Oct 09 2008

Improving a Weak Quote

I found this Halo quote on TV Tropes.

Cortana: Just one question: what if you miss?

Master Chief:  I won’t.

The dialogue needs more flair.  If I wrote a similar conversation between two Superhero Nation characters, it might look something like this.

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  1. Bretton 11 Oct 2008 at 5:07 pm

    Suppose you wrote this for a “man of few words”? Like Batman? I could see this line (or something close) working for Batman.

  2. B. Macon 11 Oct 2008 at 7:30 pm

    I couldn’t quite see Batman threatening to bite off someone’s face. But I agree that this could be easily adapted for Batman as well as most freakishly determined heroes. You would just need to change the first frame to fit with the hero’s enemies better. You’d also have to adapt the punchline in the second frame, which would be slightly more complicated.

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