Jan 30 2012

Tehonym’s Review Forum

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  1. Tehtonymon 06 Feb 2012 at 1:33 pm

    Hello hello everyone. I am in the process of writing the first draft of a super hero comic book script/outline, and wanted to see how everyone feels about it. Thanks to the talk of plausible hero origins, today I’ll be posting just that! I want to see how people react to a hero gaining his powers shortly after birth, as opposed to being born with them.

    Though I originally intended to use this review forum to only discuss the plausibility/believability of my hero’s origin, I wouldn’t mind getting some feedback and tips on how to improve the piece. I’m fairly confident in my work, but as they say, “there’s always someone better out there!”

    At the ripe old age of 7 minutes and 21 seconds, a newborn went into cardiac arrest in the delivery room of a small Midwest hospital. For 3 minutes the medical staff employed CPR and other resuscitation techniques on him, yet nothing could restart his little heart beating. With a solemn expression and tears in his eyes, the doctor explained to the unfortunate parents there was nothing else he could do; the baby boy would never again return to the mortal coil. The father, a prospective volunteer EMT, and perhaps overly enthusiastic hospital drama devotee, argued that the staff should administer a dose of adrenaline directly to the boy’s heart in order to jump start it.

    “Just fucking do it! You’ve gotta try something else! I won’t lose my son like this!”

    “Sir, I am afraid there is nothing else that can be done. Adrenaline doesn’t work like that, and even if it did, the risks would outweigh the benefits. There is literally no chance an adrenaline shot could make this situation any better.”

    A wild look in his eyes, the father shoved past the doctor and dashed toward the crash cart. Inside a drawer labeled Epinephrine rested what the man believed to be his family’s salvation. In one graceful motion he ripped the drawer open and removed the autoinjector. Precious salvation in hand, the man leaped towards the cold newborn.

    “Stop, you can’t do this! You have no idea what you’re doing!”

    He wasn’t really listening. The father heard only the hiss of the injector releasing its sweet nectar into his son’s heart.

    “I am so sorry for your loss sir, but this isn’t the way to handle this! We will help you and your wife cope, but you must calm down and let your son go! This won’t help any…”

    The good doctor was interrupted by the sound of a baby crying and cardiac monitors beeping. The man’s desperate play had paid off.

    “No chance, eh doc? Always bet on Black.”

    The doctor’s voice failed him. All he could do was smile and nod in disbelief.

    What about the little boy? What did he have to say about all this? Nothing, really. He was content to gurgle and coo as his parents told him his name. Noah Chance Blackburn.

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