hydrokinesis?

948. # Blackscaron 25 Jul 2013 at 5:10 pm

     @GreenWithAwesome

     Oh, thank you for the critique! I wasn’t expecting anyone to reply, haha!

     I’ve taken a look at what you’ve said, and I’ve edited things accordingly. Give me a bit to type up how I changed things, okay? ^.^

949. # Blackscaron 25 Jul 2013 at 6:12 pm

     All right; here goes nothing! I’ll be tackling this chronologically, okay?

     Ah, jeez, similarities to Twilight are not something I want! I’ve edited vampires so that they, besides increased durability, possess either superspeed or superstrength; never both. If by some miracle a vampire was turned or born with both of these abilities, they would be given a spot in line for the throne immediately. None of them have elemental powers, though approximately ten percent do have a minor form of mind control.

     The treaty itself has also been totally ‘revamped’. (I’m so sorry. I couldn’t resist.)

     I’ll say that the vampires had lived in segregation, only venturing out to prey on humans. (They cannot survive on animal blood, as it doesn’t carry the necessary nutrients.) They had no access to modern technology or the humans’ knowledge, though they were certainly dangerous enough without it. Intelligent, but violent, the vampires’ thirst for knowledge was almost as wild as their thirst for blood. The vampires terrorized the humans so badly that the humans were willing to offer anything, so long as the vampires would leave them alone.

     The vampires wanted the knowledge that humans possessed, so they demanded that the humans hand it over. Having no choice but to comply, lest they risk possible extinction, they taught them their ways, provided them with their modern luxuries. In return, they begged the vampires to only take the bare minimum that they needed of blood instead of killing their victims. If the vampires adhered to their end of the deal, the humans would give them the necessary resources to replicate their devices.

     The vampires accepted this, and for almost a decade the world was peaceful. However, they proved to be traitorous backstabbers; as soon as they’d gotten what they wanted, they resumed hunting and killing humans again.
     Betrayal stinging at their hearts, the humans tried to fight back with the tools they had. It seemed ordinary guns and swords weren’t as effective as they’d hoped, and nuclear weapons would kill more innocent civilians than vampires.

     It seemed that hope for a better future was lost. The vampires were too powerful, too durable, and too clever.

     Nervetech Corporation seemed like a godsend. Having worked in secret so as to avoid the vampires detecting them, Nervetech created what would become humanity’s weapon of choice, a pair of gloves specially designed to send signals to the nerves, would sync with what at first seemed like ordinary weapons. The first weapon successfully designed was a silver alloy (silver on its own dulled easily and was too flimsy) sword – one with Nervetech’s technological modifications on the inside. When presented with the proper wielder, the weapon, or even the gloves in one very rare case, would be able to produce flames, synthesized lightning, or gusts of strong wind. The first sword happened to be Fire Type, by the way.

     As the years went on, more and more weapons were successfully produced, ranging from throwing knives, to blowgun darts, to axes, to even guns and their bullets! It seemed that nearly any weapon could be modified to sync with a certain user, though they hadn’t managed to modify things such as rocket launchers or, oddly enough, boomerangs.

     The added elemental effects could be triggered with either a verbal or mental command, thanks to the Nervetech gloves.

     If, say, one synced with a rifle and happened to be a fire-type user, the plain silver gun would receive a violet design. The bullets would light on fire if commanded, and would explode upon hitting their target. A sword would be enveloped in flames. As for why Fire Type was assigned the color purple, the man who created Nervetech had an affinity for the color purple.

     Lightning worked similarly, though, as it was synthetic, it was an odd green color; hence it having the color green assigned to it. The main difference was that instead of being surrounded in an aura made of lightning, the weapons would be charged with a current that would electrify anyone but its user. A gun would shoot electrically charged bullets. Rumor had it that a special sort of Lightning Type rifle was designed; one that shot beams of the synthetic lightning. Needless to say, if it was ever discovered, people would be tripping over themselves to try to steal or purchase it.

     Wind Type was the most elusive; very few people were able to successfully sync with a Wind Type weapon. It was considered the elite, as those who were Wind Type could manipulate the wind to their will. Many of these people could only sync with a gauntlet of some sort. Eventually, Nervetech stopped producing other Wind Type weapons; it was a waste of their time and resources. This is why Wind Type received the color gold; they are the elite.

     The weapons’ secondary abilities could only be called out if the person they were synced with was wearing their Nervetech gloves while touching it. Another person could use the weapon, but it would only function as a regular weapon.
     As for the slayers’ academies, these popped up in secret. They were disguised as normal boarding schools who coincidentally only accepted humans of age 15 and up; on the inside, the students received free Nervetech gloves and weapons, which was paid for by the government. (A bit of extraneous info: one could purchase Nervetech if they were too old to attend the academies, though the Nervetech cost more than $14,000.)

     The weapons that the students first received were basic models, though they could upgrade them via the school store, if they saved up enough points. (It’s part of the academies’ system.) The Nervetech gloves, however, are unable to be upgraded; they’re already made from very high-quality material.

     Also, the color fabric of the gloves’ middle and index fingers change to match whatever type of weapon a person could sync with. A person could pick up someone else’s weapon that they didn’t sync with and use it alongside their own, but they couldn’t use the weapon’s added effects.

     So! What do you think? Have I managed to fix it? Did I miss anything? ^.^

     -Blackscar

950. # Blue chargeron 25 Jul 2013 at 7:36 pm

     Is any one her a good drawer like artist cuz I have this hero and I want a pic for him and I was wondering can anyone draw him for me

951. # B. McKenzieon 26 Jul 2013 at 5:15 am

     Blue Charger, what is your budget like? ($40-60? $80-100?)

952. # Blue chargeron 26 Jul 2013 at 9:11 am

     What do u mean budget

953. # Anon.on 26 Jul 2013 at 12:28 pm

     How much would you be willing to pay said artist?

954. # Blue chargeron 26 Jul 2013 at 7:21 pm

     I don’t know y are there online artist that can help me

955. # B. McKenzieon 26 Jul 2013 at 8:32 pm

     “Are there online artists that can help me?” For $0, no. If you’re asking strangers online for hours of artistic help, I wouldn’t expect much of a response. Especially on a writing website.
     
     Normally, if you needed an artist, I’d suggest looking on an art website like DeviantArt, but I don’t think it would help unless you could scrape together at least $25*. If an artist isn’t worth at least $25 to you, I’d suggest asking a friend, ideally doing it yourself (it’s a great learning opportunity), or waiting until you can save up a bit of money.
     
     *The concept work for The Taxman Must Die cost me $25-50 per character.

956. # GreenWithAwesomeon 27 Jul 2013 at 6:05 am

     @Blue Charger, have to agree with @B. McK here, you’re not going to find many people who’ll do a decent job at drawing concept art for nothing!

     @Blackscar, you’re welcome! It was fun to do! Time to review again!

     First of all: that joke is awful. Use it.

     I like the concept of ‘more powers = royalty’ here. Sounds like a smart decision to put their most powerful vampires up at the top.

     “I’ll say that the vampires… would leave them alone.” That sounds like a better backstory than before. Not only do the vamps take advantage of their power over the measly human race, they go about and terrorise them. All is well here, imo.

     It makes sense if they have the resources to recreate their weapons and technology, but wouldn’t the humans, knowing they’ve handed over their blueprints, have some sort of counter plan? Surely they’d have that underlying fear that one day the vampires are gonna’ turn on them; maybe the knowledge they passed over had a few deliberate flaws? Or is Nervetech their Plan B?

     Ten years – that went down pretty fast. It’s much more realistic a time-frame though. What did the vampires use the resources for? Housing? Pest control? Building weapons of mass destruction?

     Silver alloy swords – good choice. I was going to suggest that in my previous post but I forgot. XD Makes them much more durable and effective, yet still deadly to vampires! Not too sure about a silver gun though – silver bullets, yes, but I know that a golden gun is too pliable a material to make an effective gun. And if a silver sword is ‘flimsy’, imagine trying to shoot a 335 m/s silver bullet with rebound (albeit, if it’s an alloy, it may work a little better). You’d have to double-check on that, though. The extent of my knowledge on guns comes from my brother (and he ain’t that reliable!).

     I know it’s rather technical, but I guess that’s why the laws of physics are called laws. Ya’ don’t break ‘em, even in fantasy.

     “As for why Fire Type was assigned the color purple, the man who created Nervetech had an affinity for the color purple.” Hah! I like that! Not some deep meaning because ‘purple means royalty desu!!!11!~’ but because ‘this dude liked it’. Lol. Green lightning sounds awesome and ‘gold wind is gold because it’s elusive’ is rather cool too.

     Lemme’ guess: protagonist is going to have wind-type affinity?

     Holy smokes! Fourteen grand?! They’re in the middle of a war against vampires, who’re slaughtering the human race like a bunch of lost kittens, and they want the adults to pay fourteen grand just so they can protect themselves? I understand that making them probably costs an arm and leg, but isn’t it a tad excessive in their day and age when they’re trying to survive?

     So the gloves and weapons are like a package deal: it’s either both with super magical powers or one or the other with nothing? Are the gloves for one person and one person only? If I were to wear your gloves would the weapon not work? Is it like a ‘the wand chooses the wizard’ scenario?

     I feel like I am attacking you with my questions, but it does help you to think outside the box! Honest!

     ~ GwA

957. # Blackscaron 27 Jul 2013 at 7:30 am

     @GreenWithAwesome

     I’m a sucker for terrible puns, haha!

     -I’m going to say that they honestly had no other choice, and while their first set of blueprints were extremely flawed, it was better than nothing. Nervetech was a sort of plan B, I suppose!

     -The vampires used the resources for all of the above, actually. Also, they began their own brand of electronics company, called Virgo Electronics. (It’s a cell phone company that actually provides better service than many of the human ones.)

     -You do have a point about the guns. I’ll say the guns are regular pistols, though they’re painted a silvery color to match the rest of the Nervetech-brand weapons.

     -I hate when people use the color purple and say things like that. I also didn’t want to use the color red, because I’m already stacking up cliches simply by writing a novel that has vampires in it. I don’t need any more, haha!

     -Also, the flames used in Nervetech aren’t any special color. They’re normal orange.

     -Nope! Actually, the protagonist is fire type. I have about four main characters, ad two important secondary characters. (I’ll give you a list of names and what element they’re allied with.)

     (Main MC) Alice – Fire Type

     (MC) Charlotte – Lightning Type

     (MC) John – Fire Type

     (MC) Erik – Lightning Type

     Dagmar – Fire Type

     Oz – Wind Type

     -Should I have Alice be Wind Type, since she’s the main character? I can always switch her and Oz’s powers around.

     -I’ll change it to about 8k, though I do have a reason behind this. This is so that people don’t purchase Nervetech for recreational use only, and only purchase it if they intend to become a slayer. I forgot to mention this, but there are quite a few slayers about!

     -On that topic, if one already owns Nervetech and needs an upgrade, the price is rarely higher than $500. Repairs for the gloves are rather cheap, while repairs for the weapons can be somewhat pricy.

     -The gloves aren’t necessarily personalized, it’s more of a ‘you can only redeem this card to one account’ sort of situation. Once a person uses the gloves to sync with a weapon, those gloves, that weapon type, the elemental bonus, and the person are all bound for life. People can’t just suddenly grab their best friend’s gloves so they could use their friend’s weapon. After all, the gloves do read nerve transmissions. They wouldn’t work for anyone but the person they synchronized with.

     It might seem impractical, but think of it this way: would you rather have someone fighting for you who’s trained extremely well in one weapon, or one who’s trained 1/3 of the way in three?

     You’re not attacking! You have been a major help, honestly! I really do appreciate it.

     -Blackscar

958. # Kayon 27 Jul 2013 at 11:43 pm

     Hi! I am writing a novel about a kid named Jason who can generate an unpredictable amount of electric bolts out of every part of his body, but as a consequence he cannot come in contact with almost nothing but a pair of special gloves that he wears and also an enemy named Black Force, who is Jason’s age and absorbs the life energy of any organic material that she touches. She was hired to bring him to the woman because she is the only one who can touch him without harm. The woman who wants Jason wants to harness Jason’s energy as clean power and electricity for America, but while this is happening, the apprentice of the person who hired Black Force is following her to see if Black Force is following the orders that she was given. All while this is happening the chapters are following in an order of: Jason, Black Force, person who hired Black Force and then Jason, Et cetera. Jason is coping with his powers as they slowly mutate to that he becomes so powerful that he ends up burning up the whiteboard at his school just by looking at it. What ideas would you recommend to spice some things up in my novel? Any third party players or friends with powers of their own?

959. # GreenWithAwesomeon 28 Jul 2013 at 5:40 am

     @Blackscar; No problem! Book writers gotta’ stick together *fist bump*

     More questions! Do any humans use Virgo? Have the vampires rigged it so they can keep tabs on everyone?

     Good move on the guns. As long as the bullets are silver, there isn’t much problem.

     Regarding your characters, no no! Keep her Fire Type if that’s what you originally intended! It’s just protagonists usually have the most unique abilities or history in the story (that’s why they’re the main character; to tell the most interesting tale on their world). Since you said Wind was elusive I guessed Alice was one. XD I like the name Oz; catchy for an elusive Wind Type user.

     “Once a person uses the gloves to sync with a weapon, those gloves, that weapon type, the elemental bonus, and the person are all bound for life.” That doesn’t seem impractical – it makes sense! ‘Tis is a bit like being unable to trade wands in Harry Potter, but less of the ‘wand chooses the wizard’ and more ‘I am connected to this with my blood, sweat and tears… slash nerves.’

     Keep going, good writer! I’d love to hear more about the characters!

960. # GreenWithAwesomeon 28 Jul 2013 at 6:07 am

     @Kay; hello! Id be happy to chuck in my opinion. :3

     First thing that hits me: I see Jason, I see electricity. I think of Jason Grace from the Percy Jackson series. Just something to be wary of. ^^

     Let me just see here:

     Jason – protagonist, guy with electrical powers of awesome
     Black Force – enemy, girl with evil powers that suck living things dry
     Evil Woman – person who hired Black Force, wants Jason’s energy for the good of America
     Apprentice of Evil Woman – Evil Woman’s minion who is tracking Black Force

     Is that right? I’m a bit unclear lol XD If this is correct then yay :3

     I like how Jason can’t touch anything; is it physical touch, so skin, or any indirect contact? Electricity doesn’t discharge from his feet? No swimming for him. XD

     “Jason is coping with his powers as they slowly mutate to that he becomes so powerful that he ends up burning up the whiteboard at his school just by looking at it.” Surely someone would pick up by now that Jason’s some super-powered kid at this point? If he can’t touch anything would he even be able to go to school, since it’s so dangerous?

     How is the Evil Woman ‘evil’? Is harnessing the powers of Jason harmful to him? Is Black Force being paid for finding and bringing him to her?

     “All while this is happening the chapters are following in an order of: Jason, Black Force, person who hired Black Force and then Jason, Et cetera.” Are they told from all those different Point of Views? That’d be a lot to keep up with, especially if they’re doing lots of different things at once. It can be done though – don’t remember the name, but I know there’s a book where there are four people with different stories that eventually meld into one. Just be sure to seperate them and make it clear you’re switching POVs.

     As for ideas, hmm… Well, he’s going to need some allies to help drive Black Force away. Perhaps someone who can also teach Jason how to control his powers (or he’ll be stuck as a loose volt for a looong time). And he needs a friend, too. Wouldn’t be able to give you much more than that as I don’t know many details about your story.

     Hope it helps! ^^

961. # Kayon 28 Jul 2013 at 9:19 am

     Sorry I didn’t explain more.;) Jason is going to a school that can help him develop his powers so hat he is not a danger to mankind. He can only touch Black Force because she absorbs energy and a speical element called cadamitium, which in my story is mined on the moon. The evil woman is actually a mutant that can manipulate the nerves in a persons body to make them feel pain. This developed Jason’s powers because as she made him feel pain, his nerves are always on high alert, making sure that his body is prepared for her once more. Black Force is an escapee of the school that Jason is going to. She was threatened with her life and the lives of her family if she didn’t bring Jason to the woman that hired her. All of this story is in third person, but the separate story lines eventually mesh into the final climax. No first person or POV’s. I am making a friend that can freeze anything on touch because he can produce a freezing inducing bacteria that produces a speical protein that can produce a whole body shield to protect himself in battle and any other advantages such as limb regeneration. I need to have ideas for my story that oils be exciting and action packed on one story line while the other people are following a personal struggle. Jason cannot come in physical contact with absolutely anything but cadamitium and Black Force. All of his clothes are engrained with this speical element at one point in the story because his clothes catch fire on him because the electricity in his body is now becoming over-abundant.
     Thank you #GreenWithAwesome!!!

962. # Blackscaron 28 Jul 2013 at 10:11 am

     @GreenWithAwesome

     You have a point, there. *returns fist bump*

     -Yes, many humans use Virgo, as it has the best service. They’re not aware that it’s run by vampires, though some of them are becoming a bit skeptical.

     -The vampires working for the company can monitor conversations if they choose, though many of them only listen in on embarrassing or interesting ones. They would also try to eavesdrop on ones regarding slayers, as they’re not sure they want to waste their time with another war.
     Contrary to popular belief, the vampires DON’T want to kill all of the humans. If they did, what would they feed off of?

     -Don’t worry, Alice will still have a unique aspect; as the main character, I think she’s entitled to that.

     -Thanks; I’ve always thought the name ‘Oz’ was rather cool, myself!

     -If you’d like, I could type up a few paragraphs about each of the characters. It might take me a bit to do, as there are about seven of them that I’d like to talk about, but I wouldn’t mind doing it.

     -Blackscar

963. # Kayon 28 Jul 2013 at 11:22 am

     I’m thinking about adding a few secondary characters due to GreenWithAwesome’s suggestions. One is called Newton, and he can manipulate gravitational fields which gives him the power to fly, levitate, and a bunch of other stuff that I have not come up with yet. That is all I have so far. Any other power ideas and/or creative names?

964. # JayNotKayon 28 Jul 2013 at 3:54 pm

     Sorry. I am Jay, not Kay.

965. # Spandex manon 01 Aug 2013 at 5:29 pm

     All in favor of a debate page say I

966. # B. McKenzieon 01 Aug 2013 at 8:19 pm

     1) What would the benefit be to having a debate page compared to, say, the open writing forum?
     
     2) Would writers actually benefit from an argument page? Most of the arguments I’ve seen on SN have been exceptionally uninteresting. I’ve only had to call the cops once. (Thanks again for the help, Australia).
     
     3) What sort of things would you debate about? I fear this would devolve into non-authorial issues like “Who would win, Superman or Batman?” Writers already know that the most plot-important character wins pretty much every hero-vs-hero battle…
     
     3.1) “You’re dumb because you like something I don’t like.”
     3.2) “Here’s why you should like something I like.”
     3.3) “Aaron Rodgers should kick those Green Bay hippies to the curb and come to Chicago because dah Bears.” Incidentally, this is the most argument you’ll get out of a Chicagoan before the gunfire starts.

967. # Comicfighteron 03 Aug 2013 at 7:14 pm

     Hey everyone. Great list. I’m having some trouble with the main villain in my story. Hr names Romaniq and she has the ability of invisibility. But I think she needs something a little more aggressive in the catagories of powers. Can anyone help??

968. # JayNotKayon 03 Aug 2013 at 8:34 pm

     It depends on what you mean when you say “aggressive” Do you mean violent or something else. Most of the people hat I know have many opinions of his word for some reason.

969. # Comicfighteron 03 Aug 2013 at 8:48 pm

     Well she just doesn’t seem to be able to fight back in a given situation. Like she can hide herself. But then what? I’m Ina rut as of what to do to give her a more combat style power. That’s all

970. # Comicfighteron 03 Aug 2013 at 11:42 pm

     Also I’m having trouble giving her a better backstory. At first I made her a jazz singer at a popular night club. But I can’t find a way to make it so Romaniq obtainess her abilities and becomes for all intense purposes “bad”

971. # CCXon 04 Aug 2013 at 5:55 pm

     Hi everybody!
     I wanted to ask some questions- I have a character who can control lighting- what would be a good weakness for them? I was thinking water maybe, and I know that would make sense but wanted something more interesting. Would it make sense for a character that can control fire have hydrophobia because their powers are drained when they go in water or would it make sense if they couldn’t go in cold water? A character who could control water or air- should I have them be claustrophobic or being like, buried under the earth? Last one- if I had a character who could control plants or technology- what would be a good weakness? Thanks!

972. # Blackscaron 04 Aug 2013 at 6:07 pm

     @CCX

     Pertaining to the part about the character with fire powers, I feel that hydrophobia would be a plausible weakness, as would the inability to enter cold water. Perhaps you could up the ante a bit and make them be unable to swim, too?

     I’m not sure what to say for the one with lightning powers, unfortunately, though I do have suggestions for the others.

     Perhaps the one who could control water would be terrified of thunderstorms, since I think it would effect them much further?
     For air, being buried alive would work rather well, and perhaps they could be paranoid about, say, chemical warfare? I know it’s a bit of a stretch, but perhaps they could think quite often that there’s some sort of dangerous chemical in the air? (Sorry, it’s lame, but it’s all I have.)

     Controlling plants or technology…for plants, fire would definitely be a reasonable weakness, as would plant-killing pesticides. (The pesticides only apply if you’re including comedy, however.) I can’t think of anything for control of technology, unfortunately.

     I’m sorry that I couldn’t help more, though I hope what little advice I could give helped!

     -Blackscar

973. # Unknownon 04 Aug 2013 at 8:18 pm

     For the technology one, if you make that character Amish, there is one weakness (or problem). XD
     Seriously though, a weakness for someone who controls technology, you could try having them fight an enemy who can nullify other powers,or have them fight in an area without technology, but that would only be in the middle of a forest. Thats all i got.

974. # Comicfighteron 04 Aug 2013 at 9:32 pm

     Reply to ccx. You could make the person with lightening powers be weakened around super conductive metals. Like the stuff lightening rods are made of.

975. # Comicfighteron 04 Aug 2013 at 9:33 pm

     And can anyone help with Romaniq. Thanks and it’s Ok if ya can’t.

976. # CCXon 04 Aug 2013 at 9:55 pm

     Thanks Unknown, Blackscar, and comic fighter for the suggustions! Comic fighter, for your question about romanqi- have you ever seen an episode in heroes? There is this one episode where the protagonist goes to collage and another person with the ability of turning invisible is. The girl with invisibility tries and kills the protagonist because their father killed the girl with invisibility’s father. (using a lot of invisibilities…) perhaps you could use something like that- having Romanqi have a family member killed by someone who was related, close to the main protagonist. It’s kin of weak, I know, but hey- revenge is great for being bad!

977. # CCXon 04 Aug 2013 at 10:06 pm

     Hey- I was arguing about this with a friend a while ago and since you people put there seem to be experts, I wanted to ask you. Okay, say you have a muscle mimic- for those of you who don’t know/ never heard of this before, a muscle mimic is someone who can watch another person do it and, well, mimic it. For example, watching someone do a complex gymnastic routine and being able to copy it perfectly, exactly like the original doer. Okay, back to the argument. So, my friend said that technically, a muscle mimic could copy a flying person, like superman or whatever flying person you want to think of. I said no, a muscle mimic can not at all fly- a person who can fly needs like some kinetic energy or something like that. I’m not sure if they really got what a muscle mimic was- so… who would be right?

978. # CCXon 04 Aug 2013 at 10:27 pm

     Oh, Comicfighter- sorry I didn’t mention this in the suggustion thing above, like, one above, but how Romanqi gets her abilities is up to you and how you want to go in your story. If your plot line is mutants, maybe have her in the house when the protagonist (if you wanted to go on my thing- dont worry- i wouldn’t be offended if you didn’t) comes an kills her father, she hides under the bed or something and her powers are triggered and she turns invisible. Or maybe she’s been injected with something or had an accident (you know the drill) or is running away from something/someone that gave her powers. Is she a criminal? Or just a “I’m going to make my sole aim in life to hunt you down and make you suffer” villain?

979. # ChickenNoodleson 05 Aug 2013 at 5:54 am

     No a muscle mimic won’t be able to fly by watching superman. They can only mimic things that the musculature of their body can naturally accomplish. Flight is not one of those things. Superman’s ability to fly has nothing to do with his muscles so a muscle mimic can’t copy it anyway.

980. # GreenWithAwesomeon 05 Aug 2013 at 7:43 am

     @CCX; I agree with @ChickenNoodles, it’s not a natural body process. Not to mention Superman’s Kryptonian, so he might not necessarily have the same biology as a human. :3

981. # Comicfighteron 05 Aug 2013 at 8:09 am

     Thanks ccx. I have seen heroes. And I have considered that possibility of just invisibility but I’m making her criminal baddie #1 like lex Luther for superman, joker for batman ya know. And it’s because she’s a criminal that she wants revenge. If you want more you can say so. Thanks for the help

982. # CCXon 05 Aug 2013 at 10:07 am

     Thanks greenwithawesome and chicken noodles! Good luck with your book Comicfighter! Let me know if you need anymore help!

983. # Comicfighteron 05 Aug 2013 at 11:42 am

     I seem to be very fond of asking questions here. I can’t come up with a protagonist for Romaniq. Like nothing at all. Also Romaniq can walk on walls, turn invisible and shoot antimatter out of her hands. Can anyone come up with a hero for her to fight???

984. # CCXon 05 Aug 2013 at 12:20 pm

     Well, maybe you should think of it this way, Comicfighter- if you could have any superpower, what superpower would you want? Maybe make a character like that.

985. # Comicfighteron 05 Aug 2013 at 4:51 pm

     But I can only think of really genaric abilities. And I’ve wanted every superpower for a long time so my opinion isn’t very helpful in this matter

986. # Comicfighteron 05 Aug 2013 at 4:59 pm

     Hey I don’t want to take away from this list but there is a pretty extensive list of powers on Wikipedia. I know it seems ridiculous but it’s true

987. # CCXon 05 Aug 2013 at 8:46 pm

     Comicfighter, I tottaly get it- it’s hard choosing one or two powers from a HUGE list. I mean, I would love to have the ability to manipulate anything, even though it’s kind of a cheat power. Well, why not this- focus on the character, you know, name, age, gender, traits, looks, and then focus on the powers?

988. # Qwertyon 05 Aug 2013 at 10:27 pm

     @Comicfighter: I have a few ideas for your villain/hero. Maybe you could give your hero the exact same powers as your villain, so they would have to try to outwit each other. You could even take it a step further and have them gain their superpowers from the same incident (i.e. like the Fantastic Four where they all got their powers at the same time from the same source). Another (random) idea is that the hero doesn’t have any powers, but fights the villain because he knew her before she got powers.

     Generally in a case like this it’s helpful to think of a hero that would complement the villain you’ve chosen (or vice versa if you happen to choose the hero first). If the villain has the abilities of invisibility, wall-walking and antimatter…maybe the hero could be psychic (so the invisibility effect would basically be cancelled out), also wall-walking (or could control gravity, which accomplishes the same purpose), and maybe force-field abilities (to contain the antimatter). These are just ideas off the top of my head, but you get the idea.

     However, if your villain is the main character of the story, it doesn’t matter as much who the hero is, because he’s probably going to lose anyway. You might even have the villain knock off a whole list of generic superheroes before meeting ONE that is just strong (or clever) enough to challenge her.

     Just some ideas, hope it helps.

989. # Unknownon 06 Aug 2013 at 8:32 am

     Sorry to inturupt, but i have a suggestion. If you are having trouble deciding what powers to give your villein, give Him/ her the power to toggle powers. That way, they have all powers. This will cause lots of problems for the user, like learning to control every known power, and possible restrictions on how long he can use the power. Just a suggestion.

990. # Comicfighteron 06 Aug 2013 at 11:36 am

     Thanks everyone it’s a tone of help and I’ve gotten a kickass hero lined up. Also this list has both of these powers but I need to know the difference. Super endurance and indestructibility. Cause they seem the same to me?

991. # Comicfighteron 06 Aug 2013 at 11:38 am

     Ps. ccx you’ve been a real bro in helping me if you need any more help just type it up and ill answer if I see it.

992. # CCXon 07 Aug 2013 at 11:05 am

     Thanks Comicfighter! Good luck with your book! Ps- I think super endurance and indestructibility aren’t the same- super endurance is where they can Endure- however indestructibility means they can never ever be killed. Period.

993. # Comicfigteron 07 Aug 2013 at 11:13 am

     Thanks ccx. Ttyl hombre

994. # B. McKenzieon 07 Aug 2013 at 5:28 pm

     “This list has both of these powers but I need to know the difference. Super endurance and indestructibility.” Hmm? I may be mistaken, but I think the two powers up there are super-endurance and longevity/immortality. Super-endurance is the ability to take a lot of hurt and/or engage in physical activity for an unusually long amount of time (e.g. a fighting marathon). Longevity/immortality is the ability to live an exceptionally long time (e.g. aging very, very slowly or not at all, possibly with endurance mixed if the person is actually immortal).
     
     …
     
     I don’t see a major distinction between “super endurance” and indestructibility.

995. # Comicfighteron 08 Aug 2013 at 9:05 am

     Thanks for pointing that out B. Mckenzie. I was referring to a different list. Sorry for the confusion. I guess I didn’t notice.

996. # C. Macon 08 Aug 2013 at 9:06 am

     Does anyone else here think superman is overpowered??

997. # CCXon 08 Aug 2013 at 2:01 pm

     Yeah C. Mac- superman is seriously over powered, and half the time he doesn’t use all of them.

998. # B. McKenzieon 08 Aug 2013 at 9:34 pm

     “Does anyone else here think Superman is overpowered?” Yes, though I’d argue that his lack of personality is probably a bigger problem for the writers. If he had an interesting personality and/or perspective, it might be possible to make interesting stories with him anyway (albeit probably not action-heavy ones). For example, Dr. Manhattan had the personality/perspective/conflicts to add something to Watchmen even though he had god-level superpowers. However, Manhattan’s contributions to action were extremely brief.

999. # JQsetupon 09 Aug 2013 at 11:38 pm

     Hey everyone I’m writing a superhero league type story. And I have a good start but one hero I can’t put a power to is this guy called Paladin. He’s the second in command but I can’t give him a good non-cliche ability. Any suggestions?

1000. # B. McKenzieon 11 Aug 2013 at 1:32 pm

      JQsetup: “One guy I can’t put a power to is… the second in command but I can’t give him a good non-cliche ability. Any suggestions?” If the character has an interesting personality, I don’t think it matters whether the powers are creative/original or not. A character with a personality and style can create opportunities to use powers to contribute to interesting scenes, likely in ways we haven’t seen before. If I could use an example from my own work, one of the two main characters uses an extremely generic power (athleticism/agility) to terrify the other here. It doesn’t matter at all that hundreds of other superheroes are physically capable of jumping down from a ceiling and eating a resume — they don’t have the personality to actually do so.
      
      Conversely, if a character has unique superpowers but NOT a memorable personality, the superpowers will probably get used in a boring way. For example, if a character has the ability to attack with, say, black holes or gravity or something else moderately exotic, but has a bland personality, I’d expect that the power will be used mainly as a generic ranged attack and will be mostly interchangeable with lasers or fire-control. I wouldn’t expect many points from readers for superficial originality.

1001. # Ka-Pow!on 12 Aug 2013 at 12:12 am

      My friend and I are having a very nerd oriented arrgument( as usual) and he can’t figure out that acidic blood wouldn’t eat away at the persons veins because his body would build up a tolerance right?

1002. # GreenWithAwesomeon 12 Aug 2013 at 5:41 am

      @Ka-Pow! Yeah, that makes sense to me. XD

1003. # Proxie#0on 12 Aug 2013 at 9:16 am

      I would say that it depends on the potency of the acid. If, say, he were a baby with a very low acidic content that slowly built up as he grew, then I cuold see it. If he suddenly gained the ability of acidic blood…well it wouldn’t be pretty.

1004. # B. McKenzieon 12 Aug 2013 at 5:00 pm

      “He can’t figure out that acidic blood wouldn’t eat away at the person’s veins…” This is entirely up to the author’s discretion — less than 1% of readers will give you flack over this. Generally, most readers will take it for granted that a superpower comes with everything the character needs to use the power safely, so I wouldn’t recommend spending more than 1-2 sentences on how a character survives his superpowers unless the details there are somehow very important to the story and/or characterization. Aside from that, I’d only recommend covering it at any length if the character DOESN’T have everything he/she needs to use the power completely safely (e.g. perhaps a character with acidic blood has to be REALLY careful with his blood because only the interior of his body is immune to his acid… his skin ISN’T).
      
      To summarize/recap:
      –If less than 5% of your readers care about something (e.g. how he survives the acidic blood), I wouldn’t recommend spending more than 1-2 sentences on it unless you see a really good reason to.
      –Like most questions about the details of superpowers, this is generally not a major consideration for whether the story is effective or not. I wouldn’t recommend spending very much time on it unless it is somehow very important to the story or the characterization.
      –Readers generally don’t read stories for superpowers. As long as the character is doing interesting things, the details of the superpowers tend not to be very relevant or interesting (with some exceptions — e.g. if a superpower has such a major cost that it creates major conflicts or problems for the characters. See Bitter Seeds, for example).

1005. # CCXon 12 Aug 2013 at 6:12 pm

      Would being able to control darkness be a useful fighting ability? I figure you could disapper into the shadows and come out somewhere were the opponant wouldn’t expect it. Would being able to control shadows be a good power for a hero? My character can control shadows but the con is he needs to ‘eat’ like, pure stuff, such as light or souls. Would that make sense? I figure it could cause some issues for him, because he doesn’t want to be evil. Is this to weird?

1006. # B. McKenzieon 12 Aug 2013 at 7:31 pm

      “the con is he needs to ‘eat’ like, pure stuff, such as light or souls. Would that make sense? I figure it could cause some issues for him, because he doesn’t want to be evil. Is this too weird?” I’d recommend coming up with some middle ground between eating light (which would make him about as evil as the average vegetable) and eating souls, which would be quite beyond photosynthesis on the spectrum of evil.

      A few possibilities would be something like eating happiness, dreams, or human energy. He could feel conflicted about whether to hang around people, particularly people he likes, but it would not compromise his likability as much as eating souls.

1007. # B. McKenzieon 12 Aug 2013 at 7:46 pm

      “Would being able to control darkness be a useful fighting ability?” I don’t anticipate usefulness will be a problem here. Challenging him in a variety of situations may take more creativity. For example, I think his powers would seriously reduce (and perhaps eliminate) any possibility of an interesting stealth scene for the character. As for fights, depending on how easily he can use the ability to disappear into shadows, would there actually be consequences to him losing a fight, or would he just be able to escape at will? If he can escape more or less at will, I think that would probably make his fights a lot less interesting.

      I think the key would be his dependence on the fuel. E.g. if he’s been fighting heavily and has been hurt, he may not have the energy to make an easy escape. I think that would be more interesting than, say, if he could usually escape pretty easily.

1008. # CCXon 13 Aug 2013 at 11:28 am

      Hmmm. Thanks B. Mckenzie for the advice. Could a character with a forcefield abilities technically stop someone from using their powers? I mean, like put a forcefeild around the opponant to prevent them from using their powers?

1009. # B. McKenzieon 14 Aug 2013 at 4:43 am

      I think it depends on the power, CCX. For example, if your forcefields were more or less fireproof, I could see how dropping a bubble and/or forcefields around someone could cut off a character with fire-based powers.

1010. # CCXon 15 Aug 2013 at 10:45 pm

      True that, B. McKenzie! I was thinking of a scene in my book where the character with forcefield abilities lunges out and grabs the opponent’s hand, a girl with sound manipulation abilities, and stops her from making sonic blasts. If you’ve ever read the Gone series by Michael Grant, maybe you’ll get what I’m saying when they put cement on mutant’s hands to stop them from using their abilities. Would that make sense- putting a block on the mutant’s hands? I seem to notice that most abilities come out of the hands- the manipulation of fire, water, air, gravity, etc. I thought it could be like that, if it made sense. Thanks B. McKenzie!

      bank on betting- completely agree. I get some ideas for my books by looking at year old posts!

1011. # C Xavier Ron 20 Aug 2013 at 9:15 am

      so i have this idea that basically the hero lives his days twice. so he could wake up and experience the day and fall back asleep that night, but wake up the next morning on the same day. the first day would sorta be like a dream or preparation for the events of the actual day where everything is the same except his choices on the second day. is that confusing??? so he basically lives the same day twice but can act in any way he wants on both days. so everything about the day is predictable because hes already experienced it but as soon as he changes something significant, the day’s events alter according to whatever hes changed. so i’m just thinking, i feel like this story would be really confusing if i wrote about it because the timeline would seem chaotic to the reader, and in another sense it seems like a relatively easy idea to stumble across in one’s imagination so does anyone know of any similar fictitious stories that i should make sure not to accidentally plagiarize? your input would be amazing help.

      to clarify(i’ve been thinking about this scenario for a long time and it still confuses me a little), the hero lives day 1 and relives day 1 the next morning. hes only got one extra chance to change anything he wants to about the days events. then after the second day 1 he moves on to the first day 2, and so on. he ages normally, and has twice the amount of time to learn or do. for example he could skip school, then the same, next day he goes to school and does the test he skipped. the day he skipped reset itself so that it never technically happened except in his memory. so there was no absence on his report card.

      so just please let me know if this idea isn’t unique or maybe is. i know the story i have planned but if someone has the same basic concept, id like to know so i can make story changes or to just destroy the whole project

1012. # Yuuki12on 20 Aug 2013 at 9:56 am

      Greetings. Given that I am nearing the conclusion to my first story,White Noise, I am getting started on my next story. The premise is actually of a story that I wrote several years ago, when I was a teenager. Specifically, it took place in Miami, where an unexpected chemical explosion emerged and such it resulted in giving superpowers. The draft wasn’t exactly fleshed out; rather, the story was sub-par and didn’t really stand out.

      Alas, I digress. My main concern is in regards to my main character and her power. This being ability replication, specifically the power to copy other powers and abilities. Now, I understand this is a very risky ability. Having read most of the articles on this site, I understand how important it is to challenge characters, and certain powers can make that difficult.

      With that said, I believe I have come up with several solutions that will help foster this notion of challenging a character. The first solution is based on the idea of touch. She needs to touch an individual, to gain their powers. I borrowed this from Rogue from X-men, for it made sense. though, my character doesn’t injure said power user.

      That said, she needs to have her hands bare, when she touches them. Another prerequisite is that she needs to see the person use the ability, before acquiring it. This actually is due to how she activates her power, where she visualizes the ability. Given her DNA is similar to a mirror, where it reflects and captures certain qualities, I wished to emphasize this.

      The next weakness deals with how many powers she can hold. While capable of accessing multiple powers, she can only hold up to five (or six) powers at a time. If she attempts to copy someone else’s abilities, while at her max, she will be able to do so, but one of her powers, randomly, is erased.

      In terms of the actual powers, each ability she covets is actually at half strength, and individually, aren’t as strong as the original user. An example of this is that during the story she absorbs telepathy, but can only read surface thoughts, not control minds or blanket the senses, compared to the original user.

      That said, she can use multiple powers in combination to make up for this. Finally, certain powers she obtains are much harder to control than others. This can lead to her voluntarily triggering them. For example, she obtains the power of invisibility, and such she cannot control it, as she constantly fades in and out.

      So, how is that? Hopefully, this power is well balanced enough.

1013. # Dysfunctionalon 22 Aug 2013 at 12:11 am

      Hey guys can you help me with the powers Transmutation, Elemental Tranmutation?

      With transmutation from the descriptions I read, you can transform any substance/object into anything. Is this correct? Or does changing the substance/object depend on what it is? So for example I wouldn’t be able to transform a tooth brush into a spoon but I would be able to transform gravel into sand?

      In Young Justice & the DC universe Shimmer has this ability but it was different for her. She touched the inside hull of a ship and she made a hole and touched stone and turned it into sand..

      Pretty confused by this (^^) power tbh :s

      For elemental transmutation the description said you could change any substance/object from liquid, gas & solid state at will. Would this power be able to affect air? Also would this work on objects? So turning lets say a chair into liquidus state? Would that be possible? Or would I have to touch elements so like touching waster, fire, metal etc.

      Also regarding this.. would it be possible to transform dirt so it could become mud?

      If you can answer these thanks.

1014. # Standupcomicon 22 Aug 2013 at 12:16 am

      Hey everyone. I’m wondering if I have a good idea for my antihero. He’s a man with a spli personality and he has the power of poison generation but, his other self has ice generation. Is it a good idea to give each of them a different power if they’re the same body different personality??

1015. # CCXon 22 Aug 2013 at 9:11 pm

      @ Standupcomic- your villain’s power seems pretty cool and personally makes sense. I think it would make more sense to have a different power when they have different personalities. Question though- if the villain’s the same then why do they both want to attack the hero? Maybe instead of ice generation you should think of something a little more deadly instead. Hope this helps!

1016. # Standupcomicon 22 Aug 2013 at 10:49 pm

      Well they’re not the bad guy they’re just trying to live lid on the mild and wild side. Anti heroes not villains

1017. # CCXon 23 Aug 2013 at 8:40 am

      Oh, sorry about that then. Then I think it makes sense. I think that it would be interesting to have one of the personalities be perhaps good, or have the ability of healing. I dunno, I’m thinking of the Gone’s series’s Drake/Brittany. Brittnay was sweet, good girl and Drake was an evil, creepy guy. Every so often they would morph into the other person. Hope this helps

1018. # Avengerchickon 24 Aug 2013 at 11:20 pm

      Hey all. I’m hoping you can help me. Ok. Imagine a biker girl. Now imagine she meets an ancient figure who says that he wants to give her a gift.(it’s a necklace make of this cool looking petrified bone). She takes the gift and wears it around. This big tycoon for (insert company type here) is making a deal with some crime lord. She comes across the deal being made and the tycoon catches her. He the pushes her off the buildings room. An hour later she wakes up. Good opening(short version of course)

1019. # B. McKenzieon 25 Aug 2013 at 1:37 am

      Avenger Chick, here are some ideas and suggestions:
      
      –I’d recommend making the main character’s role more active. Right now, it sounds like she gets superpowers because she gets lucky that a mysterious old guy gives her a magic necklace. At the very least, I’d recommend adding an interesting reason or decision which explains why the old guy chose her rather than anyone else.
      
      –”A big tycoon for (insert company type here) is making a deal with some crime lord. She comes across the deal being made…” This feels to me like another example of contrivance, when the plot is driven forward by the character happening to be in the right place at the right time. I’d recommend giving her a more active reason for coming across the tycoon and/or crime lord.
      
      –It may help to tie the old guy/necklace angle into the tycoon/getting killed angle in some way. E.g. if the old guy saves her life AFTER the tycoon tried to kill her, perhaps because of something unusual she did that impressed him (or, less desirably, something about her that impressed him — less interesting than an unusual action or decision).
      
      –I’m not sure if you’ve seen Catwoman, but in this case, I think it would be helpful. In particular, I’d recommend watching the movie and taking notes along the lines of “How can I make my character more interesting than Catwoman?” and “How can I give my character a more three-dimensional personality than Catwoman, a one-dimensional badass?”

1020. # B. McKenzieon 25 Aug 2013 at 2:03 am

      Hello, Dysfunctional. “With transmutation, from the descriptions I’ve read, you can transform any substance/object into anything. Is this correct? So, for example, I wouldn’t be able to transform a toothbrush into a spoon but I would be able to transform gravel into sand?” You’re the author. What your story’s superpowers can do is up to your discretion — it doesn’t have to resemble what other characters have done with the power. From an editorial standpoint, it would be helpful if the characters could be easily challenged but still do some impressive and ideally unanticipated things. As long as you’re delivering on those fronts, editors won’t care whether the character can, for example, transform a toothbrush into a spoon or dirt into mud.
      
      …
      
      “Would this power be able to affect air?” This is your choice, not mine. Personally, I’d recommend against it, because I think it’d make the character much harder to challenge (e.g. the ability to turn oxygen into, say, kryptonite or poison or knockout gas would tend to end battles very quickly, which I think would make the combat significantly less interesting).
      
      “Also, would this work on objects?” This is a choice for the author. It feels pretty intuitive that it would work on objects. I don’t anticipate any scenarios where the ability to turn, say, a wooden chair into a metal one or a plastic toy sword into a metal, actual sword would make a story significantly less interesting.
      
      “So turning, let’s say, a chair into a liquid state? Would that be possible?” This is a choice for the author.
      
      “Would it be possible to transform dirt so it could become mud?” This is also up to you. Personally, I think this would be very intuitive — e.g. if you take a pile of dirt and transmute some of it into water, you’d have a pile of mud, right?

1021. # Avengerchickon 25 Aug 2013 at 10:08 am

      Thanks for the tips B. mckenzie. I was going to explain why the old guy gave her the necklass a bit later. So for the the deal could she know someone who she wanted to see. And that person worked for the crime lord and she then comes a cross the deal. Her friend watches her die?

1022. # B. McKenzieon 25 Aug 2013 at 12:06 pm

      “Could she know someone who she wanted to see? And that person worked for the crime lord and she then comes across the deal…” That sounds workable, although it might take some explanation how “wanting to see a friend” turns into “stumbling upon the friend in the middle of an obviously criminal transaction.” I mean, she has to have been FOLLOWING him without him noticing, right? Why is she secretly following a friend? The first explanation that comes to mind is that she’s deeply suspicious of something. E.g. perhaps she’s dating the friend in question or he’s dating another friend of hers and suspects him of infidelity. Another possibility is that she doesn’t intend to be secret about it, but does not have the ability to reach him. Alternately, maybe they’re living together (either as roommates or as boyfriend/girlfriend) and she notices that he’s apparently forgotten his cellphone, so perhaps she decides to go after him to return it because he’s normally VERY careful to have his phone on him at all times (for work, he claims)**. So she’s trying to meet up with him, but obviously can’t tell him that, because he doesn’t have his phone with him. (How does she know where he’s going? If she knows or can guess his computer’s password, he may have looked for directions to the address in question on Google Maps or whatever).

      *It’s likely the friend wouldn’t have his cell-phone with him during a high-end criminal operation. They can be tracked. If a criminal absolutely needed a cell-phone for a job like this, he’d have a disposable “burner” rather than his personal cell-phone. If she tried to call his personal phone number, she wouldn’t be able to reach him.

      **I can imagine that a high-end criminal organization would want to have constant access to its employees when they are off-duty.

1023. # Avengerchickon 25 Aug 2013 at 2:53 pm

      Ok that helps. Thanks.

1024. # Rolando Lamb Jr.on 26 Aug 2013 at 5:40 am

      Hey all, I am working on an action/adventure/fantasy story and i was wondering if i could pick your brains. LOL

      I have two power/energy sources that some people can tap into that allows for various superhuman and supernatural abilities. Each power source has its own properties and effects that differ from the other.

      Im trying to come up with some cool/original ways in which they can access the ability. Any ideas?

1025. # Comicfighteron 26 Aug 2013 at 9:06 am

      Reply to RolandlambJR. It honestly depends on how you design the sources of power. Do they have to be tapped into by touch. Are they like radiation where simply being in close proximity to it juices up the person? You have two different sources so maybe you could make it so that certain powers are only give via one sources and vise versa

1026. # B. McKenzieon 26 Aug 2013 at 5:07 pm

      “I have two power/energy sources that some people can tap into that allows for various superhuman and supernatural abilities. Each power source has its own properties and effects that differ from the other. I’m trying to come up with some cool/original ways in which they can access the ability. Any ideas?”
      
      I’m having trouble following along. Could you give some examples of what you already have?

1027. # TBon 27 Aug 2013 at 5:01 am

      what would be a good villain for a hero who can change density from low to high at will

1028. # tayloron 27 Aug 2013 at 6:36 pm

      hey I love this website. It has been an inspiration to my new book

1029. # Comicbookguy117on 28 Aug 2013 at 5:56 pm

      I suppose this is an appropriate place to ask this question. So here it goes. What distinguishes a golden age superpower origin from a modern superpower origin? I’m toying around with a quirky time-travel idea, so I’d like to ask for some professional advice.

1030. # Comicfighteron 31 Aug 2013 at 3:08 pm

      What are some good weaknesses for teleportation. Any ideas?

1031. # CCXon 31 Aug 2013 at 4:06 pm

      Hey Comicfighter! Nice to see you here again! For your question about the teleportation, maybe, like night crawler, someone who has teleportation maybe can’t teleport to somewhere they haven’t seen or couldn’t go a certain distance. Hope this helps Comicfighter! Nice to talk to you again!

1032. # Comicfighteron 31 Aug 2013 at 4:06 pm

      Oh and is it possible to have powers come from like magical sources and science type accidents or experiments?

1033. # CCXon 31 Aug 2013 at 7:58 pm

      @ Comicfighter- yes, a hero can get powers from a magical source. In justice league there is a character Etrigan, who I think has magical sources. I had to look this up and it was actually pretty useful. A character could get powers from science expirement a or accidents just as easily. In heroes, mohinder gains abilities by testing the formula he made on himself. (Not the brightest guy) he actually gained powers with seriously bad consequences, aka lab expirements. You could also pull regency form James Patterson’s Maximum ride- the main characters are avian-human. For accidents I can’t really think of anything- generally if someone’s in a science place they usually haven’t gone willingly. I mean, maybe like Spider-Man, but otherwise I can’t really think o anything… hope this helps!

1034. # B. McKenzieon 31 Aug 2013 at 9:44 pm

      “Oh and is it possible to have powers come from like magical sources and science type accidents or experiments?” Either could work, but I would generally recommend against having both fantasy and sci-fi origins in the same story (genre-consistency makes it a bit easier to market the work and for readers to process the setting). However, either fantasy or sci-fi origins could be used alongside non-genre-specific origins like intense training without raising genre-consistency issues.

      …

      Outside of marketing concerns, I haven’t seen many cases where fantasy origins work effectively alongside sci-fi ones. In most cases, it comes out more wacky than not, which could be helpful if intentional (e.g. see Dr. McNinja).

1035. # Comicfighteron 01 Sep 2013 at 3:20 pm

      Thanks everyone. And one more question then I leave the floor to the next person. What are the pros/cons to temporal duplication? I.E. bringing past and future versions of your self to your current location. Ignore the whole paradox thing

1036. # B. McKenzieon 01 Sep 2013 at 6:18 pm

      Some thoughts/ideas on the ability to bring past and future versions of the character to his/her location:
      
      –It sounds like it could be confusing (e.g. keeping track of who knows what and/or who is who). I’m not sure what sort of plot elements you’re thinking about, but if you’re thinking about incorporating any deception or characters needing to hide what they know from another character, I think it would be quite challenging to make sure that readers are following along. Standard self-duplication might be easier to work with here.
      
      –Generally, I think it would be helpful if the superpower enabled the character to do impressive and unexpected things in a variety of situations. Would this character be able to contribute in combat? If the antagonists are mostly superpowered, I feel like that could be an issue.
      
      –If you’re doing a comic rather than a novel, I think this might add to the artist’s workload without actually looking all that impressive. (If you’re doing a non-visual story, please disregard this).
      
      –The ability to bring in future members could be interesting, depending on what you’re thinking about in terms of character growth. For example, if the character is generally dishonest/unreliable and he becomes an antagonist or anti-hero at some point in the future, then the ability to bring in extra copies could be really interesting. If the heroes ask the future copies a question about what they know, the heroes wouldn’t actually know whether they could believe it, which I think would be much more suspenseful than getting 100% reliable information from the future. If the clones from the future are 100% reliable and more or less interchangeable with the present-day version of the character, I’d recommend simplifying the power (into e.g. the ability to self-duplicate without time-traveling).
      
      –”Ignore the whole paradox thing.” I like your thinking!

1037. # Davetheauthoron 02 Sep 2013 at 1:04 am

      Good list everyone. Hey I’ve been having trouble with giving a character to put behind a power. I know it’ll be a female. And that she will have animated hair. But aside from that I have no idea what kind of personality to give her. So to put it bluntly…I NEED HELP!!!

1038. # B. McKenzieon 03 Sep 2013 at 5:16 am

      Hello, Dave. I’d recommend checking out our articles on personality and character development, such as this one. Could you tell me more about the story and/or what you’d like to try with the character besides her hair?

1039. # Davetheauthoron 03 Sep 2013 at 7:28 am

      The story works off the same set up as static shock. A big bio tech experiment went horribly wrong and sent a wave of unbalanced energy into the world. Some people were affected by this. A few died. And she was one of the millions of people affected by it. I also have that she’s a college sophomore. But no personality comes to mind. Ill check out the article you told me about though

1040. # CCXon 04 Sep 2013 at 4:49 pm

      Hey question for anyone here; what usefulness could having wings/ flying have in a fight?

1041. # Missvisibleninjaon 04 Sep 2013 at 7:18 pm

      Now I’m confused on how to write a character who doesn’t have powers like Batman, but not like Batman. The character I have is a teenage girl who uses duct tape as weapons, but I don’t really know how to write that well.

1042. # B. McKenzieon 04 Sep 2013 at 7:26 pm

      Here are some possibilities for wings/flight in battle:
      
      –Mobility/evasion.
      
      –Surprise/ambushes. It’s harder to anticipate a fully three-dimensional enemy than one that mainly fights in 2.
      
      –Escape (or, more interestingly, insertion).
      
      –Gravity/speed could be used for momentum (i.e. death from above).
      
      –The wings could be used as a weapon, to buffet someone.
      
      –Depending on how strong the wings are, the character might also be able to create enough wind to knock someone off balance (situational — more likely to work against an opponent attempting to climb a skyscraper than one standing on concrete). One combat situation where characters might be at a precarious balance is when someone is running to pick up a dropped gun. Picking up a gun while moving, without causing it to skitter across the ground, is somewhat challenging even without (say) 30 MPH winds coming out of nowhere.
      
      –An exceptionally brave and/or suicidal character could grab an opponent and attempt to drop him. X-Men: First Class did something similar.
      
      –Kicking up enough sand or dirt to reduce visibility or mess up somebody’s eyes.
      
      –Reconnaissance.
      
      –Flanking.
      
      –Targeting weaker opponents (e.g. skirting the Hulk to ravage someone like the Sorcerer Supreme, who is definitely more flimsy).
      
      –Least interesting option of all: flying directly at the enemy, flying brick style. Not recommended unless you’ve totally run out of alternatives, because it’s used so heavily elsewhere.

1043. # Comicfighteron 05 Sep 2013 at 2:36 pm

      Reply to missvisibleninja. Something everyone has told me on this site is if your character has a great personality and your imagination to fuel the improvisation with duct tape you can make one bad ass character. Hey everyone do you have a list of costume design ideas. I feel it would help out a ton.

1044. # Brickmanon 07 Sep 2013 at 10:34 pm

      Hey so I was wondering is giving someone just super strength a bad idea. Cause my guy can’t fly or anything. He’s just got enough power to lift a building and possibly throw it. How can I get him to travel and get him to crime scenes ??

1045. # B. McKenzieon 08 Sep 2013 at 8:16 am

      “How can I get him to travel and get him to crime scenes?” Perhaps his super-strength also includes enhanced leg muscles (e.g. the ability to jump ~30 feet/~10 meters and the ability to run ~50 mph/~75 kph). So he wouldn’t be a speedster, but he would be somewhat more mobile than someone who could only pick up a building and throw it. Another option would be that he jumps on top of trains, which would be somewhat less un-badass than being a regular passenger.
      
      “Is giving someone just super-strength a bad idea?” It wouldn’t be my first option for a main character, unless the story entails very little combat (e.g. a comedy). His fights would probably get helluva monotonous (see the Hulk or the final battle in Man of Steel).

1046. # B. McKenzieon 08 Sep 2013 at 8:30 am

      “I’m confused on how to write a character who doesn’t have powers like Batman, but not like Batman. The character I have is a teenage girl who uses duct tape as weapons, but I don’t really know how to write that well.” Nothing is coming to mind for me, either. Since the main appeal of superhero stories is that the characters get to do incredible/badass things, it may help to give her a bit more to work with than duct tape. Maybe she’s exceptionally athletic?
      
      …
      
      I think it’d be cool if the character ALSO knew how to use basic tools (e.g. Agent Orange uses rope here), but I’d recommend using that as a supplement to something more impressive rather than making it the main power.

1047. # Missvisibleninjaon 09 Sep 2013 at 3:08 pm

      I was planning on Nobody having a background in gymnastics and ballet, and maybe some ninjutsu as well. I was also planning on giving her some kind of utility skirt that would have gadgety stuff in it like a pocket knife, smoke bombs, and a grappling gun.

1048. # CCXon 09 Sep 2013 at 6:41 pm

      Hey I have a question. So say you have someone who has pocket space. While fighting an opponant, they put them in their pocket space. What would happen to them? Would it be kind of like a black hole in a way? I mean, right now we’re assuming that the person with pocket space doesn’t have anything valuable in there. By technically, could it be use as a sort of prison? Maybe I’m thinking about this wrong, but could it be like Cloak’s abilities? I mean, I know he has a dark force demension thing, but still… And also, couldn’t the person with pocket space put a friend in there and like, teleport? Could you technically like walk through pocketspace? I’m probably over thinking this, but thanks.

1049. # B. McKenzieon 09 Sep 2013 at 10:09 pm

      “I was planning on Nobody having a background in gymnastics and ballet, and maybe some ninjutsu as well.” That is an unusual mix of activities. I’m sort of feeling it.

1050. # B. McKenzieon 09 Sep 2013 at 10:22 pm

      “You have someone who has pocket space. While fighting an opponent, they put them in their pocket space. What would happen to them?” I’d leave this to the author. It’d be intuitive if it were something like a prison which the prisoner would have a hard time getting out of.
      
      …
      
      “And also, couldn’t the person with pocket space put a friend in there and like, teleport?” Hmm. For dramatic reasons, I’d recommend against using pocket space as potentially a group teleport. I think it would tend to make it very hard to raise the stakes of failure for the group, if they can easily escape from pretty much any losing battle. (One limitation you could use to solve this would be if the pocket-space character was NOT able to enter the pocket space and had to stay behind to man the gates). However, if you wanted to write a pocket space as a group sanctuary or group teleportation ability, I think either would be somewhat believable.

1051. # CCXon 10 Sep 2013 at 5:05 pm

      Okay, thanks. What could you call a character who had the ability to absorb anything? The absorbing man from marvel just sounded lame and I have a character who can absorb stuff. By absorbing I mean touching a mineral and turning into it. (Touching marble and having body made of marble. Thanks

1052. # B. McKenzieon 11 Sep 2013 at 12:15 am

      “What could you call a character who had the ability to absorb anything?” If I were describing it to an editor, I would say something like “the ability to turn into different materials.” In the story itself, I generally try to avoid naming superpowers because it’s usually not very natural (particularly in conversation). For example, if Captain America is talking with Spider-Man or another character who has supernatural abilities to sense danger, it’d be much more natural for CA to ask “Are you picking up anything?” rather than “Is anything setting off your spider-sense?” If the Thing is talking with the Human Torch, something like “watch it with the fire!” probably feels a lot more natural than anything naming the power (e.g. “watch it with the fire control!” or, God help you, “watch it with the pyrokinesis!”)
      
      If characters need to talk about your character’s superpowers, I’d recommend phrasing it along the lines of “turning into [a material]“. For example, if a supervillain gives his henchmen instructions about how to kill the character, he might say something like “If he turns into a rock, use explosives. Otherwise, stick to bullets.” I think that’s a lot more natural/conversational than “if he absorbs a rock…”

1053. # CCXon 12 Sep 2013 at 9:21 am

      Hmmmm, true. I guess that would be a lot more natural. What would be a codename then?

1054. # BMon 12 Sep 2013 at 5:23 pm

      “What would be a codename then?” Doing something based off of the character’s superpowers is an option, but I’d recommend trying out some alternatives first because they tend to be more memorable and make the characters sound more interesting.

      Some alternatives:
      –Something based off the character’s personality/mindset (e.g. Rorschach, Kick-Ass, or Agent Orange).

      –Distinguishing traits and/or goal/motivation (e.g. Captain America).

      –Something thematically and/or symbolically appropriate (e.g. Batman or the Lantern Corps).

      –A contrast between how the character is perceived by others vs. what he is actually like (e.g. Beast).
      
      One potential shortcoming of a name centered around a superpower (e.g. the Human Torch) is that it tends to suggest the character doesn’t have anything interesting going on besides superpowers. If you do go down that route, I’d recommend at least going for something which has some emotional impact and/or accomplishes any of the above. For example, Wolverine’s name is vaguely related to his superpowers (he has claws and is very tough), but I think it works more on an emotional/symbolic level (wolverines are notoriously ferocious, completely uncontrollable, and luridly Canadian).

1055. # CCXon 13 Sep 2013 at 8:06 pm

      Yeah okay. So what would a good codename for someone that could absorb any thing? . By absorbing I mean touching a mineral and turning into it. (Touching marble and having body made of marble.

1056. # B. McKenzieon 13 Sep 2013 at 10:24 pm

      “So what would a good codename for someone that could absorb any thing?” Ideally, something NOT based on his powers.
      
      If you were absolutely dead-set on a name based on his powers, I think something like Emulant (or Emil/Emul+your favorite suffix) would be okay. 1) The connection to his power is that he emulates the minerals he touches*. 2) It strikes me as relatively natural/conversational, especially compared to something like the Absorbing Man.
      
      *Copying or emulation will probably be easier to work into a name than absorption will be.

1057. # Missfireon 18 Sep 2013 at 11:35 pm

      Can anyone tell me a good weakness for immortality? I’m really trying not to over power this guy but I’m losing ground.

1058. # Thalamuson 19 Sep 2013 at 8:40 am

      @Missfire:
      Start with weaknesses inherent in the power: obviously loneliness and a dislike of making friends could be there, but less obviously you could have him be extremely apathetic. From his perspective, anyone he saves will just die later on in any case, so he might become a little disinterested in helping others, or at least find it difficult to remember why he cares. You should probably put in limitations to the immortality to give him a physical as well as a psychological weakness: a common one is only having the immortal character immune to things like old age and disease, but still capable of dying violently, or simply in an accident. That would definitely add some sense of danger to the proceedings, as readers will become bored with the character if they know he’ll survive. Showing a similarly immortal character being killed early on in the story may help the readers to realise that your character could be harmed.

      Another weakness you could give the character is that the immortality is not “cheap”, so to speak: that there is something that has to be done every so often (like a magical ritual, or a vampire drinking blood, or the Doctor regenerating into a new body), as this could similarly create problems for the character if he is cut off from the necessary components, or simply doesn’t have enough time to heal (if that is how the immortality works, as opposed to simply not being hurt in the first place, which would be closer to invulnerability).

      I hope this helps you!

1059. # Thalamuson 19 Sep 2013 at 8:45 am

      Something else I thought of: if you don’t want your character to become apathetic, you could instead give him a different focus (assuming he is a hero – if not, apathy might be a perfect reason why he doesn’t care about helping others). Rather than being overly bothered about saving lives (as is the traditional hero’s creed), such a character could focus more on the quality of those lives, since while he probably wouldn’t put a huge price on the actual length of a life (since, to him, it will always be incredibly short), he could still care for them, and try to make the world a better place in ways that aren’t focused simply on the duration of one’s existence.

1060. # Missfireon 19 Sep 2013 at 10:26 am

      Thanks for the help. He’s only 250 years old so he isn’t that tired of existence yet. But! He’s also can’t be killed by himself or allies. So if he became suicidal he couldn’t kill himself. It if his friend misfired a gin at him he’d live. It’s only if its another person intent on killing him

1061. # BMon 19 Sep 2013 at 4:26 pm

      Thalamus, that is all excellent.

1062. # Elecon 20 Sep 2013 at 2:44 am

      I agree; those are some great ideas you’re throwing around :).

1063. # Czechlordon 21 Sep 2013 at 5:00 pm

      Can anyone tell me the upsides to self detonation. I just think a superhero would not be happy with a power like that.

1064. # B. McKenzieon 21 Sep 2013 at 8:48 pm

      “Can anyone tell me the upsides to self detonation?” I can’t think of anything, unless you’re really not a fan of Stamford, CT. Uhh… assuming the character survives his self-detonation, I’m assuming he’s pretty resistant to fire/heat/explosions in general. I imagine he’d be popular in a bomb defusal / IED removal sort of situation, or perhaps a burning building, any other situation involving extreme heat, or any combat situation where he has a lot of space and a lot of enemies that can freely be exploded (e.g. robots, non-humans, aliens, and armored humans, but I could imagine he and his team would be uncomfortable using him against most humans). In particular, I think he’d need a hell of a lot of creativity to contribute in a situation like a bank robbery, a VIP rescue, or any sort of hostage standoff.
      
      “I just think a superhero would not be happy with a power like that.” Well, the superhero doesn’t have to like it… he just needs to be able to contribute to the plot. It doesn’t strike me as a particularly versatile power, so it wouldn’t be my first choice for a main character’s power, but if he’s one character on a team, he doesn’t need to be useful in every situation.

1065. # koveelaon 21 Sep 2013 at 11:57 pm

      it was quite very helpful because I must make an essay on a superhero who saves someone in danger XX !11:)

1066. # CCXon 22 Sep 2013 at 2:14 pm

      Could someone who could control fire and earth technically control lava or magma?

1067. # B. McKenzieon 22 Sep 2013 at 4:01 pm

      “Could someone who could control fire and earth technically control lava or magma?” Yes, I think that sounds believable.
      
      In general, I defer to an author on whether his/her characters’ powers can be used to do something, unless the use is either extremely counter-intuitive (e.g. something which doesn’t make ANY sense, like using fire-control to mind-control a poodle) or if the power would make it so hard to challenge the character that it would make the story less interesting (e.g. it would probably be too hard to challenge an air-controller if he could suffocate a room of combatants whenever he felt like it). Neither applies in this case.
      

1068. # CCXon 22 Sep 2013 at 6:04 pm

      Okay, thanks.

1069. # CCXon 24 Sep 2013 at 4:09 pm

      Hi everyone I’m thinking of a book plot and wanted advice on it.

      General Idea:
      4 kids have access to a energy called Anima. They can access it basically anytime, except it’s draining to use. They can use this energy to get temporary powers, like converting Anima into a mind reading ability or telekineses. I’m sort of thinking it would be like manna or chi energy, except a little broadened. The kids can make the Anima project itself and become like a shield or an inanimate object. (Kind of like Green Lantern’s ring.) It’s kind of like a magical energy, you could say. The kids with the Anima, who I described below, all have slightly increased speed, strength, reflexes, and senses than a normal person. Note that they do not have true super speed, strength, etc, but simply have a little more strength than the average human.

      Plot:
      So the kids are in foster families, three guys and one girl. The setting is in Oregon. (Need help here…) The kids don’t know or remember their families, but only recall a plane crash. (Again, help…) The town that they live in, I’m still thinking of a name, has people who are hunting them (Hunters) who want to take them in and experiment on them. I know that’s really basic and overly used but I can’t think of anything original for that.

      Main Characters:

      Tommy: Tommy’s basically the leader of the 4 kids. He’s seventeen, the oldest, so he has the responsibility of keeping the others safe. He’s always on his guard, strict, never fooling around, and always, always, serious. He hates using his Anima and tries (and fails) at keeping the other kids in line. However, when Tommy does use his Anima, it’s super powerful but seriously draining. Tommy is one of those characters who doesn’t really trust people. Actually, just picture Batman’s opinions about people and pretty much use that.

      Jay:
      Jay’s the second oldest of all of them at sixteen. He’s the one who’s usually more relaxed about everything and living in the moment. Unfortunately for him, he’s also a rather nerdy type. This girl, Amber, who I’m going to have be a Hunter, tortures him endlessly. While Jay is relaxed, he’s sometimes gets upset and occasionally enjoys getting back at Amber. He constantly uses his Anima to prank people he dislikes, and he’s the one who’s always on Tommy’s nerves. He and Tommy were taken into the same foster homes after they were found near the plane crash wreckage.

      Elle:

      Elle is the only girl of all of them. She’s sixteen as well as Jay, and usually is the one in the group who’s the peace keeper and the thinker. She’s the quiet one of all of them, and never raises her voice and is always in the corner. Elle never fights back for herself when people taunt her, but instead takes their beating. She’s the one who dreams for the future. Elle usually doesn’t get angry, but when she does she really lets her anger loose. She doesn’t use her Anima too much, but when she does it’s not bad. She shares a foster home with Max. Her foster parents are the foster parents who simply bring the kids into their home for cash. Her foster dad sometimes beats her, but she only occasionally fights back.

      Max:

      Youngest of them all at fourteen. He hates being wronged and constantly tries to fight back. He often gets into fights at school. He doesn’t, actually, use his Anima as much as the others with the exception of Tommy. Max favors hand to hand combat; he likes his opponents to know who hurt them and feel the satisfaction of his successes. Because he has Anima, he’s slightly stronger then most people, but is quite small. He often stands up for Elle even when she begs him not too. Max constantly gets in fights with his foster father, not so much for himself but for Elle. Max’s Anima is weak because he doesn’t use it too often. He uses it for surges of power, speed, etc, whereas the others use it for other abilities.

      Amber:

      Main antagonist. She’s like the prettiest, most popular girl at school. Amber is actually a agent in exile; she had killed several people in her years before at age 14. She’s trying to find and capture the people with Anima to try and return to the agency. She’s sadistic, enjoys the suffering of others, and unfortunately for out protagonists- deadly. Trained from the age of eight to the age of fourteen, she’s a pretty deadly killer. She has gun training, demolition training, is an excellent marksman, you know the drill.

      So that’s what I have so far. If anyone has any suggestions, that would be great. Thanks.

1070. # Glamtronon 26 Sep 2013 at 6:36 am

      Any help please..i’m thinking of a hero who uses slings

1071. # CCXon 26 Sep 2013 at 3:35 pm

      @Glamtron What do you mean slings? Like slingshots? Maybe you want to give us more info.

1072. # Power Hogon 27 Sep 2013 at 7:42 am

      Maybe this hero has an unending supply of magic slinging rocks that have different abilities ( poisonous, bombing, hallucinations, exc.) also the sling should be enchanted so it will never miss. Hope this helped

1073. # CCXon 27 Sep 2013 at 9:38 pm

      Can someone help me on my thing? Posted 4 above.

1074. # Zinkaneon 28 Sep 2013 at 10:15 pm

      CCX, I think that, considering you need help with the plane crash, the “Hunters” just have a vendetta for the kids and want to kill them, possibly for power? The Hunters killed their parents to stop them from getting the Anima in the future. Just a thought that popped into my mind, you said that Ellie just “takes her beating” but yet she fights back at her foster dad. I just thought you should notice that. I would recommend not making Tommy super serious all the time, unless it is integral to the story and is important to the logistics if the group. It seems to me as if it would make it hard to relate to him if he never showed any sign of happiness or content. All in all, I think you have thought out your story better than most people do and had the sense to ask around before you got too far into it. Remember to take all my advice with a grain of salt, I’m not a professional.

      -Zinkane-

1075. # Unknownon 30 Sep 2013 at 6:38 am

      CCX, You said you need help with the plane crash? Here are a few ideas that might help.

      1. Maybe while on a vacation, or a trip, the plane the group was in flew through a cloud of the Anima, which resulted in their powers, and the plane’s engines to malfunction, resulting in the crash.

      2. Maybe the agency that Amber works for created the Anima, but it got away from them, and somehow got into the plane’s fuel tank, which causes the plane’s engine to die. And, when the plane crashes, gives the survivors their powers.

      3. If the Tommy and the gang already have their powers, then maybe the agency hijacked the plane, hoping to kill them and retrieve their bodies. But, they survived, and were taken away to a foster home before the agency could get to them.

      Just like Zinkane, I’m not a professional, so feel free to ignore this if you don’t like the ideas.

1076. # CCXon 30 Sep 2013 at 8:16 am

      No, Unknown and Zinkane; you guys are geniuses! I never even thought of the stuff you’ve suggested! It’s brilliant, thanks! Now I have the hard part… Actually writing it.

1077. # CCXon 30 Sep 2013 at 8:39 pm

      Hey everyone, this is for another thing. I need help finding weaknesses for my characters. My problem is that two of my main characters have the exact opposite powers, so I can’t really reuse their powers… Help!

      Here’s the list. Note that these are not for only one character.

      1) Weaknesses for wings. I figure maybe gravity, but I always saw that as seriously violent and could lead to graphic scenes. (Like if the user had gravity pull on the opponent so much it crushes their bones.)

      2) Weaknesses for earth. This one my mind is totally and utterly blank.

      3) Water. Okay, yes I know electricity, but another character already has that. Maybe like heat? Dunno…

      4) Fire. Again, I already have a character with water so this is kind of hard. Now that I think about it, maybe I should have a character that can suck the air surrounding the fire-user, but that seems kind of, again, violent and maybe graphic.

      5) Plants. I thought maybe like a character who could turn darkness into a physical thing and hurl it at her, but otherwise (besides fire…) I couldn’t think of anything.

      6) A shapeshifter. Maybe like another shapeshifter? Help!

      7) Light control. Darkness maybe? I still can’t think of anything…

      8) A flying person. Not wings, like above, but good old fashion, superman flying. (Yes, superman was the first person I could think of.) Maybe for this one I should have a gravity controlling person, like wings.

      9) Superspeed. Can’t think of anything except gravity and time slowing down.

      10) Concussive beams. Basically like Cyclops from X-Men. What would be a good opponent’s ability? I thought maybe invisibility, but I may be wrong.

      And yeah, that’s it. Can anyone help me?? Thanks.

1078. # Comicfighteron 30 Sep 2013 at 9:14 pm

      Hey ccx. For the wing flying person you can probably supersonic screams. It would disorient them and cause them to fly of kilter.
      If you want a cop out for water do ice. For fire use the benefit to have them not want to hurt anyone like hand cuffed to a friend and covered on oil. He could melt the cuffs but his friend would be toast. For superspeed I find that teleportation is a great handy cap(no offence to the people with disabilities). Conclusive beams are tricky maybe it’s something simple like to much adrenaline makes him lose control or something. If this helps please let me know.

1079. # Glamtronon 01 Oct 2013 at 3:36 am

      Ccx..For superspeed.. I use this too..dunno if its a good i idea 4 u..anothe speedster.. someone who uses a person’s power.(like someone with telepathy can read minds and actually see how d speedster uses his powers..and i need help too..any alien weapons that won’t look like the usual human kind..i can hardly come up with any..

1080. # CCXon 01 Oct 2013 at 8:19 am

      Okay, thanks Comicfighter! That stuff sounds great! Thanks for the advice! @Glamtron, alien weapons aren’t really my specialty but I’ll give it a whirl. Maybe you could have guns that are more technical looking than a typical human one. Maybe like the alien’s guns in Avengers, if you’ve seen it. Huh. Looks like I could use a little help too.

1081. # Unknownon 01 Oct 2013 at 4:20 pm

      CCX, Weakness for earth, may be weak against electricity manipulation, electricity can travel through the ground and break apart the earth, so if you used that, it would take care of the water and earth characters. And, i’m just putting this out their, but you could try a mental weakness. Like a mentally unstable mind reader would have trouble controlling his/her powers because they would be reading the minds of all around them, and that would give them a serious headache. just some suggestions.

1082. # CCXon 01 Oct 2013 at 6:30 pm

      Okay, thanks Unknown!

1083. # Zinkaneon 01 Oct 2013 at 7:36 pm

      1) I imagine the wings would be pretty heavy and would require a large amount of strength and focus in order to use when fighting, or even by themselves.

      2) Possibly a connection to earth would being necessary would be a reasonable weakness. It would make the character strong while on land, but less useful when on water or in the air.

      3) Similar to the earth weakness, a water character could be easily dehydrated when using his/her abilities. As a last resort, the character could use their own body water to use for an attack or other water-related ability, though it would surely kill the character.

      4) I don’t know if this one will be useful but here it goes. Most pyrokinetics are immune to fire, but what if yours wasn’t? I don’t mean that he will burn, but his level of fire resistance would not be as high as most pyrokinetics. He could survive for a certain amount of time with fire, but eventually he would start to burn like a normal person.

      5) A plant weakness could be a connection to the plans, which would allow the attacker to attack the plant instead of her, damaging her. This weakness would also prevent experienced plant-powered people from creating an entire forest and trapping all of their enemies in like vines or something.

      6) Shapeshifing would take a large amount of concentration and would leave extra vulnerability to mind reading or similar abilities. If you want another idea, limit the shapeshifter to things the character is familiar with. For example, they don’t know too much Bigfoot, but can easily transform into a wolf or lion.

      7) The best I can do for this one, is possibly the “solid darkness” thing you were talking about earlier. If not, possibly allow some characters to be faster than light in some form. Though, this path would require extensive research into waves and you would have to limit the characters so they are not overpowered.

      8) Instead of flying, you could try a small form of gravitational manipulation. Like Graviton, this would allow the character to fly by lowering the gravitational pull around them. If you wanted this ability for offensive purposes,you could allow a tiny amount against other people, to avoid violent and graphic scenes.

      9) For a speedster, running would probably leave them with nausea or vertigo. As an article here previously stated, B.Mac can leave you link or you can try to find it yourself, a speedster would have trouble with time; time would be slower for a speedster and, from another person’s point of view, they would probably age faster because of that.

      10) Blasting concussive beams from your eyes would most likely leave you with a few seconds of eye squinting or severe headaches. If I blasted beams from my eyes, I probably couldn’t last for more than a few seconds, could you?

      I hope this information helped and congratulations on your story, I hope it goes well.

      -Zinkane-

1084. # Glamtronon 01 Oct 2013 at 11:49 pm

      @ccx thanks for the help. And i forgot this.. For speedster(i like speedsters) maybe someone with ice powers..a speedster can’t run on a slippery ground..@4 the wingman, he won’t fighting everytime on air would he?

1085. # Glamtronon 01 Oct 2013 at 11:52 pm

      @ccx thanks for the help. And i forgot this.For speedster(i like speedsters) maybe someone with ice powers..a speedster can’t run on a slippery ground..and 4 the wingman, he won’t fighting everytime on air would he?

1086. # Glamtronon 01 Oct 2013 at 11:55 pm

      @ccx thanks for the help. And i forgot this.For speedster(i like speedsters) maybe someone with ice powers..a speedster can’t run on a slippery ground..and 4 the wingman, he won’t fighting everytime on air would he?

1087. # B. McKenzieon 02 Oct 2013 at 6:46 am

      “I need help finding weaknesses for my characters. My problem is that two of my main characters have the exact opposite powers, so I can’t really reuse their powers… Here’s the list. Note that these are not for only one character.”
      
      Some thoughts and suggestions:
      
      –How many characters are we looking at here? I’m getting the impression there are 10+ protagonists, and I think having more than 7 would raise huge red flags about character development and character utilization. My thinking here is that if the first 5 protagonists can’t drive the story between them, they probably aren’t the right characters.
      
      –Instead of introducing particular powers as counters to the 10+ superpowers already in play, I’d recommend introducing a few versatile superpowers which can be used to create interesting fights with many. For example, psychic powers, energy absorption, robotics/cybernetics, or power cancellation. Instead of gravity control, which I think would be somewhat challenging to use against the 8+ characters who cannot fly, it might be easier to use something like wind control.
      
      –I would recommend merging or deleting as many of these characters as possible. For example, the guy with wings will probably make the flying guy redundant. The light-based guy, the concussive beams, and possibly the fire controller will likely be redundant as well, particularly if they mainly use their abilities as a generic ranged attack. I could envision a lot of redundancy between earth and water as well (ranged attack + more area of effect).
      
      –”Water. Okay, yes I know electricity, but another character already has that… Fire. Again, I already have a character with water so this is kind of hard.” As much as possible, I’d recommend staying away from a Pokemon-style “one element counters another” setup or (more generally) “this character’s powers are screwed against this other character’s powers.” A fight between (say) Superman and Kryptonite-Man is a lot less interesting than a fight between two characters that are mutually threatening (e.g. Spider-Man vs. Dr. Octopus).

1088. # CCXon 02 Oct 2013 at 8:39 am

      Thanks once again for your great help Zinkane! If you ever need advice or help write it up and I’ll answer it immediately as soon as I see it. Thanks for your help!

1089. # CCXon 02 Oct 2013 at 8:53 am

      Okay thanks B. Mckenzie an Glamtron. The character list is actually for a span of diffrent books I’m attempting to write. Thanks for the advice everyone!

1090. # Comicfighteron 02 Oct 2013 at 2:11 pm

      Hey B Mckenzie how’s the story with agent orange going ?

1091. # Amberon 02 Oct 2013 at 7:09 pm

      ok so ive been working on a comic for some time and im never happy with my chacter’s powers. hes a good guy with an evil demon locked inside him. his brother is the same but his demon is good. i think i need something where the brothers’ powers are connected some way, like similar. right now i have one guys power is energy, and the other brother like energy attacks. I guess im nervous that the main character’s power is too strong like if you blow someone up its the end of the story. any advice people?

1092. # Amberon 02 Oct 2013 at 7:10 pm

      ok so ive been working on a comic for some time and im never happy with my chacter’s powers. any advice

1093. # B. McKenzieon 02 Oct 2013 at 7:19 pm

      “I’ve been working on a comic for some time and I’m never happy with my characters’ powers. Any advice?” It’d be helpful if the characters’ powers were versatile and allowed you to easily challenge them, but aside from that, pretty much every superpower can work. If the characters’ personalities are interesting enough and the plot is well-crafted, virtually any superpower will work.

1094. # B. McKenzieon 02 Oct 2013 at 7:29 pm

      “Hey, B. McKenzie, how’s the story with Agent Orange going?” I have not had much progress with The Taxman Must Die.

1095. # Zinkaneon 02 Oct 2013 at 8:13 pm

      @Amber, my character in my story is similar to yours. He is one of the most powerful super humans in my story, he is part of some special heritage, but has a sort of multiple personality disorder. His ability is to be able to replicate other supers’ abilities and use them himself . I know this ability is powerful, but it also takes a large amount of control and power to be able to use it. My idea is that, like the Hulk, he cannot become too excited or else his “new” personality will take over. His new personality, called Feral, is, you guessed it, feral. Feral is a sociopathic monster obsessed with destruction and chaos and anarchy. After witnessing Feral’s wrath, my main character chooses not to use his abilities too extensively or else chaos will ensue. In addition, the character will not want to cause unnecessary harm or destruction, or else he will be just as evil as Feral. What I am trying to say is that Feral isn’t the main focus of the story, rather an internal struggle with my main character who shapes who he becomes and why he becomes it. This is just my thought, that your demons should be the secondary story arc, unless they are the main plot piece in your comic. I’m not a professional, so take my advice with a grain of salt.

      -Zinkane-

1096. # Glamtronon 03 Oct 2013 at 3:40 pm

      Please i need help with more powers one can get from being a human with reptile traits(partly human and partly reptile)..in d story..its a boarding school and one of the teachers plan to turn humans to reptilian human..he succeeds in d 1st four students..but realizes the 2nd four was a huge mistake coz there decide to stop his plans with their newly founded power and the the help of another teacher (his ex-wife whom he turned)

1097. # Glamtronon 03 Oct 2013 at 3:55 pm

      And with the help of another teacher (his ex that was turned by him..i already have..the following powers 1.camouflage(chameleon) 2.strong skin and strength 3.wall climbing 4.speed 5.regeneration 6.a reptile sixth sense(like locating another rep human) 7.venom.. Agility and strength is a common feature for all of them..but i need some other attributes for someone with the sixth sense and for other characters.. The heroes are 4 students, same with the villains but their number will increase in later part of the story

1098. # CCXon 03 Oct 2013 at 8:44 pm

      @ Glamtron- question. So do each of the four students have all those powers or just one? For me it kind of sounds like the snake society thing in Marvel, with anovabda, constricted and viper.

1099. # Glamtronon 04 Oct 2013 at 12:35 am

      Not all the powers.. Some have two.. Like regeneration and leaping.. Some have have only one.bt agility is common to all

1100. # CCXon 04 Oct 2013 at 7:39 am

      @ Glamtron. Hmm, okay, that makes sense. So what role does the techer play in this? Do the heroes decide to become heroes to undo the evil/pain he’s caused? Why are your villains villains? Is it maybe because the heroes got good abilities and they worse abilities? For powers, all I can think of besides the ones you’ve already decided on are maybe talking to snakes like parseltounge from Harry potter or actually turning into a giant snake. Sorry if this is not helpful.

1101. # Glamtronon 04 Oct 2013 at 9:29 am

      @ccx Thanx 4 d idea..i just came up with the ability to communicate with reptiles..and to your Question.. The teacher(villain) is a rep-human himself.. D strongest,.. and he decides to turn students in the school to rep-h. Thus, starting a small scale war from his school..(to d city, to d country..any brighter ideas could work here).. And 4 d villainous students.. 1st these powers have their side effects..their eyes could change in public,having some sorta likeness 4 raw eggs and 4 some, uncontrollable anger.. These side effects frustrates the rep-students. The villains want the rest students to feel what they feel.. Some are just in support of d teacher’s plan..some just for the love of it(villains even b4 they were turned)..

1102. # CCXon 04 Oct 2013 at 3:50 pm

      @Glamtron- sounds great. Sorry that my suggustions weren’t helpful, but it still sounds good. Here’s some questions to get you thinking…

      What does the teacher want to be? Leader of a tiny country or the world? What are his reasons for this? Maybe you should have the school actually be like a testing place, and if it works for him have a bigger field of people he wants to change. Maybe you should have the villainous reptile/humans have scales on their skin. Having their eyes change, really big anger management issues, and a liking for raw eggs doesn’t seem to fuel the fustration. Maybe some of them have more snake like attributes. How is the teacher the strongest? Does he like, have all the powers or is just physically stronger? So how many villains do you have planned? Four, right? Maybe you want to think about characteristics and precise reason they are evil. For your heroes, why do they decide to become good? Were they ever tempted to join the dark side? Maybe you should have your teacher be a princible, thus giving him more power in the school. Is the teacher a mutant or a expirement? Or is he a scientist who tested something we, the audience, know he seriously shouldn’t have done? What’s his backstory? Maybe you want to give us more info on your villains and heroes, like a small character profile…

      Hope these questions helped!

1103. # Glamtronon 04 Oct 2013 at 9:29 pm

      @ccx.. Your questions really helped(if there’s a word more than help i’d use it).. Yeah,4 d villains..well d whole struggle btw the heroes and villains is secret..the school isn’t aware,thats why i wanna make the hiding of these powers work out..yeah both villains and heroes got the strange eyes&scales(but not always,comes up when they’re xtremely angry.. and 4 the villains..one of them(more like the leader)is a just a power thirsty dude(he wish he even had more).the other..(she is some nasty girl)hates d whole thing..she’s more interested in having other students feel her pain and could care less about helping a teacher..the 3rd,(really has anger management issues!)is similar to d second.since he can’t hurt d one responsible,he decides to hurt the others, d 4th(a close friend 2 d 1st)is not really a power-thirsty dude but just liking the whole thing.4 d heroes,its a different point of view.they hate it, and decide to stop it(while villains hate it, and decide to spread it).. And more importantly bcoz they were helped by his ex(the villain’s ex, also a teacher..she became “ex” coz he turned her)who reveals d whole thing to d good four and works hard tryin to find a cure.and for the main villain,i’m still trying to build his backstory(would really buy a lotta help here)but he’s a scientist.his father was inventor of the whole idea and turned his son before he died.. He always wanted his son to be a great man and not just another ordinary sciensist like him.. And told him he wanted him to take over the city(to country)he hated his father for this.. For this first two years..but later thought about it that.. His father’s still his father and the only way he could honour his dad existence was by carrying out his dad’s wish. Thats all i’ve got about him.. Thanks

1104. # Comicfighteron 05 Oct 2013 at 4:50 pm

      Hey folks. Does this sound cool? Ok I’ve taken two powers walking through walls and teleportation. Mix the two together and you can walk through a wall and apear any where else in the building.

1105. # CCXon 05 Oct 2013 at 11:21 pm

      Your backstory on the main scientist sounds good; makes sense that his dad would want him to be more than a scientist. If you really don’t think it sounds good, maybe have him lhave a weird name or something like that so he wanted revenge? i dunno, I think youshould just give him something that makes him tick. maybe being teased about his father?? So for the main bad guy’s ex, I have a suggustion. Maybe they were scientists together then developed a love relashionship, then got married. Then maybe after that, they moved in with each other, and later maybe she found him doing expirements on some students in their basement. After she divorced him, an started working on a cure? I dunno, it’s just a suggustion, so don’t pay it any mind. I like the way you make the villains tick, one being power hungry (or thirsty, take your pick) one wanting to take her anger out on innocents, the third taking their anger out on innocents, like the second (maybe you should have them be siblings) and the last just doing it cause it seems cool. Hmm. It sounds like you could put some work into them… It sounds like you’ve pretty much got your villains down, so let’s try working on the heroes.

      Sorry if you don’t think this stuff is useful…

1106. # CCXon 05 Oct 2013 at 11:32 pm

      Oh also as a second thought for the teacher’s reasons for being evil, maybe having his dad be shunned for having overly crazy ideas about human cross-species. I dunno, t would be a valid reason for revenge, as would it make sense

1107. # Glamtronon 06 Oct 2013 at 7:52 am

      @ccx.. Ur ideas have helped me alot lately! Seriously.. Well on the heroes, the 1st one(eric) is somewhat stubborn but likes being helpful to people.he is also the only one on the heroes side that finds these powers cool.The 2nd(sandra).a cheeky girl.she is close to the 1st.(and he likes her but doesn’t disclose this)she hates the change and doesn’t care about revenging on the innocent and equally doesn’t care about stoping it. But she is later convinced by eric and the teacher (villain’s ex)that if she really hates it she wouldn’t want d same thing to befall others.(she may not be able to exact vengeance on d person but she can exert it on d act).. The 3rd(jeff).. A basketballer,is helped by d good teacher(miss helen)from being discovered when his new powers 1st manifested.(xame wit d others)he has anger management issues too. And this he exerts on the villains.the 4th(lucy)is a calm dreamy girl.she has d ability predict nearest future(sth that could happen in an hour time) of rep humans.(and communicates with She is a reserved person and prefers being alone most times..

1108. # CCXon 06 Oct 2013 at 8:50 am

      @Glamtron: your heroes sound great! What abilities do they have? Well, besides Lucy. Maybe you should have each of the heroes have a seperate issue. Like for Lucy, maybe since she’s the one who can see attacks have her have nightmares and is always tired. Is she going to be an offensive player or one who sits in the corner during the fight? Jeff sounds great, don’t change anything about him. For Sandra, maybe the only reason she stays is that she has a crush on Eric. Might want to be careful if you’re going to have a love relashionship in this… eric sounds good, since you said he thinks that the powers are cool, maybe making him like a superhero nerd? how old are they? Are they all the same age? I would suggust Jeff to be the oldest, but Eric to be leader, which again I’m guessing he is. Thank you for giving them names! hope this helped!

1109. # Glamtronon 07 Oct 2013 at 12:55 am

      @ccx thanks alot! And your guess about jeff being the oldest and eric being leader is correct.. I’m happy its already looking that way even without me explaining.. On their abilities, u could still add but these are what i’ve got.Eric has incredible leaping, regeneration(and agility,this makes the other villain leader jealous) sandra’s got camouflage, like chameleon and is able to look at two direction once(she’s an offensive player) jeff’s got strength and strong skin(would it be a bad idea to make him scaly? But the scales wouldn’t cover his arm, face and knee downward?) and 4 lucy,u know hers.. judging from her calm nature i dunno if i should make her the fighting type, like sandra. And 4 their age, both girls 15 eric 16 and jeff 18..(please i would really really like you to make suggestions about their age) Thanks.

1110. # CCXon 07 Oct 2013 at 1:51 pm

      @Glamtron, nice to know I’m helping, not hindering. Here’s what I got-

      Regeneration, exceptional leaping, and agility for eric. Sounds good. Maybe he likes to taunt the other villains? For example if eric was fighting a villain, “Haha sucker. You missed me!” something like that would actually be really funny. Why does he become the leader and not Jeff?

      A quick suggestion is maybe to think of a type of reptile and have the character be based off of the type of reptile. (Or in eric’s case, amphibian. I think anyway.) I think it would be easier for you to decide abilities if you had something to base it off of. Anyway, it’s just a suggestion, so don’t pay it any mind if you don’t like it.

      So for Sandra, I like it with the exception of being able to look two ways. That just sounds somewhat weird, no offense intended. I think what might make more sense is for her to just have her be a camouflage person. I like that she’s able to fight, and doesn’t sit in the sidelines like some annoying girl characters. Go Sandra!

      For Jeff, having those abilities are great. Don’t change anything about it. Yes, I think scales would be good for jeff, making him embarrassed that he can’t go out and play basketball with his friends. if you really wanted to spike him, I would suggest the others not having such show-able scales. Of course, that’s only if you want to drag that issue into this, it’s just a suggestion. Or not. I dunno, take your pick.

      For Lucy, I honestly see her as a pacifist and not really a fighter. But I think if you did want to have her be a fighter, it could technically work out. You could have her be really agile and then have her use her ability of seeing attacks to dodge and expect the opponent’s moves. If you’ve read twilight, and yes, twilight, then you might want to copy Alice’s attacks from eclipse or look it up. It actually wasn’t a bad fight scene, all things considered. Okay, let’s get back to your book now.

      So the age I think you should have Sandra be sixteen like Eric and Lucy be 15. I think it would balance this out a little. Is Jeff upset because Eric is the leader? Or is he like, ‘whatever. I get to pound people’s heads and that’s good enough for me.’

      I think you’ve got your characters and plot pretty well down. Oh, would you mind mentioning the villain’s powers for me? Thanks and I hope this helped!

1111. # Diggeron 07 Oct 2013 at 3:35 pm

      I need some help with a hero. What’s a good power to go with a man who is a Jamaican ex-FBI agent?(he left the FBI because of an accident that occurred and he lost his arm because of it. )

1112. # CCXon 07 Oct 2013 at 4:24 pm

      @ Digger- well what power your hero has depends on what you want. If you could have any superpower, what would it be?

1113. # Coolwriteron 07 Oct 2013 at 5:38 pm

      @ Digger- I think maybe super strength, cause while he lost one arm it might make up for it if he had super strength. Your choice though.

1114. # Glamtronon 08 Oct 2013 at 12:19 am

      @ccx.. Thanx! I think i’ll go with ur age suggestions.. 4 the villains, the 1st(tom) has wall climbing,leaps too, and agility..the 2nd(mark the furious)he’s got strength like jeff.. D 3rd,(Anna)she’s got speed and snake venom. D 4th(chris)he’s got agility but honestly i don’t a power 4 him yet.. Would really need help on him(once thought about a long tongue). Thanks

1115. # Diggeron 08 Oct 2013 at 10:46 am

      Thanks for the suggestions everybody. It really helped me out. One more thing though. What’s a good limitation for super strength?

1116. # Glamtronon 08 Oct 2013 at 11:05 am

      @digger personally, i don’t think you really need a weakness(if thats the limitation you mean).. I think an equal match would be better or even someone bigger than him.. Its just a suggestion

1117. # CCXon 08 Oct 2013 at 5:38 pm

      @Glamtron: Again, nice to know im somewhat helping. here are my suggustions…

      How come you How come you decided to have Tom and Erick have the same matching abilities? Did you want it to simply make them arc genomes or something along those lines? Having that might actually be a little tricky, because they would be equal… Your choice.

      “Mark the Furious,” haha I like it. I would suggust that you should give Mark diffrent powers or something somewhat the same but diffrent. Maybe instead having him have like anaconda squeezing with his hands? Dunno…

      Anna, I like her abilities. Speed and poison, nice combo. How does she administer the venom? Please say she doesn’t lick them… gross. Maybe having her touch them if their (heroes) are cut and bleeding to inject it in.

      For Chis, you said you didn’t know what ability to give him but were orphan sly going to have him have a long tounge. So why not? It could end up with some hilarious fight scenes, like him wrapping his touge around a hero, using his tounge to pick up items, and a hero gripping his touge and swing him around with it. They do say the touge is the strongest muscle in the body… so why not? Besides, there technically is villan in the brotherhood of evil mutants (xmen/marvel) who has a long tonge so… why not?

      All of this sounds great. Have you figured out the teacher’s background yet? Hope this helped!

1118. # CCXon 08 Oct 2013 at 5:42 pm

      @Glamtron- gah, sorry for the spelling errors. Stupid spellcheck. Gnomes= enemies, and orphan sly is originally. Sorry.

1119. # B. McKenzieon 08 Oct 2013 at 7:09 pm

      “Besides, there technically is villan in the brotherhood of evil mutants (xmen/marvel) who has a long tonge so… why not?”
      
      1) Giving a superhero a very gross superpower might compromise the aspirational appeal of the character and repel readers from the character.
      
      2) If the story is more serious than, say, the average Mario game, I think the idea of using a tongue as a weapon may present tonal issues. (That said, this sort of ranged-grab combat is great for game designers — see Castlevania, Metroid, Yoshi’s Island, Leon the Super-French Serial Killmeleon* and Froggy G in Awesomenauts, etc).
      
      *”Gimme your money. Gimme your cheese. And I give you all my love.”

1120. # Glamtronon 09 Oct 2013 at 1:10 am

      @ccx yeah it helped.. And for tom and eric, tom’s got wallclimbing, and agility.(take back what i said about leaping) while eric got leaping, regeneration and agility(all the reps got agility).. And 4 anna, lick??(ofcourse that sucks!) i’m looking into your suggestion.by the way, would spitting be bad?(oops!) well appears the tongue may not be that bad afterall.. And 4 the teaher’s backstory, i’m combinine your contributions with mine.. Like his dad being for overly crazy ideas about cross species,(this could call for revenge) but determined not give it up, passes it down to his son(the villain) by turning him.. And the son who later decides to go with the plan, uses the school as a test field.. Thats all i’ve got.. (yeah! And don’t stop thinking about rep-abilities you can suggest ok?) thanks!

1121. # Glamtronon 09 Oct 2013 at 1:13 am

      @ccx yeah it helped.. And for tom and eric, tom’s got wallclimbing, and agility.(take back what i said about leaping) while eric got leaping, regeneration and agility(all the reps got agility).. And 4 anna, lick??(ofcourse that sucks!) i’m looking into your suggestion.by the way, would spitting be bad?(oops!) well appears the tongue may not be that bad afterall.. And 4 the teaher’s backstory, i’m combinine your contributions with mine.. Like his dad being for overly crazy ideas about cross species,(this could call for revenge) but determined not give it up, passes it down to his son(the villain) by turning him.. And the son who later decides to go with the plan, uses the school as a test field.. Thats all i’ve got.. (yeah! And don’t stop thinking about rep-abilities you can suggest ok?) thanks!!

1122. # CCXon 09 Oct 2013 at 4:17 pm

      @Glamtron: sorry I’m posting so late after you posted. Here are suggustions…

      Okay, sorry for having to ask about Tom and Eric. That was just confusing me a little bit. Spitting would actually make sense, and FYI I was kidding about the tounge thing, so you could go along with that if you really wanted too. I was thinking a little about that and thought that technically all of the venom is in fluids, right? So technically, you could have blood, saliva, or urine (even though I would draw the line there… Sorry, I couldn’t even resist even though it’s gross. Gotta be a kid sometimes.) it woudl make sense to the reader if you wanted to that. Having all of them have agility sounds good. It makes sense.

      Your background story for the teacher villain sounds good. Have you come up with background stories for your heroes and villains? Having a background story can help you develop your characters. Hope this helped! (Sorry that I keep saying that- force of habit…)

1123. # Glamtronon 10 Oct 2013 at 5:07 am

      @ccx lol and yeah.. It helped. But.. Would it be bad if i have a boarding school where each student got a room(not really a big room.. I’m even shy to say it) it’d help me.. Well..if its not a bad idea.. Eric and sandra had been friends(just friends) since they ran into each other at a show during d holidays.. And sometimes(when he feels lonely)he goes to her in her room so they could maybe hangout.. Something like that(not really appriopriate buh he gets fond of it)and it was in a time like this that they were both locked in her room(from outside.. By anna) in a gas that made them collapsed..before miss helen found them. Jeff’s water bottle was secretly injected while he was playing basketball.. Honestly I’m still thinking about a backstory 4 d rest.

1124. # CCXon 10 Oct 2013 at 3:26 pm

      @Glamtron: your backstories for your heroes sound good. It would. Perfectly fine if you wanted to have a boarding school, in fact, it would make even more sense if you had a boarding school; otherwise won’t their parents notice what’s going on?

      So for your idea about Sandra and Eric it sounds good, and same with Jeff’s, but what about Lucy? Why does the professor want there certain test subjects? Is there something sespific about their DNA?

      For your villains maybe just think about what makes them so angry. I know that you had posted something earlier here, but maybe you want to think of their background. Maybe like Anna is the second of three children and is always forgotten. Maybe Tom’s parents beat him. I dunno, you’re going to have to think of some pretty nasty stuff, but I needs to contribute to why they want revenge.

      So, let’s think about Lucy. Maybe she saw someone die? … I know that’s really bad, but still… or actually on second thought how about this: maybe she had some small ability to feel when someone was going to attack, and then she tried to warn her cousin, who she felt like someone was going to attack a loved one. Then they ignored her and went to were she saw them being killed by the head rep. I dunno, it’s just a idea.

      That’s all I got. Let me know if you have any other questions. (See? I didn’t say I hope this helpwd even though I just did! )

1125. # CCXon 10 Oct 2013 at 3:29 pm

      @Glamtron: your backstories for your heroes sound good. It would. Perfectly fine if you wanted to have a boarding school, in fact, it would make even more sense if you had a boarding school; otherwise won’t their parents notice what’s going on?

      So for your idea about Sandra and Eric it sounds good, and same with Jeff’s, but what about Lucy? Why does the professor want there certain test subjects? Is there something sespific about their DNA?

      For your villains maybe just think about what makes them so angry. I know that you had posted something earlier here, but maybe you want to think of their background. Maybe like Anna is the second of three children and is always forgotten. Maybe Tom’s parents beat him. I dunno, you’re going to have to think of some pretty nasty stuff, but I needs to contribute to why they want revenge.

      So, let’s think about Lucy. Maybe she saw someone die? … I know that’s really bad, but still… or actually on second thought how about this: maybe she had some small ability to feel when someone was going to attack, and then she tried to warn her cousin, who she felt like someone was going to attack a loved one. Then they ignored her and went to were she saw them being killed by the head rep. I dunno, it’s just a idea.

      That’s all I got. Let me know if you have any other questions. (See? I didn’t say I hope this helped even though I just did! )

1126. # Glamtronon 10 Oct 2013 at 4:44 pm

      @ccx.. Lol! yeah, it helped.(lol) thanks 4 xome ideas there and the boarding school stuff.. For lucy.. I’m talking about a backstory on how she was turned..you know, they never had these powers till they were turned. I’m still stuck with how she was turned.. Even for the villains too.. And i dunno, but anna’s the kinda girl(less decency stuff)that sounds like one who wouldn’t take a thing serious but does.. She doesn’t joke with her birthdays and always make sure it doesn’t just come and pass that easily.. She’s pretty also good at trouble missions from her team. And she’s sorta a little connection btw the heroes and villains coz she kinda get along with Eric(she also got a crush on him buh he doesn’t)..she’s type that makes both sides feel uncertain about if u can trust her or not.. I’m still stuck with how she was turned but thats all i got on her 4 now… And hope this helps u to help me #lol#

1127. # CCXon 10 Oct 2013 at 8:30 pm

      @ Glamtron: Haha yes. Your posting has helped me as well.

      So for Lucy, yeah I know. My backstory suggestion didn’t really make sense. Sorry about that. Maybe she was sick before and had to take medicine? And one of them put a different pill in? Like if Anna used her speed to switch pills while looking? It’s just a thought.

      For your villains, I would just go with either the typical injection theory or gas chamber theory. No offense intended towards jews at all… Yeah. But in theory this would be easier. Maybe just have the Teacher (What’s his name again? Sorry…) get them in the middle of the night and change them. I dunno, it’s not very elaborate, but hey; if the shoes fit.

      Haha Anna. Yeah, she makes sense. Why is she serious about her birthday? Is it relevant to your book? What are trouble missions? Are they like missions that are stirring up trouble for the heroes? If so I totally agree with that; the speedster’s got to be the best trickster EVER. So maybe you should have the boarding school be for troubled children, and have her be like a thief. I like that you have her be untrustworthy to both teams, making her a little rouge for both teams. I think that having her have a crush on Eric is a good idea, making her waver a little about betraying him.

      Anyway, I think you have your book’s plot and characters pretty down. Let me know if you need any more help! (Again, I didn’t say hoped it helps… Dang it… I just did it again… )

1128. # Glamtronon 10 Oct 2013 at 10:50 pm

      @ccx lol.. Yeah it helped..really!.. And thanks 4 the suggestions on lucy’s backstory. i can go with that.. And about the villains, i once had similar thoughts too..(thanks 4 confirmin it).. And the teacher’s name is Mr Williams i didn’t mention it earlier..and 4 the birthday stuff, its only relevant to a part where her team wanted to use her birthday party as a medium 4 their plans(the turning people thing)..and she refused, saying not on her birthday but they didn’t stop and she had to ask eric 4 help.(dunno if that sucx!) ..and sandra’s the type addicted to her headphone..(there’s a part where it was broken by anna)..and another thing.. U can suggest powers 4 Mr williams.. Hope it helps u help me..!-_’

1129. # Comicfighteron 10 Oct 2013 at 11:09 pm

      @glamtron. You can give him any power really. My advice is make it subtle like he’s shown it before but no one was quite sure what he did until he kills someone err something like that.

1130. # CCXon 11 Oct 2013 at 1:08 pm

      @Glamtron: So you need a power for Mr. Williams, the teacher? I would honesty have him have pretty much all the powers the other heroes and villains have. I dunno, I might have to agree with Comicfighter on this one. I still think it would be cool and would make sense if you you had him have a combination of all of the powers, but that’s just me.

      Why does Anna say no to plans on her birthday? Was ther some tragic backstory that happened on her birthday?

      Haha. I bet Sandra loses it when Anna breaks her headphones. That’s got to be a funny scene.

      Even though I didn’t really help at all, I hope this helps. (You know, I’m just giving up on the no on using that. Oh well.)

1131. # Glamtronon 11 Oct 2013 at 4:15 pm

      Thanx @ccx & comicfighter.. Good to know ideas clash.. I actually thought d xame thing but wanted to know what hear from others..(guess my concept wasn’t bad afterall) 4 anna, nothing tragic happened on her birthday.. Just kinda reflects me(don’t joke with birthdays).. So she wants some little respect 4 her day and not some sorta “REPTILE INVASION” plan.(dah sucx doesn’t it?)

1132. # MarvelAshon 14 Oct 2013 at 5:49 am

      Hey peoples! Ok, I’m writing a book for nanowrimo (coming up really soon!) and I as I’ve been planning the plot line I’ve run into a few problem points that have me stumped…

      Okay. Protagonist is a girl named Riley. Her powers are pretty difficult to explain, but bear with me..

      She has the ability to make a “copy” of whatever she holds in her hands.. Say, she has a iPhone in her left hand, and by using her power, she can create an identical item in her right.. I liked the idea of this power, but I’m running into wayyyy too many plot holes:

      How can this power be useful offensively? In a fight? (This is my main problem)
      What is her secondary power? (No clue what would work here)

      I was thinking she could be limited to non-organic things… Like if she tried to make a plant, the plant she made would find up mutated and disfigured, and might even cause harm to the original.

      Villain.. Thinking some hitler wannabe wants her to make duplicate copies of a superhuman, but she’s never been able to copy anything living..

      ….no clue! Any ideas?

1133. # CCXon 14 Oct 2013 at 9:38 am

      @MarvelAsh: your plot sounds pretty good so far. In a fight, if Riley was a weapons expert (and even though, considering what you’ve told us she’s not) she could technically make duplicates of weapons. I don’t really understand what a second power is, so I can’ help you with that (sorry) but Riley sounds like she’s pretty good with the whole duplicating thing, which actually makes sense. I think it would be good if you limited her to nonorganic items. It makes sense. Your villain sounds fine and their role makes sense.

      Hope this helped. Good luck with your book! Let me know if you need more help.

1134. # Dr. Vo Spaderon 14 Oct 2013 at 10:02 am

      @Marvel Ash,

      I think the first plot hole that comes to my mind is Riley not being filthy rich. (Getting her hands on something valuable and duplicating it to be sold multiple times) That may actually be a good for a villain’s motivation. Just a thought.

1135. # Coolwriteron 14 Oct 2013 at 4:50 pm

      Hi everyone, I have a question about a power.

      So say I have a person with the ability to learn anything. I know so far that makes no sense, but bear with me please. So anyway, say she wanted to learn how to draw anime or something like that. All she would have to do is think really hard about it, and then she would be able to draw. Or if she wanted to learn another language, all she would have to do is learn a little bit of that language and then she would get the entire language. Same with stuff like math and writing. Does that make sense?

1136. # B. McKenzieon 14 Oct 2013 at 5:22 pm

      “So say I have a person with the ability to learn anything. I know so far that makes no sense, but bear with me please. So anyway, say she wanted to learn how to draw anime or something like that. All she would have to do is think really hard about it, and then she would be able to draw. Or if she wanted to learn another language, all she would have to do is learn a little bit of that language and then she would get the entire language. Same with stuff like math and writing. Does that make sense?” It mostly makes sense, but I think the speed/ease with which the character learns things will probably make the character’s learning less interesting than a character who actually works at it? If I could offer an analogy here, Batman’s flight scenes are more interesting than Superman’s because Superman has it so easy.

1137. # Coolwriteron 15 Oct 2013 at 8:31 am

      Oh, okay, thank you B.McKenzie!

1138. # CCXon 16 Oct 2013 at 4:04 pm

      Hi everyone! I have a few questions about a book plot and wanted some opinions on it… So the story takes place in modern times in California. Here’s the main plot I’ve been thinking of.

      The main character is a girl named Alexus, a girl who’s kind of a brat at the beginning of the book. She’s shallow, and cares only for herself, although I’m going to have her mature in the course of the book. She soons discovers that she has the power of temporary mind control, influence… take your pick. Anyway, while she’s sleeping, she’s taken to a mutant prison camp by agents from the government. When she wakes, she finds herself in a hospital bed with restraints around her arms, and a blindfold around her eyes. At the mutant prison camps there are two groups of authority, Agents, kind of like guards, and Evaluators, basically scientists. Anyway, when she wakes, a Evaluaor comes into the room, and undoes her blindfold. He introduces himself of Doctor Curio, and tells we she’s in a special facility for special people. (No offense intended to disabled people.) anyway, she starts freaking out, and begins shrieking out things like, “get out!” And other stuff. Anyway, because her ability only works when either someone is listening to her or looking into her eyes, the evaluator puts the blindfold on her again, undoes the restraints, and has a helper (i didn’t mention these people before since they have no real authority) lead her outside to the other kids so they can mingle. After all, this place is supposed to be a “hospital” for sick kids. Anyway, when the helper gets to the courtyard where everyone else is, she pretty much ditches her. Alexus kind of just stands there since she can’t see anything, but then decides to try and find a wall, where she accidentally runs into a boy named Matthew, but likes o go by Matt. He’s an empath, so he absorbs her ability, and after they introduce themselves, he helps Alexus find a place to sit.

      That’s the part that I’ve actually thought out in detail, so I’ll give the abridged version now. It’s about six months later, and nothing has changed. Then Alexus and Matt find a way to escape, and in a few days they do. After that they decide to try and take down the place that kept them prisoners and free all the other kids. I feel like I should have some more characters, but I’m not sure. And after that I have no idea what to do after.

      So in case if you didn’t really get the main characters, I’ll list them here.

      Alexus- mind influencer. Main character, 16, origninally shallow but then matures into a kind of bitter and careful person.

      Matt- Alexus’s friend. Matt’s an empath, and has absorbed Alexus’s mind influencing, a random person’s flying and… help? Need basic abilities that aren’t too powerful. 16 as well. I’m kind of debating him being gay, bu I think that would make this really complex… anyway, he’s grounded and is always comforting and patient.

      I’m debating about putting a character named Patrick in there. He would be the bitter, vengeful one. His parents abandoned him a. The hospital, thinking he was a freak because he can control electricity.

      Doctor Curio- one of the main scientists. He’s kind of the original bad guys, but then it’s found out that he works for a scientist even bigger then him.

      And yeah, that’s it. Can anyone give me critique?

1139. # BeautifulNightmareson 20 Oct 2013 at 8:10 pm

      Okay so, what if, there was a power that could control/see/use radio waves? I’m not sure if that makes a whole lot of sense…like, she can see all the electromagnetic connections, and tap into the them (touch them and move them around) she could tap into a security camera and control what it sees and records, with a computer, she won’t even have to put it on. So pretty much what I’m saying is that she has her own unlimited personl wifi werever she goes. During a test in class, with a flick of her fingers in midair(that’s how others will see it) she could go onto some sites and look up the answers..not sure how she would control the browsing yet-probably with her mind or “typing it in the air” the thing is I know that if she types in mid air then in would look weird and stupid to regular people, I like it, she would be different and me, personally is different:) so going back to how she would look things up would just depend on what I come up with or whatever someone might comment-aye so let me know! I really want to strt something of this character (plus some:) sooooooooo yeah

1140. # CCXon 20 Oct 2013 at 9:24 pm

      @BeautifulNightmares: being able to see electromagnetic waves is a power I’ve only seen twice in two separate shows. The first is in Heroes, with Hana Gitelman, and a newer show called Alphas, Gary Bell who has the ability to see electromagnetic waves (which includes wifi.). He would sound a lot like the character you have in mind as he’s autistic. Hope this helped.

      Also, can anyone help me on my book plot question?

1141. # B. McKenzieon 21 Oct 2013 at 5:30 pm

      “She soon discovers that she has the power of temporary mind control, influence… Anyway, while she’s sleeping, she’s taken to a mutant prison camp by agents from the government.” If possible, I’d suggest giving her a more active role in this. For example, in Hunger Games, the main character is not actually originally the one chosen to fight to the death in the titular deathmatch. It’s the main character’s sister, but the main character volunteers in her sister’s place. Could you incorporate some element of choice or unusual personality elements which would give the character more of a stamp on the plot? I think that would probably make the protagonist more memorable.
      
      Also, it sounds like the antagonists may be sort of one-dimensionally evil. The plot might be more interesting with more depth to the villains.
      
      
      Are Dr. Curio and his boss substantially different in some way (e.g. personality, goal, modus operandi, whatever)? If not, it might not be necessary to have both characters.

1142. # JJon 22 Oct 2013 at 1:42 pm

      Ability to raise the dead ability to manipulate sound and light waves.

1143. # "X"on 22 Oct 2013 at 2:45 pm

      Question is the name Ultraman been used?

1144. # CCXon 22 Oct 2013 at 3:23 pm

      At “X”: Yeah, apperently some japense tv show used that name, but I’d guess it might still be valid. @B.Mckenzie- thanks for your help. It made sense.

1145. # B. McKenzieon 22 Oct 2013 at 8:07 pm

      I’m not terribly worried over whether the name Ultraman has been used before. In general, publishers won’t insta-reject you because a name has been used already*, but they may ask you to change the name and you can cross that bridge when you get there. While you don’t need to preemptively change the name on legal grounds, I would recommend changing it for creative reasons, in favor of a name which is more distinctive to your character (i.e. something which helps readers differentiate your character from everybody else on the market and/or makes him more memorable in some way).
      
      *Assuming the book is otherwise publishable, a publisher will not reject you over a legal concern which can be fixed in an hour.

1146. # "X"on 23 Oct 2013 at 11:40 am

      Thanks for the help

1147. # Kid Ghoston 23 Oct 2013 at 1:31 pm

      “X”: character personality or power for example ( Spiderman type, Batman type, Superman type, Raven type) which one he act like the most Oh and by the way “Ultraman” has been used by DC also.

1148. # CCXon 23 Oct 2013 at 3:37 pm

      Technically someone who could control water could control weather technically, right? And also, would it be a valid power for someone to be able to speed up the molecules in objects,

1149. # CRon 25 Oct 2013 at 1:15 pm

      Note: Elemental superpowers >> basic elements >> wind.

      Would you say wind is the same as weather? Storm from x-Men could create more than just wind.

      I ask because I am writing a comic book that will have a superhero for each of the element superpowers and am unsure if I should use wind as a superpower or weather.

1150. # Nature Witchon 25 Oct 2013 at 1:22 pm

      Wind is not the same power as for weather in my opinion, but if used correctly a wind-based power would probably be able to to manipulate weather-phenoneom. Thunder is created when hot and cold winds meet afterall, so somethings can be made.

1151. # CRon 25 Oct 2013 at 1:27 pm

      I should also state that I take nature to mean animals rather than mother nature. If this is wrong, please tell me.

1152. # Nature Witchon 25 Oct 2013 at 1:41 pm

      It would seem a little iffy if someone said they controlled nature, but did only control animals. Maybe if the character controlled both fauna and flora (animals and plants), but not only animals. But that is only my opinion, maybe someone has another idea.

      But if the character is going to control animals I would suggest you to think how far that control goes. You have to think if the control goes to all breathing beings, or if humans are an exception. There is afterall discussions of how far the differences is between human and animal.

1153. # CRon 25 Oct 2013 at 1:55 pm

      I am extremely new to the comic book world. I have never even read one! A few marvel films is as far as my knowledge goes. I’m doing this as a Christmas present for my reasonably new and reasonably comic book obsessed girlfriend (making her the star of course)

      Nature Witch: Fauna and Flora is an excellent idea! I would not extend the control to Humans and probably put it down to the fact that they are not in tune with nature – which is quite true.

      My outline so far is to have a hero and a villain for each element (if I chose all of the elemental powers above). They would all have a primary colour. All of gained their power from either a bump or traumatic event – usually as a child. They will all have other powers too but bond as a team due to their elemental powers.

      I haven’t worked on the story much yet as I think it is probably best to get the heroes and villains together first right?

      Anyone with good ideas or any feedback, please go ahead. I (and my girlfriend) will very much appreciate it

1154. # NatureWitchon 25 Oct 2013 at 2:06 pm

      Seems intresting. I would sugest that the villain and hero with the same elemental power (if I got it right, and it wasn’t that it was that noone else have the same elemental power) have diffrent secondary powers.

      “All of gained their power from either a bump or traumatic event – usually as a child.” I would suggest they wouldn’t get powers because of a bump on the head, seems a bit to simple. A lot of kids get a bump on their heads so it had to be more then that. If the traumatic event thing is used, maybe the powers are activated as a survival instinct so to say, more then that they get sad and then the powers get activated.

      Otherwise it seems intresting :D.

1155. # CRon 25 Oct 2013 at 2:46 pm

      I had a plan to explain the whole “bump on the head” thing, but I actually like your idea much better. It is both simpler than what I had in mind and far more interesting – it creates a story in itself.

      I was having trouble with what elements (and colours) to chose. I think they should probably all have an opposite so as to make for interesting fight scenes with certain villains and it gives me the opportunity to lever a fight in favour by one person showing up. It also gives a uniformity to both super-gangs (I haven’t worked out what I will call them yet :P)

      Darknss/Shadows (black) vs Light/Energy (bright, light, yellow). The former will be me and the latter my partner, both in the comic and out.

      Then either a fire vs water/ice and wind/air vs earth (which I think works well, despite popular opinion) or the more popular circle of water > fire > wind > earth > water..

1156. # NatureWitchon 26 Oct 2013 at 3:10 am

      “I was having trouble with what elements (and colours) to chose”
      I can’t really help chosing the elements, but with the colors I have an idea you can use if you want. When you have chosen your elements look up the meanings for colors. The color that fit the things you associate either with the character having the element, or the element itself is most fitting. You might have more then one color on the uniform though just so it is easier to diffrience a light blue and another blue (as an example).

      “Then either a fire vs water/ice and wind/air vs earth ”
      Do you mean they will only do one on one battles. You have to wonder why they work as a group then, so the circle of power seems to work better, bigger chances to do teamwork

      Hope it all goes well

1157. # B. McKenzieon 26 Oct 2013 at 7:41 pm

      When you said that a lot of characters got superpowers from “a bump,” the first thing that came to mind was the narcotics slang. Breaking Bad is really doing a number on me.

1158. # CCXon 27 Oct 2013 at 8:19 pm

      Question; would it be a effective power for someone to be able to increase/decrease the speed of molecules? Also, could someone who controlled water technically control weather?

1159. # Comicfighteron 27 Oct 2013 at 8:20 pm

      Are there powers that could resemble those of a vampire. Not all that blood drinking stuff but something like it?

1160. # Comicfighteron 27 Oct 2013 at 8:25 pm

      Ccx my man! I feel that the molecule thing is awesome. When molecules become rapid fire is created so that could be a big game changer in a fight or if they vibrate at a steady rate invisibility can be reached. As for the weather thing you could control aspects of it. Like in avatar the last air bender between aang and katara they form clouds because they are water and air. You just can’t control all weather with water control. Make sense?

1161. # B. McKenzieon 28 Oct 2013 at 6:20 am

      “Also, could someone who controlled water technically control weather?” Rain strikes me as intuitive. Maybe fog, hail, and snow (assuming some degree of temperature and pressure control). Wind and lightning would not feel intuitive to me.

      …

      “Would it be a effective power for someone to be able to increase/decrease the speed of molecules?” I fear the character may have trouble contributing to action scenes without turning them into physics lectures. How much can you have the character do without needing to explain what’s going on to readers?
      
      It may be easier to work with a similar power that is more intuitive to readers (e.g. telekinesis is the ability to increase/decrease the speed of objects, which will take a hell of a lot less explanation).

1162. # CCXon 28 Oct 2013 at 3:24 pm

      Oh, okay. Thank you B. Mckenzie.

1163. # Coolwriteron 28 Oct 2013 at 3:47 pm

      Hey what do you think is the lamest superpower? Personally, it’s talking to plants. But that’s just me.

1164. # B. McKenzieon 28 Oct 2013 at 5:24 pm

      “What do you think is the lamest superpower?” In no particular order, I’d vote for super-strength and invulnerability. I find the Hulk’s and Superman’s fight scenes excruciatingly monotonous. They have very little variety and very little at stake in most fights.

1165. # Unknownon 30 Oct 2013 at 4:39 am

      Water breathing is easily the lamest superpower.

1166. # B. McKenzieon 30 Oct 2013 at 5:44 am

      If the character only has one power, I would not recommend making it water-breathing/swimming or flight. However, I think they’re okay as supplemental powers (e.g. Iron Man’s ability to fly makes it easier to do fast-paced battle scenes than if he were limited to movement by foot).
      
      In general, I would not recommend relying on a superpower which anyone could add with commonly available equipment (e.g. SCUBA gear)…
      
      Another general tip: please do not make your characters useless. The most common explanation I’ve heard from authors in this situation is that they think it will be funny and/or dramatic if the character has awful superpowers and/or is very incompetent. I don’t think there’s very much comedic or dramatic potential there. Personally, I think your characters will be MUCH more promising if we can take them at least somewhat seriously as superheroes (e.g. I find Batman and Iron Man the most comedically effective, and they’re actually highly competent). Seeing characters struggle through ridiculously awful superpowers is more likely to be painful than effective.

1167. # Coolwriteron 30 Oct 2013 at 8:16 am

      Okay, thanks.

1168. # Coolwriteron 30 Oct 2013 at 3:34 pm

      Okay, I apologize for asking this, but what do you think the coolest or most effective superpower is? Personally it’s water control/manipulation.

1169. # B. McKenzieon 30 Oct 2013 at 6:19 pm

      I think there are a lot of very effective superpowers. I find agility to be exceptionally versatile for authors. Also, a character that is more agile than strong/invulnerable will force his/her author to think more creatively when it comes to how to engage enemies, which almost always makes for a more interesting fight than just flying or rushing at the enemy with little if anything at stake. Also, agility contributes to a character’s mobility without completely short-circuiting scenes that rely on mobility (e.g. agility is much more promising than, say, teleportation when it comes to writing an interesting chase scene or escape scene — it’s easier to make the scene challenging/dramatic for the agile character than for the teleporter).

1170. # Coolwriteron 31 Oct 2013 at 9:32 am

      Hmm, okay, thank you once more!

1171. # Anon.on 01 Nov 2013 at 6:43 am

      If you want the most effective superpower of all, I think it’s actually telekinesis, which allows you to basically justify anything. Hell, telekinesis itself allows for both of water control/manipulation and enhanced agility. The former is basically just ‘telekinetically moving water’, and the latter is using telekinesis and Newtonian physics (every action has an equal and opposite reaction) to enhance one’s speed and reactions.

1172. # Coolwriteron 01 Nov 2013 at 9:06 am

      @Anon- thanks! I never thought of that!

1173. # CCXon 01 Nov 2013 at 9:18 am

      Hey, what would be the best element for combat?

1174. # B. McKenzieon 01 Nov 2013 at 4:35 pm

      “If you want the most effective superpower of all, I think it’s telekinesis, which allows you to basically justify anything.” Telekinesis is definitely promising for a writer, though I think there are some situations where a hero with relatively unlimited telekinesis would probably not be very interesting. E.g. bank robberies, Mexican standoffs, most situations with endangered civilians, many stealth situations*, etc.
      
      *E.g. a mission to sneak into an enemy stronghold and grab a MacGuffin/item probably isn’t very challenging for a character that can fly silently, disable most guards from a distance, create virtually infinite distractions/misdirections by tossing items, stop bullets even if he/she does get caught, and snatch a MacGuffin without actually approaching it. (However, if the power was limited in some way(s), the scene might work).
      
      …
      
      In particular, if a telekinetic character is SO good at telekinesis that he/she can reliably stop bullets, I think the writer is more or less forced to use superpowered antagonists every time. That could make it very tough for the writer to ratchet up tension gradually.
      
      Also, superpowered antagonists generally require more explanation/setup/personality (at the very least, enough to show us that he’s dangerous), whereas a Batman comic can create an interesting problem for Batman just by inserting a few criminals with guns. If you HAVE to bring out a villain to challenge the protagonist, this may cause you to overexpose the villain to scenes where he shows up, fights the hero, and the fight ends inconclusively because it’s far too soon to actually wrap up the story.
      
      PS: If you find yourself quickly needing to introduce a threat for a hero that can’t easily be challenged by regular humans, it may be useful to give low-grade criminals access to unusually dangerous capabilities. For example, The Taxman Must Die uses low-grade superserums for temporary superpowers — that way, I can challenge protagonists with an intermediate threat between regular gunmen and bona fide supervillains. Alternately, perhaps Lex Luthor has made it a lot easier for Metropolis criminals to acquire equipment that could threaten Superman (e.g. Krypton-grade hunting rifles and/or cybernetic enhancements).

1175. # CCXon 01 Nov 2013 at 11:54 pm

      I have a lot of characters with diffrent elemental powers and had some questions on it. So out of these elements, water, fire, earth, wind, metal, and electricity, which would be the most effective? Thanks.

1176. # B. McKenzieon 02 Nov 2013 at 2:50 am

      “So out of these elements, water, fire, earth, wind, metal, and electricity, which would be the most effective? Thanks.” If the enemies are mainly humans, it might be very hard to work with fire (unless you’re comfortable with combat taking on a dark, grisly tone because the character has few alternatives to torching people).
      
      The ability to control metal… Unless you can make this feel a lot different than Magneto’s powers, he’s sort of got this game on lock. Perhaps an extremely different origin, like something mystical. (E.g. Spider-Man and Star Wars Jedi both have the ability to sense danger, but their origins are very different, so it’s less likely that either comes across as a ripoff of the other). A distinctive cost or limitation to the abilities could also help.
      
      Earth and water each strike me as workable, but I would not recommend having both because they strike me as somewhat redundant in combat (would you be able to come up with many situations where one could accomplish a goal that the other could not?). I can think of a few, like maybe using a flash flood to sweep civilians out of harm’s way or rush into battle, but generally I’d want less overlap between what each protagonist can accomplish. Lastly, noncombat use – I’m probably going to kick myself when I’ve had time to rest, but at 3:00 AM, I’m having a lot more trouble coming up with noncombat uses for water and earth than for wind or electricity.
      
      (Also, if you’re working on a comic book rather than a novel, earth-based visuals tend to get very monotonous. Water is not much better. Especially in a comic, it would be helpful to give these characters capabilities besides their elemental abilities, probably melee skills).
      
      Wind and electricity strike me as workable. I prefer wind because the mobility aspect is pretty versatile and could be useful if you want to do a high-speed chase or escape or whatever. Both wind and electricity strike me as useful outside of combat (e.g. throwing an item with wind to create a distraction or disabling a security camera during a stealth scene).

1177. # CCXon 03 Nov 2013 at 12:11 pm

      Ok, thanks B. Mckenzie. Sorry you had to stay up so late.

1178. # B. McKenzieon 03 Nov 2013 at 11:23 pm

      “Sorry you had to stay up so late.” Ah, that was my choice. No apologies necessary.

1179. # Clip-Clopon 04 Nov 2013 at 3:03 pm

      Any ideas for a versatile or exotic minor power that can be used in combat or in a chase?

1180. # Comicfighteron 04 Nov 2013 at 5:53 pm

      Reply to clip-clop. I’ve been told many times on his site that exotic superpowers don’t matter that much but, if you want some: telescopic vision is a great one, being able to sense weak points in something is good or you could go for vibrations(not superspeed) like cause is your body to vibrate at an alarmin rate.

1181. # Clip-Clopon 04 Nov 2013 at 6:50 pm

      Thanks!

1182. # B. McKenzieon 04 Nov 2013 at 7:16 pm

      Clip-Clop, what are the other powers/capabilities for the character(s) in question?

1183. # CCXon 04 Nov 2013 at 8:55 pm

      Hey guys, what do you think of this character?

      Name: James Daimon
      Gender: Male (hope you could guess that.)
      Age: 16
      Power: This part is a little complicated, so I’ll explain it. James is a healer, you know, putting your hand over a wound and it healing. But what I was thinking is that when he gets angry, agitated, or you know, upset, instead of healing he destroys. I know that doesn’t make sense, but basically in a nutshell he does the opposite of healing.

      And that’s pretty much it. Any suggustions?

1184. # Clip-Clopon 05 Nov 2013 at 5:13 am

      B.Mac,
      Tha character has pretty generic powers: regeneration and quick reflexes. I wanted to give the character another minor power, but didn’t know how it could tie in with the others.

1185. # Comicfighteron 05 Nov 2013 at 6:50 pm

      Ccx. I think it would be at totally cool idea. As bad a movie as it was push had some cool powers. Your character is sounding like the stichers from push. They can heal you or break you depending on their desire.

1186. # Kyleon 05 Nov 2013 at 10:28 pm

      The idea I had for my hero was a gadget-based one called Raven, who is skilled in martial arts and uses a Bo-staff and a Crossbow in combat. However, I’m having trouble differentiating my character from Batman (the only difference being that my character is willing to use lethal weaponry and kill people.) Is there any way I can further differentiate my character?

1187. # B. McKenzieon 06 Nov 2013 at 1:08 am

      “Tha character has pretty generic powers: regeneration and quick reflexes. I wanted to give the character another minor power, but didn’t know how it could tie in with the others.” Some ideas that come to mind: heightened senses (as noted by Comic Fighter), an especially good grasp of people (not a superpower, but definitely useful to a superhero*), maybe leaping and/or the ability to safely land falls from a great height, maybe minor electronic interference (e.g. security cameras tend to fail when he’s around) if that fits in with the origin of his first two powers, maybe above-average flexibility (e.g. the ability to enter a room through ventilation ducts that are too small for most adults), maybe minor telekinesis, etc.
      
      *E.g. being able to guess someone is about to pull out a gun a second or two ahead of time by reading body language.

1188. # Clip-Clopon 06 Nov 2013 at 1:58 pm

      Thanks, B.Mac! I think I’ll use one of those. I especially like the body language or the flexibility idea.

1189. # CCXon 06 Nov 2013 at 5:52 pm

      Okay, so I was thinking about James (see earlier post) and made up a plot. So I this is what I came up with…

      The year is 3290, and about ten years earlier there was a virus that spread across the globe that was created by the US (it seems like the military in the us soaks up a lot of hate) for biochemical warfare hundreds of years ago (around our present time). I think I’m going to have the main villan release this virus, but I’m not sure. Anyway, this virus kills about 1/4 of the global population. There isn’t a war because the us were going to destroy the weapon but, again, were intercepted by the villain. So they find a way to rid the planet of the chemical. However, some of the chemicals begin to mutate some people around the world. Scientists take people who have been mutated into a secret facility in the us (with the consent of the other governments) and tested on to try and find ways to reverse the effects. This would all be great if a) they actually had the consent of the person in question; they kidnap these people, remember? And b) they weren’t treating the people like animals.

      So that’s just the background information! Now here’s the story plot…

      So I think I’m going to have James be the main narrator. Anyway, he’s taken from his home and brought to the facility and tested on. There he meets the other four people that later will be both described and his friends. Eventually they escape, and start looking for a cure. (I could really use some help now…)

      Anyway, here are the characters…

      So I told you about James, but I’ll repeat him.

      Name: James Daimon
      Gender: Male (hope you could guess that.)
      Age: 16
      Power: This part is a little complicated, so I’ll explain it. James is a healer, you know, putting your hand over a wound and it healing. But what I was thinking is that when he gets angry, agitated, or you know, upset, instead of healing he destroys. I know that doesn’t make sense, but basically in a nutshell he does the opposite of healing.
      Background: James’ dad died in the military, and his mom is always fragile and needs help. He got beaten up alot by the local school bully, (havent thought of a name yet) until one day he insults James’ late father. James loses it, and his power “wakes.” He breaks the bully’s arms, and is nearly about to kill him when he realizes what he’s done. He tries to fix the bully’s arms. Of course, the bully’s arms are healed. James is scared by his power and runs back to his home where the agents of the facility get him before he gets home.

      Yeah, I won’t write such long backstories like that for the others. Here are the other four…

      1. Name: Parker Welts
      Age: 16
      Gender: Male
      Power: Shapeshifting. However, I was thinking in order to be able to shape shift into a certain animal or person, he would need to absorb a part of their DNA. (Touching them and then being able to shift into the animal/ person.
      Background: Parents died when he was 12. Parker was sent to a orphanage, where his powers “woke” when he… help?

      2/3. Names: Anna Petri and Kai Petri
      Ages: Kai and Anna are twins, Kai is born fifteen minutes earlier than Anna.
      Powers: Kai is a muscle mimic, and Anna has instant memorization.
      Background: Okay, again; help?

      4: Name: Sam Meus
      Gender: Girl (sorry)
      Power: I’m thinking telekinetic abilities. Like, telekinesis.
      Background: Father was a alcoholic. Mother was killed by Sam’s dad when she was around 6 years old. She then ran away from her home at age 11. Her powers “woke” (okay- I’m sorry for having to continue using that word…) when she was almosted raped. Okay, I know that’s a little heavy, but that’s all I can think of. Besides, she throws him into a brick wall. And then of course, the scientists take her.

      So yeah. That’s it. Could I have some help please?

1190. # B. McKenzieon 06 Nov 2013 at 7:05 pm

      Some thoughts and suggestions, CCX: I’d recommend tweaking 3290 to 2290 (so that the biochemical research is somewhat more recent — the government moves slowly, but I have to think even they could safely dispose of a virus in 1200 years).
      …
      
      “They find a way to rid the planet of the chemical.” Is it a virus or a chemical? Given that it spreads very quickly around the world, I’d recommend a virus.
      
      Is there some reason they kidnap these people and treat them like animals besides being one-dimensionally evil? Some backstory here might make for a more three-dimensional conflict (e.g. enough mutants have killed a lot of humans that mutant superpowers are generally regarded as highly dangerous — the virus killing a lot of people could be sufficient, if most mutants could infect new people). Also, it might be believable if different countries handled this very differently. Perhaps a less libertarian country might employ some mutants and suppress (or murder) the rest.
      
      
      “There he meets the other 4 people… and his friends. Eventually they escape, and start looking for a cure.” Hmm. Presumably a lot of doctors and researchers are already looking for a cure, given that the virus in question has already killed more than a billion people. Perhaps the search for the cure will involve some sort of investigation into an exceptionally dangerous territory (e.g. ground zero or some place which is controlled by hostile mutants). It sounds like none of the protagonists are themselves doctors or scientists, so perhaps they may need to find an exceptional doctor or scientist somewhere who’s been working a very unorthodox angle and may be ethically unreliable. They may need to break that person out of prison and/or make contact with him despite governmental surveillance and/or convince him to cooperate despite considerable danger.
      
      –Given the stakes of the plot (a billion people dead, global virus, mass abductions, etc), it may be helpful if the main character’s powers are triggered by something besides a school bully. Ideally something more based on the character’s choices rather than him reacting to something like most other protagonists would have (it sounds like he reacts to the bully in a fairly typical way, whereas giving him an opportunity to act more distinctly will help make him more memorable). Likewise, I’d suggest against rape (or a near-rape) for Sam.

1191. # CCXon 06 Nov 2013 at 7:32 pm

      Sorry it’s so long…

1192. # CCXon 06 Nov 2013 at 8:40 pm

      @B. Mckenzie: Thanks for the suggestions. Looking back I suppose it would be weird for it to be so far in the future. I think I’ll have them get a scientist out sometime… Dunno how I’ll do that, but I’ll cross that bridge when I get there. Do you have any suggestions for how James activates his powers? What did you think of Anna and Kai? I was kind of thinking that they would be opposites. She’s serious and he’s easy going. I still need help for Parker, Anna, Kai, and Sam. Help me again? Thanks.

1193. # B. McKenzieon 06 Nov 2013 at 9:01 pm

      “Do you have any suggestions for how James activates his powers?” I don’t know anything about his personality. What are some things he would do (or decisions he would make) that most other protagonists would not do or make in the same situation? What about Parker and Sam?
      
      Anna and Kai… perhaps Anna gets in trouble because she takes something too seriously* and/or Kai gets in trouble because he doesn’t take something seriously enough, and the other manifests superpowers while trying to help.
      
      *E.g. overreacting to a fairly minor provocation, or sticking with the rules even when most people would disapprove, or exacerbating a minor dispute by getting a teacher/parent/police/authorities involved, etc.

1194. # CCXon 07 Nov 2013 at 8:06 pm

      @ B. Mckenzie- thanks for replying. Here are the answers…

      So for James, he’s stubborn, proud, and overly protective of the people he loves. That being said, all I can think of for a activation is being insulted.

      Parker’s kind of laid back and easy going. Maybe what I should have for his power activation his parents being killed by agents or something. How powers would come in handy so far (and Ill kick myself later for this) i can’t think of anything. Maybe he had absorbed a pet’s DNA? Help again?

      For Anna and Kai, what I’m thinking about is them getting in a fight at school. Yes, there was a apocalypse a few years ago and they stil have to go to school. anyway, what I was thinking is maybe Kai gets in trouble/fight, and watched a action movie last night… Draw your own conclusion. Anyway, Anna, who is the over obsessive student and has read the student handbook (and since no sane person does that) and blurts out a rule when the princible busts them, saying the guy attacked Kai and he fought in self defense. (Even though he’s on the ground and kai poinded his head into the ground). Of course, note that it would be dressed up as a rule but I think it could pass. I honestly can’t think of anything but this, so if you had some ideas in mind that would be awesome.

      Sam’s always on her guard, self protective, and in general is one is those people you meet and find them to fearless. She doesn’t really trust anyone since her dad beat her and she was nearly raped.

      So what I think I’m going to have the scientist be, like you suggested, almost certifiably insane. He’s got a weird belief that only a mutant healer (cough cough, wink wink) can heal the virus.

      Anyway, that’s all of my answers. Can you help me again?

1195. # CCXon 07 Nov 2013 at 8:08 pm

      Um I screwed up at the part with Parker; I meant to say how it would come in handy during an escape. Sorry.

1196. # B. McKenzieon 07 Nov 2013 at 9:25 pm

      James is stubborn, proud, overly protective of the people he loves… I’m having trouble coming up with a memorable scenario here. These three traits strike me as sort of generically heroic, with the possible exception of being OVERLY protective but you’d probably have to push the envelope there because pretty much every hero is some degree of protective of loved ones. It may help to give him some trait which is not stereotypically heroic or at least can manifest in unheroic ways (e.g. if he’s stubborn and proud, dishonesty and/or an unwillingness to admit the truth come to mind — maybe he’s sort of in denial about the whole mutant thing and later antagonizes some other mutant(s) because of it?).
      
      As for the conflict, I was sort of having trouble imagining a scenario where someone insults a kid over his father getting killed (presumably in the line of duty). Maybe the insulter blindly accuses the dead father of being a mutant, and guesses that his men had to kill him because, well, he was a mutant. At least there’s some irony in the son getting terribly upset with an accuser making an accusation which is not true against the father but turns out to be true against the son. (Could be an opportunity for long-term character development as he comes to accept being a mutant or whatever).
      
      …
      
      With Anna and Kai, I’d recommend coming up with something a bit more unorthodox. Preferably something which helps distinguish him from James. Right now, it sounds like both Kai and James sort of randomly get into an altercation after being provoked by a sort of faceless, random character. At the very least, if they do have a similar setup like this, I’d come up with a TOTALLY different motivation. For one thing, I’d recommend having at least one of the characters be acting proactively to achieve some sort of goal. Right now, James is randomly provoked by a bully, Kai is randomly attacked, Anna’s hand is forced by the actions of Kai & Kai’s attacker, Peter’s parents get killed through no decision of his own, and Sam is attacked because of being born into an abusive family rather than anything interesting she decided to do. As much as possible, I’d recommend bringing the characters’ decisions and goals to the center here. For example, maybe Kai was doing something helluva interesting and memorable that brought him into conflict with the attacker. Maybe James hates or looks down upon mutants. Maybe Anna responds to the Kai situation with an interesting decision that most other protagonists would not have made in the same circumstances (e.g. lying and/or working other witnesses to put together an untrue version of what happened to help Kai escape punishment or going to the authorities even though this would be a highly unusual move*).
      
      *E.g. if the assailant is in a drug gang, reporting him would be highly dangerous. Most heroes would be comfortable putting THEMSELVES in jeopardy to do the right thing, but in this case doing the right thing probably also means angering Kai’s adversary and exposing Kai to more danger. Something like that would be more memorable, and probably an opportunity to develop some degree of conflict between Kai and Anna. (Having some protagonist-vs-protagonist conflict is generally helpful for developing characters and the plot). Also, later on, she may voluntarily turn herself into the police for being a mutant (thinking that they may be able to cure her), without realizing that this will probably cause the authorities to test her immediate family as well (if mutations frequently run in the family).
      
      …
      
      As for Parker’s ability. I would think that the ability to shapeshift into a human or animal would be very easy to use during an escape. I’m not sure what the circumstances are like that he’s trying to escape from, but I’m sure he could come up with some plan involving the ability to (say) perfectly impersonate a prison guard or turn into a bird. However, actually making physical contact with a prison guard or a bird could take some doing, and even then he’d have to put thought into how to use the disguise/form even if he had it. If we’re talking about how to escape from police custody, perhaps he waits for a moment of privacy and/or confusion and uses it to walk away before his captors have realized what his power is. For example, perhaps the testing process involves a urine sample? He walks into the police station’s bathroom or whatever, morphs into any other human he can, and attempts to walk out before anyone checks the bathroom and finds him missing. If there are armed guards outside the stall (believable if all potential mutants are assumed to be flight risks and/or highly dangerous), he may need to sneak under stalls in addition to using his disguise — I imagine that it would take the guards under 60 seconds to realize something is amiss, so he’d have to move very fast.
      
      …
      
      I like the idea of the healing ability being important to the cure.

1197. # CCXon 08 Nov 2013 at 4:44 pm

      @B. Mckenzie: thanks once again for replying. Here are some answers…

      Yeah, I know, James is like a sterotypical hero, but I think I’ll go with your idea about having him hate mutants. It makes sense and seems to make more sense then my ideas.

      I’m going to use your idea about having Anna turn herself in. Should I have Kai try to break her out and get captured?

      Thanks for the tips about Parker; Ill come up with something.

      So what do you think about Sam? I feel like I should give her something really original/ interesting. Do you have any power suggustions?
      Thanks for helping me.

1198. # B. McKenzieon 08 Nov 2013 at 5:32 pm

      “Should I have Kai try to break her out and get captured?” Hmm, I like that. I think it puts him in an interesting dilemma where he can try to break out a mutant from police custody OR just immediately go on the run himself (because the police will probably come to test him if they know she is a mutant). Neither one is an obvious choice, so I think it’ll be more suspenseful.
      
      If he eventually forgives her for putting him in that situation, I would recommend making it very gradual.
      
      “What do you think about Sam? I feel like i should give her something really original/interesting. Do you have any power suggestions?” It sounds like she has a lot of trouble trusting others, so perhaps something more… withdrawn. The first things that came to mind were very cliche — invisibility, darkness, poison, something psychic, etc. Personally not my first choices.
      
      Pocket space strikes me as a more interesting choice. First, in prison, it’d be a highly dangerous but potentially extremely useful ability. (If the prison guards even THINK she may be hiding weaponry or contraband, at the very least they are going to watch her very closely). The reason I say it’s very dangerous is because it’s definitely not a “tank” power — there’s more at risk for her than someone who is, say, immune to bullets or immortal or whatever. (As she grows more accustomed to her ability, she may develop SOME ability to grab bullets into pocket space to protect herself from gunfire, but I would recommend making that gradual).
      
      Besides pocket space, maybe something related to dreams/nightmares. That wouldn’t be super-original for the team Woobie, but if you can get around that, I think it’s workable. (If you’re interested in a dream and/or nightmare power, Anna would be more original there — of the characters, she’s probably the most grounded and practical, exactly the last person anyone would expect to have a power related to dreams).

1199. # Reverseon 12 Nov 2013 at 8:11 am

      Is it possible to give a hero a very “mean” power? Like if they could drain the life force of anyone they touched? Could that be to much of a problem for the writer to work with?

1200. # CCXon 12 Nov 2013 at 9:39 am

      B.Mckenzie; sorry for replying so late after you posted. Here are my questions and answers…

      I’ll go with the Kai breaking Anna out of jail and Sam + pocket space, so thank you for those sugustions. Now here are my questions…

      I was thinking about James last night and wondered if I should have his father reappear. Like, so called back from the dead. Should I have his dad maybe be in hiding and was considered a traitor?

      Do you think I should have the doctor (good one thats going to help them) be sane or slightly insane?

      Thanks

1201. # B. McKenzieon 12 Nov 2013 at 10:01 pm

      “Is it possible to give a hero a very “mean” power? Like if they could drain the life force of anyone they touched?”
      
      1. It sounds like we’re talking about a power that is neither stereotypically heroic nor necessarily nefarious (e.g. it’s not fueled by human suffering or demonic sacrifices or meth-laced Scooby snacks or selling your soul to Sweden or whatever). As long as the hero is able to do incredible and exciting things with the power, I don’t think it will be a huge problem if the power plays out a bit differently than, say, the ability to throw fireballs.
      
      2. This power actually strikes me as pretty tame compared to, say, Human Torch’s fireballs, Batman’s explosives, the Punisher’s guns, Wolverine’s claws, Xavier’s mind-control, etc. Actually, I think it’ll be easier to keep this PG or PG-13 than the ability to control fire. If you’re really worried about the gruesomeness level, perhaps the character has some ability to control the intensity of his/her power. Perhaps he/she can drain enemies without causing permanent damage — e.g. perhaps he/she can put enemies into a brief coma like Rogue does. If the character’s powers are very difficult to use without causing gruesome damage, perhaps the character has trained up some other capabilities so that he/she has some levels of violence between “harmless” and “kill everything.”
      
      3. My main concern with the power would be that it probably would not be very useful outside of combat. If the character is just one character on a team, this probably isn’t a huge deal because there will probably be other characters who can help carry the load during noncombat. If this character is the only main character, it may help to give him/her another power and/or some other capabilities useful outside of combat.
      
      4. I’d have to see a few combat scenes to see how you executed it, but I wonder how easy it will be to have this character fight for a few pages without it getting monotonous. Again, this is less of a problem for a team story, because you can usually switch to other characters to help mix in more variety. If the character has some secondary capabilities between “harmless” and “kill everything” (e.g. melee skills), that would probably help here.

1202. # B. McKenzieon 12 Nov 2013 at 10:28 pm

      “B.Mckenzie; sorry for replying so late after you posted.” No worries here. We’re not on any deadlines, and I’d much rather wait for an interesting response than get something rushed and crappy. Besides, four days is pretty prompt.
      
      …
      
      “I was thinking about James last night and wondered if I should have his father reappear.” If James’ father were a really interesting character, I would not necessarily be opposed to a major authorial effort to bring him back, but from based on what I understand, his return would cause some issues. For one thing, I think it’d be hard to have a competent soldier around without boxing out protagonists that are not-very-well-trained fugitive teenagers. At the very least, I’d raise major availability and/or reliability issues (e.g. maybe he’s sort of a double agent or far away in enemy territory, so he’s limited in how much assistance he can provide without revealing himself to the enemy). Even better: maybe there’s some degree of conflict between him and the protagonists (e.g. if they’re not sure that his goals line up perfectly with theirs).
      
      …
      
      “Do you think I should have the doctor (good one thats going to help them) be sane or slightly insane?” Whatever would make him memorable would be a plus. Some possibilities that come to mind:
      –Slight insanity and/or eccentricity.
      –At least a bit of conflict with the protagonists. That’ll give your protagonists more of an opportunity to be interesting and impressive than if the scientist is just an 100% cooperative tool for them.
      –Notable personality traits and goals besides just wanting to help the protagonists in whatever they want to do.
      –Some mixture of likability and unlikability.
      –Given the circumstances, I think it’d be very helpful if he tended to have a very unusual approach to problem-solving. It’ll make it more believable that he has a prayer of taking on a problem that has stumped every other brilliant scientist in the world.

1203. # CCXon 13 Nov 2013 at 10:07 am

      B. Mckenzie; thank you for once again replying. Here are some fresh new questions…

      I technically have not thought of a villain or person that my heroes have to vanquish. Do you have any suggustions?

      I was thinking that maybe I should have a group of angry mutants be like, a rebellion force. I mean, mutants are looked down on because they’re genetic failures, right? I realize that I would be copying Marvel’s moroks (I forget how to spell them… sorry) but I still believe that it would make sense in this case.

      Thanks for your help!

1204. # Comicfigteron 13 Nov 2013 at 3:58 pm

      Is it possible for someone who can transform into vapors to retain their shape? Still look humanoid?

1205. # CCXon 13 Nov 2013 at 4:27 pm

      Hi Comicfighter! Yes, it is possible to turn into vapor and still look humanoid. Hope this helped!

1206. # B. McKenzieon 13 Nov 2013 at 5:58 pm

      “Is it possible for someone to turn into vapors and still look humanoid?” If we’re talking about a comic, this shouldn’t be a problem for your illustrator. E.g. look at illustrations of air elementals. With a novel or a short story, I think the character’s unusual appearance will take some creativity on the author’s part.
      

1207. # Samsonon 15 Nov 2013 at 8:51 pm

      Ok I’m new to this site. But I have one question. Is there an interesting way to use super hearing? Especially if it was the power of a 10 year old girl?(I’m also a female author so you all don’t read this and see pedo) it can only see hear cowering in a corner with her hands covering her ears because she can hear all noises in the city(N.Y.) are there sny ways I can make her use full aside from finding people?

1208. # B. McKenzieon 16 Nov 2013 at 1:05 am

      “Is there an interesting way to use super hearing?” It’s not the most interesting superpower that comes to mind, especially not as a main power. It serves a supplemental role, like helping the hero hear people that need to be saved or perhaps tracking someone down. Might also be useful for detecting danger/ambushes, finding a bomb, cracking an old-school safe, detecting an imposter, detecting whether someone is more stressed than they’re trying to show, etc. Might also be helpful for communicating in situations where just picking up a phone is not possible (e.g. if a bank robber has taken hostages, one of the hostages might very softly whisper useful information to the hero).
      
      I don’t think the hero’s age matters much there, though I suspect the power would be more useful for an adult because an adult probably has more social insight, savvy, experience, etc — e.g. if an adult hears a bag softly ticking in an airport, he’d be a lot more likely to infer that there may be a bomb inside than a child would.
      
      …
      
      I can’t imagine the age of the character would raise concerns about the integrity/sanity/shootability of the author, regardless of the author’s gender. I’m guessing you didn’t enjoy Calvin & Hobbes very much.

1209. # Samsonon 16 Nov 2013 at 4:01 pm

      Well she’s not the main character. She’s just the characters adopted little sister. She won’t fight anyone.

1210. # B. McKenzieon 16 Nov 2013 at 4:41 pm

      “She’s just the character’s adopted little sister. She won’t fight anyone.” Outside of perhaps bringing her in for some sort of information gathering, I’m having trouble thinking of noncombat situations where her power would be useful.

1211. # Naomion 17 Nov 2013 at 4:20 pm

      Hey b. Mac. I was wondering what sort of villainous power is your fav?

1212. # B. McKenzieon 17 Nov 2013 at 8:08 pm

      “What sort of villainous power is your fav?”
      
      I don’t recommend this for everyone, but personally I prefer villains that rely on intelligence, resourcefulness, and/or science more than superpowered brawling. My six favorite supervillains in terms of powers.
      –Dr. Octopus
      –Clayface
      –Sylar
      –Mr. Freeze
      –Scarecrow
      –Ozymandias
      –Honorable mention: Walter White / Heisenberg, even though he’s not actually a supervillain or in a superhero series.
      –Cool concept: Clock King (someone that relies on superb timing and a minor ability to see/predict the near future), but I’d recommend making him more physically capable so that he has more ability to actually fight with Batman.
      
      Types of villains I generally stay away from:
      –Villains that have no alternatives to rushing at their enemies. This gets tedious really quickly (e.g. Juggernaut, Darkseid, and pretty much every Hulk villain).
      –Main villains that cannot have an interesting conversation. The most common offenders I’ve seen here are alien conquerors and one-dimensionally evil brutes that mainly talk to threaten. PS: This is not a huge problem for a side character.
      –Villains that cannot have an interesting fight scene with the main protagonist(s). For every one character that makes this work (e.g. Ozymandias), there are 100 Lex Luthors/liabilities.
      –Main villains that are mainly in it for the money.
      –Notably stupid villains. At the very least, I’d recommend going for an ordinary level of intelligence, especially for a main villain.
      –Villains that cannot be taken seriously (e.g. Paste Pot Pete or anyone that’s deliberately incompetent).
      –Large villain ensembles (e.g. a novel with more than 3 supervillains). It’s rarely necessary, generally results in less memorable characters (because there’s less space/time for developing everyone), and is especially hard to work with when you’re also trying to develop a team of superheroes. I think the only story I’ve seen (outside of video games) where 3+ supervillains were absolutely necessary was the episode “Almost Got ‘Im” and maybe “Trial“, both from Batman: The Animated Series. In both of these cases, the supervillains were each able to contribute something BESIDES just being an extra in a fight.

1213. # NeonPheonixon 18 Nov 2013 at 1:40 pm

      This website and this article have been exceptionally helpful. These have helped me a lot with my recent Fan-Fic series The Flash, and my novel that I am working on.

1214. # Colinon 18 Nov 2013 at 2:18 pm

      So, I have this idea to write a story about a group of teenagers, all from different backgrounds and different groups of friends, who receive super powers and slowly find out about each other. They form a sort of group and learn to understand each other and learn that they have to work together to stay sane and keep each other alive.

      There powers would be-
      -Plant manipulation (controlling plants)
      -Agility (speed)
      -sound manipulation (controlling sound waves and making high noises and sonic booms)
      -animation (animating inanimate objects like statues)
      -mirror walking (walk through one mirror and out another, even through reflective surfaces)
      -energy conversion (putting energy into something to make it explode or drain the energy from something)
      -gravity manipulation (being able to increase or decrease the gravity of a certain area or on an object)

      I’ve been struggling to start writing this. So I was just wondering what would be some weaknesses for the powers I have listed, and is there any advice to help me get started writing this book instead of putting it off all the time? Again, this is just a beginning idea.

1215. # NeonPheonixon 18 Nov 2013 at 2:53 pm

      Ok, so I’m a little new at this too but…
      Plant Manipulation, maybe you could have your character be injured when plants are killed.
      For agility, maybe like it works similarly to a steroid, temporary. Or you could have it be an adrenaline type thing.
      Sound manipulation, he/she doesn’t have complete control, vulnerable to own sound.
      Animation, limited to distance and # of animated objects? Or the objects gain a mind of their own.
      Mirror Walking, maybe it’s like types of E.S.P, his mind/soul could travel not his body.
      Energy Conversion, could be that the power drains him too.
      Gravity Manipulation could require great amounts of concentration.
      If this advice is bad just tell me. I don’t like giving people bad info.

1216. # Colinon 18 Nov 2013 at 5:07 pm

      No, its actually really helpful actually. I like all of them except for I’m not so sure about your suggestion about Mirror Walking. I picture it more as being able to move through mirrors physically and take people with… does that sound okay or too cheesy? I really like and appreciate all of your other suggestions thought! Thank you.

1217. # Anonymouson 19 Nov 2013 at 1:18 pm

      I think it sounds pretty cool actually! gl

1218. # CCXon 19 Nov 2013 at 7:27 pm

      Hi B.Mckenzie. Can you help me with these questions?

      I technically have not thought of a villain or person that my heroes have to vanquish. Do you have any suggustions?

      I was thinking that maybe I should have a group of angry mutants be like, a rebellion force. I mean, mutants are looked down on because they’re genetic failures, right? I realize that I would be copying Marvel’s moroks (I forget how to spell them… sorry) but I still believe that it would make sense in this case.

      Thanks for your help.

1219. # Monomonouson 19 Nov 2013 at 9:06 pm

      Hi! Would the ability to “give” superhuman senses to others be an effective power. Like you could give like the long-range guy super eyesight and the sneaky spy guy super hearing so he can eavesdrop on enemies better and be able to hear if anyone is coming after him. But if the guy gives a sense he loses his so when he gives super eyes to someone he goes blind. Also he could give a sense to an enemy like giving super hearing to a bad guy to disorient them during a gunfight.

      What do you think?

1220. # Neaton 20 Nov 2013 at 9:10 am

      I would like to have time travel so I can skip school and go and see who killed martin Luther king Jr.And I would like super speed so i can get done with my homework faster and box faster (im a boxer)And super intelligence.and regeneration.last but not least super strength

1221. # B. McKenzieon 21 Nov 2013 at 12:04 am

      “Would the ability to “give” superhuman senses to others be an effective power. Like you could give like the long-range guy super eyesight and the sneaky spy guy super hearing so he can eavesdrop on enemies better and be able to hear if anyone is coming after him… Also he could give a sense to an enemy like giving super hearing to a bad guy to disorient them during a gunfight. ”
      
      Some thoughts and suggestions:
      
      1) I think giving an enemy a heightened sense to disorient them would be exceptionally clever. However, if this character is going to be in several fights, I think his fights might benefit from having something a bit more versatile in addition to the ability to strengthen senses. (Otherwise, I think his fights could get pretty monotonous — there’s not much he can do besides disorienting enemies or enhancing his allies). Mixing in some other sort of capability (e.g. hallucinations/illusions, martial arts skills based on extremely sharp senses, or marksmanship) would probably help make him a bit more versatile.
      
      2) “But if the guy gives a sense he loses his so when he gives super eyes to someone he goes blind.” If you’re feeling this restriction will make his scenes more interesting, okay. If you wanted to get rid of this restriction, I think that’d be okay too. Coming up with ways to challenge this character will NOT be an issue. (Probably a bigger issue: Will this character be able to do impressive & interesting things? If his only notable capability was the ability to give heightened senses, I think his teammates will probably blow him out of the water).

1222. # Monomonouson 21 Nov 2013 at 6:12 pm

      Thanks for the reply and suggestions B. McKenzie, I’ll definitely incorporate your thoughts here, and considering the type of enemies this guys gonna have to fight I’m thinking giving him such a limitation would be overkill, so thanks for pointing that out. I may also have to give this guy other minor powers on top of his sensory transfer thing to keep his wins actually plausible and not just because he’s the “hero.” Thanks again.

1223. # Gonzoon 25 Nov 2013 at 4:12 pm

      Monomonous, I think your idea is very interesting.

      I also think that you should consider making this character exceptionally intelligent, able to concoct plans using formidably clever strategies. Make him the foundation on which the team is built, the head as opposed to the limbs so to speak. He can be the glue that holds the team together, as well as the source of every one of his teammates powers. Granted, without him the others still sound like they would be well trained operatives, and therefor no joke on their own, but not super powered in the least.

      I think this makes for an interesting dynamic, with perhaps the least physically inclined person being the only super powered one in the group, and his powers simply enhancing already formidable agents. Juxtaposed to some relatively more powerful yet more mundane super powered villains, this could essentially showcase the virtues of teamwork and forward thinking above the brash and overly aggressive tactics that one might be tempted to use were they granted a power like pyromancy or super strength.

      Just my two cents, maybe it’ll help.

1224. # Gonzoon 29 Nov 2013 at 9:36 pm

      So, B. McKenzie, I was wondering if you would be so kind as to give your opinion on something I have been thinking about for a little bit now.

      I was reading some blog the other month where people were playing a game involving the superpower wiki; They would got to the site and each click the random page button. Then, after receiving a power, they would report back and talk about it. It was interesting to see what people would get, and also to see the creative ways some of them would think to use their powers, which brings me to my point.

      One guy got omnipotence, but instead of saying that he would use the power to become a “God”, he said he would tone it down to “Superman” levels and serve as earths protector. I thought this was a very cool concept. Still, Superman is, of course, pretty godlike, so to tone it down I was thinking about the idea of a character who has near godlike abilities, so much so that they can warp reality, but, because they are still human, they simply cannot do it without losing control and/or going insane. Therefor, the character almost never actually gets even close to reaching their power’s raw potential, and when they do unleash it full on, something terrible happens every time. There must be a major consequence, like the untimely death of a loved one, or a large, permanent scar to either the psyche or perhaps the face, or even the destruction of large civilian populations. Basically, the character would be the “strongest” in terms of potential raw power within a universe of many super powered individuals, but, at the same time, be severely crippled and unstable due to the nature of his powers. A possibly god-like force that genuinely wants to act for the greater good, but who’s powers could potentially make him the worst menace on earth.

      So, I guess I was just wondering what you thought about the idea.

      If anyone else has an opinion, please, feel free to give it.

      Thanks.

1225. # B. McKenzieon 29 Nov 2013 at 11:48 pm

      Hello, Gonzo. Some thoughts that come to mind:
      
      1) My first suggestion for an extremely-potent-but-highly-unreliable character would be to make him a side-character, preferably with goals that only slightly align with the main character’s (e.g. Dr. Manhattan compared to most of the other protagonists in Watchmen or maybe Tom Bombadil (!?) in Lord of the Rings).
      
      2) “A possibly god-like force that genuinely wants to act for the greater good, but whose powers could potentially make him the worst menace on earth.” Would this character get a lot of opportunities to do exciting things, or would he spend more time worrying about whether getting involved would cause a lot of problems for people? My main concern here would be that this character could end up more paralyzed than proactive. That was a catastrophic problem for Marvel’s Sentry, who has a similar set of capabilities and limitations — he spent at least twice as much time worrying as he did actually acting.
      
      3) In general, I think it’s really helpful if superheroes have an adventurous personality and at are at least somewhat comfortable taking risks. In that vein, it might be really helpful if he has some abilities which are somewhat easy/safe for him to use, so that he can be at least a bit adventurous without the specter of catastrophe looming at all times.
      
      4) I think it’s a lot easier to market/sell characters at a more relatable level of powers (e.g. Spider-Man, Wolverine, and Batman) rather than characters on a more cosmic scale.
      
      4.1) I’m not sure what his fight scenes would look like. If he turns on his powers, can he lose?
      
      5) The limitations you have in mind strike me as the most promising aspect of his powers. “His powers could kill a loved one” is a much more interesting idea than, say, “His powers could destroy the universe” because the writer might actually pull the trigger on a loved one or a town*, but obviously destroying the universe is not really an option in most stories.
      
      *Mood suggestion: Unless you have a really dark tone in mind, I’d recommend keeping the hero’s body count under 25,000. I think that’s enough to convince readers that his control issues are serious without totally compromising his likability.

1226. # Gonzoon 30 Nov 2013 at 9:43 am

      Thank you so much for your response McKenzie!

      You pretty much got what I’m going for, and all your questions are quite in line with ones I have been asking myself in regards to this character:

      1: I do indeed envision him as a side character.

      2&3: Couldn’t agree more with your sentiments. He would indeed be restricted by the fear of potentially destroying things he cares about, but he will still have a certain set of “lower level” powers that are easy for him to control (it’s the reality warping that messes stuff up) The Idea is that he will usually restrict himself to a lesser power (or set of powers). Perhaps something like moderate spacial slicing, but, whatever it is, something much less powerful than his full on god-powers. So mental “paralyzation” wont always be a concern, because he’s in perfect control on, lets call it, “level one” of his powers. It’s when he breaks the barrier and uses “level two” powers, that he starts to lose control, and very quickly; he’s only used “level two” once or twice, and each time, the world was changed irrevocably. And while he indeed achieved what he set out to do each time, his actions also had, arguably, just as many far reaching negative effects as positive ones. So I guess what I’m trying to say is that he won’t CONSTANTLY be crippled by his fear over what he might do, but, let’s say he were dropped into a situation where he, out of the blue, felt he NEEDED to use his “level two” powers. That’s where the fear comes from. He knows he may be tempted to change the world like he has before. A certain mental toughness and resolve will most likely strengthen his character; he’s been through this before, like a veteran.

      He will be able to compete on par with “average” super-humans, but that’s not why people want him; everyone knows his potential, and now people see him as something like an H-bomb to keep in their arsenal.
      Important people and organizations will vie for possession of or control over him, and, once they have it, they will most likely push and prod him into utilizing his full destructive power for their needs, most likely to the detriment of everyone else, including himself. This most likely means he wont be sticking around anywhere for very long, even though he may even genuinely like the people or believe in the cause that is using him; even the “good” guys will eventually mistreat/ misuse him, as they too see him primarily as a weapon. He will end up bouncing between different groups and most likely settle into doing things on his own.

      4: The idea is that he turns them on only once or twice more during the entire story, and when he does, the battle is over, almost in the blink of an eye. Thing is, once the dust settles and everyone looks at the results, everyone will be shocked, including him; his control in this state is so loose that it ALWAYS brings about unintended consequences. Collateral damage everywhere, including severely harming, killing, destroying or even permanently transmogrifying places, objects, and even people. To answer your question, not really, but they prospect of using the “level two” powers is so frightening to the character that it keeps their use tightly in check (the results are potentially worse than any situation that he might want to stop by using his “level two” powers. Most battles will never use them, so he will certainly be able to be defeated or killed.

      5: Exactly.

      As for the mood suggestion, I totally agree.

      Well, thanks a lot for you’re thoughtful and timely response Mr. McKenzie.

      I hope this answered some of your questions and also hope you will respond back soon with more insight.

1227. # Proxie#0on 01 Dec 2013 at 5:59 am

      1.) You said he will likely be a side character, or rather, you envision him as one. You also said that people tend to “use” him as a weapon. I’m just a little curious as to who he really is, beyond being a proxy for some shadowy group. His own motivations? How would they keep him confined, I would only assume it would be serious psychological manipulation of some sort, though not necessarily caused by abilities. Anyway, to the true north of this question. If he is a side character, then who are the main characters (protagonist/antagonist) and what would his “alignment” to each be in this particular story?

      2/3.) In terms of abilities, it seems like you have something aking to Jean Grey/Phoenix or Aang/Avatar (and maybe even Bruce Banner/Hulk) here. As in, he has pretty useful powers at base, helpful in general situations. But when something happens to injure the character or “set him off,” he loses his mind/control, and goes into a godlike state. To caveat that, would he also have something or someone that can “snap him out of it?” (Katara to Aang, Betty [until she died] to Bruce, and then Scott to Jean)

      Also, I would like to say and ask something in a suggestive and singular way. I found the distinctions in some of these characters “god modes” very interesting. For example, if Aang dies in the Avatar State, he essentially cuts off the world from its peacemaker for another 200 or so years. Hard decision to use it. Hulk is…well, he’s Hulk. Not much to say there, except for his kids, they’re pretty special. I like the Phoenix most though. If you have not read the series permakill for Jean, or have no interest in doing so then DO NOT READ ON.

      4/4.1.) This seems very interesting. It sounds workable that he would use them in only the most extreme of situations. However, I must ask – knowing that using his stage two abilities is worse than almost any alternative, I can hardly think of something that would justify their use. I wonder, do you intend for them to be something akin to a Phoenix Down (Final Fantasy Reference). I.E., do you intend for them to be activated when he is at a point of near death? So to speak, activating an extreme survival sense, causing him to kill anyone who he deems a threat until he gets to safety? Anyway, onto the other characters in your story. You said, earlier, that you envision him as a side character. Would we see the destruction from another characters POV, or would it purely be from his own?

1228. # Conicfighteron 02 Dec 2013 at 4:46 pm

      Proxie. I think for the POV that’s up to you. To have the all powerful being watch or be watched as his havoc is set lose. It’s up to the writer. Hey everyone I have a question. What is the most minor form of fire control? Like instead of someone throwing full on fire balls is there a very very weak version of that?

1229. # Samethaon 02 Dec 2013 at 9:31 pm

      Ok so I’m planning to write a story about a group of teenage probationary heroes who have to step up after the local heroes joined a futile attempt to take down a particularly dangerous “villain.” Would really like thoughts and suggestions about how to like streamline my characters.

      Cecilia- The team leader
      age:18
      powers and skills: Can create force-fields that she can project but only up to a certain distance, she can produce multiple force-fields (up to 5) but she only has a limited “supply” so if she has to make a single force-field larger or stronger than her other force-fields become correspondingly weaker/smaller. Once in place a force-field can not move. Excellent strategist who becomes utterly logical during battle, uses her teams powers to the fullest usually coming up with synergies that even her teammates wouldn’t have thought of. Highly skilled in hand-to-hand combat and first aid.
      Background: Immigrated to the States after her town was destroyed by superhero infighting she initially hated supers until her own powers activated when she was 15 and she was recruited and practically raised by the local superhero team. The first of her team to be discovered and trained by the heroes.
      Personality: Generally nice (raised by heroes after all), but can be condescending to her team because of the gap between her experience and theirs; as the appointed team leader she just expects respect and obedience from her team anything else would actually shock and piss her off.

      Asher- Support
      Age:16
      powers and skills: Can create one clone of himself with whom he can share senses with (see what they see, etc.), he also has very limited pocket-space and leaping powers. Competence with firearms exceeds even that of Cecilia’s. Excellent in surveillance and reconnaissance due to his clone and sense-sharing powers.
      Background: The last of the team to be discovered, recruited, and trained. Refuses to speak of any actual background and history.
      Personality: Constantly polite and pleasant regardless of the situation, to a disturbing degree. The most ruthless of the entire team, much to his teammates chagrin, he’ll still say please and thank you while shooting you up though.

      Samuel- Long-range fighter
      Age:18
      powers and skills: Can launch darts of either concussive or explosive energy that he can redirect in midair. Can only redirect the darts in straight lines and redirection takes concentration and fatigues Samuel. Skilled in using and changing the battlefield to his advantage.
      Background: Part-time college student who trained and went on the occasional missions with the team during their probation, he was the second to be recruited into the team and was immediately taken in by Cecilia as her protege.
      Personality: Laid-back and flippant during battle to annoy and distract his foes, he is actually quite focused and serious during everyday circumstances.

      Bridget-Tank/close-range fighter
      Age:17
      powers and skills: Can drain electrical sources to give her point-blank telekinetic powers. The greater the power source the greater the range and capabilities powers. Becomes fatigued after expending all the energy she has drained and must drain another source to keep up forcing her to drain multiple sources during prolonged fights.
      Background: College student alongside Samuel, she dropped out and became a full-time hero the moment Cecilia approached her about her powers.
      Personality: Assertive and mischievous, she frequently pranks Cecilia and Samuel with help from Asher and his clone. Due to their frequent “adventures” she is probably the only person in the team who has noticed Asher’s eccentricities and acts accordingly around him. Highly aggressive in battle and is usually the center of the enemies attention during fights.

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1231. # CCXon 13 Dec 2013 at 8:56 pm

      Hi Sametha. I’m CCX. Here are some ideas, questions, and feed backs…

      I’m really liking your power ability choices. I wish I could be that original. When is your book’s setting? It kind of sounds somewhat in the future.
      How long does Cecilia need to be able to make a force field? Is it only after one is destroyed she can make another?
      Cecilia’s character is very good, her being self appointed leader. Does she ever have any doubts about herself?
      How does pocket space help Asher? If he’s got the ability to clone himself, why does he need it?
      I love how with Asher you have him very polite. However, you did say that he was the most ruthless of them all. Why is this? If one of his clones are hurt, is he hurt? How come Cecilia recruits him? Funny, he’s the youngest one of all yet he’s the one with the painful (I’m guessing here) background. It’s not bad at all; it’s very interesting.
      How does his abilities help in a combat situation? At other times I can see his ability as useful, but if his clone gets hurt and then he feels their pain, wouldn’t that be harmful in combat?
      I like Samuel. His abilities are interesting and original, like I mentioned earlier. Can he only redirect his own concussive energy beams or… others, I guess.
      I’m noticing a pattern with all of your characters that they love to act a certain way to piss off their enemies by acting a particular way. Not bad, but again, interesting.
      Bridgette sounds good; I like how she’s confident in herself and her abilities.
      It sounds like, however, that all your characters are very confident of themselves and have no doubts, fears, or weaknesses (Not as in power weaknesses, you mentioned them.) Could you mention a little backstory for each of them?
      It sounds like Bridgette doesn’t really use her abilities for combat. Is she one to ‘get up’ in her opponent’s face and not use her abilities in combat, or does she use her abilities from a closer angle?
      You said that Bridgette is highly aggressive in combat. It kind of sounds like that for all your characters.

      Well, that’s all I have. Who’s the main villain? I absolutely apologize if you find my criticisms either to critical or not useful. Let me know if you need more help!

1232. # CCXon 13 Dec 2013 at 9:02 pm

      @ Comicfighter; great to see you post again! I have to say the most minor form of fire control would be smoke maybe, or fire sparks. Maybe heating objects? I dunno. Hope this helped.

1233. # Klauson 15 Dec 2013 at 10:23 pm

      Hello everyone. I’m new to this but here it goes. I have a hero lined up and she’s pretty kickass. But I don’t know how to explain her powers. I don’t know why it’s called. It’s where she can touch people with powers and copy them. CAN SOMEONE TEL WHAT This is called ?

1234. # Cat of Darknesson 15 Dec 2013 at 11:08 pm

      @Klaus

      I feel I could help you if you detailed it a little more. What do you mean by “copy them”? What do you mean by saying she touches people with her powers?

      -Cat of Darkness

1235. # Cat of Darknesson 15 Dec 2013 at 11:13 pm

      Whoops! I did not see the “people with powers”, I saw it as “people with her powers”. Alright, hmm… well, I’ve never heard of this power. Would you be fine with just, like, making up this power? If so, you could call it Copycat or Mimic.

      Just trying to help.

      -Cat of Darkness

1236. # CCXon 16 Dec 2013 at 9:03 am

      @ Klaus; I believe the correct term for that would be an empath. However, Cat of Darkness (nice name by the way) would also be correct by a copycat or mimic.

1237. # Cat of Darknesson 16 Dec 2013 at 10:06 am

      @CCX,

      Thank you for the compliment.

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1239. # CCXon 16 Dec 2013 at 6:41 pm

      @ Cat of Darkness; thanks for choosing such an awesome name!

1240. # Samethaon 16 Dec 2013 at 7:36 pm

      @ CCX- Thanks for the compliments!

      Now to answer your questions

      The setting does take place in the future, but not so far that it reaches sci-fi levels. Maybe 20-50 years?

      Cecilia has a very short wait between creating forcefields initially, after that the “cooldown” depends on the duration that the last forcefield was active (if she has her max of 5 force fields down). With a longer duration of activity requiring her to wait longer before she can place another one if one is destroyed or she chooses to absorb one back into her “supply.” Should she absorb one though instead of waiting for it to be destroyed then the cooldown necessary before she can place another one is decreased.

      Cecilia is usually very self-assured, however during times when her failures in leading the team has nearly cost them their lives or when the stresses of superhero life turn the team (except Asher) into caustic, angry children then yes, Cecilia has and will doubt herself.

      Asher’s limited pocket space powers allows him to carry a substantially greater amount of supplies, equipment, medical gear, ammunition, etc. than would be ordinarily possible; however, unlike other pocket spaces Asher must apply his power onto a container of some kind (pocket/ backpack/ etc.) and even then his pocket space does have a limit and can only carry items that could realistically fit into the container that Asher has applied his power onto.

      He can create only one clone, with whom he can share senses with. His clone is essentially another separate human being that just so happens to share Asher’s physical and mental skills and capabilities as well as his thought processes, worldview, belief systems, and even memories. The clone may even learn things separately from the real Asher. If either the clone or Asher get’s hurt the other will not feel it unless they decide to share the sense of touch and even then the other will not feel the pain fully.

      He is the most polite yet the most ruthless of the whole team in that before being recruited by Cecilia he was raised that way. Cecilia recruits him only because he was one of the extremely few unaligned supers after the death of the entire original team. And yes he does have the most painful of the team’s backstories and is also the only one to know what really happened to the original team.

      During combat Asher pulls no punches and arms himself with modern military equipment, which syncs with his pocket space powers to make him incredibly versatile and allows him to switch between jobs on the fly. One moment he and his clone are acting as both sniper and spotter and the next Asher is shooting up enemies with a rifle next to his teammates while his clone tends to injured civilians with his pocket-spaced medical gear.

      Samuel can only control his owns “darts.”

      Bridget definitely uses her abilities for combat, upon absorbing a large-enough electrical power source her telekinetic powers grow in both power and range, but her max range has been at most 5 feet; however, within that five feet she is the queen of the universe, so to speak. She is a melee fighter that augments her physical capabilities with her telekinetic powers. Powers exhibit themselves as a Wonder Woman package.

      Their backstories are really long and have details that are no longer relevant to the present plot so I’ll post that in a continuation because Holy Word-Wall Batman!

      No need to apologize and I could use more of your help!

      Sorry all for hogging up your screen space!

1241. # Samethaon 16 Dec 2013 at 8:32 pm

      Continuation

      I can tell you the overarching plot of the story though:

      An elderly woman in Central Asia wishes to become a mother after numerous failed attempts at normal and even medical avenues. This woman (who is currently unnamed) manifests her “power” and becomes Barren, a monstrous tree of flesh and bone, whose roots snake out for miles and miles and drain the land of all nutrients rendering it a wasteland. Its fruit, her children, are hideous chimeras of animals and people with a mixture of animalistic instinct and human mental acuity. Barren begins to grow and her roots ever encroach on neighboring countries (Nearly a quarter of her own country is in her range and guarded zealously by her children). Her children begin to kidnap and kill people and drag them back to the roots to be absorbed rendering the next generation of chimeras marginally more human. After conventional methods fail to make progress and hundreds of soldiers from multiple countries are killed, a plea is made to the superhuman community as a whole to destroy Barren before she overruns the surrounding countries. This plea is answered by an astonishingly large majority of the superhuman community worldwide and both heroes and villains put their differences aside to help. At first, the mission is a rousing success as elementalists of varying power destroy the roots while a joint force of military and superhuman troops defend and destroy the chimeras. However, as the mission drags on the casualties begin to pile up as the chimeras begin to exhibit military strategies such as setting up ambushes, laying traps, cutting off pathways by destroying large geographical structures, and other forms of sabotage; there are even reports of uncannily human chimeras managing to sneak past their front lines and assassinating military and superhuman leaders. The battle grows more desperate as the military/ superhuman force is whittled down even as they destroy a path towards Barren herself. The final battle takes place at the base of barren herself where a mixed army of the most horrifically inhuman monsters and unnaturally beautiful chimeras both manifest powers and decimate the few remaining military/ superhuman teams. Only the strongest and most cowardly survive and escape before they too are killed. The media, having no way to follow the joint task force after they entered the country are fed stories of heroic and glorious battles where both heroes and villains alike make enormous sacrifices and epic last stands against an insurmountable foe leading the rest of the world to believe that despite the massive cost in lives, the mission was a success.

      (Cecilia and co. are founded and begin to clean up crime in their local area)

      Barren’s range begins to shrink, scientist and researchers believe that the joint-task force did incredible damage to her roots and she is now incapable of supporting herself. The world rejoices. Barren’s children begin a mass exodus to their mother, believed to be a last ditch effort by Barren to support herself and catalyze new growth by eating her own children. Barren herself shrinks. After a few years all that is left is a frail cup-like tree holding aloft the last “fruit.”

      Adam is born.

1242. # CCXon 17 Dec 2013 at 11:11 am

      @ Sametha; nice cliffhanger. Here are the tips, advice, etc.

      I apologize for having to ask about Cecilia. It personally had seemed like she was not unsure of herself at all, but after you have explained it, it’s all good.

      Okay, I get Asher now. What’s so bad about his past? Is it one of those parents were killed situations or something else?

      Ok, the over all plot seems interesting and makes sense. What country is this book in? Is what’s happening in your book happening in the future (or somewhat from what you’ve said) or is it happening in our present time?

      You said both superheroes and villains decided to join forces to try and kill/destroy Barren (that was really good name choosing), but why? I can absolutely understand why the Heroes would want too, I mean, they’re heroes. But why would the villains help? Is it because if Barren destroys the world, there won’t be a world to terrorize?

      Who’s Adam? I mean, is he going to be the most powerful spawn (sorry about that; I couldn’t think of anything else to call him…) of Barren? I’m just going to guess so.

      I’m taking a wild guess and hoping I’m right that Adam is the main villain of your book. What are you planning for him? What abilities (also a wild guess) will he have?

      Hope this helped. Don’t worry about taking to much space; I’ve written stuff that are pretty long too!

1243. # Samethaon 17 Dec 2013 at 6:48 pm

      @CCX, thanks again!

      Asher’s backstory- Born in a country neighboring Barren before she was…Barren, to a low-ranking family of soldiers employed by the local warlord. The warlord would brook no dead weight within his warband, even a baby so Asher’s family had to persuade the warlord that a child raised from birth surrounded by violence would not only make an exemplary soldier for the warlord but an utterly loyal and devoted one as well. The warlord agrees and since then Asher is forced into a variety of military training in place of any formal education. When Barren first becomes active, the numerous warbands of the country would unite and join the military groups of the various nations to destroy her. A few weeks later rescue helicopters belonging to a private security firm would find a nearly-dead Asher being carried by his “twin” away from the wreckage of various military vehicles. Asher is conscripted by the private security firm wen they find out about his powers and he is sent back again to fight Barren with the other superpowered contractors. Throughout the campaign he witnesses hundreds of superhuman groups/teams get whittled down or entirely destroyed in the larger battles. One of those teams was the original heroes of the city he now lives in, of which he was unaware until he saw pictures of them in Cecilia’s hideout. He runs away the moment he becomes aware that the chimeras are manifesting powers themselves.

      The book focuses on Cecilia and her team so it takes place mainly in The States.

      The villains helped out of a combination of factors- some villains are not actively evil, just forced into breaking the law by their circumstances and situations and so still felt that it was their duty to help; Revenge on Barren for a lost sibling during the initial military-only attacks; Concern over Barren’s explosive rate of growth and her inevitable take-over/destruction of the world; The thrill/challenge of it; the possible scientific discoveries; and the ability to live and learn about their enemies (heroes) in close proximity without any danger; the honor/glory/rewards for helping.

      Adam is the most powerful “spawn” of Barren and her only official “son.” He is the main villain of the whole world but is not the main villain/ antagonist of Cecilia and co.’s story. Adam is also the most powerful superhuman in the world with his abilities including having a fraction of the power of every single superhuman that died in the Barren campaign.

1244. # CCXon 17 Dec 2013 at 8:03 pm

      @ Sametha; Thanks for the info. Let’s get to work…

      I like Asher’s backstory. I completely agree; this is certainly a tragic backstory. Could you tell me Bridget and Samuel’s backstory as well?

      Is this book to be told in first, second, or third story?

      Thank you for explaining why the villains helped out. I apologize for having to ask.

      So if Adam isn’t the main villain, then who is?

      Sorry for the short questions… Hope this helped!

1245. # Samethaon 18 Dec 2013 at 11:01 pm

      @ CCX- work it is.

      Bridget was born to a lower-middle class family and had to learn very quickly how the world actually works and what it takes just to put food on the table. Ever since she was physically capable of doing so she was doing odd jobs all around her neighborhood from raking and mowing lawns in fall to shoveling snow in winter she would do whatever jobs came her way to bring just that much more money to her family. She would meet Samuel while raking his lawn and the two hit it off and became lifelong friends. As the threat of financial problems constantly loomed over her family’s head Bridget took the minimum amount of classes required for school and spent the rest of the day working. Due to the stresses of living this way Bridget joined the boxing club in her school to get it out of her system and would become widely-known for her ferocious brawler-type of boxing which won her numerous inter-schools victories and led to her winning state and regional championships, putting her on the map for professional recruiters and getting her into college. She would manifest powers in college during an extremely difficult fight where she was just getting destroyed by her opponent. Her power destroyed her boxing career and without the support of possible recruiters she was overwhelmed by bills, causing her to drop out of college and jump at the opportunity to join Cecilia’s team full time.

      Samuel was born to an upper-middle class family and was burdened by responsibilities, expectations, and being forced to live up to the success stories that was his whole family since he was a child. From extracurricular activities and lessons, all the AP subjects he qualified for, and numerous activities from multiple clubs his family continually pushed him harder and harder as he grew older turning him into a withdrawn sullen child. Then he met Bridget one day when he went out to offer a cup of water to the sweating girl and for the few minutes they spoke and laughed together he felt a burden lifted of his shoulders as he forgot all about the many, many responsibilities he was held accountable to. He would manifest his powers during a losing game of his most loathed sport, lacrosse, when he nearly killed the opposing goalie because his family was irritating him with all their screaming about what he should do and what he was doing wrong. He was recruited and trained by Cecilia shortly after. Acquiring numerous scholarships in college, he managed to cut most of his ties to a majority of his overbearing family while being able to take courses and join clubs that he wanted to. He would be the one to give Cecilia a head’s up about Bridget’s powers the day they manifested. Before Barren he would join in the occasional training or mission but devoted a majority of his time to his schooling. This has become the opposite of the current situation because he had to step up with the rest of the team.

      This book will be told in the first-person.

      Adam is not the main villain currently because the current story arc focuses on Cecilia and co.’s superheroics in their local area. The main villain in their local area is Lucius, an ambitious and militaristic gang leader who is currently conquering and absorbing other gangs into his own to spread his influence and heighten his power.
      Lucius’s actual power is being able to produce a number of orbs that circle around him, any ranged attack that hits an orb is redirected through another orb, though the attack loses most of its power. (Ex. Samuel’s darts fly by Lucius to other targets then are redirected to hit Lucius in the back but are caught in an orb, the darts are “teleported” into another orb that launches what is left of the darts in a random direction).

1246. # CCXon 19 Dec 2013 at 12:04 am

      @ Sametha; okay, thanks for the info. My turn…

      I get Briget’s backstory with the exception of how her powers manifest. She couldn’t have absorbed a electrical machine during the match, right? And what did she do, kill him? In your book, supers are known and/or feared, right? So everyone freaked out? Did Cecila help calm Bridget down or something? What happened?

      Bridget, overall, sounds pretty (pardon my French) badass and somewhat like Katniss everdeen from Hunger Games. Bridget, like Katniss, is ferocious, hard working, and cares about family. I’m not saying it’s bad, but be careful.

      Samuel… poor guy. If I had parents that were being control freaks, even I would flip out. Okay, so how does Cecila find him? Did she just happen to be in the same area, or following him? Or was she keeping tabs on him the entire time since he had done some missions with her late teammates? Also, did he manifest before meeting Bridget or after? Did he manifest b/f Barren? If he did (which I’m guessing he did) did he fight against her? Is he a brawn or brain type?

      For Adam; are you going to mention him at all, or is he just going to be a small character? It sounds like he’s not really important…

      Lucius; sounds like a really fun guy. How on earth do you come up with such amazing, original powers? Anyway, is he a “join or die” type of gang leader or a “if you don’t join me I will torture you. (Wicked laughter)” type of leader?

      Here are a few questions that have popped into my mind…

      What’s the public/media feelings on Supers? Is it negative or positive?

      Villains? I mean, you’ve mentioned Lucius, but are the other villains still there? Are there any heroes left?

      Are the countries in a state of apocalypse or have they all been rebuilt? Were any humans killed in Barren’s attack?

      What are Lucius’s reasons for wanting to take over? Backstory time!

      Are there any other villains in Celcila&co’s city? Or are they focusing on Lucius and small robber people + etc?

      You mentioned Chimeras in a earlier post. Are they going to be a really big part in your book? If they are, what are they going to be? (As in what role will they play?)

      Okay, this question is out of my own curiosity. Why are Barren’s children evil? Is it like a fragment of her goes into them? I apologize if you have already said this, but why is Barren evil? She was just a lady who wanted kids.

      So… yeah. Sorry for the question dump. Luck!

1247. # Samethaon 19 Dec 2013 at 6:21 pm

      @CCX

      Bridget was able to manifest her powers when her trainer offered her a phone to call her family for support during one of the breaks during the fight. The phone died before she could even put it up to her ear even though her trainer insisted that it had a full charge just before. The boost in power wasn’t enough to enable her to kill her opponent but she did beat him up pretty badly despite her injuries and exhaustion. Bridget’s powers when activated manifest as a shimmery light around her, but due to the low power increase she got it and due to the bright lights shined on the ring it wasn’t really visible until the ref. got close enough to declare her a winner and the cameras zoomed in on her did everyone find out and get pissed off.
      Cecilia wasn’t there but Samuel was. Bridget didn’t need calming down because she was too exhausted on top of the fact that after draining through all of the energy from the phone she was ready to collapse. Samuel was calling Cecilia the moment the cameras zoomed in on Bridget and everyone found out she had powers.

      Yes supers are known, and feared to varying extent. People would obviously run away from widely-known villains like Butterfly and Dragoon, but they wouldn’t run away from heroes though people would still respect/fear what they are capable of.

      For Samuel, Cecilia finds him because she responds to the call the cops give her to help against superhumans. After interrogating him about the circumstances around the attack, she realizes he has just manifested and that it was brought on by stress instead of some other strong feelings against the victim (goalie). So she helps smooth things over with the police, the victims family and the victim himself in exchange for taking Samuel under her wing. It was after this that Samuel joined the original team as Cecilia’s protege. She didn’t really need to keep tabs on him because he would show up when he was needed or wanted to help against an opponent that either Cecilia or the original team needed help with.
      He manifested way before Bridget and Barren, but like Cecilia he did not go out to fight Barren as it would leave their local area without heroes. As for the brawn or brain question, while Samuel is fit and has been trained by Cecilia in how to fight he prefers to rely on using his powers to take out enemies at range and in changing the environment to his advantage so I would have to say he is a brainy kind of hero.

      For the first parts of the book, Adam will only be mentioned by news media and the occasional research person/ scientist but will not really affect the story because he is all the way in Central Asia and the story takes place in The States, however, he will become a big plot point but he is currently chilling around his mom’s grave so far and the rest of the world know that if he is anywhere near as dangerous as his mom their all screwed but because he hasn’t been aggressive so far people are ok to just keep constant surveillance on him.

      I suppose Lucius is a fun guy who takes part in perfectly acceptable types of diversion and recreation but we’ll mostly be seeing him from Cecilia’s perspective, as the leader of a fast-growing gang. As a gang-leader, “join or die” is his stance on gangs smaller than his but for gangs that are the same size as his or are larger he prefers to make business not war with them, until his gang begins to grow larger than theirs of course.

      The public/media has many views on Supers. Just as their are multiple news channels with their own opinions on politics, etc. so it is with Supers. However, everyone is in agreement that villains can suck it.

      There are other villains, like the ones I name-dropped above. (Butterfly and Dragoon). There are heroes and villains left but in very small numbers now as a majority of the superhuman community (of the world) were killed against Barren.
      The many countries that were in Barren’s range at the peak of her power have been rebuilt with help from numerous other nations. Though the country that Barren originated from has been turned into a wasteland no longer capable of supporting life and the other countries affected by her are sporting some brand new deserts. Millions were killed by Barren, mostly by her children but a lot were also killed by the affects of her wasteland-producing roots that caused widespread deprivation of food, water, and shelter to thousands.

      I haven’t created a sufficient backstory for Lucius yet, sorry.

      Chimeras were Barren’s children; their all dead now except for Adam, but he isn’t really a chimera as he’s fully human. Barren’s children weren’t evil they were just a product of Barren’s broken powers that turned them into monstrous amalgams of animals and humans that Barren didn’t want, which is why she had them kidnap people to be absorbed by her roots in the hope that her next generation of children would be fully human.

1248. # CCXon 19 Dec 2013 at 9:32 pm

      @ Sametha. Hmm, okay, thank you for the infomation. My turn again…

      Okay, thank you again for the info on Samuel and Bridget. Apologizes for asking.

      Why are supers frowned upon? I mean, I understand that they are genetic mixups, but they did kind of, sort of, really saved the world, both good and bad.

      Are people in Lucius’s gang supers too? Normal? Or a mix?

      How old is Lucius?

      Haha. Poor villains. That must suck to have helped saved the world and the get told to suck it.

      Technically, what is Barren’s ability? How old was she when she manifested? If she manifested at a later age, why?

      Don’t worry about the backstory for Lucius; it’s better to take a week to make a backstory than to make up a quick, lame, unbelievable one.

      What are butterfly and Dragoon’s powers? Is Lucius the main bad guy or are Dragoon and Butterfly major bad people too?

      You haven’t really told me about your character’s traits and personalities. What are they like?

      Do you have any questions you want answered? If you do just type ‘em up and I’ll answer them as best as I can. Hoped the questions helped.

1249. # Samethaon 20 Dec 2013 at 10:29 pm

      Supers aren’t really frowned upon, except for the villains, but they are feared to varying extents.

      Lucius’ gang is a mix, though it is a ruthless meritocracy where having powers won’t immediately get you into a position of authority.

      Lucius is 23 years old.

      The villains that are currently being told to suck it are the ones who came out of the woodwork when news spread that nearly all the superheroes and villains that fought Barren died; creating numerous power vacuums in criminal organizations while simultaneously destroying the superheroes ability to properly rein in the resulting bloodbath brought on by villains competing for leadership positions.

      Barren’s ability was to create life, she manifested late in life around 50-60 years old. I suppose it was because she so wanted a child and as she was getting older and older she realized her chances were getting smaller and smaller causing her to become increasingly desperate until her powers broke and manifested as Barren.

      Butterfly and Dragoon are both major villains who fought against Barren but retreated early enough in the final fight that they weren’t overwhelmed by Barren’s super powered children. Lucius is the main bad guy for this story.

      Butterfly’s main power is the ability to transform into a 9-foot tall butterfly/human hybrid. His power gives him super speed, super strength, multiple limbs (or at least more than before his transformation), flight, a measure of super durability, and poison and acid powers. He is also an incredibly mobile and physically flexible combatant, making him exceedingly difficult even for superheroes to contain not to mention actually fight.

      Dragoon- (based off the light infantry men who rode on horses to engage enemies in difficult terrain)- wields power armor (like Iron Man) shaped like a centaur. Dragoon personally wields a highly modified spear/miniature nuclear weapon and a railgun pistol capable of only a few shots, which is usually all it takes to obliterate the enemies front line and allow Dragoon to plow right through. The horse portion of the armor, contains not only the mechanisms for movement but numerous automated weapon systems as well, allowing Dragoon to take on entire teams of heroes and come out the winner.

      I think I’ve written down a small summary of my characters personalities already.

1250. # CCXon 21 Dec 2013 at 11:56 am

      Okay Sametha. Thank you for the info update.

      Thanks for telling me what Barren’s abilities are. I was just a little confused about that.

      Butterfly. Looking back I really should have guessed he was a butterfly. My bad.

      For Dragoon; he sounds totally bad ass. Nice thinking.

      I think you’ve got everything down. Everything sounds great and if you haven’t started already you should; everything sounds good to me.

1251. # Comicfighteron 25 Dec 2013 at 1:09 am

      Hey folks. Ok. I have a while new story lined up. I even gave my mc one of the powers on this list! But I need a little more motivation for my villain. His name is Cain Marro. His ability is to emit fear(jut by being in the room(certain people are effected by this more than others)he can even cause people to go catatonic and leave a lingering effect for a few minutes after he is gone.) I’m just not sure I can give him much back story, depth, development and motivation. I can’t pull it out of my head…so…Help please!

1252. # CCXon 26 Dec 2013 at 12:49 am

      Hey Comicfighter. Here are my suggustions.

      It all depends on the type of villain you want to have. Ifyou want a vengeful villain, have your hero do something either annoying or something like that to piss of Cain.

      Also, for his backstory, perhaps having Cain be scared or want to retaliate in a emotional scene. I had written more stuff down, but then my stupid phone kind of crashed and lost all of it. Dang it.

      Anyway, how’s your hero? What’re their powers?

      Luck!

1253. # Kirsten Songcalon 26 Dec 2013 at 8:36 am

      @ Comicfighter

      Here’s my suggestion for your villain’s motivation: he doesn’t want to be afraid, about anything. Whether it’s financial stability, physical health, his and his family and friends safety, etc. he wants total security about everything. Which is something everyone wants, but Cain personally hates being scared so much but doesn’t care whether anyone else feels the same way, to the point that he is more than willing to force any and all of his fears, worries, and insecurities into the people around him (via his power). Is that ok? Understandably and unmistakeably bad while still making him slightly sympathetic?

1254. # Comicfighteron 27 Dec 2013 at 1:25 am

      @ccx and @k.s. Thank you both for the help. Ccx as for your questions. Cain is a villain on the way that he is trying to to destroy the government agency that monitores gifted people. Like most agencies do they have him as number one in their hit list.
      My hero I haven’t found his real name but his hero name is Terasias( the name if the blind prophet from Oedipus) and he can cause temporary blindness with the point if his finger. He also worked for the agency(later on I’m going to make so he leaves the agency not even a spoiler there.)

1255. # Laramieon 27 Dec 2013 at 1:29 am

      Wow this is a huge community. Ok. Can anyone here help me start my hero(female preferably) and just give her a decadent power and name. If you can’t that’s ok but the help is accepted. Oh and I don’t want to take from the guy above me. Ok thanks

1256. # Comicfighteron 27 Dec 2013 at 10:22 am

      @Laramie I’m sorry o be a stick in the mud but your gonna need more to get the help you desire. This list gives the power already and you have the gender out if the way. If you don’t want to give her something cliche try I avoid elemental powers. But also so if you give her multiple powers don’t overpower her the way supermen is. (That’s the only reSon that kryptonite even exists is because people complained about how op he is. ) this list gives great examples. I don’t want people to think that I’m devaluing this list but wiki has a more specific list if you really need help. Good luck

1257. # CCXon 27 Dec 2013 at 3:56 pm

      Laramie; I’m going to have to agree with Comicfighter here. While the list here is good, the wiki list is much longer. Only you can make a hero because you can’t write about something someone else made up.

1258. # CCXon 27 Dec 2013 at 4:01 pm

      Comic fighter; your hero sounds cool, and as a big fan of Greek mythology I applud your hero’s code name. Need any more help?

1259. # Mallieon 27 Dec 2013 at 7:22 pm

      Thank you so much!!! I’m actually writing a little book with super powers and this helps a TON!!

1260. # Comicfighteron 27 Dec 2013 at 10:24 pm

      @ccx tell me if this sounds stupid. In my world the powers can be improved upon. I’m gonna have my main villain have a whole story arc on how he can make an entire building s!@t their pants. Or how one man can find anyone anywhere at any given day.(not through time) but! Here’s my problem. I’m going to have a man who can see the future to such a fine science that he is not one or two but like 9 steps ahead of everyone else. Sound stupid?

1261. # Kirsten Songcalon 28 Dec 2013 at 8:31 am

      @ Laramie

      I can offer suggestions but I’m going to need a bit more to go on here.
      Is your character a villain or a hero? An antihero?
      What kind of powers were you thinking of for your character? Would they be a Speedster? Have mind powers? Etc.
      The name (I’m assuming her code-name) would be based off her power so that’s not really a problem.

      Or if you want an entirely random character, I could make one up for ya if that would jump start whatever it is your planning.

      Have a good day!

1262. # Laramieon 29 Dec 2013 at 3:55 pm

      Kirsten! I’m sorry for the lack of information! Ok my girl is a year away from college and she’s about to graduate but then she gets caught in a nuclear blast. She’s unconscious for 6 months and then a day after she wakes up her power developed. But I don’t know what her power is gonna be

1263. # Kirsten Songcalon 30 Dec 2013 at 12:04 am

      Hallo Laramie! These are a couple I’ve cooked up so far. Don’t know if your character’s a hero or a villain so the powers may vary in power or “evilness” or whatever.

      Choir- Sonic Powers/ Shape-shifting (to a limited degree)(Can create mouths anywhere on her body that are capable of using her Sonic Powers if she wants them too, or to be used as a physical defensive and offensive weapon by biting the hand or foot of an enemy that punches or kick her or by chomping an enemy she’s grappling with. She may even use it help her climb places or something).

      Sonic Powers: Singing really well, Super Shout, muting people, copying voices, throwing voices really well, echolocation, “deafening” people by muting all sound around them (which can cause hallucinations and other sensory issues after a while), making people hear voices, and causing stuff to vibrate on top of their natural frequency and break down.

      She can use all of her Sonic Powers at the same time if she creates enough mouths to do so.

      Poppet- Shape-shifting/ Sympathetic “Magic”

      Shape-shifting – Can change her any part of her form to that of a person she has seen, however she has to concentrate on the person’s form so that the change corresponds properly with the person’s body (might help to take pictures). Can change bits and pieces of her body with different peoples. (i.e. this guy’s arm, that lady’s leg, this kid’s face, etc.)

      Sympathetic “Magic” – If she changes a part of her body so that it’s like someone else’s then if she hurts that part of her body the other person will be hurt too. If the body part of the person she changes her’s into is injured then she will have the injury too and can heal the other person by fixing up the injury on her and have the other person’s injury close up or heal faster. She can also change her sensory organs into those of someone else’s and see/hear/smell/taste/touch whatever the person(‘s) are seeing/hearing/smelling/tasting/touching as well. She can’t really kill anyone because if she, for example, changes her arm into someone else’s and slits the wrist then she would bleed out and die as well then if she changes back before she dies the other person’s wound would disappear as well, though they would both be weakened from the loss of blood. When she reverts a body part back to her own whatever wound or injury on it would disappear.

      More to come…If you want.

1264. # CCXon 30 Dec 2013 at 12:07 am

      @Comicfighter, sorry I haven’t replied to you yet. I think your idea isn’t stupid; it makes sense. All you need to worry about is if you overpower your characters because that can all get really ugly. For your person who can see the future; that personally kind of sounds like super intelligence. I mean, it’s kind of like in both of the Sherlock Homes movies (Robert Downy Jr) where he thinks out several steps of attack before he does it. After being able to see to the future to a minimum of four times, it kind of becomes logic. Still, your idea about being able to be ‘upgraded’ or ‘improved’ makes sense. Once again, be careful about overpowering. Hope this helped.

1265. # Coolwriteron 30 Dec 2013 at 12:10 am

      @Laramie; just think of what superpower you would want to have.

1266. # Comicfighteron 30 Dec 2013 at 12:54 am

      Thanks as always ccx. I know about over powering I’ve kept it in mind. Also the improving takes years of work. (For Cain it’s taken a total of 10 years to get to his level of ability) if you need help at all just write on this wall. I try to check in as much as I can.

1267. # Proxie#0on 30 Dec 2013 at 5:18 am

      @ComicFighter

      I was just curious. From how you are describing your divination/future seeing individual, he reminds me of the Observers from Fringe, as well as Nic. Cages character in Next. More so the former than the latter. The observers can not really see into the future, but, as your character does, forecast it. They can think many moves ahead of everyone, and have wnchancements in their head that allow then to analyze all data and all past actions to come up with a few viable futures. From there, they do as they please. Often, they use this to change or alter minute occurrences so that the ultimate outcome is in their favor. I don’t know why I’m rambling on about them…but I just made the mental comparison of a more interesting, and more fallible, take on divination.

      It would make sense, to me, that practicing with and mastering your own abilities would possibly open gateways to more powerful versions of that ability, if not outright new…though still related…abilities. For example, it has been noted that in the X Men universe, Ice Man is nearly an elemental god, in a similar fasion to storm. He could, if he learned how to, control not only ice, but any band all forms of water. And being that the earth and human body are both about 70% water…well let’s say Bobby would be quite the powerhouse.

      Always be wary of your overpowered individuals…they can be quite taxing to limit when you need to draw out conflict or add suspense of any kind.

1268. # Proxie#0on 30 Dec 2013 at 5:19 am

      Please forgive any bad spelling or grammar…my phone hates me. And I was typing too fast for it’s RAM to pick up …kept scaring me, freezing and whatnot.

1269. # Nonumberson 30 Dec 2013 at 10:14 pm

      Hey so i am trying to write a book about a guy named William Blake who is a dragon. However he was born in his human avatar state and raised by a god father who used a human avatar as well(his parents died) making him Think hes a human. He cant form into a dragon but being human means he gets to use magic which other dragons cant. He uses his magic by manipulating six elements fire,water,earth,wind,light,darkness. the main antagonist’s are demons he use magic by fusing the six element. My main problem is Getting a exciting opener. Any ideas

1270. # Meganon 01 Jan 2014 at 9:47 pm

      Hey, um, so I’m writing a novel about a guy who’s a demigod. His mom is Lupa, the roman goddess of wolves. His secondary power is the ability to transform into a wolf at will. I need help with a wolf-related primary power. Suggestions?

1271. # Meganon 02 Jan 2014 at 10:14 am

      What do you call the ability to sense dishonesty?

1272. # CCXon 02 Jan 2014 at 8:55 pm

      @Nonumbers; an opening could be perhaps him facing a demon or finding out about his history.

1273. # CCXon 02 Jan 2014 at 9:00 pm

      @Megan; I like your idea about a demigod hero. The main powers I can think of for a wolf related primary power would be strength, senses, agility… Um, that’s all I can think of. I would suggest that you have the ability to turn into a wolf as the main power of your hero instead of a secondary ability.

      The ability to sense dishonesty would be called “to sense dishonesty,” I suppose.

      I apologize for being unhelpful. Luck.

1274. # B. McKenzieon 03 Jan 2014 at 12:14 am

      “What do you call the ability to sense dishonesty?” Which sort of scene/context do you need the name for?
      
      If I were discussing the story with an editor, I think “lie detection” would be the first thing that came to mind. In-story, it’s rarely necessary to name a superpower. For example, instead of having a character ask the lie detector “Could you use your ability to detect dishonesty on John?”, it’d sound a lot more conversational/natural to just ask “Is John lying?”
      

1275. # Meganon 03 Jan 2014 at 9:44 am

      Thanks CCX, I think I will use wolf transformation as the primary power. But the thing is: I’ve used all the other powers I can think of on the other demigods in my story. I’ve already used strength,, senses, and agility, and I’m fresh out of ideas.

      (ps thanks B. Mackenzie, that’s the word I was looking for *smiles* )

1276. # CCXon 03 Jan 2014 at 3:52 pm

      @ Megan; I think what you should do is just have your hero be able to turn into a wolf. I’m guessing that would be the + strength, stamina, senses, agility, etc, so it sounds pretty good by itself. The only other thing I can think of is being able to communicate with wolves and being their alpha or something. Sorry I couldn’t think of more stuff.

1277. # ThatOneGirlon 04 Jan 2014 at 5:19 pm

      “Time-Based Abilities…Prophecy”

      What is Prophecy? I’m confused.

      –

      Also, I’m making a character that can communicate with animals and dead animals. Besides animal communication, I’m at a loss at what her other powers will be. Ideas, anyone?

1278. # CCXon 04 Jan 2014 at 7:01 pm

      @ ThatOneGirl, I believe that prophecy refers to prophecy itself, you know, seeing the future and making a prophecy about it.

      Out of mild curiosity, how do you plan to have communication with dead animals help your character? My suggestions for other powers for your heroine would be shapeshifting or possibly controlling animals. That’s all I can think of for animal related powers.

1279. # ThatOneGirlon 04 Jan 2014 at 9:16 pm

      @CCX, oh okay.

      Well…my character hears them whisper whenever they’re around, but that’s not what you’re asking. It doesn’t really help, but whenever she finds a white rock around after she hears them (thought it’s mildly rare) it means that they were trying to tell her something. This doesn’t really help, because she chooses to ignore it.

      Thanks for the other suggestions!

1280. # GXPon 05 Jan 2014 at 4:31 pm

      I have some questions and want some opinions also

      Q) Can someone explain the power of transmutation? It seems cool & I want to incorporate it into my story but I don’t fully understand it. What would be some pros and cons to this ability?

      Q) How could you incorporate electricity &/or ice manipulation/control into hand to hand combat? I’ve noticed that they’re mostly long ranged..

      Opinion: I have a created a character named Forze and he has a couple abilities but i’m not sure if they all complement each other well. On paper they kinda do but in action i’m not too sure

      - Healing
      - Force Field Generation
      - Super Jump (not crazy like the hulk’s)
      - Enhanced speed & strength

      He’s only able to heal wounds (cuts, scratches, etc) and is unable to cure diseases or heal serious infections but can help slow the process or lessen the pain (if there is any that is).

      He can create force fields but must physically draw out the shape he wants (so if he wanted a horizontal shield he would swipe his hand from left to right and vice versa). He also has to point at who he wants the shield to cover/protect (basically aim at whoever he wants to protect). If he needs to hold someone in a shield he cannot move (minimal movements).

      Modest super jump, so he can’t go crazy high. His super jump mimics Asami Koizumi from Young Justice.

      Kinda like how captain america has enhanced strenght and stuff, nothing too crazy.

      I came up with this originally but now that I think about it, it doesn’t seem to mesh. His powers just seem kinda all over the place. I know 100% I want to keep the healing & enhanced strength & speed but i’m thinking of removing force field generation & super jump and replacing them with something else. Should i just restart completely or.. ?

      My vision is for a hero that can support, defend and attack.

1281. # Anonymouson 06 Jan 2014 at 9:50 pm

      I had an idea about a hero, but I have hit multiple roadblocks and any help would be appreciated.
      George Patterson, a senior in high school is on a science field trip when he and his friends get lost and wonder off into a dimly lit room with many strange chemicals inside. While investigating this room, a flame ignites and all the chemicals begin to burn. George helps all of his friends escape the fire, one by one. When the chemical fumes combined, it caused them to gain special powers.
      Jacob Cunningham: Gains the ability to absorb solid materials into his body. The stronger the material, the stronger he becomes. But using this power tires him and can only us it for a limited time. The stronger the material, the more fatigue is caused. He can also absorb multiple materials, but this fatigues him much more drastically than before.
      Devin Stuart: gains ability to shoot ionic lasers out of his hands and feet. May or may not be able to fly, still unsure.
      Michael Louis: unsure about his power, but have some ideas.
      Force fields
      Super speed
      Ability to heal others and self
      Supersonic yell
      George’s abilities: George has gained slightly enhance physical abilities: strength, speed, endurance. Not to captain America levels, but above the average human adult male. He also has become much smarter from this experience as it caused his brain to become more active. George is the leader of this team for a short while as they feel it is their duty to help others whithout powers. But after a great tradgety, Michael, Jacob, and Devin die and George feels responsible. Shortly after their funeral, he begins to develop his friends abilities as he helped them all escape the fire, it just took longer because of the amount of powers he was gaining. He has the ability to use all of their powers, but can only use one of them at a time so as not to become op.
      I am having trouble with their hero names and the third power as it becomes George’s and I want him to use all of his abilities about equally yet not a ridiculously strong power as to not be used more then the other powers, but not too weak that it isn’t used at all. If it is super speed, then there will be no flight abilities. Any help would be great thanks.

1282. # Qwertyon 07 Jan 2014 at 12:03 am

      GXP:

      Question 1: Transmutation, in its simplest definition, is the ability to change from one form to another. The Hulk is a famous character with this ability. (Technically you could apply this definition to any character with shapeshifting abilities, like Mystique or even the Invisible Woman, but transmutation is usually thought of as a physical form-changing ability instead of a mystical or telepathic ability.) Generally, pros of this power are super-strength and invulnerability. But in almost every case, transmutation abilities are accompanied by a loss of conscious control (like the Hulk) or an apparent dumbing down of intelligence (like the Thing). It would probably be best to think of a more unique disadvantage for this power.

      Question 2: If someone had control over electricity, they could instantly fry any assailants within range, or shoot bolts of electricity at anybody who tried to run away. Also, if they were in a room with no windows, they could cause a surge in electricity and blow out all the lights; but this would only be a good idea if they had night-vision or heat-sensing abilities and their enemies did not.

      A character with ice manipulation/control has an unlimited supply of homemade ice weapons for himself. For example, covering his arm in ice would give him an ice-sword; ice projectiles make pretty good weapons too. Also, since things become brittle when they are frozen, an enemy encapsulated in ice can be smashed into pieces. (According to comic book logic, that is.) The simplest use of ice control, however, is to simply immobilize an enemy. Not to mention that the control of ice, and the use of a snowboard-type object, gives your character a speedy getaway from any situation…see Frozone from The Incredibles.

      As for the opinion question…I think that the healing, enhanced speed/strength, and even the super jump can be powers that work together, but the force field generation seems to come out of nowhere. Unless your character has a reason to have that particular power because of something that was explained in his origin story, it might be best to cut that power out…or delegate it to a sidekick.

      ~Qwerty

1283. # Neilon 08 Jan 2014 at 5:45 pm

      I need some advice in regards to my main character, Kyle. Through the use of enchanted bracers (earned from Triton, messenger of the sea, in greek myth), Kyle transforms, developing fish physiology. In this state, Kyle gain webbing around his hands and feet, along with gills in the back, and dorsal fin shaped ears.

      He can breathe underwater, can swim at super-speed and has enhanced physical capabilities, under water, and above to a degree. He also has limited hydrokinesis. When I mean limited, he can only shape orbs of water (which he calls Hydro pulses) to which he can toss at enemies.

      That said, there are a few weaknesses to his powers. The first one is loss of sanity. Given the species is predatory, Kyle has to be careful in reigning in his emotions. Becoming too upset or angry can cause him to loose control and become a berserk creature that won’t stop until everything is dead.

      This is very much inspired by Beast from X-men, specifically his struggles in reigning in the animalistic qualities he has. Also, given the Piscians(a race of half human-half fish) also endure through this, should be an interesting plot point.

      The second weakness is dehydration. Although capable of staying out of water for prolonged periods (due to still being a human), Kyle must repeatedly rehydrate himself. Failure to do so, results in chapped skin, dizziness/ weakness, and worst case, death.

      Finally, to go with the dehydration theme, Kyle is very susceptible to intense sources of heat, like heatlamps. These will instantly dehydrate him and such he will be weakened.

      All in all, how is this? Hopefully, the weaknesses are enough to challenge him.

1284. # CCXon 08 Jan 2014 at 11:45 pm

      Hi Neil. Here’s the works…

      I like your idea about Kyle. This is a very unique character and sounds interesting. He sounds like Glaucus, the Greek fisherman who ate a magic bit of grass and turned into a minor sea god, and Namer I think it is from the Marvel Universe, king of Atlantis and half fish dude combined. I think the fish physiology thing works with the possible exception of the predatory thing. It’s smart, don’t get me wrong, and I will be the first in line to say its clever. However, for this animal reference it kind of doesnt work. I mean, with the exception of sharks and all those other good old fashioned fish at the bottom of the sea and etc, most fish dont exactly kill things. Unless you explain what sea fish/ animal you’re thinking about I wouldn’t go along with it. Take my advice with a grain of salt, I’m not an expert.

      Okay, Kyle’s second weakness; dehydration. Love it, makes total sense, go for it. Out of mild curiosity, how long can he last? Will be die if he’s exposed to to much heat?

      I kind of feel like Kyle has more weaknesses than powers. His powers make sense, but they seem kind of basic. I mean, give him something a little original. If you can’t think if anything, give him a skill.

      I hope this helps. Good luck.

1285. # CCXon 09 Jan 2014 at 12:01 am

      Anonymous; let’s see what I can do.

      Your character’s backstory sound good and interesting. What I so far don’t understand is how George gets his friend’s powers. I mean, unless he’s an empath you’re going to have to explain that to me.

      Could you explain Jacobs ability? It does it really doesn’t make much sense to me.

      I think for Devin you should have him be able to fly with his ability. It just a personal opinion and suggustion, but I think you really should have Michael be a healer. One, it will probably be used often but not be a dominate power, two, it kind of balances everything, and three, George would then have increased strength and smarts, lasers, and absorbent strength. Looking back perhaps you should either change Jacob a diffrent ability or maybe just have George have more brains over brawn, if you pardon the expression.

      I can’t help you with code names, sorry. If I did it would just be really, really bad. I’ve not luck with codenames. Sorry.

      Well besides the codenames, I hope I helped you. Good luck.

1286. # Anonymouson 09 Jan 2014 at 11:50 am

      @CCX:
      The reason that George got all of their powers is because they all got their powers from the fumes of the chemicals in the fire. He gets out first but notices that his friends are trapped, so he goes in to save them, so he was exposed to the same fumes as them, thus causing him to gain the same powers. The reason why it took so long for them to develop was because so many powers were manifesting inside him at once that the simplest one developed first, hence the slightly improved physical capabilities and greatly improved intellgence, which is why he was the leader, he was the smartest.

      Jacob’s ability is similar to that of absorbing man. He can make his body composition that of which he “absorbed” He can also “absorb” multiple materials at once, adding to his density making his stronger, but using his powers tires him out after a certain amount of time and having multiple materials at once causes much more fatigue, so he would pnly do this to quickly end a fight or to save lives from say a large falling object.

      Thanks for all the suggestions, it has helped a bunch.

      I was also thinking about telekinesis, what do you think about that? Maybe like healing with like maybe minor telekinsis for like distraction purposes, so only able to move small items.

1287. # CCXon 10 Jan 2014 at 11:02 pm

      @ Anonymous; sorry it’s taken me so long go reply.

      Thank you for the explanation on George. My only question is why didn’t the others get all the other powers? I mean, I’m taking a wild guess that they didn’t survive long enough to start manifesting all of the abilities.

      Jacob’s ability makes sense now, I’m sorry for having to ask. However, I would suggest you make it so it’s less tiring for Jacob to use because it seems like he wouldn’t use it. How long can he last with the plus material? So far the way I’m seeing it it only lasts up to maybe 20 minutes if he’s lucky.

      I think limited telekinesis and healing would be good. They’re both simple but have their uses.

      So tell me about the plot. What do you plan to happen after George’s friends die? Who’s going to be the villain? Is he going to team up with new people or be a solo act? What happens?

      Again, sorry for replying so late.

1288. # Neilon 11 Jan 2014 at 10:51 am

      @CCX

      Thank you for the input. In regards to the predatory thing, my thinking was that the fish species the Piscians were based on were similar barracudas. Given the species has had centuries to adapt to this, Kyle is exposed to this, as a human it should serve as an interesting plot point.

      Next in terms of dehydration, a typical Piscian can only remain on land for one day. Kyle, while able to remain on land for extended periods, must hydrate himself frequently to do so. Symptoms will include dizziness, chapped skin, and nausea. He has no water, he will die.

      In terms of intense heat, the sun won’t likely affect him (as he usually is near the Beach and has water). But halogen lamps and very warm conditions can make him very dizzy. Though, this can be cured by ingesting plenty of water and remaining away from heated places.

1289. # CCXon 11 Jan 2014 at 1:37 pm

      @ Neil, thanks for the info. Your predatory idea makes sense now. Once again thanks for the info on the dehydration idea.

      So you have your main character down. What about the plot? Who’s going to be your villain?

1290. # Harmonyon 16 Jan 2014 at 4:39 am

      Hi!I have been reading this forum for years,but never commented.I came up with a brawns,brains,beauty trio.Let me know what you think.

      Ian(brawl):Towards the beginning of the story,he thinks the others see him as an errand boy’Go take care of(insert minor villan here)’He later realizes it’s not true.As the story progresses,he finds himself falling for Rosalie.She has always liked him,but never let’s anyone in,so he doesn’t know.He is good looking,likeable,and will do anything for the team.He has speed,strength,and reflexes

      Micheal(brains):In the beginning of the story,he is way to easy going and doesn’t take anything seriosly.This sometimes gets home in trouble.He,although brainy,can definetly handle himself in a fight.He is about average height,and somewhat good looking.He has intelligance,and healing. Though not really a power,he is also amazing with a sword.

      Rosalie(beauty):Has trouble letting people in,but eventually opens up to Ian and Michael. Although seriosly beautiful,to quote Stephanie Meyers The Host(awesome book,my favorite)”It’s not the face,but what expressions you use.It’s not the voice,but what you say with it.It’s not the body,but what you do with it.”She is very smart,but not in a powered way.(my favorite part)She is deadly with a dagger,a bow,or an axe.She definetly doesn’t sit on the sidelines in a fight.People do that WAY to much(ahem Disney’Ohh!It’s Prince Charming!’)She has charms,persuasion,and good looks.

      Sorry if these seem under developed.It is told from Rosalie’s point of view,so I have more on her than the others.

1291. # B. McKenzieon 16 Jan 2014 at 9:24 am

      “I came up with a brawns,brains,beauty trio…” I feel that it would probably be helpful to give the characters more three-dimensional roles and personalities.
      
      For example, does Ian have any personality traits besides being untalkative and/or “not letting people in”? What about Rosalie? If not, that would suggest to me that they’d probably have trouble contributing to non-combat scenes.
      
      Does Michael have the personality to make interesting scenes with characters that don’t talk much? I think giving him a very stark personality (e.g. Tony Stark, Sherlock Holmes, or Batman) would help because it sounds like he’s not getting much help from the other characters. Right now, it sounds like his personality is relatively subdued (e.g. Peter Parker or Harry Potter), which I think would work better if other characters were able to contribute more to dialogue.
      
      …

      I’m not a romance writer, so take this with a huge grain of salt… I feel like writing a romantic arc between two characters that are both very unexpressive emotionally would be very challenging. It might be helpful if there were more differentiation between the two.

      …

      Is there anything Ian can contribute outside of combat that Michael can’t? If not, I’d recommend reevaluating Ian (e.g. maybe giving him something more to work with or relegating Ian to a minor character). Based on what I know so far, my recommendation would be merging some traits from Michael and Ian into a single character — if you have a trio of main characters, I think it’d be really helpful if there was an interesting relationship (and preferably at least some conflict) between each pair of characters. Alternately, add something to the relationship dynamics so that each of these characters gets opportunities to interact with (and preferably conflict with) the other two.

1292. # brrrxon 16 Jan 2014 at 2:51 pm

      *What’s the name for the power where they have the ability to control technology telepathically ?

      Ok so my character can make force fields but I don’t know how I can incorporate combat with the power. Any suggestions ?

1293. # rolleixxon 16 Jan 2014 at 11:36 pm

      Is there a name for the power that gives you yhe ability to jump off of any surface? I know in KH3D it was called flowmotion but i was wondering if there was an actual name for it.

      Also what kind of things can you do with ice manipulation? I know with water manipulation you can like breath underwater, heal, use it as transportation, a shield, etc. But can you do things similar with ice manipulation ?? I feel like ice is a more limited ability to be completetly honest.

      I have a character that uses his aura as a poeere and i was wondering, can a person’s auta actually used fot combat and stuff. I know the pokemon lucario uses his aura to read other people’s aura and communicate telepathically but i don’t think he uses it for combat purposes and stuff.

1294. # Kirsten Songcalon 17 Jan 2014 at 3:29 am

      @brrrx
      I think the name for that power is Technopathy.

      In combat, force fields can be used both offensively and defensively depending on how much control your character has over them. As you probably know how you can use force fields defensively I’m just going to list some ways in which you can use them offensively.

      Turning them sideways and shooting them out like blades toward enemies, turn them into a loop-de-loop (like in hotwheels tracks) to launch certain projectiles/powers back at enemies (given a couple liberties with physics), denying people access to an area or even stopping them from escaping a dangerous place (a collapsing building), depending on whether your force fields are opaque or not you can deny your enemies sight and foreknowledge about every location they go into and ambush/set up traps for them/ or just frighten them and make them constantly paranoid, you can also wrap forcefields around your character and have him become essentially superstrong and super durable for some hand to hand combat, you can also create spike traps, or make blades attached to your character to chop his enemies up (like blades on his ankles so as he’s running into his enemies he’s also slicing at their ankles and calves).

      And that’s just a couple really, it all depends on how imaginative you can get.
      Have a good day!

1295. # Neilon 17 Jan 2014 at 6:48 pm

      @CCX

      Sorry about responding so late, but I again thank you. In terms of plot, it centers around him stopping an evil Piscian who wishes to destroy both the Republic of Atlantis( in my story, Atlantis is an advanced city, populated by multiple species, Piscians, Merfolk, Selkie, sea nymphs etc.), and the surface world. This villain is imploring a group of environmentalists who are misled.

      That’s all I have. I want to do the save the environment theme, but not have it come off as preachy or cliche. As I described somewhere else, I really like Princess Monoke, as it’s a save the environment theme done right. The bad guys aren’t one-dimensional fools, rather they are complex. One could argue they aren’t villains.

      To add to this, the evil Piscian villain is going to these lengths due to altruistic reasons, but I won’t spoil why.

1296. # Harmonyon 17 Jan 2014 at 6:51 pm

      Thanks B.Mac!I was thinking Ian and Michael would have personality clashes,which sometimes elevate to out of control if Rosalie didn’t manage to smooth things over.It takes the whole book for Rosalie to realize Ian likes her,which leads to some awkwardness between them.Michael,at first,is jealous of them,then his sister(not powered,at least, not yet)Jessica points out that it is petty of him.He stays single the whole series.He becomes very stubborn throughout the book(typical hero trait,I know).Rosalie,however,gives in very easily.She is very self-sacrificing e.g.”Do you want to go steal …….(Michael)’If I can help,of course I should go.(Rosalie)’Thats not what I asked,Rosi.’(Michael)’What did I say?’(Rosalie)”She will help anyone with anything,and that combined with her selflessness and non-stubborn nature almost always lead to trouble.

1297. # CCXon 17 Jan 2014 at 11:33 pm

      @Neil, don’t worry about responding. Sometimes it’s hard to get on. Why is your villain evil? What’s is story? Sorry for the short reply.

1298. # Neilon 18 Jan 2014 at 6:33 pm

      @CCX My villain she is a Piscean was once apart of Atlantis, serving in their military (known as the Aqua Legion).

      She of course defected. The reason why is as follows: She is is Nereid, a sea nymph. Being a Nereid, she is proficient in Atlantean sorcery, notably divination. She foresees a war break out between the surface world and the Republic of Atlantis, with the surface world helpless against the nation’s advanced technology and the environment.

      As a result, surface create the ultimate weapon against them: Leviathan. This genetic/ cybernetic creature is a powerful menace. Desperate to counter such an onslaught Atlantis creates its own weapon to which they’d named Oceanus.

      These two beasts, while initially loyal to their respective sides, both sides loose control. This in turn, leads to a complete annihilation of the planet. Witnessing this, she, coupled with her hatred of the surface world (due to how it killed her lover, long ago), compels her to destroy the surface world, so as to prevent the conflict.

      How the environmentalists tie in is that she appears before them, telling them that she represents Atlantis. She tells how the surface world’s activities are damaging her nation(specifically through oil drilling), and that the only way to stop this is help produce a new source of energy.

      They are unaware this new source of energy will be utilized to destroy both worlds. As for how the main character (who I have changed his name to Adam McKnight) is tied into the story.

      Within Atlantean lore, the individual who was said to have established Atlantis was the Orkeanus Kidemonas, the “Ocean Guardian”. This title comes from the Bracers to which were blessed by the Ocean deity, Triton.

      As such, these would endow the user the powers necessary to safeguard the world’s seas. However, these Bracers were lost, stolen by the main villianess who wished to keep them away from the city. Alas, this enters Adam, whom found a Piscean who was sent to recover them, injured.

      After proving himself worthy, the sea god, Triton, claims Adam is worthy and such bestows them.

      All in all, hopefully that fills in the details of the story.

1299. # CCXon 18 Jan 2014 at 11:57 pm

      Neil; wow, that’s a really good plot. You get a lot of ideas from greek mythology, don’t you? What does Adam do to prove himself worthy? Are there going to be any other heroes? Any other villains? Again, sorry for the short reply.

1300. # Neilon 19 Jan 2014 at 11:36 am

      @CCX

      Thank you again. Yes, I took a lot from Greek myth. One of he things I try to do is not try to draw from popular or well known myths. For example, the ocean deity is Triton, not Poseidon.

      Anyway, how I have Adam prove himself is that one day he finds himself washed up on an abandoned island, due to a storm. While there, he locates an injured Piscean unconscious, holding a container( which contains the bracers).

      After patching her up, and setting up camp, she wakes and lashes back. Adam tires to calm her down, worried about her injuries. She reclutantly relents and is distrustful of him. Knowing this, Adam says nothing and continues his drawing. After the second day, she slowly opens up to him.

      Adam does the same. She explains briefly about Atlantis and her views on the surface world. When Adam asks of the box, she grows defensive and Adam doesn’t tread. Though, he is more curious. The two are then attacked by a large octopus to which a humanoid with a shark body appears. He demands for the item the Piscean has. Adam attempts to talk things through, but is pushed aside as the Piscean and them do battle.

      The Piscean, due to her injuries, is knocked back and is about to be killed. Adam, though hazy, steps in. He pleads with the the monster to stop, trying to avert more bloodshed. But this is in vain, as he’s picked up, and forcefully drowned. While struggling, Adam nearly passes out.

      It is here he finds himself underwater, but breathing. The sea deity, Triton, is before him. The divine being questions why he did what he did. Adam claims he doesn’t know, but says he doesn’t like seeing anyone hurt.

      But he admits he failed. Triton disagrees, claiming he was watching him, and saw immense courage and compassion. It is this that he deems Adam worthy of the bracers. Before Adam could blink, the bracers attach to him. Triton claims to access their power one must invoke the true name of the sea, “Neptunus.”

      Adam invokes this name, and he’s changed, and goes to beat back the enemy, reluctantly. Alas, he’s too late to save his Piscean friend, who dies, not before telling him how pleasant he was, and that he is worthy.

      I again apologize for it being lengthy, but you wished for an explanation as to how he was worthy.

      Other villains will be an organization called Dark Typhoon. This organization is composed of sea creatures who hate the surface world and see themselves the superior creatures. The villianess utilizes them to assist in her plan.

      As for other heroes, there is one character who I haven’t given a name yet, who is affiliated with Atlantean Republic, specifically a lieutenant in the Aqua Legion. He does not like the Adam at first.

      The reason isn’t due to hatred of humans. Rather, one finds out that the person Adam befriended was his lover. Being apart of a special operations division, she was entrusted to find the Bracers of Triton and retrieve them.

      He blames Adam for not being able to save her, and such acts coldly around him. All in all, that is all that I have. The one issue I am having problem with is defining the traits of the main character.

      According to B. Mckenize, he claims he’s too nice, which I agree. I shall take that into consideration deeply, when revising him.

1301. # Leffenon 19 Jan 2014 at 12:27 pm

      Hey guys! I was just wondering. Assuming everyone knows of the old disney show Kim Possible, what were Shego’s powers? I’ve seen many say that it’s energy generation, plasma generation, aura, etc.

      Just curious that’s all haha XD.

      Oh and is someone who is able to generate their power (whatever it might be) be able to manipulate it as well or noo?

      @rolleixx The name of the power to jump off of any surface is called kinetic flow, free flow or just flow. Well that’s what I found. Could differ. Also, agreed with the whole ice part.

      @brrx a good example would be to look at violet parr disney infinity gameplay and look at the way she fights using her force field ability. It’s pretty cool tbh.

      @kirsten Does it actually matter if the force fields or the user or opaque or not? Wouldn’t a force field user be able to manipulate the colour of their shields themselves.

      One thing, the power to create force fields comes from the mind right? Wouldn’t that mean the user would technically also have the ability to shield minds?

1302. # voidon 19 Jan 2014 at 1:09 pm

      force field generation seems like a poopy power on it’s own tbh.

      I made a character and his name is vexel.

      He can manipulate and generate water.

      Long story short his father and mother are going around infecting people with a virus named % and it’s either you live and get whatever side effects (powers, extra limbs, etc) or die. Vexel lives and then sets out to stop his parents.

      This is in the future so like dystopian and stuff.

1303. # Kirsten Songcalon 19 Jan 2014 at 1:09 pm

      @ Leffen
      Yes it does matter whether the force field is opaque or not and it depends on the person if they want their character to be able to change their force field’a color or not.
      Forcefields may or may not come a character’s mind but no it would not be able to protect someone’s mind, you would need a psychic shield for that. Unless, you could just make it so that your character’s forcefuelds are capable of that.

1304. # Kirsten Songcalon 19 Jan 2014 at 1:17 pm

      @void
      Insect control may sound like a “poopy” power as well, but a certain teenage girl was very successful at creatively using her power to defeat enemies orders of magnitude more traditionally powerful than her. It’s all about how your character uses it.

      Is there something you would like help with about your story? Or are you just informing us about it? (Real question, no disrespect meant.)

1305. # Rebeccaon 19 Jan 2014 at 3:10 pm

      Concerning healing/regenerating powers, how do you think it would effect hair? Say a super had a fireball hit their head, and they recover from burn marks, but now their hair or part of their hair is missing for a while — which is especially embarrassing for heroines, I think, if they’re the type that think long hair is the last word in feminine beauty. Then again, hair is made up of dead cells, so would a super with H&R powers still have “dead” hair? Would the cells be still alive, and what would happen then? (I know, I know. Artistic license plays a big part of superhero stories, but food for thought.)

1306. # B. McKenzieon 19 Jan 2014 at 7:23 pm

      “How do you think [healing/regenerating powers] would affect hair?” I think it’s up to the author’s discretion. One approach would come to mind would be that the healing ability would preserve the person’s natural ability to grow hair (even after a fireball), but would NOT accelerate the rate at which the hair grows back, so the person would probably have to wear a wig for months or risk a lot of awkward questions from friends and family that don’t know about the superhero thing. Or, if you’d prefer, maybe the person’s body would recover to its original state pretty quickly (including the hair level).

1307. # CCXon 19 Jan 2014 at 10:38 pm

      @Neil. I like Adam’s backstory. So what’s Adam’s past? I mean, you’ve explained how he gets his powers, but what about his past before that? Also, Adam is basically the quote on quote “Chosen one?”

      I like both of your Piscean characters. They’re strong and selfless. I think what you have so far is good.

      Adam is nice, yes, but that’s not necessarily a bad thing. I mean, he could be nice but understanding that there is a need for violence occasionally. I mean, look at Darren Shan. (Cirque du Freak). In the start of the series he’s nice and thinks that there should be another path than violence but eventually comes to terms that violence is unavoidable sometimes. Just saying.

      Anyway, that’s all I have for this time. Luck.

1308. # Dylanon 22 Jan 2014 at 4:15 pm

      Hi um just how much can you do with the power to create duplicates of yourself. I was thinking of making a character who can create duplicates of himself but I feel like that’s not enough. I had the thought of giving this character another power as well.

      Suggestions?

1309. # Neilon 22 Jan 2014 at 4:15 pm

      @CCX

      My apologizes for taking so long to reply.

      Adam’s backstory is as follows:

      “Adam’s origins aren’t the happiest ones. His mother was a prostitute who gave birth to him by accident. As such, he was forcefully given away to an orphanage. The place wasn’t well off, as it constantly needed funds to survive.

      That said, Adam, while seeing this hardship, always held strong. Two things in his life helped him. The first thing was drawing. Ever since he could remember, he’d always loved to draw. These were simple drawings, like buildings, cars. But they became more elaborate, like futuristic cities, cool samurai.

      His need to draw was fueled by optimism and curiosity. He believed the outside world wasn’t like he endured, that it was a beautiful place that just waited to be seen, waited to be sketched. This was also in line with his optimism of a better life, and the good within people. Though, that in mind, Adam’s drawing abilities instilled a sense of pride, specifically how he viewed his drawings, in relation to his view of the world. Given that drawback, this side of Adam, while prevalent, never overshadowed his curious, good nature.

      Much of this was fueled by the efforts of Sister Natalie. A member of the nearby church, she would often visit to assist the center. Adam adored her motherly, warm attitude. As a result, he’d often visit the church, listening to the prayers and choirs.

      Among other contributions was Sister Natalie preaching about how life is rough. She claimed that if he looked at the bad, they would see the bad. On the other hand, if he looked at the good, believed in the lord’s grace and himself, he would find good.

      This fostered Adam’s unwavering faith towards life. The biggest contribution one day was during his ninth birthday, when she bequeathed a sketchbook. Adam was overjoyed and treasures it, to this day. Unfortunately, tragedy struck Adam. It goes back to one of his good friends at the time: Dean.

      Meeting outside in a shady place, he finds out his friend has joined a local street gang, and has asked membership. Adam argues against it, but Dean tells him that alone they’re nothing, but as a group they can be something, and see the world. Although still adamant, considering Sister Natalie’s words, Adam thinks it over; unaware that the gang members handed him some drugs.

      Sister Natalie eventually discovers these and freaks out, asking him what he was doing. Adam says he hadn’t known. Furious, Natalie asks him where he got them, but Adam not wanting to get Dean in trouble, refuses. Natalie smacks Adam, and he runs off. It is here Dean meets up with the gang, asking his decision. Although still sore, Adam is still hesitant. It is here that a rival gang ambushes them, and a fight breaks out.

      Wanting to get away, Adam is cornered. It is here Sister Natalie appears, racing. Adam stunned asks why, but Natalie says they need to get out of there. But Adam says they need to get Dean. Natalie agrees, and tells him to stay there, while she races for him. Dean is pinned in a corner, until Natalie retrieves him. Reluctantly he goes. It was while getting him that Natalie is shot. The wound being serious, Adam asks Dean to get help. While dying, Adam tearfully apologizes, but Natalie says it is all right, as long as he was safe.

      Adam begs she holds on, but she tells him to never stop believing, and always look at the good. As such, she passes away. Her death had a big impact on Adam. Initially, he was depressed, feeling alone and guilty. But he snapped out of it, remembering her words. It is her wisdom that Adam cherishes. Three years would pass (He was age twelve when the death happened), and at age fifteen he found himself adopted by a well off couple. As such, he was forced to move to San Clemente, California. ”

      I apologize if this backstory was long. What I wanted to showcase was how Adam’s morals, specifically seeing the good in others and his optimism, were fostered. But also, how events, like the death of Sister Natalie, which was his fault, shaped him into seeing how dark the world was.

      This theme similarly was inspired by Shazam(aka Captain Marvel), with Billy Baxton. However, I wished to take a more realistic take( as while I like the character, I see him being too nice/ Mary Sue). All in all, what should I change, if anything?

1310. # CCXon 24 Jan 2014 at 4:51 pm

      @ Neil. Sorry it’s been so long since I’ve replied; my internet is crap sometimes. Anyway, here’s what I got.

      I like Adam’a backstory. My only suggestion is maybe make him a little less good. Did he get mad at Dean for causing Sister Natalie’s death? Does Dean come into your story later? What happens to dean? Does he get adopted too? Also, can you explain how Adam gets shipwrecked again? We’re his parents on the boat? Where is the original orphanage?

      All in all, I very much like Adam’s backstory. It’s exactly how you wanted it. Again, try and find a way to make him a little less nice.

      Keep going. You’re doing awesome.

1311. # Harmonyon 24 Jan 2014 at 8:55 pm

      @Dylan
      You could do a lot of things with duplicates.For example,maybe the charecter can see through the duplicates eyes.Then he is basiclly in two places at once(or 3 or 4).Then the charecter could send the duplicate on dangerous missions instead of himself/herself.or the duplicates have amazing skills,and work like bodygaurds.That is just my two cents,so take my unprofessional advice with a huge grain of salt.Peace Out!

1312. # Neilon 25 Jan 2014 at 4:33 pm

      @CCX

      My bad about the double post, my computer is acting up. I can see Dean reappearing in the story. Maybe, I can see him being adopted, earlier, than Adam and leaving. Hence the three years, and heading for California, specifically loss Angeles. But in that timespan, Adam grew to dislike Dean, for causing Natalie’s death.

      The troublemaker then makes his way to San Clemente to try and find Adam. He locates him, and reveals he’s joined a gang, and that he’d love to have him. But Adam tells him not, and spews how much he loathes him for taking Natalie away.

      Dean says he hadn’t meant it, and tires to use her death against Adam to turn away from the world. He refuses, and tells him to leave (feeling the bestial presence rise). Eventually, Dean being so disillusioned, tires to forcefully abduct Adam.

      He fights back and manages to best the gang, severely wounding Dean. He tells his ex friend that he’s happy were he is, and that to stop running away. It is here Adam, while will never really forgive him, doesn’t hate him anymore.

      This causes Dean to snap, calling Adam a freak, and that his words mean nothing. In a twist, the enemy group, Dark Typhoon and brings him to main villianess. She at first questions why Dean is brought back, noting her hatred of humans. But her lieutenant says he is useful.

      Dean questions why, and the villianess senses deep hatred for Adam, and knows he wants vengeance. Dean, while reluctant, agrees, and is turned into a humanoid beast, who wishes to ruin Adam’s life.

      The original orphanage was in Brooklyn New York. In terms of how Adam gets shipwrecked. His new family, which is revealed to be quite wealthy, are going on their small Yacht for recreation.

      It is here they encounter an unexpected storm. During this process, Adam’s prized sketchbook is knocked into the water. Seeing how much it matters, Adam recklessly dives after it. His family desperately tires to reel him, throwing a lifesaver. But the currents are too strong, and he’s washed further from the boat.

      He hangs on, with sheer willpower, and eventually spots the Island, where he makes his way there. All in all, how is that?

1313. # Havokon 25 Jan 2014 at 10:50 pm

      I have created a plot and characters and would just like some feedback and opinions on what I have written down so far.

      Plot: Ever since birth Bryan has been very sick. His parents never had the money to get him a true treatment and it was said by many doctors that he could die at any time. Throughout the ages, Bryan’s parents did their own treatments on remedies on their son in hopes of having him survive past the age of 8 and hopefully getting rid of his illness but Bryan’s body kept rejecting everything that was given to him. On Bryan’s 15th birthday around 7:00pm Bryan falls seriously ill. In a desperate attempt Bryan’s father searches the underground and black market and for anything and anyone that could possibly help his son. Bryan’s father comes across a tri coloured vial that is being sold on the black market and steals it from the man selling it hoping that it could save his son or at least make him somewhat healthy. Bryan’s father finds a man named Dr. Mizfer Dox (who also goes by Dr. MD) who has the ability to heal and who is wiling to help but for a hefty price. Without even hearing the terms Bryan’s father agrees to them.

      With Bryan getting worst and worst Dr. MD and Bryan’s father and mother start performing surgeries, remedies and giving Bryan treatments to kill his pain and stop his death but Bryan’s body kept rejecting everything. Dr. MD declares Bryan dead and whispers to Bryan’s father “you owe me” and walks off.

      Without thinking Bryan’s father feeds Bryan the tri coloured vial thinking it could do something. Dr. MD notices the strange liquid being poured into Bryan and gasps. He quickly and silently hides. Bryan’s body doesn’t move. His parents have a small funeral and bury him. 3 months pass after Bryan’s death, Bryan mysteriously rises from his grave and walks off. He knocks on his door at home and to his mothers surprise it’s her only son. In shock she brings him in and calls her husband. Bryan’s father who is surprised embraces his son and wife.

      They talk about how this could have happened and Bryan’s father tells them how he stole the tri coloured vial and received the help of Dr. Mizfer Dox who he now owed. Bryan tries to get more information out of his father but he doesn’t remember much so Bryan drops it. As they all continue speaking the lights in the apartment Bryan lives in go out. With the sound of only harsh loud winds and pure darkness Bryan stumbles around in a attempt to find his parents. Wishing he had light his hands suddenly start glowing blue. Frightened it takes Bryan a moment to process what’s going on. He snaps out of his frightened trance remembering he must find his parents. Using his hands he hovers them in the area where his parents were sitting. There are notes left on their respective seats. “Debt paid 1/4″ & “We have your wife”.

      Bryan must now find out where both his parents have gone, how he’s going to find them, why his hands are glowing and how to survive.

      *bare with me on the powers for each character. I haven’t finalized anything but I do have ideas.
      Characters & Powers:
      - Bryan/16: Energize // Force Fields // Air
      - Skai/17: Illusions // Tracking // Pressure points
      - Finn/Unknown: Heal // Ice // Sound
      - Queenie/15: Sight // Weapon(whips) // Transoformation

      Traits:
      Bryan: Courageous // Hot-headed // Motivation
      Skai: Intelligent // Lacks physical strength
      Finn: Understanding // lacks initative
      Queenie: Calm // Lone wolf // Good intstincts
      —————————————————————————–

      Thoughts? Suggestions? Criticism?
      I’m open to anything that will help make my story sound better, flow better and make it more appealing.

1314. # CCXon 26 Jan 2014 at 3:31 pm

      Hi Havok. Nice name choice. Anyway, here’s your feedback.

      Bryan’s backstory is good. Here are a few questions I had though.

      why does Dr. MD say we have your wife if he’s taken Bryan’s dad?

      Is Dr. MD a mutant or did he take a serum like Bryan?

      Why do his hands glow blue? I mean, that’s just a question. Why blue and not some other color?

      Is this set in present times or in the future? It sounds a little into the future to me.

      What happens after this? What idea for the plot do you have besides finding his parents?

      So for your other characters, Skai, Finn, and Beanie. Nice names by the way. Anyway, I suggest that if you are going to have your characters have more than one power you should give them powers that relate to each other.

      For Bryan, I would suggest light abilities because of the part where his hands glow. If you really wanted force fields you could have Bryan be able to thicken light into a sheild. I’m unsure about what you mean by energizing. Do you mean like energizing people, their abilities, or other things? If Bryan had light abilities he could technically do this as well.

      Skai… what do you mean by pressure points? Otherwise he sounds good.

      Finn: maybe make him control water? Then you could keep the ice and the healing. (Like how in avatar last air bender katara could heal things with her water bendig abilities).

      What do you mean by queenie having sight? Do you mean enhanced seeing or future seeing? Also, what do you mean about weapons? Like, is she an expert or does she make them?

      That’s all I have for this time. Could you give me a little more background on Skai, Finn, and Queenie? How does Bryan meet them? Sorry if this isn’t helpful.

1315. # Havokon 27 Jan 2014 at 6:41 pm

      @CCX

      - The guy Bryan’s dad stole the tri coloured vial from left the “we have your wife note”

      - Dr. MD is a mutant

      - His hands glowing blue are a side effect from the vial Bryan’s dad make him drink. Blue just seemed like a more appropriate colour and I like blue haha.

      - I would say it’s set in the future

      - I was thinking of having the black market guy (the one who had the vial originally) go after Bryan as well as Dr. MD because he has the liquid from the vial in him & they both want if for separate reasons. Also what information about the tri coloured vial Finn has/knows.

      By energizing I mean’t he could like energize whatever he touches.

      I was thinking of letting Skai be able to like ocate pressure points on the body and he would fight that way as well. Like the equalists in the legend of korra.

      I’m cool with finn controlling water.

      I was thinking like enhanced vision and future seeing. But she would only be able to see select futures for people. She would most likely be an expert in whatever weapon I end up giving her.

      Skai is a childhood friend.

      Finn is apart of the underground world so while Bryan and Skai look for answers they eventually meet him and tell him about their dilemma and as a price to receive the information Finn has Finn asks for some of Bryan’s blood since the tri coloured liquid runs through Bryan’s body and stuff. Bryan is unaware that the liquid runs through his blood and stuff.

      Queenie’s parents have gone missing as well and she’s searching for them, so Bryan basically convinces her to join them because his parents are missing. She also has some information on Dr. MD. I was thinking of making Quennie blind and then having Bryan drop his blood on her eyes and that would kinda give Queenie her enhanced sight and future seeing. Does that seem like ok? or no?

      Sorry for the late reply :s

1316. # CCXon 28 Jan 2014 at 2:12 pm

      @ Havok. Thanks for the info. Here’s your feedback.

      Poor Bryan; he has to deal with two baddies at the same time. Keep that, it’s a good idea.

      Ok, thanks for explaining Doc MD. Wasn’t sure about that.

      I like blue too.

      For Skai: never heard of Legend of kora, but it’s a good idea and I think you should keep it.

      Go ahead with the energizing idea. Sounds good, sorry for having to ask.

      How far is it set in the future? In between now and the time of jet packs?

      I think the enhanced seeing and the future seeing is a good combo. Maybe find a way for enemies to block her seeing. (As in future seeing).

      If Skai is a childhood friend, how did he get abilities?

      How did Finn and Queenie get their abilities?

      I think that your idea about Queenie makes sense. Go for it.

      Don’t worry about being late. Take your time

1317. # hunter9980on 01 Feb 2014 at 7:40 pm

      I am writing a novel with many characters who all have the potential to have abilities, and some not. Leave any feedback on what I can use to make them stronger, give them setbacks, change the abilities in any way, or add new abilities.

      The plot of my book is basically that one day, the sun’s gravitational pull for unknown reasons increased, sucking all the planets closer to it. When this happened, the planet of Jupiter became extremely close to Earth, and unbeknownst to humans until now, a race of aliens called the Floydes created by the main character’s, Jenson, father as an experiment to see if life could exist on the planet. He had sent all of his failed experiments of war creatures here after the Floydes had disappeared off the grid, and he believed nothing could live here. The Floydes were exact genetic copies of the humans in Jenson’s town, therefore giving them the same abilities that people in Jenson’s town get. The Floydes are mad about Jenson’s dad creating their horrible life, and want to kill every person in the world for revenge. Before they attack Jenson and the other kids in his town, they kill off every adult in the world who is over the age of 19 in excruciating ways. They then go for the kids, enslaving towns one by one until they reach Jenson’s town and enslave everyone there. A girl named Hannah leads a rebellion against the Floydes, and starts a war between humans and Floydes. At this same time, Jenson, Avi, and Olivia’s powers are awoken, and in time everyone else’s who has powers. The powers can only be activated by Jenson though, and the outcome is unknown as to what the power will be. And then the war just continues from there.

      Here is a list of the characters and their abilities (Which all of them but Avi and Olivia receive from Jenson):

      Jenson: sees a virtual picture of every person in a certain area around him, can activate their powers, can look through anyone’s eyes, and can borrow their powers. Can also use a type of swiping motion to severe a bodies head, arms, legs, etc., but he is very hesitant to using this part of his ability.

      Abby: Healing of herself and others. Can also create a type of healing bubble and throw it up to fifty feet away from someone and still heal them.

      Bruce: Super Strength

      Ally: Electricity manipulation. Can electrocute anyone she touches or anyone within a certain radius of herself. Can also keep electricity running in the whole town. Uses her electricity manipulation to create a force field she can project or throw at someone/something.

      Hannah: Super Stretchy

      Sam: Telepathy and can create a mental barrier around another’ sheaf or his own head.

      Sophia: Weather Manipulation

      Ruth: Technokinesis to control electronics

      Olivia: See the Future

      Mia: Can cause plants or animals to grow and take on the characteristics of certain animals and plants

      Madison: Invisibility

      Kate: Super Speed

      Josh: Can cause a person to decay when he touches them, their skins cracks falls off, their muscles degrade and then leaves a pile of bones.

      John: Can shoot light from anywhere in his body, can be harmful or harmless.

      Jane: Read Minds

      Jamie: Can create/manipulate ice/water

      Jake: Can create/manipulate fire

      Jade: Control Minds

      Jacob: Shapeshifting into anything, can use a persons ability if they have one while in the shape of that person. When he takes on no shape, he has green skin and gold hair.

      Jack: Can create/manipulate Earth

      Isabelle: Breath Underwater

      Emma: Can see everything going on at that time, like tapping into another person’s senses.

      Diana: Gravity Manipulation. Can create black holes that suck in what she tells it to, can throw gravity at people in the form of a ball that explodes into a black hole, can increase gravity in an area, crushing a person, or can suspend gravity in an area.

      Dave: Can absorb kinetic energy through punches, kicks, any other form of harm done to him, and from beams of energy. Can redistribute it as bursts of speed, strength, reflexes, or super senses for a brief amount of time depending on how much he absorbed and built up.

      Coby: Can cancel out others powers.

      Clare: Can absorb anyone’s powers through touch.

      Caleb: Can transfer powers between people by absorbing them from one person through touch and giving it to another person through touch.

      Brian: Flight

      Avi: Teleportation

      Alex: Superhuman Intelligence

      Abigail: Duplication of herself

      Cody: Can locate an object within a certain radius of him.

      Cameron: Super senses

      Dana: Can cause someone to go into a coma through touch the coma lasts for different amounts of times depending on how long she holds on to them.

      Any feedback would be helpful, even negative.

1318. # B. McKenzieon 01 Feb 2014 at 9:13 pm

      Hello, Hunter. This is 34 characters, right? If we’re talking about a single novel, I’d recommend cutting at least 25 of them. I think that will give you a lot more time to develop and actually use each character — generally, having fewer characters that are better-developed is more interesting than having more characters that do not have enough development. (Personally, if I were evaluating a 1-2 page synopsis of a story, I would be strongly inclined to reject if it mentioned more than, say, 8 characters because a really large cast size tends to make summaries very hard to understand).

1319. # Havokon 01 Feb 2014 at 11:03 pm

      @CCX Sorry for the extremely late reply, school’s been busting my butt haha.

      I’ve finally finalized the powers of the group

      Bryan: Ability to energize things
      Skai: Mental Shield
      Finn: Water Manipulation
      Queenie: Enhanced Sight & Clairvoyance (I think that’s the proper name for it)

      Here’s my problem though. Since people have powers it must be set pretty far into the future right? I don’t know how far I should put it or what would be a reasonable time period.

      ——————————–

      I also made a short story (I have lots of free time at home and between periods :P)

      3 main characters: Hugo, Tasha, TJ, Nan

      Story: *SET ON A DIFFERENT EARTH// After a meteor from another planet falls on to earth it releases a worldwide radiation that spreads causing new species to appear, giving people powers and causing death and horrible mutations. After coping with their situation for 10 years a unknown group come to earth to find the meteor they call “hondoris”. War begin between earth and the invaders. Hugo, Tasha, TJ & Nan are assigned to the same group and are selected due to their great control of their powers to help lead earth to victory (along with others) and battle the invaders while doing other missions as well.

      Hugo: Sonic Scream. Can scream at high pitches to disable foes. Can also use vibration and/or other sound waves to locate things. He’s not immune to his own scream so he wears special headphones

      Tasha: Pain Transference/Human Voodoo Doll: By focusing on her victim she can transfer any pain or discomfort she feels to someone else

      Nan: Teleportation. Can teleport along sightlines. Able to teleport others but it causes her and whoever she takes with her pain.

      TJ: Force Field: Can generate AND manipulate force fields. He can create force fields for various things. His force field changes colour depending on the environment. (ex: if in a forest it will glow a somewhat visible dark green)

      Give your thoughts on ^^ if you like.

1320. # CCXon 02 Feb 2014 at 6:23 pm

      @ Havok. Don’t worry about the reply; I know it’s not easy to get on.

      Good job with the finalizing the abilities. Question though; why mental shield for Skai? Clairvoyance is the right word for future seeing.

      Can’t stay with only one book? Ditto…

      Nice plot. Why are they trying to fight the unknown group if they gave them abilities? Are they like, aliens?

      Here’s for your characters…

      Hugo; nice touch with his ability hurting him. I mean, usually heroes aren’t affected by their own abilities, so that was nice.

      Tasha’s abilities kind of freak me out, if you don’t mind me saying. It’s still very good, and in a fight it would be very useful.

      Nan; how would it cause pain when she teleports with people?

      TJ: how can he manipulate forcefields? Do you mean manipulating his forcefields? Nice touch with it changing colors.

      Nice job overall. Need any more help?

1321. # Zangetsuon 04 Feb 2014 at 10:45 pm

      Greetings everyone. I have an idea for a character, who I name Jeff. A forensic photographer, through exposure of mysterious extraterrestrial element, gains the power of size alteration, specifically growing and shrinking himself. With that said, allow me to get into detail.

      My reason for picking this power was because, while I saw plenty of comic heroes using this ability, it seems underrated or just overpowered. For shrinking, Jeff can shrink down to near microscopic levels. This he can also do with objects( such as for example shrinking a sword to the size of a toothpick). With that said; there are a few limitations.

      For one thing, Jeff cannot shrink others or any living beings. Secondly, Jeff while able to remain small for prolonged periods, depending on how small he is, he might have a harder time changing back.

      On the flip side, Jeff can also increase his size. He can grow as tall as a small building. While his shrunken form does not enhance his physical capabilities, his gigantic one does.

      However, there are plenty of drawbacks. For one thing, Jeff can only grow to a specific size
      If he grows bigger he risks damaging his organs and muscles from the strain. In his enlarged state,Jeff must reign in his emotions, less he enter a Beserker state. This is due to the alien race who experience the same emotional shift while giants, as opposed to when they are smaller or normal sized. All in all, how’s that? I look forward to the feedback.

1322. # CCXon 06 Feb 2014 at 10:20 pm

      Hello Zangetsu. Here is your reply. Sorry it took so long.

      You have a very good point that all of the superheroes in current comics are either underrated or overpowered. I like how Jeff’s abilities sound so far. It’s nice that there are several weaknesses instead of having simply the ability to change size.

      So Jeff, in his small/ minuscule form (sorry about that, no clue what to call him in his small form.) doesn’t loose any physical abilities, right? So then, say, if he were to punch someone in the smaller form, it would do the same amount of damage as it would if he were in his regular size, right? Also, how small can he get? Like, “dust mites are big” small or a “dust mites are small” small?

      I like how you have him not being able to change sizes without strain. How bad is the “Beserker” state? Like, is it flailing and accidentally destroying cities bad, or Hulk bad? What fuels it besides aliens also having it?

      One of the things I’d like to point out is that if the alien race is a completely different species, how does their dna get imprinted into Jeff? It kind of sounds like Roswell. (With Liz, Main female protagonist, gets healed by Max, an alien/ main male protagonist, and then later develops abilities due to him healing her.)

      How do you figure the element affected Jeff? Was it like, DNA or something else?

      Can you give us a backstory?

      All in all, you did a really good job on Jeff and I applaud you on your originality. Good job. Need anymore help?

1323. # MissMarvelMasteron 06 Feb 2014 at 10:21 pm

      Hello, I’m new to this site. I need a little bit of help. I’m writing a book with a character name Trixie, she’s trying to tell the reader about her backstory. (Is to lazy to post it right now)

      She is part cat, has power over plants and she is a tech master. She is eleven in the current time phase and she was sold to a lab for feline-human testing for half a million dollars. She grew up in Florida, then her family moved to MountainView, where her father took on the life of crime to support the family. The mother’s boss died, leaving her work adversary to rule the company. Sorry can’t type any longer, but if you have a suggestion please help!

1324. # Coolwriteron 07 Feb 2014 at 11:25 pm

      Hi MissMarvelMaster. Welcome.

      Can you give us a little bit more background on your story? I can’t really help you if I don’t have any information about what you need.

1325. # MissMarvelMasteron 08 Feb 2014 at 9:03 am

      Sorry Coolwriter, I didn’t have enough time to explain everything.
      Continuing the backstory, the father was caught and sent to prison after Trixie escaped the lab, the mother married a rich man named Drew Persel. (This chapter takes place in present) Anyways, after Trixie finishes her backtory, she finds out her dad is in prison and she goes against her two “older sisters” will to speak with him.

      I know it sounds childish but I need help deciding if Trixie should be in what I call her “Cat” temper, which is sort of like a White Tiger thing, (From spiderman, tiger amulet and she goes berserk if she doesn’t control it) or if she goes in a loving mood. Also Trixie’s code name is Tick Tick BOOM (She loves bombs)

      She also has a pendant that can change into practically anything, a mobile cube called Notie that is like a personal block robot, and she has this danger sense. I also forgot to tell you that she is a animal shapeshifter, limited to non-fantasy animals, except a certain type of dragon, which she found the DNA for.

      To the background of the story. Trixie has escaped the lab with a few friends, Nat and Kat. Along the way to stop the lab, they come across a few friends, Kaleb is a half dragon, Cole is sort of like Cyclops from X-men, Sam, well Sam is still being developed. Please help if you can!

1326. # MissMarvelMasteron 08 Feb 2014 at 9:08 am

      Whoops, I forgot to explain the danger sense or some other powers! Well, she doesn’t have her kitty ears and tail out all the time, they only come out when she’s shapeshifting or if there’s danger. She has the ability to heal people by putting her hand over the wound. She has mood eyes and she can make other people change their moods, and her eyes change color into the mood she is trying to sway the person in. She also is developing an ability to talk to machines. Well Kat and Nat are both around like 16 or something, but Trixie’s actually more mature than them, most of the time. maybe sometime I’ll paste the entire chapter onto here. Thanks! Please help!

1327. # Coolwriteron 08 Feb 2014 at 7:43 pm

      @MissMarvelMaster: thank you for more information, but I don’t understand with what you need help with. Although your idea about the cat temper is a good idea, I would advise against it. It doesn’t seemed nessasrily related.

1328. # Comicfighteron 09 Feb 2014 at 2:46 am

      Damn this forums been buisy. Hey all great advice giving since I kinda forgot about this place. But I have two very big questions for ya’ll. 1: is it bad to have characters who’s powers defy logic? Like Mr. Myxyplkt or dare I type it out loud bat mite. 2: how does this sound. This 15 year old girl has the nerve “disease” that doesn’t let her feel pain. Then blah blah blah horribly science altering accident yata yata and she can now essentially send her body into a form if armor lock from halo. But it doesn’t wear out, and she can only breath and blink when she is in this state. No movement outside of that. (Not sure if I want to give a minor healing ability when she’s not in the invulnerable mode). Her story before and after I can build ok but is her “getting-the-power” arch okay?

1329. # B. McKenzieon 09 Feb 2014 at 10:22 am

      “Is it bad to have characters who’s powers defy logic? Like Mr. Myxyplkt or dare I type it out loud bat mite.” I don’t have any problems with magical superpowers (i.e. superpowers that are non-logical), but I’d generally react very poorly to powers like Myxyplkt’s or Bat-Mite’s because they’re really goofy. If you’re targeting adult readers, goofiness is rarely if ever a net positive, especially if it doesn’t fit the overall mood (e.g. every other Batman character is much more serious, even Joker).
      
      2. “How does this sound? This girl has a nerve disease that doesn’t let her feel pain… [after a scientific accident] she can now essentially send her body into a form of armor lock from Halo. She can only breathe and blink in this state — no other movement.” Would this power remove any consequences of her losing a fight? E.g. if she can just go invulnerable when she’s beaten, I think that’d be a lot less interesting than someone that’s actually in danger when defeated.
      
      “Is her “getting-the-power” arc okay?” I don’t know anything about the origin story besides that involves a scientific accident. Some scientific accidents are interesting — e.g. I find Captain America’s origin interesting because it gives him opportunities to make interesting choices, like repeatedly lying to the Army in an attempt to enlist despite physical handicaps. If her origin story is JUST getting lucky with a non-disease “disease” and a scientific accident without her making any major decisions, I suspect it probably wouldn’t be the highlight of the story.

1330. # Comicfighteron 09 Feb 2014 at 10:38 am

      Ok B. Mac. Thanks for the advice. I put her together a little more last night so that should help.

1331. # CaptainTedon 09 Feb 2014 at 11:42 pm

      Damn..the chat area is even bigger than the list!
      Ok. My villain is a very lex luthier type. He wants to control all the crime/media/law etc. in the city. He’s rich. BUT! I don’t know his means of getting it. His power is easy to understand. It’s a double whammy. He has enhanced brain function and! he can also rip someone’s soul from their body. But I’m rambling…can you guys help me figure out where he obtains his wealth??

1332. # B. McKenzieon 10 Feb 2014 at 6:25 am

      Captain Ted, I think the first answer that comes to mind would be that he becomes wealthy by creating a criminal empire (e.g. when the police bust a rival kingpin, he swoops in and recruits the rival’s underlings and shows them how not to make the same mistake that got the first one arrested). I imagine that his organization would be unusually disciplined and meritocratic. For example, whereas many gangs are ethnic-based, he might be more interested in having competent criminals of any ethnicity.
      
      Another possibility would be how the gang is organized. In most superhero stories, city crime groups are generally structured like pyramids — e.g. you have one kingpin at the top and he has 3-5 capos and they each have 3-5 lieutenants and each of them have 3-5 sub-lieutenants and so on down to the street level criminals. This very clear hierarchy makes law enforcement’s job easier because any individual person that breaks can identify/implicate all of the people he directly works with, and the police have a pretty good of convincing one of THEM to identify/implicate others, creating a snowball effect. If your businessman is more smart than proud, he might try to keep things as murky as possible. For example, maybe each of the drug dealers don’t know ANYTHING about people higher up in the organization (e.g. they receive messages of where drugs have been dropped off, but do not actually interact with suppliers). It’d be more of a decentralized, Al Qaeda-like structure where breaking one cell doesn’t necessarily lead to major victories against other pieces of the organization.
      
      …
      
      “He can also rip someone’s soul from their body.” Killing them, I’m guessing?
      …
      
      “Damn..the chat area is even bigger than the list!” Yeah. It’s about 200,000 words of comments. That’s ~3 novels.

1333. # Weisson 10 Feb 2014 at 7:44 am

      Yo. Weiss here.

      So, I was working on my first chapter, and I encountered a pressing issue. My witch character – Lacie – has a brand of magic that is basically pyrokinesis. However, I don’t want to be forced to fall into the trap of using generic fire-based abilities.

      Would anyone have any recommendations for spicing up Lacie’s powers? (I can provide details about her personality if necessary.)

1334. # B. McKenzieon 10 Feb 2014 at 7:56 am

      You might be able to use the concept of fire more generally for enchantments and the like besides just lighting stuff on fire. For example, maybe she is acquainted with semi-cooperative fire spirits that may be willing to provide magical assistance in various ways for various costs.
      
      Speaking of fire-related supernatural entities, the mayor of Louisville recently defeated a fire troll in battle.

1335. # Weisson 10 Feb 2014 at 8:30 am

      @B. McKemzie

      I was actually considering using the ‘fire-based Familiar’ route, but I’m not sure how contrived it would seem. Although, if it required her to trade something in return, perhaos it would be like a final resort if she can already harness a weak form of fire on her own? Perhaps I’ll have the flames sealed into a weapon and she can only use her abilities if she channels them through the blade, only so she isn’t constantly lighting up whenever she gets too emotional?

      Gah! This is harder than I’d originally thought. Warren’s fighting style was so much easier to construct…

1336. # Weisson 10 Feb 2014 at 8:31 am

      @Weiss

      *B. McKenzie

      *perhaps

      Damn phone. Also, that is one interesting article…definitely made me snicker a bit.

1337. # Weisson 10 Feb 2014 at 2:22 pm

      All right, after some heavy contemplation and a small headache, I’ve reached a solution: Lacie’s abilities will include minor fire manipulation on her own – such as fireballs and the occasional channeling of flames through a weapon – but heavier spells, such as pyrokinetic teleportation and whatnot require the cooperation of fire spirits.

      She’s not going to have a familiar, even though most witches would, and I have a reason for that. However, said reason is a MASSIVE spoiler, hehe, and so I’m not going to reveal much. Yet. All I’ll say for now is it involves the date of her birth and a blue moon.

      Thoughts?

      -Weiss

1338. # B. McKenzieon 10 Feb 2014 at 4:59 pm

      “She’s not going to have a familiar, even though most witches would, and I have a reason for that. However, said reason is a MASSIVE spoiler, hehe, and so I’m not going to reveal much. Yet. All I’ll say for now is it involves the date of her birth and a blue moon. Thoughts?” That sounds workable.

1339. # MissMarvelMasteron 10 Feb 2014 at 7:27 pm

      Never mind Cool Writer. Thanks though. I’m probably not going to post for a while.

1340. # Silverstoneon 11 Feb 2014 at 7:41 am

      I have two heros

      the first ones power is She can bybass the natural durability (hope thats the right word to use) to hurt them on a normal human level, this is not super streanth,so for instance, if she was to punch superman in the stomach he would not be sent flying back but he could have the wind knocked out of him. or if he was punched in the face mabe a black eye or nose bleed

      The Second one can fuse with anyone shes friends with for diffrent effects

1341. # Anonymouson 11 Feb 2014 at 8:37 am

      1. Strength
      2. Speed
      3. Flight
      4. Invisibility
      5. Telekinesis
      6. Telepathy
      7. Teleportation
      8. Fire
      9. Water
      10. Ice
      11. Air
      12. Earth
      13. Plants
      14. Wall climbing
      15. X-ray vision
      16. Healing
      17. Shape change (Minor)
      18. Shape change (Major)
      19. Grow
      20. Shrink
      21. Double
      22. Stretch
      23. Jumping
      24. Illusion
      25. Immunity –Ageing
      26. Immunity – Heat
      27. Immunity – Cold
      28. Immunity – Poison/Disease
      29. Immunity – Suffocation
      30. Immunity – Radiation
      31. Immunity – Telepathy
      32. Indestructible skin
      33. Indestructible bones
      34. Immortal
      35. Phasing
      36. Possession
      37. Puppetry
      38. Senses –Eyes –Distance
      39. Senses – Eyes – Darkness
      40. Senses – Eyes – Detail
      41. Senses – Smell
      42. Senses – Hearing
      43. Water breathing
      44. Water walking
      45. Metal
      46. Create things
      47. Alter objects
      48. Alter memories
      49. Darkness
      50. Light
      51. Talk to animals
      52. Disease
      53. Poison
      54. Power negation
      55. Acid
      56. Extra limbs
      57. Power mimicry
      58. Sound mimicry
      59. Weather control
      60. Seeing how things work
      61. Necromancy
      62. Pause time
      63. Time travel
      64. Seduction
      65. Dream walk
      66. Force field
      67. Lightning
      68. Heal other
      69. Prehensile hair
      70. Gliding
      71. Summon swarm
      72. Turn into swarm
      73. Intelligence
      74. Change colour – self
      75. Change colour – object
      76. Stone form
      77. Metal form
      78. Crystal form
      79. Super stamina
      80. Shadow form
      81. No fall damage
      82. Radiation
      83. Learning
      84. Danger sense
      85. Calculation
      86. Accuracy
      87. Persuasion
      88. Drain life
      89. Claws
      90. Teeth
      91. Force sleep
      92. Powerful voice
      93. Acrobatics
      94. Flexibility
      95. Reverse gravity
      96. Bring objects to life
      97. Adoptive muscle memory
      98. Heat Generation
      99. Lie detection
      100. Shock wave
      101. Corroding touch
      102. Sand Form
      103. Water form
      104. Fire form
      105. EMP
      106. Poison gas
      107. Induce insanity
      108. Control animal
      109. Super Digestion
      110. Sense emotion
      111. Locate Person

      These are ones I’ve come up with, I’ve been doing stupid amounts of research on this… XD

1342. # Zinkaneon 11 Feb 2014 at 9:44 pm

      I have already started to work on this, but I wanted input on my character’s abilities while I can still use it. One of my characters has the ability to mimic other people’s abilities after being exposed to the ability. He also turns into a beast when becomes too stressed or “excited” (not a literal beast, but a crazy, psychotic form of himself). Another character can teleport short distances and has an increased intelligence. She also has her own pair of knives that she uses for more quick and stealthy kills. My other character is, I guess you could say, “resourceful”. He can build pretty much what he wants, given he understands what he is making. Instead of having a standard weapon, he has a metal glove that makes his combat more effective, along with special glasses he designed himself. There is also a few other minor characters/enemies that have heir own abilities. I feel most people use abilities in only one “normal” way. Like fire for ranged attacks or telekinesis for throwing things. I prefer to use fire for more effective punches, leaving burns on the enemy. And telekinesis could be used for “super-jumping” or quick dodging. what do you think about this?

      -Zinkane-

1343. # Silverstoneon 13 Feb 2014 at 7:36 pm

      I like it
      ZinKane

1344. # lcslimon 15 Feb 2014 at 11:29 pm

      Good ideas ZinKane, I like the idea of you using the powers that are normally used but are making them different from what other characters with them known powers use them for.

      Well done

1345. # Silverstoneon 16 Feb 2014 at 4:52 am

      the super power i came up with is for my hero

      She can bybass the natural durability (hope thats the right word to use) to hurt them on a normal human level, this is not super streanth,so for instance, if she was to punch superman in the stomach he would not be sent flying back but he could have the wind knocked out of him. or if he was punched in the face mabe a black eye or nose bleed

1346. # "X"on 17 Feb 2014 at 8:19 pm

      i have a question what a good weakness for hero

1347. # lcslimon 19 Feb 2014 at 12:03 am

      There’s not really any one good weakness fora. Hero, X.

      But, it really depends on what powers they have. So, what powers does your hero have?

1348. # Gabriel Nightshadeon 26 Feb 2014 at 9:53 am

      one of my characters is a Phaser that can pass through walls, turn invisible, and partly solidify inside some one to control them and he needs a weakness.

1349. # Silverstoneon 27 Feb 2014 at 4:05 am

      what you could say is his powers put an accumulative stress on his body which is slowly takeing it’ toll so he has to limit the use of his powers

1350. # morgtaron 06 Mar 2014 at 9:38 pm

      what are the advantages of having someone be able to phase through things like pros and cons cause in all honesty it seems like a crappy power (no offense to those who like it)

      I guess it would be good for stealth purposes..

1351. # B. McKenzieon 06 Mar 2014 at 11:19 pm

      “in all honesty phasing seems like a crappy power…” I agree it’s not terribly useful on its own, but it could be combined to make other powers/capabilities more dangerous. For example, I believe the Martian Manhunter has relatively interesting fight scenes compared to most flying bricks because he can use the environment/setting in more creative ways than just throwing things at people or hitting people through things. I’d recommend using it more as a change of pace than as a primary power.
      
      I don’t feel it’s terribly versatile either. I think it’ll get pretty monotonous from one fight scene to the next, and the noncombat applications strike me as pretty limited.
      
      “I guess it would be good for stealth purposes.” I think it’d make stealth scenes very easy/non-challenging for the character, which would probably reduce the potential for writing interesting stealth scenes. I feel like it would probably be pretty easy for the phasing character to escape, and I think it would be pretty hard to actually threaten a character in that situation. Personally, I strongly prefer stealth scenes from characters that DON’T have invisibility, teleportation, phasing, or the like — e.g. a character like Batman has more to lose, which I think makes a stealth scene more interesting and forces the character to come up with more interesting solutions than just turning on a superpower.

1352. # Anonymouson 16 Mar 2014 at 6:23 am

      awesome, i can’t believe this actually helped me in my English homework, weird

1353. # Phoenixon 28 Mar 2014 at 8:18 pm

      This has really helped me with my English story. It is supposed to be a si-fi or fantasy story, so I kind of went with people with superpowers, and a main character with telekinesis. My supporting characters still needed powers, so this really helped. Thanks.

1354. # CCXon 31 Mar 2014 at 10:13 pm

      Hey everyone; I have a question. It’s not for a book, just out of my own curiosity. Couldn’t technically someone with air control control water and fire? My reasoning behind water is that water is technically just vapor. And as we all know, vapor=gas. But for fire, what I figured is that fire is like, sparks plus air right? So technically, couldn’t someone with air control control fire?

1355. # B. McKenzieon 01 Apr 2014 at 1:48 am

      “Couldn’t technically someone with air control control water and fire? My reasoning behind water is that water is technically just vapor.” I don’t believe this would help very much with liquid or solid water.
      
      Also, I think it’d be a pretty weak substitute for actual water control because there wouldn’t be enough water vapor in most situations to actually make a major difference. For example, let’s say you’re in an office of about 40 feet wide by 20 feet long by 10 feet high (12 meters x 6 meters x 3 meters). Assuming room temperature (70 degrees Fahrenheit or 21 degrees Celcius) and a relative humidity of 60%, there’s only about half a gallon of water vapor in the room (2.4 kg or 5 pounds).
      
      With a square footage of about 800 feet, this office would likely be covered by about 6 fire sprinklers. Assuming each sprinkler uses 20 gallons of water per minute, a water controller that turned on the sprinklers would have access to 2 gallons per second. Alternately, a water controller with access to a residential fire hydrant has, let’s say, 5-10 gallons per second at his disposal. I think someone trying to control vapors would quickly get overpowered by someone that can control liquid water (assuming there is any). Additionally, the ability to control water might also extend to the water in other people (the average 150 pound male’s body contains about 90 pounds of water), allowing for some Vader-like shenanigans.
      
      …
      
      “But for fire, what I figured is that fire is like, sparks plus air right? So technically, couldn’t someone with air control control fire?” I believe an oxidizing agent (usually oxygen) is a necessary but not sufficient condition for most fires, alongside heat (e.g. a spark) and fuel. I do not believe that controlling air alone would be sufficient to create a fire*, but it would probably be enough to put one out. (Fires can be suppressed by cutting off their air supply — that would probably be pretty easy for someone that could control air molecules).
      
      Also, there are some funky cases with non-gas oxidizing agents (e.g. corrosive materials or chemicals). Superheroes that deal with super-scientist villains would probably be more likely to encounter these fires.
      
      *Unless the character has such a precise control of air pressure that he can increase the temperature of the gas, but I believe this would only be effective in an airtight space.

1356. # CCXon 02 Apr 2014 at 3:42 pm

      @ B. Mckenzie: thanks for replying so quickly. Your information was very helpful; I just hope you didn’t take to much time to write it. Thanks again!

1357. # Coolwriteron 02 Apr 2014 at 3:46 pm

      Is it a good idea to make a fan fiction about the Marvel or DC universes or is it advised against?

1358. # B. McKenzieon 02 Apr 2014 at 8:22 pm

      “Is it a good idea to make a fan fiction about the Marvel or DC universes or is it advised against?” If you see yourself becoming a professional writer someday, I would strongly encourage you to work on original content — writing your own original material is better practice than grabbing somebody else’s story and it might conceivably be sellable. If you only see yourself writing for a hobby, I don’t think it matters much whether you write original content or fan fiction, but please don’t post fan-fiction here. (Professional courtesy).

1359. # B. McKenzieon 02 Apr 2014 at 8:27 pm

      “Your information was very helpful; I just hope you didn’t take to much time to write it.” I’m glad to help. It was fast, much faster than reviewing a script.

1360. # red moonon 07 Apr 2014 at 6:40 am

      I have been looking for a list of powers to help my right my book to make way for a new super hero but no luck and this sit is not helping at all

1361. # Chaseon 07 Apr 2014 at 2:49 pm

      I’m thinking about writing a some sort of superhero novel where this typical kid, named Alex, finds out he has telekinesis and then his life turns upside down. He gets captured by a secret agency that claims to help kids like him learn to control his powers. I was thinking about adding on to Alex’s ability. In the book he’s super smart so I was thinking he may be able to use his telekinesis at the cellular and molecular level since he would understand how that all works. So, I would be able to have more freedom with what to do with the object. I was also thinking about giving him telepathy and other mind related abilities. Will this end up making him too strong?

1362. # B. McKenzieon 09 Apr 2014 at 7:32 am

      Some ideas, Chase:
      
      1) Generally, I think it’s best for pacing scenes (especially action scenes) if the character’s superpowers require as little explanation as possible. If you find that his ability to use telekinesis at the cellular/molecular level is taking so much explanation that it’s stalling your action-heavy scenes, I’d recommend choosing a different power instead (e.g. standard telekinesis).
      
      2) “I was also thinking about giving him telepathy…” Do you mean the ability to read minds or the ability to mentally communicate with another person? I feel the ability to read minds would make the story less interesting (because it significantly reduces the potential for deception/intrigue/secrets, which sounds like it would be a major problem for your story because the agency is presumably hiding something important from the characters about what its actual goals are).
      
      If you mean the ability to mentally communicate with another person, that would not be a problem. However, generally I’d recommend eliminating superpowers that can be replaced through everyday gadgets (a phone in this case), unless you have a lot in mind for this superpower that you couldn’t do with a phone. For example, I imagine that an otherwise frightening character (like Batman) could use this power in very creative ways to make an impression on people. However, if he’s just using the power like a phone or to communicate with teammates*, it’s probably not necessary.
      
      *Unless the point is to show that he’s unusually intrusive with teammates.

1363. # Chaseon 10 Apr 2014 at 4:52 am

      The reason I want him to be able to use his telekinesis at the molecular level is so I would be able to have more room for imagination with his power. Otherwise, Alex would be chucking bricks all day at his enemies. With the molecularkinesis, that’s what I’m calling it, Alex would be able to so much more with his powers. Also, He can still use regular telekinesis, so in the heat of a battle I wouldn’t have to go into detail about whats happening. With his molecularkinesis, Alex could possibly imagine the particles in a piece of paper moving more rapidly and rapidly and combusts. Or, he would be able to freeze his enemies by making the particles in them move slowly. But, I’m worried that this would make him unstoppable, though I still want to do it. Do you have any suggestions for possible weaknesses to give him?

1364. # B. McKenzieon 10 Apr 2014 at 6:29 am

      “Or, he would be able to freeze his enemies by making the particles in them move slowly.” Granted, I haven’t seen this in action yet, but based on what I understand so far, my initial impression would be that this would likely be less interesting than a character with a more typical ranged power, which generally offers more opportunity for interaction and skill (e.g. an ice ray can be dodged and one shot poorly could hit a teammate or bystander). In contrast, I’m not sure how someone would fight back against a telekinetic freezing, especially in a stealth or combat situation where the exact position of the telekinetic is not known (e.g. if he’s taking advantage of higher elevation or striking first). Within your parameters, I don’t find this very promising for fight scenes. Personally, I wouldn’t preemptively decline a manuscript based on this preconception, but if the fight scenes turn out as anticipated, it’d be pretty fast. Best of luck.
      
      “Do you have any suggestions for possible weaknesses to give him?” Giving him powers that can be seen, responded to, and interacted with in a way more interesting than just attacking the telekinetic. And preferably don’t entail narrating what’s happening to someone’s molecules in the middle of a fight scene.

1365. # B. McKenzieon 10 Apr 2014 at 6:40 am

      “I have been looking for a list of powers to help my right my book to make way for a new super hero but no luck and this sit is not helping at all…” I anticipate that there may be some greater obstacles to getting your book published than superpower selection. Best of luck with that — please let me know if you have any questions or suggestions.

1366. # Comicfighteron 12 Apr 2014 at 11:53 pm

      hey everybody! So i was wondering…are speedster characters enjoyable to write and work with? I’m thinking about writing one but i would like to know if they are any fun to develop and create?

1367. # B. McKenzieon 13 Apr 2014 at 8:53 am

      “So i was wondering…are speedster characters enjoyable to write and work with?” Whether you find them enjoyable to write is a matter of personal preference, I think.
      
      One challenge of writing them is that their powers can short-circuit almost any ordinary combat challenge in an unsatisfying way (e.g. they can resolve a hostage situation or a bank robbery in seconds, without any challenge). I believe this will force you to use superpowered antagonists or other extraordinary threats every time, which I think is generally less effective. Over the course of a novel starring a lone superhero protagonist, there will probably be something like 4-6 fights. If we’re working with a protagonist like Batman, almost all of these fights will probably be conclusive engagements with nameless, unpowered criminals (gradually building up to a climactic fight with a supervillain). If we’re working with a protagonist that can only be challenged by extraordinary criminals, you’re either going to have to run through a lot of minor supervillains and/or (more likely) you’ll overexpose your main villain to multiple inconclusive fights that have mainly been included to burn time. These fights are less likely to be interesting because they generally resolve less (e.g. if the villain escaped and neither the hero nor villain took any long-term damage, the fight probably had no effect on the plot and could probably be improved).
      
      …
      
      I haven’t personally tried this approach with a speedster yet, but I believe you could limit his powers in such a way that he may be able to have interesting scenes with ordinary criminals. For example…
      –Perhaps his maximum speed is modest enough (e.g. 50-100 mph or 80-160 kph) that he could conceivably be shot, but he can still do impressive things.
      –Perhaps he has bursts of great speed, but not enough stamina to keep it running constantly in a fight. He’d have to approach a fight against multiple enemies more carefully than just turning on his speed and insta-winning.
      
      …
      
      In addition, a character that takes on ordinary criminals from time to time (or most of the time, in the case of Batman) is more likely to be relatable than someone that takes on only extraordinary threats. In general, I think relatability contributes somewhat to better sales.

1368. # Comicfighteron 13 Apr 2014 at 2:48 pm

      Thanks B. Mac! Helped out so much!

1369. # Weisson 16 Apr 2014 at 4:04 pm

      Out of sheer curiosity, how could blood manipulation be used offensively? That is to say, the manipulation of others’ blood, not the blood manipulating character’s blood.

      ~Weiss

1370. # demigod1945on 17 Apr 2014 at 9:00 am

      First things first, this article was very well made, along with almost every other one on this website.
      Secondly, I was hoping some advice could be provided on my main character’s main ability. (He isn’t a stereotypical “Superhero”, so I like to think that my concept is a tiny bit unique.)

      Here’s what I have so far: (Please note that his ability is synthetic (man-made), as I want a somewhat realistic story.) The main character, who’s name is Samuel Garrington, has the ability to consciously control his own brain functions. Which, in turn, gives him various “smaller” abilities at his disposal, such as slowing down his perception of time, enhancing his memory, increasing his intelligence, and (a rather unique one I think, but I may be wrong) he can also tweak how his brain “sees” through his eyes to give himself sort of a “HUD”. This particular ability allows him to see the visual paths of objects in motion, and physically “see” probability, which increases his ability to predict physical actions and outcomes of events. These smaller ones are all temporary, and can not be in use for too long without harmful effects to himself.

      Another note: My character would be considered the stereotypical sociopath( which is a side effect of his synthetic ability.), he has no remorse or empathy for other humans, which I hope will make for an interesting plot.

      I would explain how he obtained his ability and how it lead to the sociopath “side effect”, but I don’t have time for that at this very moment.

      Any advice offered would be greatly appreciated!! So, thank you (to whoever gives me advice/criticism.), in advance for the help.

1371. # B. McKenzieon 19 Apr 2014 at 11:22 am

      Weiss: “Out of sheer curiosity, how could blood manipulation be used offensively? That is to say, the manipulation of others’ blood, not the blood manipulating character’s blood.”
      
      If “blood manipulation” is just telekinesis that only works on blood, the only thing that comes to mind is worsening a wound that was bleeding and perhaps mentally controlling a weapon forged out of blood. If that’s it, it doesn’t strike me as a terribly versatile offensive power.
      
      I’d recommend also giving him the ability to use blood in non-telekinetic ways (e.g. perhaps using it to start a fire or freeze people). I’d recommend getting creative here.

1372. # B. McKenzieon 19 Apr 2014 at 11:31 am

      Demigod: “My character would be considered the stereotypical sociopath (which is a side effect of his synthetic ability.), he has no remorse or empathy for other humans, which I hope will make for an interesting plot.”
      
      I anticipate that a sociopath protagonist will probably be very hard to like. It may be possible to mitigate that to some extent by giving him some extraordinary social skills (e.g. perhaps he’s wildly charming/witty) and by placing him alongside more conventionally likable characters. And preferably giving him some goals that readers can relate to, preferably tying him to other people in a positive way (e.g. providing something for someone else).
      
      If he’s just a loner robot that can’t feel anything for anyone else, I’d recommend reevaluating his role as a protagonist.

1373. # Weisson 19 Apr 2014 at 3:01 pm

      @B. McKenzie

      Ah, okay, so it’s not quite as versatile as I’d hoped. I could certainly implement the non-telekinetic ways, too – in fact, I think I’d better do that, lest I risk the power becoming terribly repetitive!

      Hmm…could the character conceivably reduce blood flow to another’s heart and kill them, I wonder? I’ll have to do some research to see what blood deprivation does to a person, and how quickly symptoms set in!

      Thanks!

      ~Weiss

1374. # demigod1945on 19 Apr 2014 at 5:58 pm

      @ B. Mckenzie
      Well, my plan was to, over the course of the story, slowly have him obtain some “humanity”. He would begin to have empathy for other central characters. He would be the only sociopath in the story, so the other characters should be pretty likable in comparison. As for his overall goal, it’s (for personal reasons, obviously) revenge. But, while this isn’t his initial concern, the people he wants revenge against cause a lot of suffering and pain, therefore he would inadvertently be helping thousands of people in his revenge plot.

      @Weiss
      Have you ever heard of blood bending? In the animated TV show Avatar The Last Airbender, bloodbending is used extensively for offense.
      A good place to read about it would be their wiki, if you want some more ideas for offensive tactics for manipulating blood.

1375. # Alliance of Nineon 22 Apr 2014 at 12:23 am

      I want to write a books (eventually) and one could be a super hero book.

      So Aaron Lank, an ordinary 12 year old suddenly feels… strange. He falls down the stairs with no pain or injuries, sees beams of light coming from his alarm clock and computer, and starts thinking his grass has a room beneath it.
      One day, his father pulls him outside and tells him, “You know that supervillain, (need name for supervillain with shadow powers)?And (need name for female supervillain with super speed)” his father opened up an old box they got their tv in a few years ago. “Well,they’re your mom and me.” He said pointing down a hole in the crate “That’s our lair.”

      The Rogue/Aaron:
      Power: Indestructable, only dies of age, decapitation, brain damage, and blasts of pure radiation. His other power is Energy
      Manipulation, can manipulate all energy into solid objects of pure condensed energy, can blast beams of energy, and can store energy he can use all kinds of energy, from kinetic to radiation
      Personality: Brave, leader, modest, kind, and energetic (OBVIOUSLY)
      Skills: Unarmed combat, quick decisions
      Weaknesses: Using his powers (in the start), to willing to sacrifice himself for his friends.
      Other info: He got elected to join the Alliance of Seven, a team of elite young superheroes and children with incredible potential, like him.

      THE ALLIANCE OF SEVEN:
      Heroes: Blink, Flash, The Rogue, The Nameless Man, Backstab, The Creator, and One
      Powers: Blink Teleport, The Rogue Invincibility/Energy Manipulation, The Nameless Man Genetic Alteration, Backstab Light Speed, The Creator Superior Intelligence, One Power Bestowal
      Creator: Gavin Smith, Billionaire and Super Hero researcher
      Other Info: I have limitations for the other heroes, I just want to see how I did on my main character and the team, tomorrow I will check for responses on this and possibly do more characters Sarah if required if you think it sucked say it sucked but tell me why so I can fix it.

1376. # CCXon 22 Apr 2014 at 6:22 pm

      @The Allience of Nine: I’m CCX.

      So far your idea actually sounds pretty good. Here are a few suggestions.

      I really am liking your idea, even though it kind of sounds like you’ve taken from the runaways marvel comics.

      For Aaron, I would suggest that you change his ability to simply just energy abilities, and keeping it to kinetic or radiation. If you really want to give him invincibility, then have him channel energy into that ability. Instead of having him be usual hero, why not throw something interesting in? Maybe give him some problems with his powers or something.

      So explain your universe you hope to create. Are people aware of superheroes and villains? Are they respected or feared?

      So tell me more about the Allience of seven. So who do they fight? Do they fight just general villains, robbers (and co of course) or do they take down big villains?

      Another suggestion would be to change Blink’s name into something else, as blink is also the name of a xman character.

      Tell me more about your characters and I can help you more than I could right now. Sorry for the cruddy advice, and good luck.

1377. # Alliance of Sevenon 22 Apr 2014 at 10:21 pm

      Oops I ment to say that he still gets injured, so he could be shot in the heart ten times, be in great pain, unconscious, and completely useless and not die (he still has to heal though so if that happened it would take him a long time to heal), but if that still sounds like a overpowered just tell me and I might mention more on the Alliance of Seven (I have no clue why I did nine earlier) some time, but for now I just wanna work on characters. People are aware of superheroes/villains
      The alliance was ment to be for supervillain, very powerful ones, which is why it is so large and the heroes are the ones, with the best powers, so as a work on other characters they will start to have more of a history and will seem more interesting.And name blink does sound like xmen, now that I think about it,I’m not very good with names though.

      The villain is going to basically be a mad genius whose only power is controlling water, which is basically useless since water Isn’t even solid, but he got terribly injured in a lab experiment so made himself (with help from top scientists and engineers) a buying suit that makes him basically indestructable, and the Alliance of Seven was created by Gavin to beat the villain, who I don’t have a name for yet.

      Also I read books more then comics so I haven’t read any marvel comics. I read a book about a superheroes recently that I really liked and got me in to superheroes because I used to think the concept of a super hero was odd.
      If you have any suggestions please tell me.

1378. # Alliance of Sevenon 22 Apr 2014 at 11:00 pm

      I forgot to “explain the universe” It is really just Earth in the future it might just be there have always been superheroes and people have always known, or they have always been supers (I’ll be using “supers” to say superheroes/supervillain, basically anybody with superpowers) but they were hidden til recently, but I’ll probably do superheroes are new, as in maybe there was to much pollution that started mutating people, or maybe it just randomly happened, like it was a part of evolution, and it can be passed down through generations. Super heroes are respected supervillains are hated. Also Aaron is called The Rogue because since his parents are evil he kinda just stops crime, but at the same time he breaks laws too, like speeding (more like his team’s driver speeds) and eventually The Alliance of Seven does that to, this way people just call him, the Rogue, not a superhero.
      Also, since The Creator is in The Alliance he create them gear, some of which is the nanites which follow them which can do little things, like removing a weapon from wherever it is and it in their hand. Aaron’s suit is mainly black, but it has golden flames trailing down from his neck to about lfay down his body on all sides, his helmet is gold, and has a black visor covering his eyes and goes halfway down his nose over it, it doesn’t have an indent fir his nose it is just far off his face, he has tights (is it tights or leggings?) That are also black. UN the outer part of his arm their are rods (one for each arm) that have uranium surrounded by a material preventing the radiation from harming him inside the rods, which are called energy rods, and they are his weapon. They attach at the ends and can lengthen using nanites to form a war staff instead of a bar of energy and since he can store energy in objects, he store it in these and can focus that energy to one point of it to create extra damage when he hits something with it. His boots are black and are extra thick on the bottom due to rocket propulsion which allows him to sort of fly, but not as well as the super power flight, with the help of a steel rod on his back that folds out into gliders, which is, along with the nanites and boots, controlled with his mind through the helmet. A few things the nanites can do is get weapons help “fly” and add sounds and small differences to their appearance to make them look more impressive and better and help them earn money via phone shoots endorsement and articles. Super powers are rare and the less relatives with powers the less chance you have to get them.

      Also if you have ideas for the parents villain names or the evil cyborg’s name please tell me.

1379. # Alliance of Sevenon 22 Apr 2014 at 11:01 pm

      Tomorrow I will explain The Creator.

1380. # CCXon 23 Apr 2014 at 12:55 pm

      Hi Allience of Seven: sorry you stayed up so late to explain everything to me. Here’s the suggustions…

      For one, I think you have Aaron down. My only suggustion would to give him some different characteristics that would make him have a conflict. Also, as much as it’s addictive to do, don’t overpower your main character. Have him stick to energy control or nanites.

      So if the Allience was created for super villains, why does Gavin recruit teens? I mean, wouldn’t he not want to put kids in harms way?

      I honestly can’t really help you with names: they are basically my only weakness in writing. What I usually do is just translate it to Latin, but hey: to each their own, right? I’m about 80% sure that there’s an article somewhere on this website that explains how to choose names.

      I have to argue with you on your super villain though. Water control is hardly useless, as everything living in this world is composed of water. If anything, you should have him have limited control over metal or something, then the suit would make sense.

      I thought you said earlier that Aaron used unarmed combat?

      Did you base your plot off of the book, or was did it simply inspire you to write?

      I would go with your evolution theory. I mean, it really depends on how far into the future you want your book to be, as well as what type (dysponian or somewhat utopian).

      So give me your other character’s back stories. Why were they choose. By Gavin to be in the Allience of seven? I mean, Aaron, because of his parents being villains I can get, but what about the others?

1381. # Alliance of Sevenon 23 Apr 2014 at 9:49 pm

      Well, the nanites don’t really do much they just help them gain endorsement and make them look more impressed, but I see what you mean, I guess you’re right. It is vary far in the future there are things like flying cars, and they are common (but they don’t fly very high, only about one story high. I plan on making it sometime 2300 and 2500. I like the metal thing though. But what I ment is that it has to be liquid water, so all he could really do is move water or throw it at them, I guess he could drown them but that is really all. So One was picked by Gavin because he can give himself, or others, one power at a time but it cancels out their other power until One removes one, but swapping powers knocks you unconscious a while (the more powerful the power the longer). So he basically picks a power before each battle then removes at the end ( removing powers has no side effects). And when I said Aaron used unarmed I meant no , as in sword, knife, gun, bow, but he can wack villains with a stick. Also I thought I would change Blink to Warp.

      The Creator was picked to help the team with gadgetry so they have more then their powers.

      The Nameless Man was picked to be a sort of spy and disguise himself as one of the Villian’s mindless robots he made to cause terror, as if he wasn’t enough.

      Warp because he was just a great hero.

      I am tired so I’m going to bed earlier then usual

      Buhbye

1382. # CCXon 24 Apr 2014 at 9:27 am

      Allience of Seven: sorry you had to stay up to reply. Here’s your feedback.

      If you really want to use the nanites, and don’t get me wrong, I think they sound awesome, give them to like, the creator. If anything, the nanites would make more sense there.

      For the One, I would really just suggust some mass limitations. I mean, one thing that is a big issue is: why doesn’t the one have nameless man and the rouge get him into the rouge’s super villain parent’s lair and then take away abilities? Or why doesn’t Gavin assign warp, (nice name btw) rouge (sorry for dropping the the) nameless man, and creator to just guard one all the time and help him get rid of the superpowered population? I mean, the idea is creative, but you’d have to find some serious limitation. Instead of being able to transfer abilities, I would suggust instead that you have one be able to “power up” abilities instead. That way you can technically do more with him.

      “warp, because he was just a great hero…” do you have any female characters? Also, add something to why warp is a good hero. Like, what’s his fighting type? Does he pop behind the enemy, shank them with a knife, and then go to the next enemy?

      what happened to backstab?

      Once again, sorry you had to stay up to respond to me. I hope my feedback has helped.

1383. # Roseon 24 Apr 2014 at 7:56 pm

      Hello. I seem to be having some trouble deciding on my protagonist’s name and abilities, though I have the story’s framework laid out. (Sorry for any typos. English isn’t my first language, but I’m trying hard to do my best.)

      The main character herself is an amnesiac – overdone, yes, but it suits my story best for her to have no recollection of what she truly is – who has spent the past five years prior to the story’s start trying to both learn as much as she can about her existence while simultaneously pushing forward to give herself a reason to exist.

      Her personality is cocky, brash, energetic, and extremely self-assured, while also being somewhat melancholic and wistful at times. She’s always boasting about her latest accomplishment and talking down others, oftentimes in a childish and teasing manner, and yet whenever she sees other people exchanging warm greetings or friendly interactions, she can’t help but feel an unidentifiable ‘pang’ in her chest – almost like loneliness or regret. She’s slow to anger and rarely holds grudges – because she feels that is a waste of time – but is very blunt and won’t hesitate to tell someone exactly how she feels about them, even if it’s at the worst possible time. She’s also quite selfish and won’t hesitate to abandon someone she once considered a comrade if it’s for her own good, and yet afterwards such a thing would haunt her for days, if that makes sense. However, she’ll never wittingly throw someone in harm’s way unless they’re directly opposing her goal of finding her memories.

      Her profession before the story starts is a self-employed ‘thief’ of sorts who seeks to obtain a device that will allow her to harness the magic all humans possess, as she knows with that device she’ll be able to go further and learn more about who she was and decide for herself who she wants to be. As such, she’s extremely fast – almost unnaturally so, but still within human parameters – and she’s quite dexterous, too. (In my world, very few (possibly a magical race, depending on which direction I take this story) can use magic. Some can barter an aspect of themselves away for temporary magic before their body is destroyed. Most have to rely on technological inventions that forcibly rip open the part of the human brain that can use magic.)

      She’s going to get something that will give her some kind of power, but I’m not sure what, yet. I need something that will complement her personality. I was considering electricity but I’m not sure if that would be best. What does anyone think would work?

      For a name, I was considering March Hare, playing off of the arrogant hare in that old fable. She can’t remember her real name, but maybe the public hears of all the thievery and gives her a sort of nickname. Would this work?

      Does anyone have any suggestions other than this?

1384. # Zinkaneon 24 Apr 2014 at 11:25 pm

      @Rose This may be dumb, but you could try Harriet. That’s the first thing that came to my mind, so please forgive me if you don’t like it. If she doesn’t remember her past, I don’t think it’s very important to give her a last name, unless she managed to find that out before e story started.

      For her powers, I would recommend duplication. It would certainly help her in her “thieving”. To make it more unique and useful, maybe she can “trade” places with her duplicates. Like she can send out a duplicate a few meters ahead and trade places to like pass security lasers or a camera. It would also be useful in combat. She could create a duplicate, or duplicates, and switch with them to confuse the enemy about who is the “real” her

      Ooh! I just came up with a last name. If she has the duplication power, her nickname /last name could be Cambio. It’s Spanish for switch or trade, like her power. Hope I helped, but I’m not a professional, so take my advice with a grain of salt.

1385. # Roseon 25 Apr 2014 at 1:52 pm

      Zinkane -

      I do like the name Harriet, and I may use it for a protagonist-related sort of plot twist later on in my story.

      Hmm…I do like it quite a bit, actually. The only issue I might encounter is redundancy and lack of the ability to describe it (since I’m writing a novel, not a comic). That is the only reason I’m hesitant to automatically accept, because otherwise that seems like a useful and unique power. I hope I’ll be able to use it. It’ll definitely help her with her thievery, and, later on, when she ends up tracking down an organization and becomes a sort of bounty hunter, I suspect that’ll help even more.

      Later on, she ends up discovering what she is isn’t exactly the most humanitarian thing (I’ll make a post explaining that later on, once I solidify it). Duplication would correlate with her identity perfectly, especially with the purpose she served and the task she was supposed to perform. (Mass condemnation, in a way – it’s hard to explain, so I’ll post more on it later. I should also mention that it isn’t supposed to be a religious metaphor, because someone once misinterpreted it that way.)

      However, I’m really fond of Cambio, so I think I’ll definitely use that for a public nickname if I go with duplication. Thanks for all your help!

1386. # super crusaderon 25 Apr 2014 at 5:20 pm

      Rose,
      I had an idea that might help you out .
      A few years ago ,
      I came up withe idea of a character who seemed to be a Superman type .
      For example,
      He appears to fly and but he actually just has control over very powerful invisible energy fields, the energy fields are lifting him up .
      Another thing he could do with these fields is manipulate their shapes so that they looked like people on the outside a form of “energy disguise”
      it might be helpful for a thief .
      Just an idea.

1387. # CCXon 25 Apr 2014 at 8:17 pm

      @ Rose: Here are a few more abilities that could help with thieving. If you are set on duplication, you can ignore this but I figured I would try to help anyway.

      Phasing
      Invisibility
      Shapeshifting
      Luck manipulation (As in shifting luck that a guard wouldn’t be in her way)
      Super speed?

      Anyway, it defiantly sounds like you’ve decided on self-duplication. Either way, I hope I helped nonetheless.

1388. # B. McKenzieon 25 Apr 2014 at 11:31 pm

      CCX, for a thief character, personally I recommend powers that wouldn’t make it really easy for characters to escape from a stealth scene. In contrast, I feel that phasing, super speed, and probably invisibility would make it really hard to do an interesting stealth scene because there’s relatively little risk of the character actually failing. Along those lines, with self-duplication I’d recommend using a distance limit (e.g. perhaps the character has to be within 300 or 600 feet (~100 or 200 meters) of the duplicates rather than just remotely controlling them from a safe location) to ensure the thief has at least some risk.
      
      I also have a comment above on superpowers for thieves: http://www.superheronation.com/2007/12/30/list-of-superpowers/#comment-159133

1389. # Roseon 26 Apr 2014 at 1:36 pm

      I’ve done some thinking for my protagonist’s powers, and I’ve reached the conclusion that duplication, as enthusiastic as I’d earlier been about it, won’t work for the storyline. It’ll contradict too many other elements of the story, so I have to scrap it. Back to the drawing board for me, I guess.

      Since her thievery is more backstory-related than plot-related, I’m thinking I might go with something not so traditionally stealthy. Also, like B.McKenzie’s comment pointed out, if I do choose to include stealth scenes, they’ll lose their potential for drama or the ability to make the readers care if they know she’ll escape every time.

      I feel like her powers should be something that contrasts the ‘usual’ sort of powers thieves in fiction tend to have. I checked out that link, and now I’m debating between weapon-summoning and telekinesis. Maybe it will be some kind of telekinesis that has an effect only on a certain material. At the same time, however, I’m hesitant to use abilities that are primarily offense-based, because I think then some of her scenes might get a bit redundant.

      I appreciate everyone’s suggestions, however, even if I didn’t use them. Thank you all very much.

1390. # GhostGirl1998on 26 Apr 2014 at 5:26 pm

      How about the power to pull something from one world, and pull it to your world? Or just to open portals?

1391. # Alliance of Sevenon 27 Apr 2014 at 11:54 pm

      What if it was less of a power and more of a skill, like superhuman agility, or superhuman reflexes?

1392. # Alliance of Sevenon 27 Apr 2014 at 11:57 pm

      Do yo have any idea what the plot will be?

1393. # crescon 28 Apr 2014 at 1:25 pm

      I’ve always wanted to write a character who could teleport things to them.

      Perhaps Nightcrawler in reverse? Skilled martial artist that Bamfs his opponent somewhere nearby and then punches them.

1394. # morgtaron 29 Apr 2014 at 5:03 pm

      Ok so I have a project and we need to come up with a superhero and think of powers, traits, background, etc and it’s due tomorrow so I need some questions answered.

      1) Someone with the ability to manipulate energy (like shoot beams or use it to strength punch and kicks) can create force fields right? Can you shape the energy you create or no?

      2) With transmutation does the user get to turn whatever they touch into whatever they want or does it have to somewhat math the original matter/substance (ex: touching the metal floor and it turning into ice or touching concrete and it turning into sand)

      3) Let’s say my superhero’s powers comes from a staff or like magical glowing wristbands, if I lose them do I lose my powers as well? Could I call the items back?

      Thanks

1395. # B. McKenzieon 29 Apr 2014 at 7:30 pm

      “1) Someone with the ability to manipulate energy (like shoot beams or use it to strength punch and kicks) can create force fields right? Can you shape the energy you create or no?” You’re the author — this is your choice. I very much doubt that your teacher will take off points because the superpowers can do unexpected things.
      
      2) “With transmutation does the user get to turn whatever they touch into whatever they want or does it have to somewhat match the original matter/substance.” This is also your choice. Given your time constraints, giving the character relative freedom to work would probably be faster.
      
      3) “Let’s say my superhero’s powers comes from a staff or like magical glowing wristbands, if I lose them do I lose my powers as well?” This is also your choice. Personally, I feel it would be intuitive if the character temporarily lost his powers if he lost the item that gave him the powers.
      
      “Could I call the items back?” Also your choice. In Green Lantern, the protagonist was able to summon his ring. If this were a professional work, I’d say that’d be a pretty weak/undramatic way for him to overcome the problem of losing his item/superpowers, but it would probably be okay for your assignment.

1396. # Volixon 03 May 2014 at 4:36 pm

      On the topic of transmutation though.. How does it actually work? I’ve been reading up on it and it seems like the users can turn whatever surface they touch into anything but elsewhere I’ve read that it’s very limited ad the surface/susbtance changed turns into what is was before (sorry if that made no sense) but like an example would be (like the one morgtar) used. Turning concrete into sand.

      The powers to complicated for my simple mind lol

1397. # B. McKenzieon 03 May 2014 at 6:38 pm

      “Transmutation… How does it actually work? I’ve been reading up on it and it seems like the users can turn whatever surface they touch into anything but elsewhere I’ve read that it’s very limited and the surface/substance eventually returns to its original form.” It’s not used very often, but the form I’ve seen the most often would be the ability to change oneself into a different material(s), like Colossus on the X-Men. I’ve also seen cases where the character can change the materials of other objects — personally, I think that usually turns out pretty goofy.

1398. # Kivaltoon 08 May 2014 at 3:45 am

      Ok, so I am having some difficulty figuring out a power for the leader of a spec. ops mutant military team. I have his group but not him. His parents were mutant extremists that headed a terrorist group that targeted humans. When he was younger he ran away from home because they tried to force him to use his abilities to destroy a building that housed several humans. He then joined the military. He is pretty rough around the edges, but firmly believes in equal treatment for both humans and mutants. He is definitely more of a brawler and likes to be out in the frontlines. I just need one offensive power, but it needs to be versatile. I don’t want telekinesis because I don’t like how limitless that power can be at times. If anyone has any suggestions, that would be very helpful. Thank you.

1399. # frolluon 10 May 2014 at 7:50 pm

      I need a power that lets my character attack and defend. I want him to be able to help others while still being able to fight and i just don’t know what power allows me to do both. I need a versatile power.

      I thought of a couple powers but idk.

      1. Force field generation seems like it could do both but it’s super defensive and I don’t see any offensiveness to it and seems sort of limited.

      2. Water manipulation could do both but that would mean he would need a source and if he didn’t have water available he’s basically useless and I don’t want that.

      3. Air/Wind manipulation could work.. but.. idk..

      4. A combination of _ and _ ability. I was thinking of giving my character two powers/abilities and seeing if it could work

1400. # havokon 10 May 2014 at 7:57 pm

      force field generation is a crappy power (look at invisible girl. she can’t do much). Don’t use it. Water manipulation doesn’t have much “defending” properties. Also yeah the whole water being unavailable thing hinders it. Air/Wind is more of a offensive power, no? A combination could work. Like healing and super strength (look at Sakura). Depends though, are you going for a character that can defend others or one that can just help others in general.

      I would say do a combination of two powers or like a power + and ability. So perhaps what I said above healing + super strength or you could have danger sense + whatever power.

      In the end it’s up to you. It’s your story so do whatever I guess.

1401. # Zinkaneon 10 May 2014 at 11:58 pm

      Force fields can be surprisingly offensive. If your character uses a lot of close-quarters combat it would be useful. Force fields would protect him from hurting his arms and legs when punching and kicking. It would be kind of like an armor. Like Iron Man. If you want it like that. It would be incredibly useful if your character is skilled in combat. I’m not sure how you want the force fields to work. If it has to actually protect something, then the gloves/boots thing could work. If it’s a bit more open, then maybe you could do shields and smash and bash people like Captain America. I don’t think I have to tell you what are good defensive uses for force fields. If you need any more help just ask. And remember to take my advice with a grain of salt.

      -Zinkane-

1402. # havokon 11 May 2014 at 1:39 pm

      “If your character uses a lot of close-quarters combat it would be useful. Force fields would protect him from hurting his arms and legs when punching and kicking” But wouldn’t that also harm the user? The constant impact would eventually effect him. I say force fields can’t be used offensively because any type of pressure that hits it will most likely harm the user (depending on whether they’re mental, energy based or elemental). If Frollu’s character is someone who likes close combat I don’t see how you can incorporate close combat fighting with force fields. It literally doesn’t mesh. I’m sure you could use force fields in an offensive way some how but the power is too defensive. It’s too limited in my opinion.

      Frollu, if you do go with force fields then add another power since it’s usually accompanied by a “sub-power” like invisibility.

1403. # Anonymouson 12 May 2014 at 3:39 pm

      I have a character in one of my books that I want to be able to mentally generate things. But I’m afraid it would be too easy to get out of a situation if I do that and it would make the book kind of dull. What can I do?

1404. # Alliance of Sevenon 12 May 2014 at 9:36 pm

      Other could be a limit like if he was to mentally generate a car, he would have to get the poo arts separately, I read a book once where some people could “shape” which is where through practicing, willpower, effort, they could simply create things sometimes even items with special abilities, like jumping really far. You could do something like that.so he could mentally generate only simple things, like a small weapon, or a steel wall.

1405. # Anonymouson 13 May 2014 at 8:16 pm

      I thought about maybe he also just doesn’t have control over it, like, at any given moment some random object could pop up and he would have to use his brains to figure out how it could help him. Would that work you think?

1406. # Victoriaon 14 May 2014 at 3:16 pm

      Ok, so I’m writing a superhero-type story but not really going for that comic book type feel. Pretty much it’s based in the future where many people are born with powers (a bit like x-men) and racism and what not don’t exist there is just a strong discrimination against these people with powers. Everyone have a chip/tag in them (the whole world is just really techy and everyone scans there chip which has all of there info on it to pay for groceries or apply for a job) and the people with powers’ chips are marked and they get less in life. They have to rent houses and work for cheap because no one wants to hire them. Everyone is in a different class depending on there power. Less dangerous/ useless powers get decent jobs, more obvious powers are poorer and dangerous powers arent allowed on the streets rather they commit I crime or not. Anyway, the government starts this program where really powerful people or H.E.R.O.s can earn there freedom by working for a police force and capturing rouge “Villains” (people with powers who commit crimes) I have some different power ideas for the heroes and one is for these twin sisters who can change a person’s perspective on the world around them. They can’t cause full on hallucinations but like they can make someone think time is going slower than it is or that they’re moving faster than they actually are. Another example could be that there opponent hears his name being called but by one of the twins using their power it could sound very desperate or loud to the villain or something. They’d be able to alter how you think something smells, sounds, tastes, hears, or feels. Maybe they could make people a little crazy by making themselves look different to them, or have shadows become 3 dimensional. IDK it’s just a thought. Any thoughts or insights on limitations or practical uses?

1407. # Anonymouson 14 May 2014 at 8:58 pm

      what about for tin man?
      what can i do?

1408. # Shelly1011on 15 May 2014 at 4:34 pm

      I’m planing on making another world story. It’s more like another dimension from ours. It has magic in it. Anyway I came up with a few main characters.

      Aliyla (or Alastriona…which name sounds better?) she is able to make things (mainly weapons) out of light and it slightly glow white. She usually creates a chakram, she sometimes creates arrows and spears.she does not always hit the target so that’s why she usually uses a chakram. She is a girl who has a spunky personality and is very loyal. She is kinda smart(she is a c average student). She has red violet hair, blue eyes and she is 5’2″

      My second hero is a demon. His name is drake(I kinda want a different name for him but i don’t know) He was supposed to be human, but before he was born an evil witch turned him into a demon. So he is able to create fire and breath it too. He can make wings appear(I don’t know if it should be bat or black feather wings) and he can transform into a full demon. He is immortal but he does have a weakness to an enchanted metal. He can heal fast depending on how sever the wound is(like bruises and scratches would take a day) He looks human but he has some demon trait. He kinda has a bad boy personality but I’m taking a few traits out(mostly good traits) he is 6’2″, he is 19, has black hair and yellow eyes. His teeth will either be all pointy or he has fangs

      My third is a rich boy(either the kings son, mayors son, or just a rich kid) who is detective. He has fast reflexes and is a great swordsman. He is able to sense murder and dishonesty. He is a detective at times if the case is too hard to solve. And girls adore him. He has amazing blonde hair( it takes him a long time to do it) and he charming and smart he is also too pampered. He has forest green. Also 6’2″ and 19

      My fourth is a Druid and she is an elf. She can control nature and water but she is too powerful to control it so she has a magical staff to help her control it. She comes from a clan and she is the leader’s daughter. She has green hair and rose eyes and tan skin. She is 18

      And there is the mentor. He has a magic eye which gives him many magical abilities, but he needs to stay away from some kind of mineral. He is 2132 but he looks 40. His eye ge got from a mystical dragon.

      My supporting characters is a girl named Caroline and is a gunslinger and really good aim.
      She is 19 has brown eyes and grey eyes.
      The seconded one is a boy who is 16 and he is an engineer and he is very very smart.

      Is there anything I need to fix?

1409. # Thoidson 17 May 2014 at 2:38 pm

      VERRY LONG POAST!
      Hello, I need help on the story, and characters of this idea I have. The story itself is completed, but I just want extra help. It is never too late to improve something bad. and the opinions of as many people as possible. There are still lots of areas I need to improve on, so anyone’s opinion, good or bad, is helpful.

      6 months prior to the events of the story, a divided race, the Teazonians, are wraging war against each other. Liten, the leader of the Galactic Resistance, stole the Kastron Virus from his home planet, Teazon. His enemy, the Teazonian Empire, led by Kyrell followed him into space in an attempt to retrieve the Kastron Virus, as it could shift the war in favor of the Resistance. By accident, they accidently lose the Kastron Virus in battle, on the primitive planet of Earth. There, hundreds of natives are exposed to the Virus, and are gifted with enhanced speed, agility, reflexes, and superpowers. Liten and his Resistance gather a group of humans, exposed to the Virus, to aid them. Together, the resistance, and Kastron exposed humans take on the Teazonian Empire as they come to Earth to make sure nobody exposed to the Virus will stand in their way. Inexperienced with their powers, and not used to the pressured situation, they fail. Badly beaten, the survivors go into hiding as the Teazonian Empire lays waste to the planet.

      By the time the story begins, most of Earth is in ruins, and almost all of Earth’s inhabitants are dead. The heroes must unite other factions of survivors, so they can take back the planet, against overwhelming odds. Although redemption seems impossible, they, as a team, refuse to give up.

      CHARACTERS: I have lots of characters. I’m just going to say that now. I have a tendency to list off ALL characters, no matter how unimportant, so I’ll try not to do that.

      HEROES/KASTRONIANS: I have 16 heroes, but only 14 are human, and two of them die. All human heroes are between the ages of 15 and 21. Kastronians are just another word for anyone who has been exposed to the Kastron Virus.

      Travis Shaw: Travis is the leader of the heroes (Kastronians). He hates the position, and doesn’t want to be the leader. He sees it as his fault that his planet, and race, are almost dead, and believes he doesn’t deserve the position. He lost all confidence in himself when his team went into hiding. However, he strives to make things right, no matter what the cost. As long as the monsters who destroyed the planet are stopped. He has a Transmorphing ability, being able to transform himself, or anything he touches, into anything he wants. However, if he transforms his arm into a shield or sword, he can use them to attack, and defend, but can still feel pain.

      Zach Koutz: The second in command, Zach also is afraid to inherit leadership over the other Kastronians, because he doesn’t want to screw up. He is kind, and gentle to everyone, except Alice, who he hates. He goes out of his way to make Travis feel like the leader, not only because he doesn’t want to be, but because he, like all, respects Travis and knows he is the only person truly cut out to lead them. He has the power to control air, and carries a broken katana, which was broken during the Teazonian Invasion of Earth, although it is later refined into a new sword.

      Douglass Jackson: The team’s voice of logic and reason, Doug is always respected, and is always pushing himself to help others. He is an African-American, was sent to an orphanage when he was five by his parents, because they were too poor to support him. He, however, believes that he did something to cause them to abandon him, and he does good deeds for others to try and forgive himself. Despite being the peacemaker of the group, he is a good asset to have in battle, and has the power of teleportation. Hence, he is also the groups means of transportation in a planet overrun with enemies.

      Scott Williams: The self-appointed combat instructor on the team, Scott has always been cocky, and overconfident with himself. He became less cocky when he lost his legs in combat. Equipped with advanced Teazonian Cybernetic limbs, Scott is still one of the fastest, and quickest fighters on the team. He has a girlfriend, Kelsey, and is concerned for her safety in the destroyed Earth. His power (Ironically) is enhanced agility and reflexes, 10X that of his comrades.

      Ron Waldron: Ron is a careless, fool who tends to screw around, and crack jokes, trying to lighten the mood between his friends. Despite being one of the older Kastronians, he always seems to be the youngest to outsiders because of his immaturity. He is always happy, loves to joke around, and rarely takes anything seriously. He is the team’s sniper, and has the power of accuracy. He likes Sarah, not only because it enrages Jason, but because he truly has feelings for her. The only thing that can turn him from a loveable, happy joker, into a angry psychotic killer, is if anyone mentions his parents, who were alcoholics that shunned and ignored him as a child, but he still remembers how they neglected him.

      Jason Betz: The cold, optimistic fighter, Jason is always serious, and is determined to win back the planet from the Teazonians. Due to him and Ron being complete opposites, the two often get into fights, which tend to both amuse the others, and serve as a stress reliever for Jason. He is extremely protective of his twin sister, Sarah, and goes great limits to see to it that she doesn’t develop feelings for Ron. He has the power to create, and control ice.

      Ben Gaylord Seamen: The team’s strategist, Ben is idolized by his teammates for being able to come up with complex strategies that tend to save lives in fights. He is not much of a fighter, and has low self-esteem. (His middle name, last name, and power don’t help that) He cuts himself down much more than he should, and believes that he is absolutely useless to the team, even though he is not. His power is water breathing, which only adds to his low self-esteem. (He is the only character that has his full name mentioned.)

      Sam Baker: Before meeting Travis, Sam lived on her own, never having a group to call a family. Now that she has met Travis and co, she wants nothing more than to stay with them. She had developed feelings for Travis, but is too proud to admit them. Only when Travis tries to sacrifice his life to save a group of humans does she (sort of) find it in her to admit her true feelings. She is a survival expert, and has made living life in hiding a bit easier. She has a power of speed, and uses this to be with Travis as much as she can.

      Mason Shaw: Travis’s younger brother who sees him as a perfect leader. Mason believes his brother to be invincible, and will listen to him without question. The youngest member of the team, Mason is quick to complain if someone other than Travis tells him to do something. He is normally happy and cheerful, but recently as become gloomy and down on himself since the Invasion. He has the power to control shadows and darkness, even turn a shadow into a solid object/weapon.

      Sarah Betz: Jason’s twin sister. Sarah is shy, and quiet, even towards her friends, most of whom she has known for years. She is in love with Ron, and the fact her brother, Jason, hates him only adds to her feelings for him. Sarah, despite being shy, is very much like her brother in a fight, ruthless and unforgiving. She wants things to return to the way they were before the war, but knows with a deep pain that they never will. She enjoys Ron’s antics because they remind her of times before the war, and their powers. She also has the power to create, and control ice.

      Nick Freed: The oldest member of the team by 4 years, Nick lived as a thief before the Teazonians came to the planet. He has the power to clone himself multiple times, and influence his clones to do different things. (He is the least important of the heroes, and is the first to die when the battle heats up)

      Kelsey Walker: Scott’s girlfriend. Kelsey has a tomboyish personality, believing that she can suffer the consequences of any risk she decides to take. If anyone tells he to go back away from the fight, she will usually remark by accusing the speaker of sexism. She loves Scott and is extremely protective of him, even more so now that he lost his legs. Her power is to generate, and control lightning.

      Alice Cooper: A force field generator who is in love with Stuart. She is a risk taker, and pushes Stuart to overcome his constant fear of everything by making him do extremely risky things. This, however, has only mad him more afraid of everything. She is rude to everyone else, often causing Ben to hate himself even more, and constantly irritates everyone with her constant nagging.(She is killed by Jex, and her body is accidently incinerated by a mortified Stuart. Her dyeing words to him are, “Don’t be afraid.”)

      Stuart Kench: Stuart is afraid of everything, and that means EVERYTHING. If he hears a stick crack at night, if he sees his shadow, if a frog croaks in the dark, he’ll straight up wet himself. He tries to avoid combat and is usually one of the two people who can irritate Jason to the point of him actually causing him bodily harm. (The other being Ron) Stuart, despite his phobia, has the uncontrollable ability to incinerate whatever he touches. (When Jex kills Alice, he goes berserk and goes on a killing spree, murdering Jex, and thousands of Teazonians in the process)

      Toxic: A member of the fearsome Reddonain race, Toxic resembles a giant snake with two arms, and four legs. Toxic, like most of his race, is a savage, and will eat any form of living and dead meat. He is one of Liten’s most trusted allies, and was given his power with Treert before the war started. Toxic’s power is a mutation that caused his saliva to be acidic, capable of dissolving anything on contact. This, coupled with his seemingly endless appetite, makes him feared by both friend and foe alike.

      Treert: One of the first to be exposed to the Kastron Virus, Treert was gifted with permanent intangibility just before the war broke out. With all Teazonians being immortal, Treert is devastated that his ability has rendered him useless in a fight, and fears that his lover, Solb, will see him as a monster, as he is now ghost white, and can’t be touched. He appears to be the wisest Teazonian, and always is willing to help coach the Humans to solutions they don’t understand.

      GOOD ALIENS: Members of Liten’s Resistance. The group is made up of four alien races Teazonians, Reddas, Enegoids, and Traalons

      Liten: The leader of the Galactic Resistance, and the one who claims that Travis and his team can take back their planet. (Other than that, he remains largely out of the picture)

      Barlam: A Teazonian Scientist who helped to create the Kastron Virus. He feels guilty about ruining the lives of those exposed to his creation, and constructs devices to aid the Resistance in their struggle against the Empire.

      Thoids: (Personally my favorite character) Thoids is a spy for the Resistance, and a former thief. He can easily infiltrate any enemy base, and sneak out without being noticed. He is Liten’s closest friend, and one of the best Teazonian Warriors the Resistance has.

      Solb: Treert’s lover, and Thoids’s cousin. Like Thoids, she is an outstanding fighter. She is truly in love, and wants to marry Treert, but (According to Thoids) the only way the two can be truly married by cultural tradition, is if the two produce an offspring. Due To Treert being locked in an intangible state, this will never happen. Still, Solb remains devoted to Treert, always chosing to stay with him. (After the war is over, she choses to stay with Treert on Earth, with the heroes.)

      Cobline: The sole survivor of the Enegoid race, Cobline is the best pilot in the Resistance. He is close friends with Thoids. (He wipes out the Enegoid race when he preforms a kamikaze attack on enemy warships to save Earth.)

      Orro and Kantos: Two Teazonians who are allied with Liten, but doubt that the humans can help them at all in the war against the Teazonian Empire, even going as far as to suggest leaving “the pitiful race to die. It’s not like they’re important anyway.” (Both die at the hands of the Empire. Kantos by Kyrell, and Orro when the warship he is commanding is shot down.)

      NORMAL HUMANS: Humans with no powers.

      Dylan: Travis’s only friend who doesn’t have a power. He was separated from his friends during the Invasion, and has recently hooked back up with them. He is a master hacker, although he has sworn to never use these skills again, as his father, who was an undercover terrorist, taught him the skills.

      Lowell Palmer: A retired Military General. Travis convinces him, and a faction of human survivors, to join him, and retake Earth. He doesn’t trust the aliens, and is paranoid of every moving Redda he sees. Who wouldn’t though.

      Brendon: The result of genetic testing, Brendon is an extremely strong human, capable of causing an earthquake by tapping his foot too many times. He has to be extremely careful around others. Ron referred to him as Chuck Norris once, But Brendon doesn’t like it because it, “makes him feel too strong.” (Brendon then proceeded to rip a car door out of place, then throw it into the upper atmosphere)

      Jake: Jake drinks ALOT! Having watched his entire family die at the hands of the Teazonians, Jake drinks to forget, and it works. He is either Drunk, hung-over, or both at the same time. He and Brendon are close friends.

      TEAZONIAN EMPIRE: They came to Earth numbering about 7 trillion. They are the against anyone who opposes them, and will go out of their way to kill their enemies in the worst possible way.

      Kyrell: Leader of the Empire, who secretly exposed himself to the Kastron Virus, gaining the power of machinery. He attacked Earth, wanting to destroy the Virus, so he could be seen as a God. (He is killed due to the combined efforts of Travis, Zach, Ron, Sam, and Scott)

      Karnk: The second in command of the Empire. Karnk is a witty, heartless killer. He hates Jex, and believes that he would be a better leader than Kyrell.

      Jex: A cold, murderer who would never hesitate to kill a friend to move up in society. He has done so more than once. As a result, he has no friends, and is hated by basically all his comrades. (Killed by Stuart in a blood rage)

      Liedge: A Teazonian who counts Jex as a friend. He just is careful to keep his distance when Jex is moody. Liedge is talkative, and cheery. This sets him apart from most of his kind. Nevertheless, he is a fighter, and a killer, loyal to Kyrell. (Killed by Cobline’s suicide bombing.)

      Thanks for taking the time to read this. I have had other friends reed my completed story, but I feel like I need more help. All I hear from them is, “Nice Job!” and, “This was great.”, when I know I need to improve on thing in the story. I know I need more criticism. Character overload is big problem. I solve this by having my characters split up into groups of three or four, but it is still a problem. Any extra ideas would be helpful. It isn’t too late for me to change things, so if you have any ideas or criticisms, I’d love to hear it. Thanks.

1410. # B. McKenzieon 18 May 2014 at 11:23 am

      “HEROES/KASTRONIANS: I have 16 heroes, but only 14 are human, and two of them die.” If you’ve tried submitting this to publishers and haven’t gotten any positive responses, I’d suggest reevaluating how many of these characters are actually going to get the time/space they need to be interesting. I would recommend double-checking each of these characters, trying to merge and/or remove as many as possible. Personally, I think that having more than 7 heroes is generally unnecessary and I think most publishers would probably quickly reject a submission from an unpublished author with 10+.

1411. # Amber Don 20 May 2014 at 12:37 am

      So I am thinking up this story where there is an organization that is there to control people with powers. Make sure no one is using there powers for crimes or that if they do commit a crime that they are caught. They do this with methods like a lock on bracelet that tracks where they are and records what they say. The organization was made as part of a treaty between people with powers and the government ( that was previously hunting down all people with powers and imprisoning them). The goal of the organization is to give people with powers freedom and at the same time make sure they are not taking advantage. However after several years of it they realize that people with certain powers they can’t control even with an extremely advanced control system they label these people uncontrollable and now are trying to imprison them. This time even people with superpowers are after them out of fear that if the organization falls a part the government might start hunting them all again. Anyway I need help coming up with powers that would be considered uncontrollable. For example one I thought up is technopaths because the organization relies heavily on technology.

1412. # tommatton 21 May 2014 at 6:28 am

      wat abt a man who can astral project and can walk without his eyes or a very high imagination power that can let him see without eyes?

1413. # LoneSword7878on 23 May 2014 at 3:08 am

      I found a great encyclopedia of superpowers right here.

      http://powerlisting.wikia.com/wiki/Superpower_Wiki

1414. # Mynaon 23 May 2014 at 8:29 am

      @LoneSword: I LOVE SUPERPOWER WIKIS THEY ARE LITERALLY THE BEST THANK YOU

      @tommatt: Astral projecting sounds cool. I’m not sure what you mean by walk without his eyes–if he can see without his eyes due to imagination power, that’s not really much of a superpower, just a guy who can see by more unconventional means.

      Anyway, I’d avoid superpowers that automatically make up for a disability (such as person without eyes can see anyway) because they’re kind of used a lot?

1415. # Yeahon 24 May 2014 at 12:29 am

      This page is so helpful!

1416. # Neilon 26 May 2014 at 6:28 pm

      Greetings everyone. I need some help in regards to my character, Todd Hawthorne, specifically his abilities. For starters, I wished to have given him teleportation, but I felt that power was very hard to manage, and wouldn’t sufficiently challenge him. With that said, I decided to give him vibration manipulation.

      Specifically, Todd(due to him being a Pyson), can vibrate his being, along with sense and project vibrations. Most commonly, he utilizes this power in the form of concussive blasts, which he calls Vibe blasts. These are similar to iron man’s repulser blasts. They are capable of knocking back enemies, and depending on the frequency can crush objects.

      With that said, Todd can also utilize his powers to sense vibrations. He does this by releasing a wave (usually by touching the ground). This enables him to feel the vibrations around him, and know their proximity.

      Finally, Todd has a form of self-propelled flight. By vibrating particles in the air(with his hands), he generates a downward thrust that propels him into the air. Originally, Todd could only use this ability in the form of burt, such as jumping from a low to high point. However, he learns how to use this power in a continuous fashion.

      This grants Todd flight,which makes him highly maneuverable. He also learns how to hover for prolonged periods, through his hands. My apologizes for the lengthy description.

      As for weaknesses,there are a few. The first notable one is Todd’s lack of control. Todd’s body cannot voluntarily control the vibrations. This causes him to vibrate uncontrollable. The results are devastating. For starters, he unleashes powerful shockwaves that can cause severe injuries to his environment. Just as bad, Todd’s body is not immune to the backlash. Symptoms include nausea, dizziness etc.

      If left unchecked, Todd could pass out and potentially die; all the while causing mass carnage with his shockwaves. As a solution, Todd’s agency has given him specialized gauntlets. Called Pulse Gloves, these accessories regulate the vibrations within Todd’s body, and effectively channels the powers through his hands.

      With that said, the other inherent weakness lies in intensity. At full power, Todd’s vibration powers are unstable. This is evident when he fires a Vibe blast at full power and is knocked back (ironically, it gives him inspiration for flight) into a wall. Additionally, these high power attacks, while effective, can be very lethal, as if used on living things can potentially severely maim and or kill them. Todd must utilize caution when using this in front of civilians, so as not to injure them.

      And finally, the attacks also damage Todd’s gloves. To backtrack, Todd’s gloves are capable of withstanding the vibrations he puts out, given they are made from a special composite metal. However, at the high frequencies he generates, the limiters on the gloves can become damage, which in turn leaves Todd vulnerable to losing control.

      All in all, how is that? Are the weaknesses enough?

1417. # B. McKenzieon 27 May 2014 at 6:12 am

      Tommatt: “What about a man who can astral project and can walk without his eyes or a very high imagination power that can let him see without eyes?” I agree with Myna here regarding his ability to see with eyes. Unless his supernatural ability to see allows him to do things most other characters can’t, I’d recommend just giving him ordinary eyesight. (For example, perhaps he can sense supernatural elements that most other people can’t). As for astral projection, I’d recommend a more risky ability that might place him in danger (e.g. I suspect that an ability like phasing would be more interesting because there’s more potential for things to go wrong than with astral projection).

1418. # Brittanyon 28 May 2014 at 4:48 pm

      Alright so I am going to start off my own series but I wanted to basically use the young justice idea and make my own team but it would be batman’s daughter as the MC I’m just not really sure if I should give her powers and say that her mom was a super hero but idk I mean I do know that if she does has superpowers then she would have a cat that goes every where with her and when she would call it tiger it would then transform into a large black tiger and then when she called it minx (cats regular name) it would shift back into a cat now this cat would be with her all the time and it never leaves her side. she would also have the power of animal manipulation and she would be able to call upon animals to do things for her. Now if she doesn’t have powers then I would want her to be kinda like batman she would learn different fighting types and take on the name of batgirl but idk if I’m allowed to do that. If she did have powers her name would be black tiger and she would also be super flexible. I’m just not sure of what to do though and if her mom was a super hero then who would she be. I’m just not sure where to take this or what to do I would like some opinions and suggestions please!

1419. # Mynaon 28 May 2014 at 6:54 pm

      Technically, if your goal is publication, you won’t be able to write a char who is Batman’s daughter without there being trouble with DC. But for fanfiction, you’re fine. There’s already a char out called Batgirl though, so whether you write fanfic or original fiction, it might get confusing if you keep the same name. Anyway, your character should be unique! Give her her own name, make her be her own person. Don’t let her live in the shadow of her father, she can do so much more than that.

      Honestly either setup would be fine, whether her mom is a super and she has powers with animals or whether she’s just a badass normal. Which is best depends on what she needs to do in the story, I think. Animal manipulation could be really interesting, especially if it extends to bugs (like a whole swarm of roaches attacking someone? Sorry bugs are really interesting to me), which would make it more useful even in a big city.

      I think the only trouble with the animal one is that it might start seeming like the animals are fighting for her, if that’s her only means of defense. If she can’t defend herself on her own, she’s just constantly calling up other animals to do the whomping, which gives her less credit as a superhero. That said, it could also work as a conflict if she’s in a tight spot and can’t summon an animal to help…

1420. # Brittanyon 30 May 2014 at 1:32 pm

      Well it would be a fanfiction, but ya she wouldn’t just depend on the animals she would have these like gloves she wears and they have claws on them that she can fight with and stuff and she also does know how to fight, so she can defend herself she just uses her tiger and the other animals she calls upon to help her. I already know what she would look like and how her personality is and how she would act but the main reason why I was thinking about the batman thing is cause I wanna have nightwing in the story as like her love interest or something cause considering how his personality and her personality is I think they would go together well and make a cute but funny couple. Cause she’s sassy and she likes to have things her way and she’s stubborn and usually doesn’t follow the rules and the fact that nightwing follows the rules he would get on her case about it and stuff and at first they would hate eachother but eventually fall for eachother, but I want to make a whole team of superhero prodigies kinda like they did with the show young justice but they would fight more along side with the justice league. I just wanted her to be batman’s daughter cause batman’s my favorite superhero but ya. I do like the idea of the bugs though I think that, that is a really good idea and I will definitely use that at some point but I don’t know I feel like I’m missing something.

1421. # Mynaon 30 May 2014 at 4:33 pm

      That sounds like it’d work, and I like the contrast you bring up in their relationship. : ) Relationships with really striking contrasts are way more interesting than one dimensional stuff…

1422. # Paigeon 31 May 2014 at 1:32 am

      Hi guys i’m new to writing comics and all but I’d love to start my own superhero comic. I’m currently working on my main protagonist but am having trouble deciding on her superpowers and how she could obtain them. Any help would be lovely. Here’s a the basic profile for her so far.

      Name: Primrose

      Supername: Not sure yet

      Powers:
      Not sure. Increased physical prowess is a minimum though.

      Personality:
      Dynamic, Bold, Fun and Outgoing, Merciful, Determined, Generous, Fair and Open minded, Somewhat Naive, Passionate about her goals.

      Non SuperH Career:
      With her new found disgust for the justice force she has since taken to following other pursuits to help maintain a normal identity outside of her Justice work. She is currently working as an apprentice house cleaner, which, while a dull and frustrating job at times, pays the bills and puts food on the table. Though she would love to just simply be “Super Name” she knows it would not be a smart choice financially wise. Her SuperH career isn’t a payed job after all.”
      Physical stature prepowers: Primrose has always been a very strong, fit and athletic person. In her desire to beome part of the justice force she would train herself physically to the limits to make sure she would be in prime physical shape for when she herself became a Field Officer.
      Physical Description: Primrose has a strong yet graceful athletic frame. She stands just under 5″8″ in height. Her skin tone is lightly tanned. Her eyes shine a beautiul torquise blue. Her soft earthly brown hair falls just short of her waist.
      Homecity:

      Age:
      17 when she first became a superhero. She is currently 19.

      Goal/Motivation:
      She had always looked up to the justice force of her city and desired nothing more than to become a part of that very force one day. To help and protect the good from the many evil’s that plauged her city and to bring fair justice upon them.
      However upon learning of the corruption that tainted this very force her faith in the justice system was broken. Her city needed a true hero, one who would protect the innocents and deliver fair justice to the evil doers unconditionally. It was thus she resolved to bring the cause of justice in her own hands, for she could no longer trust the justice system of her city. She then took upon the guise of “superhero name” and has since become the true hero and protector of her city, proving to her citizen’s that true justice still burns untainted andstrong.

      Trait:
      When fighting she will try to keep property damage to an absolute mi nimum and will try to bait her enemies into more desoluted areas if nearby.

      Any ideas?

1423. # Tazon 06 Jun 2014 at 9:00 pm

      Hello, I was wondering if I could get some feedback/help with figuring out some of the logistics of my character.

      Essentially, he works with/transforms energy. The best way I can describe it at this point would be that he has a build up of potential energy within him that he turns into kinetic/transforms into the other types of energy (chemical, electrical, etc.) when needed. This is where I feel torn. I want to have the drawback be the conservation of energy law, where if he isn’t focused enough, or over estimates the amount of energy he needs to direct into an object, the leftover energy reacts with whatever is closest (ie, if he’s closest to a gas station, the excess energy will direct itself from whatever he’s focused on into changing the chemical energy of the gasoline into thermal energy from its explosion) so that the balance is maintained.

      But where I’m stuck at is how he 1) knows how much energy to use and 2) where he gets the energy from. He can’t just be a walking potential energy bucket. I’ve played with the idea of him getting it from the sun, and with the idea of him just absorbing it from wherever he is. Such as, if he’s in the middle of a battle, and a gun goes off, he could use any leftover energy, redirect it through himself and channel it into whatever task he wanted to complete. I’ve also played with the idea of him having ADHD, as that being a place he could draw energy from. And I don’t know if it would be better for my character to just feel when he has enough energy, or if he just had to become really good at physics to execute equations in his head during the heat of battle.

      And I know his power would have huge drawbacks. He’d have to be intensely focused on what he’s doing. The chaos of fighting would make it harder for him to focus, would possibly put his team in danger. He’d have to have great control, or be kept somewhere far enough away where he could still direct/transform energy, but could have a clearer head. Depending on where he draws his energy from, there could be limitations to that as well.

      I would really appreciate any thoughts you might have!

1424. # havokon 07 Jun 2014 at 10:36 am

      I don’t know the name for this power, all I can do is describe it :s My character has the ability to use his power through his staff.

      What draw backs could their be for this??

1425. # B. McKenzieon 07 Jun 2014 at 5:17 pm

      Havok, I don’t know what his power is, so it’s hard to say what his limitations might be.

1426. # Bobon 10 Jun 2014 at 4:32 am

      I started writing a superhero novel and I wanted to see what people thought about my powers. It going to be based around a group of fifteen year olds who become a super hero team.
      Ian Mason: He has the power to manipulate atoms. So far he can only use this to generate and manipulate fire.
      Cheryl-Lyn Pucci: She can manipulate energy into a variety of things. From making bright flashes of light to shooting energy beams. She also has the power to heal minor wounds.
      Nicholas Worley: Can generate super powerful sonic waves from his mouth as if yelling.
      Callum Johnson: Becomes stronger depending on the amount of carbohydrates he consumes.
      Sylas Williams: Can make any technology from thin air as long as it has military applications. He also has powerful telepathy but it negates his other power for a short time.

1427. # Mynaon 10 Jun 2014 at 6:54 am

      I think with both Ian and Cheryl, you’re going to have trouble limiting them.

      Atom control is definitely cool, but since atoms make up all matter in the universe, you will have to fine tune his powers a lot to figure out where his limits lie. Atomic control could give him more than just pyrokinesis–he could become a shapeshifter, manipulate the weather, bring buildings down with a thought, etc.

      Energy control also seems really hard to limit. Almost everything in the universe has potential or kinetic energy and finding the line where her abilities stop might be difficult.

      But maybe I’m just applying too much science to this…

1428. # B. McKenzieon 10 Jun 2014 at 7:15 pm

      “Callum Johnson: Becomes stronger depending on the amount of carbohydrates he consumes.”
      
      “Nicholas Worley: Can generate super powerful sonic waves from his mouth as if yelling.” By itself, I think this power isn’t terribly versatile (e.g. it’d be hard to come up with uses for it outside of combat, and even within combat, it might get monotonous because there aren’t many different ways to use it).
      
      Normally, I’d suggest adding a minor power or capability for variety (so that he has something he can do besides yelling), but in this case, I think the team is already covered when it comes to ranged combat. For example, it might be helpful to give the character powers and/or capabilities hinging on finesse?
      
      “Callum Johnson: Becomes stronger depending on the amount of carbohydrates he consumes.” I’d have to see this in context, but my initial impression is that this feels REALLY old-school (e.g. like Popeye eating spinach). I think just generic super-strength would be okay in this case — it sounds like some of the other characters have relatively complex superpowers, so it might be helpful if CJ’s are not.

      …
      
      Lastly… this isn’t a problem now, but before you submit to publishers, I’d recommend taking another look at the character names (unless they’re supposed to come across as unusual and/or strange).

1429. # Bobon 10 Jun 2014 at 11:26 pm

      Thanks foe the input. I’ll try rethinking Nick and Callum’s powers.
      “I think with both Ian and Cheryl, you’re going to have trouble limiting them.”
      That was the idea behind Ian and Cheryl. They don’t know how powerful they are yet or where their power comes from. I was thinking they would find out at the end of the book and use it to beat the villain.
      I was also wondering if anyone could help come up with good code names for the team members.

1430. # JT Schaefferon 19 Jun 2014 at 4:47 pm

      I am trying to find a weakness for a power that I call ‘ember skin’. If you have seen Iron Man 3, you have seen the basic gist of the power in the Extremis virus. I had already chosen the power (which I had never seen anywhere else) for one of my female characters.
      She is able to heat her skin to incredibly high temperatures. The result of heating her skin is a glow that flicker like a burning coal, or ember if you will. She can get hot enough to melt metal easily and can heat her lungs to ignite the air in them and breath fire. She has a problem keeping from burning her clothes in the beginning but that is fixed early by another character loaning her his dragon scale armor.
      Aside from difficulty controlling the power when she first gets it, what other weaknesses would make this character more interesting and make it hard for her to use her power?
      I had thought that maybe she could get dehydrated, her power doesn’t differentiate between friend or foe, and her emotions strongly affect the power.
      The story world is a knights-and-armor, dragons, castles, and just learning to use gun-powder (or some other form of explosive). It’s a made up world by the way.

1431. # JT Schaefferon 19 Jun 2014 at 4:59 pm

      Also, I am looking for unique uses for the ‘ember skin’ power. For instance, the character accidentally melted her parents wedding rings and will later try to form them back with her power by molding them with the heat. She also finds the glow of the ember skin is quite calming and she has had a lot of reasons to be stressed in my book, so that is helpful.
      Thanks.

1432. # Zinkaneon 19 Jun 2014 at 10:19 pm

      One weakness I immediately thought of was for her fire-breathing. If she burns the oxygen in her lungs, then that would make it, at its best, difficult to breathe.

      For alternate uses, maybe, and this is really pushing it, intangibility. According to physics, I think, when things heat up, the molecules/atoms move faster. So if she got hot enough she could theoretically become intangible. This could be used as a sort of “rage” effect. Maybe if she gets too irritated or excited (something like the Hulk if you want) she can heat up incredibly high and become nearly fire and thus intangible. Like I said, that’s really pushing it, but, hey, it’s your story and you can do what you want.

      Another idea is not really a “power” or “ability” but more of an application. If she gets to water, she can vaporize it and create like a sauna. Since this is an imaginary world, maybe the vaporized water can be lit, by the oxygen, and be like a bomb. Somehow, I think I’ve created an idea more far-fetched than the last one. But these are ideas. Just wanted to help. Hopefully these ideas do more help than harm.

      -Zinkane-

1433. # JT Schaefferon 20 Jun 2014 at 6:19 am

      Thanks Zinkane! I love the idea of the oxygen burning. I hadn’t thought that she might pass out from lack of oxygen. I will definitely use that. Maybe like a hyperventilation type thing.
      A sauna, or cover for a getaway. Sounds like a good idea to me.
      She is fire proof and heat proof because of her power so lighting herself on fire by covering herself in oil might be an idea. The fear factor would be off the charts because she would look like a demon.

1434. # SuperGameLordon 24 Jun 2014 at 5:11 am

      Hi everyone. I need to put a few limitations on my Super Speeding character. He has super speed and most attributes that come with it (speed swimming, healing factor, etc.) but usually, speed is connected to some sort of electricity so i decided to give him electrokinesis (the manipulation of electricity) too. My current limitations is that water messes with his electricity, he needs to absorb electricity regularly and his main villain van control velocity and slow him down (but only to human standards). I need a couple more things for side villains to make my fights longer and more interesting.

1435. # Yuuki991on 28 Jun 2014 at 9:25 pm

      Greetings everyone. I know I have been posting a lot. To that, I do apologize. Being that I have completed my first draft of my first story, I have been abuzz with what to do next. One possibility for the second iteration is to have the story focus on Liam Patel.

      He was Derek Masters, the main protagonist’s, best friend. In my view, he seems like a more interesting character to focus on.Though, I might revise Derek. Alas, going off the assumption I am going to utilize him I am stuck as to what ability to give him. That said, I do have two options.

      Option A: Teleportation

      Upon assuming a transformation, Liam is able to disassociate his being and enter a dimensional space called the null space. This world is an area to with no color and no sound. Everything moves in a frame by frame motion, similar to a motion reel.

      Liam can traverse and navigate the zone thanks to the third eye on his forehead during his transformation. When others see him disappear, his body flickers, similar to that of a hologram.

      Eventually, Liam discovers he can fire bursts of energy from his eye. These blasts are capable of teleporting objects and or people. Liam can control the direction to which these objects manifest.

      Alas, there are several critical weaknesses. The first one is distance. Liam can only travel maximum two miles. The basis is due to his third eye which can only perceive the immediate space he is (like a room or street section), but nothing else. Additionally, Liam can only teleport to places that he can physically see. So for instance, he cannot teleport to cities or out of confined spaces.

      The other apparent weakness lies in Liam’s third eye. If this eye is at some point damaged,
      this hinders his ability to teleport. The reason is because is third eye enables him to see through the null space. This is akin to a diver and his goggles. As such, depending on the damage, Liam can be blind when teleporting, and such end up in unwanted places, such as crashing into a wall. The final weakness deals with duration. While able to freely access the null space and able to navigate it, Liam can only spend limited time within it. This is due to the higher pressure level of the space.

      Prolonged exposure weighs on his body, and could potentially rip Liam in two.

      All in all, that is Option A.

      Option B: Force-field generation/ manipulation

      Similar to before, upon assuming a transformation Liam can project and manipulate force-field. How Liam accomplishes this is through concentration. Having a third eye in this form, Liam can visualize the shapes and trace them out, mentally. This process is instantaneous and invisible to the naked eye. This leads to materialization of said construct.

      As per the usual standards, Liam can manifest basic shapes and barriers and shields. Eventually, Liam is able to create more complex constructs, such as rods and cones. He is able to utilize a column to launch himself, and generate platforms to utilize as steps. Liam also learned how to control these constructs’ thickness. For instance, he is able to create a barrier capable of stopping bullets, but can modify the barrier to be less dense and more elastic.

      Alas, there are several weaknesses. For instance, being the barriers are mentally linked, sufficient force to them damages Liam mentally. As such, maintaining concentration on these constructs is much harder. In addition, damages to his third eye can make it difficult for Liam to visualize and generate these barriers. This weakness was even apparent in his normal form. Although able to use his abilities, the constructs are much smaller, less refined. This leads to a reduction in power, as compared to his transformed.

      All in all which ability should I go for? Thank you very much for taking the time to read this.

1436. # B. McKenzieon 29 Jun 2014 at 12:00 am

      Of these, teleportation sounds more promising, but ultimately I think the success of a story hinges much more on character development and plotting than on superpower selection.

1437. # Neilon 29 Jun 2014 at 5:03 am

      @ B. McKenzie

      I understand. Fortunately, I have a good idea as to how Liam is like. If there were two characteristics I noticed about him it was his intelligence. Being an expert on computers, Liam is capable of hacking most networks and understanding technology. With that said, his smarts also extend socially, as he’s quite outgoing( aside from being introverted which is different from being shy) and loves to talk with others and get to know people.

      How he has two big flaws. The first is his flirtatious attitude. Liam loves women. Whether they are his age(high school sixteen) or older. This can distract him and put him on the wrong foot when interacting with other members of the opposite sex. Finally, Liam’s overconfidence is another weakness. He prides himself on his mind. This results in Liam getting impatient with those of lesser intelligence. Combined with his powers, Liam will often act even with little information. This can result in him getting into situations, where he can possible underestimate a threat or situation(maybe because the individual is smarter than him). This can in turn Liam in a dangerous situation, where he could get himself or someone killed. This turn of events can also lead to self- doubt. All in all, how’s that? Should I further revise him?

1438. # Yuuki991on 30 Jun 2014 at 5:49 am

      I accidentally posted as “Neil”. That said, those are my thoughts, and I won’t double post.

1439. # Justin:Pon 13 Jul 2014 at 11:49 pm

      Hey. I’m writing a book about a teenager who is about to graduate high school so that cuts out the mess of being in school lol. He finds out he’s the kid of 2 Italian Gods. He was left on Earth on accident thus leaving him partly human and stripping him of his godly status. He discovers he has a multitude of powers. When his Goddess mother talks to him she explains why he has so much power. When he was born something went wrong so the Gods combined all they’re essence and power into as to ensure his survival. He joins a team of super heroes, which has 2 members besides him. At about the age 2 or 3 he created a “friend” and in doing so implanted all of his negative or evil type powers into him.

      This “friend” of his is in turn evil and in being evil is the arch nemesis of this teenager. Since his dark powers are with this other guy, who looks exactly like him, makes them both half as powerful as they should be. The only way to become whole again is for one of them to extract the power from the other.

      This teenager is also bisexual and is dating a guy throughout the book. I also want to turn this one book into a series. I also decided to make the male superhero a kind of slightly violent homophobe. I thought it would be better for the sake of making it a book series. The first book will be about tackling that problem and not so much about the evil twin so to speak. lol. The evil twin thing will likely be the last books villain but he’ll still show up throughout the other books. Oh and the first time he uses his new powers (each power) they will be at near full power but after that he has to train up on them to get himself back up to that point. I figure it would make his character seem or rather be a little less invincible.

      So let me know what you think and i can take criticism lol.

1440. # Damsonon 15 Jul 2014 at 12:43 am

      JustinP: I like the story. But, I think the villain needs more motivation. Being evil for the sake if being evil can be fun to write. However, if you give him more flavor it will give people a greater reason to love to hate this guy. Hope this helped.

1441. # Justin:Pon 15 Jul 2014 at 8:20 pm

      Damson
      Thanks for your imput. It really was a help. I’ll try to do my best and take your advice.

1442. # Byakuya21on 25 Jul 2014 at 9:07 pm

      Greetings everyone. I have just finished writing my first draft for a short story, which is non-superhero related, so I won’t give details. That said, I need some assistance in regards to my next tale that I am working on:

      “When the Azellians,a group of highly advanced elves, invade earth, nineteen year old Andrew Goldstein’s life takes a serious turn. The situation is made worse, when his older sister, Lisa, goes missing in New York. But when a group of freedom fighters arrive things change. In addition, Andrew has been chosen to wield an ancient power, further increasing his chances of finding his sister. Can Andrew succeed? Or will Lisa,along with humanity, falter?”

      Sorry about the long-winded summary. I need some help in regards to Andrew’s superpower. By having his soul inhabited by the ancient spirit, Ajimil, Andrew can transform into a Garuda, a half human, half eagle that exists in Hindu myth.

      His abilities are what one expects for avian superheroes. Enhanced physiology, aerial maneuverability and adaptability. But Andrew and Ajimil’s most prominent ability is light manipulation.

      The can create bright flashes, fire bolts of light and eventually learn to turn invisible. That said, I am having trouble coming up with some weaknesses.

      I have a few, but I don’t know if they are good. Although the two are bonded, when Ajimil transforms he can only draw a certain portion of energy. The reason has to deal with Mana, where Ajimil (while enhancing Andrew’s Mana), siphons from it.

      Overexertion from Ajimil can be life threatening to Andrew, as his both his body and soul cannot handle the strain. Alas, this weakness becomes mitigated, as Andrew becomes much stronger and in turn gets a better handle on his abilities.

      It is the idea of not wanting to kill Andrew that leads to the second weakness: tied lifespans. Being bounded together, whatever injures/fatigue Ajimil receives is felt by Andrew, and vice versa.

      Thus, if either one is killed, the other will follow. This is critical, considering both characters, as neither one will want to willingly put the other at risk. The other major weakness lies in Andrew’s usage of magic. Although capable of tapping into light magic in his human form, Andrew’s is much weaker. The one talent he has is invisibility, but even then it lasts for a very short time.

      Much of this stems of Andrew’s lack of mana control, which is tied with emotions. Being distant from his emotions, this is a hard topic Andrew has to tackle. All in all, how’s this? I chose a Garuda, because in my view, a lot of people haven’t really utilized hindu myth, especially this one.

      Also, I understand that for this concept to work, both characters need to be well developed. I look forward to everyone’s feedback.

1443. # CCXon 26 Jul 2014 at 7:45 pm

      Hey Byakuya21: congrats on your first draft. Anyway, here’s your feedback.

      So I like the plot summary (and considering I have to think of one for my story, I consider the fact you’ve summarized it amazing). My only question is why elves? I mean, if you’re writing about a Hindu myth, why elves? It seems a little odd. Also, how do the elves invade? Is this going to be leaning towards sci fi or fiction?

      For andrew’s weaknesses, despite the fact I think that you’ve pretty much everything down for the weakness section, if you have Andrew be a very moralized character, you could have inner struggles with Andrew and Ajimil, if Ajimil is more warrior like.

      I think you’re going good. Sorry if my stuff wasn’t useful.

1444. # Byakuya21on 27 Jul 2014 at 7:20 am

      @CCX

      Thank you for the feedback. The reason why I chose Elves is due to a few reasons. One, I enjoy the concept of an invasion of Earth, but I didn’t want to do aliens. The reason why is because in my view alien invasions are done so much, they have lost their potency.

      Though, coincidently I do acknowledge this story was inspired by tales like this, Independence Day, War of the Worlds and recently, Falling Skies. Another inspiration was Dungeons and Dragons, where I am like: what would happen if someone were to experience a Dungeon and Dragons/ Lord of the Rings adventure in our current world? I digress.

      As for how the Elves invade, they(along with Ajimil, and the remaining characters) come from a realm known as Zavira. It is a fantasy realm with advanced technology. So for instance, one of my characters, is an Orc Ranger, who relies on mana-based guns and rifles.

      It also has magic, evidenced by the Elves who use both. As for how they came to our world, being apart of the Azellian Empire, they have advanced technology. This technology includes dimensional shifting. As such, they bring an entire armada of ships (shaped like leaves), along with an enormous ship, shaped like a giant Wyvren.

      It is found out in the story the Azellians are waging war against all of Zavira in order to take it over, and that they have come to Earth (They call it Gaea) for specific reasons. As for why Ajimil and the Garudas are in the story, that is simple.

      Ajimil is the last Garuda, for in Zavira Garudas(along many other elder races) once existed. However, Garuda were wiped out by their sworn enemy the Naga(they too were wiped out). The reason was due to Ajimil, hence he was sent to Earth and sealed away as punishment.

      As for Andrew being a moralized character, I don’t see it that way. Andrew is intelligent and very dedicated, but he’s very distrustful and at times abrasive. My inspirations for his character were Artemis Fowl and Dr. Gregory House.

      Artemis Fowl, in the sense he’s a genius(specifically at computer programming), and House in the sense of his abrasive attitude and Misanthropic views. Being that Andrew had a rough past, there are few things Andrew values, namely his sister Lisa and his laptop, which he calls “Alfred”.

      I can see Andrew trying to keep some distance with Ajimil, only focusing on his main goal of rescuing his sister(he could care less about everyone else). But I can see this changing once he gets to know Ajimil, and vice versa.

      Eventually, it is found out that the freedom fighters(These being a female paladin, Leperchaun mage, Orc Ranger, and eventually an Elf spellcaster) are apart of a rebel force, The United Federation of Fey and Allied Races (UFFAR) who oppose the Azellians.

      All in all, your feedback was useful, and I thank you.

1445. # LeRizadoron 31 Jul 2014 at 2:24 am

      Hi, I need a power for my main character. It’s basically about a virus that eventually gives people powers. Hard science..realistic, very realistic. My character is very similar to Scott Summers from x-men. Strategist, smart, athletic, and charismatic. But really energetic and flirtatious when stressed. I have a ton of powers in mind and that ai have a basis for, just need another opinion. I don’t want to use a lame power that can’t get stronger…unless I should

1446. # Alaris Moonon 31 Jul 2014 at 9:13 pm

      Hi! I was hoping you could do a quick review o one of my heroes.

      Name: Carter Vasquez
      Superhero Name: Hemo
      Gender: Male
      Race: Human
      Powers: Hemomancy (blood bending)
      Appearance: Tall, lean build, Hispanic, dark brown hair, russet eyes and prominent eyebrows, always hiding in big hoodies and jeans
      Personality: loud, fond of acting annoyed and seems to enjoy yelling at people
      Superhero Personality: quiet, professional when needed and irrepressibly flirtatious, at least where his partner is concerned and very self confident.
      Superhero Outfit: sleeveless black catsuit with red accents and a hood. Red spines break through the material at the hips. Gloved armsleeves with the bottom of wrists open. Insignia is a big ‘H’ with drops of blood dripping down it.
      Other: Not a morning person, loves coffee.

1447. # Alaris Moonon 31 Jul 2014 at 9:15 pm

      Also he wears a red mask.

1448. # LeRizadoron 05 Aug 2014 at 11:09 pm

      Alarmism your character reminds me of mine. Very cool

1449. # electro is badasson 08 Aug 2014 at 5:16 am

      so guys im new to this site but i am wrighting a novel about a kid who can use some sort of earthly power to himself and others. i was thinking about tar. encasing himself and others in tar to protect himself or suffocate others. he could fly like iceman creating a icy path but mabey a new road. but is tar a good idea or should i pick something else like fabric or metal or diamonds. i would love to hear back from you soon as i can start the novel. see you soon!

1450. # Byakuya21on 13 Aug 2014 at 4:32 pm

      I have an idea for a possible hero who is a technopath. I was looking into Forge, the X-men character he has the ability to perceive what is known as mechanical energy. This enables him to understand and comprehend any technology. This is done at a subconscious level so Forge isn’t a genius, as he cannot comprehend how.

      That said, what if I had a hero have the ability to perceive energy similar to this. Taking the forms of auras and nodes of energy, this essence (which could be dubbed auto lines), these emit from electrical devices, such as phones, computers etc.

      The hero’s mind can subconsciously understand this energy. This enables him to understand devices, down to their very components and their functions and limitations. This enables him to deconstruct(telekinetically) these technologies and rebuild them, such as merging parts of a smartphone and a digital watch, or rebuild them.

      Alas, there is a second part to this ability is that the hero can do. Interface with computers and devices. By grasping at the auras and attempting to feel them, the individual can turn on and gain access to the devices. This is a style of astral projection where the character’s mind enters the computer and they see binary data. Being that this is useful, a drawback is that the character can only do this for limited periods, as the information is bombarding the mind, faster than they can comprehend.

      All in all, how is that? I am looking for some drawbacks that would make sense and in turn not make the individual overpowered.

      P.S: Sorry about this. Do you think it would be interesting if this power was given to someone who wasn’t intelligent? To restate Forge, even though he can create devices, he isn’t like Reed Richards or Tony Stark, who can design machines without their abilities. In my view, it’d be interesting, especially if the character perceived the ability as lame at first.

1451. # Raksha Killianon 13 Aug 2014 at 6:48 pm

      My heroes powers:

      Cardiac – hemomancy
      Aries/Ghoul (still on the fence) – mediumship (talking to spirits, ghosts)
      Toreador/Summoner (also on the fence) – animal control
      Mage – telekinesis, optic blasts
      Leo – can shapeshift into big cats
      Lyrebird – mimic others’ powers
      BLIND JUSTICE (I love this name) – super senses that make up for lack of eyesight. (She’s literally BLIND Justice
      Arachne- arachnid manipulation, probability manipulation, limited mind control (only works on weak minded, only works on one person at a time)
      Muscle Beast – super strength
      Jester- increased strength and stamina when angered
      Prince- eagle eyed with a sniper, can manipulate weather
      Siren- sonic scream, healing, water manipulation

1452. # Anonymouson 17 Aug 2014 at 9:42 am

      After a great war that ravaged the universe the war’s victors have settled into a time of peace. The Heroes, elite fighters who fought by the hundreds in the war, are reduced to all but a handful. Deciding to adjust to the peace, they spread out across the universe to settle down, and start families. The peace, however, is shattered when The Heroes’ second in command, Zach, is mysteriously murdered. Travis, leader of the surviving heroes, must gather his team and come out of retirement to fight his their greatest enemies. His dead comrades.

      I would appreciate it if I could get an opinion on the characters, and narrow them down a bit.

      HEROES
      Travis- Team leader, with a transmorphing ability. He dislikes the position, and is haunted by the memories of his dead friends. His second in command, Zach, is killed by a mysterious enemy, prompting him to come out of retirement. He is married to Sam, and is expecting his first son soon. He tends to value his friends over himself, prefering not to see another one of his friends suffer and die. As a result, he tends to take on enemies alone, but even he doesn’t think he can fight his revived friends.

      Sam- Travis’s wife. She has a speed power, and will not go back to fight due to her pregnancy.

      Scott- The team’s combat instructor, and newly appointed second in comand. Scott is one of the few heroes that remain active after the war (The others being Andy and Casey), hunting down remaining enemies. He has an agility and reflex power, and has lost both arms and legs in combat. Armed with cybernetic limbs, Scott is reckless and tough, and sometimes rude. He was married to Kelsey, who died in the war, and has a teenage son named Kyle, who also has a reflexive based power. Kyle is eager to help in a fight, but Scott keeps him out of the fight, hoping to keep the only family he has left alive.

      Ben- The team’s stratigest, and a bisexual hero with a waterbreathing power. Ben has low selfesteem, and doesn’t think too much of himself. He is respected by his teammates, and always pulls through for the team in a tough situation. He has a pet otter with an invisability power. He, at one point, had a girl with an obsessive crush on him, but she died during the war.

      Ron- The team’s sniper, with an accuracy power. Ron never takes things seariously, and enjoys screwing around. He is one of the older Heroes, but appears to be the youngest due to his immaturity. He rarely gets angry, but an easy way to do so is to mention his parents (who were drug addicts, and shunned him as a child. He is mentally affected by this and will fly into a fit of rage if this is mentioned.) He is married to Sarah (who stays retired to take care of her family), a Hero who can control ice, and they have a three children. A son named Trent (has a telekinesis ability), and a daughter named Ashten (has a hair manipulation ability) , and an adopted son named Parks (has a database power). All three have powers.

      Andy- The team’s sabatoge specilest. Andy is the boundry between two worlds. The living and dead. As a result, he can see, and comunicate with beings in both worlds. He died in the war, but his ability allows him to possess an android version of himself, inorder to fight. He tends to pull pranks on others, and is seen as a rude individual by his friends, dispite being a generaly kind person. He is slowly loosing his sanity, due to his power to see and communicate with the dead.

      Leo- a young man with an energy power, Leo is rash, overconfident, and stuck up. He wants to be the Hero leader, but is denied the chance to lead due to his rude personality. He thinks only for himself, but remains loyal to the Heroes, knowing they could defeat him in a fight with ease. In combat, he uses a pair of energy whips. He can also fire energy blasts fron his hands.

      Casey- a young boy, who has the ability to transform into any weapon. Being a pacifist he is kind, quiet, and alone, having been seperated from his brother during the war. He allows Andy to use him as a weapon in combat, but refuses to fight his anyone himself, and won’t allow Andy to use him as a weapon against his brother.

      Rex- A hero, covered in scars, and has the power of past duplication. Having all the injuries, with no idea how he got them, Rex finds his power a curse. He hates pretty much everyone on his team, but isn’t afraid to help them in a tough situation, as long as he covers himself first. Others see him as a shifty person, possibly an enemy, even though he isn’t, only adding to his dislike of others.

      Kayle- a Hero with the power of oger manifistation. She harbors secreat feeling for Rex, and Casey, but is unsure of who she should choose. She isn’t afraid to make a move on them, and is very perverted. She dislikes using her power because she can’t control what she does in that state, and is afraid it will cause Casey and Rex to shun her.

      Treert & Solb- Two immortal Teazonians. Treert is a hero locked in an intangible form, and Solb is his wife. Treert acts as a counselor to the heroes, sharing his infinite wisdom with the team. Solb is a motherly like figure, tending to watch out for the heroes, trying to keep them out of deadly situations.

      Dylan- A long time friend of Travis, and a normal human. Dylan was married to Holly, a female Hero, but she is murdered, and Dylan is put in critical condition trying to protect her.

      VILLANS
      Cilax- A Teazonian scientist who cloned dead heroes, altering their minds to serve him. He is out to clone all of the dead Heroes, amplifying their hate and greed, using their altered clones as pawns so he can take control over the universe.

      Adam- Travis’s closest friend, and one of the first heroes who died early into the war, Adam has the power to transform himself into a tornado. His mind altered, he now believes Travis left him to die on the battlefield, and is out for revenge. He believes it is his life goal to kill Travis, and will do anything to end his enemy’s life.

      Jason- Another close friend of Travis, Jason was always easy to anger, and has always hated Ron, who married his twin sister, Sarah. This hate now amplified, Jason is out to kill Ron, and will go through anyone to do so. He cares deeply for Sarah, and will go out of his way to see that no harm comes to her. Like his sister, he also as the ability to control, and create ice.

      Zach- Travis’s former second in command, Zach, with his mind altered, believes that Travis set him up to die, and that he is the true leader of the Heroes. With this new desire to lead, Zach commands the brainwashed Hero clones into battle against their closest friends, with no thoughts of remorse. He has the power to control air.

      Evan- Casey’s twin brother, who can move at super speeds ONLY when in direct contact with his brother. Unlike Casey, Evan is rude, heartless, and is not afraid to start a fight. He knows his brother refuses to fight him, and uses this to his advantage.

      Ashlee- Ashlee has the ability to control light, and once had an obsessive crush on Ben. But, being bisexual and unsure of himself, Ben never returned her feelings. The fact she is now fighting against Ben haunts her, as she still deeply loves him, and wants him to join her. She does show and express anger at the fact Ben never returned her feelings, and this anger has been amplified by Celix, but not enough to cause her to dislike Ben.

      Chris- A mentally unstable mind reader, Chris was the first causality of the War, and blames Sarah for not helping him when he died. Out for blood, Chris will stop at nothing to kill Sarah, and he and Jason often fight about this. Before he gets to Sarah though, he has to get through Ron.

      Sylius- Sylius died at the age of 12 during the war, but Celix’s cloning process makes his clone appear to be twice that age, but he still acts the same as he did when he was 12. Sylius is very clumsy, and awkward, and was once good friends with Ashlee and Ben. His mind altered to believe that Scott set up his death, Sylius is out to kill all in his path, but often holds the rest of his team back due to his clumsiness.

1453. # Chaseon 23 Aug 2014 at 6:20 am

      I am writing a short story about a teenager who develops super powers, but I am not sure what some original powers that I could use are. I was thinking maybe something elemental like lightning or fire. If I did that would he need a secondary power like heightened senses or enhanced reflexes? What are some challenges he could face with these powers and what would be a good super villain for someone with powers like these? Also, what are some ways he could have gained his powers?

1454. # Raksha Killianon 23 Aug 2014 at 11:16 pm

      @Chase I recently found a website that contains pretty much every superpower seen in media, its called ‘Superpower Wiki’.

1455. # Cadillacon 24 Aug 2014 at 9:52 pm

      I’ve posted on here a couple times and have just decided to have a story arc where five of my characters become a team. Because the five of them each have pretty established, individual backstories, I am mainly focusing on the perspectives and character relations within the team. Here is a quick guideline of the members:

      Terry Thompson/Alphaman — Frat boy who lost both his parents when he was four. He got the power of telekinesis through a scientific experiment with his best friend, but ultimately found out the scientist’s ulterior motives and had to kill both the scientist and best friend. Terry is cocky and kind of a douchebag, but he becomes a bit more somber after having to kill his friend.
      Wallace White/Aqualung — Marine researcher who discovers an oxygen tank that lets him breathe forever. He fixes and modifies it so that it becomes a jetpack and an infinite scuba tank. Interested in science but more so in the glory of being a superhero.
      Alex Craft/Aquilo — Son of World War One veteran and victim of a failed assassination attempt in 1957. He was put in a cryogenic freeze to save his life and when he was awakened he helped fight secret wars against the Soviet Union with his new ability to create and control ice. Alex is the heir to millions of dollars and somewhat rash/outspoken.
      Chris Brooks/Automaton — Unemployed high school graduate from the middle of Ohio who loses his single mother to a fire. He has to become a robot in order to stay alive. He is very cold and suicidal.
      Jack Barnes/Nocturne — Boxer who winds up in a match-fixing scandal in Paris that quickly becomes life or death with a French mob. He is soft spoken but aggressive, and his actions and involvements in Paris get his girlfriend killed.

1456. # Cadillacon 24 Aug 2014 at 9:57 pm

      The team dynamic is basically this:
      Terry and Chris are sort of friends because they are close in age. Alex especially hates Terry because Alex represents the past generation where Terry is the modern one. Alex feels Terry acts entitled/privileged. Alex also reawakens in the future after being frozen only to find out his girlfriend was killed in a submarine explosion. This makes Alex and Jack somewhat closer because they have that to relate to.
      Alex and Terry’s relationship starts with banter and quickly becomes hateful after Terry makes fun of Alex’s dead girlfriend, so Alex makes fun of Terry’s dead parents. Alex then sleeps with Terry to piss him off.
      Jack hates Chris because he envies his “undeserved” strength where as a boxer and human he had to train for his. Jack also states that Chris is not brave because he has no fear.
      Wallace is sort of the rubber piece as the team’s social dynamics become a 2 vs 2, and both sides want Wallace to side with them. He tries to remain neutral, but because he is sort of weak minded and just wants people to respect him, he has to choose a side.

1457. # Anonymouson 25 Aug 2014 at 7:12 am

      Interesting stories! Anyone need an artist?

1458. # Rolando Lamb Jron 30 Aug 2014 at 1:09 pm

      Wassup guys! I was wondering if you guys had any good ideas for unique/interesting abilities for a female spy? Thanx!

1459. # Oreoon 08 Sep 2014 at 7:51 am

      Hey, this site is really neat. I’ve got this character with the ability to manipulate light and make it into solid objects such as forcefields, but I’m a little stumped on what might be an appropriate weakness for her. I mean, there is of course the generic Darkness weakness, but she isn’t in a world where buildings are common, and the only place where she might have a problem with that weakness would be deep in a cave, unless it was a stormy night or something. Do you have any advice for a good weakness?

1460. # Oreoon 08 Sep 2014 at 8:06 am

      For example, her main villain has darkness powers – the ability to see when it is dark and shadow manipulation – and his weaknesses are light (akin to the vampire sunlight conundrum) and silver. Moonlight is not terribly harmful, except on the full moon, and firelight is almost as detrimental as sunlight, which can burn his skin and blind him. The magically enhanced light that the hero can create is strong enough to kill him, but he’s usually clever enough to evade her, as all superviains are. :p

1461. # Tapiron 10 Sep 2014 at 12:17 am

      @Oreo since the heroine’s powers seem more magic based why don’t you have some kind of scientific weakness like an invention that could disable her powers or maybe some kind of mineral that weakens her

1462. # snakeon 18 Sep 2014 at 6:12 am

      ok i had an idea for an awesome villian: he feeds off the life force of others and once he has destroyed them he can shapeshift into them; but there is a catch he has to be near someone to drain them and if he goes too long without draining a life force his own life force depletes.

1463. # snakeon 18 Sep 2014 at 8:10 am

      ok heres a preview of my novel:

      Chapter 1
      12 years earlier:
      “Landon, How is the project going?” asked my boss, George Logger. “We are making progress sir,” I replied, “but we still don’t know if it’s safe to be used on humans.” “YOU MEAN YOU HAVENT TESTED IT ON HUMANS YET!” “Well we can’t test it until we sure it is safe.” “ALRIGHT THEN GET IN THE TEST CHAMBER” “What, are you crazy?” “I said get in the chamber,” He ordered, holding a revolver to my head. As I walked in the chamber I heard the door lock behind me. I knew what came next as the ventilation started spewing dark green gas into the room. The second I inhaled it I screamed in agony as my turned skinned scaly and black and my fingernails grew into claws. Then everything went black. I woke up in a body bag about to be cremated in the morgue. As soon I touched the fire I couldn’t believe what was happening: I wasn’t burning! However the two people working at the morgue started aging rapidly until they eventually turned to dust. I then somehow changed into one of the workers. Once the bag had melted into ash I simply climbed out of the cremator and donned the clothes of one of the workers. After that I soon realized my powers. I drain off the life of others and as long as I have a life force I can leech off of, I’m virtually invincible and once my host is dead I morph into them. I then proceeded to Gentek for some unfinished business.

1464. # Redon 21 Sep 2014 at 8:00 am

      I wanted to know if my hero’s abilities sounded too generic (I’m writing a short story).
      He gains a more diluted version of Multiple Personality Disorder as a result of his powers, each personality has an ability and a skill
      Lincoln-A telepath who is omni-lingual
      Paxton-Super human speed and agility
      Simon-A telekinetic who has photographic memory
      Trevor-Enhanced strength and fighting skills coupled with great proficiency with any weapon

1465. # B. McKenzieon 23 Sep 2014 at 9:13 pm

      “I wanted to know if my hero’s abilities sounded too generic (I’m writing a short story).” I don’t think these powers are overly generic, but I think that Lincoln’s powers (telepathy & the ability to speak any language) would be fairly limited in utility.

1466. # Redon 24 Sep 2014 at 12:16 pm

      I realised how limited it was, I might take out the fact he’s omni-lingual because that has no use but the people my character has to go against are mostly in broken mental states, the telepath exploits this weakness in and out of battle also there are telepaths and this telepath is the only personality who can telepathy. Do you have a suggestion on how to improve/add to his skill set?

1467. # Priyash Jainon 09 Oct 2014 at 5:21 pm

      Hey guys…I am creating a superhero novel currently. Can you tell me if my heroes and villains are good enough?
      Hero: Magna-Man
      James Orlando was an ordinary Biochemistry student until one day he, being a daredevil, encountered an extraterrestrial explosion, changing his molecules forever. He began to acquire magnetic friction within his palms and fingertips. He can also see extremely far distances. Lastly, he can bend energy and energy molecules around him so he kind of has a minor version of the “force” in star wars.

      Villian: The Beam-X35
      The Beam used to be a scientist, Dr. Ronald Sly, who had everything taken away from him by a larger incorporation. He seeks revenge and in the process causes harm to the whole city. He has no natural powers, but he does have an extremely powerful weapon, known as the Beam-X35 (from where he gets his super villain name). He uses the Beam-X35 to transform into any laser-form of a weapon that he can think of. This makes it hard for Magna-Man to defeat him. Think of the Beam as an extraordinary light saber.

      Thanks for your help! Please comment!

1468. # Bob the dudeon 11 Oct 2014 at 7:28 am

      Thanks so much my story is so much better now that I know super powers. thanks.

1469. # derpersonon 14 Oct 2014 at 8:18 am

      it helped me on my story because it gave me superpower options. thanks

1470. # Thunderwulfon 15 Oct 2014 at 3:23 pm

      Sure does. What I find interesting is that a lot of these power, most of them in the Elemental Control/Manipulation category, have actually names. For instance, aerokinesis is the ability to control air, and photokinesis is the ability to control light. It fun finding out the names of the powers, even though there fictional.

1471. # ANGELLOVERon 21 Oct 2014 at 2:42 pm

      hi. im angellover. im thinking about writing a novel where its a lot like maximum ride, but I don’t want it to be like that. it has 3 main characters who can fly and have other assorted powers. im pretty new to this, what do I do?

1472. # Chrison 22 Oct 2014 at 11:27 am

      Hello,

      I am thinking about writing a super hero novel about teenagers who are brought together by a super hero who can no longer do his super duties due to an injury he suffered while trying to take down a super villain.

      I have an idea for a character whose powers are based on the emotions that he feels. His ability allows him to pass his emotions onto others. This allows him to defeat super villains easily. He can make the most ruthless super villain there is and make him feel compassion and make them become the nicest person in the world.

      However, I am having trouble coming up with a weakness for him.

      Can anyone help me here? Also, does that ability make him overpowered?

1473. # ANGELLOVERon 22 Oct 2014 at 6:03 pm

      hello, chris. I feel like that does make him a little overpowered, but I have some suggestions

      1. he can transmit feelings, not emotions, and he has to try hard to make them stay. this would work if he is an especially moody person, because it would require him to feel peaceful to transmit happy emotions, and that create a lot of internal conflict

      2. this power could be classified as telepathy, so there oculd be a limit on how much he can “hack” a persons mind at one time. if the villain were able to set up mind blocks the protagonist wouldn’t be able to pass them. or, some minds could just be weaker than others

      3. this power wears him out.

      4. if you want to make this a side ability, you could have the ability so that when he passes an emotion onto someone else, or passes too much of an emotion onto someone, he is either temporarily or permanently drained of this emotion. for example, if a certain villain is very evil, and the protagonist has to give too much happiness too this villain, the protagonist can no longer feel happiness. ever. so, that would make for a major weakness, because, I mean, nobody wants to not have any emotion, right?

      5. the villain could be able to control robots, or tech. similarly, the villan could either be a robot/machine, ar have a mind likk one. robots do not have emotions, so this would mak efor a very interesting scene.

      6. he cannot control his powers. maybe when he gets sad or something, he involuntarily passes these emotons to whoever is in the room at the time.

      hope these are useful

      angellover

1474. # ANGELLOVERon 22 Oct 2014 at 6:11 pm

      so sorry whenever I wrote protagonist in my last comment, I meant the non-villain

      soooo sorry for the confusion

1475. # Chrison 23 Oct 2014 at 2:01 pm

      @ANGELLOVER,

      Wow, thanks you gave me a lot of cool ideas. The ideas that I especially like are #1, #3, #4, #5, and #6.

      You hit it right on the nail with this character. That’s why I chose this power for him. He is a moody character and unconsciously transmits his feelings amongst his team mates, which causes a lot of trouble. He has to constantly be in a good mood in order for his team mates to do well when they are training or doing their heroic duties.

      I never thought of his ability being a sub power of telepathy, that’s pretty damn cool. I can see him mentally drained from transmitting his feelings amongst others. That could be a weakness. The side ability of passing on his emotions and temporarily or permanently losing them is pretty cool. I can see a subplot involved with that.

      Also, his nemesis could control robots or could build something that blocks my character’s telepathy-like powers. Think Magneto.

      I can see him losing control of his powers and transmitting them to his team mates. This could also be a sub plot.

      Thanks for the help.

      I’ll try to help you out in return.

      Okay, so you want to write a novel that’s like Maximum Ride, but don’t want it to be the same, right?

      Well, in order for you to do this, you need to think to yourself what would set your idea apart from Maximum Ride.

      Not only do the powers need to be different, but the plot and the characters need to be different as well. Or it will become Maximum Ride with a different title.

      I think you should work on your plot/story and then introduce your characters.

      I hope I helped a little bit.

      Good luck.

1476. # SuperGameLordon 25 Oct 2014 at 5:27 am

      AND! I forgot, all of the heroes in my books are 15-17

1477. # Hannaon 25 Oct 2014 at 6:24 am

      Hi!! I love your website, but I didnt find what I was really looking for.See, my character has two powers… the Control of Blood and Water. The name that I am thinking of is Jacqueline Rose, but her friends would call her Jack or Jackie. Anyways, what do you think a good name would be??

      ~Thanks

1478. # ANGELLOVERon 25 Oct 2014 at 8:14 am

      Thank you so much, Chris. I’m really glad that helped. this is my summary for my novel:

      One day, one a little girl wanders out of the woods. a 19 year old girl named kit finds her, threatens to take her to the cops, but Sam ((the girl) these are just filler names until I come up with better ones.) shows Kat that she can fly, so Kat decides that she can’t turn her over to the cops, and takes her in. 8 years pass, and they find 2 other girls who can fly. Then, one day, Kat takes them camping, and they encounter some Fannoys, these things made specially to hunt them down. The Fannoys can blend in with their surroundings, or have other stealth powers, so that it makes Sam and co. impossible to fight, or run away from them. They mostly are the trackers, though. The brute force comes later. Sam and co. (their names are Brittney-12 Sam- 14 and Maggie-10) get away, though Maggie has a broken arm. They head back to the tent, only to find that Kat is gone. Sam searches her laptop, and finds that she has been emailing with the Company a lot. The laptop wipes itself before she can find anymore, so they all fly off to Oregon and try to blend in. that works just fine for about 3 days, then Sam finds a mysterious stranger named Lucas. Neither of them realize the other has powers, and Lucas lets it slip that he spends most of his time running from the Fannoys, then realizes what he has done, turns into a bird, and fly’s away. Naturally, Sam flies after him, and Lucas tells her to check Maggie and Brittney and see if they have a special mark on their shoulders. She does, and they do. Sam meets Lucas back at the place where they agreed to meet, and Lucas decides to show her something. They fly for hours, until they touch down at a camp, which at first glance seems to have just normal kids, but if you look any closer, you will see that they all are “mutants” with powers. Sam is astonished, and Lucas sits down to talk to her. He explains that all these kids have powers, sometimes even 3 or 4, but none of them have memories before first using their powers. This is when Sam recounts her first memory. (Walking out of the woods, Kat, etc.) Lucas wants her to meet these two girls, Esperanza and Emma, who can see into people’s pasts. Essie and Emma look into Sam’s mind, and find something. They confer with Lucas privately, and decide to tell same 8 years ago, there was this group of scientists who thought they could make the ultimate supersoldier, yadayadayada. First they tried it on adults, and it flailed. Then they tried it on children, and it worked, but the entire facility exploded, wiping out all the scientists, and sending that mutant gene thing all over the world. The kids whose bodies were strong enough got powers. The others died. The original 8 kids that were in the room when the explosion happened have the strongest powers. The experiment was only performed on 1 of the 8 kids, though, and that kid has the potential to have every power there is.* that kid is same The other 7 kids are esperanza, emma, lucas, a boy named joseph, a girl named cass, another boy named jack, and a boy named luke, who took in lucas but then abandoned him and went to the company.

      *I don’t know if this makes her too overpowered or not

      That is all I have written so far, hope you guys like it. Please read and give me feedback! Thanks!
      -ANGELLOVER

      sorry about all the typos, stupid auto correct

1479. # ANGELLOVERon 25 Oct 2014 at 12:49 pm

      sorry, here are the characters

      Sam – 14, long, blonde hair, willing to protect her family at any cost, fierce, curious, flight

      Maggie – 10, frizzy red hair, hyper, cheery, troublemaker, flight

      Brittney – 12, wants to be older than she really is, popular, fashionalble, flight

      lucas – 14, cute, jaded, secretly gay, shapeshifting

      emma – cold, harsh, seeing into the future(somewhat)

      esperanza – Hispanic, warm, friendly, really nice, even to a fault, seeing into someones past.

      kat – desperate for powers, nice, friendly, betrays the kids for superpowers.

      those are all the characters I have so far. hope u like!

      -ANGELLOVER

1480. # ANGELLOVERon 25 Oct 2014 at 1:16 pm

      tell me if you guys get the name ANGELLOVER

      wow, supergamelord, that’s pretty ambitious! but, theyre all great ideas. can I suggest having a book from each persons perspective, and some characters get two books? the side characters feel like too much of side character-ness. I mean, you didn’t even mention them until the last paragraph!
      yes, they do seem quite overpowered, but ill bet you can make it work.
      just one last question…

      how many of you used to be/are the nerds or geeks at your school? because, I, personally have found my home planet. this website is amazing! check out the agent orange comics, too. theyre really great!
      that’s all for now

      -ANGELLOVER

1481. # Comicfighteron 01 Nov 2014 at 4:10 pm

      Holy crap I haven’t been here in a long time. Ok. My newest question is, does bone manipulation have to be internal. Can you make you bones pertrude from your body? (Not detachable e.i. Spike from Xmen) much thanks to any who answer!

1482. # B. McKenzieon 02 Nov 2014 at 2:16 am

      “My newest question is, does bone manipulation have to be internal. Can you make you bones protrude from your body?” I think that’s up to the author’s discretion. If it is purely internal, though, I think it’ll be relatively hard to come up with situations where the power is actually useful, though.

1483. # Redon 05 Nov 2014 at 2:33 pm

      Okay this is what I have from the idea I posted before:
      Teenager Wyatt Haydric finds himself being chased by a brute with super human abilities. After being offered Haven (in exchange for vague favours) by a scientific institute ran by independent military groups. Waking up a month later strange memories that seem out of place, he somehow awakens outside of the institute after an incident with the building in ruins and every other member of it gone. Finding out it’s been two months since he found a safe place in the institute he’s contacted by a mysterious person to track down all missing members of a mysterious project within the institute using his new found abilities (which he’s not even aware he has). Fast forward the plot slightly he’s faced with two options: Help restart the project that imprisoned him or bring down the very people who empowered him.
      I just want to know if there’s anything cliché about the plot or anything that should be added/taken away from it. His abilities if you haven’t seen my previous post:
      Each personality he has gives him an ability/abilities:
      Lincoln-Telepath who can use his abilities in a variety of ways including: Persuasion through planting ideas, torment through past memories (last resort, draining and can traumatise user), looking through peoples memories and of course mind reading (has a secondary power of illusions)
      Simon-Strategist, Photographic/Eidetic memory and Telekinesis
      Paxton-Super human agility and speed (Possibly super human senses to make him on par with the others)
      Trevor-Enhanced strength/durability, fighting skills and weapon proficiency
      The response I got before was the powers weren’t overly generic, so is there a way to make them even less generic?

1484. # Kenzieon 06 Nov 2014 at 5:53 pm

      I am having trouble coming up with a superhero name my hero got his powers from a space trip, they called it Mission to mars. The mission backfired and while they were 5 seconds into lift off the ship started to smoke and all the crew passed out and some died. While one crew member was in the hospital recovering he noticed something different. He had the power of Telekinesis( the power to move things around mentally), Invisibility, speed, super strength, agility/reflexes, and finally flight.

      Any one have any recommendations?

1485. # ALLIEPUFFLEon 06 Nov 2014 at 6:56 pm

      “I am having trouble coming up with a superhero name my hero got his powers from a space trip, they called it Mission to mars. The mission backfired and while they were 5 seconds into lift off the ship started to smoke and all the crew passed out and some died. While one crew member was in the hospital recovering he noticed something different. He had the power of Telekinesis( the power to move things around mentally), Invisibility, speed, super strength, agility/reflexes, and finally flight.”

      that sounds a lot like the fantastic four, and how they got their powers. I mean, no offense, but that’s almost exactly like the fantastic four. you might want to consider changing your backstory quite a bit, marvel is very aggressive about their characters. if you plan on publishing said book, you may run into some legal problems, and trust me, they are awful to deal with. you don’t want to sit in court for two months over a character in a book. but that’s just my opinion.
      as far as names go, tell us a little more about your character. what is his personality like? is he doing the whole superhero thing for money? does he want attention? after you answer these questions, youll have way better luck looking for names. hope this helped.

      -alliepuffle

1486. # Kenzieon 06 Nov 2014 at 7:36 pm

      ok maybe I will change the background of my character, I have never seen fantastic four so I didn’t know, My character has dirty blond hair, blue eyes, he is short but not too short, athletic, shy when he is not fighting crime. He is not in it for money and he doesn’t want attention, He is 16 years old, lives on a beach, loves to surf, and he is generous.
      will that be enough information or will you need more?
      thanks for telling me that I wouldn’t want to sit in court:)

      -Kenzie

1487. # Kenzieon 10 Nov 2014 at 2:06 pm

      does anyone have any ideas for me
      I have come up with one seacrest but I am not sure I want to use that one

1488. # Kuliraon 11 Nov 2014 at 4:01 am

      Can someone review my main heroes and villains?
      HEROES:
      Kardiak – Blood-bending
      Ghoul – Mediumship/Telekinesis
      Page – Animal control
      Mage – ‘Dark’ magic
      Catnip – Shapeshifts into big cats (lion, cheetah, tiger, etc)
      Seamstress – Power mimicry
      VILLAINS:
      Blind Bandit – Synaesthesia
      Cerulean Scourge – Probability manipulation
      Voltage – Electricity manipulation
      Rage – Gains strength and stamina from anger
      Prince – Weather manipulation
      Nymph – Sonic scream/Water manipulation

1489. # Fact-Or-Fictionon 11 Nov 2014 at 5:25 am

      All the powers sound cool, kulira, but we need more. Personality, goals, motivation, ect.

1490. # B. McKenzieon 11 Nov 2014 at 5:30 am

      Having 6 villains may limit time/space for character development and clutter fight scenes, especially considering that there are already 6 heroes.

1491. # Kuliraon 11 Nov 2014 at 5:55 pm

      I tried to make it so each hero would have an enemy in the story, but I can see your points.

1492. # ALLIEPUFFLEon 13 Nov 2014 at 5:14 am

      what do you guys think of my first chapter? it might need to be longer, but this is the first draft.

      I ran through the forest, feet pounding on the hard, dusty ground, heart racing as if I had run a marathon then drunk ten cups of coffee. They won’t catch me again I thought firmly to myself not this time, not tomorrow, not ever again. I was so absorbed b my thoughts that I didn’t even notice the cliffs edge, a fifty foot drop leading into a sea spotted with boulders. I skidded to a stop, my left foot brushing some loose rubble into he frigid ocean below. I looked off of the cliffs edge. I wonder if I could make the jump. Just then, a cold hand gripped my shoulder like a vice.
      “Hello, Cassie pooh. Nice seeing you again.” Said a sickly sweet voice from behind me that I recognized that voice all too well. “Fancy meeting you here”
      Does.
      Not
      Compute
      I thought they would send someone else, one of their goons, maybe. Not him.
      “D-d-dad?” I stuttered, as I turned to look up into the face of a man who had haunted my dreams ever since I was nine years old. His teeth were bared, like some sort of ferocious dog, and his eyes full of hatred for me for something I had never even done.
      “Why, yes, Cassie. You remember me!” he said, feigning cheerfulness. “How much else do you remember?” he asked me, his voice deadly quiet. “Do you remember your mother, cassie? Do you remember how you killed her?” he was screaming now.
      I-I-m sorry, daddy. I’m so, so, sorry.” My voice shook and broke as I held back tears. They were a sign of weakness. “I swear to you, nobody in this universe fells worse about it than I do.”
      “You killed the woman I loved” he roared “now I’m going to kill you!”
      “Daddy, please” I sobbed, weakness forgotten. “Please, you-” I paused. “You’re all I have left.” I whispered. For a fleeting moment I thought I saw something like remorse, sadness, even caring. But it was gone in an instant.
      “It’s a little too late for apologies.” He snarled at me, and lunged. In the few seconds that he was airborne, I thought of all the great things we has done together. Eating ice cream on the docks, holding hands. Then that day. That horrible, horrible day.
      Just as his fingers connected with my left forearm, I drew my uncovered left hand back and slammed it into his temple. He froze midair, a look of horror crossing his face. his skin turned ash gray. Then, as If he was made of dust, he crumbled and fell to the ground, now no more than a pile of ash, mixing with the dirt and brown Californian dirt. I swept up a small pile, sobbing all the while.
      “Dad” I whispered. “I’m so sorry.” I turned towards the sea, and flung my handful of ashes out onto the jagged rocks below. Then it hit me. I had killed my dad. I killed my dad! I fell to the ground, bawling. I had no one left. No one. I was an orphan. I think I probably stayed like that, curled up on my side in a fetal position for two hours, maybe more. And when all of my tears had run out, I gathered my things, shouldered my backpack, and walked off, hoping never to see that place again.

      thanks much, guys
      -alliepuffle

1493. # B. McKenzieon 14 Nov 2014 at 1:50 am

      “What do you guys think of my first chapter?… This is the first draft.” I’d recommend holding off on feedback until a draft of the manuscript is finished.

1494. # Kid Infamouson 14 Nov 2014 at 8:58 am

      I created a superhero-ish type of guy kinda like Hancock but his only ability is Immortality w/ a 44-magnum. How can a villain stop him?

1495. # Kid Infamouson 14 Nov 2014 at 9:05 am

      his name is ElyJah Winchester. and his father is Tartarus, Spirit of the Abyss. his mother is a human and he isn’t

1496. # Kid Infamouson 14 Nov 2014 at 9:33 am

      Kulira i don’t have time to write this but we can probably add our stories together, but my characters are a spin-off to the Universe. lemme introduce you to them:

      ElyJah- Young, loose cannon, Immortal, 44-Magnum

      Dominique Dreadful- friend and ally to ElyJah, Penny Dreadful’s Brother, bone manipulation

      Tartarus- Father of ElyJah, Hates Mohanna Winchester, No weapon, Almost Omnipotent

      Mohanna Winchester- Mother to Elyjah, lives in Asgard, Johlmtirr (a spear), Immortal,Flight

      Mage- Adoptive brother to ElyJah, you can give him a weapon

      Ryse Kenway, Brother to Edward Kenway, ElyJah’s real name that appears in Old memory adventures due to Coma,Immortal

      Penny Dreadful- only mentioned, presumed dead

      et,c.,et,c. you could make a story w/ me or not choise is yours

1497. # Kid Infamouson 14 Nov 2014 at 9:40 am

      except Rage to Enrage

1498. # B. McKenzieon 14 Nov 2014 at 11:23 pm

      “I created a superhero-ish type of guy kinda like Hancock but his only ability is immortality with a .44 magnum. How can a villain stop him?” If the villain is intelligent, he may be able to pull off his plan without killing the hero (e.g. Ozymandias in Watchmen). Alternately, if you’ve written in anything into the character that might potentially be exploitable to convince him to give up on the fight (e.g. is there anything he values so much that he might walk away to save?*), that could also work. That said, I think that immortality generally makes stories less interesting (especially the fight scenes or anything else that might have been dangerous otherwise).

1499. # ALLIEPUFFLEon 15 Nov 2014 at 8:15 am

      thanks b mcenzie

1500. # ALLIEPUFFLEon 15 Nov 2014 at 8:16 am

      bmac. I have no idea where I got b mcenzie from. srry

1501. # B. McKenzieon 15 Nov 2014 at 8:59 am

      Ah, it’s okay, I’ve used “B. Mac” and “B. McKenzie” interchangeably.

1502. # Kuliraon 16 Nov 2014 at 3:30 am

      Kid Infamous, thank you, but I’d have to decline. I don’t really feel comfortable putting other people’s characters into my stories.

1503. # Kuliraon 16 Nov 2014 at 3:30 am

      Or vice versa.

1504. # Kuliraon 19 Nov 2014 at 4:03 am

      I don’t have a lot of time, but I’ve edited a few of my character’s. I’ll post Kardiak’s so you can give him a proper review:

      Name: Carter Vanitaz

      Alias: Kardiak

      Age: 17

      Gender: Male

      Location: Sydney, Australia

      Power(s): Hemomancy (blood-bending), heightened senses, can make weapons out of blood, near-genius intelligence, self-healing

      Weakness: can’t think of one…

      Race: Evolved Human

      Occupation: High school student

      Personality: Loud, fond of acting annoyed, enjoys ranting, is quick to insult, and generally has very little patience with things

      Background: Carter was born into a somewhat well-off family. He was a regular kid up until he started school. Children at school liked to bully him, teasing him for his looks, as albinism isn’t a common sight. As a result, Carter became a rude, loud, disruptive kid. By the time high school rolled around, Carter had dyed his hair dark brown and had gotten contacts. He made his first friend, a boy named Samuel Chance (who is also a superhero) and was introduced to an entire group of people who eventually became his friends. His father signed him up for self-defence classes, thinking he’d need them
      Origin Story: Carter is a fourth generation mutant; he and his older brother are both “evolved humans” as their father says. Carter’s mutation revolves around blood. He can create, manipulate and heal with his own blood. His older brother, Kyle, disapproves of Carter’s constant use of his hemomancy, despite using his power quite often.

      Hobbies: Carter holds a fondness for superheroes, both real and fictional. He will be first shown wearing Batman merchandise. He likes video games and a movie, owning most of the superhero based games in existence, and owns every superhero and romcom in existence

      Family: Diane (mother, deceased), Kaden (father, alive), Kyle (older brother, alive), Melanie (cousin, alive), Nikita (cousin, alive)

1505. # Marieon 19 Nov 2014 at 6:45 pm

      Very cool, Kulira. He somewhat reminds me of Karkat Vantas from Homestuck.

1506. # Kuliraon 19 Nov 2014 at 6:48 pm

      I loosely based Carter around him, but I didn’t realise anyone would take notice.

1507. # Tahlia Jon 19 Nov 2014 at 6:50 pm

      Carter’s my boyfriends name X3

1508. # Imogen Hon 24 Nov 2014 at 11:04 pm

      Good to know, Tahlia

1509. # Edward Thatchon 25 Nov 2014 at 8:39 am

      Is giving a character who in my story recreated the Pirate Republic with superhuman abilities
      (strength and speed and durability) along with a sixth sense a good idea or no?
      just wondering

1510. # Edward Thatchon 25 Nov 2014 at 8:42 am

      I also wonder if anyone catches on to my name?

1511. # Edward Thatchon 25 Nov 2014 at 8:50 am

      he is in some cases… an evil protagonist but thats due to he being a pirate

1512. # ALLIEPUFFLEon 25 Nov 2014 at 9:03 pm

      isn’t edward thatch the guy from twilight??? ahhhhh!!
      btw, who gets my name?
      

1513. # Redon 26 Nov 2014 at 2:07 pm

      Isn’t Edward Thatch black beards real name, presumably reference to the pirates in your story?
      Also does anyone have any ideas for super speed/agility, the other protagonists in my short story seem a lot more powerful than the one with super speed (for an idea of how fast he is, I’d put him faster than enhanced humans like captain America but slower than speedsters like the flash)

1514. # Redon 26 Nov 2014 at 2:22 pm

      Sorry, I was meant to say super speed/agility sub-powers.

1515. # ALLIEPUFFLEon 27 Nov 2014 at 8:28 am

      Red-
      for superspeed and agility combined, hed make a pretty powerful character, because he could use his powers in many different ways, i.e.-

      high speed parkour(I think that’s how you spell it)
      creating large holes in the ground by running in a circle(way cooler than it sounds)
      creating a wind vortex while in the air.
      (youll see this one in x men), breaking things by vibrating hands/feet really fast.
      he could potentially wear something down by creating enough friction through his hands/feet
      (you could use this for just a really funny scene) he could rub his feet against the carpet, in turn creating electricity to shock someone or something

      character traits ideas
      he could be a bit of a kleptomaniac, or something like that, because then he would have to deal with his issues, plus they could be very useful to the team

      just some ideas, hope u like
      peace,
      alliepuffle

1516. # Redon 27 Nov 2014 at 4:36 pm

      Thanks for the ideas, I’ll definitely be using some of them!

1517. # Justinon 30 Nov 2014 at 4:19 pm

      Hi! So I have been wanting to write some sort of novel about this specific character I had in mind, however I’m just not sure of what her powers should be or her name. Please help!

      The idea of my character was a spider- themed woman(specifically the Black Widow). So far, I like the thought of her having super senses but I’m not completely sure if I want her to have the sense of danger, or strengthened five senses (sight, hear, touch, smell, and taste). I am also quite confused of what her mode of transportation should be. For her main defensive ability, I was thinking of her being able to use her mind to inflict pain on others, or being able to make enemies hallucinate pain.

      I would very much appreciate advice from more “experienced” writers, so please help!

1518. # Justinon 30 Nov 2014 at 4:34 pm

      Or, it doesn’t have to be an experienced, but just someone that has better thoughts than me cx

1519. # Redon 01 Dec 2014 at 10:12 am

      I’m no experienced writer but if I were you I’d go for enhanced 5 senses. Enhanced senses can achieve a similar effect, have a variety of other uses like spying via enhance hearing/sight. Also despite the differences your character may have, giving them danger sense and making them spider themed might get them called a spider man copy.

1520. # ALLIEPUFFLEon 01 Dec 2014 at 3:24 pm

      Justin-
      good ideas, but to me, this woman does seem like your average type of superhero. what qualities define her, put her apart from the rest? she also seems just slightly over powered. but just a little. on the enhanced senses or danger sensing, I agree with red. you don’t want her to come off as a Spiderman wannabe.

      I also don’t get the part about the inflicting pain/hallucinating it. that seems more like an offensive power than a defensive one. Spiderman is more of a agility type superhero, and his powers can be explained very easily, while as, say, jean grey from the x men, can make others feel pain and other things, her powers are simply classified as mutant. mutants’ special genes or something or other are the reason they have powers. I don’t know. all I’m saying is, pick one or the other. telekinesis-inflicting pain-mutant-not so explainable-type of powers, or Spiderman-agility-more-human-than-x men-explainable type powers. the two together don’t really mesh tpo create a belivable character. do you get it? sorry, I’m not very good at explaining. hope it helps.

      -ALLIEPUFFLE

1521. # 'Dreaon 12 Dec 2014 at 9:35 am

      I kinda need help. I’m writing a story about demi-gods, not superheroes but the concept is the same. I established earlier that when pressed with emotions and experiences, my main character has this power. Her chest gets ‘cold’ and when she breathes, it kills. I just don’t know how to develop it. Like should I do that with training, Keres (my MC) can expand her poison to other parts of her body? Or should I just have that when she’s intimate with the person she is sent to kill? (She’s Hades’ assassin) But if I do that, then I have to develop a new power for her, which I had trouble with at first. So, please help? All thoughts are appreciated.

1522. # Alpha Flighton 13 Dec 2014 at 12:15 pm

      Hey! Long time lurker, first time poster!
      B. mac: I tried to register on your site, but I never got a password?

1523. # Alpha Flighton 13 Dec 2014 at 12:47 pm

      ‘Drea: First off, I’m gonna warn you I am a HUGE Percy Jackson series one fan (I know, I know). Heroes of Olympus SUCKS. Why? Because it basically ruins the whole premise/backstory of series one. (“the greeks were the best!!! That’s why they still exist!!” Wait, no, I lied, “Romans were awesome too so they gave the gods multiple personality disorder!!! And there’s another camp that you never even heard of!!!”)

      I’m telling you this because of the following:
      1. You don’t want your story to be a Percy Jackson ripoff.
      2. Don’t mix your mythologies. (Kane Chronicles, Heroes of Olympus, and Percy Jackson are Egyptian, Roman, and Greek gods. They all claim their ancient civilization is the best, and yet they still all exist in the SAME country without realizing the other gods are there.)
      This would just annoy readers unless you managed to convince them otherwise right up front.

      Okay, now that I’m done using Percy Jackson as a warning, I’ll try to answer your question.

      “I established earlier” – I couldn’t find “earlier” so I’m just basing this off your most recent comment.

      As far as I can tell, your mc has poison/cold breath. I think limiting to her breath could be good for limiting her powers. If she had to assassinate someone in a crowded area like, say, a party, this could be harder for her as she couldn’t just brush up against her target. She’d have to and breathe on him (I’m guessing fairly up-close and personal). If you live somewhere cold enough to see your breath in the winter, you’ll notice it becomes a cloud that is only about 1 – 2 feet away from your face. If this was the case for your mc than I can see two scenes:

      1. She’s at a party and has to get close enough to her target to breathe on him WITHOUT killing other people within the 1 foot radius. She’d probably have to be close enough to kiss him, which would creep him out or make him mad if he had a girlfriend (or annoy the girlfriend)

      2. She’s in a deserted area (say, in a park) and he’s on the park bench reading a newspaper, and she has to either sit down right next to him (so he’d probably move down the bench every time she tried to sit next to him, which would be hilarious) or, she could just try to convince him to put down his newspaper, then promptly lean in and breathe on him, or pull down the pages and try to breathe on him, but he keeps flipping up the newspaper before she can kill him.

      I wouldn’t recommend extending the poison throughout her body, as that would make things too easy (she’d just have to “accidentally” brush up against someone) unless you made it impossible to turn off, in which case you could give her limitations like rogue.

1524. # ALLIEPUFFLEon 14 Dec 2014 at 3:01 pm

      nooooo! you are a percy Jackson non beliver!!!

1525. # Alpha Flighton 14 Dec 2014 at 7:44 pm

      I believe in a Percy Jackson universe where series 2 and the Kane chronicles never happened. It’s a bad habit of mine… If I don’t agree with the author, then I just edit out what they did to offend me. I’m still doing this with M day in marvel and plan to continue until marvel rights the timeline and sends out a hand written letter to me begging my forgiveness. (I’m also expecting gold leaf chocolates)

1526. # 'Dreaon 15 Dec 2014 at 9:26 am

      I like Percy Jackson and Heroes of Olympus was alright but my story isn’t like that. It’s more like a story of children of Death (all kinds of different ‘aspects’, as Rick Riordan would say, of the god of death, i.e. Hades, Hel, Pluto, etc.) and they all represent one of Death’s characteristics, i.e. vengeance, mercy, etc. I plan it out to be either a really, really long book (like 5000 pages) or a really long book series.

      Now, as for Keres, I was thinking that since she doesn’t have control over her powers or emotions, the ‘Rogue’ concept would work but since she’s going to go train to be one of Death’s assassins, it wouldn’t work. Because she’d have to learn to control her powers before being sent out to assassinate her targets.

      The poison breath is something I really don’t want to get rid of, because it’s original and I like the concept of close-up and personal kills. It just suits Keres’ personality. But sometimes, she would not be able to do an up-close and personal kill, so should I give her another power or should I just let her be a good enough fighter to take care of herself when it comes down to it. I don’t want my characters to be unrelatable and super-human. More help?

1527. # 'Dreaon 15 Dec 2014 at 12:12 pm

      And my characters are going to come from the place where the religion was, i.e. Keres- Greece, ????- Rome, ????- Germany. (Haven’t decided on character names yet, stilll really early)

1528. # Alpha Flighton 15 Dec 2014 at 9:37 pm

      Hey, ‘Drea.
      I just wanted to mention Percy Jackson to make sure it wasn’t a ripoff. It sounds like a cool idea you’ve got there.
      For the length of your book: at one end of the spectrum, you have war & peace. Only dedicated people who are good readers generally make it through books this length. Most people lose interest. at the other end, you have ANIMORPHS, which has 54 books plus miniseries, all of which take about an hour to read. Fun, quick reads? Yes. However, assembling all 54+ books is not an easy feat, so people might jump in at book 32 an think the series sucks because they have no idea what is happening. I think Harry Potter is an excellent example of what a long series should aim for. Eragon is NOT.

      I like the up close and personal aspect of her killing – it could have interesting psychological issues.

      Long range: I assume hades assassin can do more than just use her powers. Here are some suggestions for combat skills:
      Cool looking knives (one for each hand) possibly dipped in agonizing poison.
      Bow and arrows – good for long range. Can also be dipped in poison.
      Hand to hand – fairly standard.

1529. # 'Dreaon 16 Dec 2014 at 7:59 am

      Thanks, it came to me one day when I was playing Hitman: Bloodmoney and watching the Percy Jackson movies (Ugh, do NOT get me started on how bad the movies were compared to the books).

      It’s not going to be too long, there are going to be big books and at least 5-6 books. I actually really want to write something as J.K. did. Harry Potter was amazing and I strive to write something half as good as she did. I don’t want it to be books that are too long that no one reads them but I don’t want like ANIMORPHS (I only read a couple and they didn’t make sense to me) or House of Night (11 books and they all could be put into like 3 books and still be the same).

      I like the idea of psychological issues that her killing would bring. With her first two planned kills, she doesn’t feel bad or regret anything because of what they did to her. Her very first kill was a complete accident and she completely regrets it and the look of death in the person’s face haunts her. I also like how people wouldn’t be able to tell how the person was poisoned because it’s her breath and, unless she is seen being intimate with them, no one would see her giving them the poison.

      She will be trained by retired assassins of Hades, in combat, seduction, murder, and all the things she will need for her assignments. I do like the idea of knives, dipped in an antagonizing poison. She could also have a crossbow for long range kills.

1530. # Alpha Flighton 16 Dec 2014 at 7:31 pm

      Yup, the movies suck.
      ANIMORPHS, well, you have to start at book one…. And there are a few others you can’t miss, but other than that you can sorta skip around.
      Harry Potter rocks
      Btw, how does she get her powers? Is she an actual daughter of Hades or did she get her powers and then get recruited by Hades? Just curious.

1531. # Alpha Flighton 16 Dec 2014 at 7:33 pm

      Oh, also… Did you mean agonizing poison, or antagonizing poison… Cuz I’d totally want to see a poison that turned the victim into an antagonist

1532. # 'Dreaon 17 Dec 2014 at 7:40 am

      She is the actual daughter of Hades. Her powers come from being his daughter.

      Lol. I meant agonizing, stupid autocorrect on my Chromebook. That would be a funny way to create an antagonist in a story. She gives them poison or however they get it and they become a villain and try to kill her.

1533. # Redon 21 Dec 2014 at 4:40 pm

      Sorry for being a d#uche but Hades is not the god of death. Thanatos is (forgot the name of his roman equivalent). Hades is the god of the underworld (and riches/the underground).

      Also does anyone have any ideas for my character Virgil. My story is not a superhero one but the character has the power of empathy. His powers rely on seeing the other person’s eyes (doesn’t have to be direct eye contact, but he has to make some contact for a few seconds). I was trying to think of creative ways to use it (my story is post apocalyptic). So far the only other application (apart from the obvious main use) is to tell what people are thinking/planning to do through their emotions. (For example calling out a bluff when someone’s too confused/scared to act).

1534. # Yuuki221on 22 Dec 2014 at 9:26 pm

      Greetings, everyone. It has been a while. With that said, I have a new story concept and ability to go with it.

      I was thinking my main character has the ability to innately understand technology and construct devices as a result. The justification would be due to him being able to see something called Mech-lines. Short for Mechanized Leylines, these fields encase most devices(in the form of different colors and line patterns).

      The character can understand the basic and advanced functions of devices by studying these lines and reverse engineer/ construct new technology. I understand this ability is very similar to Forge from X-men, which was partly my inspiration.

      For weaknesses, I have two noteworthy ones. The first is control. The character CANNOT actively turn off this ability. Thus, his mind can get overwhelmed with the amount of information. It is this reason why he wears, specialized contact lenses that can filter out the effect(much like Cyclopes with sunglasses).

      The second drawback is much like forge, the character is not a super genius. This means he does not understand conceptually HOW his technology works. Rather, it is a byproduct of a subconscious understanding.

      Thus, he needs to reverse engineer everything. Overall, I look forward to any comments or concerns. Sorry for this post being so long.

      P.S: Given my superhero would be western themed, would it be interesting to have most of his tech, be based off what cowboys would use? Like ion revolvers, or plasma Lasso?

1535. # ComicFighteron 27 Dec 2014 at 11:28 pm

      The comments just keep growing and growing here dang! Does anyone know of a superpower that could mimic a boa constrictor snake? (Without turning into one.)

1536. # Redon 28 Dec 2014 at 5:50 pm

      ComicFighter, the only one that comes to mind is elasticity. Maybe you want to modify it slightly to be more snake like. Also are you looking for specifically a boa or someone with non venomous snake like abilities?

1537. # CCXon 30 Dec 2014 at 9:25 pm

      @Comicfighter; super strength could also be a power that would mimic a boa constrictor. In all technicality, you could have the person just squeeze the person to death. Just a suggestion.

1538. # CCXon 30 Dec 2014 at 9:30 pm

      @Red; for your character Virgil (if you still need help with it), if his power is strong enough, he could use his empathy to see what people last saw when they died. Since I don’t know what type of apocalypse your book is about (disease, aliens, etc, etc) this probably isn’t useful, but I thought I would mention it.

1539. # CCXon 30 Dec 2014 at 9:48 pm

      @Yuuki221; here are a few things I thought about as I read your post. Don’t know if it’ll help or just bug the heck out of you, but here they are;

      How come you’re having him be western theme? It’s not a criticism it’s just a question.

      Is he a powerful fighter? If he is, you can have him use more melee weapons instead of long distance weapons, such as the revolvers and lassos (which are good ideas). Again, it all depends on his ability to fight.

      How would the contacts help? In theory there is nothing that can filter out information processed by the brain, so what would they be made of that would allow that to happen? I might just be stupid about this, so if you think you’ve got a pretty solid idea for that, then you should go ahead.

      All in all, everything sounds pretty good. If you want help with the plot just type it up.

1540. # 'Dreaon 05 Jan 2015 at 6:11 am

      I know that Thantos is the actual god of Death but Hades is the god of the Underworld and controls all things that are dead, so I think that it works just fine. If I came off in any way that seems rude or disrespectful, sorry, didn’t mean to.

1541. # Redon 05 Jan 2015 at 3:02 pm

      Death abilities for children of Hades worked well in the PJO and HoO worked fine, I don’t see why it wouldn’t work but I was just pointing it out.

      @CCX that was actually quite helpful and could even help the plot development of my story. Thanks!

1542. # CCXon 06 Jan 2015 at 4:37 pm

      @ Red: glad I could be of service. Good luck!

1543. # Nitroon 07 Jan 2015 at 1:24 pm

      I like the powers but where is invisible part?

1544. # Alvin Smith Jr.on 09 Jan 2015 at 5:31 am

      Hey I had an idea about an African prince named J’karr his powers is darkness and his name is Shadow he was secretly chosen to be the next dark warrior he leaves and then comes back from to see his entire village on fire and his people getting slaughtered.then he hears his mother scream and he kicks in the door to see his mother,getting penetrated by a machete he screams and then he awakens his dark powers.he pushes out his hand and a dark circle pushes the man into the wall knocking him out then his mom and farther die in his arms then he chases down.the masked man but goons block the way the wind talks to him it says say enter shadows and then he is bathed in blackness and then the shadow is born and then he is filled with a thousand gens of dark warriors and he phases into the shadows and snap one of the guys neck is this cool he mend his arms into weapons he makes one a blade and slices one dudes head off and ripped one guy to shreds with his claw hand I tried to make him hardcoreish kind of is this ok or should I die it down eventually he meets the masked man and in the end he has to decide to either kill or capture him spoiler alert the man is his uncle and should I make it so that the people choose or should I choose and if he dose spare him he gains a new form that he can switch from even in battle btw he dose not kill all the time just that once instance and the chose other wise he just knocks them out.please reply any comment would help ps sorry to have no periods type to fast

1545. # Yuuki221on 09 Jan 2015 at 9:20 pm

      @CCX

      Greetings. My apologizes for not responding sooner. I’ve been quite busy. You raise some very good points, especially about the visual indicator. Because of that and various other reasons, I am ditching the technological bit.

      As for why cowboy themed, my main character had always had a fascination with Cowboys, particularly the west. He grew up with the genre up with it(via his mother) and always appreciated the joy, namely remembering Will Bill Hickok.

      To that, I was thinking the character instead would have forcefield manipulation instead. He do the standard forming barriers to stop objects/ people. But a unique trait is that he can shape his forcefield into small pelts and fire them from his fingertips. These would be called “force Slug”. Depending on the density(which he can alter his fields), these can knock back enemies or do similar damage to that of firearms.

      As for weaknesses, this is where I am very shaky. One obvious one is mental strain. One thing I liked about the fantastic four movies(the films overall I’m not a fan of) was Susan Storm and how when she overexerted herself she got a nose bleed. Maybe, something like that can happen.

      Also, I’m thinking that the character needs to use his hands to help concentrate and form the actual constructs. So maybe, if those hands were handcuffed or bound, they could limit his ability to form such elaborate fields. This was inspired by Dr. Strange, in that some comics depicted him needing his hands to perform magic.

      P.S: I’m also thinking for occupation, I kind of want this character to work in the VA. Maybe, he’s a counselor, helping other soldiers go through PTSD. I was inspired by Falcon in Captain America the Winter Soldier.

1546. # Alvin Smith Jr.on 09 Jan 2015 at 9:51 pm

      those are good points yes he does uses his hands so that is a great idea that I will use and the force felid and the shooting thing genius but maybe instead of force slug it can be shadow shot and his arch enemy can have metallic power aka his weakness to think on his toes on how to defeat the villain to make it more dramatic he is only a teen so what would a teen do for money I really do not want to change his power from shadow to magnetic manipulation but this is my opinion if other like the magnetic I will change it thank you for your feed back

1547. # CCXon 10 Jan 2015 at 2:04 pm

      @Yuuki221: glad to see you reply. Here’s your feedback.

      Thanks for explaining the cowboy/western idea. It makes much more sense and I think it works now, especially with your new idea of force fields. I think your idea is very good and you should proceed to use it.

      For your weaknesses you actually seem pretty solid. If you really are desperate for another weakness, you could have him only have a limited amount of five slugs he can use.

      Your idea of him being (would you mind giving me his name? Don’t mean to be pushy, but I always feel weird when calling him ‘your character’ or ‘him’) a part of the VA sounds pretty good. Then again, it all depends on your plot. Is he a veteran himself, like Falcon? What’s his personality? I’m assuming he’s empathetic considering you’re going to make him a counseler for veterans. If he isn’t a veteran, how would his powers come into play? If you don’t mind me asking, what is your plot? What do you plan to do with him?

      Sorry if none of this was useful.

1548. # CCXon 10 Jan 2015 at 2:45 pm

      @ Alvin Smith Jr.- I have no idea if you still need help, but I figured I might as well give you some feed back on your plot.

      First off, does J’karr know that he’s been chosen to be the next dark warrior? Can you explain what those are in depth? Are they avengers, Warriors, shamans?? Explain please.

      If he is awaking his powers, wouldn’t they just destroy the entire town or when he first activates then died he have a handle on them?

      What are his powers? What extent of darkness can he use?

      What was he like before? Kind, gentle? It can cery much determine how he changes if you want him to become more ‘hardcore.’

      Prehaps after the attack on his village he goes by the name Shadow.

      Is everyone in the village killed? That could give him reason to be hardcore and cold.

      Hardcore people (especially heroes) have a tendency to not let people live, so you might want to reconsider that idea a little bit. I could be wrong about that, however. If you’re really intent on having him be hardcore, the you have to stick to your guns and not let it die down. How would you feel if your entire town was killed and your parents died right in front of you? Let it sink in.

      If the man is masked, I think most people would simply take the mask off. He would find out the uncle was the one who killed his family and would thus decide accordingly.

      Can you explain the uncle’s reasoning? Is he the father or mother’s brother? If it’s the mother’s then there’s not really a reason for him to murder them. I would suggest that it is the father’s brother, as there would be more reason for him to kill (to get the throne).

      The wind talks to him. Clarification please.

      What does it mean ‘I choose or the people choose?’ Is this going to be a goosebumps or whatever book where the reader chooses the ending?

      What do you mean by new form? A new avatar? A new power? Clarification please.

      Overall, what is that your entire plot? It seems like an awful lot of stuff should happen in between.

      Lastly, I just thought I should tell you that Yuuki221′s reply wasn’t directed towards you but at me as I helped them a couple of weeks ago. I just thought I should point this out to you as it seems like you’ve taken some ideas that might not work with your story.

      Hope this helps.

1549. # CCXon 10 Jan 2015 at 2:46 pm

      @Alvim Smith Jr.- also, how fast are you typing?

1550. # CCXon 10 Jan 2015 at 2:54 pm

      Also, I meant did he have a handle on them in the third paragraph(screw spell check sometimes), very instead of cery,

1551. # Alvin Smith Jr.on 10 Jan 2015 at 5:19 pm

      do you mind contacting me so we can discuss further ideas over the phone

1552. # CCXon 11 Jan 2015 at 12:14 am

      @Alvin Smith Jr.- sorry, don’t do personal contact info. If you type it up though I’ll help best I can.

1553. # Yuuki221on 14 Jan 2015 at 10:07 pm

      @CCX

      I am terribly sorry for not posting sooner. I’ve been dealing with some personal issues
      With that said, going over my plans for this VA character I feel as if I do not have enough information to give you at this time. Though, I could use your help with a character I have been working on for a few years: Andrew Goldstein.

      Andrew’s ability is that he can transform into a Garuda: a half human, half eagle from Hindu myth. This is accomplished by being possessed by Ajimil, a spirit who is a Garuda. In this form, he has heightened phyisology, flight and light manipulation, as per the myth.

      Andrew’s weaknesses with this ability are such. The first is shared life force. Ajimil’s soul is bound to Andrew’s. Thus, if either one is injured/ killed, the other will suffer as well. This ties into shared life force. While Ajimil has master control over the Garuda form, he cannot Overexert himself. The reason why is because Ajimil’s mana is tied directly to Andrew’s own supply. Thus, doing so will injure/kill him. Finally, this leads to duration. While both can switch control between human and Garuda form, Andrew can only maintain the Garuda form for a maximum of a few hours before he reverts back.

      Overall, that is it. If you want backstories, plot and characterizations I’m more than happy to share.

1554. # CCXon 15 Jan 2015 at 10:45 pm

      @Yuuki221; if you have to deal with personal stuff, don’t worry about things on here! It’s fine; I tend to check once a day to see if anyone needs help. Anyway, I actually believe that I saw you post this idea on here at an earlier date. I was intrigued by it, but it had been posted several weeks earlier and it’s always awkward to say “hey here’s an idea” to someone from a week or 2 before. Anyway, I recall it being very well thought out. If you don’t mind, would you give me a refresher on other characters, plot, storyline, and back stories? What can I help with? Your idea is solid enough to me. Can you tell me (and/or remind me) of the plot? Thanks!

      Anyways, I hope whatever’s going on gets better. Can’t wait to hear from you.

1555. # Julion 17 Jan 2015 at 4:12 pm

      Can anyone list all hard science powers? Which means more realistic powers

1556. # Crosseon 20 Jan 2015 at 12:21 pm

      Honestly, you can explain any ability with a certain amount of science. The easiest ones I can see being made real would probably be body enhacement abilties. That is increased speed, strength, reflexes and the like. Just by increasing the amount of energy the body can produce and us at a time, you can increase each of those exponentially.

1557. # Julion 20 Jan 2015 at 3:43 pm

      Idk can’t seem to pick powers for any of my characters. I don’t want people to be carbon copies and more realistic means less powers I think..idk I just want ideas for possible reasons people get powers that are more realistic. And I suggest people to pm CriticWriterK, on wattpad, he’s an amazing writer and helped many people. Hilarious guy who also suggests using this site

1558. # CCXon 24 Jan 2015 at 3:54 pm

      @Juli: like Crosse said, anything could technically be realistic. Heck, I’ll wager that in fifty years or so they’ll find a way to grant super strength, speed, reflexes, and etc to anyone. Also, if you’re having trouble picking out powers, think about the plot. Personally, when writing fiction like this, you’ve got to be able to just let go of the concept of ‘realistic’. Unless you’re writing a mystery-crime super-powered book, I don’t think it needs to be incredibly specific.

      However, should you feel the need to have very realistic super-powers, I would advise you watch the show ‘Alphas.’ It is available on Netflix and most likely on YouTube. It features very scientific ideas, and if you really want to have realistic powers you should look there.

      Luck.

1559. # B. McKenzieon 24 Jan 2015 at 4:58 pm

      “However, should you feel the need to have very realistic super-powers, I would advise you watch the show ‘Alphas.’” I like the way they handled superpowers (especially mind control) but the characterization was fatally weak.

1560. # CCXon 25 Jan 2015 at 8:43 pm

      @B. Mckenzie: I thought it was pretty good, but to each their own I guess.

1561. # Krishna kalyanon 29 Jan 2015 at 7:24 am

      Wait for my another story

1562. # Anonymouson 05 Feb 2015 at 7:05 pm

      Hello this is my first time here but you seem very capable and I feel yout cpuld help with an idea I have.

      So me and a few friends wanted to write short stories talking about how superhuman abilities might impact a person in real life. I wanted to develop a power that was both (slightly) original and in a way reflected the type of elements I wanted to deconstruct. So my idea was the have a character who could take on the powers of any comic book character for 30 minutes.

      Now here’s the catch, any power he uses he can obtain once and never again even if there are other characters with the same power. I did this because I thought it would help add an interesting element of having the main character have to think of the best powers to use in certain situations, and also because I thought it would be more interesting to have to use all of the strange abilities that comics might have to offer instead of sticking to the same power set.

      Now here comes the part I’m having trouble with, I’m having a hard time coming up with a plot that would allow my hero to actively use his powers without winning in two seconds. This means I need a capable villain, however I am unsure if this villain should also have abilities or just be a very smart and capable normal person. Beyond that I have everything settled, from the first time he discovers his abilities (using batman’s vast intellect and skills to defend himself during an attempt to jump him and later when he manages to heal himself after being beaten within an inch of his life and stabbed), to his origin which I am thinking of making purely metafictional, as in I the god of this universe granted him these powers.

      Please help me if you can wise one.

1563. # G. Rexon 05 Feb 2015 at 7:10 pm

      Hello this is my first time here but you seem very capable and I feel yout cpuld help with an idea I have.

      So me and a few friends wanted to write short stories talking about how superhuman abilities might impact a person in real life. I wanted to develop a power that was both (slightly) original and in a way reflected the type of elements I wanted to deconstruct. So my idea was the have a character who could take on the powers of any comic book character for 30 minutes.

      Now here’s the catch, any power he uses he can obtain once and never again even if there are other characters with the same power. I did this because I thought it would help add an interesting element of having the main character have to think of the best powers to use in certain situations, and also because I thought it would be more interesting to have to use all of the strange abilities that comics might have to offer instead of sticking to the same power set.

      Now here comes the part I’m having trouble with, I’m having a hard time coming up with a plot that would allow my hero to actively use his powers without winning in two seconds. This means I need a capable villain, however I am unsure if this villain should also have abilities or just be a very smart and capable normal person. Beyond that I have everything settled, from the first time he discovers his abilities (using batman’s vast intellect and skills to defend himself during an attempt to jump him and later when he manages to heal himself after being beaten within an inch of his life and stabbed), to his origin which I am thinking of making purely metafictional, as in I the god of this universe granted him these powers.

      Please help me if you can wise one. Sorry I forgot to add a name or email

1564. # CCXon 06 Feb 2015 at 12:37 am

      @Anonymou/G.Rec (since I’m assuming you’re the same person ); welcome to superheronation! Here’s what I can help with.

      Your idea sounds great, and if you don’t mind me asking, how many friends are you working with? (I cowrite, so I’m just wondering what you guys are doing).

      Perhaps instead of having a particularly strong villian you could gave limits on the hero’s power as well. For example, say you wanted to have your hero mimic flash. You could have him either be able to run at the same speed for a shorter amount of time, or you could have him run slower for a longer amount of time, if you understand what I mean.

      Speaking of the powers, I have a question about them. Say you have your hero mimic superman. Would he only mimic one ability or all of them? If it’s all of them then you’re never going to have them use super strength, flying, heat vision, super endurence, … just saying you might want to reconsider your idea if that’s what you have in mind. Perhaps you could have him only be able to use one character instead of only using one power. Because superstregth, speed, and ensur are probably the most over used abilities and you yourself might want to use them.

      I think you could have your villan be either very capable or have really weak powers. Unless you really want your character to have a really rough time, I wouldn’t make your villian to overpowered.

      So are you using heroes from every single comic book? Like, DC, Marvel, etc? That’s just a curiosity question. What characters (to mimic) do you have in mind?

      For your plot, my thought would be, personally, to have mutants. The ‘I am the creator/God’ thing never works out. I mean, unless you’re just writing this for the hell of it. Anyway, getting back to the main point, you could have your villian work for a company that hunts down people like your hero. I mean, to be honest, really only you can make up the plot.

      Anyway, I hope what I posted help a little. If you need more help write it up and I’ll do my best. Luck.

1565. # CCXon 06 Feb 2015 at 12:37 am

      *rex. Jeez, stupid spell check.

1566. # AjofEarthon 06 Feb 2015 at 1:46 pm

      @G.Rex/CCX – Another possible consideration/modification for this hero, which might lend some flexibility to the villain, would be instead of actively deciding to obtain a superpower that he can only ever use once, he is granted a completely random superpower at the beginning of every day. Brand new, fresh start, every time. A sort of “Momento-Effect” if you will, but with superpowers.

      This could aid in the limitation of this hero because he wouldn’t be able to strategically plan to obtain power X to thwart a specific villainous effort, instead relying on quick-thinking and versatility through experience, applied to his power-of-the-day, to come out on top.

      And again, this could work to the villain’s advantage because if they can manage to keep a lid on their plans, stay off the hero’s radar, they run a much higher rate of success given that the hero can’t specifically challenge them with a hand-chosen ability.

      …my humble $0.02

      Have an awesome weekend!

1567. # G. Rexon 07 Feb 2015 at 9:32 am

      I’m working with two other friends, and I really like the idea of haVing the abilities be random I’m wondering if I go with that idea if perhaps it could be like a Ben 10/ Dial H for hero type thing where he can activate powers but never choose which one he wants. This also adds a limitation that allows me to erase the never use the same power limitation, just in case I want to use a a power again but with an interesting variation on it. I think the god thing could be taken out as well, because I’ve decided since I’m working with friends and our characters are supposed to share a universe it wouldn’t exactly for me to declare myself almighty lol. Also, I agree that maybe one power might be the best in this case, unless the powers work complimentary like wolverine’sh healing abilities and his claws. I plan on using a vast array of comics. So far the heroes I’ve thought about using are Batman, Ant-Man, Wolverine, Ice-Man, Flash, and Professor X. I might use more later but I’m not sure which.

1568. # G. Rexon 07 Feb 2015 at 9:38 am

      And opps, @AjofEarth/CCX thanks guys

1569. # drewon 09 Feb 2015 at 4:44 am

      hi guys! so, i’m starting a superhero story. i have searched back and forth to find abilities for my superhero that are related to space / cosmos / the stars / sun. i was intent on super speed at first but it’s not very flexible and very overused! i was thinking of something different and i’ve had telekineses in mind so far but the thing is, i want there to be a connection between his powers and the stars. i am honestly very confused and drawing blanks here. the dilemma is that i want my superhero to be the “good guy”, the one who’s out there saving people from burning buildings. i honestly cannot think of any abilities that connect cosmic forces to a power that can be pretty generic but flexible. any ideas?

1570. # AjofEarthon 09 Feb 2015 at 9:47 am

      @drew – Mornin’! This character sounds pretty righteous; I’ve always enjoyed the powers Cosmic heh.

      Question: Do you think you can specifically decide between “cosmic-related” and “star-related”, or rather narrow down what you intuit as being related to either category? I ask because I feel “cosmic” is pretty broad, given the amounts and types of energies, forces and elements that exist in space. It might also be a little difficult to really nail down in a single sentence what this character can do, and further raises the question of whether or not it’s intuitive that they’re on the ground, on Earth, saving a burning building. Followup question: Does having “cosmic-related” powers put them in a different league?

      But just off the top of my head, here are what I personally associate with both those categories…

      Cosmic: Manipulation of particles (eg, concentrated into concussive force blasts or perhaps alternatively the ability to phase); Manipulation of gravity (flight, “telekinetic” effect on objects, or making them super heavy, etc); Wavelength/Energy Sensitivity (ability to perceive radiation, electromagnetism, radio signals, etc); Wavelength/Energy immunity (to withstand said forces in environments like outer space, without being harmed, etc); Energy absorption (enhanced strength/durability, or perhaps redirected into environment for various effects/phenomenon, etc); possibly natural super strength

      Star: Plasma Projection (eg, shooting “starfire” (heated, gaseous, radiation) blasts from hands or body ); Wavelength/Energy immunity (to heat/radiation/ionization/ultra-violets, etc); Enhanced strength and durability (the sun is ultra-dense); Light projection; possibly flight

      Again, these are just my in-the-moment associations – any of these ideas can be modified, expanded upon, fine-tuned, broadened as needed but I hope this sort of gives a general idea of the differences/elements to consider when handling a character like the one you’re developing.

      Hope this helps! Happy Monday.

1571. # B. McKenzieon 09 Feb 2015 at 8:30 pm

      “It might also be a little difficult to really nail down in a single sentence what this character can do, and further raises the question of whether or not it’s intuitive that they’re on the ground, on Earth, saving a burning building.” Depending on character motivation and/or personality, I think this can be surmounted. For example, Green Lantern can probably destroy a planet, but he’s sort of a peacekeeper/cop and in context I think it’s believable that he sometimes does relatively pedestrian work like rescuing people from buildings. In contrast, I don’t think it’d be believable to slot someone like Dr. Manhattan into that role — he doesn’t have the personality or empathy to be generically altruistic (why would he care?). Also, DM’s powers are so godlike that a rescue which would be impressive for Spider-Man or Batman would be quite boring from Dr. Manhattan.

1572. # AjofEarthon 10 Feb 2015 at 2:04 pm

      “[Dr. Manhattan] doesn’t have the personality or empathy to be generically altruistic (why would he care?)” Good ol’ Dr. Manhattan – my favorite of the Watchmen, hands down.

      But you make a very good point in regards to Green Lantern and his role as peacekeeper/cop. That’s actually a perfect example of how big-picture abilities can be utilized for more grounded, pedestrian efforts. Dig it.

1573. # Thoidson 12 Feb 2015 at 11:47 am

      Premises: The war against the Teazonians is over. The human population is numbering less than seven thousand. Of these seven thousand, a few hundred have been exposed to the Kastron Virus, a Teazonian super virus that grants superpowers to all who are exposed to it. The new Government labels these humans as a sub-species which they dub Kastronians. The elite most Kastronians are gathered, and placed under the leadership of Travis Shaw, the Kastronian Hero who led the strike that defeated the Teazonians, and are trained to master their abilities, just incase the Teazonians rise and strike again. Little do they know, Marcus, a high ranking government official who also has powers, has gathered an army of Kastronians, and plots to use them to take over a weakened human race, and become a God.

      The number of Kastronians under Travis’s command number around thirty (I dare not list them all). I have reached the point where I figure I need to kill off a few characters, narrowing down the thirty Kastronians down to eight. Of the four characters I have below, I am planning on keeping two, and need opinions on who, and why I should keep them.

      1. Seth vs Chase: Seth and Chase joined Travis’s team for basically the same reasons. The reasons being fame, glory, and women. The two are close friends, and have been working together in the same strike team (Teams who search Earth, and clean up remaining Teazonians) ever since they arrived. The two usually stray from their hunting jobs, and end up trying to use their status as Kastronians to score with the ladies. A recurring joke is that the two will go to Seth’s home in Australia to check out the ‘white pointers’. Their constant plans of flirting with other women makes them unpopular with the female Kastronians.

      Seth is a twenty year old Australian ‘bloke’, with an elasticity power. His body has no limitations, which allows him to bend and fold himself into any shape or form, making him an effective spy. Seth is generally laid-back, and enjoys having fun, and traveling, but knows when to be serious. He knows the war with the Teazonians is not over, and pushed himself beyond his limitations in order to survive. He tends to use Australian slang when he speaks, enjoying the fact it confuses his allies. He makes sure to be close to Chase during combat, knowing Chase always has his back.

      Chase is a twenty year old man, who lived in New York prior to the war with the Teazonians. He has a laser vision ability, but lost all use of his left eye in combat with a cannibalistic Teazonian. He wears a dark-grey metal disk over his blood-shot left eye, and can only use his power with his right eye. Chase is determined to outclass the other Kastronians, however, he tends to slack off with Seth much more than he should. Chase already believes himself to be one of the best fighters Travis has under his comand, and tends to act recklessly in battle. He has survived due to skill, luck, and the fact Seth always has his back.

      2. Ashlee vs Ayane: Both Ashlee and Ayane are beautiful women who have strong feelings for Ben, a superior Kastronian, and one of Travis’s trusted commanders. The two are constantly fighting for Ben’s affection, much to his carnage. (Ben thinks of them as friends, likes them, but is on the fence with his sexuality.) The two spend time bettering their control of their powers, not wanting to be outclassed by the other. Despite being rivals, the two are dangerous when fighting together, as they have fought each other so much, they are able to coordinate, and pinpoint each other’s attacks.

      Ashlee is a gorgeous twenty one year old British woman, who can control light. She believes herself to be more superior to Ayane in combat, but their fights always end in a stalemate, so it remains unsure of who is the better fighter. She is positive her wits, brains, and charm will persuade Ben to fall for her. She has trouble identifying her flaws, and can be impatient around Ben, trying to push him to make decisions. Her body is more developed than Ayane’s, and she isn’t afraid to point it out to her rival. She is irritated by Ayane’s lewd personality, and her willingness to ‘share’ Ben, but “expect Japs to act that way”, causing her to come across as raciest.

      Ayane is a stunning woman of Japanese origin, who has a repulse power. Ayane is cunning and bull-headed, but is open, honest, and able to acknowledge her flaws, making her allies see her as a trustworthy ally. She speaks her native language, hoping it will help her keep an innocent appearance, even though she understands, and speaks, English perfectly fine. She has developed an obsessive crush on Ben, and is willing to do anything for him. Ayane is very perverted, and is not above offering threesomes to Ben. She is more than willing to ‘share’ Ben with Ashlee, even though she would much rather have him to herself. Unlike her rival, Ayane is gentle and patient with Ben, wanting him to make his choice when he is ready, but she also makes it clear her feelings for him will never change.

      There they are. Sorry this was so long. Between the pairs, who do you think I should keep, and why?

1574. # Leson 13 Feb 2015 at 2:56 pm

      Here are the lists of certain powers that I came up for my superheroes, the Vanquishers…

      #1 Green Ranger: No powers. Despite of his enormous size, he is extremely muscular, unusually very fast and agile. Has Genius-level intellect, peak physical condition, adept athlete, expert hand-to-hand combatant (he’s the master of all combat styles), master tactician/strategist, expert weapons master (wields his longsword and thorn whip as his signature weapons), expert marksman (both in firearms and in archery), and carries a huge arsenal of nature-themed weaponry and gadgetry (his man-made thorn-whip, razor leaves, pine cone grenades, plant poisons, stun spores, tanglefoot bags, and many
      others). He had a German Shepard and his pet grizzly bear, also both used seldomly as his service animals for some of his both on-duty and off-duty ‘Vanquisher’ missions.

      #2 Windman: Has many powers similar to F4′s Invisible Woman (invisibility, create invisible weapons out of thin air, and force fields), flight (can fly up to Mach-2), can create and control winds, can create and control tornadoes, skilled marksman (wields his revolver and Uzi).

      #3 Hydrowoman: Adept swimmer, superhuman strength/stamina, super durability, she can create/control water, create weapons made of water (hence her fists and swords made of water) and shoots powerful jets of water from her hands- all when she’s not underwater. However, she does not transform herself in a watery substance- instead, she does what is stated last sentence and can mentally levitate beneath the water pulse- depending on her consciousness. A ferocious hand to hand fighter, and a skilled markswoman too. Her weakness is that she can be frozen with a right temperature, making her incapable to move and fight.

      #4 Flamedraman: He’s a raging, fire-breathing, yellow-skinned man-dragon with wings made of fire (depending on his consciousness). Controls and create scorching fire, and flies too. Can even create many types of melee weapons made of fire (including the axe and sword). Has prehensile tail lit with fire, and when this flame gets brighter, means that he’s angrier, and his fire-based powers grow stronger, and when dimmer, reverse is true. He’s a ‘pint-sized’ powerhouse, an experienced hand to hand combatant, and a marksman (wields his handgun, shotgun, an M-16, and a semi-auto shotgun).

      #5 Heavy Mace: Strongest bruiser of the team. He possessed near-limitless strength, being capable of breaking mountains, lifting and using buildings as weapons, and extreme durability. When gaining his momentum, he cannot be stopped nor change
      direction. Able to leap in great distances. He could shield himself even further from injury by mentally surrounding himself with a force field. Enveloped by this field, the Mace had been seen to survive heavy explosions without any pain. His superhuman stamina enables him to survive indefinitely without food, water, or oxygen thanks to his being sustained by his divine energies alone. He’s however vulnerable to magic and some psychic attacks. He is also known to be an unusually superior hand-to-hand combatant and marksman (he wields his huge revolver).

      #6 Doomfrost: Powers granted by the ghost of St. George. Can transform entire body into hard ice, which grants him superhuman strength and stamina. Able to lower his external and internal body temperature without harm to himself, therefore radiating intense cold from his body. Able to reach -110 degrees Fahrenheit within a few seconds, and is immune to sub-zero temperatures around him. He can control and create ice, use them as weapons and shields, and shoots cone of cold from his mouth and/or his hands. His Cold Gaze forces victims to experience pain and guilt of their own misdeeds and then suffer extreme brain freeze and collapse. He also possessed a power to heal allies and sometimes protect from evil. Being a coast guard vet, he’s a skilled tactician, seaman and hand-to-hand fighter. He’s vulnerable to fire and extreme heat.

      #7 Steeler: She wears her impregnable, titanium-steel battle suit that she created. Her armor possessed many advanced types of weaponry and abilities, so as her super-fast, hi-tech motorcycle “The Steel Chopper.” Her genius-level allowed her to invent a wide range of sophisticated devices and specializing in advanced weapons and armor. She is also an experienced hand-to-hand fighter and mistress tactician. Her armor is however, susceptable to EMP attacks, shutting down her armor systems.

      #8 Charger: He’s a living power plant. He can create and control electricity, and can project up to 5 megavolts which allowed him to emit lightning. He can also spew lightning bolts from his mouth. As he feeds up electricity, his strength/stamina increases. In the downside, his excess electricity wisely causes him to go into overdrive and loses his control. He is very tall and well-built, and also has superhuman speed, agility, flexibility and reflexes. He is also has genius-level intellect, expert tactician, and skilled hand-to-hand combatant. He wields his huge trademark warhammer, the Shock Hammer.

      I think these character have these reasonable powers…

1575. # Leson 13 Feb 2015 at 8:22 pm

      Well… For #7, excuse my erring, she could improvise any technological advancements to her armor to overcome many weaknesses, as with Iron Man. For now, her “Steeler” armor, once gain possessed many advanced types of weaponry and abilities. when in armor, she could even surround herself with a force field in which enable her to withstand heavy explosions, even EMPs and plasma fire! The only weakness is sustainability to reality warping. He personal weaknesses are being rather shy, gloomy, pessimistic loner due to the motorcycle accident, and she’s just a human being inside her armor.

1576. # Anonymouson 24 Feb 2015 at 6:28 pm

      Hi can you help me on this?
      Villain: the cute younger sister is Villain!

      Villain age: 6 years old (adopted,main characters cousin bastard, but no one know that not even the Parents!)
      light brown hair, violet eyes, adorable face, really light skin, small for her age and brilliant
      Flaw:?

      the hero age:18 older sibling. dark brown hair, a dark Blue almost black eyes, Armenia skin color, a little small (run in the family) (main characters have two other older sibling, a 20 year old female) and a 23 year old(male).
      Flaw:?

      Villain Ability: if she is touching you she can create Illusion (of your worst fears, pain, joy,make you think that you lost your sight but it just a Illusion, and so on…….)

      Sub-ability’s:Biological manipulation?/Superhuman agility?/Night vision? (I don’t know yet, does she need a Sub-ability?)

      what motivate the villain: REVENGE on ALL family members!
      what does the villain want/need: too control, set her self up as Queen, destroy all that pose a threat to her.
      how long have the villain been planing this:(I don’t know)

      Hero Ability:Animal mimicry-Ability to take on the abilities of certain animals
      sub-ability:Invulnerability-Ability to be immune to one or more forms of physical, mental, and spiritual damage and influence. (to sister power?)(I like this one.)

1577. # SuperGameLordon 28 Feb 2015 at 4:53 am

      To Anonymous: I don’t suggest making the villain six years old but im assuming you meant 16. Sounds good, you should think stuff up though, youre leaving a lot of blanks. What did her family do to make her want to become…queen of the world? I suggest not giving the villain a subpower but instead extend her range from just touching. Or if it is just touching, maybe you can get/use a machine to increase the range which would help with the take over.

      Do NOT make your hero immune to the villains powers. Too cliché. If the hero is immune, it’d be so much easier for her to beat the villain, why would there even be conflict in the first place? I suggest removing the invulnerability and allow her to mimic the invulnerability from another animal when need be. And maybe if you DO want to make her immune to her sisters powers, maybe make her still experience the illusiions but she automatically knows that she is in an illusion and needs to find the “weakness” of the illusion to break free.

      Maybe give the villain a “if you die in the illusion, you die in real life” type of thing.

1578. # The awesome oneon 15 Mar 2015 at 9:01 am

      I’m trying to make a character who can control luck, is there any way to actually make that interesting? Because she could just make the villain have really bad luck and trip in the middle of battle. Help please!

1579. # Leson 15 Mar 2015 at 12:14 pm

      I am working on my villain, Dire (Vanquishers’ arch-villain), and trying to guess of his powers he had. I want him to be the most powerful, dangerous, deadliest, and craftiest possible so that he could beat the ‘Quishers more easily.

      Kurtis Milton Cromwell was either: nearly killed during the explosion from the machine which he’d built as part of his experiment, losing his left arm, crushing his teeth, and scarring his left eye, or from the exploding proximity mine during battle– Its based on my dreaming.

      Kromwell survived the explosion, and his body was immediately sent to the secret military lab. His body underwent a cybernetic, arcane, and genetic augmentations to create a powerful human weapon. He has a near-indestructible titanium-steel mechanical left arm, red cybernetic left eye, and his teeth made of near-indestructible titanium steel.

      He’s much bigger and stronger in musculature as his strength and durability has sharply increased due to both genetic and cybernetic augmentation. His already genius intellect increased as well.

      Talking of his mechanical left arm and in addition of superhuman strength, I am not really certain of coming up with kinds of weaponry and gadgetry his mechanical arm have. Maybe: fire fist, ice fist, lightning fist… Anyway any suggestions of other supers of his cyborg arm?

      Kromwell is the master of the dark arts and has some powers akin to Dr. Doom and/or Shao Kahn. He’s also a formidable warrior with expert swordsmanship, unarmed combat, tactician/strategist, and marksmanship (due to his military experience).

1580. # The awesome oneon 18 Mar 2015 at 4:58 pm

      Plz can someone help me!!!!!!!!!!!! I have already done multiple other heroes and villains, and have used practically every power there is. (P.S. this site has helped me in a lot of ways.) If someone could help me it would be great. Thx in advance!

1581. # ekimmakon 24 Mar 2015 at 2:38 pm

      I actually wrote a character like that once. He was just a part of a team, and to keep it from become low scale reality warping, I put up a lot of psychological barriers in his powers, rather than straight limitations.

      He was superstitious, so if he thought he had done something to cause bad luck, his powers would fulfil that belief and cause him bad luck.

      He was greedy. A lot of his little side plots would involve some sort of morally questionable get-rich quick scheme, including underage gambling.

      He was cowardly. Although he did have some talent with a sword, most of the time, he’d be happy to stay far away from any sort of fight, so he’d have to be dragged along to any sort of mission, and would simply duck and cower in any sort of fight.

1582. # The awesome oneon 03 Apr 2015 at 3:39 pm

      Thank u so much ekimmak! Your comment on more personality barriers rather than power barriers really helps! Thx again!

1583. # WriterSmurfon 06 Apr 2015 at 12:39 pm

      @B.Mac:
      Hey I was wondering if a character with enhanced durability (not invulnerability) and light manipulation would be OP. Consider that this character can use light to burn, blind, create illusions, fly, create lasers and possibly become sentient light.

1584. # Anonymouson 12 Apr 2015 at 1:32 am

      Looking for feedback on the characters powers, storyline, and generally people’s overall opinion.

      The Kastron Virus is the greatest invention, created by Teazonian scientists. The only thing they need now are test subjects. Believing the Kastron Virus will grant them infinite knowledge the scientists at The Facility kidnap thousands of beings, and test the Virus on them all. Unfortunately for most, the survival ratio is less than eight percent, and only twenty eight survive the testing process. Those that survive develop powers. The story revolves around two groups; Liten, a Teazonian investigator who is eager to know what is happening in The Facility and Treert, a young Teazonian who was kidnapped and tested on.

      Tajon/Toxic- A large, green-skinned, snake-like Redda. Tajon’s exposure to the Kastron Virus gives him acidic saliva. Like most Reddas, Toxic is cold and vicious, but has a strong sense of justice. He is easily the strongest of the beings trapped in The Facility, and quickly becomes respected as a leader. He is one of the three to survive the purge on the facility, and joins Liten’s Resistance, where his power earns him the nickname ‘Toxic’.

      Kyrell- A shifty thug, Kyrell has little to no respect for the Reddas, and sees the Teazonian race as the superior race. He sees his power to control machinery as a sign.
      A sign that he isn’t destined to be a simple thug. He is a God. In order for this to become a reality, he first needs to escape the facility, and allies with Tajon, who is the strongest being in The Facility. He and Treert form a close bond, but he doubts it will last, dispite how much he wants it to. Kyrell orders the purge on The Facility, and is one of the three to survive, later becoming the leader of the Teazonian Empire.

      Treert- A young factory worker, Treert was kidnapped and tested on. The power he gained from the Kastron Virus caused his body to turn completely intangible, giving him the appearance of a ghost. To his dismay, the effect can not be reversed. He stays at the facility in hopes the scientists will find some way to reverse the Virus’s effect. As he learns to cope with his new body, he quickly allies himself with Tajon and Kyrell. He and Kyrell form a close bond, but Kyrell seams to be too treacherous and shifty for Treert’s taste. He survives the purge on The Facility, and joins Liten’s Resistance.

      Edsly- A fast talking Teasonian business man, Edsly is make a decent profit selling anything he pulls out of the trash. He is deathly afraid of Reddas, and will go out of his way to avoid them. He gains the power of levitation from the Kastron Virus, and if put face to face with his fears when he joins with Tajon and Conring (two Reddas).

      Conring- A midget Redda with golden skin and fangs, Conring was once a fierce rival to Tajon on the Redda’s home world. Here, however, things are different, and Conring mutst ally himself with his enemy in order to survive. The Kastron Virus grants him a fire breathing power, which he uses to scare those who fear him (which is almost everyone). He HATES Edsly, and tries to eat him multiple times, but is always stopped by Tajon, who is stronger than Conring. In terms of speed, however, Conring has Tajon beat.

      Liten- An investigator trying to find out what is causing the recent disappearances. Liten is barley getting by in life, and is trying to find his purpose. It isn’t until he is hired by Belic and Solb that he finds his purpose. Expose the truth of The Facility, and free the kidnapped beings. He later becomes the leader of a resistance faction determined to kill Kyrell.

      Belic- Treert’s older brother, Belic is very loyal to his heritage, and follows Teazonian culture word by word. He desperately wants to see his brother again, but has no idea what he is getting involved in. He is minupliated by Kyrell, and becomes one of his commanders in the Teazonian Empire.

      Solb- Treert’s overly protective fiancée. Solb is always fretting over Treert’s safety, and now that he has gone missing is driving herself crazy looking for him. As per Teazonian culture, her marriage to Treert is unofficial until they produce an offspring. As much as she wants to help Liten uncover the truth of The Facility, she is much more concerned with finding Treert. Little does she know that he is now a literal ghost of his former self. She joins Liten’s Resistance, but Treert avoids her, unsure of how she will take his new appearance.

      Barlam- A Teazonian scientist who disagrees with the methods used by his fellow scientists. He has been employed at The Facility for nearly five hundred years, (not too long considering the fact that Teazonians are immortal), and is more than willing to help the Kastron test subjects live more comfortably in The Facility. He is the only scientist to survive the purge on the facility, and joins Liten’s Resistance, where he serves an engineer.

      What do you think of the powers? Story line? Do you think I should change anything with the powers or story line? Any form of feedback would be great! Thanks!

1585. # B. McKenzieon 12 Apr 2015 at 7:35 am

      WriterSmurf, I think the question is whether the character is hard to challenge (not whether he’s “overpowered”). I don’t know anything about the context of the story or the plot, so I don’t know how easy it would be to challenge him.
      
      I do anticipate, though, that the abilities to fly and create illusions will pretty much force you to use superpowered enemies in every fight, which I feel limits a writer’s options compared to a character that could have an interesting fight scene with non-powered enemies (e.g. Batman or Spider-Man).
      
      If the character can fly and become light (presumably moving at the speed of light), I think that would limit your options for interesting noncombat action scenes (e.g. no chase scenes, no escape scenes, not much in the way of rescuing civilians, etc). If you were thinking about making him as fast as the speed of light, I think slowing him down a lot would give you more options.

1586. # thedarkerknighton 16 Apr 2015 at 2:10 am

      Hi! First time posting, and I wanted to make sure that people were actually still commenting on these. Anyway, I’m writing a superhero story and I wanted to make sure the “rules” of powers I’ve made make sense. (Be warned, this’ll turn into a mini-essay).

      The main character (still working on names, but temporary one is Forte) can manipulate sound – sort of. See, I made this character before the rules were in place and so far the only rule is “Powers only work on living things.” Sound? Not living. So I’ve got to figure out a way that it makes sense for him to control/create loud sounds. His secondary powers make more sense – things like perfect pitch, echolocation, sound-sponging (sort of?), etc.

      Prophet is a tricky one. See, ever since I read Worm, I’ve had a thing about precogs being OP. So Prophet isn’t technically a precog. His power is seeing (and then mentally organizing) cause-and-effects of every action that people take. Basically, he can see every possible outcome of every event. How is it different from the over-powered problems posed by Precognition? Well, since this is millions or billions of possible events, he 1) gets huge headaches from using it, 2) he can only organize or see a week at max (ie, in the end of the story) and typically less than a day, and 3) he uses it irresponsibly – “if I skip school today, can I keep a good grade?” etc. 4) He also constantly switches sides. Enough of a power down?

      Cat is maybe my favorite. She’s got super-balance, heightened reflexes (can’t dodge bullets, but she could catch a throwing knife, etc), mini-danger sense (enough to catch herself from falling and add to her reflexes), heightened senses, and stamina. And then there’s the one I have trouble with. Remember the “living things only” rule? Well, she can make herself virtually weightless – to other living things. She’s used it to walk and people’s heads, etc. but she can’t render herself weightless to non-living things, walking on water, etc.

      Gonna rush throw because this comment is a monster. Dancer, another one I like, can move parts of her body super fast. I thought this was a toned-down twist on the speedster. Basically, it lets her punch and kick faster than a bullet, but she can’t actually run that much faster. She makes up for this by actually carrying around a compact scooter. Secondary power includes spinning fast enough to float a bit off the ground. Yeah, IDK about that one.

      Skipping most of my villains. Hunter (real and code name) is basically relentless and self-sufficient. Doesn’t need to sleep, eat, drink, sweat, relieve himself, blink, blow his nose, exercise, etc. He may not even need to breathe. Other than that, he’s vulnerable to everything a human is. Kinda torn on this one. Does it even make sense?

      The next is my favorite – really love twists on teleportation.
      Cain is the older twin. The twins basically have the two ends of teleporting. Cain can make things (living things, remember) disappear via skin contact. Romulus, younger twin, can make them reappear in a five foot radius. Besides obvious setback of not being able to TP weapons or clothes, they’re bald. They (read: the author) have to get creative with this. For instance, once Cain vanishes them, Romulus can teleport in lions, bears, plagues (sort of…), jellyfish, etc. Cain is pretty limited, can only make his enemies disappear. If the bros are in contact, they can teleport naturally. Way the power works is Cain turns the living thing into particles that are faster than light and Romulus reforms them anywhere he is. Weakness is, the amount of things they can “dematerialize” is about the size of a school bus (note a schoolbus can hold 50~60 people). Thoughts?

1587. # Comicfighteron 18 Apr 2015 at 10:20 pm

      Whew. Took me half a minute to scroll to the bottom! Thanks to all of you for the power advice. It has been taken into account.

1588. # 'Dreaon 11 May 2015 at 11:32 am

      Hey, I got help for my story before and, since I’ve run into a stump, I was hoping to get some more help again.

      Let me give you a little update for anyone who doesn’t want to go and find my earlier post:

      Keres is a demi-god (Not a PJO spin off) whose father is Lord Hades. Her parents are now dead, her mother died of sickness and her father was murdered (by Keres). She has poison breath. Now, her poison breath works like this, her chest grows ‘cold’ and she breathes out poison. She uses her own emotions to activate it. Now, her father, before his death, sold her to a disgusting man who wanted her only for a breeder. She was a nuisance to him because she was not of his blood. This man, Pelagius, used her for that and she killed him for what he did to her. Then she got a vision from her father about his temple, the Necromanteion, and headed there. Now, she is living there with her sisters (half-sisters… whatever). The story will be expanded to include other religion’s versions of Hades. (Roman, Norse, Gaelic, etc)

      So:
      1. The Savages (Hade’s assassins) were awaiting the Oracle, which I have given that to Keres and she has foretold the demise of the Savages but I don’t like her becoming a higher powered being in my story, so should I change it or should I make her stop having visions once her ‘condition’ passes?

      2. Her ‘condition’ I mentioned is that she is pregnant. Pelagius managed to steal her innocence before she could kill him (Everything is PG 13, I ended the pragraph with the hint of what was to happen) and I am wondering what to do with the baby. Keres is unknowing of her pregnancy but I know that she is going to keep it. Should I make the baby special, like it’s mother, or a normal mortal?

      3. As for other characters, I have developed Iveska, the ‘Headmistress’ if you will of the Temple, Aziza, the African sister of Keres, Sasha, the only male who lives with the Savages in the Temple and future love interest of Keres, Evangelina, the psychic and aura-reading sister of Keres,and Juliana, Keres’ sister whose power I have not developed. Is this too many characters? The story is in Keres’ POV.

      Thanks for all the help.
      -’Drea

1589. # Anonymouson 14 May 2015 at 9:21 am

      Awesome but why do u have to the sign stupid thing to watch a YouTube channel
      Do u know that children use this for there homework?

1590. # B. McKenzieon 14 May 2015 at 9:22 pm

      “Awesome but why do u have to the sign stupid thing to watch a YouTube channel
      Do u know that children use this for there homework?” I do not understand. Could you please clarify?

1591. # Crosseon 15 May 2015 at 6:17 pm

      Do these abilities, added together, seem fairly versatile (and not like a grab bag)?

      Background: [Temporary] Abilities come from use of human tested, non-FDA approved miracle drug, PANACEA. Seems to have slightly different outcome if injected into brain stem.

      Speed – Top run speed is ~28mph for a normal person

      Durability – Enhanced stamina (runs out of energy more slowly) and tougher body composition (takes more bullets or hits to maim or kill).

      Agility/reflexes – Can execute complex movements faster than most people, though coordination plays a large role…and is not changed by PANACEA

      Healing/regeneration – Can regrow limbs over an extended period of time, though most limbs or organs regrown this way will need conditioning, as they will be heavily atrophied. General wounds heal much faster than a regular persons, but do not heal completely. Use for medical emergencies to allow for further operation at a legitimate hospital.

      Super-Senses – Allows users to “zoom” their vision in and out a certain amount. Their sense of sound and scent also see significant gains, though there is little increase in touch sensitivity. For most people, this is difficult to control at first. Even when mastered, many subjects choose not to use it.

      Psychokinesis – Still unsure just how powerful this can be. For even minimal display of this ability, massive doses of PANACEA must be taken, and those are usually fatal. This has been bypassed in one experiment, where an individual was injected in the brain stem, and began showing signs of extreme internal brain activity. It is possible that either usage could cause high scale psychokinesis.

1592. # Edufeyon 15 May 2015 at 10:11 pm

      I wanted to get some ideas/opinions, on a new hero I’m making. His powers were going to be symbiote based, along with the outfit. I was thinking something like Venom, but maybe a bit less, spider-like. He’s mostly acrobatic, and agile, while not very violent, and results to actually fighting an enemy last. I was wondering if any of these ideas are good, or what specific abilities I could make him use with the symbiote since that will be the base for his power. Another idea I had about the symbiote, was maybe it had a mind of its own, and talked to the hero, telepathically, while, unlike other symbiotes like Venom or Carnage, he could maybe be comedic, and sarcastic.

1593. # Aushaudon 16 May 2015 at 2:37 pm

      Crosse,

      Your descriptions of the augmentations given by PANACEA seem like they are well balanced and could lend themselves to varied and interesting scenes. The characters would have enhanced capabilities but could still be challenged in ways that would be fun to write and not contrived (i.e. unarmed vs. armed adversaries, chase scenes, etc). The addition of things like super senses and psychokinesis is also a nice way to diversify your casts’ skill sets; even varying degrees of durability and reflexes can help differentiate individual characters and their specialties.

      Are you planning a comic book or a novel?

      Who are your protagonists? Are they a team?

      Who/What are your antagonists?

      What’s the setting like? What genre are you writing?

      What are the effects of PANACEA on your stories world?

1594. # Crosseon 16 May 2015 at 9:41 pm

      Unfortunately, I do not have my full set of notes on me…but I can make do.

      1.) The specific instance here is actually for a video game. But, the game does take place in (and is part of the back-story for) the a book series I’d very much like to actually write at some point.

      2.)Eventually (not in the game) an organization is formed, but they are more or less just trying to be free from the government and people that hate them. Why do they hate them, you ask? Well, the majority of people get their abilities from their body’s unique way it absorbs anti-matter radiation (very long story behind that one). They emit it passively, and the amount increases as they use abilities. So people are absolutely terrified of them, due to their knack of causing horrible, radiation affiliated diseases.

      In the game though, there are none of those people. It takes place in the 70′s, before the “Rads” were exposed. However, there was still the issue of this strange, everlasting form of radiation. They contained it inside the Mississippi river (It is dammed up on all sides, little to no water flowing through it. Essentially, a “terrorist organization” used a bomb that they knew little about in Louisville, KY. Radiation levels after detonation were astronomical, and the USGOV realized the hazard of having a major waterway almost completely irradiated.)

      Now…characters…

      Damien is the protagonist of the story. As a child, and throughout his life, he has never really been able to exert much command or control over people or situations, despite his being the eldest child. He also got screwed over a lot when he tried to control things, but people didn’t know what he was asking or how to do it. This is because he cannot explain things in a very concise or intelligible way. Now, at home and with friends, he tries to control and micromanage as much as possible, and generally comes off as abrasive. That is one reason that his girlfriend of five years recently left him. He can keep a cool head if he is only worried about himself, but others being involved in situations leaves him too much to worry about, and he can get stressed fairly easily. Still, under all this, he retains a large amount of empathy that lends to his surprising amount patience (unless there is a limited time to do things). He comes to care for people rather easily, and can usually see things from other peoples point of view. He has a knack for biochemistry, but joined the military instead of following in his fathers footsteps as a renowned biochemist. He is in the communications wing of his unit (he’s in the military) now, but was previously in the infantry.

      Patricia (just call her Trish, or Pat if you want to piss her off) is a loyal, strong willed woman who is not afraid to open her mouth and make her opinion known. She doesn’t always think about things before she does them, but always faces the consequences as honorably as possible. She is incredibly intuitive, but also easily distracted by things she finds interesting…or cute. She tries to take an analytical approach to most things, and usually thinks that she’s right. When she’s wrong, she can get sad or angry, don’t find out which one. She had a brief affair with one of Damien’s close friends. However, upon learning that the man was married, she informed the wife of his infidelity. The man fought it, but he and his wife got a divorce soon afterwards. Trish continued teaching on base, and actually ended up becoming a friend to Maria, the scorned wife. Trish enjoys her job teaching as she loves and hopes to have a child in the future, but has never found the right person to stay with. She spends a lot of her time reading and going out with Maria and their friends, and also keeps her blog up to date.

      Alexander, Damien’s brother, followed the near exact opposite path of his brother. He is trusting and open, and completely wiling to allow for people to go about their work how they feel it would best further productivity. In his personal life, this has caused him a bit more trouble. He has generally allowed people to walk over him, though he loses his temper if he notices it. Oh yea…he has a mean streak. In general though, he keeps himself in check. He usually feels that he is right, even when you can prove that he isn’t. And when he gets proven wrong, he usually switches his stance and uses your evidence to support his arguments in the future. He i very observant, and can pick up on physical and psychological weakness rather easily. Though he is far less capable at bio-chemistry and bio-mech, he pursued the field to carry on his fathers legacy. He didn’t do it for his father, as he could care less for the man. He wanted to have something for his and Damien’s sister whenever she grew up. Their father never had time to set aside for them, so Alex has mostly taken over her caretaker, and loves Cordelia and Damien deeply. He is also He generally shows himself to be a happy man, and he may well be, somewhere. He works hard, and is willing to do anything to keep his family and friends safe. He is currently working with the pharma company on the (Neither of them know, it’s a triple blind test) same base as Damien. The company is field testing PANACEA on military members with the governments approval, as the FDA had yet to approve what appeared to be the biggest breakthrough in medical science.

      3.)There are plenty more, but that is all I will list for now. And there are no bad guys…there are plenty of grey guys, but no bad guys. Why i said characters, not good guys.

      4.) Military base in the middle of the Mojave desert, about a week and a half before Christmas. Don’t know the exact year…mid to late seventies. Just after the final dam against the Mississippi was completed. Modeling it after 29 palms, since I’m normally stationed there. The majority of the story takes place in an underground lab, of which there are none in 29.

      5.) Panacea has not been released yet, and may never be. This is due to the extremely addictive nature of the drug, as well as the horrible withdrawal from extended use. Which is why it is being tested secretly/illegally on USMIL grounds. They are trying to perfect it so that it doesn’t have those nasty side effects. When and if it does get released to the public, they would likely not inform the people who would be using the drug (mostly people with life threatening diseases, or amputees, or people missing body parts) would not necessarily experience the extra effects. Though the abilities are temporary, one dose is enough to cure tings like Alzheimer’s in a patient.

1595. # Strangeon 17 May 2015 at 7:20 am

      I am currently writing a superhero story, but I`m worried it might be to similar to other stories out there, so I was wondering if anyone has any ideas to spice the story up a bit.
      “Unlucky 13″ is about thirteen random people who die in the space of a week and come back to life with a “super”-power. They have to figure out why the resurrected; got a superpower and why there are others like them.
      (I haven`t quite figured out why they have developed powers and resurrected, so any ideas on that front would be most appreciated.)
      So onto the characters:
      Nightmare: Able to create a demonic creature out of his own shadow to attack enemies near him (range & strength dependent on the size of his shadow to begin with)
      Scarlet: Causes all men near her to fall in love with her (they`ll do anything she asks of them) (limit: lasts for about five minutes after she has left the room, but daily exposure & touch causes them to fall permanently in love with her)
      Katana: Her subconscious summons forth a katana whenever she is emotional, which then attacks/defends her against any physical attack (limit: unable to consciously control her power)
      Demon Girl: split personality: punk, quiet girl; demonic winged beast with super strength and durability and very violent & destructive (limit: beast brought out when she`s scared; only lasts for 13 minutes before reverting back to girl form, leaving her with no memory of what happened)
      Monk: Astral projection: can detach his spirit and travel around the world (drawn by death, so has no control of where his spirit goes); limit: His body is left vulnerable to attack; Only witness event occurring in the present; Invisible to everyone in this form, (only those who have been resurrected can hear him)
      Koas: a version of empathy: Can make people within a 5-10 metre radius feel whatever she wants them to feel (scared; angry; paranoid; happy; jealous; etc.)
      Red Riding Hood: can manipulate the blood in another person (can clot the blood, cause arteries to burst, etc.) limited to only being able affect one person at a time.
      Icicle: His breath expels liquid nitrogen, causing those around him to freeze (weakness to hot climates)
      Ninja: gains the ability to use everything as a weapon (guns; pencils; her own body; etc.) ;Limited by the fact she can`t do anything “superhuman” (stays within human capabilities)
      Fire Hazard: Able to superheat/melt anything she touches. (limit: only through her hands & takes longer to melt stuff with higher resistance to heat)
      Wrath: Able to cause inanimate objects to break apart (limited to the object being inanimate, near her and in her line of sight)
      Envy: Able to make people tell him the truth by looking into their eyes. (only effects a person at a time and then only for as long as he holds eye contact with them. He can also only use his ability once on each person)
      Shade: Able to turn his body intangible and phase through inanimate objects.
      What do you think about their powers? I will start by focusing on writing about 2 characters (as they discover their powers and meet others like them), until they have met all the others, who I`ll be introducing gradually through their own POV-part.
      For now I`ll be focusing on Nightmare and Scarlet.

1596. # Crosseon 17 May 2015 at 3:44 pm

      Unfortunately, I do not have my full set of notes on me…but I can make do.

      1.) The specific instance here is actually for a video game. But, the game does take place in (and is part of the back-story for) a book series I’d very much like to actually write at some point.

      2.)Eventually (not in the game) an organization is formed, but they are more or less just trying to be free from the government and people that hate them. Why do they hate them, you ask? Well, the majority of people get their abilities from their body’s unique way it absorbs anti-matter radiation (very long story behind that one). They emit it passively, and the amount increases as they use abilities. So people are absolutely terrified of them, due to their knack of causing horrible, radiation affiliated diseases.

      In the game though, there are none of those people. It takes place in the 70′s, before the “Rads” were exposed. However, there was still the issue of this strange, everlasting form of radiation. They contained it inside the Mississippi river (It is dammed up on all sides, little to no water flowing through it. Essentially, a “terrorist organization” used a bomb that they knew little about in Louisville, KY. Radiation levels after detonation were astronomical, and the USGOV realized the hazard of having a major waterway almost completely irradiated.)

      Now…characters…

      Damien is the protagonist of the story. As a child, and throughout his life, he has never really been able to exert much command or control over people or situations, despite his being the eldest child. He also got screwed over a lot when he tried to control things, but people didn’t know what he was asking or how to do it. This is because he cannot explain things in a very concise or intelligible way. Now, at home and with friends, he tries to control and micromanage as much as possible, and generally comes off as abrasive. That is one reason that his girlfriend of five years recently left him. He can keep a cool head if he is only worried about himself, but others being involved in situations leaves him too much to worry about, and he can get stressed fairly easily. Still, under all this, he retains a large amount of empathy that lends to his surprising amount patience (unless there is a limited time to do things). He comes to care for people rather easily, and can usually see things from other people’s point of view. He has a knack for biochemistry, but joined the military instead of following in his father’s footsteps as a renowned biochemist. He is in the communications wing of his unit (he’s in the military) now, but was previously in the infantry.

      Patricia (just call her Trish, or Pat if you want to piss her off) is a loyal, strong willed woman who is not afraid to open her mouth and make her opinion known. She doesn’t always think about things before she does them, but always faces the consequences as honorably as possible. She is incredibly intuitive, but also easily distracted by things she finds interesting…or cute. She tries to take an analytical approach to most things, and usually thinks that she’s right. When she’s wrong, she can get sad or angry, don’t find out which one. She had a brief affair with one of Damien’s close friends. However, upon learning that the man was married, she informed the wife of his infidelity. The man fought it, but he and his wife got a divorce soon afterwards. Trish continued teaching on base, and actually ended up becoming a friend to Maria, the scorned wife. Trish enjoys her job teaching as she loves and hopes to have a child in the future, but has never found the right person to stay with. She spends a lot of her time reading and going out with Maria and their friends, and also keeps her blog up to date.

      Alexander, Damien’s brother, followed the near exact opposite path of his brother. He is trusting and open, and completely wiling to allow for people to go about their work how they feel it would best further productivity. In his personal life, this has caused him a bit more trouble. He has generally allowed people to walk over him, though he loses his temper if he notices it. Oh yea…he has a mean streak. In general though, he keeps himself in check. He usually feels that he is right, even when you can prove that he isn’t. And when he gets proven wrong, he usually switches his stance and uses your evidence to support his arguments in the future. He is very observant, and can pick up on physical and psychological weakness rather easily. Though he is far less capable at bio-chemistry and bio-mech, he pursued the field to carry on his father’s legacy. He didn’t do it for his father, as he could care less for the man. He wanted to have something for his and Damien’s sister whenever she grew up. Their father never had time to set aside for them, so Alex has mostly taken over her caretaker, and loves Cordelia and Damien deeply. He generally shows himself to be a happy man, and he may well be, somewhere. He works hard, and is willing to do anything to keep his family and friends safe. He is currently working with the pharma company on the (Neither of them know, it’s a triple blind test) same base as Damien. The company is field testing PANACEA on military members with the government’s approval, as the FDA had yet to approve what appeared to be the biggest breakthrough in medical science.

      3.) There are plenty more, but that is all I will list for now. And there are no bad guys…there are plenty of grey guys, but no bad guys. Why I said characters, not good guys.

      4.) Military base in the middle of the Mojave Desert, about a week and a half before Christmas. Don’t know the exact year…mid to late seventies. Just after the final dam against the Mississippi was completed. I’m modeling it after 29 palms, since I’m normally stationed there. The majority of the story takes place in an underground lab, of which there are none in 29.

      5.) Panacea has not been released yet, and may never be. This is due to the extremely addictive nature of the drug, as well as the horrible withdrawal from extended use. This is why it is being tested secretly/illegally on USMIL grounds. They are trying to perfect it so that it doesn’t have those nasty side effects. When and if it does get released to the public, they would likely not inform the people who would be using the drug (mostly people with life threatening diseases, or amputees, or people missing body parts) would not necessarily experience the extra effects. Though the abilities are temporary, one dose is enough to cure things like Alzheimer’s in a patient.

1597. # Aushaudon 17 May 2015 at 5:25 pm

      Strange,

      I think the powers that you chose for your characters are fine. However, there is one glaring concern I have from the information you’ve divulged. Your cast is markedly large; I imagine it may be difficult to develop this many characters over the course of your novel. Additionally, it may be harder for readers to get behind a character if the focus have to continually shift from one character to the next in order for everyone to get page-time. Coupled with the fact that you also need to develop an engaging plot while cultivating your individual characters makes the process trickier to navigate.

      Personally, I feel casts like this work better in a visual medium like a comic book or manga (e.g. X-Men, Bleach, Naruto) where it’s more acceptable to have two-dimensional characters tag along with major protagonists. X-Men has a huge collective cast, but writers usually ends up spotlighting a smaller group of mutants at a time and developing them in a story arc. I feel as though this may be the route you should take if you are wanting all 13 characters to be included.

      What genre are you writing? Sci-fi? Fantasy? This could help inform you as to the incident that incites the story (the death and resurrection of 13 individuals). Was it a part of a ritual to awaken 13 champions for a gladiatorial battle for metaphysical supremacy? Maybe a science-savvy terrorist organization’s biological attack permeated a city but the only casualties were 13 individuals who died and returned to life with unique abilities?

1598. # Strangeon 18 May 2015 at 4:45 am

      Hacky Writer,
      First of all, thank you for taking the time to respond to my post.

      I was going to focus on Scarlet (detective in the city & the first to receive her power) and Nightmare second (small-time thief). Then I`ll focus on Monk (prison shrink) and Katana (inmate who organizes the prison riot which results in their deaths and subsequent resurrection). M./K. escape the prison, while S./N. investigate their escape and the prison riot. M./K. meet Demon Girl, who also escaped the prison (was held in mentally insane part of the prison). They are caught by S./N., where they realise their all the same.
      Then more and more characters gradually get involved and team up with them.
      As for the genre… well, I know its going to take place in the present day in a city (name still unknown), but I don`t know if it`ll be sci-fi, fantasy or a bit of both, as I am struggling to come up with a good way to explain how and why the 13 received their powers, without sounding ridiculous/corny/ clichéd or predictable.
      The two best scenarios I`ve been able to come up with are:
      - A group of people/scientists realise that the rate of crime and criminals in general are becoming stronger and stronger, so they develop a machine/injection/? to combat them. They concentrate their efforts in the one city as it serves as a test city/ place with the highest percentage of criminality. The 13 all die “unnatural deaths” (murder/ suicide) and are subsequently resurrected due to the machine/injection/…
      - A omnipotent being decides that the 13 who died didn`t deserve to, and decides to send them back to earth to see what happens. Their powers are a side effect of that.
      If anyone has any advice or better suggestions, then please let me know. Thank you.

1599. # Aushaudon 18 May 2015 at 7:23 am

      Strange,

      I’m glad that the character focus seems to be oriented around two characters at a time (at least in the beginning). I think that will make it easier to give each character time to be well introduced and developed before you move to the next perspective. I do have a few questions about the partnership between Scarlet and Nightmare. Why is a detective teaming up with a small-time thief for her investigation? What does Nightmare stand to gain by working with her? Why partner with a ‘small-time’ thief when someone like a racketeer/scam artist/terrorist may be more useful in understanding the facets associated with escaping a prison (i.e. blueprints, schematics, or people)?

      For that matter why do Monk and Katana team up? I doubt a prison psychologist would be apt to follow a breakout organizer for fear of incriminating himself. Does he know/suspect that she as involved and is following her to orchestrate her recapture? I imagine that them both having powers and having little explanation as to why could make them want to stick together, but I feel giving them each a motive besides having abilities will distinguish them more as individuals.

      As for the origin scenarios I’m leaning more towards the first one because it creates more opportunity to get some of the characters involved. I imagine it’d be better to administer the injection/use the machine of living people rather than cadavers; you’d be able to record how their bodies respond in a scientific fashion versus hoping they return to life changed. You’d have to come up with a reason they all got the injection before the breakout. Also, if you can incorporate some of the characters into the origin that would help develop them as well. Maybe Scarlet was already investigating a string of sudden deaths before being assigned to the prison breakout. When she snooped too deep the powers-that-be arranged for her capture and gave her the injection.

      Let me know what you think.

1600. # Strangeon 18 May 2015 at 8:57 am

      Okay. Here goes.
      Scarlet (honest -and the only female detective on the police force) dies whilst on patrol, and wakes up in her car, believing that she had been hit, but not fatally. When she returns to the station, she is surprised to find that her fellow officers seem to be more worried about her and trying to impress her than insisting she file a report on the incident or bullying her for being shot in the first place. While there, she is asked to interrogate a criminal who had been brought in for attempting to rob a house, as all the other officers appear to be way too busy filing divorce claims so that they can be with the “hot blond” detective. She enters the interview room and within seconds of telling him her name, he (Nightmare) tells her everything, stating he loves her and would do anything for her. She doesn`t believe him, thinking he`s just saying that to get to her, but when her superior enters the room to say that she has to release the thief due to lack of evidence, she realises that her superior officer is just as infatuated with her as everyone else. She makes a quick escape.
      Nightmare gets attacked and killed by his own gang as they believe he ratted them out to the police. He wakes up after his death and decides to find “his love”. He breaks into the station, grabs the files on Scarlet’s desk and heads to the address he found on one of the papers. He arrives on Scarlet`s doorstep and despite her mistrust, she agrees to let him in in exchange for the files and the fact that he “knows what really happened”. Together they realise that they both died and came back to life and that Nightmare`s gang had, against his orders, kidnapped the family in the house whilst he was holding the cops at bay and had then killed them, which went against his moral code. Scarlet convinces him to be the key witness in the case. The next day the set out and capture the other gang members, all of whom are a) in love with Scarlet as soon as they see her & b) completely terrified of Nightmare and his shadow. As Nightmare is in loath to leave Scarlet as he loves her, they both are the only ones who have “died” and come back with weird powers and Scarlet realises that he is in danger as there are probably still members of the gang in the city, she decides that they should stick together.
      She then receives a call that there had been a prison break at the juvenile correctional facility and a subsequent riot at the prison, so they head there, where she introduces Nightmare as a consultant.
      Shortly after Nightmare`s murder, Katana, an inmate of the prison is released after spending 3 years in jail for stealing and crashing several cars. As she had been placed in boarding schools and ignored by her family all her life, she had made friends at the prison/facility and didn`t want to loose them. She also didn`t know how to live a normal life, as she had spent most of her life rebelling against anyone and anything in the hope of getting her parents to notice her. Realising that she couldn`t commit another crime to get back in to see her friends, as she was no an adult, she decides that she should get her friends out, so that they could be with her. She then initiates a prison break using her inside knowledge of the prison. In doing so, she accidently kills a guard. The prison inmate witness this and start a riot. Katana and another inmate hide in Monks office to escape the notice of the guards, when Monk confronts them and the inmate kills him. When Katana protests and starts to panic, the inmate, her “friend”, kills her to shut her up. Monk and Katana wake up in a small room with two other guards who had been killed in the riot. They are confronted by another guard, who Katana unwittingly kills with her power. They realise that they can`t stay here, as they were believed to have died, so they dress up in the guards uniforms and leave the prison. Once out, Monk comforts the distraught Katana, promising to always be her friend. She asks him why he helped her, to which he replies that he cannot ignore someone in need, no matter who they are or what they had done. He claims that they both have been resurrected by the hand of God to do his bidding, which he believes they can only do by leaving the prison.
      Whilst they are on the run, Nightmare and Scarlet arrive to find the prison is back under control and that four people have died (2 guards and M./K.). They discover the body of the third guard and that M./K. are missing. As S. is about to inform her superiors, Nightmare realises that the two who had escaped were actually dead and he shows her the CCTV footage.
      They beat a quick exit and using Nightmare`s knowledge of the street, quickly find and confront the two escapees. They realise that they are the same. (resurrected)
      Scarlet is then contacted and informed that an inmate in the insane wing of the juvenile prison had managed to escape and she is tasked to find her. Scarlet turns down the offer of assistance and asks the other three to help her fin the runaway. (Demon Girl)

      Plot:
      A scientist develops what he hopes is a new antibiotic. All the normal tests run without incident, so he approaches a company in the hopes that they`ll be able to test it on humans. The company agrees and, through under-the-counter dealings bribe various officials to use the vaccine on random people to test its effectiveness by injecting it into inmates at the prisons, bribing the police to give it to the criminals they catch and by offering it “free” to everyone else.
      Those killed suddenly within 24 hours of receiving the vaccine are then “resurrected”, with their powers being a side-effect of being dead. But this only happens with the first batch, as the company were constantly tweaking the formula in every new batch.
      –> They (13) only figure this out when they all get together and search for a common denominator, after which they confront the company in search of the scientist who developed it.
      Is that okay or is it too clichéd?

      Thank you for your advice again Hacky Writer!

1601. # Crosseon 19 May 2015 at 6:26 pm

      Is there any particular reason that you can think that a comment would be waiting for moderation? I know it is usually when there is adult or mature content, or something of that ilk. I was just curious because neither of my comments (which are the same thing) contain such material.

1602. # Aushaudon 20 May 2015 at 8:13 am

      Crosse, I approved your comment for you. Occasionally, the site will think that a comment may be spam and hold it for moderation. I went in and approved it for you after reading through it.

1603. # Crosseon 20 May 2015 at 6:14 pm

      Thank you. Hopefully the general setting and character information isn’t confusing or conflicting.

      Something I forgot to add…Damien is the only one to extensively use PANACEA. This is due to his having been a part of the greater military unit that Ficluer Pharm. was allowed (by the USGOV/USMIL) to test PANACEA on. Trish only ends up using it once or twice. Alex uses it once, if you almost kill him when presented the choice in the game. Other people/mercenaries involved in the quarantine of the base may or may not have noticed the other effects of PANACEA, and may or may not use it to gain an advantage.

      General Story: Ficluer Pharm notices that escaped subject from their Calexico (California) facility is en route to the military base in the middle of the Mojave, where they have other subjects (mutated dogs, the escaped subject is their mutated mother). Once they are sure it is on the base/in the facility, they place the base under quarantine. Someone gets bitten by it, and Ficluer/theri mercenaries assume the worst. They capture the beast, and take all inhabitants from the base for testing. They know there are others hiding or trying to escape, so they post armed guards at all entrances. Damien is on watch during all this, and ends up gettng bitten. He is taken by one of the commanders of the Mercenaries, Douglas, to the hospital when he realizes that he is his bosses brother. They get flipped over, and Douglas assumes Damien is dead. Damien wakes up about an hour and a half later, gets up, and goes to his room on base to grab all the gear he needs to get out of the area. He attempts to escape using the residential entrance/exit of the base, where he runs into Trish. She insists on going with him, and he grudgingly agrees. The two manage to get to the exit, and almost make it through. However, they are caught by the same mercenary that saved Damien before. He now captures both Damien and Trish, and brings them to the bottom of the underground facility.

1604. # Strangeon 21 May 2015 at 7:49 am

      Crosse,

      You haven`t explained why Damien wants to escape. Is it because he gets bitten? Or something else? And for that matter, why does Trish want to escape? Or does she want to stay close to Damien (Friends/Lovers?)
      What is Douglas`s and Damien’s relationship? Does Douglas report that Damien also got bitten?
      What do you mean by “Other trying to escape”? And how do the Ficluer and co know about their attempts to escape? Do they see it on CCTV? Does Douglas tell them? Do they already know that Damien wants to escape?
      Why does the mercenary (I assume it is Douglas) capture them, especially when he believed him to be dead?
      As PANACEA is an addictive drug which Damien uses, (according to your previous post) does he start to develop any side-effects? Perhaps that impeded their attempt to escape? Or does the bite and the drug result in him not experiencing any side-effects or withdrawal symptoms?

      “Alex uses it once, if you almost kill him when presented the choice in the game”: I don`t understand that sentence. Was he forced to take the drug? Don`t they have enough military personnel taking the drug? Why would they insist on testing it out on a guy working for the pharmacy company?

      Overall, I like the sound of your plot outline.

1605. # Crosseon 22 May 2015 at 3:20 pm

      Lots of questions and just as many answers for you.

      1.) They see chaos on the base. They know there is a quarantine. They have seen that it is not government led, and that people are being forced to go with the mercenaries from Ficluer. Damien doesn’t really like working with other people, but he also doesn’t want to leave someone to a completely unknown fate. No, they are not in love. There is a moment where they feel like they like each other, but Damien explains that they are just in a high stress situation, and that it is chemically natural. He ensures her he will help, and that he does care, but it is not like that.

      2.) Douglas initially helps Damien. They are together when Damien encounters the Hound, and Douglas helps him fight it off. Douglas, as the story progresses, becomes a grey mentor character. By that, I mean that decisions while playing the game determine if he is on your side or not, but he ultimately helps Damien learn about himself anyways. He doesn’t report that Damien was bitten at first, since he was dead (and Douglas isn’t the best with biological sciences). Later, when they find out that the Damien and Trish are alive, he reports it.

      3.) Ficluer knows that they want to escape because they are the ones running the quarantine. They are the ones that have the guards reporting to them. They have eyes all over the ground telling them more about the situation. They know that there are a lot of people that want to escape…Damien and Trish just so happen to be some of them.

      4.) Simple. The mercenaries, including Douglas, are under orders from Ficluer to prevent anyone from leaving the quarantine.

      5.)Ohhh does he experience the side effects and withdrawal symptoms. If he doesn’t use PANACEA (the Injected form is the most potent and quells the entirety of withdrawal for up to twenty-four hours, when it kicks back in. Withdrawals can be fatal…), he begins seeing and hearing things all over the place. He ends up not being able to distinguish reality from what exactly he thinks he is seeing, which is incredibly dangerous.

      6.) That takes place a lot later in the game, close to the end. Throughout the game, the Hound from Calexico ends up getting into the greater part of the underground facility, and releases all of it’s mutated offspring, at its own expense. Then, with super powered mutant dogs running around and such, things erupt into chaos as Alexander tries to get the facility under control (he is not the CEO, he is just in charge of this project). He ends up trying to have his brother work on the assumed infected to find some way to get Panacea to remove the disease. Alex…is definitely not the best guy. At one point, he is forced into a confrontation with his brother, Damien. If you make the choice, you shoot Alex, and then decide whether to use Panacea to save him or not. It ends up being too much for him, and his body rejects the serum. The player can still save him if they act quick enough though.
      Thank you! This is just the first act, so it’s good to know it’s going well.

1606. # Phantasamon 26 May 2015 at 8:03 am

      hi my story is based on agents of shield and here’s what i have so far:

      Shikoba-controls the air
      Anna-Can absorb energy and as a result becomes super strong,faster and more confident…will develop this into giving her energy blasts instead
      Ana-can fire blasts of ice(she@s the teams handler but she dies in their fist mission)
      Sofia-she has enhanced physical capabilities she’s also a trained assassin(more on this will be revealed later)
      Leah – she has super intelligence thanks to the cuff on her arm
      Richard- What power do you reccomend I give him,he is the main character in the team

      Arc 1
      1.Team meets Fury
      2. Team teleported to personal trainer (member of Dora Milaje)
      3. Mission1. An Inhuman (maybe one of the ones submitted ((Christopher or Gorgonna))) begins attacking the city, damaging buildings. The team wants to help but Fury is cautious and doesn’t want them too. After much convincing, they’re aloud to go.
      4. Someone (TBA) is killed, throwing the team into guilt and anger
      5. Skye’s team arrives and the Wardens must fight them. They’re driven by anger and guilt.
      6. The Wardens barely escape and take a chapter to recover.
      7. (introduced to two runaways ): Daniel and Aspen arrive but the team doesn’t want to help because they think they’re inhumans. S.H.I.E.L.D. teaches the lesson that not all inhumans are bad (revealed that Daniel/Aspen are mutants)
      8. Mission 2(isn’t it 2?): The team has recovered and goes to Wakanda after recieving a distress call) They meet the Shaman and he gives the vision. Chapter ends at cliffhanger of Richard discovering powers

      Arc 2
      1. Time Skip 1Month
      2. Inhumas attack and kidnap Shikoba (a large battle takes place)
      3. The team splits up to try to find Shikoba
      4. Anna goes to the fish oil factory and finds Gorgona (battle/Anna falls into a chemical vat/cliffhanger)
      5. Anna emerges and beats Gorgona, Chris and Unspoken appear, end of chapter: Chris is given the mission to kill Richard, he agrees but says that he’ll only do it if Shikoba is returned (he believes in fair trade)
      6-prt1. Shikoba is shaken up and quits the team and Anna follows
      6-prt2. Richard goes home and Leah stays, chapter ends in cliffhanger (Leah’s capture)

1607. # Tommyon 29 May 2015 at 3:47 am

      Hey, I only came across this website today because recently I’ve been playing with the idea of making a superhero comic. I’ve always loved superheroes and really enjoy thinking up new characters. so I’ve got a few ideas for characters but just didn’t know if they were any good? they wouldnt be in the same story but whos to say they couldn’t be part of a bigger world eventually? they’re all pretty vague in areas so there are a lot of holes to fill! ok so heres my first character.

      This story would be based on earth however the protagonist is from another realm/dimension. (im not sure if this place would be somewhere faraway in space or something else) I haven’t got a name for him but I think his superhero nickname would be Brimstone. this other world is very similar to what people would describe as hell; baron, rocky, hot, fire everywhere etc… and the people who inhabit it are demon like creatures… similar size and stature to humans but pointy ears, sharp teeth, greyish skin maybe? now for some reason this character has been sent to earth ( because he was banished? or because he has been put on a mission? or he escaped?) now some of the other demon people would have left this realm too but probably to places other than earth and each one has their own personal small portal/gateway to their homeland… however for some reason ( I know very vague) Brimstone has his portal in his stomach….now this is where his powers come in.. as well as being naturally agile and competent in battle, he is able to store things in his stomach and then use them when he wants… the object would just sit in the other world until he needed it…. for example he could swallow a bunch of grenades before battle and release them in combat…. in contrast, if someone threw an explosive, he could quickly swallow it and then nullify the blast….. also I think he will have a sword that he pulls out of his mouth for combat…. I also thought that he would have the ability to use the flames from his homeland to almost breath a special kind of fire from his mouth. Obviously he won’t be able to use all of them straight away, especially the fire. But he would discover and develop new skills throughout the story. There would be limits to what he can swallow for example, the size of the object. he can probably open his mouth wider than other people but he couldn’t swallow a car or something stupid. Also, if he swallows an explosion of a certain size its going to damage him in some way. it could be the first time he sacrifices his safety for the sake of someone else when he swallows a massive explosive without knowing how much damage it would do ( or something like that)

      now as a character he would be very disobedient, creates his own rules, maybe quite selfish?. sort of like an anti-hero… he does things because it would benefit him. He probably feels like he is better than humans at the start but then eventually ( not sure how long) he starts to respect certain ones. (These are probably human characters that become a bigger part of his story. one could be a girl/potential love interest) and I don’t know why but I get the feeling that he has some sort of grudge against the people of his own realm and probably ignores their orders ( if they give him any??). maybe after coming to earth he becomes some sort of hitman? like a freelancer earning money for hunting down certain people? although he comes across as quite dark, I would want him to have a good sense of humour…. so when fighting, he wont be very serious and would crack a joke every so often to provide a bit of comic relief. like he isn’t scared to fight but almost enjoys it… despite all this he still becomes the hero in a way. he just doesn’t set out to be, almost like he stumbles into the role. now this could be because of a higher organisation that he ends up getting involved with and turns out to be something huge and destructive… or his own realm could get more involved in earth for bad reasons (they want to take it over? or see something there that they want?) by that point he would feel more connected to some of the other characters on earth and find himself fighting on their side. or it could be that he helps earth defeat a common enemy ( his own realm) which he doesn’t agree with or whatever… If anything I think I would want to open the story with him already on earth talking to someone he has just captured, tormenting the person or something similar. then his origin would be explored later.

      Im not sure if he resembles any existing characters but I’m just trying to write down all the information I have in my head and see if I can make something of it… I’ll leave my other characters for another post or else this one will go on forever! Thanks for any advice I get. I haven’t done any comics or novels before so any help would be good help!

1608. # The awesome oneon 03 Jun 2015 at 9:30 pm

      How do you make a character like Gambit or Spider-Man without completely ripping off the character?

1609. # Yuuki991on 06 Jun 2015 at 7:14 pm

      Greetings. It has been a while. I can happily say that I am finished with my first story. It took me three years(working on and off), but it is finally done. With that said, I have been thinking of doing some major revisions to the story and I could use some thoughts on it.

      The main issue I am dealing with is my main character, Derek Masters. Originally, in the story I had given him sound manipulation. He had super-heaing and could move quickly, via sound waves, and had a sonic scream. having read plenty of articles on this website, I know from experience that superpowers don’t make a character. Rather, just a good character.

      And while I’d like to think I have created a good main character, I do think there is room for improvement. But I digress. For his powerset, I do not think I was able to properly challenge him. To that, I wish to assign him a new powerset.

      Instead, I wish to bestow Derek with forcefield manipulation. He can do the things associated with manipulating forcefields, but the unique thing is that Derek can shape pelt shaped constructs from his fingertips and fire them. These he calls Force Slugs.

      The reason why is that Derek is a western themed superhero(which I lifted from a previous concept that went nowhere), where he’s like a gunslinger and fires them. Also, the western theme can be explained by Derek’s backstory.

      In my view, I think I can challenge Derek a lot more effectively with this ability set.

      If anyone is curious for more information, I can elaborate on another post if requested. Overall, thank you very much for reading this post.

      P.S: Should I consider giving Derek another ability? I was rereading through some of the posts and B. Mac suggested to one person that if one is considering using a hero with forcefields as an ability, that one should consider giving another ability set or combat proficiency.

      If this advice is sound, I wish to give Derek the ability to perceive auras. He can visualize a person’s aura and gain information about their emotional states, and overall health. I think it would be a much more unique ability, as opposed to camouflage or cloaking.

      Also, on a side note, why is that Force-field manipulation is so heavily skewed towards female-based characters?

1610. # B. McKenzieon 07 Jun 2015 at 4:05 am

      “I was rereading through some of the posts and B. Mac suggested to one person that if one is considering using a hero with forcefields as an ability, that one should consider giving another ability set or combat proficiency.” I think you’ve already got that covered — it sounds like your version of forcefields has more offensive utility than most versions I’ve seen.
      
      …
      
      “If this advice is sound, I wish to give Derek the ability to perceive auras. He can visualize a person’s aura and gain information about their emotional states, and overall health. I think it would be a much more unique ability…” I feel that social superpowers are generally not as interesting as social skills are, so I’d suggest just making him perceptive. It’ll be more impressive if he notices something interesting through a skill (e.g. gleaning a hint that someone may be lying is more impressive than reading someone’s aura to know that they are definitely lying — there’s more difficulty/challenge, uncertainty/intrigue/danger, and perhaps most importantly it’s much easier for readers to share the experience with him and try to piece together the clues as he does). Also, I think social skills also lend themselves to interesting competition/conflict more easily than superpowers do (e.g. a master liar can try to fool someone perceptive, and I think that’d probably be more promising than, say, having the liar just use superpowers to hide his aura).
      
      In general, I feel that social superpowers tend to make conversations less interesting. (E.g. if a character can reliably detect lies, that will significantly reduce the potential for intrigue from deception and/or uncertainty).

1611. # Yuuki991on 07 Jun 2015 at 9:16 am

      @ B. McKenzie

      First off, thank you very much for responding. I very much appreciate the feedback. I can see your point about social powers. Relying on innate skills is much more relatable and fulfilling to most audiences, compared to utilizing an extraordinary skill. With that said, I do like the idea of making Derek more perceptive.

      It certainly fits the character, given his backstory, and the western theme. But I also like the aura ability. Perhaps, I can tone it down, where he cannot sense emotions. Rather, fields of life force to which help him gather information on physical characteristics, such as health and for purposes of tracking.

      To make it more unusual, maybe Derek needs to close his eyes to use it? I kind of got the inspiration from Lucario from Pokemon, but it could add a factor of risk. There would be plenty of people giving Derek odd looks if he was looking at them with his eyes closed.

      The next question I want to ask is potential weaknesses for forcefield manipulation. I am going with the mental strain weakness. That being that Derek’s fields are tied to his head and that a strong enough force can generate immense pain and possibly a nose bleed.

      But the other idea was that Derek’s use of hand movements. He needs to use his hands to aid him in concentrating and creating the gestures. If those appendages were to be injured or bound, that can limit what Derek can do.

      Overall, Thank you very much for the feedback. I very much appreciate it.

      P.S: Sorry, if this message is too long. I had an idea for Derek for using his powers as a means for transportation. What if Derek could super leap with his fields? To be more precise, what if Derek generates a field, whose tensile strength is elastic like a trampoline?

      Then, he jumps and generates a rising column underneath his feet, before collapsing. This could give him added momentum to leap from buildings to buildings. And maybe, Derek can generate platforms in the air or on the ground to both stabilize his landing and give him another surface to jump.

      I think this might be a more unique method of movement, as opposed to a levitating platform which I feel has been overdone and isn’t really a new experience.

1612. # B. McKenzieon 07 Jun 2015 at 8:32 pm

      “Perhaps, I can tone it down, where he cannot sense emotions. Rather, fields of life force to which help him gather information on physical characteristics, such as health and for purposes of tracking.” Ah, okay. That sounds workable. Alternately, if you were interested in working in tracking as a skill, I think that’d also be doable. (You mentioned that the character has a Western-themed backstory, so working in tracking skills may be a lot easier than if he were, say, a mainly urban character like Peter Parker).
      
      …
      
      “To make it more unusual, maybe Derek needs to close his eyes to use it? I kind of got the inspiration from Lucario from Pokemon, but it could add a factor of risk. There would be plenty of people giving Derek odd looks if he was looking at them with his eyes closed.” In a similar vein, making some of his abilities intrusive (e.g. if the person he’s using his powers on knows that Derek is doing something unpleasant to him, that’d raise the cost of using the powers, which could be interesting).
      
      …
      
      I like the limitations of fatigue and hand motions. Those feel workable to me. Also, extending his powers to include transportation capabilities also feels workable, though there may be times when you want it to be difficult from him to get from one place to another. At those times, maybe you could work in an arm injury or fatigue or some other factor to make the movement more difficult.

1613. # B. McKenzieon 07 Jun 2015 at 8:48 pm

      “How do you make a character like Gambit or Spider-Man without completely ripping off the character?” If the character’s personality and ideally his voice and motivations/goals are very different, I think you’ll probably be okay if the characters share somewhat generic powers (e.g. agility and/or melee ability). However, webbing is DEFINITELY a game that Spider-Man has on lock and I wouldn’t recommend reaching for that lock unless you’ve got a team of highly paid IP lawyers.

1614. # Yuuki991on 07 Jun 2015 at 8:52 pm

      @ B.Mckenzie

      Again, thank you for your feedback. I very much appreciate your advice. I agree with your logic about possibly making the ability intrusive, but I am unsure as to how to approach that.

      The best I can come up with is maybe having Derek’s eyes glow an eerie green that is quite noticeable and in turn can cause others to spot him.

      Again, thank you very much for the advice.

1615. # J12345on 14 Jul 2015 at 8:51 pm

      I’m writing a superhero book about this superhero family that has moved in to Westview to start their life’s over to become a normal family. But, eventually the fathers arch nemesis Dark shadow tracked them down and starts to destroy the city and kill their family……..
      The main characters are-
      Joey-16 years old powers- force field,freeze breath,telekinesis
      Sophie-16 years old powers- speed, invisibility, breathe under water
      Owen-10 years old powers-electric wave
      Carmen-9 years old powers- teleportation
      Maya-1 year old powers- voice mimicking
      Dad- Clark – 42 years old powers- strength flying
      Mom-Sara – 39 years old powers – shape shifting control water
      Dark shadow- drain life
      Alexis-16 years old powers- reverse gravity
      Brett-16 years old powers-shock wave
      And more characters….

1616. # B. McKenzieon 15 Jul 2015 at 6:35 am

      J12345, to give yourself more space for developing each character, I’d recommend removing/merging characters. I’d recommend a main cast of 4-5 heroes in this case.

1617. # DH1982on 16 Jul 2015 at 12:47 am

      @B McKenzie

      I was wondering if you could give me advice on a story/novel idea Im trying to create revolving around a Batman/Dark Knight-esque type character.

      Originally I had Ghost then found it was taken, then I went for Reaper, only to find that this was taken. Im really stuck on how to go about this.

      My character is dark and is similar to Batman, however, he is not a wealthy playboy businessman, he is a man who has lived a troubled life as a child, failed to settle within foster homes and turned to crime. One family takes him in and tries to turn him around, after lengthy struggles they manage to make some headway as the main character, in this instance, Ryan Kane secures a job at his foster father’s construction site.

      Without going to much into depth he gets into a fight with a fellow worker and is patched up by the first aider, who just happens to be the female lead. This is where I begin to get stuck.

      My plan originally was for Ryan to be invited with the female to the a party in aid of opening the building he has been working on, at said party the main villain, who at this time I have called the Prophecy arrives and attacks the event. The Prophecy is a sadistic, psychopathic killer (very dark for a superhero story).

      My plan was after the event, many would fall at Prophecy’s hands. Ryan would survive after being helped by an old man (in the form of Alfred Pettyworth mentor type thing) who would somehow re-train Ryan to return to the city. Ryan, who lost his memory after the attack takes on the persona of the new hero to hunt down The Prophecy due to small fragments of his memory returning to him regarding the attack. Ryan would also believe that the female lead was murdered but as the story develops he indadvertedly comes across her but is warned to stay away by her father.

      In all I plan to try and create three stories but the plans are in their infancy. If you could give me any pointers on this it would be greatly appreciated. I know what I have wrote seems extremely vague but Im hoping you can take pieces of it and help me to develop this story.

      Im not interested in a superhero with unrealistic and unbelievable powers, i really am keen on the lone vigilante role but obviously not ripping off Nolan’s Dark Knight trilogy. The story I want to create will be dark but believable and Id love the reader to get engrossed with the bubbling love story between Ryan and the female as he fights to keep his identity and the fact that he survived Prophecy’s attack a secret from her.

      Many thanks!

1618. # B. McKenzieon 16 Jul 2015 at 6:55 am

      “Originally I had Ghost then found it was taken, then I went for Reaper, only to find that this was taken. Im really stuck on how to go about this.” Marvel alone has named ~7,000 characters. I think all the generically badass simple-noun names have been used before. Some workarounds: You can go with a less everyday term, you can add a modifier to the name, you can try using the name even though Marvel and/or DC already have a character by that name*, etc. Alternately, you can use a character name that is or sounds like it might be a given name or surname (e.g. Rorschach or Heisenberg).
      
      *If it’s a minor character, you can submit with a character by that name, and your eventual publisher will later let you know if the name needs to be changed.
      
      …
      
      It may be helpful to give the character a more active role during his origin story, preferably involving an unusual choice that most other superheroes (especially Batman and the Punisher) would not have made in the same situation. Also, unusual personality traits, definitely including something that Batman/BW doesn’t have.
      
      …
      
      “Ryan would survive after being helped by an old man (in the form of Alfred Pennyworth mentor type thing) who would somehow re-train Ryan to return to the city.” The mentor might be a deus ex machina. Also, in what ways would he be different than Alfred?
      
      …
      
      “I’d love the reader to get engrossed with the bubbling love story between Ryan and the female as he fights to keep his identity… secret from her.” I’ve seen a lot of stories that use secret identities as a major plot point, and generally I feel like those plotlines tend to get very formulaic. Personally, I’m sort of burned out on using secret identities as major plot points. It did come up in the Nolan trilogy (a minor character in TDK attempts to blackmail Lucius with Batman’s secret identity, but that was like a minute or two out of a 2.5 hour movie).

1619. # DH1982on 17 Jul 2015 at 12:54 am

      @ B McKenzie

      
”you can try using the name even though Marvel and/or DC already have a character by that name*, etc. Alternately, you can use a character name that is or sounds like it might be a given name or surname (e.g. Rorschach or Heisenberg).”


      Ive decided to go down the route of naming my protagonist as Reaper. I like the dark sounding nature of it plus it doesn’t sound corny or make him be “100% hero”, I want my main character to share the same edge as Nolan’s Batman.

      ……

      “It may be helpful to give the character a more active role during his origin story, preferably involving an unusual choice that most other superheroes (especially Batman and the Punisher) would not have made in the same situation. Also, unusual personality traits, definitely including something that Batman/BW doesn’t have.”

      This does sound interesting but Id like to know what you mean? Im keen to think up an original but engrossing origin city that doesn’t take up to much of the main story itself. I like the fact that Nolan’s trilogy only really touched on BW as a young child and what he went through to become Batman.

      ……

      “Ryan would survive after being helped by an old man (in the form of Alfred Pennyworth mentor type thing) who would somehow re-train Ryan to return to the city.” The mentor might be a deus ex machina. Also, in what ways would he be different than Alfred?

      The mentor has a checkered past, he would be tied in with one of the lead villains. I was thinking about a revenge theme, maybe the mentor’s daughter was killed by someone with connections to one of the lead villains and it also left the mentor in a wheelchair, unable to seek the vengeance he craves, therefore recruiting the would be hero to carry out the job for him?. Alfred was more of a father figure to BW, Id ideally like some sort of this with the mentor Im creating but for him to have additional motives as to why he takes Ryan under his wing.

      …..

      “I’d love the reader to get engrossed with the bubbling love story between Ryan and the female as he fights to keep his identity… secret from her.”

      Again I like the concept of simmering chemistry between the hero and the female lead but without it being to overdone. Maybe they have feelings for each other but refuse to accept them?, I won’t make this the main draw of the story (similar in some aspects to The Amazing Spiderman 2) but will have it bubbling away as some sort of subplot?. (the engrossing chemistry in Twilight for instance is something Id like to write in but just not as intense as the hero refuses to draw the female into his other life).

1620. # B. McKenzieon 18 Jul 2015 at 1:02 pm

      BM: “It may be helpful to give the character a more active role during his origin story, preferably involving an unusual choice that most other superheroes (especially Batman and the Punisher) would not have made in the same situation. Also, unusual personality traits, definitely including something that Batman/BW doesn’t have.”
      
      DH: “This does sound interesting but Id like to know what you mean? Im keen to think up an original but engrossing origin city that doesn’t take up to much of the main story itself. I like the fact that Nolan’s trilogy only really touched on BW as a young child and what he went through to become Batman.” I’d say in this case that the origin story here is the Prophecy attack on the building, the mentor stepping in, and/or the main character deciding to pursue revenge (rather than, say, letting the police take care of it). I’d recommend incorporating a decision in here that most other superheroes wouldn’t have made in the same situation. For example, Peter Parker doesn’t stop someone from robbing a person that had wronged Peter, and the robber later kills Uncle Ben. Almost any other superhero in the same situation would have stopped the robber first, and this unique move from Peter helps develop his personality (e.g. he’s not as 100% altruistic as, say, Superman — he is occasionally petty). So, for example, I imagine there were many victims of this attack. Out of all of them, why does the mentor choose to help this one fight back? (Maybe there’s something distinctive about Ryan that suggests that he’d be a better source of revenge than any of the others).
      
      Ideally, Ryan and the mentor wouldn’t be 100% on the same page — e.g. perhaps their goals are different, which could lead to conflict later on. (I feel that protagonist-vs-protagonist conflict is generally helpful).

1621. # MysteriousCharacteron 29 Jul 2015 at 11:49 pm

      Hey everybody! Wonderful list! (Gave me a few ideas.) But! I was wondering. Do you think it would be to much of a deus ex machina to include a character like Dr. Fate/Doctor Strange. (I need a hero that can help out my very rapidly downward spiraling heroes) Someone who is so mystically intune that they are beyond what most mortal heroes would comprehend and understand. Not to the level of power like omnipotence but…possibly something close. I dunno. Thanks you for the list and meaningful website.

1622. # B. McKenzieon 30 Jul 2015 at 8:59 pm

      “Someone who is so mystically intune that they are beyond what most mortal heroes would comprehend and understand. Not to the level of power like omnipotence but…possibly something close. I dunno.” I definitely wouldn’t make him 100% cooperative (or he’d be a deus ex machina). E.g. maybe he has an agenda of his own, maybe he helps the characters but for a price, etc. And I’m not opposed to making him much more capable than the main characters, but in general it’d probably be helpful if there were limits on what he could do for the main characters. (E.g. if he’s pretty close to omnipotent, what could he possibly want from characters that far beneath him?)

1623. # Ian L.on 06 Aug 2015 at 2:43 pm

      I had an idea for a book and was wondering if it was good. There’s this group of superpowered teenagers with practically useless powers (seeing the future but not being able to do anything about it; shapeshifting into random things at random times; duplication but not being able to control the duplicates, etc.). I was also thinking about twins- one can see the future and one is a genius and sets traps. Are these good ideas?

1624. # Ian L.on 06 Aug 2015 at 3:18 pm

      Also, I’m having trouble creating organization names. I want an organization that’s kind of like S.H.I.E.L.D. but I can’t think of a name for it. Also, I’m trying to basically create my own universe, but I can’t think of anything to call it. Any suggestions?

1625. # B. McKenzieon 06 Aug 2015 at 7:08 pm

      Some suggestions, Ian:
      
      –I’d recommend starting by thinking about what makes the group unique (e.g. an unusual focus, an unusual personality trait, an unusual modus operandi, an object or symbol associated with the group, etc).
      
      –I’d recommend either using a really short acronym or a word without an acronym.
      
      –If you do use an acronym, you don’t need to use every letter. Don’t force corny words in to make an acronym work.
      
      –I wouldn’t recommend worrying about naming the universe at this point. Get a work published, and then take it from there.

1626. # B. McKenzieon 06 Aug 2015 at 7:20 pm

      “There’s this group of superpowered teenagers with practically useless powers (seeing the future but not being able to do anything about it; shapeshifting into random things at random times; duplication but not being able to control the duplicates, etc.). I was also thinking about twins- one can see the future and one is a genius and sets traps. Are these good ideas?”
      
      Some thoughts:
      
      –On a scale of 1 to 10, with 10 being most important to making a story work, superpower selection is usually a 2-4. As long as the characters can do interesting things and face interesting challenges, you can make pretty much any superpower selection work. Character development is a 9-10, so I’d recommend focusing on that (e.g. unusual choices, unusual goals, protagonist vs. protagonist conflict, etc).
      
      –I believe that one of the core appeal of superhero stories is generally characters with incredible capabilities doing incredibly awesome things. I appreciate that your characters have limits to their powers (which will make it easier to challenge them), but it may be helpful if they were more capable/competent (whether through superpowers or otherwise).
      
      –It looks like most of your characters aren’t really in control of their powers (e.g. the ability to see the future but not do anything about it, completely random shapeshifting, uncontrollable duplication, etc). I think this’ll make it harder for them to be active and consciously shape the plot. Also, it may make them more dependent on luck to succeed, which is generally less interesting than a character who isn’t.

1627. # Ian L.on 06 Aug 2015 at 8:13 pm

      Thanks! That was a really fast and helpful reply. I realized I forgot to put in there that they have talents that help them in battle (martial arts, crowd control, marksmanship, etc.). They don’t really rely on their powers, they use tools and weapons. Would a trigger be helpful (e.g. When they feel a lot of fear, they turn into a bear)? Also, there are some people who control their powers, I just chose the main three (give something life and control it but it desintegrates after five minutes) but I do know what you mean.

1628. # B. McKenzieon 06 Aug 2015 at 9:34 pm

      “I realized I forgot to put in there that they have talents that help them in battle (martial arts, crowd control, marksmanship, etc.). They don’t really rely on their powers, they use tools and weapons.” Ah, cool. When you’re pitching this to publishers, if/when you mention the character’s capabilities, I would recommend focusing on what the characters do and avoid giving the impression that the characters are in any way worthless. E.g. if you need to describe a really limited superpower, I’d recommend “minor” or “secondary” instead of “practically worthless.”
      
      (This is definitely an issue I’ve run into with The Taxman Must Die — one notable thing about the title character is that he’s the only guy without incredible combat capabilities on a SHIELD-like team, so I’m trying to use mental/detective capabilities and basic firearms skills to make sure that he will be able to drive the plot forward besides just things happening to him. If a publisher thinks “he’s useless”, they will reject it quickly).

1629. # Ian L.on 07 Aug 2015 at 11:42 am

      K, thanks! Your advice has been really helpful!

1630. # Aj of Earthon 13 Aug 2015 at 11:19 am

      @B.Mac /@everyone

      If you personally had one of the the superpowers listed here (only one and exactly as-is*) what would it be?

      *I know a lot of these can easily blend and mesh with others, but for the sake of the question let’s keep them as they’re listed.

1631. # B. McKenzieon 13 Aug 2015 at 3:08 pm

      In terms of raw utility, I think the ability to stretch/accelerate time, teleportation, or immortality. Telekinesis is also pretty badass. However, personally I’d trade telekinesis for being 6’6″ and hard-working.

1632. # Aj of Earthon 13 Aug 2015 at 9:07 pm

      Ha, right on. I’m partial to psychic ability, but if I had to step outside of that I’d probably go phasing or luck manipulation.

      Thanks for answering, not sure why I asked but good times! Also, 6’6″ definitely counts as super…

1633. # B. McKenzieon 14 Aug 2015 at 7:19 pm

      I already have luck manipulation!* (IARPA superforecaster, 99.5th percentile).
      
      
      *Either that or foresight, but it feels a lot more like luck. Either way, I’d also trade it for 6’6″ and diligence.

1634. # Aj of Earthon 14 Aug 2015 at 9:21 pm

      Interesting. …I’m open to it, which makes me wonder if, in context, Agent Orange is ever described as being 6’6″ tall and if you yourself are a secret agent. Which would make me a superforcaster as well. Though if correct I’d doubt you’d say so, which would render my results… “inconclusive”.
      Though giant Reptillians walking around in human disguise… It’s not entirely unheard of.

1635. # B. McKenzieon 15 Aug 2015 at 8:08 am

      From the pencils, it looks like Gary is about 6 ft tall (the average for U.S. men is 5’10″) and Gain is around 7 ft tall.
      
      …
      
      I am definitely not a secret agent (nor an intelligence analyst). IARPA is researching the possibility that civilians analyzing open-source (public) data forecast geopolitical events more accurately than actual intelligence analysts with access to classified data. Preliminary results there are favorable for the civilians — my hypothesis is that government employees are subject to political/job pressures likely to reduce accuracy and/or government hiring procedures favor reliability, subject expertise, and the ability to get a security clearance over analytical accuracy. Also, if you are in the top 5% of whatever it is you do, the government will not pay as well as the private sector probably would, whereas if you’re in the bottom ~60-70%, the government will probably pay noticeably better* — I suspect that the most capable analysts have financial incentives to work in the private sector.
      
      *Many (maybe most) government employees believe their pays are insultingly low. In the case I’m most familiar with, at least — Illinois teachers — I don’t think there’s much supporting evidence. The average Illinois teacher earns $59,100 per year plus kickass benefits (e.g. an amazing pension, summers off*, tuition forgiveness, great health benefits, virtually no risk of layoff/firing, etc), but still believes he/she is on the verge of starvation. After benefits, I’d estimate that the average teacher compensation is closer to a private-sector salary of $80-90K. Most private sector jobs at that compensation level (e.g. scientists, nurses, actuarial analysts, statisticians, and engineers) require much more technical expertise and may have lives on the line (e.g. a nurse’s patients or the people driving over an engineer’s bridge).
      
      *Getting a salary of $59,100 for ~9.5 months of work is the monthly equivalent of a 12-month worker getting paid $74,700.

1636. # billy bon 17 Aug 2015 at 2:22 am

      I am doing a project and i was thinking what is a good super power for a turtle who hates marine debris and wants to get rid of it?

1637. # B. McKenzieon 17 Aug 2015 at 5:23 am

      Telekinesis that is limited to marine debris. Or the ability to alter ocean currents and/or bacterial life (e.g. bacteria breaking down debris).

1638. # Gaby P.on 22 Aug 2015 at 5:16 am

      How can I make mind control, crystal manipulation and control over fire get more interesting?

      P.S.: Those are for different characters!!!

      Thanks,

      -Gaby P.

1639. # Daniel Bakeron 18 Sep 2015 at 10:38 am

      Dear B. Mac,
      Hello, my name is Daniel. I emailed you a few months ago about my book M.O.R.P.H or as you told me to put it, Morph! You really helped me out, I have decided to give my book a reboot therefore I am commenting to ask for some inspirational help!
      Thanks,
      Daniel Baker

1640. # keonon 24 Sep 2015 at 11:08 am

      I would have telekinises beacause it will be a good and you would have more than one power(if you try). when you have teleinises you can use your powers to lift up elements(like water,fire,earth,andon and on).you can also use your powers to fly or you can use your powers to make the enenys machines break so telekinises is wrong

1641. # keonon 24 Sep 2015 at 11:09 am

      sorry I mean telekinises is the best power

1642. # Yuuki991on 24 Sep 2015 at 7:28 pm

      With my work Marshal Malachite almost finished, I am now working on another work. The story is about an alternative history where powered users, known as Psyons, exit and there’s an organization named the Bureau of Psyon Affairs (BPA for short, a policing organization that helps regulate Psyons.

      The story specifically centers around my main character, Todd; as he miraculously gains an ability and becomes a Psyon(in my words, you need to be born with the PSY gene to become one).

      An idea I had for Todd’s ability is what I call supercharging. Basically, Todd can supercharge and further enhance the abilities of other Psyons. How this is accomplished is that he emits a type of energy he calls Helio sparks(due to how it is yellow and resembles electricity). By touching another Psyon, he can further augment their ability.

      This is beneficial for his allies, as(another character, he’s teamed up) he can enhance her abilities. Two drawbacks to this ability. The first is that when he supercharges someone, depending on how much energy he outputs will leave him exhausted.

      This can leave him breatheless and if he’s careless he could pass out, or worse die. The second deals with the individual receiving the boost. Depending on how much energy they receive, will lead to their ability improving by that amount. However, some may not be able to control the instant powerup and could hurt themselves or others.

      A final use for this ability that I came up with(inspired by Heroes) is that Todd can discharge energy bolts from his fingertips. This energy acts like electricty as he can short circuit devices and knock/kill other people. The drawback is that at first he’s unable to control how much energy he discharges. Thus, not only could he accidentally kill someone, but could be left exhausted.

      And perhaps, that’s why he learns to regulate how much energy.

      Overall, what do you think? Should I just have Todd have electricity manipulation instead and justify it as supercharging or is this fine? I look forward to everyone’s feedback.

1643. # Dreameron 15 Oct 2015 at 1:40 pm

      Btw. I choose Omnipotence…

1644. # BWSon 15 Oct 2015 at 11:12 pm

      I’m planning a story where a group of kids all get powers from a terrorist attack from a group calling themselves supremacist.

      I want their powers to be impressive but not astonishing.

      I was thinking:
      Dreaming the Future
      Flying
      Speaking to Animals
      Teleporting
      Knowing Everything about Someone by Making Eye Contact
      Unnatural Charm and Beauty
      Peak Conditioning
      Super Intelligence

      I’ve decide on having five characters with powers and I just need to know which powers to choose

1645. # B. McKenzieon 17 Oct 2015 at 11:15 am

      Dreaming the future is, I feel, likely to make the story less interesting than, say, a character that’s intelligently able to predict likely cause/effect and/or figure out who is doing what or who has done what or who will do what. If you do go down the path of prophecy, I’d recommend making it unclear and/or open to misinterpretation.
      
      Teleportation and flight… I’d recommend giving these characters some interesting skills and/or capabilities, because the powers by themselves are mainly useful for getting places and escaping from danger. Melee skills are probably the most common choice here.
      
      Speaking to animals… there are goofy ways to use influence over animals (e.g. Aquaman or Squirrel Girl) and more serious ways (e.g. the wargs in Game of Thrones). Unless the mood of the work is very light-hearted, I’d recommend erring on the side of seriousness.
      
      It’s hard to imagine a scenario where knowing everything about someone would make a scene more interesting. It’d pretty much eliminate any potential intrigue from uncertainty/deception/disloyalty/incomplete personal information. I’d find a character that worked to uncover information much more promising. For example, let’s say that a character with unnatural charm and beauty is working his/her charms to try to convince an enemy to betray his allies, and the enemy agrees to help the charmer. The uncertainty about how reliable the (ostensible) defector actually is will help make his cooperation (and/or potential betrayal) more interesting. A character that knows everything would completely torpedo that as soon as he made eye contact… I think he’d make pretty much every scene he’s in less interesting. I’d recommend handling this instead as a skill rather than a superpower (it wouldn’t be 100% accurate and wouldn’t cover everything, which would give you a lot more to work with).
      
      Unnatural charm and beauty… I’d recommend handling this as a skill (e.g. the person is really good with people) rather than a superpower. It’ll force you to be more creative and will make the character a lot more impressive. Also, I’d recommend making sure that the character has an actual personality besides just being sexy. If you are a guy (especially a non-married guy), I strongly recommend making this character a male — otherwise the character will probably do things that make novel editors want to reject the submission, and you won’t know what they were. (Probably less of an issue with a comic book submission).
      
      Peak conditioning and super intelligence… Personally, I’d find these the easiest to work with out of the ones you’ve listed.

1646. # CharCamOlsonon 18 Oct 2015 at 11:49 am

      One way to make speaking to animals interesting is to have the character with the power function as the detective, able to get all kinds of useful information from the powerful senses and ubiquitous presence of members of the animal kingdom, assuming he can convince them to cooperate. I think it would be more interesting if the power is only communication, meaning the character could get an animal to help him, or accomplish a complex task, but only if he can convince the animal that it will get something out of it (food, safety, fun) or has already established a working relationship with that animal (like the kind ordinary people have with well trained dogs).

      It would also open up having specific animals with distinct personalities (which, of course, animals already do have, but in this case the personalities could be more obvious) and would allow the writer to delve into the details of how different types of animals have:
      -specific ways in which they must be approached (all herbivores must be convinced that you aren’t going to eat them, which is hard when you have the binocular vision characteristic of a predator AND most predators are territorial to some degree and are very interested in establishing an order of dominance if they think you have any place in their social order or might impinge on their territory)
      -things they are especially good at (crows can solve all kinds of complex problems and can actually communicate with each other to some degree, squirrels are amazing pathfinders and could probably get into just about anyplace if they had a mind to, hawks, eagles, falcons and owls can all see in ways that humans can’t, dolphins actually CAN talk to each other and may even have names for themselves, making them a wealth of information on the oceans if you could understand them, mockingbirds can imitate all kinds of sounds, something that could make an excellent distraction, woodpeckers can put holes in more than just trees, which could be very good for key sabotage, rats are actually EXCELLENT judges of human character, UNLIKE mice, making them good spies for getting a read on a situation, raccoons have very dexterous paws that look like hands and can manipulate things fairly well, etc etc etc)
      -different ways in which they are motivated (food, yes, finding a mate, yes, protecting territory, yes, but many animals are also highly social and have complex social structures and interactions that could be taken advantage of or that could cause a communication faux pas if ignored).

1647. # Vixis Shiar'Deluson 24 Nov 2015 at 2:51 pm

      I know I’m about a month late to the game here, but I do have a few suggestions for two of the powers listed.

      Knowing Everything on Eye Contact:

      This does take most of the drama out of a scene if used incorrectly, but can be done well. The best example I can think of is from the Super-Spy show, Chuck. In that show, the main character has the entire CIA database loaded into his head, allowing him to identify certain faces, names, operations and sounds on exposure. However, most of the tasks he and his team have require a lot of discretion, so the drama comes from everyone knowing what needs to happen, but having to find a discreet way to do it. The Intersect, the device the main character has, has data gaps and whatnot in it as well, and for the majority of the first two seasons the main character is essentially used as a database and doesn’t have his skills acknowledged.

      Unnatural Charm and Beauty:

      As B. Mac said, it would best be that this is just a people person skill, and not an ability. If it is an ability, I’d say it shouldn’t be ranged. No people falling in love on eye contact or with a whisper, it makes things much easier for the main character. Too easy. My advice, if it must be an ability, is have it require skin contact. Examples would include Rogue, and the female character from Misfits. These abilities are very different, as Rogue steals powers and kills you by touch, and the other simply induces an insatiable urge to have sex with the user. But both require touch, and both can make certain situations much more dramatic than if they were ranged abilities. Though in the show Misfits, the female’s power was an extension of how she portrayed herself as a promiscuous person as an attempt to gain attention. She very rarely actually used the ability itself, though one could see the use as a form of distraction.

      If you feel so inclined to use it as a non-touch based ability, I’d suggest reading up on a sword called Sightblinder. The sword, in the Book of Swords series, shields the user from discovery by making others see them as someone they either fear or love. But since those aren’t the same for everyone, it isn’t the most effective.

1648. # Vixis Shiar'Deluson 24 Nov 2015 at 3:50 pm

      How do these characters sound, based on base powers(*) and general skills/traits(-)? There is a lot more to them than this, but this is the baseline…

      VILLAINS:

      Jaizon:
      *Possession Expert
      *Adept Mind Control/Imprint
      -Master Manipulator
      -Expert Strategist
      -Adaptive
      -Arrogant
      -Fickle

      Nixial:
      *Master of Alien Hive Mind
      *Master Bone Manipulation
      *Adept Alchemist
      -Master Strategist
      -Extremely Arrogant
      -Conceited
      -Sociopathic

      Vixis:
      *Extreme Strength and Durability
      *Adept Earth Manipulation (via backdoor from France into Sentient Terraformation Device in America)
      -Adept Strategist
      -Expert Manipulator
      -Charismatic
      -Empathetic
      -Natural Born Leader

      HEROES:

      Matthew:
      *Expert Alchemist (force atoms together or apart to change type and or state of matter, can also change the shape matter takes by affecting molecular structures)
      -Cynical
      -Adept Strategist
      -Inquisitive
      -Strong Willed

      Alfred:
      *Expert Energy Location Manipulation (can change direction energy is traveling, or the shape it takes; can NOT change form of energy, or absorb it)
      -Expert Strategist
      -Ambitious
      -Pompous
      -Sociopathic

      Wilbur:
      *Adept Energy Manipulation (can change the form or type of energy and can absorb/eject it; can NOT change direction or shape of energy)
      -Adept Manipulation
      -Adept Strategist
      -Reckless
      -Emotional
      -Selfish

1649. # B. McKenzieon 24 Nov 2015 at 9:24 pm

      “This does take most of the drama out of a scene if used incorrectly, but can be done well. The best example I can think of is from the Super-Spy show, Chuck. In that show, the main character has the entire CIA database loaded into his head, allowing him to identify certain faces, names, operations and sounds on exposure.” Access to a CIA database in a spy show would presumably provide some useful information, but I don’t think it’d gut the potential for uncertainty like a “know everything” superpower would. (For example, the CIA’s information could be outdated, incorrect, deliberately faked, and/or correct information that’s been horribly misinterpreted and/or correct information that could be useful but is missing critical context).

1650. # Vixis Shiar'Deluson 25 Nov 2015 at 9:48 am

      Exactly the point I was going for when I was suggesting it.

1651. # MurderousHDon 03 Dec 2015 at 11:51 am

      So i’m writing a story and my hero is a young girl named Alex. She can read and hear thoughts but she just recently got them and doesn’t know how to control them and I can’t think of a way she can fix this or anything. I need help and none of my friends will help me

1652. # Haunter_Hunteron 07 Dec 2015 at 1:24 am

      How would Chrysopoeia work as a superpower, how could one use it to stimulate a story.

1653. # B. McKenzieon 07 Dec 2015 at 6:49 pm

      “How would Chrysopoeia work as a superpower…” I’d recommend checking this out. Also, I feel like the ability to turn things into gold would probably be more useful for a side-character. For example, Heroes uses a side-character that makes gold to explain how the organization he works with has accumulated so much wealth/power. But it’d be extremely hard to use in most action scenes (combat or otherwise), so it’s not the most intuitive choice for a main character.

1654. # John McMullenon 12 Dec 2015 at 3:00 pm

      Let’s try this comment again, without names or URLs because it’s not my intent to promote any one of them. (I do love the RPG hobby, so I don’t mind promoting the hobby as a whole.)

      If all you’re looking for is a categorized list of powers, I’m surprised that no one has mentioned superhero roleplaying games. The old-school ones catalogue the powers. Some also provide ways to make them more effective or limit them, so that you can personalize the powers a great deal. Some don’t, of course, and some are more about creating a comics story experience so they’re more about creating the kind of structure that Syd Field talked about, but in a superhero context.

      If you already have an idea for the powers in your story, you don’t need that sort of help at all, and it might even be a straitjacket, so don’t do that. If you are looking for inspiration, a list of existing powers might be useful to you.

      There are PDFs of superhero roleplaying games legally available for free in various places on the Internet. You can buy them at online rpg games stores (use a search engine to find one). You can even buy hardcopy ones at a games store, though they’re relatively rare compared to the fantasy ones.

      One thing that I notice in the source material (comics) is that the powers frequently mirror the psyche of the character. (Not always, and certainly not in the older characters.) However, the person afraid of being hurt emotionally might get to be tough as a power–things bounce off him or her–so that’s symbolic of their emotional wall. A character with mind control might be a manipulator, more so if the mind control is limited in some way.

1655. # John McMullenon 15 Dec 2015 at 6:24 am

      @MurderousHD, some questions that might be fruitful in figuring out how she controls her powers.

      How do you want her to control it? How is it out of control?

      Being able to turn the power off and on leads to different story situations than being able to block out the extra babbling in her head.

      How do the powers work? You get a different effect if she’s overwhelmed by the power when she touches someone than if they’re always in her mind.

      How does she show that she’s not in control? Does she start echoing the other person’s movements or seeing through their eyes, becoming functionally blind in crowds? Or is she overwhelmed by the feels?

      Knowing how she responds might give you ideas about how she controls the power without invoking strange Tibetan mental disciplines.

1656. # Tanner Wilkersonon 26 Dec 2015 at 7:33 am

      Can I get a simple list of five or six powers for my character? I’m trying to make a roleplaying game where me and my brother have to remember how to use powers we haven’t used in 11 years to defeat an enemy that knows everything about us. I’d appreciate the help. Thank you for your time.

1657. # B. McKenzieon 27 Dec 2015 at 9:55 am

      Tanner, can you take 5 or 6 powers from the above list?

1658. # Vixis Shiar'Deluson 05 Jan 2016 at 1:41 pm

      Does memory reading/absorption sound like a believable sub-ability of energy absorption? The character I am writing can absorb energy in pretty much any form, and use it to speed his metabolism and healing and whatnot, or can redirect it in short to medium range blasts. He can not control energy outside of his body, so there is no form of ‘bending’ involved. After it is absorbed, it can be changed into other forms of energy too, but he must physically command it to, and it only changes just as it is leaving his body. But just as he can absorb energy, he can absorb life energy. The way I have his memory reading go is that he essentially absorbs some of the electrical energy stored in the brain of the dying person, and his body/brain keeps it in its base state, electrical impulses set to a pattern that forms a memory of an image or sound.

1659. # B. McKenzieon 05 Jan 2016 at 7:06 pm

      “Does memory reading/absorption sound like a believable sub-ability of energy absorption?” Not intuitively, no. However, with 1-2 sentences of explanation about neurology 101, I think you could swing it pretty easily.
      
      My main concern in this case would not be believability but a fear that (protagonist*) powers which kill secrets/uncertainty tend to make noncombat scenes a lot less interesting. E.g. out of all of the ways that your character could get information from another character, turning on a superpower is likely the least promising for creating dramatic opportunities. (A skill-based solution would give a protagonist much better opportunities to solve problems and navigate dialogue in interesting and impressive ways). Failing that, I’d suggest making it a VERY costly superpower to use (so that at least the protagonist’s choice to solve the issue in this way is noteworthy).
      
      *If the character is a villain, I don’t think it’d be much of a problem. (e.g. giving a villain a shortcut option may be practical for saving what little space the villain gets).

1660. # Vixison 06 Jan 2016 at 8:37 am

      He can only use that ability by killing others. When he absorbs the electrical energy from their brain, it kills them. This is something he dislikes doing, as the memories flood into his mind, making him see and feel all of them at once. It disables him for a time, and is also the primary reason he doesn’t use his abilities to get an “easy kill”

1661. # Brainiacon 06 Jan 2016 at 3:05 pm

      Mr.Multiple

      Orgin:A truck passed, and out of nowhere, toxic waste spilled on him.

      Gender:Male

      Age:28

      Height:6’7

      Real name: Tyson Turner

      personality: Easily Angered, Cares about his family more than anything in the world.

      Powers: Can turn into any person, and could make multiple copies of himself.

1662. # Brainiacon 06 Jan 2016 at 3:07 pm

      PLEASE COMMENT!!

1663. # B. McKenzieon 08 Jan 2016 at 1:43 am

      “PLEASE COMMENT!!” Okay, uhh, I don’t see any major issues with the superpower.
      
      However, I feel the origin story is hyper-generic, and I’d strongly recommend working in a major and/or unusual choice by the protagonist rather than a truck randomly spilling chemicals on him as it drives by. In general, it’d be helpful if the origin story accomplishes something besides just providing a source of superpowers (e.g. developing a key personality trait, a conflict, an unusual goal, etc)…
      
      The character’s personality sounds like it could be a lot more three-dimensional — how does he act in the (say) 80%+ of lines where he’s not angry or talking about his family? Depending on execution, a character’s regard for his family could lead to him making interesting decisions that most other characters would not have made in the same situation (e.g. see Ned Stark and the Lannisters in Game of Thrones), OR it could lead to a half-assed revenge plot when someone kidnaps/kills/threatens a loved one that’s more a plot device than a character.
      
      Lastly, not a critical problem, but I’d suggest thinking about potential alternatives to “Mr. Multiple.” Maybe something which develops something about the character besides just his superpower?

1664. # B. McKenzieon 08 Jan 2016 at 1:54 am

      “He can only use that ability by killing others… This is something he dislikes doing, as the memories flood into his mind, making him see and feel all of them at once. It disables him for a time, and is also the primary reason he doesn’t use his abilities to get an ‘easy kill.’” Okay, so at least the decision to use the power should tend to be memorable. I suspect the flood of memories wouldn’t be the most interesting way to transfer information from one character to another, but probably better than the average mind-reader (presumably, most scenes where he’s more or less disabled next to a dead/dying body will be high-stakes and high on danger, whereas someone silently/safely reading someone’s mind would probably not create interesting problems to overcome).

1665. # WILLon 10 Jan 2016 at 12:02 pm

      I’ve been creating a super hero who was stuck in a radio active, manmade tornado in world war 3. It went ove 400 mph and now he can go that fast as long as he’s flying. He also has super strength, as the tornado was strong. I need help thinking of a name for it, ideas?

1666. # B. McKenzieon 12 Jan 2016 at 7:41 pm

      “I need help thinking of a name for it, ideas?” If we’re looking at a postapocalyptic world, I feel like it might be better just to use his given name and pass on the superhero name. My thinking here is that most of the traditional rationales for having a second identity (e.g. keeping loved ones safe, protecting a civilian life/career from disruption, public disapproval, a total disregard for journalistic conflict of interest regulations, etc) might not be major factors after the apocalypse. If you had to use a superhero name, I’d recommend going heavy on grit — in contrast, I think a more conventional superhero name like Red Tornado or (God help us) Mister Twister would probably not fit the setting/plot.
      
      Also, when you say “it,” is there something unusual about the character demographically (e.g. android or something)? (If it is actually an android, though, I feel like that might be really similar to Red Tornado, barring something extraordinary in the way of character development and/or plotting).

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