Jun 25 2008
5 Common Mistakes for First-Time Novelists
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This short article will help beginning novel-writers avoid five common mistakes that will usually cause publishers to throw out a manuscript.
1. Please do not have a character gaze at his own reflection in a mirror, pool or any other reflective surface. That’s a cheesy way to describe what a character looks like and will cause most professional publishers to reject your manuscript. Fortunately, there are better ways for you to establish a character’s appearance than having him gaze at himself, such as his actions, backstory and dialogue. If he nervously steps on a scale, we’ll visualize him as overweight. If he’s a boxer, we’ll visualize him as well-built.
2. Be careful with scenes that feature characters eating. Eating scenes are typically boring filler. Every scene should either develop a character or advance the plot, but eating scenes are usually extended chats with sensory imagery mixed in. Don’t let your novel manuscript sound like a food review.
If you use an eating scene, make it interesting by adding danger or intrigue. Perhaps the dinner is part of some larger conflict, like a white woman bringing home a black fiancee to her disapproving family. Or maybe someone’s poisoned the food. As a rule of thumb, if the scene is about what the characters are eating, it probably sounds more like a food review than a story.
3. Please don’t switch point-of-view midchapter. Switching POV mid-chapter will disorient and confuse readers. Generally, it’s smoother and less confusing to add a chapter-break whenever you want to switch POV. If something has happened that’s important enough to make you want to change POVs, it’s probably important enough to justify a chapter-break.
4. Even if you’re writing medieval fantasy, I’d recommend avoiding melodramatic syntax and language. Phrases like “is it not?” and anything that sounds Shakespearean tend to disorient modern audiences. You don’t have to use modern slang, of course, but you are writing for a modern audience. So please make sure that modern audiences can easily read your book! One way you can combine an old-fashioned style with modern legibility is by avoiding contractions. Depending on how old your readers are, you might also consider using longer sentences.
Relatedly, I’d advise against quoting Shakespeare and other classical English authors. It may come off as pretentious, particularly if your novel is written for casual and/or younger readers.
5. I recommend avoiding characters that switch back and forth between several species. These characters are often usually poorly-developed Mary Sues.
This article was the first part of a series. If you’d like to read about how to avoid other common writing mistakes, you’ll find the links just below.
What about the American Dragon? He switches between a dragon and human.
Hmm, that’s a good point. For readers that aren’t familiar with the show American Dragon, the main character and a few extras are humans that have the ability to transform into dragons. I’m inclined to excuse the show’s part-time dragons because the show places a limitation on Jake’s ability to transform (they can’t be seen by bystanders*). Also, the show bends over backwards to demonstrate that being a dragon is as much a liability as an asset for Jake.
A major problem with part-time dragons in the average fantasy story is that having two species is never actually a liability, because the PTD is free to switch between the two depending on which is convenient. That may feel inauthentic, because readers might expect that something as important as, uhh, your species is something that you wouldn’t just swap out of because the other species is more useful in a given instance. I can’t imagine that the dragon’s attachment to being a dragon would be so casual that he’d give up being dragon (even temporarily) because it’s more convenient. At the risk of drawing a totally insipid and stupid analogy, no black would put on white-face so that he fits in better at a golf tournament, and I think a dragon would be at least as attached to his species as a human is to his race. It generally feels inauthentic, I think, when a PTD changes for convenience’s sake. For example, if a PTD changes to human form to attend a dinner because the hosts either don’t like dragons or because it would be difficult to serve a dragon guest, I think it would probably be more authentic for the dragon to demand to be accommodated as he is, whether or not he has the ability to transform himself into a human.
*Notwithstanding that every potential witness is a flaming idiot and can be convinced that, say, dragons doing battle with genies are part of a middle school talent show.
1. I only mention the appearance of my characters passively. Like: “My mum brushed some of my fringe out of my eyes” shows that the character has a relatively long fringe. Or: “Her brown eyes were lit up with happiness”, because it adds more detail to the sentence.
2. I have a few scenes where the characters are eating, but it’s more about the conversation than the food.
3. I always change chapters when changing from first to third person.
4. Oh, God, please no.
5. Doesn’t apply.
I think your approach to #1 is pretty good. I appreciate that your sentence does more than tell us that the character’s eyes are brown.
You approach to #2 sounds workable as well.
I’m slightly concerned about the concept of mixing first-person narration and third-person narration in a single novel. There’s probably a good reason from your perspective (something like making sure that the reader gets relevant information that the main character doesn’t have access to, I bet), but I’m not sure if the readers will get the change. I don’t think I’ve ever seen a book try it before.
Oh God, no, is just what I thought for #4…
#5 is kind of niche. Originally I had a longer explanation there, but I figured that it just doesn’t matter to enough readers to warrant that space.
What about the Animorphs? They change species a lot, and it works well.
Here are a few reasons that I think it works pretty well for the Animorphs.
1. There are two strong restrictions on the morphing powers: secrecy and time-limit. So it’s well-established that the characters can’t use it whenever they like, however much they like. These restrictions are easy for readers to understand, which makes them strong and dramatic obstacles for the characters.
2. Additionally, the characters can only morph into animals that they’ve “acquired” by touch. This reduces the potential for characters to pull a solution out of their ass. However, it does give the characters a chance to prepare for a situation by acquiring an appropriate animal. The character’s preparation can be very interesting and can help set up the main plot well.
3. Since morphing is the only special power in the series, it’s easy for the readers and author to keep track of what the characters can do. I don’t think it works as well when it’s part of an ensemble.
4. The books bend over backwards to show that the animal forms affect the personalities and mindsets of the characters, when they are in those bodies. Usually, when a fantasy character can turn into a dragon or something like that, the author doesn’t use any personality change. It makes the transformer more of a Mary Sue. It also makes the transformation feel more like flicking a switch. “I think I’ll be a dragon today!” See my comment about Jake Long above for an example of why Jake Long handled this much better.
5. At the end of the two-hour limit, the character is stuck in his animal body forever. That adds the prospect of danger, especially after the author took the unusual step of actually turning one of the characters into a full-time hawk.
In contrast, here are a few warning signs that suggest a shapeshifting character is not that interesting. For example, I find Beast Boy’s powers a bit dull.
–He can shift into any animal he wants.
–He can use his powers in public, wherever and whenever he wants.
–There is no time limit or any other limit on his powers.
–The change is purely physical; it doesn’t affect his personality or anything like that.
“3. Please don’t switch point-of-view midchapter.”
I recently reviewed my best friend’s first fan fic. It started off with all the characters singing. I can’t remember what they were singing, but it was basically written like this:
“X!” sang Dory. “Y!” sang SpongeBob. “Z…uh…I can’t remember the words.” sang Patrick.
They were all in separate houses.
Dory… SpongeBob… Patrick? Do I even want to know?