Mar 18 2010

The Walrus’ Review Forum

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  1. The Walruson 25 Mar 2010 at 4:48 pm

    Im making a four issue comic book mini series being written, drawn, inked, and lettered by myself. It takes place in real life (no superpowers, supped up cars, or over the top names and costumes.) Ive only come with two charcters so far…

    The Skull AKA Neil Johnson- A paranoid conspiracy theorist (not like the over the top kind who mumbles nonsense about girlscouts and crop circles being related) he’s a detective character and usually finds evidence that police miss. he wears a oversized coat, a scarf, jeans, t shirt, and a white panama hat. He’s called the skull because of the with cloth mask with a skull stencil sprayed on it. He uses the things around him (street signs, metal trash can lids, manhole covers, etc.) and a metal battery powered flashlight.

    Arsenal AKA Vladmir Kalishnikov- A Russian and Neil’s closest thing to a friend. He wears bullet proof vests and general riot gear. hes a tank character and a loose cannon, preffering to go in guns blazing than actually strategize. He uses guns with rubber bullets and hornets nest gernades.

    This is one of the more gritty and dark stories like those written by my hero Alan Moore. All ive got is a rough out line so far and ive never written a script in my life.

  2. Wingson 25 Mar 2010 at 5:36 pm

    I think that DC had an Arsenal at some point, and I’m almost certain that there’s at least one Skull somewhere.

    Any more details about their personalities? I’d like to hear more.

    – Wings

  3. Ghoston 25 Mar 2010 at 7:06 pm

    Walrus,
    Marvel did have a supervillian named arsenal, but he was not very widely published, and has nothing in common with your charatcer.Marvel’s Arsenal is an android built by tony stark’s father. So you should probably be fine if you use the name. I didn’t find any other character named the Skull, but I think your character reminds me of the punisher for some reason. I know that your character and the punisher have nothing in common, and the Arsenal is the gun carrying anti-hero. However, that was just the first thing the popped into my mind when I read your post.

  4. Lighting Manon 25 Mar 2010 at 8:09 pm

    Arsenal is a recurring name for Speedy, as Wings noted, and he will be returning to that name soon or already has (I haven’t gotten my pull-list from Wednesday in the mail yet) It is similar to Nightwing in that it is a grown-up version of a kid sidekick.

    http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Roy_Harper_(comics)

    http://dcu.blog.dccomics.com/2009/12/11/dcu-in-2010-the-rise-of-arsenal-and-the-fall-of-green-arrow/

    Personally, and I don’t think this is entirely coincidental, the characters mentioned seem very reminiscent in appearance and partially in personality, in my opinion to Rorschach (The Skull) and The Comedian (Arsenal) from Watchmen, although The Skull seems to have more in common with Rorschach’s inspiration, The Question than Rorschach, in terms of personality. I think that although it is helpful to have a clear inspiration, you’d be better suited by differentiating between the original work that inspired you and your secondary work. Although I will gladly admit that there is a much grander history of the “detective in a coat and hat” genre than those two characters, this seems to be very tied with them.

    Although these are established archetypes and there is a lot you can do with them , the personalities as stated are rather plain and both seem to lack a necessary hook in order for such a prevalent and defining archetype to hang on them efficiently. My suggestion would be that you look around the web site a little bit, read the articles about crafting effective and interesting characters, because even if I am jumping the gun given these are precursory character examinations, it never hurts to get advice, especially good advice such as is offered by B. Mac’s articles.

    Of course, just my opinion.

  5. B. Macon 25 Mar 2010 at 8:39 pm

    Yeah, I think you don’t need to worry about the originality of Arsenal’s name until you’re almost ready to submit. At that point, you’ll know more about the character and it’d probably be easier to come up with an alternate name if you decide to do so.

    “Im making a four issue comic book mini series being written, drawn, inked, and lettered by myself. It takes place in real life (no superpowers, supped up cars, or over the top names and costumes.) Ive only come with two charcters so far…” If realism is an important part of the plot, I think names like “The Skull” and “Arsenal” might be too Spandex-y. Kalashnikov strikes me as more effective, even for readers that don’t get the reference.

    How much do you know about the plot? What are the characters gonna be doing? What’s at stake for them?

  6. The Walruson 26 Mar 2010 at 1:28 pm

    Wow. I just realized how similar the characters are to the cast of watchmen…but I guess if I change them around then im good. I was thinking that the names were a bit superheroic earlier, and actually I was originally going to call arsenal kalishnikov but i decided to use it as a last name, Im changing it back to kalishnikov now. If anyone can give me a name for Neil Iohnson that would be great. I realized I hadnt written down either ones personality

    Johnson is a cycnic and highly sadistic and anti social, he believe progressives are evil and that everything is somehow related to a major world wide conspiracy.

    Kalishnikov is an eternal optimist and really freindly, the kind of guy you make friends with in a bar. he is a recovering alchoholic and a chain smoker.

    still working of a strong plotline
    all I’ve got is that a prostitute gets killed and Neil finds evidence that the government has something to do about it. He eventually tracks down a major conspiracy that links everything together, from the moon landing to area 51 to the crop circles. he persuades his only remaining friend, Kalishnikov, to help him before the U.S government from bombing several big cities and blaming it on cuba and the middle east so they can completely destroy both.

  7. The Walruson 08 Apr 2010 at 4:52 pm

    I havent posted in forever, many apologies. I came up with a name for johnson, I think I might call him Requim, any suggestion would be great.
    Ive got a More prevelant idea of the plot now
    Requim is on one of his nightly raids of the slums for gangs when he finds one of them is working for the national bank. he breaks into his office to find that the man part of a government plot to increase gang violence so the american people will have to relie on the government for protection. Requim tips Kalishnikov off about this and makes his way to new mexico. he breaks into area 51 and discovers a world wide plot by the UN to destroy Cuba, Russia, and the Middle East, because they consider the Middle East a threat with Al Queda and Cuba and Russia too back-water. he then gets found in the air vents and is captured. They ship him to Russia where he resigns to his fate and goes to a bar to drink his sorrows away. then a slightly drunk Kalishnikov finds him and convinces him that they need to stop this after Requim tells him what happened. Im trying to figure out a proper ending, if someone could help me that would be awesome.

  8. The Walruson 10 Apr 2010 at 2:07 pm

    Im redesigning the outfits of Requiem and Kalishnikov
    Requim is going for a vagrant look, his jacket is two sizes to large with missing buttons, held closed with the scarf around the waist, jeans with one too many holes shoes that are falling apart at the seams, and a torn mask with the features of a skull(eye sockets, nose sockets, teeth and grin).

    Kalishnikov is going to look more like a riot control unit but without the helmet and night stick, has a stalin/russian mustache and side burns. has ammo cartriges of rubber bullets, hornet nest gernades, and smoke bombs on a belt.

    Im also adding a third character called Sand
    Sand is wearing a tweed coat with a tie and a pair of jeans. He is called Sand because he uses a sandblaster on his opponets and he wears a gasmask so he doesnt inhale any of it. I got his basic design componets off of the wesley dodds sandman. Sand is a pessimist and mute outside of his outfit, but when he puts the mask on he is extremely talkitive but usually insultive to everyone.

    Im still having trouble figuring out an ending.

  9. The Walruson 11 Apr 2010 at 8:05 am

    Imgettingrid of sand, because really he has no point in the plot.

    I think Ive found the ending
    Requim and Kalishnikov hijack a plane to the US. They beat the pilots unconscience but one plane takes off Requim makes his way to it and climbs in and throws the pilot out, he proceeds to disarm the bomb and crashes the plane into the ocean where he dies in flames.

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