Archive for the 'Superhero Nation' Category

Apr 28 2012

The Third Draft of My Guidebook Proposal

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I provide advice about how to write novels, comic books and graphic novels. Most of my content applies to fiction-writing in general, but I also provide articles specifically about superhero stories.

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Don’t Forget the Death-Ray!: How to Write Compelling Superhero Stories will help prospective authors write superhero stories that are as effective and unforgettable as the titular doomsday implement. It will cover storytelling elements such as characterization, plotting, dialogue, and how to craft villainous schemes that will make would-be Supermen wish they were back in Smallville.

 

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Mar 26 2012

LeFlamel’s Review Forum

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LF: “I have a protagonist motivated by revenge, an antagonist trying to better society, and a Master Mind manipulating them both because of romance.”

5 responses so far

Mar 24 2012

Please Donate

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I would appreciate if you would consider making a donation. Thanks.

 

 

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Mar 17 2012

Carl Shinyama’s Review Forum

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Carl: “I’d love to see the feedback on my comic book, ‘The Aloha Girl’ (currently in development).”

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Mar 17 2012

Cresc’s Review Forum

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Cresc: “I am currently developing a superhero comic titled ‘Hi-Tech Girl’ with the intent to publish digitally.”

23 responses so far

Mar 12 2012

If You’re a Fan of Chess…

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I found this Bobby Fischer graphic novel interesting.  It’s refreshing to see a use of chess that isn’t a Hollywood cliche (e.g. the villain bullying the hero around the board until the hero unleashes a checkmate at the last moment).  I think the characterization could be stronger, though–that would probably help give it some appeal beyond chess fans.

 

If you’re not a chess fan, it’s similar to a sport, but with more violence*, State Department shenanigans, and (above all) bedroom hijinx with Russians of dubious character.  In most sports, if a guy flops, he’s probably trying to draw a foul call from a referee.  In chess, a guy flops because he drank a KGB cocktail.

 

*Assuming you’re playing it right.  Who would waste poison on a beginner?

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Mar 09 2012

TheTacosAreHere’s Review Forum

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Mar 07 2012

Huzzah, Part 1

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Candlemark & Gleam is releasing Matt Adams’ superhero novel, I, Crimsonstreak this May.  I’m not sure which of his signature feats is more impressive–getting published or surviving a man-eating frog–but my panel of publishing consultants* agreed that the publishing deal would pay better.

 

*Three hobos and a bus-driver.  The bus-driver may have misunderstood my question, because he threatened to throw me into the street if I tried to pay my fare in frog legs.

 

 

If you’d like to be part 2 of the only series that combines publishing congratulations with man-eating fauna, please let me know if you have any exciting writing news to share.  (You’ll get a free link and help remind prospective authors that the light at the end of the tunnel isn’t necessarily an oncoming train).

 

 

I’m not sure if this counts as a preemptive huzzah, but I’m upping my New Year’s resolution from 275,000 hits this year (25% more than last year) to 300,000 hits (36% more).  So far, traffic this year is up 31% compared to the same period last year.  Thanks for reading!

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Mar 02 2012

MoguMogu’s Review Forum

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MoguMogu writes: “A socially inept loner is thrust into the world of superheroes against her will. She can either run away and and abandon everyone that needs her or fight it out at the cost of her health and sanity. She doesn’t want to be famous or save the world; she just wants to be left alone.

 

Target audience: Humans. Preferably alive.

 

I’m looking to get published, so in the form of reviews, spare nothing. As long as it’s constructive, I’ll take it.”

18 responses so far

Mar 02 2012

M. Happenstance’s Review Forum

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Mar 01 2012

Nightwire’s Review Forum

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NW writes:

“I’ve been gestating a concept for my steampunk-superhero novel, Ghost In The Machine. It is set in a Constructed World plagued with individuals who suffer from a mental condition called Tinker’s Syndrome (or Mad Scientist’s Disease).

 

My protagonist, a young Tinker named Matthew Bartholomew Grayson, is a sophomore at the University of Cogsworth (think Unseen University for mad scientists). He is the son of Maxwell Grayson, a renowned toymaker (for being the only one of his craft to include a self-destruct mechanism in his toys).

 

Matthew’s alter-ego is the Gremlin of Cogsworth. He has some sort of mind-link to a dead gremlin, which effectively causes him to share his mind between two bodies (the human one and the gremlin one). He is able to jump conciousness between two bodies at will, yet he cannot control both at one. So whenever he uses one body, the other one is basically dead.

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Mar 01 2012

InfiniteRider’s Review Forum

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Infinite Rider writes: “My story is in the developmental stage. Here’s a general overview:

 

The story takes place sometime in the future. A new sport has started, Air Riding.  (Name tentative. Maybe something with Gravity or Aero).  Air Riding is a sport where riders use air boards or OT Skates to race around the city. The city is filled with gangs and these gangs all have their own territories and emblems to mark them.

 

Air Riding is used to Race for territory, battle, etc. Need For Speed sort of feel.

 

I want my main character to be a delinquent that gets in way over his head when he tries to race a member of an infamous gang. After experiencing a humiliating defeat he decides to get better. While doing so he makes his own gang and starts to work his way up.

 

How does this sound? I’m really just writing this for entertainment purposes but I may decide to go for a more serious approach. Any helpful information would be greatly appreciated.”

14 responses so far

Feb 19 2012

Zoey’s Review Forum

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Zoey: “I’m writing a YA story about a pulling pranks, getting in trouble, getting put in jail, and hitchhiking to Florida.”

17 responses so far

Feb 19 2012

Brandon’s Review Forum

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Brandon writes:

 

“Unlikely savior Bryan Deleon has discovered his true self and his powers at the young age of 13. Forced away to “Lost Angeles” by the king he raises himself until he is 18. The world is overrun by a murderous threat called the Dark Axis and there are only a select amount of individuals who can stop this plague and bring the world back to its regular state and not be entirely eaten up by the “dark sister” of Earth. Bryan and his friends must embark on a perilous journey in order to stop the world from being entirely consumed by Thrae.

 

Facing many new friends, enemies, and rivals Bryan is introduced to the real side of life, the one the media and the government, particularly the king; his father has hidden for countless years. This is the reality and it is scary, will this batch of heroes have what it takes to take back the world from tyranny or fall victim to the leech of a world.

 

Bryan is an introverted teen who lost his memory shortly after being banished by his own father. Now 18 years old, Bryan must re-discover himself and discover the harsh and overly brutal reality that life has its jagged edges and leaves deep scars. He can’t turn down his quest save if he wishes for the world to slowly implode within itself.

 

His friends are much more charismatic than him; Chase and Sarah bring out the best in him though. Through time he grows to be a very insightful and incredibly powerful catalyst who both leads a rebellion against his father’s kingdom and takes down a tyrant bent on sucking Earth dry of resources and teleporting them to Thrae.”

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Feb 10 2012

Sparx’ Review Forum

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Sparx: “I’m writing an action/comedy about the lives of superheroes not only during their crimefighting gigs, but their hectic and often funny home lives as well.

 

It doesn’t have a title yet, but it’s about a team of young superheroes (around age 20) who live in an apartment complex that houses other superhumans as well (good and bad ones). The main character is the younger brother to the team leader, but doesn’t have superpowers himself. Certain circumstances force the character to live with his brother at the apartment, along with the leader’s zany teamates.

 

The idea of this story makes one think of it as a mix between “Hey Arnold”, and “Justice Friend” from “Dexter’s Laboratory”. The target audience would be anyone 16 and up. I can add much much more detail about the entirety of this story if you have any questions.”

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Feb 09 2012

Superhero Nation Response Times

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Our reviewing options:
  • Free advice: I generally respond to writing/editing questions within 2-14 days. Please email your question to superheronation-at-gmail-dot-com or leave a comment anywhere on SN.  If you haven’t received a response within 5 days, please feel free to politely remind me once (either by emailing or commenting).
  • Expedited advice: If 2-14 days is not fast enough, I’d be happy to expedite your request for some nominal fee (like $10 / hour). If an editor’s time is not worth even $10 an hour to you, I’d suggest waiting 2-14 days for free advice. If neither of those is an option, thank you for your time, but I’d like to pass on reviewing your work because I don’t think that it will be a mutually happy experience.

 

Thanks for your questions!

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Feb 08 2012

Zyrion’s Review Forum

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Zyrion is writing a novel (target audience 12+) about a girl with brain cancer who gains telekinetic powers after her operation is interrupted by a fight between a superhero and a villain.

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Feb 08 2012

Richard’s Review Forum

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Richard writes:

“My main character is called Edward Snyde, but is mainly referred to by his surname. He is a bit of a misanthropist, and is easily agitated, but he tries to keep a mainly calm state of mind. This is because of his superpower: he can control people. This is done through a chemical he produces through his skin, that turns those that inhale it into a hallucinogenic state, in which Snyde can tell them what to do. This sounds great, but it has two drawbacks: Snyde must be completely focused at all times, and if he controls the person for two long, their basic brain functions stop, and the person being controlled dies.

 

In the world Snyde inhabits, all those with powers work for the Company: a large organization that pretty much serves as a superhuman military service. Anyone with powers who does not work in the Company (this includes criminals, old people- anyone) are collectively known as Manics, and are brought down by the heroes. Hero training begins at thirteen, and they can stop doing active crime fighting (but not leave the Company) after 30 years of service.

 

The main plot of the story revolves around Snyde and his division of beginning heroes (they have all just started in the Company). There are five mutants in the group:
-Shepherd (Snyde’s codename)
-Bonfire, a character who I also want to go into depth with. He can release large quantities of thermal energy, as well as absorbing other forms of energy, then converting them. He is the opposite of Snyde: Whilst he is resourceful, calm and antisocial, Bonfire is headstrong, arrogant and eager to be the center of attention.
-Specter, the stereotypical ‘little miss backstabber’. She has the power to enter people’s dreams, something that scares Snyde (he hates the thought that others can enter his head when he is unaware of it).
-Electron, the daughter of their first villain, Techulon (excuse for the cheesy name: her mother was an old school hero fan). She has the power to control technology through electrical signals
-Division, a highly religious boy that can replicate himself. He is also a sadist, and this troubles him deeply.

 

I want to show the development of the team members as individuals, and how the actions they take change one another (spoiler: Snyde becomes a manic). I also want to show the Company as both a good thing and a bad: whilst it keeps those that the public would be afraid of on a leash, and uses their powers for the good of mankind, there are some things that seem a little off (for example, using children as bio-weapons, and categorizing them based on their powers: Snyde has a purple ring on his chest, because he is psychic, and Bonfire has red, as his powers are energy based. This open discrimination creates a lot of tension, as psychics are generally seen as trouble, energy powers as big headed, and the children of Manics as evil.)

 

Any comments are greatly appreciated, as I want this novel (if I ever write it) to be as good as possible.”

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Feb 03 2012

Ani’s Review Forum

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“Hi there, I’m Ani, a newbie to posting but a long time reader, and I’d like some opinions.

 

My newest idea is about a teenage girl named Jessie who has been working to defeat the forces of the supernatural since she was ten years old, when the ghost of her mother returned to help her grandfather train Jessie. She’s seventeen now, and she regularly fights these forces, what she fights varies from week to week, but includes things such as vampires, werewolves, and ghosts – all in the classical sense. However, the biggest thing she fights are the Boogeymen, ghosts of emotions who cause havoc and pain wherever they go in their quest to destroy. Boogeymen can only be seen by those who know exactly what they are and believe in them – such as Jessie and Derek (we’ll get to him), and children, who believe in such monsters under the bed.

 

Jessie is not focused on being popular or getting boys, and will not fall apart the first cute boy she comes across. The drama comes mostly from her two worlds intersecting, her friends finding out about her abilities and ‘night job’, and the tension between her grandfather and her over the ‘future of the family power’. Her abilities come from meditation and balance, meaning that she needs to stay focussed and calm or run the risk of getting herself killed in action. Essentially, she’s a ninja. A redheaded, British descended ninja.

 

The rest of the cast includes Samantha a.k.a. Sam, Jessie’s sports loving, tomboy best friend who has a major crush on Derek. Tristan, the childhood best friend of the girls, who is not actually in love with either of them. He’s into technology and inventing. And then there’s Derek, the stereotypically hottest and most popular guy in school, who, in all actuality, is a huge dork and loves all things supernatural, often tripping over his words in trying to protect his reputation. He’s generally a nice guy though, and hangs out with everyone, particularly Jessie and Co.

 

There’s not much in the way of plot yet. But I do know that Sam already knows about Jessie’s little hobby, Tristan is suspicious of what they do in their spare time – which actually leads to a subplot where he thinks they are secretly dating and ‘outs’ them to the whole school. He later finds out the truth though and proceeds to try and make new gadgets for Jessie. And Derek ends up in the middle of it all due to his paranoid and supernatural loving ways. Add on the fact that Jessie’s Mom tends to hang around and chat with her, though Jessie and her grandfather are the only ones who can see him, and her grandfather constantly pushing her to become the ultimate fighter and wanting her to take over the family, and I think I have something relatively interesting.

 

Thoughts?”

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Feb 02 2012

Hobbes’ Review Forum

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Feb 01 2012

Dan Lee’s Review Forum

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Feb 01 2012

Green Kid’s Review Forum

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Green Kid says: “I’ve started work on a teen superhero novel about a boy who develops super powers after being exposed to a chemical dumped in the local lake by a large corporation conducting research on possible ways to create a superhuman. It’s very early in the process and I’ve barely written anything, but I’d like to see what people have to say about my ideas and how I can make them better. By the way, I am very new at this and I don’t have a lot of experience.”

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Jan 30 2012

Tehonym’s Review Forum

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Jan 10 2012

Kahi’s Review Forum

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Kahi: “At the moment, [I’m writing] a novel. Its about a world where superhumans have long been the cause for conspiracy and secrecy, but have recently entered the public eye in the last decade. While the world is adjusting to these superhumans walking among them, a mutant is discovered that has the ability to sense and create oil. The governments of the world all take interest in the mutant, and are prepared to enter into another World War to have such a valuable skill on their side.”

 

Target audience: “I’m not sure what the target audience would be…I’m suspecting male teenagers would be the primary audience for this sort of thing, but there is a chance that an older audience might find it interesting, as well as a female audience.”

 

“’Don’t sugar-coat your advice, but please try to be polite.’ While this is my first time posting something like this on an open forum, I really want to know what others think about this premise/idea.”

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Jan 07 2012

Young Author’s Review Forum

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Jan 06 2012

Comic Book Guy’s Review Forum

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Comic Book Guy: “I have an conceptual idea for a total redesign of the DC comic universe and would like to know what people of work I’ve done on the members of the Justice League.”

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Jan 02 2012

Damzo’s Review Forum

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Jan 01 2012

Check Out “Screws Loose”

SN guest writer Jeremy Melloul is trying to raise funds for his upcoming comic book on KickStarterScrews Loose is a supernatural military thriller about a team of mercenaries that finds a mysterious crate.  Even a $10 donation gets you a copy of the comic (when it comes out) and a $25 donation gets you a copy and character designs.  I have donated $150 in the off-hand chance that the mysterious crate holds a bathtub full of rabid mongeese.  “That’ll teach you to be a mercenary in a supernatural thriller!”

 

(I wonder if there’s any chance his thank you card will have a sketch of his characters fighting off a bathtub of rabid mongeese.  That would be the most badass thank you card I’ve ever seen).

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Jan 01 2012

2012 Resolutions and 2011 Summary

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My 2011 resolutions for SN:

  • Increase site traffic from 150,000 hits to 200,000 (around 25% growth).  I actually had about 219,000 (roughly 38% growth).   
  • Write at least 100 writing articles.  Including guest articles, we had about 105.
  • Get published.  Not yet!

 

My 2012 resolutions for SN:

 

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Dec 23 2011

Legolas Arrow’s Review Forum

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Legolas Arrow: “I’m working on a story about superheroes fighting a variety of villains trying to take over the world.  Among the villains, there are factions that plan to take out other factions when they take over the world, and then the last faction divides into factions, until it’s the ultimate power struggle between two supreme villains. In other words, if they manage to take control, it’s like The Hunger Games; alliances can only be temporary. The story might also have various side-plots, such as the story of Shadow Assassin or what happens when half the superheroes become convinced the other half is evil.  (That idea is pending).”

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