May 25 2009

Psycho Child’s Review Forum

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I’m writing a fantasy manga. It’s mainly about three teenagers named Cyrus, Wes and Logun.  They join a school to acquire and develop their own special techniques.  As these boys advance though the ranks of this school, they will find out the dark secret of their rival school, Theta C Academy.  This school only accepts students that already have their etching power.  This manga will have action, drama, betrayal, love and hatred.

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  1. Psycho Childon 03 Jun 2009 at 11:04 am

    Hello,everyone and welcome to my review forum.Im Psycho Child and I’m gonna give you a short summury of my comic Kappa XII.

    There are three main characters.Cyrus(oldest),Wes(middle),and Logun(youngest).They will join one school of two(that specialize in fightiing) known as KappaXII school of Power binding and Etching.There are ranks in the school that students must go through in order to graduate.Gamma,Alpha,Omega are the ranks Gamma starting at the lowest and Omega the highest.Once you graduate you ether leave or become a Sigma rank and do missions asigned by the school princepal.The boys will join the school advancing through the ranks of the school and will adventualy find out the dark secret of the rival school Theta C.They believe that the rival school wants to take Etching from all students at Kappa XII and give the stolen Etching techniques to the students at their school.But by all means their wrong.The princepal of Theta C is the only one aware of this paln, but he wants to take Etching from all other people in the world and destroy them.(Etching is a technique that all people in the world have to themselves.It’s a technique that all people share but all etching is different.For example one person might have the ability to transform and the other the ability to control fire.It all is different)

  2. Psycho Childon 03 Jun 2009 at 11:06 am

    I forgot to mention this is a manga not a comic.

  3. Holliequon 03 Jun 2009 at 11:38 am

    Um, I’m a little confused. Let’s see if I have this right . . .

    -Kappa XII (I like this name, by the way) is essentially a school for superhumans (or a school which brings out an idividual’s superpowers). In your story’s setting the powers are called Etching.

    -There are ranks, from lowest to highest: Gamma, Alpha, Omega, Sigma. What purpose do these ranks serve? Also, any particular reason they’re in the order they are? (I’m not too good on my greek letters, but I’m pretty sure Alpha means “a new beginning”.)

    -The brothers think rival school Theta C wants to steal the Etching of their students and give them to Theta C students. If Etching is unique to a single person, then how could other people gain these techniques? Also, Theta C school sounds like an “evil school”. Any reason for this?

    -The real plot is that the principal of Theta C wants to steal the Etching from the rest of the world and then kill everybody. This seems a bit too evil. What are his motives? If he wants to kill everybody in the world, or even everybody with Etching, then he will probably come across as unneccesary evil.
    (http://www.superheronation.com/2008/09/01/dont-make-your-villains-unnecessarily-evil/)

  4. Tomon 03 Jun 2009 at 11:44 am

    Yeah, Gamma, then Alpha, then Omega, then Sigma?

    Gamma is the third letter of the Greek aplhabet, Omega is the last, Alpha is the first, and I forget where Sigma is but it’s somewhere in the middle. Why isn’t it Alpha, Beta, Gamma… Omega?

  5. Ragged Boyon 03 Jun 2009 at 2:17 pm

    Hola, Psycho Child

    I mostly agree with the previous comments. I’d also like to state the your grammar and punctuation could use a little work. I think the most glaring issue is the capitalization. For example:

    “KappaXII school of Power binding and Etching”

    – With this being a place I’d recommend capitalizing all on the major words (i.e. Kappa XII School of Power Binding and Etching). Although, I feel that the school’s name is a bit too narrative and not very stylish. If the school’s main focus is on foster students etchings, then I think that should center in the name. Something like, Kappa XII School of Etching Arts, or whatever.

    – I don’t think “etching” or the school ranks (Alpha, Gamma, etc) need to be capitalized under regular circumstances.

    Also, I’m not a big fan of the name Theta C for the rival school. I think C shoule be replaced with a word or removed.

  6. Psycho Childon 03 Jun 2009 at 3:07 pm

    When I use the the names gamma,alpha,omega,and sigma i just put them in the order I really don’t know what they mean but i just put them there.

    Also Gamma rank is for students who can’t etch or use power skills that well.

    Alpha rank is for those who are at an adept level with their power skills yet still can’t etch.

    Omega is for student who are advanced with power skills and are able to etch,but their etching is’t completely mastered.

    Sigma is for graduates who have mastered both power skills or etching.

    I didn’t mention this above but Power Skills are techniques that all people in the world could use. It goes from 1 to 2000. Like if someone hasn’t started etching yet they would use power skills to fight. Power skills can also be used when etching too.

    Also the Theta C is Theta 100, the C is the roman numeral.Also the Theta school is suppose to be the bad guys of the story,that’s why the name is kind of sinister.

    The princepal of Theta C is not planning to kill everyone in the world he just wants to extract the etching ability from people and destroy etching it’s self not kill the people.He wants to make etching extinct.

  7. Ragged Boyon 03 Jun 2009 at 3:23 pm

    With the ranks, I’d going with the example Tom provided of the actual order (Alpha, Beta, Gamma, and Omega). A reader who knows their greek alphabet with probably roll their eyes if you seem like you don’t know what you’re talking about. So it’s be:

    Alpha- Students who are novice at power skills and can’t etch, yet.

    Beta- Students that are adept with power skills, but still can’t use etching.

    Gamma- Students with advanced power skills and novice to adept skill in etching.

    Omega- Students well advanced in both power skills and etching.

    I think you could add ‘Academy’ to Theta C and make it feel more official (Theta C Academy).

  8. Psycho Childon 03 Jun 2009 at 3:31 pm

    Thanks alot, I agree 100%.

  9. Psycho Childon 03 Jun 2009 at 4:20 pm

    I’m writing a fantasy manga.It’s mainly about three teenagers named Cyrus.Wes, and Logun who join a school that will help them aquire and develop their own specail technique.While these boys advance though the ranks of this school they will find out the dark evil secret that their rival school posses.The name of this school is Theta C academy.This school on accepts students that already have their etching power.In side the manga the will have action,drama,betrail,love,and hatered.

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