I'm a former assistant editor with advice about how to write novels, comic books and graphic novels. Most of my content applies to fiction-writing in general, but I also provide articles specifically about superhero stories.

Does your title help readers answer at least three of the following questions about your novel? If not, it probably doesn’t say enough about the work.

• What’s the genre? (Action, comedy, sci-fi, fantasy, mystery, romance, horror, etc).
• What’s the subgenre? (Are we talking about an action with… Superheroes? Military/espionage? A natural disaster?  Adventurers? Vampires/supernatural creatures? Mythological figures? etc).
• What’s the inciting event?  (What event throws the main character out of his status quo/comfort zone?)
• What’s the main character like?  (Anything that makes him more interesting to prospective readers or suggests his role–CAUTION: naming him does not necessarily accomplish either)
• What’s the main antagonist like? (Same as for the protagonist)
• What’s the setting like? (Time and/or place)
• What’s the central goal of the main character and/or what’s at stake if he loses?
• What’s the author’s style like?
• Is there an interesting contrast between elements of the title?

If the title doesn’t nail at least three of these, I’d recommend rewriting it and/or starting over.  Here are some examples that I enjoyed.

Captain Freedom: A Superhero’s Quest for Truth, Justice, and the Celebrity He So Richly Deserves

• Main character: a highly self-entitled, egomaniacal superhero, maybe a parody of Superman
• Goal: celebrity and recognition
• Contrast: The idealistic, lofty name “Captain Freedom” vs. his preposterously petty goal.
• Author style: I’d totally pick this up, assuming I could survive the cover.

Saddam Hussein and the Hippies from Space

• Main character and antagonist: Either Saddam Hussein and the space hippies or vice versa
• Genre: science fiction/comedy
• Author’s style: Wow.  I love the contrast, too.

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1. Be careful about needlessly long titles, particularly ones loaded with separate phrases. They’re typically less inviting to prospective readers and harder for people to remember. Unusually bizarre titles, like Saddam Hussein and the Hippies from Space, have more latitude here. (Regardless of length, they will be memorable).

2. If your title does not appeal to prospective readers, start over! Some words that rarely mean much to prospective readers include fictional character and place names.  Alternately, some authors use puns.  If the reader immediately makes prospective readers smile, fine. If readers will only understand the pun after reading the work, they won’t ever find out how witty the pun is… because they won’t open the book.

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I named both my products (the writing advice website and the comic book series) Superhero Nation.  I’d like readers to be able to Google one and not get confused with the other, so I’ll rename one.  Probably the comic, because changing this website’s URL would break of all of our incoming links.  Ick.

So now I’m just trying to come up with a placeholder title for a wacky office comedy about an accountant-turned-secret agent and his mutant alligator partner.  At this late hour, these seemed remotely acceptable. What do you think?

• THE TAXMAN MUST DIE

[alternate word: accountant]

• GARY MUST DIE

(Normally, I think “Gary” is far too bland a name to be used in a title, but I like the contrast between the normal name and the extraordinary phrase).

• CLOSE ENOUGH FOR GOVERNMENT WORK
• SANITY A PLUS, MARKSMANSHIP ESSENTIAL
• DEATH COMES FOR THE TAXMAN
• DEATH AND TAXES
• DEATH AND TAXES (BUT NOT IN THAT ORDER)

If you’d like to suggest something else, I’d love to hear it.

I finally came up with a title that I like enough to use in my proposal.  Don’t Forget the Death-Ray!  Everything You Need to Write Superhero Novels and Comic Books. What do you think?

Cadet Davis reviews and revises the titles of 30 manuscripts submitted to a writing workshop. This will help you evaluate and improve your titles.

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This is a list of the top 35 bestselling paperback mass-market novels.  Afterwards, I have some observations about the titles as a whole.

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An e-mailer asks:

When you guys review titles, you frequently suggest that the title go farther to distinguish itself from other books with a similar setting.  For example, you said that the manuscript Questor failed to distinguish itself from other Roman stories, but how many Roman stories are there?  Why would you need to distinguish yourself within such a small subset of books?

Thanks for your e-mail, Giuseppe.  Questor’s title failed to distinguish its premise.  The setting is uncommon, but what happens in the book?  What is the hero trying to accomplish in ancient Rome?  Generally, the best titles identify the book’s premise.

• His Majesty’s Dragon (“what if the war against Napoleon was fought with dragons?”)
• Soon I Will Be Invincible: (“what if we told a superhero story mostly from the supervillain’s perspective?”)

Some other titles neglect the premise and focus on the subgenre and setting.  That may be sufficient, but it’s generally not as impressive.

• Superhero Nation.  The title suggests it’s a superhero story set in the real world, but you’d have to look at the book cover to know that the book is mainly about an unlikely police officer and his non-human partner.
• Questor.  It’s a story set in ancient Rome, but that’s just the setting.  What is the premise?  What happens?  What is the hero attempting to accomplish? My guess is that the setting isn’t interesting enough to sell the book on its own.

Cadet Davis reviews and revises the titles of 30 manuscripts submitted to a writing workshop. This will help you evaluate and improve your titles.

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1) Story (and variations like tale, legend, ballad, book, etc). Let’s say your book is named Carl’s Story. The word “story” insults the audience’s intelligence. We can see it’s a story. Furthermore, the word “story” fails to offer any information that would convince a reader to read this story. What sort of story is this?  I would only recommend using these sorts of words in the title for humorous effect  (Ballad of the Drunken Squeegee-Master) or to convey information that isn’t immediately obvious (Autobiographies from Death Row).

2) Man/Person. Generic nouns are usually vague, which makes them poorly-suited for a title. For example, Two Men and a Sword is bland and forgettable. Two Firemen and a Sword is more intriguing. Try to replace generic words with ones that provide more information about the story to prospective readers.

3) Song. This is like “story,” but even more aggravating. Unless your book is literally about a musician or music, please do not use “song” in your title.

4) Heart. This is usually a generic and ineffective way to suggest your story is emotionally driven. Which characters experience which emotions? Why should we care?

5) Night/Black/Dark/Darkness.  These are typically used ineffectively to suggest that the story is dark and foreboding. You can do better. For example, Requiem for a Dream. If you use something like night/black/darkness anyway, please at least combine it with something unexpected to intrigue readers. For example, Darkness at Noon or the series title His Dark Materials.

6) Stranger. This word is often superfluous in a title and can usually be replaced with a more specific, powerful noun. Let’s say your title is The Strangers Among Us. You can replace “stranger” here with a more interesting and specific noun. If the title were The Soldiers Among Us, for instance, we would understand that the soldiers are strangers compared to “us.”

7) Boring adjectives. I’ve seen The Green Dragon… The Strongest Barbarian… The Forest Ranger. If you use an adjective, make sure it’s one that readers will care about.  As a rule of thumb, unexpected and unusual adjectives tend to be most interesting.  For example, compare The Green Dragon to Backyard Dragon or His Majesty’s Dragon.

8 ) Fictional place names. Readers aren’t familiar with your fictional kingdoms and cities. We probably won’t care about them.  Please focus on the elements of your story that will engage prospective readers. Alternately, if you need to refer to a place, it may be more effective to name its type of building rather than the building specifically. For example, Murder in the Cathedral or Indiana Jones and the Temple of Doom.

9) Fictional character names. We don’t know who your characters are, so their names will probably not interest us much unless they are extraordinarily evocative, such as  Barbara Bloodbath. Instead of naming a fictional character, it’s usually more effective to refer to him by his profession or rank or something else that describes his role in the story.  For example, His Majesty’s Dragon is a far more effective novel title than Temeraire would have been.

10) A reference clear to few prospective readers. For example, a title like Gethsemane would be unwise unless you were writing for an audience that is highly Bible-savvy.  Alternatively, if you use a reference that a prospective reader doesn’t know, is the title effective anyway?  For example, a title like Dead Letter Office might establish a vaguely sinister mood even if you don’t know what a dead letter office is.

B. Mac reviews and revises the titles of 30 manuscripts submitted to a writing workshop. This will help you evaluate and improve your titles.

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B. Mac reviews and revises the titles of 30 manuscripts submitted to a writing workshop. This will help you evaluate and improve your titles.

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Cadet Davis reviews and revises the titles of 30 manuscripts submitted to a writing workshop. This will help you evaluate and improve your titles.

Above Average

1. Evil by Choice. This one has a lot of style and markets itself well to the readers of psychologically-themed and villain-as-main-character stories.
2. Rails Across the Dragonlands. This sells a steampunk fantasy well, but it would be more effective if it gave us something to care about.

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I wouldn’t recommend putting an animal in your title unless the animal actually features prominently in your book. No matter how obvious you think it is that Corporate Wolf is not actually about a Canis lupis, the red herring will throw off at least a few (and possibly many) of your readers.  It would probably be worth your time to take out the animal name, particularly if your book will be on a shelf with fantasy or science fiction offerings.

Above Average

1. Houndsditch and the Age of Meat. Even though we don’t know who Houndsditch is, “the Age of Meat” slaps readers in the face. And it foreshadows how frighteningly funny the story is. Also, there’s meat involved.
2. Self Love. Definitely a head-scratcher, but an intriguing head-scratcher. However, it’s vague. Adding more details would probably benefit this story.

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Cadet Davis reviews and revises the titles of 30 manuscripts submitted to a writing workshop. This will help you evaluate and improve your titles.

Above Average

1. The Merchant of Venison. This title does a remarkably good job of identifying the story as a Shakespeare parody. Also, it was the only title this week to get me to chuckle.
2. Dogs in Clogs. This was a real head-scratcher and failed to foreshadow the plot in any meaningful way, but was invitingly weird.
3. Creeping Death. It foreshadows the story and tone well. If I were rewriting it, I’d make it more subtle and less cliché.

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This article gives nine tips to writing a title that grips readers and sells your book.

1. Tell us enough about the book to make us want to read it. This is what separates bland, forgettable titles like The Dragon from classics like His Majesty’s Dragon. The more we can surmise about the plot, the better.

2. Do not use imaginary place names. Readers haven’t heard of Asgardia, Lukawanda, or whatever your fictional kingdom or city is called. Your invented words won’t interest us because they don’t mean anything to us. The only place names that will attract prospective readers are those that use English words, like the Temple of Doom. We can guess what a temple of doom is.

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Cadet Davis reviews and revises the titles of 30 manuscripts submitted to a writing workshop. This will help you evaluate and improve your titles.

Above Average

1. One Brown-Haired Girl With A Stick. This title slaps readers across the face and dares them to start reading.
2. A Labyrinth of Entrails. This story easily bests its horror competitors with comically gruesome imagery.
3. Moral Issues Aside. This has potential, but I think it would help to identify its genre and subgenre or add details about the plot. For example, “Moral Issues Aside, It’s Time For You to Die” or “Moral Issues Aside, Killing My Boss is a Bad Business Move.”

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This article will cover how to write novel titles that sell and when/how to name your chapters.

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