Dec 27 2010

Flyover City is finished!

Joel Wyatt just finished his 41st issue (chapter) of his free superhero story.  It strikes me as sort of a Seinfeldesque take on superheroes.  Here’s the protagonist reflecting on a fight between a superhero and a villain.

But you would be mistaken. Centrifuge, man: this guy’s got class, style… that certain je ne sais quoi that makes him the perfect dark horse for your super-group. His body’s center of gravity shifts wildly when he’s under stress, like the beads in one of those South American rainsticks, making the guy FLIP OUT, like a Topsy-Turvy Titan.

Now that is a freakin’ subtitle. Market analysis my balls.

“But Joel,” you say, “He didn’t even win the battle. Deacon Struck got away.”

“You, sir,” I retort, “are a dildo.”

5 responses so far

5 Responses to “Flyover City is finished!”

  1. Sean Higginson 28 Dec 2010 at 11:54 pm

    I enjoy the final comment, but I don’t think I care for the voice here. And if I’m reading this correctly, it’s first person and that’s the narator. It would do for a character (like Jerry in Seinfeld) to have this kind of dialogue, but I’d be concerned if the entire series is written in the sort of banter. I’ll check it out when it’s not 2 AM, and perhaps provide a more substantial thought.

  2. B. Macon 30 Dec 2010 at 8:39 am

    You’re right; this is the narrator addressing the audience. Most of the story isn’t in second-person.

  3. Sean Higginson 30 Dec 2010 at 2:10 pm

    I read the first issue. It’s intriguing and working in a call center, I appreciate the character. The conversation aspect of the narration reminds me of the novel I’m working on. It works, but the stream of conciousness could get dangerous in an extended story.

  4. Sean Higginson 30 Dec 2010 at 2:13 pm

    Didn’t mean to send that yet – Also wanted to note one problem I did have with the first issue. It’s billeted as a superhero story but there are not any elements that strike me as either “super” or “heroic.” I understand a little need for backstory, but what would your thoughts be on the idea of releasing an issue (presumably with a delay before the second issue) that doesn’t incorporate the genre to which you are writing?

  5. B. Macon 30 Dec 2010 at 3:46 pm

    He decides to become a superhero in issue/chapter 10.

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