Sep 01 2008

Does this writing site work?

The site is http://www.annecordwainer.com/ .  Anne is a friend of mine and I would really appreciate if you would check out her site, particularly if you’re a fan of real-world magic stories.  Does the site work?  It feels like there’s something not quite clicking, but I’m not sure what.

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5 Responses to “Does this writing site work?”

  1. Jacobon 02 Sep 2008 at 12:09 am

    I notice that she quoted B. Mac saying the following: “I’m a… hard-core military action junkie. I normally revile high fantasy stories. I think that this story is pretty interesting, which suggests that it has a lot of cross-genre appeal . . . Good luck getting published! I’m confident that you’ll be able to get it done with this piece.”

    First, the last two lines of that won’t matter to the audience and should be removed. Second, the author should have asked B. Mac to speak more specifically about why this fantasy book might appeal to Tom Clancy readers. If B. Mac actually meant to suggest that this book had broad appeal to military-action readers (rather than just himself), that would be truly interesting, but neither the synopsis or other reviews reinforce that. It’s not clear whether B. Mac meant just himself or military readers in general…

    The website has a few modest-to-serious visual design issues, too. The photographed skyscape (Boston, I believe) is acceptable but parochial and the font choice is a bit forgettable. I didn’t like the caption very much: “Enter a new and magical world… but it’s ourworld.” The picture of Boston already told us that, didn’t it?

    I don’t like that, on the left side of my screen, the “WHAT’S NEW” and the sidebar subheaders (like “Flying Solo”) touch the black border. Some of the text-spacing is too small.

  2. Cadet Davison 02 Sep 2008 at 8:54 pm

    Yeah…

    –the plot seems rote and the genre emphasis isn’t clear. If this is supposed to be an action-heavy story, I’d *highly* recommend axing phrases like “decaying ethics and poor accountability” from the book synopsis. That sounds like a Congressional indictment, not a novel.

    –“A subculture which keeps its existence secret even from the government is by definition outside the law. Since magic is unknown to the justice system, sorcerers rely on an antiquated system of family honor to maintain order and prevent immoral behavior. It’s not working any more.” I’d recommend revising that to “For generations, wizards relied on their own families to maintain their laws. It isn’t working any more.” Telling us what is “by definition outside the law” is off-target.

  3. B. Macon 02 Sep 2008 at 9:18 pm

    Foolish contributors! You didn’t like anything about the site design? For example, I found it pretty simple and mostly easy on the eyes.

    As for the writing, I don’t really remember the book. I don’t think it was military action, though, or that the typical M.A. fan would enjoy it.

  4. Anonymouson 03 Sep 2008 at 2:03 am

    The forum is a nice touch.

  5. Anne C.on 03 Sep 2008 at 6:07 am

    Hi folks,

    Thanks for the visits and the downloads. When you’re launching a new site, every little bit helps. I hope at least some of you enjoyed the stories.

    They’re not military action. I quoted that to suggest cross-genre appeal, but I can whittle B. Mac’s quotation down more if it’s misleading. I can twiddle the style sheet some more, too, although I’m loathe to use too much real estate for news items . . . I’ll see what I can do.

    I appreciate the discussion. Hope to see some of you back again!

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