Another thing that bothered me was how nothing was abbreviated, like “Mister Mystic” instead of “Mr Mystic” or “Doctor Impossible” instead of “Dr Impossible”. To me it makes the names feel dragged out and less succinct, not quite as snappy as superhero/villain names should be.

Her gender?! I’ve been following this article thinking it was a he. D:

Oh, I know he’s straight, I just… think it’s odd that he throws ‘honey’ around, and he’s playing with his fancy cell phone… I’m not sure about that one. Mostly the ‘honey’ comment. Maybe not gay, but more… metro? Hahah, I don’t know.

Good:
– Even if it does read like a fashion magazine at times, I’ve not seen the ‘superheroes as moviestar celebrities’ angle done before. It probably has been, but this is the first I’ve seen it where they’re not hiding their identities and such.
– Again with the ‘angle I haven’t seen’ is the fact that they’re no longer a team, but are coming back together now.

Bad:
– Fatale is so so so whiny and negative, especially at first.
– Wow. So many names, so many identical characters. o.o
– Rainbow Triumph. How did the author get published, with a character named Rainbow Triumph? Mister Mystic is hardly any better.
– Elphin goes from ‘a child’s whisper’ and ‘wide-eyed’ to ‘the voice of an amazonian warrior’ with no warning whatsoever. What’s the deal with that? Plus, if this counts for anything, it took me five pages since she was mentioned before I realized her gender.
– I’m not sure what I’m supposed to think of Blackwolf. He’s got this strange gay-fighter-techie vibe going on, which I never thought could be possible. He calls Damsel ‘honey’, which I would have let slide if he were still married to her but they’re clearly on the rocks as far as their divorce, then he’s twirling a knife and playing with his Blackberry at once. Oh, and he’s autistic. What?
– The namedropping is ridiculous. There have been something like twenty one names mentioned in the first few pages.
– The whole chapter in general, or at least the parts that involved character interaction, seemed really… awkward. Not awkward in the story, but it was written awkwardly.

Good:
– I like that the very first chapter is from the supervillain’s point of view.
– I like that he’s actually in jail and contained rather than on the loose. That gives it a different feel, in my mind, though I’m not sure how to describe it.

Bad:
– He needs to suck it up. Seriously. I’m not sure if I’m just having a really insensitive day, but he seems to whine way too much. While bragging way too much at the same time. Still, points for the fact that I was still interested enough despite that.
– Tangents everywhere. I understand that he (the author and/or Dr. Impossible, either one applies) may have had perfectly good reasons for including all the stuff it did, but the chapter had no sense of organization whatsoever.
– He… really doesn’t seem too smart? Like, alright, he told us how he ‘froze the Supreme Court, impersonated the Pope, and held the Moon hostage’, but then he says things like ‘the slowness of the accident’. ‘Slowness’ isn’t exactly an intelligent choice of words, is it? Considering it isn’t really a word.
– The names in this book already bug me. Dr. Impossible is fine enough, but if I see the ‘f’ in ‘CoreFire’ capitalized one more time, I’m going to punch something. >_> ‘Damsel’ and ‘Stormcloud’ really aren’t the best either. Damsel is alright, I can see it being used with style, but Stormcloud? Thankfully, this guy’s only Damsel’s father. I hope Dr. Impossible is just namedropping so I don’t have to take Stormcloud seriously.

…So yeah, there’s my response to the first chapter.