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		<title>By: YoungAuthor</title>
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		<dc:creator>YoungAuthor</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Mon, 30 Jan 2012 14:24:45 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Thanks for the input GL.B!!! i made a note of those errors and i&#039;ll try to fix them ASAP!! there&#039;s another one on my forum so if you could check that one out to that&#039;d be great! thanks</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>Thanks for the input GL.B!!! i made a note of those errors and i&#8217;ll try to fix them ASAP!! there&#8217;s another one on my forum so if you could check that one out to that&#8217;d be great! thanks</p>
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		<title>By: GL.B</title>
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		<dc:creator>GL.B</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Sun, 29 Jan 2012 22:10:40 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>For YoungAuthor, 
Not bad! The pacing wasn&#039;t too confusing, and I could understand who was fighting and doing what. I only have a few questions. First, when Aaron is fighting the Executioner, it feels like he either just remembered he had super strength, or he just got it. Both of those are kind of unlikely though. Maybe you could introduce an element as to why he didn&#039;t use it first? When Kane was fighting Massacre towards the end, it seemed a little rushed. I know that the chopped sentences are supposed to contribute to the way the two are evenly matched, but I kept on getting thrown off of the flow. There was also the part, when after Kane kicked Massacre, it says he kicked her away after the narration focused in on Executioner. I think it can be remedied by switching the &#039;her&#039; pronoun for Massacre&#039;s name, it just got me a little confused. Heh, these are just little things that irked me, maybe everybody else gets it though.
Anyway, I really like it! Good job!</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>For YoungAuthor,<br />
Not bad! The pacing wasn&#8217;t too confusing, and I could understand who was fighting and doing what. I only have a few questions. First, when Aaron is fighting the Executioner, it feels like he either just remembered he had super strength, or he just got it. Both of those are kind of unlikely though. Maybe you could introduce an element as to why he didn&#8217;t use it first? When Kane was fighting Massacre towards the end, it seemed a little rushed. I know that the chopped sentences are supposed to contribute to the way the two are evenly matched, but I kept on getting thrown off of the flow. There was also the part, when after Kane kicked Massacre, it says he kicked her away after the narration focused in on Executioner. I think it can be remedied by switching the &#8216;her&#8217; pronoun for Massacre&#8217;s name, it just got me a little confused. Heh, these are just little things that irked me, maybe everybody else gets it though.<br />
Anyway, I really like it! Good job!</p>
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		<title>By: YoungAuthor</title>
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		<dc:creator>YoungAuthor</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Fri, 20 Jan 2012 03:15:36 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>I just want some feedback on one of my action scences so if i could get some, that would be great! :)


“Come meet our friends,” said Death Adder. “Don’t be shy.” Aaron and Kane had the feeling that whoever was inside the other car definitely wasn’t a shy type of person. The car door opened to reveal two of the deadliest killers the world had ever seen. Blood Red and Annihilation. Then two figures stepped out of the car, both dressed in similar suits.
“Speechless?” goaded Death Adder. “There’s no need for introductions for two of them. However, you must be wondering about the younglings. This is Massacre and this is the Executioner.  They’re killers in training. Well, enough with the small talk. You must be wondering why we’re here, no? Well, we really don’t approve of you running around and killing our boys. That’s not ok.” With his last comment, Death Adder seemed to get slightly angry.
“It was him,” said Aaron pointing at Kane. With the villains’ attention on Kane, Aaron began to slowly reach for his alarm button. This would alarm his parents, who were sitting in the Laser Ray, awaiting their children.
“Don’t try it little boy.” warned Death Adder. “Now fortunately for you, I am in need of your services. So you will come with me. Whether or not you do so willingly is totally up to you.”
Aaron was stunned by this man’s heap of confidence. He sounded like the type of man that got what he wanted, when he wanted it, and exactly how he wanted it. 
“Well? Are you coming?” he prodded. 
“Not with out a fight you lowlife.” spat Kane. “You piece of shit. Do you actually think we’re going to hand ourselves over to you?”
“Well, um yeah I kinda do.” said Death Adder, with out a hint of sarcasm in his voice.
“Well then you got another thing coming asshole.” Retorted Kane. He drew two ruby-red sai’s from his belt of weapons. “I’m ready whenever.” Aaron immediately pressed his alarm button, or so he thought. When he looked down, it was missing.
“Looking for this?” teased Death Adder. In his hand he held the missing alarm button. “Nice try kiddo. You’re going to have to try a lot harder than that to best me.”
Kane took this as means to begin the battle. He rushed towards Blood Red, weapons in front of him. He feinted with his left, and tried to stab the villain with his right sai. His attempt failed miserably as Blood Red slapped his attack away and gave him a brutal kick to the chest that sent him flying backwards onto his back.
“I’m not fighting you,” he said. “They are.” He raised his hand to point towards the two apprentices.  Immediately, the Executioner drew a large battle-axe that seemed slightly like a play toy in against his six-foot-five frame. Massacre raised her hand to reveal two loaded wrist rockets. She quickly fired twice, once where Kane was and once where she guessed he would be. An electric shield blocked her second rocket, which would have hit Kane directly in the face. 
“Back off.” Aaron said firmly with one hand behind his back.
“What are you going to about it?” said the Executioner, his voice reeking of hubris.
“This” responded Aaron. He pulled his hand out from behind his back to reveal a Master Lighting Bolt. Death Adder could only stare in shock as Aaron released this powerful bolt of pure electricity. It struck Annihilation in the chest, and its repercussions also gave a brutal shock to Blood Red. The two famed killers were brought down on all fours, their bodies convulsing with pain. The two of them were very lucky that Aaron had not been able to charge it for a very long time, or else they would have been ashes. Their protégées began to retaliate fiercely with their weapons in hand. Aaron joined his friend in what was to be a fierce battle. Massacre engaged in hand-to-hand combat with Kane. She put him on the defensive immediately, striking with pace and precision. Her right hook became blurred with her left jab as Kane reeled back in an effort to avoid being struck by his enemy. Meanwhile, the Executioner swung his battle-axe at Aaron’s jugular. Aaron smiled to himself because he had been charging an electric field around his body since the time he threw the Master Lightning Bolt. The field stopped the battle-axe and also gave the Executioner a violent shock that sent him staggering backwards onto his back.
SMACK!!! Kane received a violent backhand from Massacre that sent him spinning backwards. She capitalized on her small victory by delivering a kick to the back of his head. Kane fell onto his back feeling heavily disoriented. She raised her hand to deliver another punch, but was shocked by Aaron.  Aaron had no time to enjoy this triumph as the Executioner began his attack again, this time with his fists. Aaron, who was well versed in the ways of close quarters combat, was no match for the brute strength and speed of the Executioner. He was felled with a couple of blows until he realized that these blows actually didn’t hurt. He had super-strength. He delivered an uppercut that sent the Executioner flying backwards into a wall. Aaron fired a series of small lighting blasts that shocked his adversary.
“Always watch your back” came a voice from behind him. Aaron felt a strong blunt blow to the back of his head, knocking him unconscious. Death Adder stood over him, shaking his head in a disappointed manner. 
“Pick him up and bring him to the car” he ordered to Executioner. The large boy did as he was told. Kane, however, was keeping up his fight with Massacre. He punched. She dodged. She kicked. He flipped. He stabbed. She twisted away. She threw up a knee. He slapped it down. He tried a left hook. She slipped under it. She connected a right jab. He rolled with the punch. He tried a sweeping kick. She fell only to bounce back up again. Their fight was like an intricate dance that only they knew the steps to. They were two fighters who knew their trade well. Kane finally found an opening when he kicked out her left knee. He pivoted at a rapid pace and delivered a vicious kick to her right side, knocking her down. Her pulled one of his guns only to have it knocked out of his hand by the Executioner. The Executioner had stepped in to save his partner. After Kane kicked her away, he was rushed by Executioner and pinned against the wall. Kane retaliated by bringing his knee up to the crotch of his opponent, who dropped like a stone. 
“Why the dirty move?” asked the heavily entertained Death Adder.
“It’s a fight. Nothing is dirty.” Kane replied.
“You little shit!” screamed Executioner. “Your gonna pay for that!” 
“Make me.” Kane said quietly as he leapt away. The executioner came at Kane, yelling at the top of his lungs. He feinted a punch at Kane’s head, making Kane raise his guard. He lashed out a ferocious punch at Kane’s stomach, sending him backwards into some trashcans.
“That attack would’ve worked on your dad. Oh wait, he’s dead. And so is the rest of your trash family.” said Executioner. Kane flew towards him in a blind rage, punching and kicking in a flurry. A significant number of his blows landed on Executioner. His adversary landed right in front of his boss who looked at both of them with contempt. 
“I can do this all night’’ said Kane cockily.
“Well I can not,” stated Death Adder. Death Adder appeared behind Kane and knocked him unconscious just as he had Aaron.
“Take these scum into the car and back to my fortress. Lets get out of here.” The villainous entourage followed their leader as they drove off from the scene. 

Feedback is welcome!</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>I just want some feedback on one of my action scences so if i could get some, that would be great! <img src='http://www.superheronation.com/wp-includes/images/smilies/icon_smile.gif' alt=':)' class='wp-smiley' /> </p>
<p>“Come meet our friends,” said Death Adder. “Don’t be shy.” Aaron and Kane had the feeling that whoever was inside the other car definitely wasn’t a shy type of person. The car door opened to reveal two of the deadliest killers the world had ever seen. Blood Red and Annihilation. Then two figures stepped out of the car, both dressed in similar suits.<br />
“Speechless?” goaded Death Adder. “There’s no need for introductions for two of them. However, you must be wondering about the younglings. This is Massacre and this is the Executioner.  They’re killers in training. Well, enough with the small talk. You must be wondering why we’re here, no? Well, we really don’t approve of you running around and killing our boys. That’s not ok.” With his last comment, Death Adder seemed to get slightly angry.<br />
“It was him,” said Aaron pointing at Kane. With the villains’ attention on Kane, Aaron began to slowly reach for his alarm button. This would alarm his parents, who were sitting in the Laser Ray, awaiting their children.<br />
“Don’t try it little boy.” warned Death Adder. “Now fortunately for you, I am in need of your services. So you will come with me. Whether or not you do so willingly is totally up to you.”<br />
Aaron was stunned by this man’s heap of confidence. He sounded like the type of man that got what he wanted, when he wanted it, and exactly how he wanted it.<br />
“Well? Are you coming?” he prodded.<br />
“Not with out a fight you lowlife.” spat Kane. “You piece of shit. Do you actually think we’re going to hand ourselves over to you?”<br />
“Well, um yeah I kinda do.” said Death Adder, with out a hint of sarcasm in his voice.<br />
“Well then you got another thing coming asshole.” Retorted Kane. He drew two ruby-red sai’s from his belt of weapons. “I’m ready whenever.” Aaron immediately pressed his alarm button, or so he thought. When he looked down, it was missing.<br />
“Looking for this?” teased Death Adder. In his hand he held the missing alarm button. “Nice try kiddo. You’re going to have to try a lot harder than that to best me.”<br />
Kane took this as means to begin the battle. He rushed towards Blood Red, weapons in front of him. He feinted with his left, and tried to stab the villain with his right sai. His attempt failed miserably as Blood Red slapped his attack away and gave him a brutal kick to the chest that sent him flying backwards onto his back.<br />
“I’m not fighting you,” he said. “They are.” He raised his hand to point towards the two apprentices.  Immediately, the Executioner drew a large battle-axe that seemed slightly like a play toy in against his six-foot-five frame. Massacre raised her hand to reveal two loaded wrist rockets. She quickly fired twice, once where Kane was and once where she guessed he would be. An electric shield blocked her second rocket, which would have hit Kane directly in the face.<br />
“Back off.” Aaron said firmly with one hand behind his back.<br />
“What are you going to about it?” said the Executioner, his voice reeking of hubris.<br />
“This” responded Aaron. He pulled his hand out from behind his back to reveal a Master Lighting Bolt. Death Adder could only stare in shock as Aaron released this powerful bolt of pure electricity. It struck Annihilation in the chest, and its repercussions also gave a brutal shock to Blood Red. The two famed killers were brought down on all fours, their bodies convulsing with pain. The two of them were very lucky that Aaron had not been able to charge it for a very long time, or else they would have been ashes. Their protégées began to retaliate fiercely with their weapons in hand. Aaron joined his friend in what was to be a fierce battle. Massacre engaged in hand-to-hand combat with Kane. She put him on the defensive immediately, striking with pace and precision. Her right hook became blurred with her left jab as Kane reeled back in an effort to avoid being struck by his enemy. Meanwhile, the Executioner swung his battle-axe at Aaron’s jugular. Aaron smiled to himself because he had been charging an electric field around his body since the time he threw the Master Lightning Bolt. The field stopped the battle-axe and also gave the Executioner a violent shock that sent him staggering backwards onto his back.<br />
SMACK!!! Kane received a violent backhand from Massacre that sent him spinning backwards. She capitalized on her small victory by delivering a kick to the back of his head. Kane fell onto his back feeling heavily disoriented. She raised her hand to deliver another punch, but was shocked by Aaron.  Aaron had no time to enjoy this triumph as the Executioner began his attack again, this time with his fists. Aaron, who was well versed in the ways of close quarters combat, was no match for the brute strength and speed of the Executioner. He was felled with a couple of blows until he realized that these blows actually didn’t hurt. He had super-strength. He delivered an uppercut that sent the Executioner flying backwards into a wall. Aaron fired a series of small lighting blasts that shocked his adversary.<br />
“Always watch your back” came a voice from behind him. Aaron felt a strong blunt blow to the back of his head, knocking him unconscious. Death Adder stood over him, shaking his head in a disappointed manner.<br />
“Pick him up and bring him to the car” he ordered to Executioner. The large boy did as he was told. Kane, however, was keeping up his fight with Massacre. He punched. She dodged. She kicked. He flipped. He stabbed. She twisted away. She threw up a knee. He slapped it down. He tried a left hook. She slipped under it. She connected a right jab. He rolled with the punch. He tried a sweeping kick. She fell only to bounce back up again. Their fight was like an intricate dance that only they knew the steps to. They were two fighters who knew their trade well. Kane finally found an opening when he kicked out her left knee. He pivoted at a rapid pace and delivered a vicious kick to her right side, knocking her down. Her pulled one of his guns only to have it knocked out of his hand by the Executioner. The Executioner had stepped in to save his partner. After Kane kicked her away, he was rushed by Executioner and pinned against the wall. Kane retaliated by bringing his knee up to the crotch of his opponent, who dropped like a stone.<br />
“Why the dirty move?” asked the heavily entertained Death Adder.<br />
“It’s a fight. Nothing is dirty.” Kane replied.<br />
“You little shit!” screamed Executioner. “Your gonna pay for that!”<br />
“Make me.” Kane said quietly as he leapt away. The executioner came at Kane, yelling at the top of his lungs. He feinted a punch at Kane’s head, making Kane raise his guard. He lashed out a ferocious punch at Kane’s stomach, sending him backwards into some trashcans.<br />
“That attack would’ve worked on your dad. Oh wait, he’s dead. And so is the rest of your trash family.” said Executioner. Kane flew towards him in a blind rage, punching and kicking in a flurry. A significant number of his blows landed on Executioner. His adversary landed right in front of his boss who looked at both of them with contempt.<br />
“I can do this all night’’ said Kane cockily.<br />
“Well I can not,” stated Death Adder. Death Adder appeared behind Kane and knocked him unconscious just as he had Aaron.<br />
“Take these scum into the car and back to my fortress. Lets get out of here.” The villainous entourage followed their leader as they drove off from the scene. </p>
<p>Feedback is welcome!</p>
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		<title>By: David</title>
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		<dc:creator>David</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Fri, 01 May 2009 14:48:07 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>i just watched that then i seen the best bit in batman and Robin


it was the credits hahaha :P</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>i just watched that then i seen the best bit in batman and Robin</p>
<p>it was the credits hahaha <img src='http://www.superheronation.com/wp-includes/images/smilies/icon_razz.gif' alt=':P' class='wp-smiley' /> </p>
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		<title>By: Stefan the Exploding Man</title>
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		<dc:creator>Stefan the Exploding Man</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Fri, 01 May 2009 14:13:34 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Yeah, David is spot on. Batman and Robin was the worst Batman movie ever. And Mr. Freeze had terrible, cringe-worthy puns:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SRH-Ywpz1_I</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>Yeah, David is spot on. Batman and Robin was the worst Batman movie ever. And Mr. Freeze had terrible, cringe-worthy puns:</p>
<p><a href="http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SRH-Ywpz1_I" rel="nofollow">http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SRH-Ywpz1_I</a></p>
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		<title>By: David</title>
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		<dc:creator>David</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Fri, 01 May 2009 14:04:44 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Bat man and Robin received the worst reviews of the batman film 

and i have to agree they gave the role of batman to a clown i mean come on he cracked jokes and oneliners and sucked they tottaly took batman away from his roots with that film

now Mr freese was a great villen good motive and such but with batman the way they made him he wasent able to be the best he could be i felt he could have been better if batman was darker 

i hope my rant makes sence lol</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>Bat man and Robin received the worst reviews of the batman film </p>
<p>and i have to agree they gave the role of batman to a clown i mean come on he cracked jokes and oneliners and sucked they tottaly took batman away from his roots with that film</p>
<p>now Mr freese was a great villen good motive and such but with batman the way they made him he wasent able to be the best he could be i felt he could have been better if batman was darker </p>
<p>i hope my rant makes sence lol</p>
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		<title>By: Yogi</title>
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		<dc:creator>Yogi</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Fri, 01 May 2009 09:07:46 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Well, technically speaking, she&#039;s only flirting with him because she&#039;s the bait. She&#039;s sort of an assistant to the Big Bad, and she&#039;s flirting with him just to redirect his thoughts, so that the Big Bad gets to pull off the heist while the hero is busy. She will express her disgust at the hero to the reader, while the hero is somewhat interested with her, and she decides to exploit this.</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>Well, technically speaking, she&#8217;s only flirting with him because she&#8217;s the bait. She&#8217;s sort of an assistant to the Big Bad, and she&#8217;s flirting with him just to redirect his thoughts, so that the Big Bad gets to pull off the heist while the hero is busy. She will express her disgust at the hero to the reader, while the hero is somewhat interested with her, and she decides to exploit this.</p>
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		<title>By: B. Mac</title>
		<link>http://www.superheronation.com/2009/04/03/how-to-pace-a-scene-more-quickly/comment-page-1/#comment-26199</link>
		<dc:creator>B. Mac</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Fri, 01 May 2009 08:13:12 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>I think so.  I feel the romantic banter would substantially detract from the seriousness/intensity of the combat.  
&lt;br /&gt;
Then again, this might just be a personal preference.  I&#039;ve never understood the attraction of romantic tension between a hero and villain.  I feel that Catwoman&#039;s appearances are generally underwhelming and Poison Ivy&#039;s role in &lt;i&gt;Batman and Robin&lt;/i&gt; left a really bad taste in my mouth.   By the end of BAR, I was kind of hoping for my own dose of fast-acting poison to make the pain stop.
&lt;br /&gt;
If you&#039;re planning on going down this route, I&#039;d recommend making least one of the combatants dishonestly exploit the romantic angle to gain a combat or informational advantage on the other.  Otherwise-- if you have two characters that are genuinely kind of interested in each other-- I think that their fights will be pretty lackluster.  I suspect the stakes will be low if they aren&#039;t going for the jugular.  </description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>I think so.  I feel the romantic banter would substantially detract from the seriousness/intensity of the combat.<br />
<br />
Then again, this might just be a personal preference.  I&#8217;ve never understood the attraction of romantic tension between a hero and villain.  I feel that Catwoman&#8217;s appearances are generally underwhelming and Poison Ivy&#8217;s role in <i>Batman and Robin</i> left a really bad taste in my mouth.   By the end of BAR, I was kind of hoping for my own dose of fast-acting poison to make the pain stop.<br />
<br />
If you&#8217;re planning on going down this route, I&#8217;d recommend making least one of the combatants dishonestly exploit the romantic angle to gain a combat or informational advantage on the other.  Otherwise&#8211; if you have two characters that are genuinely kind of interested in each other&#8211; I think that their fights will be pretty lackluster.  I suspect the stakes will be low if they aren&#8217;t going for the jugular.</p>
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		<title>By: Yogi</title>
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		<dc:creator>Yogi</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Fri, 01 May 2009 06:55:06 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Would it slow down an action scene if the (female) villain flirts with the hero, a la Spiderman/Black Cat or Batman/Catwoman, while fighting?</description>
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		<title>By: David</title>
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		<dc:creator>David</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Wed, 22 Apr 2009 16:52:40 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Ah, right.  Thanks, B. Mac.  I think I&#039;m doing well with my scenes.  </description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>Ah, right.  Thanks, B. Mac.  I think I&#8217;m doing well with my scenes.</p>
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		<title>By: Ragged Boy</title>
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		<dc:creator>Ragged Boy</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Wed, 22 Apr 2009 15:35:36 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>A slow start is what nearly killed me at the beginning of this book, &lt;i&gt;Shadow of a Dark Queen&lt;/i&gt; I&#039;m reading. It was pretty boring for about the first 40 pages.</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>A slow start is what nearly killed me at the beginning of this book, <i>Shadow of a Dark Queen</i> I&#8217;m reading. It was pretty boring for about the first 40 pages.</p>
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		<title>By: B. Mac</title>
		<link>http://www.superheronation.com/2009/04/03/how-to-pace-a-scene-more-quickly/comment-page-1/#comment-25164</link>
		<dc:creator>B. Mac</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Wed, 22 Apr 2009 15:27:29 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>You could pace a scene slowly for dramatic or emotional effect, or to give the reader a space to breath after an intense action scene, &lt;i&gt;&lt;strong&gt;maybe&lt;/strong&gt;&lt;/i&gt; introducing readers to a new location or character, etc.  
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However, it is very rare that a story is paced too quickly.  It depends on the audience, but the danger in any slow scene-- particularly one at the beginning-- is that the publisher&#039;s assistant gets bored.  If that happens, rejection is rarely far behind.  In contrast, the danger of an opening scene that&#039;s too fast is that it might be a bit hard to follow.  It&#039;s easier to clarify an exciting scene than to make a slow scene exciting.  
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In particular, scenes that drag at the beginning of a book tend to suggest that the story isn&#039;t going anywhere.  If you&#039;re a publisher&#039;s assistant that has two days to reject 99 out of the 100 manuscripts on your desk, you don&#039;t have the time to give each book fifty pages to prove itself.  Hell, you don&#039;t even have the time to give them twenty pages.  If the book is slow, the publisher&#039;s assistant is just going to pitch it and move on.  </description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>You could pace a scene slowly for dramatic or emotional effect, or to give the reader a space to breath after an intense action scene, <i><strong>maybe</strong></i> introducing readers to a new location or character, etc.<br />
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However, it is very rare that a story is paced too quickly.  It depends on the audience, but the danger in any slow scene&#8211; particularly one at the beginning&#8211; is that the publisher&#8217;s assistant gets bored.  If that happens, rejection is rarely far behind.  In contrast, the danger of an opening scene that&#8217;s too fast is that it might be a bit hard to follow.  It&#8217;s easier to clarify an exciting scene than to make a slow scene exciting.<br />
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In particular, scenes that drag at the beginning of a book tend to suggest that the story isn&#8217;t going anywhere.  If you&#8217;re a publisher&#8217;s assistant that has two days to reject 99 out of the 100 manuscripts on your desk, you don&#8217;t have the time to give each book fifty pages to prove itself.  Hell, you don&#8217;t even have the time to give them twenty pages.  If the book is slow, the publisher&#8217;s assistant is just going to pitch it and move on.</p>
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		<title>By: David</title>
		<link>http://www.superheronation.com/2009/04/03/how-to-pace-a-scene-more-quickly/comment-page-1/#comment-25161</link>
		<dc:creator>David</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Wed, 22 Apr 2009 15:15:07 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Hey, B. Mac.  Am I right in thinking that there are times you should pace a scene slowly?</description>
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		<title>By: B. Mac</title>
		<link>http://www.superheronation.com/2009/04/03/how-to-pace-a-scene-more-quickly/comment-page-1/#comment-25143</link>
		<dc:creator>B. Mac</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Wed, 22 Apr 2009 12:25:27 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Hi, Dinhilion.  I&#039;ve set a review forum up for you &lt;a href=http://www.superheronation.com/2009/04/15/dinhilions-review-forum/ rel=&quot;nofollow&quot;&gt;here&lt;/a&gt;.</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>Hi, Dinhilion.  I&#8217;ve set a review forum up for you <a href=http://www.superheronation.com/2009/04/15/dinhilions-review-forum/ rel="nofollow">here</a>.</p>
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		<title>By: Dinhilion</title>
		<link>http://www.superheronation.com/2009/04/03/how-to-pace-a-scene-more-quickly/comment-page-1/#comment-25130</link>
		<dc:creator>Dinhilion</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Wed, 22 Apr 2009 07:58:11 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Could I have a review forum?  This site seem useful and I want to try and work on my writing.</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>Could I have a review forum?  This site seem useful and I want to try and work on my writing.</p>
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